1. Lunatic (3,82 stars, 962 notes)

EvilElvis wrote:

Fury

1. Reduced DS of some jumps
2. A couple minor rhythm fixes

16:11 *-Bakari- is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/722103 forestpireo - Heartbeat Planetarium [Lunatic]]
16:12 EvilElvis: так точно!
16:12 EvilElvis: o>
16:13 -Bakari-: Бесполезно просить поставить более подходящие цвета? :c 
16:13 EvilElvis: почему же?
16:13 EvilElvis: может поставлю
16:13 EvilElvis: я буду бг менять
16:13 -Bakari-: 00:00:378 (1,2) - не самое удачное начало, джамп в самом начале может сбить игроков, да и чувствуется притянутость какая-то 
16:14 EvilElvis: подвинул единицу ближе, ты прав
16:14 EvilElvis: но только для начала, там дальше такое же и я хочу оставить
16:15 -Bakari-: 00:04:923 (3,4) - читается как 1/2
16:15 EvilElvis: хм
16:16 EvilElvis: подумаю еще, звуки сильные и хотел вариативность сделать
16:16 EvilElvis: с другой стороны
16:16 EvilElvis: она может и не очень нужна
16:16 EvilElvis: ладно, стакну
16:16 EvilElvis: и везде в похожих
16:16 -Bakari-: 00:12:196 (1,2,3) - под такой ритм было бы проще поставить одинаковую дистанцию 
16:16 -Bakari-: Ну, или хотя бы примерно 
16:16 EvilElvis: поставил
16:18 -Bakari-: 00:17:423 (4,4,4) - а попробуй 1/2 слайдеры, звучит чуть лучше, кажется 
16:18 EvilElvis: не очень нравятся, к сожалению, лишними кажутся
16:19 -Bakari-: 00:31:287 (4,1) - после джампа очень резкая смена дс. Пусть между этими двумя тоже будет какой-нибудь 1.7 например 
16:20 EvilElvis: 1.4 будет, 1.7 великоватым кажется
16:21 -Bakari-: 00:43:787 - тут точно ничего не надо? 
16:21 EvilElvis: хм
16:21 EvilElvis: поставлю, хотел так кик выделить
16:22 EvilElvis: но пускай будет
16:23 -Bakari-: 01:23:559 (4,1) - играется, но все равно как-то слишком быстро
16:24 EvilElvis: поближе двинул
16:25 -Bakari-: 01:35:605 (4,5,6) - потести, 3/4 от 1/2 визуально трудно отличить
16:26 EvilElvis: шестерку дальше двинул
16:26 -Bakari-: 01:57:082 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - ^
16:28 EvilElvis: ага
16:28 -Bakari-: 01:58:559 (1) - а если увеличить скорость и попробовать что-то поинтереснее? [http://puu.sh/ivUjb.jpg a]
16:29 EvilElvis: тут нет, потому что странно будет резко менять с вокала на гитару (или что там), тем более что вокал ощущается сильнее
16:31 -Bakari-: 02:01:855 (7) - не нужен же. [http://puu.sh/ivUod.jpg давай так?]
16:31 EvilElvis: а мне кажется есть
16:31 EvilElvis: синтезия
16:32 EvilElvis: сейчас прибегу обратно
16:36 EvilElvis: прибежал
16:36 -Bakari-: А я отбегу, надо кое-что быстро проверить \w/
16:36 EvilElvis: конечно
16:40 -Bakari-: 02:28:787 (6,7) - куда-то далеко унесло
16:41 EvilElvis: теперь поближе
16:41 -Bakari-: 02:29:468 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,3,4) - нк спам же
16:42 EvilElvis: оно не очень без нк выглядит
16:42 EvilElvis: тут оставлю в угоду дезигну
16:42 -Bakari-: 02:37:878 (6,1) - не упрыгивай слишком далеко :c 
16:43 EvilElvis: хорошо
16:43 -Bakari-: 02:39:014 (4,6) - имеет смысл повторить НК спам, раз уж он там остался, то на похожем паттерне пусть будет 
16:43 EvilElvis: договорились
16:44 -Bakari-: 03:02:878 (4,5,6) - ну ты уже понял 
16:45 EvilElvis: не упоминай, я сам пройдусь
16:45 EvilElvis: чего ты лишний раз копипастить будешь!
16:45 -Bakari-: 04:03:559 (4,1) - прыжки 
16:46 EvilElvis: да
16:46 -Bakari-: Ну и все вроде
16:46 EvilElvis: запостишь?
16:46 EvilElvis: спасибо большое
16:47 -Bakari-: метадату и генерала не проверял 
16:47 EvilElvis: мета неправильная еще
16:47 EvilElvis: там не романизация
16:47 EvilElvis: я просто еще не поднапряг нипонцев

1. 00:31:741 (2,3) - You can maybe try to space these notes a little bit further from 00:31:514 (1) - because it's slightly overlapping with 00:31:059 (3) - and it's kinda noticeable!
   
2. 00:33:786 (4) - You could maybe move that note in the centre of the triangle shaped pattern made with 00:33:105 (1,2,3) - .
   
3. 00:33:105 (1,2,3) - (suggestion only) Maybe you can try to Ctrl+G these three circles! It gives a better flow imo!
   
4. 00:43:559 (7,8,1) - Even if it's not overlapping the default HP Bar , I'd highly suggest you to lower them down!
   
5. 01:14:468 (5) - The jump here with 01:14:696 (1,2,3) - is kinda high! Don't you think ? o:
   
6. 01:29:468 - It'd be a perfect place to introduce a kiai time here
   
7. 02:29:014 (7) - The jump would be kinda hard to read cause the cursor may click the slider's tail o:
   
8. 02:56:741 - Maybe a second kiai wouldn't hurt here too
   
9. 03:03:332 - I think you missed a beat here owo
   
10. 03:05:605 (5,5) - Some small curves wouldn't hurt the visual aspect of the map
    
11. 03:27:650 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - Still at the same location ? I highly doubt if it can be not borng for the players x)
    
12. 04:02:196 (1,2,3) - Some small curves like that can be cool for the visual aspect and the flow of that pattern !
    
    
    sliders.

    

Kiiwa wrote:

:(

Reiji-RJ wrote:

Fist

1. 00:13:559 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - потише бы, можно с нарастанием до текущего уровня
2. 00:22:196 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6) - нк потеряно, должно быть 00:24:014 (4) - и 00:23:105 (5) -
3. 00:36:741 (1,2,3,4) - почему-то неприятный паттерн, не только за счёт линии, но и из-за порядка нот. То ли дело http://puu.sh/ixb1f/85f14444f7.jpg
4. 00:45:832 - громкость зашкаливает, плохо. Мне кажется, это про всю карту можно сказать, ты же музыку забиваешь
5. 01:17:082 (2,3,4) - отвратительно звучащие без нормалхитов свистки, которые я тебе предлагаю поменять везде, где ты придумал их расставить под вокал, на мягкие
6. 01:34:014 (3) - согнуть, потому что 01:30:378 (3,4,1)?
7. 01:35:605 (4,5,6) - слишком широко
8. 01:42:878 (4,5) - и опять
9. 02:09:014 (6) - раз звуком выделил, может, и нк поставишь?
10. 02:29:468 (1,2) - стек можно избежать, поставивь ноту сверху над слайдером
11. 02:31:287 - лучше бы ты этот удар замапал, чем нк спамить, тем более он сильней
12. 02:51:287 (1,2,3,4) - ну и зачем.
13. 03:27:650 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - дрейнтайма не хватало до пяти минут, видимо, ну и дальше такой же кусок
14. 04:33:105 (1,2) - сломанная дуга

TicClick wrote:

1. 02:29:468 (1,2) - стек можно избежать, поставивь ноту сверху над слайдером
2. 02:51:287 (1,2,3,4) - ну и зачем.

Первый киаи отличается от остальных, где джампы с даблами.

Secretpipe wrote:

s.pipe is here !1!1!1!!1!1!!1!1!

[Lunatic]

1. 00:31:741 (2,3) - You can maybe try to space these notes a little bit further from 00:31:514 (1) - because it's slightly overlapping with 00:31:059 (3) - and it's kinda noticeable!
   i guess that was changed
2. 00:33:786 (4) - You could maybe move that note in the centre of the triangle shaped pattern made with 00:33:105 (1,2,3) - .
   i prefer what i got already
3. 00:33:105 (1,2,3) - (suggestion only) Maybe you can try to Ctrl+G these three circles! It gives a better flow imo!
   huum... no i think current one is fine
4. 00:43:559 (7,8,1) - Even if it's not overlapping the default HP Bar , I'd highly suggest you to lower them down!
   yes sir
5. 01:14:468 (5) - The jump here with 01:14:696 (1,2,3) - is kinda high! Don't you think ? o:
   yes sir
6. 01:29:468 - It'd be a perfect place to introduce a kiai time here
   i guess that was changed as well
7. 02:29:014 (7) - The jump would be kinda hard to read cause the cursor may click the slider's tail o:
   since it's the same with 02:27:423 (1,2,3,4,5) - these i think there is no problems with understanding this pattern
8. 02:56:741 - Maybe a second kiai wouldn't hurt here too
   yaya
9. 03:03:332 - I think you missed a beat here owo
   but not the vocals!
10. 03:05:605 (5,5) - Some small curves wouldn't hurt the visual aspect of the map
    yes sir
11. 03:27:650 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - Still at the same location ? I highly doubt if it can be not borng for the players x)
    since the gaps between these circles it's kinda hard to make spacing logical so i prefer stacks
12. 04:02:196 (1,2,3) - Some small curves like that can be cool for the visual aspect and the flow of that pattern !
    yes sir
    
    sliders.

    

Awesome map as always o/

Call me back when you feel that it'll be ready!

1. 00:01:287 (2,3,1) - The distance of these 3 sliders differ. The pattern itself could be nice enough, but considering the relevance with 00:04:923 (3,4,1) and 00:08:559 (2,3,1), maintaining the distance will be better in beatmap consistency.
2. 00:15:832 (6,7) - The spacing of these two objects is a little sudden considering the previous stacks. Also this distance is almost the same with 00:16:287 (9,1) which decreases the effect as a jump for the latter. I suggest you reduce the spacing of 00:15:832 (6,7).
3. 00:31:287 (4,1,2,3) - Start the combo from (4). That way fits the music better, and will let the players notice your gradually reduce of spacing technique more intuitively. If not, 00:31:741 (2) just looks like a random spacing error.
4. 00:38:559 (1,2,3,4) - Personally this spacing feels too huge comparing with the overall pace of the similar parts. Though it's just a rough suggestion, consider trying this.
5. 00:43:105 (5) - Since the instrument sound that was being a standard of your previous rhythm selection ends at 00:42:878, consider starting a new combo.
6. 01:18:446 (8,1) - I believe keeping the spacing will look neater.
7. 01:35:605 (4,5,6,7) - Relatively complexed rhythm with a similar distance is a hell in reading. Strongly suggesting to place (5) at (460,44) to enhance readability. Though 01:35:832 is a good spot for a jump, it shouldn't hinder in reading the map. Also since this rhythm gets repeated, mapping the first appearance stable will justify your future patterns.
8. 01:45:264 (4,1) - Nazi, but the stack is broken. (Uncheck "Stacking" at "View")
9. 02:39:014 (1,2) - Flow is broken. Placing (1) at (308,80) will work better.
10. 02:51:287 (1,2,3,4) - A complete copy-paste with the previous pattern is way too repeated. Consider adding a rotation or something.
11. 04:01:287 (7,8) - Since (8,9) is a complexed rhythm and the distance is far, it could be able to confuse as a jump. The placement as 04:08:559 (7,8,9) would have been more appropriate.
12. 04:56:173 (3) - Spacing could be better.
13. 05:01:628 (7,8) - Stack broken.

sheela901 wrote:

Hello EvilElvis!

Lunatic

1. 00:16:741 - Irrelevant green point.
   okie
2. 00:26:287 (3,4) - 00:29:923 (3,4) - How about adding space between them? It would ruin the patterns and stacks though, but it would fit very well with the music.
   well, i wanted to keep it as it is, but since you're not the first who suggesting it, okay
3. 00:56:514 (6) - I'd add a circle on 00:56:741 because of the finish (well, whistle) hitsound. A clickable object would go with this hitsound. This also applies to 02:25:605 (6)
   okie
4. 00:58:332 (6) - The whistle doesn't fit since there's nothing that trigger that hitsound. So remove it.
   it's about hitsound patterns, moreover, i wanted to give more emphazise music like that, so no
5. 01:35:832 (5) - What about adding a new combo? There is a change in the rhythm (01:36:173 (6) lands on the blue tick) which can make less readable without the new combo. I thought it was on the red tick. There's also 01:50:378 (5) and other more.
   not a big fan of these ncs, all the parts you mentonied mapped more with vocal than music and since it's still goes with vocals (these changes of rhytms) i prefer to keep it as it is
6. 01:43:105 (5) - Reduce the distance between this and the previous circle a little, like x:330 y:258, to differentiate the rhythms of 1/2 and "1/3" (01:35:832 (5,6,7) - ).
   changed in a bit other way
7. 04:01:628 (8,9) - Move this a little further from (7), like 04:08:900 (8,9) . The reason is similar to the first point.
   sure

This should be it! Poke me back for a recheck.