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Bikko

Joined January 2010

Bikko 2010-08-07T16:15:30+00:00

Poof! Summoned!

My english is not good. I'm sorry about this but my contury is not english-speaking world. keep in mind please.

[General]

My acc is always in abyss, It's veryvery bad and sucks, but I could SS. so, as I think, Timing is fine now.

[Frill's Normal]

Nice relaxing map.

00:16:030 ~ 01:21:040 = 01:28:768 ~ 02:33:778

PERFECTLY SAME PATTERNS JUST FLIPEP. Yeah, I love this kind of C&P map, but It is immoderate. c'mon, It is short map just 354 combos. change your patterns on some parts little bit.

00:51:035 (1,2) These notes are too close with spinner's end timing, and It is normal diff. I suggest more empty place after spinner. till 00:51:944 or 00:52:399

02:03:773 (1,2) ^

[Hard]

Good patternmap. I love this.

00:08:188 (4,5) These 2 circles not perfect stacked with slider. as I think it is not an big issue because It is not effective actual play... but I recommend to move it slightly.

00:25:122 (3) Move up 1 grid.

00:33:191 (1) not perfect stacked with slider.

00:49:217 (1,2,3,4,5,6) not perfect symmetry. rotate it to clockwise 33, and move 1,2,3,4,5 slightly, and turn it back. If you want perfect symmetry.

01:29:905 (1) not perfect stacked with slider.

01:31:723 (1) ^ (well, these stacks are really tiny issue, These are nothing more than pixel-level Nazi modding. Also, on this type of map, Nazi-modding is silly. you can ignore it.)

02:11:047 (2) ^

I know they're all little more than nazi moddings(because Your map is too good to me, so It's really hard to find flaws). but IMO, 00:08:188 (4,5) stack is can be an issue.

[Total]

Good map, Good song, Totally, This mapset is charming. It should be ranked. star~

Neethime

168 posts

Joined May 2010

Neethime 2010-08-07T16:50:13+00:00

Pink words:You have to fix these,they are mistakes.
Black words:Just suggestions.

[Frill's Normal]

Fine to me.

[Hard]
Some big jumps,covered notes,suddenly changed distance spacing make this diff harder than a Hard I think,though it doesn't contain many 1/4 notes.But it's not a big deal.

00:20:349 (1,2) - This jump is a bit sudden to me,could you make it a bit smaller?
00:28:986 (6) - new combo
00:52:399 (7) - ^
01:41:725 (7) - ^
01:43:088 (2) - 1 grid down.
02:09:456 (2) - 1 grid left.
02:09:683 (3) - 1 grid down.

Really nice map~Hard's hitsound work is great to me,nice green lines

I can't find obvious wrong in this map,so I can only do some nazi,sorry~
I think you may find a BAT to check and bubble your map now~
+Star

Shiro

Global Moderator

4,984 posts

Joined May 2009

Shiro 2010-08-07T17:34:37+00:00

Unrankable.
Major issues in the map: it is highly recommended to fix them.
Minor issue in the map: you don't have to follow them exactly, but I recommend you to.
Suggestions: those are personal opinions, feel free to follow them or not.
Possible fix suggestion.
If there's one black bold line in the whole mod post, I won't star the map. PLEASE NOTE THAT THIS DOESN'T MEAN I WILL STAR THE MAP IF THERE IS NO BLACK BOLD LINE. Learn to mathematical implication.

General:
The mp3 you are using is way longer than the mapped part. Cut it.

Frill's Normal:
00:27:850 (2) - Move it two grids left ?
00:45:580 (2) - Move it one grid down.
I think you should add some clap hitsounds and normal hitsounds on some slider ticks.

Hard:
Very nice map. The only thing I'd point out is:
01:25:131 (1) - Don't place circles in the center of the screen after a spinner, they're hidden by the 300/100 when the spinner is completed.

Aside from that, really nice map. You deserve a star.

Last edited by Shiro 2010-08-08T21:18:04+00:00, edited 1 time in total.

Pokie

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2,630 posts

Joined December 2009

Pokie 2010-08-07T18:32:58+00:00

General

- Disable countdown on all diffs
- Offset should move to -332ms and match the downbeat Edit: Remember to resnap after chagnes ;-;

Frill

- ;_; awwww copy&paste

00:05:119 (1) ~ 00:08:756 (1) - 1 grid left
00:35:578 (2) - remove finish
00:43:079 (5) - delete > 00:43:306 (x) - add a circle
01:48:322 (2) - remove finish
01:55:824 (5,6,7) - same as 00:43:079 -
02:34:233 (1) - spinner should be longer? Try to end up at 02:36:051

Hard

- Shinx** style!
- Some of the sliders can be more curve.. e.g. 01:57:409 (1,4,7) -

00:58:309 (8) - new combo here?
00:58:764 (1) - and remove new combo
01:05:128 (6) - overlap it under 01:04:446 (4) -
01:14:902 (2) - 1 grid down for 2nd point of the slider
01:30:814 (4,5) - place them like this?

Click me!

01:42:634 (1) - 1 grid down

Nice

James2250

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Joined July 2008

James2250 2010-08-07T19:29:41+00:00

remove the countdown on both difficulties
cut mp3?

Frill's Normal:
very very repetitive with the same patterns and same hitsounds all the way through which makes it kinda dull to play but I find no actual errors
I would just suggest to through and try and make some new and interesting patterns so it isn't so linear (also maybe try some new hitsound combinations, try making some nice slider patterns too?)
But you can leave it as is if you are fine with it

Hard:
Still think hitsounds could be more interesting but map is nice
Some very random jumps in this but I could hit most of them

*star*

Mismagius

9,237 posts

Joined July 2008

Mismagius 2010-08-07T21:07:16+00:00

Overall
MP3 needs to be cut.

Frill
Nothing wrong

Hard
00:11:029 (3) - i don't like this jump... it makes no sense, but you can keep it

01:06:947 (8) - make start of slider louder and then use finish on it?

I'm not a big fun of constant jumps, but this map is great. Star!

miccoliasms

491 posts

Joined April 2009

miccoliasms 2010-08-07T22:02:45+00:00

y u c a

844 posts

Joined April 2009

y u c a 2010-08-08T09:58:27+00:00

ｺﾞｰ!o(*･ω･)○ｺﾞｰ!
mp3もｺﾞｰ!o(*･ω･)○ｺﾞｰ!

Card N'FoRcE

osu! Alumni

4,058 posts

Here since the beginning

Card N'FoRcE 2010-08-08T13:38:30+00:00

- General: (Considerations and things you need to check/fix for the whole map)

BPM is correct. Seeing 131,98 i thought it might be 132,000 but it's not. Don't change it.
Are you sure that Source: "DRAGON BALL GT" is all capitalized?

- Frill's Normal:

.Opinions: (Just some thoughts, I'd personally like if you follow them)
Ok.

- Hard:

.Opinions: (Just some thoughts, I'd personally like if you follow them)
There are lots of sudden spacing changes like, for example, 00:22:622 (1,2,3,4,5,6). Personally, i don't quite like them, but i have to say that you used them with consistency for the whole map, so the map is playable and i am ok with that.
Nothing else, the flow is good.

Good job.

Eirene

577 posts

Joined December 2008

Eirene 2010-08-08T19:44:49+00:00

[Hard] :
really good, especially Hitsounds *.*
jumps :33333
3 remarks, feel free to ignore them >.<

00:15:121 (5,1) - you might have a little jump here, it would be cool >.<
01:19:221 (6,7) - maybe move up and right these circles
02:01:046 (2,5) - would be better like that ? :

[Normal] :
/Nazi ON/
there are few combos on the diff where you have a 2 squares spacing and then a 3 squares spacing.
Because the spacing is small, there is a big difference between 2 and 3 square grids.
sometimes it's a bit strange when playing
for exemple : 00:27:850 (2) - for this case, you should place the circle without grid snap
/Nazi OFF/
if you're lazy, don't change anything, it's all good >.<

[Easy] :
zzzZZZzzZZZZzzz
well, classic easy >.<

TKiller

4,390 posts

Joined May 2009

TKiller 2010-08-09T03:11:54+00:00

[Normal]

00:09:665 (2) - hold shift and make it perfecly symmetrical with (1)

00:11:484 (4) - hold shift and make it perfecly symmetrical with (3)

don't forget to move next objects after that (if needed)

00:19:667 (1) - bezier sliders are better this way, imo

I think you get the point, to do this just hold shift and play with slider points a bit. Then just ctrl-c, ctrl-v, ctrl-r, etc.. to make the next one symmetrical

00:26:486 (1,3) - same goes to these

00:26:486 (1,3) - and, in some way, for these

And just check all other bezier sliders to fix if needed

01:20:130 (1,2,3) - why are they higher than slider end? o.o

02:07:865 (1,2,3) - lol, 1 grid down

[Eazy]

00:07:847 (4,1,2) - ugh, wtf, this is ugly

00:11:484 (4,5,6) - and this is too, in some way...

00:19:667 (5,6) - looks really wierd

00:25:122 (3,4) - 1 grid down

and, well, I got nothing to say about this Easy except it really lacks "neatness". Can't really suggest how to fix all this, because this is just overall desing and mapping style.

[Hard]

I wanted to ask you +1 OD when first checked it, but you already did that by now.
Hard is ok by me.

DeadAlready

1,575 posts

Joined August 2008

DeadAlready 2010-08-09T19:19:38+00:00

nice map~

gogogo >w</

(EDIT: an advice in irc XD)

ah19980924

51 posts

Joined January 2010

ah19980924 2010-08-09T20:55:28+00:00

nice map

soulfear

947 posts

Joined January 2010

soulfear 2010-08-09T21:13:36+00:00

good!

Vicho

887 posts

Joined May 2009

Vicho 2010-08-10T20:17:08+00:00

good for me (:

star

ShaggoN

689 posts

Joined September 2008

ShaggoN 2010-08-11T15:16:28+00:00

Blue: Sugestion. Not necessary, but should take good effects.
Green: Notification or cosmetic thing. May, but don't have to be fixed.
Orange: Should be fixed.
Red: Have to be fixed.

[Easy]

01:55:590 (1) - New combo look little weird here.

[Frill's Normal]
Cool :3

[Frill's Normal]

02:10:592 (1) - Same issue with new combo.

I like this stage. Jumps and spacing, are well planned, they're playing so naturally, no confusing.

Great beatmap. Hope it'll be ranked soon. Starrr'd

btw. Sorry it took so long :<

Beuchi

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2,288 posts

Joined February 2009

Beuchi 2010-08-11T19:32:53+00:00

Hi!~

Remember these are just suggestions that you can totally ignore

~Easy~
No problems here~

~Frill's Normal~
No problems here~

~Hard~
00:58:308 (1,2,3,4) - This part looks pretty messy, I guess it's because of having all those notes in a short spacing when your whole map is spaced out o:

Meh, almost anything. I like your style! All the jumps are pretty intuitive and it isn't overmapped at all. Good luck!!
*star*

PS: Don't kudosu this, it's not worth it D:

PSPDS Eddie

457 posts

Joined November 2009

PSPDS Eddie 2010-08-13T14:52:09+00:00

perfect!!

Ignacio_old

378 posts

Joined August 2009

Ignacio_old 2010-08-13T23:02:14+00:00

*.*

Gladi's fan

EEeee

1,026 posts

Joined July 2008

EEeee 2010-08-18T02:31:50+00:00

Irc modding on different offsets that needed to be fixed from diffs

map looked great, u lie when u say "noob mapper" :/

Caroline7

7 posts

Joined June 2009

Caroline7 2010-08-18T08:39:17+00:00

Apricot

565 posts

Joined July 2010

Apricot 2010-08-18T20:24:04+00:00

star

yuyuyuko

57 posts

Joined October 2009

yuyuyuko 2010-08-18T21:01:37+00:00

（ﾟ∀ﾟ）!!

EEeee

1,026 posts

Joined July 2008

EEeee 2010-08-19T18:19:26+00:00

>___________<v

Shinxyn

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1,179 posts

Joined June 2008

Shinxyn 2010-08-20T01:55:02+00:00

Very minor things pointed out on IRC (slight offset change and a pair of grid mod)
... doesn't seem like the mp3 was ever cut, I don't mind it too much, since filesize isn't an issue for the mapset
Doesn't mean the next BAT won't~

Bubbled~

Rhythmic_old

Rhythmic_old 2010-08-20T02:05:06+00:00

★

Alace

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Joined August 2008

Alace 2010-08-20T07:40:04+00:00

sorry i am late
take my heart

Muya

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Joined August 2009