Hi there
General
00:42:010 - Why not add a circle? It will make the gap smaller, and it will be mapped to the soft hihat and "kinda" to the vocals.
00:44:103 (2) - Uhmmm this slider starts on...nothing really important and ends on a stronger vocal beat. I wonder why you did this. Consider a rhythm like this ok idk you probably know something better
00:52:824 (3,4,5) - I would've spammed some offbeat sliders here (and by off-beat I mean on the blue ticks), as they perfectly represent the vocals. What you did is kinda meh, especially because you used a 1/2 slider when the "can('t)" is pretty strong in the vocals there
00:59:626 (5) - Usually I'm not the one complaining about this, but this blanket looks pretty bad
01:01:022 (2) - This blue tick slider has no purpose, and feels kinda wrong, because a new sentence starting on the slider-end is completely ignored there. Consider using circles, idk, but the next blue tick slider does fit.
01:05:557 (9,10,1) - You're not forced to do this but between these objects there is a pretty strong sound in the background. Maybe add a triple before the downbeat or make a burst here
01:24:568 (4,5,6,7,8) - Rotate clockwise because the flow from 01:24:393 (3) - is kindaaa meh
01:29:103 (6,7,8,9,10,11,12,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - I love this pattern, really nice
01:40:789 (10) - I feel that over such distances as these, ctrl+g would feel a lot nicer. I understand the pattern, but it doesn't really play that comfortably, at least to me. Let me know what you think
01:44:974 (12,13,1) - I know, I know, really powerful, but maybe a little bit closer to each other? Unless you want to see the world burn
01:45:847 (3,4,5,6,7) - Is this on purpose? The curve in the quintuplet doesn't really make much sense here
Box's Insane
00:52:650 (2) - Same here tbh, and so on. I can see the symmetrical patterns though, up to you
00:58:754 (3,1,2,1) - Uhm why do you suddenly undermap here and ignore the vocals? It's kind of a weird switch
01:01:022 (3) - I don't see the purpose of this slider. The blue ticks don't have any special sound or anything
01:02:940 (4,5,6,7,1) - This kinda feels overmapped. I can hear the vocals, alright, but how about keeping it with a triple instead of quintuplet instead? the first yellow tick circle doesn't follow anything. But if you like overmapping then ignore this suggestion
01:06:778 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - 01:08:173 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - These also feel out of place for an intro, though I can hear some of the yellow ticks... all up to you
01:13:231 (8) - Position this somewhere like this (just an example). The circle does not deserve such a huge jump for no special sound, and it takes away the emphasis for the clap on 01:13:405 (1) -
01:25:091 (2) - Move down instead? Spacing-wise it will make a lot more sense
01:26:312 (3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4) - This is the only place you used these, and it would be nice if there was actually a reason for this. But as far as I can hear there isn't. Why not use a regular quintuplet? ending on k2 would maybe emphasize something on the yellow tick, but idk what in this case
01:37:475 (4,2,2) - I like the pattern. However, considering the claps are in this case the stronger ticks, why not move the circles closer to the slider-ends instead of the slider-heads of the next slider to represent them better? Just a suggestion though
01:46:022 (4,5,6,7) - I thiiiiink this was a mistake
01:55:964 (3) - A drum finish fits better, no? Idk how it sounds in your skin, but for the default skin it seems like a better choice
Sharkie's Advanced
00:46:545 (1,2,3,4) - The auto-stack of the editor fucks up your pattern a little. Move 00:48:638 (4,5,1) - these three to x=304, y=122 OR (this is easier) move 00:46:545 (1,2,3) - to x=236, y=136
00:49:859 (2) - Same as prfbox
00:52:650 (2) - Etc
00:59:103 (5,6) - Again i'm not usually the one complaining about this, but if this was supposed to be a blanket, improve it a little
01:01:022 (3) - And same as prfbox
01:01:719 (5) - Especially this one, the vocals (and those sounds on the beats) are much stronger, so why not follow that instead?
01:08:871 (1) - I don't think a spinner is the best solution here, but anyway, lower the hitsound volume a little because the spinner-end is quite loud
01:39:568 (1,2,3,4,5) - Because this is a hard, I don't recommend you to use this pattern. Stacks like these require quite a fast snapping (at least for mouse players), so consider lowering the distance a little
01:40:266 (5,6) - Not necessary, but maybe a symmetrical pattern would look nice
01:50:731 (1,2,3,4) - Same thing here, but if you ignored my previous suggestion about the stacks, consider making the distances equal here at least, as a lower distance for the strong clap-beat doesn't really make sense
01:55:440 (9) - Doesn't this represent the music a lot better?
Priti's Normal
01:08:871 (1,1) - I believe there is enough time between these, but the slider is also pretty far away from the centre and against the direction you're going (well unless you spin in really big circles and happen to end up there with your cursor). Just stating this, nothing more, maybe ask a qat if you didn't already.
01:50:731 (1) - Is the soft-finish intentional here? Seems to be the only one in the kiai (or even the whole map I believe)
Toybot's easy
00:40:964 (1) - Maybe start using the bass-kick here already. I know it slowly becomes louder, but starting on a downbeat feels more natural
00:41:661 (2) - Add bass-kick to the slider-return
00:44:452 (2) - ...And on this slider-end
00:52:824 (1) - ^
00:56:312 (3) - And this slider-head. Please double check all these, would be weird if you did this on purpose
01:08:871 (1) - Remove the clap, it doesn't really fit
01:30:150 (4,2) - This overlap doesn't really look that great
Both Normal and Easy handled this song very well, nice job
The whole set seems nice, and with another diff of apple coming, I think this mapset will be very nice overall
Good luck (and have a star already)
General
- Cool, cool
- Lol I think the intro is a little messy, but the rest is very nice
00:42:010 - Why not add a circle? It will make the gap smaller, and it will be mapped to the soft hihat and "kinda" to the vocals.
00:44:103 (2) - Uhmmm this slider starts on...nothing really important and ends on a stronger vocal beat. I wonder why you did this. Consider a rhythm like this ok idk you probably know something better
00:52:824 (3,4,5) - I would've spammed some offbeat sliders here (and by off-beat I mean on the blue ticks), as they perfectly represent the vocals. What you did is kinda meh, especially because you used a 1/2 slider when the "can('t)" is pretty strong in the vocals there
00:59:626 (5) - Usually I'm not the one complaining about this, but this blanket looks pretty bad
01:01:022 (2) - This blue tick slider has no purpose, and feels kinda wrong, because a new sentence starting on the slider-end is completely ignored there. Consider using circles, idk, but the next blue tick slider does fit.
01:05:557 (9,10,1) - You're not forced to do this but between these objects there is a pretty strong sound in the background. Maybe add a triple before the downbeat or make a burst here
01:24:568 (4,5,6,7,8) - Rotate clockwise because the flow from 01:24:393 (3) - is kindaaa meh
01:29:103 (6,7,8,9,10,11,12,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - I love this pattern, really nice
01:40:789 (10) - I feel that over such distances as these, ctrl+g would feel a lot nicer. I understand the pattern, but it doesn't really play that comfortably, at least to me. Let me know what you think
01:44:974 (12,13,1) - I know, I know, really powerful, but maybe a little bit closer to each other? Unless you want to see the world burn
01:45:847 (3,4,5,6,7) - Is this on purpose? The curve in the quintuplet doesn't really make much sense here
Box's Insane
- Great
- 01:00:498 (1) - 85% is too loud for this section. I recommend you to use something around 70% at most
00:52:650 (2) - Same here tbh, and so on. I can see the symmetrical patterns though, up to you
00:58:754 (3,1,2,1) - Uhm why do you suddenly undermap here and ignore the vocals? It's kind of a weird switch
01:01:022 (3) - I don't see the purpose of this slider. The blue ticks don't have any special sound or anything
01:02:940 (4,5,6,7,1) - This kinda feels overmapped. I can hear the vocals, alright, but how about keeping it with a triple instead of quintuplet instead? the first yellow tick circle doesn't follow anything. But if you like overmapping then ignore this suggestion
01:06:778 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - 01:08:173 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - These also feel out of place for an intro, though I can hear some of the yellow ticks... all up to you
01:13:231 (8) - Position this somewhere like this (just an example). The circle does not deserve such a huge jump for no special sound, and it takes away the emphasis for the clap on 01:13:405 (1) -
01:25:091 (2) - Move down instead? Spacing-wise it will make a lot more sense
01:26:312 (3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4) - This is the only place you used these, and it would be nice if there was actually a reason for this. But as far as I can hear there isn't. Why not use a regular quintuplet? ending on k2 would maybe emphasize something on the yellow tick, but idk what in this case
01:37:475 (4,2,2) - I like the pattern. However, considering the claps are in this case the stronger ticks, why not move the circles closer to the slider-ends instead of the slider-heads of the next slider to represent them better? Just a suggestion though
01:46:022 (4,5,6,7) - I thiiiiink this was a mistake
01:55:964 (3) - A drum finish fits better, no? Idk how it sounds in your skin, but for the default skin it seems like a better choice
Sharkie's Advanced
00:46:545 (1,2,3,4) - The auto-stack of the editor fucks up your pattern a little. Move 00:48:638 (4,5,1) - these three to x=304, y=122 OR (this is easier) move 00:46:545 (1,2,3) - to x=236, y=136
00:49:859 (2) - Same as prfbox
00:52:650 (2) - Etc
00:59:103 (5,6) - Again i'm not usually the one complaining about this, but if this was supposed to be a blanket, improve it a little
01:01:022 (3) - And same as prfbox
01:01:719 (5) - Especially this one, the vocals (and those sounds on the beats) are much stronger, so why not follow that instead?
01:08:871 (1) - I don't think a spinner is the best solution here, but anyway, lower the hitsound volume a little because the spinner-end is quite loud
01:39:568 (1,2,3,4,5) - Because this is a hard, I don't recommend you to use this pattern. Stacks like these require quite a fast snapping (at least for mouse players), so consider lowering the distance a little
01:40:266 (5,6) - Not necessary, but maybe a symmetrical pattern would look nice
01:50:731 (1,2,3,4) - Same thing here, but if you ignored my previous suggestion about the stacks, consider making the distances equal here at least, as a lower distance for the strong clap-beat doesn't really make sense
01:55:440 (9) - Doesn't this represent the music a lot better?
Priti's Normal
01:08:871 (1,1) - I believe there is enough time between these, but the slider is also pretty far away from the centre and against the direction you're going (well unless you spin in really big circles and happen to end up there with your cursor). Just stating this, nothing more, maybe ask a qat if you didn't already.
01:50:731 (1) - Is the soft-finish intentional here? Seems to be the only one in the kiai (or even the whole map I believe)
Toybot's easy
00:40:964 (1) - Maybe start using the bass-kick here already. I know it slowly becomes louder, but starting on a downbeat feels more natural
00:41:661 (2) - Add bass-kick to the slider-return
00:44:452 (2) - ...And on this slider-end
00:52:824 (1) - ^
00:56:312 (3) - And this slider-head. Please double check all these, would be weird if you did this on purpose
01:08:871 (1) - Remove the clap, it doesn't really fit
01:30:150 (4,2) - This overlap doesn't really look that great
Both Normal and Easy handled this song very well, nice job
The whole set seems nice, and with another diff of apple coming, I think this mapset will be very nice overall
Good luck (and have a star already)