1. 01:01:285 - feels void here. Consider add a note.
2. 01:07:285 - maybe?
   
   or
   
3. 01:17:110 (2,3) - this jump dont feel intuitive, imo, a spacing to 1.5x feels better here:
   
   
4. 01:24:607 (5) - Arrow saw hiding under (3) -> http://puu.sh/jzEgL/d16079ec1e.jpg , try to ask to some QAT.
5. 01:26:107 (3) - this jumps feels a bit strange... i suggest try another stuff here
6. 01:40:819 (5) - ugly flow. Try it:
   1) Rote 8 degrees to (5) and (6). ((6) is for avoid little overlap with (3))
   2) Move (5) like this: http://puu.sh/jzESI/402797b590.jpg
7. 07:36:885 (9) - imo, change spacing => nc.
8. mm.. map have maaaaany noticeable copy/pasta... idk if this is good idea... for me, copy rhythms is fine, but not patterns.

ErunamoJAZZ wrote:

Hi~

First, a replay http://puu.sh/jzA8G/1b3779cd94.osr

[Crimson Dream]

1. 01:01:285 - feels void here. Consider add a note.
2. 01:07:285 - maybe?
   
   or
   
3. 01:17:110 (2,3) - this jump dont feel intuitive, imo, a spacing to 1.5x feels better here:
   
   
4. 01:24:607 (5) - Arrow saw hiding under (3) -> http://puu.sh/jzEgL/d16079ec1e.jpg , try to ask to some QAT.
5. 01:26:107 (3) - this jumps feels a bit strange... i suggest try another stuff here
6. 01:40:819 (5) - ugly flow. Try it:
   1) Rote 8 degrees to (5) and (6). ((6) is for avoid little overlap with (3))
   2) Move (5) like this: http://puu.sh/jzESI/402797b590.jpg
7. 07:36:885 (9) - imo, change spacing => nc.
8. mm.. map have maaaaany noticeable copy/pasta... idk if this is good idea... for me, copy rhythms is fine, but not patterns.

Good luck!!

AmigoDoChroome wrote:

Não vi nada de errado no mapa, ficou muito bom
Não considere essa merda um mod, é um uma opinião minha
▸ 01:18:160 (4) - Ela fica meio estranha nessa posição. Tenta colocar ela entre 01:18:010 (3) - & 01:17:860 (2) -
▸ 05:38:599 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,1) - Tipo esse " Pré Kiai" eu tentei fazer um negocio meio estranho, não sei se ira gostar.
Tipo, fazer os jumps imitando uma rosa.

Boobs wrote:

Clearly the best red like roses map out in the public.

But clearly needs more work.

ghm12 wrote:

Mais um projeto abandonado pelo tarrasky, além de taiko rip cause beautiful

Kalibe wrote:

m4m

[General]

CS 4,1 mb? :3

fix this and add : marathon to metadata

[Crimson Dream]

01:19:210 (6) - NC ?
01:22:732 - add circle to make triple as here : 01:17:260 (3,4,1) -
01:35:401 (6) - NC for drums
01:57:319 (9) - NC
01:58:819 (5) - mb smth like this? http://puu.sh/kLdla/2dfdb02da1.jpg
02:00:619 (5) - NC
02:04:519 (5,6) - mb ctrl + g?
02:07:819 (5) - NC
02:38:074 (1) - short spinner to 02:45:666 - and add circle or slider on 02:45:825 -
02:47:625 (7,6,6,7) - NC
03:25:314 (3) - http://puu.sh/kLdNX/ace174b442.jpg ?
03:34:457 (3) - ^
03:51:742 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - this moment should be extra jumpy like that : http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/3816909
03:52:313 (7) - ^... and NC it
04:02:885 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - these sliders sounds strange on red lines
05:14:599 (10) - NC it ( 14 numbers is too high man )
05:39:171 (5,9) - NC it for cool pattern :3
06:44:742 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16,17,18,19,20,21,22,23,24,25) - em... you know what to do xD
06:59:171 (5,8,11,14) - NC it for nice pattern
07:39:171 (8,9,10,11,12) - imo this is overmapped
07:57:885 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16,17,18,19,20,21,22,23,24,25) - -----^
08:30:599 (3) - http://puu.sh/kLeJJ/94e64ce850.jpg ?

And, that's it. GL

btw. Nice hitsounds tho, match to the instruments :3

Hoen wrote:

Hello ~*

Crimson Dream




Coloca Rock, Marathon nas tags?

1. 01:20:701 (3) - x:348 y:240?
2. 01:24:607 (5) - Consegue deixa o final desse slider em x:172 y:132?
3. 01:28:198 (3) - x:168 y:220 pra consertar o blanket
4. 01:32:251 (5) - x:232 y:220 Talvez
5. 01:57:019 (5) - NC?
6. 03:04:425 (6) - ^
7. 03:36:028 (6) - x:357 y:48
8. 05:18:456 (3) - x:112 y:264. Blanket
9. 05:40:313 (5) - x:352 y:246? Fica mais "quadrado"
10. 06:45:885 (1) - x:380 y:204
11. 06:46:956 (6) - x:260 y:120
12. 06:56:170 (1) - Finish no inicio do slider seria ótimo
13. 06:58:456 (3) - Finish?
14. 08:37:885 - Coloca um hit com whistle aqui?

Mapa incrível!!! Quase não tem erros :3 GL~

Kuki wrote:

[Crimson Dream]
01:17:410 (5) - Remove new combo, although I can see you've placed it because of the emphasis I don't think you really need it.
01:19:060 (4,5) - These need to be snapped onto 01:19:210 (6) -. So does 01:20:110 (1) -.
02:26:719 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - I think these would all be nicer curved, also don't use new combo when there's no timing changes here, it's uneccessary. peoples can die if not be nc
03:39:028 (3,1) - Good opportunity for a blanket of (1) on (3) here.
03:50:599 (5) - Snap this to 03:49:885 (5) -.
05:02:885 (6) - Snap this to 05:01:742 (6) -.
05:02:885 (6) - NC here or 05:03:170 (1) - here because of the upbeat.
06:02:456 (6) - Here too.
06:46:456 (6) - NC here and remove combo at 06:46:599 (1) - for the emphasis here.

Kroytz wrote:

Dunno if this is any help tbh

mod

01:07:285 (2) - I'd NC this and 01:07:928 (5) - for design appeal.

01:16:510 (1,5) - the relationship between these two don't feel very complimentary. Maybe just style but the close edginess of them is weird.

01:43:395 (9,10,1) - space this out more and make it like stream?

01:55:219 (5,6,7,8) - distance spacing is so weird here but you can't really tell what's being emphasized

02:26:719 (1) - I sooooo want these to be spinners like on the famous Red Like Roses lool. I think it'll work well xDDD

02:56:775 (3) - red tick slider and triple starting on white isn't rhythmically sound seeing as how you start your triples on reds (like they should be)

03:07:425 (1) - might be too close to 7. Doesnt get enough "standing out" when its close to it imo

03:17:028 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - I feel like this pattern could be changed to be more interesting than a copy flip... At the least, do something about (6,7) cuz that DS change although fitting just looks kinda weird. Maybe NC (7) and it'll look better.

03:19:314 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - ^

03:51:028 (6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Maybe I'm too attached to the other map but this could be JUMPY ;www;

03:55:456 - add beat here?

03:56:170 (3,4,5) - It feels kinda weird having the stops in motion, you do it more I see but I think it'd be more fitting to the song to keep the map moving.

04:18:028 (3) - could also be a high SV round slider

04:43:599 (1) - (I would do like the other map and put it on the other side and not SV. This way it keeps the player looking for that next beat lol) I mean, I guess it doesn't really matter all that much, but using slider points can help the aesthetic of a map as well.

04:59:599 (5,1) - something's up with that NC/rhythm

05:10:742 (4) - here too maybe keep the map moving

05:14:313 (7) - remove for more JUMPS

05:38:599 (1) - im just wondering why you never like use perfect squares..

06:03:456 - DONT NEGLECT THESE BEATS PLEASE!! D: D: D: D: D: (also more jumps ;wwww;w;w;w;)

07:33:313 (3) - I'd hit these as well

Kinda hard to mod. It's okay if you disagree with all of these... If I could recommend a few things, I would try to limit the overlapping style you have and go more 'crazy' with the spacing (like how you did at the last kiai but not so crazy for the other parts) because you are using CS3 after-all. Beginning sliders are <3333

1. 01:18:160 (8,1) - should have higher spacing for better emphasis at (1) , try move (1) to around x404 y47 ?
2. 01:23:257 (5,6) - I think ctrl+g this make flow here 01:22:807 (4,5,6,7,1) - better
3. 01:28:949 (7,1) - should have bigger spacing than 01:28:798 (6,7) - since (1) sound very emphasized , try move (7) to around x440 y248
4. 01:32:551 (7,1) - similiar to above , try move (7) to around x250 y237 ?
5. 02:21:619 (1,2) - spacing here is pretty large compare with the previous one which make it looks weird imo , try to make spacing here like the previous ?
6. 02:25:219 (1,2) - similiar ^^^
7. 02:56:775 (3,4) - spacing is pretty large , I don't think (4) sound very emphasized that much so it would be better to decrease spacing here a bit
8. 02:58:875 (7,1) - should have higher spacing than 02:58:725 (6,7) - cus (1) sound really emphasized , try move (7) to around x256 y304 ?
9. 03:01:725 (3,4) - and yea a bit too large spacing here, (4) doesn't sound really that emphasized so using large spacing just make it play weird imo ,consider lower spacing here
   03:05:025 (1,2) - similiar ^^^
10. 03:34:743 (4,5,1) - spacing might be a bit too big here x_x idk can't pass this lol
11. 03:44:028 (4,1) - should have higher spacing for better emphasis at (1) , try move (1) to around x260 y56 ?
12. 03:57:885 (1) - curve this the another way so it might make flow here 03:57:885 (1,2,3) - a bit better ?
    SPOILER

    
13. 04:10:884 (2) - try place this at around x216 y40 for better flow ?
14. 05:04:313 (3,4) - a bit too large spacing here imo (4) doesn't sound that emphasized
15. 05:23:028 (3) - curve this the another way so it might make flow here 05:22:885 (2,3,4) - will be better ?
16. 05:27:742 (4,5) - should have more spacing than 05:27:599 (3,4) - , try move (4) to around x220 y180 ?
17. 05:43:028 - somehow I feel like some spacing in 2nd kiai don't feel right when I try to hear a bit beat there , when you map a jumps if you map a large for an unemphasized beat like 05:44:742 (3,4,5) - 05:46:885 (2,3) - 05:48:313 (4,5,6,7) - 05:53:885 (3,4,5,6) - it's just feel don't right or weird imo , and yea that just what I hearing from the beat there and compare with the spacing you use so try to make spacing a bit more correlation with music here
18. 06:26:885 (4) - 06:27:456 (3) - mapping cymbal for sliderend here sound pretty weird , I would try to make that cymbal sound clickable for better impact
19. 06:36:742 (9,1) - should have higher spacing for better emphasis at (1) , try move (1) to around x384 y221
20. 06:42:456 (1) - curve another way ? for better flow here 06:42:456 (1,2,3,4,5) - imo
21. 06:52:028 (2,3) - maybe ctrl+g this would make flow here 06:52:028 (2,3,4,5,6) - better imo
22. 07:05:313 - for 3rd kiai it's just like what I said in 2nd kiai up there
23. 07:07:599 (1) - curve another way ? for better flow here 07:07:599 (1,2,3,4,5) - imo
24. 07:09:885 (1) - similiar ^^
25. 07:34:742 (10,11) - ctrl+g these for better flow here 07:34:599 (9,10,11,1) - ?
26. 07:37:313 (1) - yea similiar to this 07:07:599 (1) -
27. 07:38:456 (1) - ^^^ current flow just seem a bit weird for me
28. 07:50:599 (7) - nc ? so it make spacing here
29. 08:05:742 (4,5) - mmm maybe I feel like you can decrease spacing a bit here since I feel like it's a bit too much when (5) doesn't sound that much emphasized to me imo
30. 08:18:456 (1) - similiar to this 07:07:599 (1) -
31. 08:23:028 (1) - ^^^^^
32. 08:25:313 (1) - 08:27:599 (1) - same
    
    uhh yea I feel like the spacing correlation can be a bit improved and the flow too can also be improved a bit imo

CelsiusLK wrote:

m4m as requested

[crimson dream]

1. 01:18:160 (8,1) - should have higher spacing for better emphasis at (1) , try move (1) to around x404 y47 ? hm nice fix
2. 01:23:257 (5,6) - I think ctrl+g this make flow here 01:22:807 (4,5,6,7,1) - better ok done
3. 01:28:949 (7,1) - should have bigger spacing than 01:28:798 (6,7) - since (1) sound very emphasized , try move (7) to around x440 y248 hm i dont move from exactly this point but i use your idea to improve, thanks ^^
4. 01:32:551 (7,1) - similiar to above , try move (7) to around x250 y237 ?
5. 02:21:619 (1,2) - spacing here is pretty large compare with the previous one which make it looks weird imo , try to make spacing here like the previous ?
6. 02:25:219 (1,2) - similiar ^^^
7. 02:56:775 (3,4) - spacing is pretty large , I don't think (4) sound very emphasized that much so it would be better to decrease spacing here a bit for aesthetics 02:57:075 (4,5,6) -
8. 02:58:875 (7,1) - should have higher spacing than 02:58:725 (6,7) - cus (1) sound really emphasized , try move (7) to around x256 y304 ? hm ok
9. 03:01:725 (3,4) - and yea a bit too large spacing here, (4) doesn't sound really that emphasized so using large spacing just make it play weird imo ,consider lower spacing here fix
   03:05:025 (1,2) - similiar ^^^ fix
10. 03:34:743 (4,5,1) - spacing might be a bit too big here x_x idk can't pass this lol eh, this time have a stop timing before, is playable ^^
11. 03:44:028 (4,1) - should have higher spacing for better emphasis at (1) , try move (1) to around x260 y56 ? fix
12. 03:57:885 (1) - curve this the another way so it might make flow here 03:57:885 (1,2,3) - a bit better ?
    SPOILER

    
13. 04:10:884 (2) - try place this at around x216 y40 for better flow ? fix
14. 05:04:313 (3,4) - a bit too large spacing here imo (4) doesn't sound that emphasized fix
15. 05:23:028 (3) - curve this the another way so it might make flow here 05:22:885 (2,3,4) - will be better ? fix
16. 05:27:742 (4,5) - should have more spacing than 05:27:599 (3,4) - , try move (4) to around x220 y180 ? fix
17. 05:43:028 - somehow I feel like some spacing in 2nd kiai don't feel right when I try to hear a bit beat there , when you map a jumps if you map a large for an unemphasized beat like 05:44:742 (3,4,5) - 05:46:885 (2,3) - 05:48:313 (4,5,6,7) - 05:53:885 (3,4,5,6) - it's just feel don't right or weird imo , and yea that just what I hearing from the beat there and compare with the spacing you use so try to make spacing a bit more correlation with music here
18. 06:26:885 (4) - 06:27:456 (3) - mapping cymbal for sliderend here sound pretty weird , I would try to make that cymbal sound clickable for better impact
19. 06:36:742 (9,1) - should have higher spacing for better emphasis at (1) , try move (1) to around x384 y221 fix
20. 06:42:456 (1) - curve another way ? for better flow here 06:42:456 (1,2,3,4,5) - imo fix
21. 06:52:028 (2,3) - maybe ctrl+g this would make flow here 06:52:028 (2,3,4,5,6) - better imo fix
22. 07:05:313 - for 3rd kiai it's just like what I said in 2nd kiai up there fix
23. 07:07:599 (1) - curve another way ? for better flow here 07:07:599 (1,2,3,4,5) - imo fix
24. 07:09:885 (1) - similiar ^^ fix
25. 07:34:742 (10,11) - ctrl+g these for better flow here 07:34:599 (9,10,11,1) - ? fix
26. 07:37:313 (1) - yea similiar to this 07:07:599 (1) - fix
27. 07:38:456 (1) - ^^^ current flow just seem a bit weird for me fix
28. 07:50:599 (7) - nc ? so it make spacing here fix
29. 08:05:742 (4,5) - mmm maybe I feel like you can decrease spacing a bit here since I feel like it's a bit too much when (5) doesn't sound that much emphasized to me imo fix
30. 08:18:456 (1) - similiar to this 07:07:599 (1) - fix
31. 08:23:028 (1) - ^^^^^ fix
32. 08:25:313 (1) - 08:27:599 (1) - same fix
    
    uhh yea I feel like the spacing correlation can be a bit improved and the flow too can also be improved a bit imo

good luck thanks ^^