Kia Ora~
From Kiwi modding queue~
I'll point out whatever my eyes/ears catch. Most of the stuff might just be suggestions.
That's pretty much it. Overall you have amazing flow in your map. It looks reasonably tidy and consistent. Only things that seemed off were some of your stream shapes, so I hope you fix those. And the under-mapped triplets/streams in some cases aren't that important, they're only suggestions. I hope you'll respect my mod and consider most things I say.
Good luck approving this~ It's almost there!
From Kiwi modding queue~
I'll point out whatever my eyes/ears catch. Most of the stuff might just be suggestions.
Dissonant Existence
00:02:824 (3) - x:255, y:5 (so stream perfectly blankets the circle)
00:08:974 (3,4,1) - Suggestion: Increase spacing for this triplet (x1.0 or something) to put more emphasis on the strong beats. This will give a distinctive transition from the stream into the triplet.
00:10:549 - Missing triplet? Sorry just seems under-mapped, but peak difficulties (especially marathons) could aim to stress out the song to its' full potential (rhythm-wise).
00:11:974 (3,4,1) - Increase spacing for emphasis.
00:13:549 - Missing triplet? Past this point I'll try to not point out any more triplets cuz the rhythm would end up repetitive and boring. Plus I'm sure you'd get tired of hearing it all over and over.
00:53:824 (5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - Try shape streams like these into perfect circles. I personally like ovals, but I do have to agree that when an oval is really close to being a circle, it appears to have a slightly annoying appearance. One simple way to achieve that is by placing a circle as a reference point and try align the distances perfectly, then delete the circle. This way the shape looks tidier and has what some people might call an "invisible circle".
00:54:424 (13,14,15,16,1) - ^ Proceed to do the same.
01:09:124 (1) - Super nazi but: End-anchor: x:286, y:145
01:17:374 - and 01:17:449 - could be mapped with circles as a triplet.
01:20:674 (6) - If you're not using any specific DS, I don't see why you wouldn't place it x:101, y:192
01:24:574 (8) - x:92, y:300
01:25:399 - and 01:25:549 - (potential 5 note stream). Please don't get me wrong, it's up to the mapper to decide how to interpret the music and present it as a map, but please consider mapping parts like these as I mentioned before, the song has so much more potential to stress out with.
01:26:974 (10) - May I suggest to end the slider at 01:26:974 (10) - and then start the stream at 01:27:274 (1) - (as it is a strong beat and ending the slider on that note seems unreasonable). 01:27:274 (1) - add circle + NC.
02:15:274 - ^
02:20:074 - ^ and 02:19:774 - SV slowdown maybe?
01:33:124 - This whole kiai is really cool :3
01:50:974 - and 01:51:049 - (undermapped)
02:00:574 - and 02:00:649 - ^ I can't really complain though cuz it is's maintaining consistency so you may ignore these suggestions.
02:30:049 (8,9,10,11,12,13) - Perfect circle please~
02:58:761 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - ^
02:40:324 (1,2) - Sick sliders <3
03:00:011 (1) - SV slow down? End slider here: 02:58:527 (2) - start stream here: 02:58:527 (2) - (and NC), as previously explained, these beats (especially on big white lines where a new rhythm sections start) are screaming for emphasis.
03:05:324 - ^
03:09:308 - missing beat~
03:12:433 - ^
03:30:804 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Try make this a perfect circle (as mentioned earlier with other examples)
03:56:512 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - ^
04:32:489 (6,8) - At this point I'm confused why you manually offset stacks on most circles but on this jump you stack them perfectly? Seems inconsistent but I'm sure you have your reasons so up to you~ just pointed out my confusion~
05:14:551 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - try curve this as a perfect circle
05:16:951 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - ^
00:02:824 (3) - x:255, y:5 (so stream perfectly blankets the circle)
00:08:974 (3,4,1) - Suggestion: Increase spacing for this triplet (x1.0 or something) to put more emphasis on the strong beats. This will give a distinctive transition from the stream into the triplet.
00:10:549 - Missing triplet? Sorry just seems under-mapped, but peak difficulties (especially marathons) could aim to stress out the song to its' full potential (rhythm-wise).
00:11:974 (3,4,1) - Increase spacing for emphasis.
00:13:549 - Missing triplet? Past this point I'll try to not point out any more triplets cuz the rhythm would end up repetitive and boring. Plus I'm sure you'd get tired of hearing it all over and over.
00:53:824 (5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - Try shape streams like these into perfect circles. I personally like ovals, but I do have to agree that when an oval is really close to being a circle, it appears to have a slightly annoying appearance. One simple way to achieve that is by placing a circle as a reference point and try align the distances perfectly, then delete the circle. This way the shape looks tidier and has what some people might call an "invisible circle".
00:54:424 (13,14,15,16,1) - ^ Proceed to do the same.
01:09:124 (1) - Super nazi but: End-anchor: x:286, y:145
01:17:374 - and 01:17:449 - could be mapped with circles as a triplet.
01:20:674 (6) - If you're not using any specific DS, I don't see why you wouldn't place it x:101, y:192
01:24:574 (8) - x:92, y:300
01:25:399 - and 01:25:549 - (potential 5 note stream). Please don't get me wrong, it's up to the mapper to decide how to interpret the music and present it as a map, but please consider mapping parts like these as I mentioned before, the song has so much more potential to stress out with.
01:26:974 (10) - May I suggest to end the slider at 01:26:974 (10) - and then start the stream at 01:27:274 (1) - (as it is a strong beat and ending the slider on that note seems unreasonable). 01:27:274 (1) - add circle + NC.
02:15:274 - ^
02:20:074 - ^ and 02:19:774 - SV slowdown maybe?
01:33:124 - This whole kiai is really cool :3
01:50:974 - and 01:51:049 - (undermapped)
02:00:574 - and 02:00:649 - ^ I can't really complain though cuz it is's maintaining consistency so you may ignore these suggestions.
02:30:049 (8,9,10,11,12,13) - Perfect circle please~
02:58:761 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - ^
02:40:324 (1,2) - Sick sliders <3
03:00:011 (1) - SV slow down? End slider here: 02:58:527 (2) - start stream here: 02:58:527 (2) - (and NC), as previously explained, these beats (especially on big white lines where a new rhythm sections start) are screaming for emphasis.
03:05:324 - ^
03:09:308 - missing beat~
03:12:433 - ^
03:30:804 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Try make this a perfect circle (as mentioned earlier with other examples)
03:56:512 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - ^
04:32:489 (6,8) - At this point I'm confused why you manually offset stacks on most circles but on this jump you stack them perfectly? Seems inconsistent but I'm sure you have your reasons so up to you~ just pointed out my confusion~
05:14:551 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - try curve this as a perfect circle
05:16:951 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - ^
That's pretty much it. Overall you have amazing flow in your map. It looks reasonably tidy and consistent. Only things that seemed off were some of your stream shapes, so I hope you fix those. And the under-mapped triplets/streams in some cases aren't that important, they're only suggestions. I hope you'll respect my mod and consider most things I say.
Good luck approving this~ It's almost there!