BlackY - FLOWER -SPRING Long VER.- [OsuMania] · forum

Kawawa

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Kawawa 2017-07-16T22:20:07+00:00

Sar7 wrote:
I'm sorry I'm so late.

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As Flowers Bloom And Fall
02:43:098 (163098|3) - Please move this LN to |2| because I felt a little strange. It was hard to press...
wanted to move it, but hmm kinda hard by around structure. ;w;
04:05:863 ~ 04:10:098 - Please change all of notes to hold notes. I think it looks more beautiful.
Ah, it was that. I changed it by maxus' suggestion. but I want to keep as now!

That's all because I think your map is almost perfect so I can’t find a place to fix.
I'm looking forward to this ranked!

Don't worry. I'm so glad to see any opinion!
by the way I can't update right now.
so I surely will consider this things before qualify check.
Thanks for the opinion! and your time!

Last edited by Kawawa 2017-07-28T06:24:05+00:00, edited 1 time in total.

Mordu

50 posts

Joined January 2016

Mordu 2017-07-21T22:44:18+00:00

As Flowers Bloom And Fall

1) I feel that from 05:36:392 to 05:41:863 is non-stop, for example, there has to be a note in 05:36:480 line, the sounds can't be ignored I think :d, another examples are these lines too: 05:37:363 , 05:37:539 | | Do not think I don't know what you want to express, though!

2) You would feel that part better like this

3) From 05:46:098 to 05:52:980 is also non-stop, you can add notes, for example in these lines 05:47:421 , 05:48:127 , 05:48:833. All the way like that for non-stop until the previously said 05:52:980

4) I dont feel these parts being a straight stair, I feel it must be more ~~~ "meandering" (I don't know if that is the correct english word :d)

I feel the rhythm "meassier", like this or something, but only for those two parts!

5) 05:46:098 (346098|6,346098|3,346098|0) Those notes have no sounds on that place, the songs continues in the next line, but is not that important!, you don't even feel it when playing! only when testing near that part, I just wanted to point that out just in case.

That's all. This map is already awesome.
Really amazing map!

Kawawa

Topic Starter

Kawawa 2017-07-28T06:20:58+00:00

Mordu wrote:
As Flowers Bloom And Fall
1) I feel that from 05:36:392 to 05:41:863 is non-stop, for example, there has to be a note in 05:36:480 line, the sounds can't be ignored I think :d, another examples are these lines too: 05:37:363 , 05:37:539 | | Do not think I don't know what you want to express, though! I ignored them as an intention. because I wanted to make a rest at here a bit before burst.
I actually know what it is, so there is no change.
by the way your opinion is also valid, but it is the style of my structure. so wanna keep!

2) You would feel that part better like this
I played yours too. but I still want to keep.

3) From 05:46:098 to 05:52:980 is also non-stop, you can add notes, for example in these lines 05:47:421 , 05:48:127 , 05:48:833. All the way like that for non-stop until the previously said 05:52:980
I actually did a lot of research on this structure. yeah, You're right. it is a non-stop.
But I did not focus on it.
I mean I buffed some notes to piano when it has a high pitch or impacted than around.
and in the process, I ignored some. for what?
I wanted to express the jump when It goes low pich from high pich.
like 05:41:951 (341951|4,341951|5,342215|4,342215|5,342480|5,342480|4,342745|5,342745|4) -
Actually it does not give much feeling when I play it as x1.0 playback rate.
I have the skills to play this enoughly, and I can understand exactly because I can feel the feeling.

4) I dont feel these parts being a straight stair, I feel it must be more ~~~ "meandering" (I don't know if that is the correct english word :d)
It depends on each thinking how it accept as a theme of song.

I feel the rhythm "meassier", like this or something, but only for those two parts!

5) 05:46:098 (346098|6,346098|3,346098|0) Those notes have no sounds on that place, the songs continues in the next line, but is not that important!, you don't even feel it when playing! only when testing near that part, I just wanted to point that out just in case.
This is the main section. can be impacted, and it gives a feeling to player enoughly.
because I have described those things on the above, so I will not comment much it.

That's all. This map is already awesome.
Really amazing map!

I was able to get a feedback, and that will help me in the future!
Thanks for your opinion!

Critical_Star

Beatmap Nominator

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Joined December 2013

Critical_Star 2017-07-28T06:49:00+00:00

some irc check

14:29 Critical_Star: u wanted to ask me?
14:29 *Kawawa is editing [https://osu.ppy.sh/b/1330572 BlackY - FLOWER -SPRING Long VER.- [As Flowers Bloom And Fall]]
14:30 Kawawa: 05:31:804 - I missed a note here.
14:30 Kawawa: should be three in this part like 05:33:215 -  05:34:627 -
14:30 Kawawa: I just noticed -w-
14:31 Kawawa: so changed like this http://puu.sh/wV8Dr/401f092814.jpg
14:31 Critical_Star: okay
14:31 Kawawa: 05:36:215 - and from this, I ignored the main synth sounds like 05:36:480 -  05:37:363 -  05:37:539 -  05:37:892 -  05:38:774 -  05:38:951 -
14:32 Kawawa: It's good to you?
14:32 Kawawa: 05:39:039 - And again here, I mixed them at here only(main synth + drum) till 05:41:863 -
14:32 Critical_Star: here is the beat phase 
14:32 Critical_Star: i think is fine to keep it
14:32 Critical_Star: i see your intention for each double white tick line
14:33 Kawawa: yeah, If I should add here like 05:38:951 -
14:33 Kawawa: then It can't get a rest
14:33 Kawawa: I did not want "non-stop"
14:33 Critical_Star: yea make a break there is good so player can regain the momentum
14:33 Kawawa: alright!
14:34 Critical_Star: 06:04:142 (364142|4,364186|2) -  CTRL+G?
14:34 Critical_Star: i thought same direction would play much comfortable
14:34 Kawawa: 06:04:186 (364186|2,364230|0,364274|1,364318|2) - It's hard
14:37 Critical_Star: 06:04:407 (364407|4) -  kinda bother me a bit too short to play
14:37 Kawawa: yeah, same thinking.
14:38 Kawawa: https://puu.sh/wV8QT/0d7fb31bc5.jpg
14:38 Kawawa: waht do you think about it then?
14:38 Critical_Star: http://puu.sh/wV8RL/eb11fe8409.png how about this
14:38 Critical_Star: oh sure that is okay too
14:39 Kawawa: I tried yours but why it make up SR 6.29 to 6.32?
14:39 Kawawa: -w-
14:40 Kawawa: actually weird SR system.
14:40 Critical_Star: haha
14:40 Critical_Star: LN spike
14:40 Critical_Star: it is really easy to spike with LN
14:40 Critical_Star: like my sennen kotowari
14:40 Critical_Star: if i remove the LN at the end
14:40 Critical_Star: less than <5
14:40 Critical_Star: u wanted to keep the SR?
14:41 Kawawa: yeah I don't want to up SR
14:41 Kawawa: https://puu.sh/wV8QT/0d7fb31bc5.jpg
14:41 Kawawa: this one is seems keep
14:41 Critical_Star: because 06:03:745 (363745|3,363789|4,363833|5,363877|6) - 
14:41 Critical_Star: so i thought it will be nice to make something like that
14:41 Critical_Star: sure
14:42 Kawawa: I made some shorter LN when It followed with piano like  03:22:804 - 03:45:392 -
14:43 Kawawa: First time I tried 1/12 snap for the piano, but It was too weird. and something.
14:43 Critical_Star: 1/12 kind hard
14:43 Critical_Star: 1/8 is already short
14:44 Kawawa: 01:41:510 -  will add at 4
14:44 Kawawa: for bass drum.
14:45 Critical_Star: ok
14:45 Kawawa: okay I guess that's all
14:46 Critical_Star: alright nice
14:46 Critical_Star: let me make a short post for this
14:47 Kawawa: okay!

Oscyy

403 posts

Joined August 2014

Oscyy 2017-07-31T10:38:54+00:00

just a quick simple suggestion here

04:56:510 (296510|2,296510|4) - umm, somewhat i always got noteblocked on this part since you put a jack (and its 3 notes in a row) and quite strong bump (1.8x - 0.2x), can you switch them to col 1 and 5?

Ryzen_old_1

Ryzen_old_1 2017-07-31T23:13:19+00:00

Another Lie wrote:
Another epic map after Black or White >/////<
Mod
03:50:510 - missing note?
03:57:392 (237392|0,237392|5,237392|2,237392|1,237392|4,237392|6) - i didn't catch the feeling at the end of LN, maybe like this https://puu.sh/wXXuJ.png (if that accept, 04:00:215 - should be double 35)
05:55:627 (355627|5,355627|3,355745|3,355863|3) - swap col for hand balance (tbh i hate spamming 4th col XD)
sorry if i'm using quote (because this is not my account, also my account is ded)

Kawawa

Topic Starter

Kawawa 2017-08-01T07:05:02+00:00

OscarRickyH02 wrote:
just a quick simple suggestion here

04:56:510 (296510|2,296510|4) - umm, somewhat i always got noteblocked on this part since you put a jack (and its 3 notes in a row) and quite strong bump (1.8x - 0.2x), can you switch them to col 1 and 5?

I earliy tried some stuff for it, but wanna keep this.
Since I really like the feeling of highlight with those three jack.
I'm still thinking that It's already has a convenience and concept of the chart reasonably! Thanks for your opinion!

Kawawa

Topic Starter

Kawawa 2017-08-01T07:18:24+00:00

Ryzen wrote:
Another Lie wrote:
Another epic map after Black or White >/////<
Mod
03:50:510 - missing note? was considering it, did not. I focused on the snare drum at there.
and I used the expression them as bundle, like a jump! [I can not explain this as word, but I know it by feeling]

03:57:392 (237392|0,237392|5,237392|2,237392|1,237392|4,237392|6) - i didn't catch the feeling at the end of LN, maybe like this https://puu.sh/wXXuJ.png (if that accept, 04:00:215 - should be double 35) It is okay! note amounts are depends on each structure. can be changed as intention.

05:55:627 (355627|5,355627|3,355745|3,355863|3) - swap col for hand balance (tbh i hate spamming 4th col XD)
I'm so sorry. I was trying to change this. but It looks hard by conception of the chart.

I seperated them one by one, I mean one hand is piano, other one is drum mostly.
05:53:157 - here is the one which right hand follows the piano bundle.
05:54:568 - and again, next case which left hand follows. about 4th col (because I use left hand for space key) uwu
05:55:980 - to 05:58:627 - and It becomes center.
sorry if i'm using quote (because this is not my account, also my account is ded)