DJ Okawari - Luv Letter

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Topic Starter
EvianBubble

I_Tatsuo_I wrote:

You should move this map into Pending.
When you submit your beatmap the next time, choose Pending instead of Works-In-Progress, since I believe all you need is just mods.
That's why people are getting mad at you for having your beatmap in "Works in Progress."

You ARE done, aren't you? You need mods now, as far as I can tell. I don't see any more difficulties being made.
Ehehehe, done XD. Pending scares me, it's like ... I have dreams of people going "WTF THIS BEATMAP ISN'T IN PENDING! MOVE IT BACK TO WIP, NOOB!" :o ... Well okay, not really, but you know what I mean XD
NatsumeRin
Red: You must fix this.
Blue: You'd better do sth with this imo.
Green: Just suggestions.

[General]
the mp3 file you are using is a 320kbps one, according to ranking criteria it's unrankable, but don't think this is a big problem since the .osz file is not that large. just change it in your next map.


[Bronze]
01:12:398 (3,4,5) - spacing between them are not equal.
01:17:450 (1) - nazi, 1 grid left.
02:52:177 (5) - xooxxooo, x=whistle, o=normal.
03:32:594 (4) - xoooxooo

[Silver]
00:35:771 (3,4) - spacing?
02:38:284 (5) - new combo?

[Gold]
-v-hitsounds. seems my mod helps= =
00:37:034 (1,2,3,4,5) - emm... 1 is not at the center of 2345?
02:51:546 (2,3,4) - spacing?

good enough for first map.
Topic Starter
EvianBubble

NatsumeRin wrote:

Red: You must fix this.
Blue: You'd better do sth with this imo.
Green: Just suggestions.

[General]
the mp3 file you are using is a 320kbps one, according to ranking criteria it's unrankable, but don't think this is a big problem since the .osz file is not that large. just change it in your next map. Okay thanks, I'll keep this in mind next time

[Bronze]
01:12:398 (3,4,5) - spacing between them are not equal. Moved down (5 was not in line with 1 of next combo either!)
01:17:450 (1) - nazi, 1 grid left. Done, moved the rest of the combo left as well
02:52:177 (5) - xooxxooo, x=whistle, o=normal. Added whistle
03:32:594 (4) - xoooxooo Added

[Silver]
00:35:771 (3,4) - spacing? Rest of combo moved two grids left
02:38:284 (5) - new combo? I think I'm going to leave this one

[Gold]
-v-hitsounds. seems my mod helps= = Ehehe, yes, thanks very much :D
00:37:034 (1,2,3,4,5) - emm... 1 is not at the center of 2345? This pattern was troubling me as well. Hope it looks better now
02:51:546 (2,3,4) - spacing? Fixed, should be more even now

good enough for first map.
Thank you! :D
Colin Hou
[General]:
  1. There is no need to insert background as StoryBoard, then delete the .osb file and make sure that:
  2. do a full submit after you delete the .osb
  3. the hitcircle-overlay.png makes it difficult to read the notes, if possible make a simple one and I think that will work. (The default one is quite good in my test :3)
  4. combo color #4 and #1 are quite alike, do some change if you like
  5. set a background for this mapset
  6. cancel the countdown?
  7. maybe you should use a mp3 with no higher than 256Kbps qualily


[Bronze]:
  1. 03:54:934 (1) - snap this note by using 1/8 beat snap.
  2. 01:08:294 (3,4,1) - 1 grid down
  3. 01:38:922 (2,3,4) - place (3,4) without grid snap


[Silver]:
  1. 03:54:930 (1) - unsnapped note


[Gold]:
  1. seems good to me


Star~
Topic Starter
EvianBubble

Colin Hou wrote:

[General]:
  1. There is no need to insert background as StoryBoard, then delete the .osb file and make sure that: Done
  2. do a full submit after you delete the .osb So THAT'S why the .osb kept coming back!
  3. the hitcircle-overlay.png makes it difficult to read the notes, if possible make a simple one and I think that will work. (The default one is quite good in my test :3) Okay, using default now
  4. combo color #4 and #1 are quite alike, do some change if you like
  5. set a background for this mapset ? What do you mean?
  6. cancel the countdown? Only Bronze has the countdown just to make it easier
  7. maybe you should use a mp3 with no higher than 256Kbps qualily Okay I will try to find one


[Bronze]:
  1. 03:54:934 (1) - snap this note by using 1/8 beat snap. Snapped
  2. 01:08:294 (3,4,1) - 1 grid down Ah thank you
  3. 01:38:922 (2,3,4) - place (3,4) without grid snap I think I'll leave this


[Silver]:
  1. 03:54:930 (1) - unsnapped note Fixed


[Gold]:
  1. seems good to me


Star~
Thank you for your help! :)
Colin Hou
  1. About the Background Color, I means this:
  2. I donno how you use the default hitcircle-overlay.png (unable to download lol), but make sure that you have placed this file in the folder of the song.



no kds for this post, it's just a recheck.
soulfear
yeah,okawari
Frill
These are suggestions, you don't have to change anything.

[Bronze]

02:33:232 (1) - add finish in start

[Silver]

02:33:232 (1) - add finish in start.
03:33:857 (5) - maybe, add circle or 03:32:594 (4) - add one return .. and add finish in end

[Gold]

01:42:395 (5) - remove finish
01:42:711 (6) - add circle and add finish
02:33:232 (1) - add finish in start
Topic Starter
EvianBubble

Colin Hou wrote:

  1. About the Background Color, I means this: Changed the colour
  2. I donno how you use the default hitcircle-overlay.png (unable to download lol), but make sure that you have placed this file in the folder of the song. Okay I have added that in

[attachment=0:d592a]hitcircleoverlay.png[/attachment:d592a]

no kds for this post, it's just a recheck.
Thank you for the recheck :D

soulfear wrote:

yeah,okawari
This song is freaking awesome, lol XD

Frill wrote:

These are suggestions, you don't have to change anything.

[Bronze]

02:33:232 (1) - add finish in start Good idea. Added

[Silver]

02:33:232 (1) - add finish in start. Done
03:33:857 (5) - maybe, add circle or 03:32:594 (4) - add one return .. and add finish in end I actually really like this, added

Lol that one note randomly gave the map another half star even though the difficulty only went up 0.01 XD

[Gold]

01:42:395 (5) - remove finish
01:42:711 (6) - add circle and add finish Huh, good idea. Moved (4 - 6) up so the jump isn't that far to the next combo
02:33:232 (1) - add finish in start Done
Thank you for all your suggestions (which I totally added because they were awesome)! :)
La Cataline
This map is pure magic ^^

[Bronze][Silver]
00:43:349 this break spoils the beginning. Maybe you should remove it?

Star~
Topic Starter
EvianBubble

La Cataline wrote:

This map is pure magic ^^

[Bronze][Silver]
00:43:349 this break spoils the beginning. Maybe you should remove it? Mapped over it

Star~
Thank you! ;)
Kecco
•Overall•
Offset : 29.446 ~ Resnap All Notes

•Gold•
Too many breaks, I strongly suggest to fill them.
This diff is ok.

•Silver•
Too many breaks, I strongly suggest to fill them.
This diff is ok.

•Bronze•
00:33:245 (3) - Distance error.
01:08:294 (3) - ^
01:39:553 (4) - ^
02:24:391 (2) - ^

Nice map
+Star
Kurai
Hi~

[Silver]
00:40:349 (3) - Spacing
01:40:343 (4) - New combo

[Gold]
02:33:232 (1) - Spacing

Star~
Topic Starter
EvianBubble

Kecco wrote:

•Overall•
Offset : 29.446 ~ Resnap All Notes Thanks, done

•Gold•
Too many breaks, I strongly suggest to fill them. I don't see how I can change them. I think the only problem would be between the first two but any earlier and it's too early, IMO. I don't think 5 breaks is too many for a song 3:30min (that's approx. every 40secs or so)
This diff is ok.

•Silver•
Too many breaks, I strongly suggest to fill them. I filled in the shortest one, I think the time between the others is OK
This diff is ok.

•Bronze•
00:33:245 (3) - Distance error. Moved up two grids
01:08:294 (3) - ^ Moved (2) up one grid
01:39:553 (4) - ^ Remade this triangle without grid snap
02:24:391 (2) - ^ Bottom moved one grid town, top moved one grid up

Nice map
+Star
Thanks! :)

Kurai_ wrote:

Hi~

[Silver]
00:40:349 (3) - Spacing Moved one grid right
01:40:343 (4) - New combo Okay

[Gold]
02:33:232 (1) - Spacing I'm going to keep this for design purposes but I see your point (this design caused my spacing a lot of grief, actually XD)

Star~
Thank you for the help :D
Neo Adonis
- Very important - you should pay attention.
- Not so important, but I can help you.
(?) - Just a suggestion or in doubt.
(♥) - Not a problem, but something it liked me ^^

[General]
(♥) - Good skin!!
(*) On "song setup", storyboard tab, select "default" as preferred skin to avoid problems with non-skinned elements.
(*) 02:13:024 (-) - You could add a note here with finish and whistle sound...
(*) 02:25:022 (-) - And add here another volume section add turn up volume half a tick...
(*) 02:27:548 (-) - ^
(*) 02:30:548 (-) - ^

[Bronze]
(*) 01:05:767 (3) - Add whistle sound
(*) 01:07:030 (3) - ^
(*) 01:37:659 (-) - You can add a inherit timing section here and turn up the volume 1 or two ticks to give contrast to the notes along with the piano...
(*) 01:38:290 (-) - ... and return the volume back to the normal here.
(*) 02:12:708 (5) - Remove finish sound.
(*) 02:12:866 (6) - You should put a timing section and reduce the volume 2 tick...
(*) 02:28:180 (1) - New combo here.
(*) 03:09:544 (3) - Add whistle sound.
(*) 03:10:807 (6) - ^
(*) 03:29:752 (3) - ^
(*) 03:31:015 (5) - ^
(*) 03:31:331 (1) - Add finish sound.

[Silver]
(*) 00:40:349 (3) - You should move this slider 3 grids to the right to follow spacing rule...
(*) 00:43:349 (4) - And this circle 1 grid to the left.
(*) 00:47:138 (5,6,7) - And this pieces 1 grid to the right.
(*) 01:01:663 (2) - Sorry if I'm too strict, but move this circle 4 grids to the left and 2 grids down.
(*) 01:07:346 (1) - Move this circle 2 grids to the left...
(*) 01:07:978 (2,3,4) - ...along with this...
(*) 01:09:872 (1,2,3) - ...and trying to keep the same distance between these pieces.
As I'm seeing, from this part, you're using distance snapping, something you didn't do before. I'd recommended that you use custom or fixed snap on all the song, but not mixing these. Well... I won't spoil your mapping, because that isn't too bad at all (at least in this case).
(*) 01:13:030 (6,7,8) - The spacing is different here: you're using more spacing. At least try to use "distance snap" with these objects.
(*) 01:33:870 (2) - Use distance snap or, if you're using again custom spacing, move this object 1 grid to the left.
(?) 01:35:449 (4) - New combo (?)
(?) 01:40:343 (4) - ^
(?) 01:55:657 (4) - ^
(?) 02:00:709 (3) - ^
(*) 02:10:497 (4) - Again (Ctrl+V): Use distance snap or, if you're using again custom spacing, move this object 1 grid to the left.
(?) 02:52:177 (4) - Why don't you add another repetition to the slider with a finish sound?
(!) 03:54:934 (1) - To be extra-precisous, the object should be on 03:54:980 or 03:54:990. Move it by replacing the last line of the .osu file with 256,192,234980,5,2 or adding a non-inherited timing section (73.840 BPM, but it really doesn't matter this) on 234980 and putting there the note.

[Gold]
Again custom spacing (excluding the jumps)... I can't mod this... :(
(*) 01:02:294 (3) - Add a new combo... the draining should be stopped!
(!) 03:52:803 (-) - Add here a new timing section, 85 BPM, and snap the
(!) 03:54:934 (1) - As same as the [Silver] diff, the object should be on 03:54:980 or 03:54:990.


I "luv" the song! Star!
Topic Starter
EvianBubble

Neo Adonis wrote:

- Very important - you should pay attention.
- Not so important, but I can help you.
(?) - Just a suggestion or in doubt.
(♥) - Not a problem, but something it liked me ^^

[General]
(♥) - Good skin!! Thank you! :)
(*) On "song setup", storyboard tab, select "default" as preferred skin to avoid problems with non-skinned elements. I didn't think of that, thanks
(*) 02:13:024 (-) - You could add a note here with finish and whistle sound... Done
(*) 02:25:022 (-) - And add here another volume section add turn up volume half a tick... Good idea, I've never messed with volume before haha
(*) 02:27:548 (-) - ^
(*) 02:30:548 (-) - ^

[Bronze]
(*) 01:05:767 (3) - Add whistle sound Added
(*) 01:07:030 (3) - ^
(*) 01:37:659 (-) - You can add a inherit timing section here and turn up the volume 1 or two ticks to give contrast to the notes along with the piano...
(*) 01:38:290 (-) - ... and return the volume back to the normal here. I like this :D
(*) 02:12:708 (5) - Remove finish sound. Yes
(*) 02:12:866 (6) - You should put a timing section and reduce the volume 2 tick... Okay
(*) 02:28:180 (1) - New combo here. This is already a new combo o_O
(*) 03:09:544 (3) - Add whistle sound. Done
(*) 03:10:807 (6) - ^
(*) 03:29:752 (3) - ^
(*) 03:31:015 (5) - ^
(*) 03:31:331 (1) - Add finish sound. Okay

[Silver]
(*) 00:40:349 (3) - You should move this slider 3 grids to the right to follow spacing rule... Done
(*) 00:43:349 (4) - And this circle 1 grid to the left. Fixed
(*) 00:47:138 (5,6,7) - And this pieces 1 grid to the right.
(*) 01:01:663 (2) - Sorry if I'm too strict, but move this circle 4 grids to the left and 2 grids down. Sure thing
(*) 01:07:346 (1) - Move this circle 2 grids to the left...
(*) 01:07:978 (2,3,4) - ...along with this...
(*) 01:09:872 (1,2,3) - ...and trying to keep the same distance between these pieces.
As I'm seeing, from this part, you're using distance snapping, something you didn't do before. I'd recommended that you use custom or fixed snap on all the song, but not mixing these. Well... I won't spoil your mapping, because that isn't too bad at all (at least in this case). I don't even know how I did my spacing. Will pay more attention to it in this map
(*) 01:13:030 (6,7,8) - The spacing is different here: you're using more spacing. At least try to use "distance snap" with these objects. Ack you're right, fixed
(*) 01:33:870 (2) - Use distance snap or, if you're using again custom spacing, move this object 1 grid to the left. Done
(?) 01:35:449 (4) - New combo (?) I don't think it's necessary
(?) 01:40:343 (4) - ^ Yes here
(?) 01:55:657 (4) - ^ Not here I think
(?) 02:00:709 (3) - ^ Leaving this one too
(*) 02:10:497 (4) - Again (Ctrl+V): Use distance snap or, if you're using again custom spacing, move this object 1 grid to the left. Okay
(?) 02:52:177 (4) - Why don't you add another repetition to the slider with a finish sound? Added as a new circle
(!) 03:54:934 (1) - To be extra-precisous, the object should be on 03:54:980 or 03:54:990. Move it by replacing the last line of the .osu file with 256,192,234980,5,2 or adding a non-inherited timing section (73.840 BPM, but it really doesn't matter this) on 234980 and putting there the note. Fixed, thanks

[Gold]
Again custom spacing (excluding the jumps)... I can't mod this... :(Will do! Don't worry ... D:
(*) 01:02:294 (3) - Add a new combo... the draining should be stopped! Going to leave this one
(!) 03:52:803 (-) - Add here a new timing section, 85 BPM, and snap the Fixed! This part was giving me trouble XD
(!) 03:54:934 (1) - As same as the [Silver] diff, the object should be on 03:54:980 or 03:54:990. Done


I "luv" the song! Star!
Thank you so much for everything! :D
Doodley
Very pretty song with a very pretty background and very pretty hit circles. I love it. :3

You don't need to change anything if you don't want to.

General Notes
Timing sounds fine to me. Piano refrains are generally hard to time, so kudos to you for managing it.
Very good for your first map.

Bronze
01:40:175: Move this over one blue tick to 01:40:333

Silver
These changes might make the map a little harder.
00:37:024: Replace this with a slider, extending to 00:37:339
00:37:655: Replace this with a slider, extending to 00:37:971
00:39:550: Replace this with a repeating slider, extending to 00:39:708.
00:42:076: Again.
00:52:338: Add a note, I suggest stacking it and then make the slider closer.
00:57:548: Move this slider to 00:57:864, shorten it to 00:58:495
01:34:176: Add a note. I suggest placing it inbetween the next note.
01:36:702: Again.
01:39:228: Again.
01:43:648: Again.
01:46:174: Again.
01:48:700: Again.
01:54:384: Again.
02:01:962: Agai--NO WAIT! Stack it this time.
02:01:594: Again, stack it on 5.

Gold
Flawless!

Star.
Topic Starter
EvianBubble

stickmeister wrote:

Very pretty song with a very pretty background and very pretty hit circles. I love it. :3

You don't need to change anything if you don't want to.

General Notes
Timing sounds fine to me. Piano refrains are generally hard to time, so kudos to you for managing it.
Very good for your first map. Why thank you! I have had the help of some very knowledgeable timers though ... :P

Bronze
01:40:175: Move this over one blue tick to 01:40:333 I can see why, but I think I'll leave this since it's an easier map

Silver
These changes might make the map a little harder.
00:37:024: Replace this with a slider, extending to 00:37:339 Leaving this one, but ...
00:37:655: Replace this with a slider, extending to 00:37:971 ... changing it here
00:39:550: Replace this with a repeating slider, extending to 00:39:708. I'm using single notes to change up the patterns so I'll leave this
00:42:076: Again.
00:52:338: Add a note, I suggest stacking it and then make the slider closer. I'm leaving this as well because this is the "calm" section so I don't want to overload it
00:57:548: Move this slider to 00:57:864, shorten it to 00:58:495 This solider coincides with the change in the violins so I'm going to keep this as well
01:34:176: Add a note. I suggest placing it inbetween the next note. Instead of doing it every time I think I'll use it for emphasis ...
01:36:702: Again.
01:39:228: Again. ... such as here. Added
01:43:648: Again.
01:46:174: Again. Added here as well
01:48:700: Again.
01:54:384: Again.
02:01:962: Agai--NO WAIT! Stack it this time. I like this here :O
02:01:594: Again, stack it on 5. Done, also moved closer to (4) and (1) of next combo

Gold
Flawless!

Star.
Thanks so much for all your suggestions! :D
brikel
Hi~ Hi~ :)

[General]
03:54:980 (1) - add spinner at the end point 03:58:230?
And... If you can edit song, cut after 03:59:855 ??. It's your selection.

[Bronze]

00:38:287 (3) - use finish?
00:58:495 (5) - add finish?
01:13:651 (5) - add finish?
02:37:011 (4) - add finish?

[Silver]

00:38:287 (7) - use finish?
00:48:391 (7) - use finish?
01:13:651 (8) - use finish?
01:44:911 (3) - add finish?
01:47:437 (4) - add finish?
03:53:582 (4) - Is it your mistake? please move 03:53:424.

[Gold]

00:38:287 (5) - use finish?
00:48:391 (3) - use finish?
01:13:651 (9) - use finish?
01:44:911 (6) - add whistle?
01:47:437 (6) - add whistle?
02:37:011 (7) - add whistle?


Um... I like this style song. Star~
Kiddo-Kun

Suggestions wrote:

[Bronze]

00:35:445 (1) - Remove New Combo

01:06:073 (1) - ^

01:07:336 (1) - ^

Star~
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