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Aihuro
329 posts
Joined January 2015
Aihuro
Hey~! M4M request in-game.

General:
  1. There's an off-screen object in Extra. Please fix this since it's unrankable.
  2. Why not change the combo colors to blue or a color that is not pink lol. (In easy)

Easy:
  1. 00:05:506 (1,2,3) - This pattern is kinda messy. . why not try clean it up by improving the triangle shape or blanket (3) with (2).
    Image
  2. 00:25:505 (2,3) - I highly suggest you don't put hitcircles on places where the beat is hard to map. It would be really hard for newbies to play. Why not add a slider here: 00:25:338 - and end it here: 00:25:838 - .
  3. 00:32:838 (5,1) - It would be nice if you could blanket these two sliders.
  4. 00:34:172 (1,2) - This flow has a really sharp angle. . And the placement doesn't really make sense to me so why not place the hitcircle under the slider? Or here: X: 20 Y: 84
    Image
  5. 01:21:505 (2,3,5,1) - This is not really recommended because this sort of stacking can confuse newbies. Why not blanket 01:23:172 (5) - with 01:22:172 (4) - ? Something like this:
    Image
  6. 01:31:505 (1,2) - This is kinda weird placing. . why not just move the slider to the left like this:
    Image
  7. 01:34:172 (1,2) - Blanket here can be improved.
  8. 01:37:505 (2,3) - ^ Same like I mentioned above. Rather just remove the hitcircles and add a slider.

Some placements are a little nazi. This diff needs more mods before it's prefect~!

Normal:
  1. The spacing is very big imo. . Because the BPM is very fast. Why not change the DS to 0.8 ot 0.9? I think it looks way better.
  2. 00:25:838 (3,4) - For better flow, you can try to make them in a straight line. Just move the slider just a little bit to the right.
    Image
  3. 00:37:505 (2,3,4) - This flow can be improved. Just rotate (4) by 50 degrees. Imo the flow is way better and it also just looks much neater.
  4. 00:38:672 - Add a note here.
  5. 00:47:505 (1) - This slider shape can be improved. At the moment it looks really nazi. . Try to change it to:
    Image
  6. 00:50:172 (6) - This placement really looks ugly. . Instead of curving all this sliders why not change (6) into a straight slider and place it here:
    Image
  7. 01:00:172 (5,1) - This blanket here is very nazi. Please improve it.
  8. 01:33:838 (5,3) - The overlap here is very visible. Please try to ignore any sort of overlaps like this one here.

I really suggest you change the DS to 0.8 or 0.9. I just don't like these kind of spacings in normals.

7ka's Hard:
  1. 00:30:172 (3,4,5) - Make sure that the spacing here is similar. As you can see there is a difference:
    Image
    So just move (4) so that the distance is the same.
  2. 00:52:838 (1) - I don't really understand why you add a jump here. Cause the music sounds like calm here. Just make the DS the same here.
  3. 01:24:838 (1,2,3,4,1) - You can improve the flow here. Just turn 01:25:505 (1) - so that it looks like this:
    Image
  4. 01:36:672 (4,1) - This jump is kinda big. Just try to decrease the jump.
  5. 01:37:172 (2,3) - This DS is inconsistent with 01:36:672 (4,1) -. . Why not also add a small jump here? the beat here is the same with here 01:36:672 (4,1) -

I like this diff~

Insane:
  1. 00:24:005 (3,4) - This spacing here is weird because the beat is kinda strong. I suggest you add a jump here.
  2. 00:48:005 - I highly suggest you add a note here. It feels really empty here.
  3. 01:00:838 (1) - I don't really like this flow here. . Why not try something like this:
    Image
  4. 01:10:838 (3,4) - I'm not sure with other modders. . but this flow is really terrible >.< It also looks really nazi. Please try something like this instead:
    Image
    Like you did here for instance: 01:14:172 (1,2) -

I'm not really an expert with Insanes. . but I think this diff needs a lot of work.

This is all from me! Wish you good luck with this map~
DeletedUser_423548
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_423548

Aihuro wrote:

Hey~! M4M request in-game.

General:
  1. There's an off-screen object in Extra. Please fix this since it's unrankable. I can not understand...
  2. Why not change the combo colors to blue or a color that is not pink lol. (In easy) I think that it is the same color to me

Easy:
  1. 00:05:506 (1,2,3) - This pattern is kinda messy. . why not try clean it up by improving the triangle shape or blanket (3) with (2).
    Image
  2. 00:25:505 (2,3) - I highly suggest you don't put hitcircles on places where the beat is hard to map. It would be really hard for newbies to play. Why not add a slider here: 00:25:338 - and end it here: 00:25:838 - .
  3. 00:32:838 (5,1) - It would be nice if you could blanket these two sliders.
  4. 00:34:172 (1,2) - This flow has a really sharp angle. . And the placement doesn't really make sense to me so why not place the hitcircle under the slider? Or here: X: 20 Y: 84
    Image
  5. 01:21:505 (2,3,5,1) - This is not really recommended because this sort of stacking can confuse newbies. Why not blanket 01:23:172 (5) - with 01:22:172 (4) - ? Something like this:
    Image
  6. 01:31:505 (1,2) - This is kinda weird placing. . why not just move the slider to the left like this:
    Image
  7. 01:34:172 (1,2) - Blanket here can be improved.
  8. 01:37:505 (2,3) - ^ Same like I mentioned above. Rather just remove the hitcircles and add a slider.

Some placements are a little nazi. This diff needs more mods before it's prefect~!

Normal:
  1. The spacing is very big imo. . Because the BPM is very fast. Why not change the DS to 0.8 ot 0.9? I think it looks way better.
  2. 00:25:838 (3,4) - For better flow, you can try to make them in a straight line. Just move the slider just a little bit to the right.
    Image
  3. 00:37:505 (2,3,4) - This flow can be improved. Just rotate (4) by 50 degrees. Imo the flow is way better and it also just looks much neater.
  4. 00:38:672 - Add a note here.
  5. 00:47:505 (1) - This slider shape can be improved. At the moment it looks really nazi. . Try to change it to:
    Image
  6. 00:50:172 (6) - This placement really looks ugly. . Instead of curving all this sliders why not change (6) into a straight slider and place it here:
    Image
  7. 01:00:172 (5,1) - This blanket here is very nazi. Please improve it.
  8. 01:33:838 (5,3) - The overlap here is very visible. Please try to ignore any sort of overlaps like this one here.

I really suggest you change the DS to 0.8 or 0.9. I just don't like these kind of spacings in normals.


Insane:
  1. 00:24:005 (3,4) - This spacing here is weird because the beat is kinda strong. I suggest you add a jump here.
  2. 00:48:005 - I highly suggest you add a note here. It feels really empty here.
  3. 01:00:838 (1) - I don't really like this flow here. . Why not try something like this:
    Image
  4. 01:10:838 (3,4) - I'm not sure with other modders. . but this flow is really terrible >.< It also looks really nazi. Please try something like this instead:
    Image
    Like you did here for instance: 01:14:172 (1,2) -

I'm not really an expert with Insanes. . but I think this diff needs a lot of work.

This is all from me! Wish you good luck with this map~
Thanks for mod!
I have not changed some places according to your image
William K
694 posts
Joined January 2013
William K
Hi, sorry for a very late mod :3

[General]

  1. This map's Normal only has some 1/2s. But the Hard has most of its rhythm 1/2, and even 1/4s. So the spread is kinda imbalanced, Maybe you could make another "Advanced" difficulty?
[Easy]

  1. 00:05:506 (1) - Please check Distance Snap, it's on 1.46x, please make it consistent with the others.
  2. 00:44:838 (1) - Shouldn't this have the same rhythm as 00:42:172 (1) - ? They sound pretty much the same.

[Normal]

  1. 00:20:672 - Please add a note here, the instrument of 00:20:672 - is pretty much the same with 00:18:005 (3) - and 00:23:338 (3) - so it's better to add a note for consistency.
  2. 01:19:505 (3,4,5) - Isn't this the same as 01:08:838 - ? It should've been the same according to the similarity of the music. So please be consistent with the rhythming.

[Insane]

  1. 00:01:506 (1) - Actually, I can't hear anything from the reversed slider. How about changing it into something similar to 00:03:506 (1) - ?
  2. 00:22:838 (4) - Why's this not emphasized but 00:24:172 (4) - is emphasized? Both of them have the same instrument playing. How about emphasizing 00:22:838 (4) - too?
  3. 00:38:338 (2,3,4) - How about making a reversed slider instead for the triplet? The part is pretty calm so a triplet would be too much here imo. And you even don't do triplet at an intense part like 00:50:339 (2,3) - .
  4. 01:10:172 (1,2,3,4) - Seems pretty random on patterning, you did a pattern at 01:20:838 (1,2,3,4) - but why not at 01:10:172 (1,2,3,4) - ? Please stay consistent.

That's all I guess, but please stay consistent on mapping something, as you can see in the mod. :3 GL!
DeletedUser_423548
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_423548

William K wrote:

Hi, sorry for a very late mod :3

[General]

  1. This map's Normal only has some 1/2s. But the Hard has most of its rhythm 1/2, and even 1/4s. So the spread is kinda imbalanced, Maybe you could make another "Advanced" difficulty?
[Easy]

  1. 00:05:506 (1) - Please check Distance Snap, it's on 1.46x, please make it consistent with the others.
  2. 00:44:838 (1) - Shouldn't this have the same rhythm as 00:42:172 (1) - ? They sound pretty much the same.

[Normal]

  1. 00:20:672 - Please add a note here, the instrument of 00:20:672 - is pretty much the same with 00:18:005 (3) - and 00:23:338 (3) - so it's better to add a note for consistency.
  2. 01:19:505 (3,4,5) - Isn't this the same as 01:08:838 - ? It should've been the same according to the similarity of the music. So please be consistent with the rhythming.

[Insane]

  1. 00:01:506 (1) - Actually, I can't hear anything from the reversed slider. How about changing it into something similar to 00:03:506 (1) - ?
  2. 00:22:838 (4) - Why's this not emphasized but 00:24:172 (4) - is emphasized? Both of them have the same instrument playing. How about emphasizing 00:22:838 (4) - too?
  3. 00:38:338 (2,3,4) - How about making a reversed slider instead for the triplet? The part is pretty calm so a triplet would be too much here imo. And you even don't do triplet at an intense part like 00:50:339 (2,3) - .
  4. 01:10:172 (1,2,3,4) - Seems pretty random on patterning, you did a pattern at 01:20:838 (1,2,3,4) - but why not at 01:10:172 (1,2,3,4) - ? Please stay consistent.

That's all I guess, but please stay consistent on mapping something, as you can see in the mod. :3 GL!
All fix!

thank you for mod! :)
-Nanaka-
815 posts
Joined July 2013
-Nanaka-

kajiyatta wrote:

M4M
[Hard]
Placement
00:36:172(1,2) ここだけdownbeatでNCかかってないのでNC入れ替え。
ここのPartのDbは特に強い音もありませんし、手前が5.5.5と来てるのでbalance重視でいいと思います
Rhythm
00:58:172 不要な緑線。
Hit Sound
00:52:672(6) finishをつけるならこっちで、次の(1)は削除。
00:52:672 (6) - になってるのはハイハットでシンバルではないと思います、6に付けてみてもかなり違和感があります
01:14:172~　このパートだけ音がないのはやや気になります。
ここは折り返し地点なのでうるさくするよりもおとなしめに付けてgapを出す方が好きです
Good Luck.
Modありがとうございました :)


Aihuro wrote:

Hey~! M4M request in-game.
7ka's Hard:
  1. 00:30:172 (3,4,5) - Make sure that the spacing here is similar. As you can see there is a difference:
    Image
    So just move (4) so that the distance is the same.
    ok,fix
  2. 00:52:838 (1) - I don't really understand why you add a jump here. Cause the music sounds like calm here. Just make the DS the same here.
    sure
  3. 01:24:838 (1,2,3,4,1) - You can improve the flow here. Just turn 01:25:505 (1) - so that it looks like this:
    Image
    We can handle it.
  4. 01:36:672 (4,1) - This jump is kinda big. Just try to decrease the jump.
    This jump is just right!
  5. 01:37:172 (2,3) - This DS is inconsistent with 01:36:672 (4,1) -. . Why not also add a small jump here? the beat here is the same with here 01:36:672 (4,1) -
    01:36:838 (1,2) - I make anti-Jump here.Because there is Break of 1/1, it is different from 01:37:338 (3,4) -
I like this diff~
This is all from me! Wish you good luck with this map~
Thank you for modding :)
NewRulerNA
1,301 posts
Joined December 2010
NewRulerNA
Mod力が衰えているので簡易的な音取りに関してのModが主になります。低難易度帯のチェックとのことでしたので、EasyとNormalのみです。
ヒットサウンドと配置に関してはあまり触れていません。

red: unrankable issue.
blue: maybe unrankable issue.
bold: problem/suggestion
underline: reason
italic: solution

[Easy]
  1. 00:31:505 (3) - 前のオブジェクトとの距離間が、これのスライダーエンドによって伝わりにくくなっている印象を受けました。リズムが2/1になっているため、より分かりやすい配置にする事を提案します。
    形そのままx260、y368のような下の位置に持っていくだけでも印象が代わります。
  2. 00:32:838 (4) - これについても上記と同じことがいえます。スライダーのエンドの先に次のオブジェクトがあるため流れも悪く、距離感を惑わすリスクも存在しています。

    少し大きな調整がこの後に必要となりますが、横に移動させてしまうのが自然で、かつ比較的広いエリアを活用した配置となります。
  3. 00:55:505 (1,2,1,2) -この後の00:58:172 (1,2,3,4) -と比べて曲調に対して密度が薄く、後者が曲調に対して濃い密度をしています。なので密度のバランスをそのまま入れ替えたリズムにする勧告をします。
  4. 01:14:172 (3) - このオブジェクトが複数の音を中途半端に拾ってしまった印象があります。
    01:14:172 ～ 01:14:672 - は楽器の音を拾っているのに対し、01:14:838 - はボーカルを合わせて拾っているため、そこを分けて音を拾ったほうが自然なリズムとなります。
  5. 01:14:172 (3) - 1/1 Slider
01:14:838 (4) - Cricle01:29:505 (2) - このスライダーでは01:29:838 - の音を拾っていないためミスマッチをしているように感じました。2/1スライダーを仮に入れたいのであれば01:30:172 - からの開始にしたほうが自然に入ります。


01:29:505 (2) - 1/1 Slider01:30:172 (3) - 2/1 Slider01:31:172 (4) - Circle01:33:838 (4) - 画面の外に触れてるので必ず修正してください[Normal]
  1. 00:34:172 (1) - スライダーの00:34:505 - のピアノの音を拾わないのは仕様でしょうか？

  2. 00:48:838 (4,5) - ここも00:46:172 (4,5) - のようなスライダーリバースに繫げて短いスライダーを入れるパターンをここでもぜひ採用して欲しい。
    一貫性がどうとかではなく、あのボーカルを長いスライダーのリバース込みで拾って、楽器の音を1/2スライダーで拾う音取りが綺麗に分けられていて、曲と高い一体性を持っているためです。
  3. 00:50:172 (1,2) - サークルを、とまでは言わないので、1/2スライダーをそれぞれの白線で入れて密度を上げて忙しいパートとするとより一体感が増します。

  4. 01:36:672 - ここの音も拾い、手前の01:36:505 (6) - と合わせてスライダーでまとめてみてはどうでしょうか？
    (6)と同じ音があり、01:33:838 (6) - からの入りで聞くとこの部分の抜けが際立って聞こえてしまいます。
音取りに関しては特別深刻な問題はありませんでした。
DeletedUser_423548
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_423548

NewRulerNA wrote:

Mod力が衰えているので簡易的な音取りに関してのModが主になります。低難易度帯のチェックとのことでしたので、EasyとNormalのみです。
ヒットサウンドと配置に関してはあまり触れていません。

red: unrankable issue.
blue: maybe unrankable issue.
bold: problem/suggestion
underline: reason
italic: solution

[Easy]
  1. 00:31:505 (3) - 前のオブジェクトとの距離間が、これのスライダーエンドによって伝わりにくくなっている印象を受けました。リズムが2/1になっているため、より分かりやすい配置にする事を提案します。
    形そのままx260、y368のような下の位置に持っていくだけでも印象が代わります。
  2. 00:32:838 (4) - これについても上記と同じことがいえます。スライダーのエンドの先に次のオブジェクトがあるため流れも悪く、距離感を惑わすリスクも存在しています。

    少し大きな調整がこの後に必要となりますが、横に移動させてしまうのが自然で、かつ比較的広いエリアを活用した配置となります。
  3. 00:55:505 (1,2,1,2) -この後の00:58:172 (1,2,3,4) -と比べて曲調に対して密度が薄く、後者が曲調に対して濃い密度をしています。なので密度のバランスをそのまま入れ替えたリズムにする勧告をします。
  4. 01:14:172 (3) - このオブジェクトが複数の音を中途半端に拾ってしまった印象があります。
    01:14:172 ～ 01:14:672 - は楽器の音を拾っているのに対し、01:14:838 - はボーカルを合わせて拾っているため、そこを分けて音を拾ったほうが自然なリズムとなります。
  5. 01:14:172 (3) - 1/1 Slider
01:14:838 (4) - Cricle01:29:505 (2) - このスライダーでは01:29:838 - の音を拾っていないためミスマッチをしているように感じました。2/1スライダーを仮に入れたいのであれば01:30:172 - からの開始にしたほうが自然に入ります。


01:29:505 (2) - 1/1 Slider01:30:172 (3) - 2/1 Slider01:31:172 (4) - Circle01:33:838 (4) - 画面の外に触れてるので必ず修正してください[Normal]
  1. 00:34:172 (1) - スライダーの00:34:505 - のピアノの音を拾わないのは仕様でしょうか？

  2. 00:48:838 (4,5) - ここも00:46:172 (4,5) - のようなスライダーリバースに繫げて短いスライダーを入れるパターンをここでもぜひ採用して欲しい。
    一貫性がどうとかではなく、あのボーカルを長いスライダーのリバース込みで拾って、楽器の音を1/2スライダーで拾う音取りが綺麗に分けられていて、曲と高い一体性を持っているためです。
  3. 00:50:172 (1,2) - サークルを、とまでは言わないので、1/2スライダーをそれぞれの白線で入れて密度を上げて忙しいパートとするとより一体感が増します。

  4. 01:36:672 - ここの音も拾い、手前の01:36:505 (6) - と合わせてスライダーでまとめてみてはどうでしょうか？
    (6)と同じ音があり、01:33:838 (6) - からの入りで聞くとこの部分の抜けが際立って聞こえてしまいます。
音取りに関しては特別深刻な問題はありませんでした。
全て変えました！ modありがとうございます！
Depths
681 posts
Joined January 2014
Depths
thzz requested me w

[baka's utakata]
  1. 00:24:005 (4,1) - maybe you can blanket here? http://puu.sh/uWquC/5a54f904df.jpg
  2. 00:25:838 (5) - what if you stack under 00:25:338 (3) - ? I feel it is more comfortable and more emphasis for 00:25:838 (5,1) - with this spacing
  3. 00:27:505 (1,2,3,4) - maybe tails sounld be clickable?
  4. 00:40:672 (2,3) - this feels confusing to read imo
  5. 00:59:172 (5) - what did you stack under 00:58:838 (4) - here? though this section this is the only stack. maybe something like this? http://puu.sh/uWqLm/a4a55f3e7d.jpg
  6. 01:00:672 (6) - stack on 01:00:838 (1) - ? since this seems to be the common pattern you use~
  7. 01:37:338 (3,5) - can stack these if you agree with my earlier statement at 00:25:838 (5) - :3
thats all really great diff still baka w
Meg
1,617 posts
Joined August 2012
Meg
from in-game
thzz's utakata

  1. 00:11:506 (1) - これも1/2sliderにしません？00:11:506 (1,2,3) - ボーカルがこの部分を一息で歌ってるから３つとも音合わせたほうがいい気がしました
  2. 00:19:505 (1) - 音が強い割に前のcircleと近いから配置が若干弱く感じます。00:18:672 (4,5) - がこれだけ離れてるしこっちももうちょっと離してみては？00:19:338 (7) - を移動させるのもアリ
    img
  3. 00:21:505 (1) - remove NC?　ここだけ余分な気がします
  4. 00:25:838 (5,1) - この二つのspacingがちょっと近くて歪に見えるのと00:26:172 (1,2,3,4) - の流れがあんまり良くない感じがしたので00:26:172 (1) - の位置を変えるのはどうでしょうか。自分なら00:26:172 (1) - を00:26:838 (6) - の頭に置いてギザギザな流れを作るかな～
  5. 00:30:172 (1) - ちょっと前のsliderと近い？これくらいは離してあげたほうが見た目もスッキリすると思います
    img
  6. 00:34:838 (2,3) - ^
  7. 00:40:672 (2,3) - play中だとかなり読みづらく感じるから(2)を上にずらすか(3)を下にずらすかした方がいいかも
  8. 00:43:505 (1,2,3,4) - 1/2sliderを2つ、もしくは00:43:838 (3,4) - だけを1/2sliderで置くのはどうでしょうか。個人的には00:44:172 (5,6,7) - の音を強調させたく感じたので全てcircleだと薄れてしまう気がしました。
  9. 00:48:838 (1,2,3,4) - ^
  10. 00:52:672 (6) - このdrum-hitnormal3の音ちょっと小さすぎませんか？打鍵感がなさすぎて気になりました
  11. 00:56:005 (5,6) - 普通にvocalフォローでこの音取りの方が合いそう。cymbalも大きいけどplaying的にはこっちの方が自然です
    img
  12. 00:57:005 (2,4) - ちょっと離しすぎ？これくらいでいいんじゃないかな。 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7640019　あと音取りも上と同じで気になったけどさっきと連打鳴り始めるところが違うからここは多分このままでいいと思います
  13. 00:59:172 (5) - このパートの3/4slider+circleの配置でここだけstackになってたからここもずらしちゃいませんか
  14. 01:00:505 (5,6) - vocal強いしここstackは合わない気がします。(6)を別のところに置いてみては
  15. 01:05:505 (5) - 01:08:172 (4) - と合わせてここも3/4sliderとかどうですか
  16. 01:24:172 (1,2,1,2) - ちょっと飛ばしすぎな気がする。音は全然違うけど01:25:505 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - を強調させるためにこっちはもう少し抑めのspacingでいいんじゃないかな
  17. 01:25:338 (5) - これも少し遠いと思います
頑張ってください～
thzz
579 posts
Joined May 2012
thzz

Depths wrote:

thzz requested me w

[baka's utakata]
  1. 00:24:005 (4,1) - maybe you can blanket here? http://puu.sh/uWquC/5a54f904df.jpg prefer flow around here~
  2. 00:25:838 (5) - what if you stack under 00:25:338 (3) - ? I feel it is more comfortable and more emphasis for 00:25:838 (5,1) - with this spacing stack rather can emphasize the snare sound. also follow point between (5,1) isn't visible and (4,5) stack make flow stop, therefore current distance should work as emphasize enough.
  3. 00:27:505 (1,2,3,4) - maybe tails sounld be clickable? this section is going to calm part. circle pattern is too much imo.
  4. 00:40:672 (2,3) - this feels confusing to read imo change sv a bit
  5. 00:59:172 (5) - what did you stack under 00:58:838 (4) - here? though this section this is the only stack. maybe something like this? http://puu.sh/uWqLm/a4a55f3e7d.jpg ok, change:3
  6. 01:00:672 (6) - stack on 01:00:838 (1) - ? since this seems to be the common pattern you use~ preparing emphasis of kick sound at 01:00:838 -
  7. 01:37:338 (3,5) - can stack these if you agree with my earlier statement at 00:25:838 (5) - :3 sry ;_;
thats all really great diff still baka w thank you :D and you also baka
thanks for mod~!

Meg wrote:

from in-game
thzz's utakata

  1. 00:11:506 (1) - これも1/2sliderにしません？00:11:506 (1,2,3) - ボーカルがこの部分を一息で歌ってるから３つとも音合わせたほうがいい気がしました ピアノですね……
  2. 00:19:505 (1) - 音が強い割に前のcircleと近いから配置が若干弱く感じます。00:18:672 (4,5) - がこれだけ離れてるしこっちももうちょっと離してみては？00:19:338 (7) - を移動させるのもアリ 調整！
    img
  3. 00:21:505 (1) - remove NC?　ここだけ余分な気がします 明らかに余分でした
  4. 00:25:838 (5,1) - この二つのspacingがちょっと近くて歪に見えるのと00:26:172 (1,2,3,4) - の流れがあんまり良くない感じがしたので00:26:172 (1) - の位置を変えるのはどうでしょうか。自分なら00:26:172 (1) - を00:26:838 (6) - の頭に置いてギザギザな流れを作るかな～ ちょっとだけ遠くしてみました、aimの角度もマシになってると思われる
  5. 00:30:172 (1) - ちょっと前のsliderと近い？これくらいは離してあげたほうが見た目もスッキリすると思います ok
    img
  6. 00:34:838 (2,3) - ^ ok、このセクション全体的に調整
  7. 00:40:672 (2,3) - play中だとかなり読みづらく感じるから(2)を上にずらすか(3)を下にずらすかした方がいいかも ないす
  8. 00:43:505 (1,2,3,4) - 1/2sliderを2つ、もしくは00:43:838 (3,4) - だけを1/2sliderで置くのはどうでしょうか。個人的には00:44:172 (5,6,7) - の音を強調させたく感じたので全てcircleだと薄れてしまう気がしました。00:30:172 (1,2,3,4,5) - このあたりの流れを汲んでいるのでちょっと欲張りたい、保留～
  9. 00:48:838 (1,2,3,4) - ^ ^
  10. 00:52:672 (6) - このdrum-hitnormal3の音ちょっと小さすぎませんか？打鍵感がなさすぎて気になりました soft-whistle追加
  11. 00:56:005 (5,6) - 普通にvocalフォローでこの音取りの方が合いそう。cymbalも大きいけどplaying的にはこっちの方が自然です やっぱり00:57:338 (4) - と合わせたいしcymbal優先でkeepしたい
    img
  12. 00:57:005 (2,4) - ちょっと離しすぎ？これくらいでいいんじゃないかな。 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7640019　あと音取りも上と同じで気になったけどさっきと連打鳴り始めるところが違うからここは多分このままでいいと思います nerf, ok
  13. 00:59:172 (5) - このパートの3/4slider+circleの配置でここだけstackになってたからここもずらしちゃいませんか yes
  14. 01:00:505 (5,6) - vocal強いしここstackは合わない気がします。(6)を別のところに置いてみては 01:00:838 - ここのkickの感じを出して行きたい
  15. 01:05:505 (5) - 01:08:172 (4) - と合わせてここも3/4sliderとかどうですか 後者の3/4は01:08:422 - の"su"なんですよね……
  16. 01:24:172 (1,2,1,2) - ちょっと飛ばしすぎな気がする。音は全然違うけど01:25:505 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - を強調させるためにこっちはもう少し抑めのspacingでいいんじゃないかな 調整！
  17. 01:25:338 (5) - これも少し遠いと思います ok
頑張ってください～
modありがとう～～

http://puu.sh/uWFN5/174733402d.osu
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good luck
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Nanashima Asami wrote:

good luck
take my star
Thanks!
_kotachi_
567 posts
Joined July 2014
_kotachi_
hi from game chat
thzzさんの譜面すっごいイイです...modするのﾑｽﾞｶｼｲ...（）

  • thzz's utakata
  1. 00:27:505 (1,2,3,4) - ここ どんどんSVを小さくしていくのはどうですか？
  2. 00:52:172 (5) - これくらい緩やかなスライダーでもいいと思います→https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7642356
  3. 01:14:672 (3,4,1,2) - ここの距離の差が少し急だと思ったので01:14:672 (3,4) - を広げて01:15:005 (1,2) - を縮める形はどうでしょうか　こんな感じで→https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7642370
  4. 01:15:505 (1) - ctrl+Gのほうがいいと思います
  5. 01:16:838 (1) - x205 y272辺りどうでしょうか
初見プレイでフルコンした...　すごくいい譜面でした！
good luck! :)
thzz
579 posts
Joined May 2012
thzz

_kotachi_ wrote:

hi from game chat
thzzさんの譜面すっごいイイです...modするのﾑｽﾞｶｼｲ...（）おほほ

  • thzz's utakata
  1. 00:27:505 (1,2,3,4) - ここ どんどんSVを小さくしていくのはどうですか？ okです
  2. 00:52:172 (5) - これくらい緩やかなスライダーでもいいと思います→https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7642356 割とお気に入りのデザイン……一旦keep
  3. 01:14:672 (3,4,1,2) - ここの距離の差が少し急だと思ったので01:14:672 (3,4) - を広げて01:15:005 (1,2) - を縮める形はどうでしょうか　こんな感じで→https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7642370 一帯を調整
  4. 01:15:505 (1) - ctrl+Gのほうがいいと思います ここは1/4の延長線上をクリックさせたい
  5. 01:16:838 (1) - x205 y272辺りどうでしょうか ないす
初見プレイでフルコンした...　すごくいい譜面でした！ うまい、ありがとうございます！
good luck! :)
mod ありがと～ :)

http://puu.sh/uWTsi/0b8560fdc7.osu
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Topic Starter
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_kotachi_さん二度目のmod あっどうもです。
Left
2,156 posts
Joined October 2014
Left
as req

[thzz]
00:26:005 (5) - even this sound got note, 00:25:172 (2) - i think it would be better if here also has note.
00:30:172 (1,2,3,4,5) - 00:32:838 (1,2,3,4,5) - are this kind of jumps have logic?
00:35:338 (3) - 00:32:172 (2) - clickable vs unclickable. I think make it same would be better for consistency.
00:49:338 (4,5,6,7) - DS is low, considering vocal is higher than 00:48:005 (5,6,7,8,9) - this kind. especially 00:49:338 (4,5) - here
00:52:838 (1) - S slider can be improved i think?
01:06:505 (1,2) -
01:18:505 (3,1) - stack if u want?
01:22:172 (1,2) - quite bad for read, how about just 1/2 slider from 01:22:505 - like before?
01:38:005 - same

good luck!
thzz
579 posts
Joined May 2012
thzz

Left wrote:

as req

[thzz]
00:26:005 (5) - even this sound got note, 00:25:172 (2) - i think it would be better if here also has note. ??? sry i can't understand what you'd like to say (maybe misscopied somethig)
00:30:172 (1,2,3,4,5) - 00:32:838 (1,2,3,4,5) - are this kind of jumps have logic? logic that doesn't have logic
00:35:338 (3) - 00:32:172 (2) - clickable vs unclickable. I think make it same would be better for consistency. you mean like "AAAC" from 00:28:838 - . my thinking is "AABC"
00:49:338 (4,5,6,7) - DS is low, considering vocal is higher than 00:48:005 (5,6,7,8,9) - this kind. especially 00:49:338 (4,5) - here fix~
00:52:838 (1) - S slider can be improved i think? S for blancket
01:06:505 (1,2) - ?
01:18:505 (3,1) - stack if u want? yea
01:22:172 (1,2) - quite bad for read, how about just 1/2 slider from 01:22:505 - like before? okay
01:38:005 - same ???

good luck!
thanks for mod! :)

http://puu.sh/uXPPU/0b80676667.osu
lit120
3,251 posts
Joined August 2013
lit120
[thzz]
  1. 00:41:505 (1,2) - well i'd set the soft custom to 2 instead of 3, since it's a soft sound, and not even that loud though
[insane]
  1. 00:02:256 (2) - i don't think using a slider fits really well on the song, since the red tick has a lower tone of the note than the white tick. would set 2 notes there with a triangle pattern, but up to u though xd
  2. 00:41:838 (2) - ok clap doesn't suit rly well too. it doesn't have any drum notes here
  3. 00:41:505 (1,2) - same reason about the custom hitsound like above
  4. 00:56:838 (1,3) - woah, the overlap there
  5. 01:28:838 (1,3) - fix the stack
[nanaka san XD]
  1. 00:03:006 (1,2) - blanket pls
  2. 00:05:506 (2,3) - fix the blanket
  3. 00:19:172 (5,1) - ^
  4. 00:42:172 (1,3) - ^
  5. 01:18:505 (2,3) - ^
gl
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Topic Starter
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lit120 wrote:

[insane]
  1. 00:02:256 (2) - i don't think using a slider fits really well on the song, since the red tick has a lower tone of the note than the white tick. would set 2 notes there with a triangle pattern, but up to u though xd
  2. 00:41:838 (2) - ok clap doesn't suit rly well too. it doesn't have any drum notes here
  3. 00:41:505 (1,2) - same reason about the custom hitsound like above
  4. 00:56:838 (1,3) - woah, the overlap there
  5. 01:28:838 (1,3) - fix the stack


gl
I changed everything!

Thank you lit120 :)
thzz
579 posts
Joined May 2012
thzz

lit120 wrote:

[thzz]
  1. 00:41:505 (1,2) - well i'd set the soft custom to 2 instead of 3, since it's a soft sound, and not even that loud though i wanna make it louder gradually, sry~
thank you~~
-Nanaka-
815 posts
Joined July 2013
-Nanaka-

lit120 wrote:

[nanaka san XD]
  1. 00:03:006 (1,2) - blanket pls
  2. 00:05:506 (2,3) - fix the blanket
  3. 00:19:172 (5,1) - ^
  4. 00:42:172 (1,3) - ^
  5. 01:18:505 (2,3) - ^
gl
だいたい直しました、Thx,llit! :)

@やさい、soundファイル構成変わってたみたいなんで無音のsliderSide1を追加しといてください

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Karen
2,860 posts
Joined August 2013
Karen
my angel rem o.o

Unused hitsounds:
normal-hitclap2.wav
normal-hitwhistle2.wav
00:15:506 - is this red line necessary? there's no bpm change

thzz
missing video
00:15:006 (4) - can you avoid the overlap on the slider head and tail
00:20:172 (4,5) - spacing isn't good for a 3/4 rhythm imo
00:34:838 (2,3) - 1 slider? like 00:32:172 (2) - , idk why it's different here

insane
00:07:506 (2,3,4) - use the same DS as 00:09:506 (1,2,3) -
00:16:672 - should be a circle here i think
00:22:838 (3,4) - 00:24:172 (5,6) - it would be better to use the same spacing for 3/4 sliders
00:41:505 (1,2) - the reverse arrows are totally covered, not a good pattern :(
00:59:171 (2) - clap?
01:02:172 - make it clickable? this beat is very strong
01:05:172 (2,5) - the overlap is pretty ugly

it's not a 1st ranked map so my standard is high :(
try to improve it and find someone else for ranking, good luck~
DeletedUser_423548
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_423548

Karen wrote:

my angel rem o.o

Unused hitsounds:
normal-hitclap2.wav thanks
normal-hitwhistle2.wav ^
00:15:506 - is this red line necessary? there's no bpm change delete


insane
00:07:506 (2,3,4) - use the same DS as 00:09:506 (1,2,3) -
00:16:672 - should be a circle here i think
00:22:838 (3,4) - 00:24:172 (5,6) - it would be better to use the same spacing for 3/4 sliders
00:41:505 (1,2) - the reverse arrows are totally covered, not a good pattern :(
00:59:171 (2) - clap?
01:02:172 - make it clickable? this beat is very strong
01:05:172 (2,5) - the overlap is pretty ugly

All fixed

it's not a 1st ranked map so my standard is high :(
try to improve it and find someone else for ranking, good luck~
Thank you Karen! :)
-NanoRIPE-
2,018 posts
Joined October 2013
-NanoRIPE-
ok lets finish this (acutally i want to mod this map last month but cuz im lazy so im late to mod it xd)

easy
00:11:006 (2) - unnecessary circle here cause theres no instrument nor vocal to emphatized with this circle
00:27:505 (1) - i think this slider's shape could be nicer
00:35:172 (2) - same as first point
00:35:505 (2,3) - 1/1 reverse slider its enough here imo to emphatize the vocal here (same as you did at 00:32:838 (4) ) cause at 00:36:505 - theres no vocal to emphatized with the slidertail
00:45:838 (2) - move to x:124 y:31 for better flow between (1,2,3)
00:50:172 (3) - ^ x:169 y:377
00:55:505 (1,2,1,2) - hmm the rhythm here its not really good (i mean its not really fit with the music).you can improve the rhythm with 3/2 reverse slider at 00:55:505 - and at 00:56:838 - *note : 3/2 reverse slider its like at 01:00:838 (1) -
01:06:172 (3) - ctrl j and move to 399,281 for better pattern
01:16:838 (3,4) - hmm the straight slider ruined the pattern and flow.maybe use curve slider and blanket it with (4) ?
01:31:505 (1) - move down a bit for better flow (the linear flow here is not really good imo)
01:38:172 (1) - same as above,move down a bit for better flow

normal
00:27:505 - you emphatize the guitar here on easy diff but you dont emphatize it on normal? :thinking:
00:32:838 (2) - meh,the shape makes the pattern a bit ugly.just use straight slider here for better
00:34:172 (1) - hmm long slider here for vocal same as you did on previous pattern
00:35:505 (3) - same as easy
01:11:172 (3) - move down a bit for better flow between (2,3,4)

not bad

hard
00:38:838 (4,5) - considering to adds whistle on the sliderhead for emphatize the vocal
01:14:505 (3) - clap for drum
01:25:505 (2) - cut this slider into a 1/2 reverse slider for emphatize the vocal well
01:27:505 (1,2) - 4 circles for emphatize the vocal and drum more

insane
00:22:172 (1,2,3) - the overlap looks ugly for me
00:24:838 (1,1) - stacked for better pattern and emphatize the cymbal better
00:27:505 (1,2,1,2) - try to add jump here for represent the guitar well
00:28:838 until 00:39:505 - the ds make looks the pattern ugly for insane diff (dont follow the ds here.i mean increase the ds at least.this is insane diff not normal nor easy.
00:40:672 - circle here cause piano
00:51:505 (1,2,3) - can you try another pattern pls? cause the current on its kinda boring imo
01:00:838 (1,2) - this linear flow its not really good imo (try to move circle (1) somewhere to avoid the linear flow)
01:01:505 (1,2) - ^
01:16:838 (1,2,3,4) - bad flow imo xd
01:36:838 (1,1) - same as before
01:37:838 (4,4) - stack on the sliderhead not the slidertail for better flow

hmmm this map need some polishing imo ~
gl ~
DeletedUser_423548
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_423548

-NanoRIPE- wrote:

ok lets finish this (acutally i want to mod this map last month but cuz im lazy so im late to mod it xd)

easy
00:11:006 (2) - unnecessary circle here cause theres no instrument nor vocal to emphatized with this circle fixed
00:27:505 (1) - i think this slider's shape could be nicer no problem
00:35:172 (2) - same as first point fixed
00:35:505 (2,3) - 1/1 reverse slider its enough here imo to emphatize the vocal here (same as you did at 00:32:838 (4) ) cause at 00:36:505 - theres no vocal to emphatized with the slidertail It is hard to change
00:45:838 (2) - move to x:124 y:31 for better flow between (1,2,3) changed a bit
00:50:172 (3) - ^ x:169 y:377 It will exceed the frame
00:55:505 (1,2,1,2) - hmm the rhythm here its not really good (i mean its not really fit with the music).you can improve the rhythm with 3/2 reverse slider at 00:55:505 - and at 00:56:838 - *note : 3/2 reverse slider its like at 01:00:838 (1) - no!
01:06:172 (3) - ctrl j and move to 399,281 for better pattern no change
01:16:838 (3,4) - hmm the straight slider ruined the pattern and flow.maybe use curve slider and blanket it with (4) ? fixed?
01:31:505 (1) - move down a bit for better flow (the linear flow here is not really good imo) 01:32:838 (3) - Can not be placed
01:38:172 (1) - same as above,move down a bit for better flow fixed

normal
00:27:505 - you emphatize the guitar here on easy diff but you dont emphatize it on normal? :thinking: ok
00:32:838 (2) - meh,the shape makes the pattern a bit ugly.just use straight slider here for better ok
00:34:172 (1) - hmm long slider here for vocal same as you did on previous pattern I am picking up the piano
00:35:505 (3) - same as easy no problem
01:11:172 (3) - move down a bit for better flow between (2,3,4) no

not bad

hard
00:38:838 (4,5) - considering to adds whistle on the sliderhead for emphatize the vocal
01:14:505 (3) - clap for drum
01:25:505 (2) - cut this slider into a 1/2 reverse slider for emphatize the vocal well
01:27:505 (1,2) - 4 circles for emphatize the vocal and drum more

insane
00:22:172 (1,2,3) - the overlap looks ugly for me fixed
00:24:838 (1,1) - stacked for better pattern and emphatize the cymbal better This is my style
00:27:505 (1,2,1,2) - try to add jump here for represent the guitar well no
00:28:838 until 00:39:505 - the ds make looks the pattern ugly for insane diff (dont follow the ds here.i mean increase the ds at least.this is insane diff not normal nor easy. There is no need to widen Distance in a quiet part
00:40:672 - circle here cause piano I challenged it but it is hard to play
00:51:505 (1,2,3) - can you try another pattern pls? cause the current on its kinda boring imo no
01:00:838 (1,2) - this linear flow its not really good imo (try to move circle (1) somewhere to avoid the linear flow) I do not think so
01:01:505 (1,2) - ^ ^
01:16:838 (1,2,3,4) - bad flow imo xd I do not think so
01:36:838 (1,1) - same as before same
01:37:838 (4,4) - stack on the sliderhead not the slidertail for better flow It's better now

hmmm this map need some polishing imo ~
gl ~
Thank you for the second mod :)
thzz
579 posts
Joined May 2012
thzz

Karen wrote:

thzz
missing video oops (thx 714)
00:15:006 (4) - can you avoid the overlap on the slider head and tail　this shape is imagination of cherry blossom, so i think it's fine and the best. (but polished a bit)
00:20:172 (4,5) - spacing isn't good for a 3/4 rhythm imo not necessary to do that imo cuz of 01:32:172 (4,5) - and some same kind of distances of 3/4 rhythm,
00:34:838 (2,3) - 1 slider? like 00:32:172 (2) - , idk why it's different here i think placement should be becoming intenser gradually in this section considering the piano
thx karen~

http://puu.sh/vQpql/f4774bffc5.osu
sahuang
2,293 posts
Joined December 2014
sahuang
aaa placeholder for 2kds

Sorry for late

Easy
00:26:172 (1) - unreasonable to use a red anchor,and you can improve the flow here 00:25:505 (2,1) - by putting the second slider down a bit. Also no need to NC this
00:36:172 (3,1) - doesn't look good
00:59:172 - 01:00:505 - why do you make these empty :o
01:38:172 (1) - also why NC

Normal
Next time change a sv and ds setting cuz it looks really bad with this kind of overlaps 00:01:506 (1,2,3) - 00:19:172 (5,1,2,3) - etc very small
00:26:172 (1) - remove NC
00:28:838 (1,2,1,2,1,2,3) - they are too simplified. Since you are following vocal onwards (00:35:505 (4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5) - ),
i suggest you follow music for the previous part as well. for example 00:34:172 (1,2,3) - change to 3/2 slider etc
01:04:172 - maybe add sth here
01:26:005 (6,1) - stack?
01:28:672 (4,1) - ds thing
DS between objects are bad in this diff...the overlap is too small.

Hard
00:55:505 (1,2) - spacing is unreasonably big compared to 00:56:838 (1,2,3) -

Insane
01:02:005 (4,1) - increase spacing...emphasis the downbeat
01:16:838 (1,2,3,4,5) - etc this actually look bad cuz the weird overlap for 01:16:838 (1,5) -
01:26:005 (7,1) - increase spacing for emphasis
This diff can be polished a bit, doesn't look good in aesthetics

thzz
00:57:672 (5,6,7,8,9) - maybe same spacing as previous stream
01:20:838 (1,2) - shape looks weird to me :w

I think there's still a lot to improve, good luck on this :)
DeletedUser_423548
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_423548

My Angel Azusa wrote:

aaa placeholder for 2kds

Sorry for late

Easy
00:26:172 (1) - unreasonable to use a red anchor,and you can improve the flow here 00:25:505 (2,1) - by putting the second slider down a bit. Also no need to NC this
00:36:172 (3,1) - doesn't look good
00:59:172 - 01:00:505 - why do you make these empty :o
01:38:172 (1) - also why NC

Normal
Next time change a sv and ds setting cuz it looks really bad with this kind of overlaps 00:01:506 (1,2,3) - 00:19:172 (5,1,2,3) - etc very small
00:26:172 (1) - remove NC
00:28:838 (1,2,1,2,1,2,3) - they are too simplified. Since you are following vocal onwards (00:35:505 (4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5) - ),
i suggest you follow music for the previous part as well. for example 00:34:172 (1,2,3) - change to 3/2 slider etc
01:04:172 - maybe add sth here
01:26:005 (6,1) - stack?
01:28:672 (4,1) - ds thing
DS between objects are bad in this diff...the overlap is too small.

Insane
01:02:005 (4,1) - increase spacing...emphasis the downbeat
01:16:838 (1,2,3,4,5) - etc this actually look bad cuz the weird overlap for 01:16:838 (1,5) -
01:26:005 (7,1) - increase spacing for emphasis
This diff can be polished a bit, doesn't look good in aesthetics


I think there's still a lot to improve, good luck on this :)
All fix

Thank you My Angel Azusa! :)
Underdogs
820 posts
Joined July 2014
Underdogs
one hundred kds www

irc mod
21:53 Underdogs: hello w
21:54 Yasaija 714: hi~
21:55 *Underdogs is editing [https://osu.ppy.sh/b/1244943 Ayumi. - Hanagoyomi short version [Easy]]
21:55 Underdogs: wanna irc mod?
21:55 Underdogs: i think forum mod might take too long
21:55 Yasaija 714: ok~
21:55 Underdogs: ok uh
21:56 Underdogs: 00:01:506 (1,2) - is it ok to leave the rhythm as is? Newbies listen to vocal, rather than music
21:56 Underdogs: maybe add a circle in between would be better I guess
21:57 Yasaija 714: ok
21:57 Yasaija 714: fix
21:57 Underdogs: 00:28:838 (1,2) - make these the same?
21:58 Underdogs: From structure, I do not think they are pleasing to watch
21:59 Yasaija 714: fix
21:59 Underdogs: if you fixed that as well
22:00 Underdogs: If possible, you might make  00:31:505 (3) -  a straight slider, so it would look intuitive?
22:00 Underdogs: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9027764
22:00 Yasaija 714: ok
22:01 Underdogs: hmm
22:01 Underdogs: I think that is it.
22:02 Underdogs: But if I might be honest, if you dont mind, I think this difficulty might need a better structure?
22:03 Underdogs: It can be ranked, although it would be a little difficult to see BN actually liking this diff.
22:03 Underdogs: but you once had a ranked set. So I think I will trust on this difficulty
22:03 Yasaija 714: hmm...
22:04 Yasaija 714: However, since this map is a map before being ranked, it can not be trusted
22:04 Yasaija 714: Do you think Remap is correct?
22:04 Underdogs: I am not sure 
22:05 Underdogs: i think your current diff can still be done
22:05 Yasaija 714: Is that so...
22:05 Underdogs: yes
22:05 Underdogs: let us move on to the next difficulty
22:05 *Underdogs is editing [https://osu.ppy.sh/b/1244945 Ayumi. - Hanagoyomi short version [Normal]]
22:05 Yasaija 714: ok
22:08 Underdogs: wow
22:08 Underdogs: so good
22:08 Underdogs: I can't actually mod it, as it would break the structure you already build
22:09 Yasaija 714: Thank you~ XD
22:09 Underdogs: let's check your Insane
22:09 Yasaija 714: ok
22:10 Underdogs: 00:02:506 (3,4) -  not sure why pause here. At least add a slider on 00:03:006 - 
22:11 Underdogs: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9027833
22:11 Underdogs: 00:05:006 (6) - also, I think 1/2 slider fits better here?
22:11 Underdogs: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9027836
22:13 Yasaija 714: I think I will try two circles instead of a slider
22:13 Underdogs: yes
22:13 Underdogs: although I do prefer slider, since that part is calm
22:15 Underdogs: 00:47:005 (5) - triplet then add a slider works better as a rhythm here
22:17 Yasaija 714: ok
22:17 Underdogs: hmm, I cannot find much. And I think that's it.
22:17 Underdogs: Great work, I like the set
22:18 Yasaija 714: thanks XD
22:18 Underdogs: keep up the great work :)
thzz
579 posts
Joined May 2012
thzz

sahuang wrote:

thzz
00:57:672 (5,6,7,8,9) - maybe same spacing as previous stream previous is only the drums, here has the piano.
01:20:838 (1,2) - shape looks weird to me :w (2) is blanket for (1)'s tail tho...
thx for check!
-Nanaka-
815 posts
Joined July 2013
-Nanaka-

-NanoRIPE- wrote:

ok lets finish this (acutally i want to mod this map last month but cuz im lazy so im late to mod it xd)

hard
00:38:838 (4,5) - considering to adds whistle on the sliderhead for emphatize the vocal
not need.
01:14:505 (3) - clap for drum
^
01:25:505 (2) - cut this slider into a 1/2 reverse slider for emphatize the vocal well
Since 01:24:838 (1,2,3,4) - are four circles, 1/1 is appropriate.
01:27:505 (1,2) - 4 circles for emphatize the vocal and drum more
It would be better to give a feeling of speed with a slider than the circle stacked.
gl ~

sahuang wrote:

aaa placeholder for 2kds

Hard
00:55:505 (1,2) - spacing is unreasonably big compared to 00:56:838 (1,2,3) -
slider+slider slider+circle,Because it is different pattern it will not be compared.(At least that's what I think.)
I think there's still a lot to improve, good luck on this :)
thank you for modding :3
Garden
Nomination Assessment Team
1,343 posts
Joined June 2013
Garden
sorry for delay ;(

Easy
  1. 00:55:505 (1,2,1,2,1,2,3) - the long chain of 1/1 sliders is a bit boring and doesn't show the variety of music imo, I suggest https://puu.sh/xLvwJ/b599060eaf.png for 00:55:505 (1,2,1,2) - , 2/1 slider = a line of lyric so I think it fits the song well
Normal
  1. 00:28:838 - missing some whistles in the section
  2. overall okay, but you should try to make rhythm denser to bridge the diff gap to hard, now it seems kinda questionable for me. for example, 00:26:172 (5) - is same rhythm as easy, while hard is using much harder rhythm and spacing
7ka's Hard
  1. 01:25:505 (1) - change to 1/2 rhythm for the vocal? different from 01:26:172 (1,2) -
Insane
  1. 00:10:506 - 00:11:506 - whistle too?
  2. 01:12:838 (1) - 3/4 slider instead? fits vocal
  3. 01:16:422 - you follow other vocal syllables on the blue tick so this should be mapped too i guess?
  4. 01:32:172 (3) - spacing's kinda low for an insane dif, i try to modify it a bit while keeping your slider shape design -> https://puu.sh/xLx3r/98787205c0.png
thzz's utakata
  1. 01:13:505 (1,2,1,2) - the vocal pitch is going down so it doesn't deserve so much spacing as 01:08:838 (1,2,1,2) - 01:14:838 (4,1,2) -
  2. 01:16:838 (1,2,1,2) - similar point as above, 01:19:505 (1,2,1,2) - is obviously much more intense
  3. 01:27:505 (1,2,3,4,5) - it's painful (at least for me) to play such spacing without any build up
    well what a spacing mod
[]
mapset quality is generally okay I'd say, but since there are two ranked versions for the song already and I don't see many new ideas in this one, I don't feel like nominating in this case.. hope the mod helps some tho!
DeletedUser_423548
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_423548

Garden wrote:

sorry for delay ;(

Easy
  1. 00:55:505 (1,2,1,2,1,2,3) - the long chain of 1/1 sliders is a bit boring and doesn't show the variety of music imo, I suggest https://puu.sh/xLvwJ/b599060eaf.png for 00:55:505 (1,2,1,2) - , 2/1 slider = a line of lyric so I think it fits the song well
Normal
  1. 00:28:838 - missing some whistles in the section
  2. overall okay, but you should try to make rhythm denser to bridge the diff gap to hard, now it seems kinda questionable for me. for example, 00:26:172 (5) - is same rhythm as easy, while hard is using much harder rhythm and spacing
Insane
  1. 00:10:506 - 00:11:506 - whistle too?
  2. 01:12:838 (1) - 3/4 slider instead? fits vocal
  3. 01:16:422 - you follow other vocal syllables on the blue tick so this should be mapped too i guess?
  4. 01:32:172 (3) - spacing's kinda low for an insane dif, i try to modify it a bit while keeping your slider shape design -> https://puu.sh/xLx3r/98787205c0.png
ok All fixed

[]
mapset quality is generally okay I'd say, but since there are two ranked versions for the song already and I don't see many new ideas in this one, I don't feel like nominating in this case.. hope the mod helps some tho! I understand. :(
Thank you Garden!
kunka
1,566 posts
Joined July 2012
kunka
hey!
irc
22:16 kunka: easy
22:17 kunka: 01:38:172 (3) - これ1/1とcircleのほうが良い気がする。やっぱ最後のfinishは叩きたい
22:17 kunka: normal
22:18 kunka: 00:05:006 (5) - 1/2sliderでvocal followとか良さげ
22:19 kunka: 00:12:256 - 音とvocalあるのでadd circle
22:20 kunka: 00:16:506 (1) - 音あるけど個人的に必要ないかな
22:25 kunka: 00:56:838 (4) - vocal取るならkeepだけど try this https://puu.sh/xObAe.jpg シンバルとスネアが取れる
22:26 kunka: 01:25:505 (5,6,1) - これむじい。01:16:838 (4,5,6) - みたいのほうが良い
22:29 kunka: 01:28:672 (4) - これは微妙、、beatとフレーズが変わる節目なんで01:28:838 (1) - を強調したいから(4)は消すぽい
22:32 kunka: 01:35:838 (5) - これは好み。1/2sliderとcircleにする。代わりに01:35:338 (3) - を消すぽい？なぜなら01:36:172 - はdown beatなんでcircleのほうがリズム作りやすい
22:33 kunka: 01:38:172 (1) - これも01:16:838 (4,5,6) - こういうほうが良い
22:33 kunka: insane
22:34 kunka: 00:12:256 - normalと同じ
22:39 kunka: 00:24:838 (1,1,2) - time lineは1/1、1/2つう感じなのに間隔が同じで不自然。00:25:005 - 音あるのでnote追加。強い音は00:24:838 (1,3,4) - なので00:25:005 - は1/2sliderでguitar follow
22:39 kunka: https://puu.sh/xOc50.jpg こんな感じ
22:41 kunka: 00:55:505 (1,2,3,4,5) - 個人的に☆配置希望
22:45 kunka: 00:56:172 (5) - vocalなんでけど音は00:56:338 - から連打ってる。　https://puu.sh/xOcfY.jpg
22:46 kunka: 00:57:338 (3) - 1/2とcircle。スネア音を叩きたい
22:49 kunka: 01:25:172 (3,4) - streamが良さげ
22:50 kunka: 01:36:838 (1,1,2) - 上と同じ
22:51 kunka: 01:38:838 (6) - 自分なら01:37:505 (3) - の頭にstackぽい
22:53 kunka: 01:00:838 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 書き忘れ。微妙に形崩れてる。01:01:088 (2,3,4,2,3,4) - を直線上に出来ないかしら？
22:54 kunka: 以上
22:55 Yasaija 714: -全部直しました
22:55 kunka: はやｗｗｗｗｗｗｗ
粘ってこ～！！b(｀･ω･´)d
DeletedUser_423548
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_423548

kunka wrote:

hey!
irc
22:16 kunka: easy
22:17 kunka: 01:38:172 (3) - これ1/1とcircleのほうが良い気がする。やっぱ最後のfinishは叩きたい
22:17 kunka: normal
22:18 kunka: 00:05:006 (5) - 1/2sliderでvocal followとか良さげ
22:19 kunka: 00:12:256 - 音とvocalあるのでadd circle
22:20 kunka: 00:16:506 (1) - 音あるけど個人的に必要ないかな
22:25 kunka: 00:56:838 (4) - vocal取るならkeepだけど try this https://puu.sh/xObAe.jpg シンバルとスネアが取れる
22:26 kunka: 01:25:505 (5,6,1) - これむじい。01:16:838 (4,5,6) - みたいのほうが良い
22:29 kunka: 01:28:672 (4) - これは微妙、、beatとフレーズが変わる節目なんで01:28:838 (1) - を強調したいから(4)は消すぽい
22:32 kunka: 01:35:838 (5) - これは好み。1/2sliderとcircleにする。代わりに01:35:338 (3) - を消すぽい？なぜなら01:36:172 - はdown beatなんでcircleのほうがリズム作りやすい
22:33 kunka: 01:38:172 (1) - これも01:16:838 (4,5,6) - こういうほうが良い
22:33 kunka: insane
22:34 kunka: 00:12:256 - normalと同じ
22:39 kunka: 00:24:838 (1,1,2) - time lineは1/1、1/2つう感じなのに間隔が同じで不自然。00:25:005 - 音あるのでnote追加。強い音は00:24:838 (1,3,4) - なので00:25:005 - は1/2sliderでguitar follow
22:39 kunka: https://puu.sh/xOc50.jpg こんな感じ
22:41 kunka: 00:55:505 (1,2,3,4,5) - 個人的に☆配置希望
22:45 kunka: 00:56:172 (5) - vocalなんでけど音は00:56:338 - から連打ってる。　https://puu.sh/xOcfY.jpg
22:46 kunka: 00:57:338 (3) - 1/2とcircle。スネア音を叩きたい
22:49 kunka: 01:25:172 (3,4) - streamが良さげ
22:50 kunka: 01:36:838 (1,1,2) - 上と同じ
22:51 kunka: 01:38:838 (6) - 自分なら01:37:505 (3) - の頭にstackぽい
22:53 kunka: 01:00:838 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 書き忘れ。微妙に形崩れてる。01:01:088 (2,3,4,2,3,4) - を直線上に出来ないかしら？
22:54 kunka: 以上
粘ってこ～！！b(｀･ω･´)d
All fix

"BN同士みんな似た様な思想を持ってるわけじゃないから聞いて見る価値はあるんじゃない"
2017-10-02 21:47 kunka: https://osu.ppy.sh/s/351841　諦めんの？
2017-10-02 21:48 Yasaija 714: Gardenの最後の文でかなり心揺らされました；；
2017-10-02 21:48 Yasaija 714: 一応
2017-10-02 21:48 kunka: 見た感じ、恐らく、もうちと弄った後で有力なＢＮでいけそうな希ガス

あきらめようと思ったら応援してくれるというあきらめきれない状況。
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