00:01:430 - For some pitch relevancy, I suggest you to make the pattern like
http://puu.sh/iQ5sf/60d4efa7d4.png00:03:145 (3145|3) - Move to 1, 00:03:573 (3573|0) - Move to 3. For some pitch relevancy.
00:06:573 - For some relevancy with the pitch, I suggest you to make the pattern like
http://puu.sh/iQ5Ay/ac0d850604.png http://puu.sh/iQ5Bn/f557197559.png . Don'y forget to move 00:08:287 (8287|0) while applying this.
00:12:787 (12787|0) - Contract this LN to 00:13:430 , since the instrument ends there.
00:13:430 - Add 2 notes here for the kick, as in 00:13:002
00:14:770 - You forgot to add note here, since in here you can hear the faint snare as in 00:14:823 and such.
00:15:895 - If you follow the computer-like sound synth, you should add note here since you can hear it clearly here. The sound is like 00:16:323 (16323|0,16537|0,16645|2)
00:16:752 - Here you can hear it too.
Do it until 00:27:573
00:28:645 - From here, you can hear that the 1/8 streams starts here.
Basically from 00:29:502 to 00:35:502 - The LNs are 1/2 long, I mean its length are like
http://puu.sh/iQ668/6838582246.png (From White to red line and vice versa).
00:35:073 - Here, there's also the lead synth. Add one LN here with 1/2 snap long like before.
00:35:502 (35502|2) - This actually a 1/4 long LN (From White or red line to blue line).
00:36:145 to 00:42:145 - Do it the same as before.
00:44:073 - You can hear the bell-like hihat here. Add note.
00:43:859 (43859|1) - This LN is actually ended on 00:44:073 . Hear it carefully.
00:44:716 (44716|2) - This LN ended on 00:45:037 .
00:45:037 (45037|1) - And this one ended on 00:45:359 . Please hear it carefully with 25-50% Playback Rate.
00:48:680 (48680|0) - Delete. One note is enough.
00:49:002 - For some pitch relevancy, you can make the pattern like
http://puu.sh/iQ6pG/91db577ece.png00:49:859 to 00:51:573 - Do it just as same as before on 00:43:859 (43859|1) and ahead
00:56:287 - Make the pattern like
http://puu.sh/iQ6wB/68e4a2930e.png . More relevant to the pitch and more fancy.
00:56:716 - How about doing it like
http://puu.sh/iQ781/ae89e12d91.png ? More relevant to the instruments.
00:59:287 to 01:00:145 - Make it consistent with pattern in 01:06:145 to 01:07:002
01:00:145 - Do it just like before.
01:03:145 - Suggest to make this like
http://puu.sh/iQ7ig/31a051ebd3.png so it's more relevant to the instruments and the pitches.
01:10:109 - 01:10:323 - Add note here for the snare sound.
01:10:752 - The pattern here are actually looks like 01:10:752 (70752|3,70805|1,70859|0,70859|2,71073|1,71073|2,71502|3,71502|1)
01:11:502 (71502|3,71716|2,71930|1) - It's the same instrument with different pitch. Suggest to make it like
http://puu.sh/iQ7sj/89fbe80016.png for pitch and instruments relevancy.
01:14:716 - Suggest to alternate the pattern like
http://puu.sh/iQ7uw/c00b71af55.png . More balanced and flows better.
01:18:359 - Do it same as 01:11:502
01:26:716 (86716|3) - Delete. This note actually didn't follow any instrument.
01:28:430 (88430|3) - ^
01:36:145 - Why you didn't cover the kick? For the consistency sake, cover it.
02:07:698 (127698|0,127805|2) - Delete. The 1/8 stream doesn't starts here.