1. Easy (1,46 stars, 50 notes)
2. Heart (4,22 stars, 182 notes)
3. Krfawy's Hard (3,39 stars, 127 notes)
4. Normal (2,13 stars, 86 notes)

1. 00:16:142 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - To be honest, I feel like this section should still use whistles like it does in the intro. It feels empty when you only use the whistle on the end of (1) and nowhere else. This obviously applies to all your diffs.
2. 00:28:808 (4) - This would take a lot of adjusting, but consider reducing this by 1/2 so it catches the dominant drums since you aren't following the piano here.
3. 00:32:142 (1) - Why not have the bump at 00:36:475 - instead? It'll hit more key notes in the music. http://puu.sh/iyQsa.jpg
4. 00:38:808 (3) - Triangle with (1,2)? http://puu.sh/iyQxH.jpg | You'll have to make a few extra adjustments afterwards, but it'll look a lot cleaner.

1. 00:14:142 (2) - you could end this 1/2 earlier and put a 10-20% volume finish on the tail. You can also start the spinner at 00:14:808 - after.
2. 00:17:142 (2) - are you sure you want to map this? It'd work as a tail end, but it really doesn't provide enough feedback to be its own circle.
3. 00:19:308 - spots like this you could add a note in without any sacrifice to your rhythm. This is to help balance out your set.
4. 00:29:642 - same here.
5. 00:36:975 - Another spot. Actually I'm surprised you skipped mapping this really powerful beat.
6. 00:39:475 (5,6) - (6) is pretty much pointless.. why not just change (5) into two circles and remove (6)? There really isn't any difference in the sounds from 00:44:808 (4) - so even just deleting (6) and leaving (5) as a slider is fine.
7. 00:48:808 (2,2) - try a whistle on both tails. applies to Heart as well.

1. 00:06:475 (3,8) - For example. These two could be easily removed. You can apply this to the upcoming patterns as well. In otherwords, the Piano really is your friend.
2. 00:16:308 (1) - I would personally remove this. the song has a much better beat starting at 00:16:475 (2) - anyways. 160~ms on a hard difficulty is pretty much unrankable anyways.
3. 00:19:475 (5) - what's the point of this wiggle/bump? It doesn't match up with anything in the song. It'd make more sense for it to be back at 00:19:642 - instead.
4. 00:29:808 (2) - Maybe a lower volume finish instead? Just because the drum hitsound sticks out here and doesn't feel like it really belongs.
5. 00:26:975 (2) - and the rest of them. I personally think circles work better here. Maybe not for ones like 00:28:308 (2) - , but definitely on notes like 00:30:308 (5) - where there are two clear beats.
6. 00:43:975 (2) - you could remove this easily to help lower the density.
7. 00:46:642 (2) - ^

1. 00:14:309 (4,1,1,1,1,1) - I'll be blunt. I really don't like playing this. It'd be better as just a spinner. The main reason is that the first note 00:14:892 (1) - starts awkwardly and it doesn't even match the sounds playing. 00:15:017 - on a 1/8th note etc. It almost also feels like you should be reducing 00:14:309 (4) - by 1/2 and starting 00:14:892 (1) - on 00:14:808 - for example. In other words... It really doesn't even match up with the song and I highly suggest you simplify it with a spinner or something like Neil Watts was saying.
2. First off, this diff feels really uncomfortable to play because the slider/circles feel random in places. One would expect a slider start at 00:16:475 - and 00:17:975 - for examples as they mark the piano keys. Think like 00:18:808 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - | Also It would be really nice to see more 1/1 sliders placed in this section. For example: 00:17:975 - to 00:18:308 - would make a great 1/1 slider. Also like mentioned in Easy. I really suggest you use some more whistle hitsounding here, especially to match the piano. The feedback it provides tremendously helps.
3. 00:26:808 (1,2) - this jump always feels very uncomfortable to play because it's asking to double your momentum when you don't really expect it and then virtually kills it with 00:27:308 (5) - Try placing the 00:27:142 (4) - (select (2,3,4) on the earlier 00:26:475 (4) - so it provides this even momentum increase for the next few notes.

Taeyang wrote:

M4M

• Easy

1. 00:05:475 (1,2) - pattern suggest - Fix
   
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2. 00:08:142 (1) - red anchor move to tick 00:09:475 (2) - blanket can be better - I guess it's ok now.
   
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3. 00:12:142 (1) - remove NC - Fix
4. 00:32:142 (1,2) - suggest - I'll keep mine.
   
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5. 00:34:808 (1) - add circle - No or I break consistency.
6. 00:41:475 (4) - make like this and try stack 00:41:475 (4,3) - - Can't stack them, and it's not very important here.
   
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7. 00:45:475 (1,3) - parallel - Fix
   
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8. 00:54:725 - gerrenline move to 00:54:808 - - I change this part.

• Normal

1. 00:07:808 (3,1,2) - flow i sugest like this - I prefer my straight sliders here, also flow works good here.
   
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2. 00:09:975 (2,1) - blanket so close - Not a problem I don't overlap.
3. 00:17:142 (2,1) - try stack - Fix
4. 00:43:808 (1) - remove NC - Just move it 1/1 later.
5. 00:54:725 - gerrenline move to 00:54:808 - - Changed.

• Heart

1. 00:07:475 (3,1) - blanket so close - Not a problem here. I respect spacing.
   
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2. 00:08:642 (2) - 00:07:475 (3) - stack slide tail - I prefer keep my spacing.
3. 00:09:142 (4,1) - blanket close - Not a problem.
4. 00:15:058 - 00:15:308 - 00:15:558 - 00:15:808 - 00:16:058 - here add 5% vol - I don't really hear the difference. I like how it is now.
5. 00:42:808 (1,2,3,4) -00:44:142 (5,6,7) - i think taht so far use 1.2~1.3 DS - This part is more stronger than before so I adjust spacing on purpose.
6. 00:47:475 (4,4) - try stack - Not visible in play.

good luck~

Neil Watts wrote:

hi Noz :3

[General]
- Tags : Ajoute Krfawy en tags - Fix
- Green timing point décalé ici 00:16:145 - Il pourrait y en avoir d'autres - Fix

[Easy]
- 00:06:808 (2) - Avis personnel, mais je trouve que ça rend mieux en le retournant (comme ceci http://puu.sh/iynty/fe67e5ff75.jpg) pour éviter l'aspect "blanket raté" qu'il donne - J'ai changé celui-la en fait 00:05:475 (1) - (du premier mod).
- 00:14:142 (2) - Un green timing point pour adoucir la fin du slider (le volume) serait pas mal, vu qu'il n'y a pas de note dans la musique à l'endroit où il se finit - Fix
- 00:44:808 (4) - brrr, du 1/2 ici, je ne suis pas sûr que ça soit une bonne idée - Fix

[Normal]
- 00:14:808 (1) - Fais commencer ce spinner sur le tick blanc, et raccourcis le slider d'avant. C'est une Normal, il doit y avoir un espace minimum entre un spinner et l'item qui le précède. - Et bien...non en fait ^^ ce qui est important c'est plutôt ce qu'il y a après.
- 00:52:142 (3,1) - Pareil ici - ^
J'ai aussi l'impression que tes claps ne sont pas très consistants, vérifie ton hitsounding au cas où - Ok :/

[Heart]
- 00:14:892 (1,1,1,1,1) - J'aime pas comment tu as mappé ici, on dirait que tous les sliders sont vraiment off, un spinner comme dans les diffs précédentes serait largement préférable. - Lanturn a dit la même chose en plus détaillé, donc ok I give up go le spinner :c
Aussi, comme ta Normal, j'ai l'impression que les hitsounds (claps en particulier) n'ont pas l'air très consistants, mais c'est peut-être dans ton style de hitsounding. - Ils le sont :c

C'est tout ce que j'ai pu trouver, bon courage !

Lanturn wrote:

Quick mod. Also the M4M from about 10 months ago I still owe you :3

Note. the gap between Normal and Hard is, in my eyes, unrankable. Normal needs a little bit more density if it's going to be balanced between the Easy and Hard. The Hard could also remove a few notes here and there - I'll see with Krfawy for Hard, but exept what you point, I don't really know what to add on Normal :c

It would be great if the red tick started at 00:05:475 - so the measures are properly reset. Note you'll have to fix the green timings as they might be 1ms off after if you do this. - For kiai yes; Fixed.

[Easy]

1. 00:16:142 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - To be honest, I feel like this section should still use whistles like it does in the intro. It feels empty when you only use the whistle on the end of (1) and nowhere else. This obviously applies to all your diffs. - Should be better now.
2. 00:28:808 (4) - This would take a lot of adjusting, but consider reducing this by 1/2 so it catches the dominant drums since you aren't following the piano here. - I prefer avoid 1/2 on this diff finally (I change the only one who was present on it).
3. 00:32:142 (1) - Why not have the bump at 00:36:475 - instead? It'll hit more key notes in the music. http://puu.sh/iyQsa.jpg - Fix
4. 00:38:808 (3) - Triangle with (1,2)? http://puu.sh/iyQxH.jpg | You'll have to make a few extra adjustments afterwards, but it'll look a lot cleaner. - Fix

[Normal]
As I mentioned above, this needs a bit more density.

1. 00:14:142 (2) - you could end this 1/2 earlier and put a 10-20% volume finish on the tail. You can also start the spinner at 00:14:808 - after. - I prefer finish on 00:14:308 - to catch the clap.
2. 00:17:142 (2) - are you sure you want to map this? It'd work as a tail end, but it really doesn't provide enough feedback to be its own circle. - It's that or change both circles for a slider. I'll let it like this and see later if I'll change it.
3. 00:19:308 - spots like this you could add a note in without any sacrifice to your rhythm. This is to help balance out your set. - Fix and adjust all pattern in same time.
4. 00:29:642 - same here. - Fix
5. 00:36:975 - Another spot. Actually I'm surprised you skipped mapping this really powerful beat. - I'm used to limit 1/2 on Normal, but I guess in this case I limit them too much ^^'. Fix
6. 00:39:475 (5,6) - (6) is pretty much pointless.. why not just change (5) into two circles and remove (6)? There really isn't any difference in the sounds from 00:44:808 (4) - so even just deleting (6) and leaving (5) as a slider is fine. - Fix
7. 00:48:808 (2,2) - try a whistle on both tails. applies to Heart as well.

[Heart]

1. 00:14:309 (4,1,1,1,1,1) - I'll be blunt. I really don't like playing this. It'd be better as just a spinner. The main reason is that the first note 00:14:892 (1) - starts awkwardly and it doesn't even match the sounds playing. 00:15:017 - on a 1/8th note etc. It almost also feels like you should be reducing 00:14:309 (4) - by 1/2 and starting 00:14:892 (1) - on 00:14:808 - for example. In other words... It really doesn't even match up with the song and I highly suggest you simplify it with a spinner or something like Neil Watts was saying. - Changed for a spinner :c
2. First off, this diff feels really uncomfortable to play because the slider/circles feel random in places. One would expect a slider start at 00:16:475 - and 00:17:975 - for examples as they mark the piano keys. Think like 00:18:808 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - | Also It would be really nice to see more 1/1 sliders placed in this section. For example: 00:17:975 - to 00:18:308 - would make a great 1/1 slider. Also like mentioned in Easy. I really suggest you use some more whistle hitsounding here, especially to match the piano. The feedback it provides tremendously helps. - When I play it I don't feel like it was so uncomfortable. I just map drums and piano and adjust more patterns when piano is 'stronger'. Also ok I added some whistles should be good.
3. 00:26:808 (1,2) - this jump always feels very uncomfortable to play because it's asking to double your momentum when you don't really expect it and then virtually kills it with 00:27:308 (5) - Try placing the 00:27:142 (4) - (select (2,3,4) on the earlier 00:26:475 (4) - so it provides this even momentum increase for the next few notes. - Fix

Good luck.

Lanturn wrote:

Good stuff. call me back sometime in the future.

Euny wrote:

as your request!♥

• General

1. just my feelsl.. i think, normal <-> hard gap bit greater. - Add some objects to fit better rhythm and fix inconsistency. Should be ok now I can't do more or this won't be a Normal anymore.

• Normal

1. 00:05:475 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2,1,2,3,1,2,1,2,3,1,2) - fix new combo for every 2 measure. cause your easy did that, also should be fit for other objects after 00:14:808 (1) - this spin - Fix
   
2. 00:31:308 - add note for here. feels bit empty cause you didnt fill it. - Don't fit at all imo.

• Heart

1. 00:31:808 (5) - i know its copy by 00:31:308 (3) - this. but i think this shape looks better. - Owwwww that mistake orz.
   
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2. 00:43:808 (4) - ctrl G for remove repeat flow? i meant with 00:42:475 (5) - this - True works much better.

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Krfawy wrote:

Nozhomoe, can you just lower HP in my diff to 6, please?

Kinshara wrote:

Per your request

Heart

1. I'd recommend that you increase your volume a bit, I can barely here any whistles. Maybe using a whistle like http://puu.sh/iIUWO/692c0a7c09.wav might also stand out more? Up to you on the second part, but I definitely would like for you to increase the volume. - Okay~
2. 00:52:224 (1) - There's a 'beep' sound at the end of this spinner. I think a whistle would be nice here. If you do this, raise the volume on 00:53:224 - this green point to ~20%.- Just up volume to 15% os enough.
3. 00:05:475 (1) - I think a whistle on the slider end would be nice because of the strong note. - Fix
4. 00:05:975 (2,3,4) - It doesn't make sense for there to be more distance between 2 & 3 than between 3 & 4. There should be more distance between 3 & 4 to emphasize the stronger note at 4's head. - Fix
5. 00:09:142 (4,5,1) - This pattern would look nice if there was the same distance between 4 & 1 as there is between 4 & 5. You might need to adjust the next sliders accordingly. - Fix
6. 00:12:141 (1) - Since you are going with stacking over here, you might as well the stack the end of this slider with the end of 00:11:641 (4) - slider? - Fix
7. 00:14:309 (4) - It would be cool if you could make this slider slower? - I don't think music suggest it imo.
8. 00:14:892 (1) - This spinner's end is unsnapped btw. This should be snapped to the 1/3 beat at 00:15:919 - . - Fix
9. 00:19:473 (4,6) - How about stacking 4 on 5's head and 6 on 1's head? It would create a nice pattern imo. - Could be good, but I prefer have these jumps to emphasis this the strong note of each piano part.

Normal

1. Same hitsound suggestions from Heart difficulty. - Fix
2. 00:06:308 - I suggest you map this note. It's pretty strong. You can change slider 2 to a 1/2 reverse. - Fix
3. 00:08:808 (2) - Same as above. - Fix
4. 00:11:475 (2) - Same as above. - Fix
5. 00:14:808 (1) - How about removing the spinner and mapping the beat at 00:16:141 - . Regardless, I am not sure if the recovery time after the spinner is enough. - 2 beats is enough at this BPM if I follow what xxdeathx wrote here -> t/288639 .
6. 00:19:641 - Map this beattttt... gahhh :C - Fix
7. 00:22:308 - Make up your minddd. You're gonna confuse players. Sometimes you map this note (such as at 00:20:142 (4) - 00:22:808 (4) - etc etc and then you don't... This will mess players up. I suggest you remap this area :/ - Fix
8. 00:25:474 (4,5) - This 3/2 gap is very hard to read for new players. You should cut this gap out by making slider 4 a reverse as you have done before. - I think because people saw it with reverse they can know the gap because it don't change.
9. 00:36:808 (5,6,7) - Please don't do this :C Just use a 1/2 reverse slider. 00:39:475 (5,6,7) - same here. - Fix
10. 00:51:475 (2,3) - Cut this 3/2 gap out. - Fix

Easy

1. Same hitsound suggestions from Heart difficulty. - Fix
2. I suggest you NC every 2 measures instead of every 1 measure. - It's not already the case ?
3. 00:26:808 (1,3) - This stack might confuse new players. Due to the low AR, slider 3 will appear relatively quickly and confuse the players. - I think it could be the case if the stack was with the head of slider not their end.
4. 00:29:475 (1,3) - Same here - ^
5. 00:34:808 (1) - How about extending this into a 1/1 slider to catch the beat at 00:35:141 - . - Fix

That's all. Hope it's helpful. Good luck!

Kocari wrote:

No

Kinshara wrote:

Krfawy's Hard

1. How about bumping up the volume in the beginning to ~65%? I can barely here the whistles and my effect volume is on 100%... Well for me the volume is totally fine. If there's more complaints I will raise it. D:
2. 00:08:975 (2) - blanket (nazi things sorry) Fixed
3. 00:12:141 (4) - You can stack this better by moving the slider to x:181 y:255 Fixed even more than suggested :3
4. 00:14:808 (4,1) - To avoid the ambiguous rhythm of the wubs and the snap of the spinner. I suggest you remove 4 (there's not beat there that would suffice its presence anyway) and start the spinner from 00:14:808 - . Also 00:14:975 (1,1) - this is not enough recovery time for a 180 bpm Hard diff. You might want to remove the spinner all together. Should be fine as it is now so I keep it.
5. 00:16:808 (2,3) - You might want to custom stack this? Because of the auto stack, the distance between the previous object will be skewed. I want them skewed
6. 00:26:974 (2) - This might throw players off. I think it's safer to go with a triplet here. It also plays much more smoothly. Lol...Yea the same goes for the other times you used this. It's only because it's hard to judge the rhythm with 1/4 sliders... :c Still it plays smooth enough and easy enough and I don't want this diff to be full of triples when it's a one difficulty appearing just after a Normal. Now it plays nice and I find it very OK.
7. 00:42:808 (1,2) - The fact that the first slider repeats twice but the second one repeats only once can be a bit confusing. I suggest you cut the repeats on the first slider by 1 and then add a circle at 00:43:808 - . Very obvious beats appearing in the second slider makes it obvious to click circles instead of another repeat. I keep it as it is.
8. 00:45:475 (1) - Same here, Just cut the reverse and add a circle at 00:46:474 - . It's just a lot better to play. Plays worse if you ask me.
9. 00:08:975 (2) - Why is this slider a reverse? All the other times, you've used a 1/1 slider for this rhythm (00:05:475 (1) - 00:06:808 (4) - 00:07:308 (5) - 00:09:475 (3) - 00:09:975 (4) - etc. etc.) But now that we're on this topic, you might as well replace 00:06:308 (2,3) - with a 1/1 slider for consistency. Very good point here. Changed the reversing slider into a circle.
10. 00:47:808 (5) - NC for new measure? That would be random, it's not two circles, it's a single slider.

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311,218,19308,1,2,0:3:0:0:
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270,380,21142,1,8,1:3:0:0:
243,293,21309,1,2,0:0:0:0:
331,266,21475,6,0,P|351:202|313:147,1,140,2|2,1:2|0:3,0:0:0:0:
224,123,21975,1,2,0:0:0:0:
218,33,22142,1,8,1:2:0:0:
218,33,22308,2,0,B|287:26|287:26|348:60,1,140,2|2,0:0|0:3,0:0:0:0:
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477,233,23808,2,0,P|471:195|479:158,1,70,8|2,1:3|0:0,0:0:0:0:
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313,94,24642,1,2,0:0:0:0:
313,186,24809,1,8,1:2:0:0:
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390,360,26974,2,0,P|407:358|424:353,1,35,2|2,0:2|0:0,0:0:0:0:
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109,24,28308,2,0,P|92:29|76:35,1,35,2|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
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358,91,29975,1,2,0:0:0:0:
270,66,30142,1,2,0:0:0:0:
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31,222,30808,5,4,0:3:0:0:
42,312,30975,1,2,0:0:0:0:
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268,334,31475,1,2,0:0:0:0:
299,248,31642,1,2,0:0:0:0:
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435,258,32808,1,2,0:0:0:0:
370,321,32975,1,2,0:3:0:0:
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146,327,33475,6,0,P|111:333|77:325,1,70,2|4,0:0|0:3,0:0:0:0:
7,269,33808,1,4,1:2:0:0:
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Kocari wrote:

I'll do my best so here we go

[Heart]

1. 00:06:308 (4,5) - These two notes can somehow be placed differently to fit what you are trying to do. The rotation for me isn't as crisp visually as it should be considering how these rotations are supposed to look 00:05:475 (1,4) - You can possibly try something like this instead of rotation to start off with the song. http://puu.sh/iJUGu/47be6cc6fb.png - Well your puush is not the good one so...for me I like this rotation so I'll keep it.
2. 00:09:142 (4,5) - Use 1.3 spacing here and do something like this, note (5) is at a slightly sharp angle of motion and it would feel uneasy to be hit following up with the the counter-clockwise rotation, doing something like this will give it more flexibility to hit the notes cleaner http://puu.sh/iJUSi/1f1288cde8.jpg - It is 1.3x. Also I want this triangle and I want 00:09:142 (4,2,3) - being straight like it is now.
3. 00:13:142 (4) - With how this note is placed, visually it the blanket doesn't serve a purpose over that note as all you are doing is continuing with Ctrl+g of the last note. I would prefer if you somehow used this note 00:12:641 (2) - while moving 4, something like this to go well http://puu.sh/iJV3t/ff455a7b79.jpg - I t would ruin the spacing here, and I don't want that or moving all around just for this pattern. Blanket is ok imo.
4. 00:18:975 (2) - You can move this note and stack it on slider (5) it'll have more open space without having the (2) in an awkward position with the other notes http://puu.sh/iJVg3/646327a442.jpg - For spacing issue I can't do that again. I prefer a constant spacing here with a ok pattern sry.
5. 00:44:142 (5,6,7) - Holy shit... - ???
   Nothing really wrong with it, but imo I believe this would've been cleaner if it wasn't for the clumping of notes in a section, but without that the insane is rankable.

[Normal]

• 00:12:142 (3) - DS - Fix

1. 00:27:142 (2) - Cleaner DS - Fix
2. 00:39:475 (5,6) - This may be a concern of problems for beginners, but as it is now we shall she what people will say - Imo should be ok because of the NC.
3. 00:42:808 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - Same as ^ - ^
   not much really

That's really about it, Hope I could help in any way