[Lost Grapes]
- I was testing this and the SB went over the recommended x5,0 load.It would be good if the load could be reduced. Hopefully that happens when the SB is finished and gets properly modded.
- 00:20:437 (1) - I think you could end the spinner at 00:21:630 - and map a circle at 00:21:801 - so you don't miss the downbeat.
- 00:27:255 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - I think you could add a bit more distance on this pattern, not only to make it a bit more interesting and funnier to play, but to emphasize that slight "fade out" effect. For example, something like this could work:
- 00:42:255 (1,2) - This part deserves a bit more distance as 00:42:596 (2) - is a strong piano sound. I think you can move 00:42:596 (2,3) - a bit to the right, maybe x:192 or so.
- 00:43:960 (2) - The movement back to this after the hyperdash feels a bit weird to me. I just think it'd have a better flow if this was placed to the left of 00:43:619 (1) - , also rearranging the following notes maybe like this:
- 00:46:346 (1) - This note deserves a bit more emphasis, so I'd put more distance to it and even make it a hyperdash, since it's the beginning of a new stanza.
- 00:58:960 (3,4,5) - The movement here doesn't flow really well, as there's nothing in the music that hints a direction change on that 1/4. I suggest you the following placement:
- 01:02:625 (9,1) - The 1/4 hyperdash here feels a bit exaggerated and the distance to the next object also feels a bit awkward. I would either reduce the strenght of the hyperdash by moving (1) to the left a bit or make it a 1/2 by removing 01:02:625 (9) - .
- 01:06:801 (1) - This object deserves more distance from the previous note, as it's a strong vocal. So move it to the right.
- 01:15:323 (2,3,4) - This pattern could have a bit more strenght, emphasizing the vocals a bit more. Some ideas that you could do here:
- 01:27:255 - I have to agree with Riari that the map would be much better if you mapped this. A lot of structures are repeated throughout the whole diff, so using a calmer part to break that monotony would really benefit the map.
- 01:49:073 (1) - This would flow better if you make it curve to the right at first, following the movement of the hyperdash (similar way as you did on 01:51:715 (6,1) - ).
- 01:52:397 (3) - Maybe you could delete this note to emphasize the 1/2 beats a bit more.
- On the 02:32:710 - part, there are some vertical stacks that feel weird compared to similar patterns in the same section, and become unexpected stillness and break the flow a bit. For example, 02:36:289 (7) - has almost no distance to its previous note, while on 02:33:562 (5) - , which is mapped to the same sound, you added an hyperdash. Also, there are some inconsistencies regarding distance, for example, 02:45:494 (4,5,6) - has a strong dashing movement required, while 02:42:767 (4,5,6) - didn't.
- 02:55:892 (5) - Reduce the distance here, it feels a bit large for a relatively calmer section.
- It is really weird that 02:59:642 (5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6) - requires a lot more dashing than 03:05:437 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - , despite the second section being more prominent because of stronger drums and piano.
- 03:08:761 (3,4) - This is an awkward spacing and doesn't fit the rest of what you've been doing, so I'd reduce it.
- 03:16:346 - Same as with the break before, it's a real loss to the map not having it mapped.
- It is weird again that 03:49:073 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2) - has less dashes than 03:38:164 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - , despite having drumbeats and so.
- Same as the beginning of the first Kiai, this could be curved to the right so it follows the movement from the hyperdash better.
- 04:14:301 (3,4,5,6,7) - The stacks again, these notes should have more distance to further emphasize the 1/2 vocals
- 04:24:528 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This lacks movement :/
- 04:35:437 (1,2,3,4) - This pattern is totally different to what you've been using, so it's a bit overthrowing. Note how it plays totally different from 02:13:619 (1,2,3,4,5) - , which is mapped to the same part of the other kiai.
- 04:54:358 (4,1,2) - 05:05:352 (9,1,2) - These movements in the opposite direction after the hyperdash don't flow too well, and they don't help creating a contrast between the kiai and normal parts. I'd put (2) in a way that it follows the movement of the hyperdash and rearrange the following objects as you deem fit.
- Carefully check your NCs. There are some parts with weird NC placing such as 04:21:119 (1,1,1) - .
- I think the map lacks a bit of contrast between the Kiai and verses. If it weren't because of the glowing fruits one would be barely able to tell the difference between them. Mapping the calmer parts that you current have as breaks will also help break this feeling.