Miyamori Aoi & Yasuhara Ema & Sakaki Shizuka - Animetic Love

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Hello, from my queue~
Nice picture btw, I love Kantoku :]

[General]
  1. Change artist according to the CD. Someone would have to confirm though. I'm not confident.
    Artist: 宮森あおい(木村珠莉)&安原絵麻(佳村はるか)&坂木しずか(千菅春香)
    Romanized Artist: Miyamori Aoi (Kimura Juri) & Yasuhara Ema (Yoshimura Haruka) & Sakaki Shizuka (Chisuga Haruka)
  2. You're going to want audio lead-in. Open the .osu and change leadin to . . . 2000 probably? http://puu.sh/gRoYl.png
  3. Disable Letterbox during breaks if you're not planning on having a storyboard (there's no breaks in here anyway, so it's still useless)
  4. Use custom combo colours. I'm not good at finding good colors to use, try to ask around.
  5. Add a space in the the diff name? (Love Letter)


[LoveLetter]
I understand you were trying to go for emphasis on some of these standalone 1/4 sliders, but they just don't fit the song because they end on nothing.
IMO, all of the 1/8 sliders can be removed and the map will play better. You don't have to listen to me though, these are just suggestions.
  1. 00:08:326 (3,4,5) - these 1/4 sliders sound weird and out of place compared to the ones at the start, make them into longer 1/2 sliders
  2. 00:14:902 (4,5,6,7) - same as above^
  3. 00:12:641 (3) - the slider is really scrunched up and awkward, reduce the curl and it will look a lot better http://puu.sh/gQTIe.jpg
  4. 00:18:189 (1) -
  5. 00:19:628 (1) - I don't like how this note is placed on the start of the triple, I would move it
  6. 00:31:956 (1,2,1,2,3,4) - it would be nice to see this part repeat over itself like in 00:28:669 (1,2,1,2) to add emphasis
  7. 00:36:682 (2,3,4,5,6) - this stream is out of place, it doesn't match the music. If you decide to keep it, PLEASE movie it away from the path of the next stream.
  8. 00:38:326 (2) - this note has no business being there, pls move :/
  9. 00:40:997 (4) - blanket?
  10. 00:41:614 (1,2,3,4) - keep spacing constant between these notes
  11. 00:44:696 (1) - this is fine as a 1/4 slider
  12. 00:49:217 (4,1,2) - again with the 1/8 sliders :[ change to single notes or 1/4 sliders pls
  13. 01:04:628 (2,2,2) - all these notes make the slider starts super weird. remove them and make the sliders longer
  14. 02:02:162 (2,2,2) - ^
  15. 03:46:545 (2) - ^
  16. 01:20:039 (1) - this slider misses a beat, and the repeat lands on nothing. maybe replace it with a 1/1 slider and a single note?
  17. 02:45:518 (1) - ^
  18. 04:06:066 (1) - ^
  19. 01:39:148 (2) - I feel like this repeats too many times. plus, you're missing out on a fairly important beat right after it
  20. 03:04:628 (2) - ^
  21. 01:46:956 (1,2) - change these to single notes please. explained above.
  22. 01:50:244 (1,2) - ^
  23. 02:13:463 (2) - again, not a fan of this placement
  24. 02:15:313 (1,2) - this triple doesn't belong
  25. 02:15:518 (3,5) - there's no reason for these to be repeat 1/8 sliders. it sounds very weird and out of place :[
  26. 02:18:600 (1) - change to single note
  27. 02:29:285 (2) - make this a 1/1 slider?
  28. 02:30:107 (2,2,2) - these sound really weird. i would replace with 1/1 sliders again
  29. 02:43:463 (1) - a bit picky, but it would be nice if the kinks lined up with slider ticks http://puu.sh/gRmJC.jpg
  30. 03:15:313 (2,1) - Change to single notes or 1/2 sliders pls
  31. 03:18:600 (2,3) - ^
  32. 03:21:888 (4,5,6) - ^
  33. 03:37:710 (1) - ^
  34. 03:40:792 (3) - ^
  35. 03:32:573 (1,1,2,3,4,1) - lining these all up looks kind of ugly tbh, especially when they're not perfectly lined up. i would spread them out
  36. 03:39:354 (1,2,3,4) - completely unnecessary. back to single notes please.
  37. 03:42:641 (1,2,1,2) - ^
  38. 03:45:929 (1,2,1) - ^
  39. 03:46:545 (2) - I'd like the finish to be tapped
  40. 04:17:162 (5) - this lands on nothing. make this a 1/2 slider so you can hit the beat on the red tick, too
  41. 04:26:203 (2) - maybe slow this slider down so it's not so massive.
  42. 04:31:751 (2) - change to single note
  43. 04:34:627 (4,5,6) - change to single note or 1/2 slider
  44. 04:41:203 (4,5,6,7) - ^
  45. 04:43:463 (1,2,3,4,5) - i think this sounds better: http://puu.sh/gRopk.jpg
  46. 04:44:490 (1) - please put this note away from the start of the triple
  47. 04:45:929 (1) - I still don't like how this note is placed on the start of the triple, I would move it
  48. 04:47:778 (1,2,3,4) - again with the inappropriate 1/4 sliders. I really don't like these, and I feel like they don't belong in the song.
  49. 04:54:353 (1,2,3,4) - ^
  50. 04:52:093 (5,1) - blanket?


Solid map, nice song. Good luck on rank! :D
Topic Starter
Suzuya Jyuzo

[ Way ] wrote:

Hello, from my queue~
Nice picture btw, I love Kantoku :]

[General]
  1. Change artist according to the CD. Someone would have to confirm though. I'm not confident.
    Artist: 宮森あおい(木村珠莉)&安原絵麻(佳村はるか)&坂木しずか(千菅春香)
    Romanized Artist: Miyamori Aoi (Kimura Juri) & Yasuhara Ema (Yoshimura Haruka) & Sakaki Shizuka (Chisuga Haruka)
  2. You're going to want audio lead-in. Open the .osu and change leadin to . . . 2000 probably? http://puu.sh/gRoYl.png
  3. Disable Letterbox during breaks if you're not planning on having a storyboard (there's no breaks in here anyway, so it's still useless)
  4. Use custom combo colours. I'm not good at finding good colors to use, try to ask around.
  5. Add a space in the the diff name? (Love Letter)


[LoveLetter]
I understand you were trying to go for emphasis on some of these standalone 1/4 sliders, but they just don't fit the song because they end on nothing.
IMO, all of the 1/8 sliders can be removed and the map will play better. You don't have to listen to me though, these are just suggestions.
  1. 00:08:326 (3,4,5) - these 1/4 sliders sound weird and out of place compared to the ones at the start, make them into longer 1/2 sliders
  2. 00:14:902 (4,5,6,7) - same as above^
  3. 00:12:641 (3) - the slider is really scrunched up and awkward, reduce the curl and it will look a lot better http://puu.sh/gQTIe.jpg
  4. 00:18:189 (1) -
  5. 00:19:628 (1) - I don't like how this note is placed on the start of the triple, I would move it
  6. 00:31:956 (1,2,1,2,3,4) - it would be nice to see this part repeat over itself like in 00:28:669 (1,2,1,2) to add emphasis
  7. 00:36:682 (2,3,4,5,6) - this stream is out of place, it doesn't match the music. If you decide to keep it, PLEASE movie it away from the path of the next stream.
  8. 00:38:326 (2) - this note has no business being there, pls move :/
  9. 00:40:997 (4) - blanket?
  10. 00:41:614 (1,2,3,4) - keep spacing constant between these notes
  11. 00:44:696 (1) - this is fine as a 1/4 slider
  12. 00:49:217 (4,1,2) - again with the 1/8 sliders :[ change to single notes or 1/4 sliders pls
  13. 01:04:628 (2,2,2) - all these notes make the slider starts super weird. remove them and make the sliders longer
  14. 02:02:162 (2,2,2) - ^
  15. 03:46:545 (2) - ^
  16. 01:20:039 (1) - this slider misses a beat, and the repeat lands on nothing. maybe replace it with a 1/1 slider and a single note?
  17. 02:45:518 (1) - ^
  18. 04:06:066 (1) - ^
  19. 01:39:148 (2) - I feel like this repeats too many times. plus, you're missing out on a fairly important beat right after it
  20. 03:04:628 (2) - ^
  21. 01:46:956 (1,2) - change these to single notes please. explained above.
  22. 01:50:244 (1,2) - ^
  23. 02:13:463 (2) - again, not a fan of this placement
  24. 02:15:313 (1,2) - this triple doesn't belong
  25. 02:15:518 (3,5) - there's no reason for these to be repeat 1/8 sliders. it sounds very weird and out of place :[
  26. 02:18:600 (1) - change to single note
  27. 02:29:285 (2) - make this a 1/1 slider?
  28. 02:30:107 (2,2,2) - these sound really weird. i would replace with 1/1 sliders again
  29. 02:43:463 (1) - a bit picky, but it would be nice if the kinks lined up with slider ticks http://puu.sh/gRmJC.jpg
  30. 03:15:313 (2,1) - Change to single notes or 1/2 sliders pls
  31. 03:18:600 (2,3) - ^
  32. 03:21:888 (4,5,6) - ^
  33. 03:37:710 (1) - ^
  34. 03:40:792 (3) - ^
  35. 03:32:573 (1,1,2,3,4,1) - lining these all up looks kind of ugly tbh, especially when they're not perfectly lined up. i would spread them out
  36. 03:39:354 (1,2,3,4) - completely unnecessary. back to single notes please.
  37. 03:42:641 (1,2,1,2) - ^
  38. 03:45:929 (1,2,1) - ^
  39. 03:46:545 (2) - I'd like the finish to be tapped
  40. 04:17:162 (5) - this lands on nothing. make this a 1/2 slider so you can hit the beat on the red tick, too
  41. 04:26:203 (2) - maybe slow this slider down so it's not so massive.
  42. 04:31:751 (2) - change to single note
  43. 04:34:627 (4,5,6) - change to single note or 1/2 slider
  44. 04:41:203 (4,5,6,7) - ^
  45. 04:43:463 (1,2,3,4,5) - i think this sounds better: http://puu.sh/gRopk.jpg
  46. 04:44:490 (1) - please put this note away from the start of the triple
  47. 04:45:929 (1) - I still don't like how this note is placed on the start of the triple, I would move it
  48. 04:47:778 (1,2,3,4) - again with the inappropriate 1/4 sliders. I really don't like these, and I feel like they don't belong in the song.
  49. 04:54:353 (1,2,3,4) - ^
  50. 04:52:093 (5,1) - blanket?


Solid map, nice song. Good luck on rank! :D
Thank you for the mod.

About the Artist :Change according to the CD too long that can not upload, so I cut out in brackets.

00:19:628 (1) - Note on here I think there is no problem (Similar to these places are not modified)
00:31:956 (1,2,1,2,3,4)-I think it no problem
01:04:628 (2,2,2) -I think it looks ugly and elongated sliders.Do not have to find a good solution to replace them.
:)
Karen
2015-03-28 22:12 Suzuya Jyuzo: Ren你好,可以向你要MOD吗?
2015-03-28 22:13 Kagamine Ren: 最近不想mod,你可以先发过来 过一阵子再摸
2015-03-28 22:15 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩,好的,图:https://osu.ppy.sh/s/295996
2015-03-28 22:16 Kagamine Ren: 等等
2015-03-28 22:16 Kagamine Ren: 不如现在来IRC吧
2015-03-28 22:16 Kagamine Ren: 正好有点空
2015-03-28 22:17 Suzuya Jyuzo: IRC?是什么?
2015-03-28 22:17 Kagamine Ren: 就是这样mod
2015-03-28 22:17 Kagamine Ren: 在这里
2015-03-28 22:17 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦,聊天里MOD
2015-03-28 22:17 Kagamine Ren: 然后我把记录贴到论坛 给我个kd就行了
2015-03-28 22:17 Suzuya Jyuzo: 谢谢啦
2015-03-28 22:17 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩恩
2015-03-28 22:18 Kagamine Ren: 00:00:518 - 这里可以三连
2015-03-28 22:18 Kagamine Ren: 理解吗
2015-03-28 22:19 Kagamine Ren: 不知道可以问..
2015-03-28 22:19 Suzuya Jyuzo: 加到前面,红线要往前移吗
2015-03-28 22:19 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩
2015-03-28 22:19 Kagamine Ren: 往前4拍
2015-03-28 22:19 Suzuya Jyuzo: 知道了
2015-03-28 22:19 Kagamine Ren: 就是负数offset
2015-03-28 22:20 Kagamine Ren: 00:14:696 - 这种音别漏了
2015-03-28 22:20 Suzuya Jyuzo: 4拍是4条白线是吗
2015-03-28 22:20 Kagamine Ren: 这歌节奏丰富
2015-03-28 22:20 Kagamine Ren: 是
2015-03-28 22:20 Kagamine Ren: 就是移到前一个大白线上
2015-03-28 22:20 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩
2015-03-28 22:21 Kagamine Ren: 这个默认的clap音效不合适
2015-03-28 22:22 Kagamine Ren: 建议找个别的换一下
2015-03-28 22:23 Suzuya Jyuzo: 自己找音效外加上去吗,我也不知道用什么好
2015-03-28 22:23 Kagamine Ren: 是的
2015-03-28 22:23 Kagamine Ren: 现在大部分图都是自己加音效
2015-03-28 22:23 Kagamine Ren: 不用默认
2015-03-28 22:23 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦
2015-03-28 22:24 Kagamine Ren: 这图的话 可以用那个咚咚咚的clap音效
2015-03-28 22:24 Suzuya Jyuzo: 跟音乐里面的音效相似点的是吧,之后去找找
2015-03-28 22:25 Kagamine Ren: 对
2015-03-28 22:25 Kagamine Ren: ACTION is listening to [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/520110 Sphere - Future Stream]
2015-03-28 22:25 Kagamine Ren: 比如这图里那个clap
2015-03-28 22:25 Kagamine Ren: (变相推销
2015-03-28 22:25 Kagamine Ren: 而且你加的太频繁了
2015-03-28 22:25 Suzuya Jyuzo: 好好,借鉴了,这图我打过~
2015-03-28 22:26 Kagamine Ren: 一般隔一个白线加一次
2015-03-28 22:26 Kagamine Ren: 大部分的歌都是 第二和第四拍加的clap
2015-03-28 22:26 Kagamine Ren: 作图也是一样
2015-03-28 22:27 Kagamine Ren: 02:20:860 - 比如这里是第二拍,02:21:682 - 这里是第四拍
2015-03-28 22:27 Kagamine Ren: 理解吗
2015-03-28 22:27 Suzuya Jyuzo: 额,因为默认Whistle听不怎么出来,都加上了。之后改
2015-03-28 22:27 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩
2015-03-28 22:27 Kagamine Ren: 然后除了24clap
2015-03-28 22:27 Kagamine Ren: 就是13whistle
2015-03-28 22:27 Kagamine Ren: whistle的话默认那个就很好
2015-03-28 22:28 Kagamine Ren: 万能whistle 什么图都能加
2015-03-28 22:28 Suzuya Jyuzo: 都是加白线上的吗,那红线的呢
2015-03-28 22:28 Kagamine Ren: 红线一般不加
2015-03-28 22:29 Kagamine Ren: 还有一个finish音效
2015-03-28 22:29 Kagamine Ren: 02:43:463 - 比如这种地方
2015-03-28 22:29 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦
2015-03-28 22:29 Kagamine Ren: 你听背景有个finish音
2015-03-28 22:29 Kagamine Ren: 就该加finish
2015-03-28 22:29 Kagamine Ren: 一般这里是很重的音 需要强调
2015-03-28 22:30 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩
2015-03-28 22:30 Kagamine Ren: 除了背景有的finish
2015-03-28 22:30 Kagamine Ren: 有时候需要自己判断
2015-03-28 22:30 Kagamine Ren: 哪里音很重 需要finish
2015-03-28 22:31 Kagamine Ren: 音效上差不多就这些
2015-03-28 22:31 Kagamine Ren: 基本的
2015-03-28 22:32 Kagamine Ren: 然后继续看节奏
2015-03-28 22:32 Kagamine Ren: 等等吧 一次说太多我怕被禁言
2015-03-28 22:34 Suzuya Jyuzo: 掉线了,
2015-03-28 22:34 Kagamine Ren: 。。。。。。
2015-03-28 22:34 Kagamine Ren: 你看到哪里了
2015-03-28 22:34 Suzuya Jyuzo: 需要finish那里
2015-03-28 22:34 Kagamine Ren: 哦然后差不多没了
2015-03-28 22:35 Kagamine Ren: 音效就这么些基础的
2015-03-28 22:35 Kagamine Ren: 其他就得靠经验了
2015-03-28 22:35 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩,好,之后好好研究音效
2015-03-28 22:35 Kagamine Ren: 然后继续看节奏
2015-03-28 22:35 Kagamine Ren: 02:43:463 -
2015-03-28 22:36 Kagamine Ren: 这里不适合滑条啊
2015-03-28 22:36 Kagamine Ren: 略过了这么多鼓点
2015-03-28 22:36 Suzuya Jyuzo: 还是跟鼓吗
2015-03-28 22:36 Kagamine Ren: 对啊
2015-03-28 22:37 Kagamine Ren: 03:34:422 (1) - 这个可能是unrankable的
2015-03-28 22:37 Kagamine Ren: 不能用很多红点让滑条变速
2015-03-28 22:38 Suzuya Jyuzo: 啊这样啊,那我这里还想放滑条,要加绿线吗
2015-03-28 22:38 Kagamine Ren: 可以加绿线减速啊
2015-03-28 22:38 Kagamine Ren: 而且你这个滑条不觉得丑吗
2015-03-28 22:39 Suzuya Jyuzo: 有点。。
2015-03-28 22:39 Kagamine Ren: 04:26:203 (1) -
2015-03-28 22:39 Suzuya Jyuzo: 好好记下了
2015-03-28 22:39 Kagamine Ren: 这也是 不适合
2015-03-28 22:39 Kagamine Ren: 而且这个爱心歪了啊
2015-03-28 22:40 Kagamine Ren: 04:26:203 (1) - 这么明显的音 别漏
2015-03-28 22:40 Suzuya Jyuzo: - -|还是都跟鼓好了
2015-03-28 22:40 Kagamine Ren: 对啊
2015-03-28 22:41 Kagamine Ren: 04:40:997 - 也是
2015-03-28 22:42 Kagamine Ren: 05:07:710 - 最后插绿线降音量 20%左右
2015-03-28 22:43 Suzuya Jyuzo: 又掉了。
2015-03-28 22:44 Kagamine Ren: 看到哪了。。
2015-03-28 22:44 Suzuya Jyuzo: 后面差不多了吧
2015-03-28 22:44 Kagamine Ren: 也没啥
2015-03-28 22:44 Suzuya Jyuzo: 爱心那边,歪了
2015-03-28 22:44 Kagamine Ren: 节奏上比一般新人好点
2015-03-28 22:44 Kagamine Ren: 但是排列上还是不行
2015-03-28 22:44 Suzuya Jyuzo: 排列是什么问题
2015-03-28 22:45 Kagamine Ren: 00:09:662 (2,6) - 首先避免这种靠的很近的东西
2015-03-28 22:45 Kagamine Ren: 00:15:724 (6,7) - 还有碰到的东西
2015-03-28 22:46 Suzuya Jyuzo: 额,这里本来用1/4滑条,后来拉成1/2排版没改。。
2015-03-28 22:46 Kagamine Ren: 01:04:730 (3,1,2,3) -
2015-03-28 22:46 Kagamine Ren: 靠太近不好看
2015-03-28 22:47 Kagamine Ren: 01:23:737 (1,2,3,4,5) - 这也碰到了
2015-03-28 22:48 Kagamine Ren: 除非是特定的梗 一般排版不要这样
2015-03-28 22:48 Suzuya Jyuzo: overlap都不行是吗
2015-03-28 22:48 Kagamine Ren: 不是都不行
2015-03-28 22:48 Kagamine Ren: 没有意义的overlap
2015-03-28 22:48 Kagamine Ren: 不行
2015-03-28 22:49 Suzuya Jyuzo: 额。。新人分辨不出有没有意义。。
2015-03-28 22:51 Kagamine Ren: 有时候你需要摆一块梗,这梗需要overlap
2015-03-28 22:51 Kagamine Ren: 看起来也好看
2015-03-28 22:51 Kagamine Ren: 就有意义
2015-03-28 22:51 Kagamine Ren: 无目的的摆 出现overlap 就没意义
2015-03-28 22:51 Kagamine Ren: 比如上面举的例子 你放的时候有想过,这里我要overlap吗
2015-03-28 22:52 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦哦 01:04:422 (1,2,3) - 这一块我是想摆梗的
2015-03-28 22:52 Kagamine Ren: 这梗...
2015-03-28 22:52 Kagamine Ren: 不好玩也不好看
2015-03-28 22:53 Kagamine Ren: 01:04:730 (3,3) - 这种滑条 极丑
2015-03-28 22:54 Suzuya Jyuzo: 把滑条缩短1/4怎么样呢,形状改改
2015-03-28 22:54 Kagamine Ren: 改弯点就行了
2015-03-28 22:55 Kagamine Ren: 这个又弯又直的 纠结死了
2015-03-28 22:55 Suzuya Jyuzo: ...恩
2015-03-28 22:56 Kagamine Ren: 间距上
2015-03-28 22:56 Kagamine Ren: 一开始作图 就统一一点
2015-03-28 22:56 Kagamine Ren: 平时的地方 都确定一个间距
2015-03-28 22:56 Kagamine Ren: 开DS摆
2015-03-28 22:57 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩,大部分地方都有DS
2015-03-28 22:57 Kagamine Ren: 00:16:545 (1,2,3) - 比如小跳
2015-03-28 22:57 Kagamine Ren: 全图都用一个ds
2015-03-28 22:57 Kagamine Ren: 这个看起来也还行
2015-03-28 22:58 Kagamine Ren: 主要问题是排版
2015-03-28 22:58 Kagamine Ren: 不知道怎么表达
2015-03-28 22:58 Suzuya Jyuzo: 额。
2015-03-28 22:58 Suzuya Jyuzo: 是什么感觉
2015-03-28 22:58 Kagamine Ren: 简单的说就是 太乱了
2015-03-28 22:58 Kagamine Ren: 用某个人的话说就是 没有结构
2015-03-28 22:59 Kagamine Ren: 一块与一块地方需要建立一定的联系
2015-03-28 22:59 Suzuya Jyuzo: 要怎么摆才能体现出结构
2015-03-28 22:59 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦
2015-03-28 22:59 Kagamine Ren: 比如多用共用点
2015-03-28 22:59 Kagamine Ren: 就是重叠
2015-03-28 22:59 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦
2015-03-28 23:00 Kagamine Ren: 或者说两块地方组成一个梗
2015-03-28 23:00 Kagamine Ren: 01:09:765 (1,2,3) - 比如这里跟01:08:532 (3,4,5,6) -
2015-03-28 23:00 Kagamine Ren: 这两块地方 可以建立联系
2015-03-28 23:01 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦,懂了
2015-03-28 23:01 Kagamine Ren: http://puu.sh/gT4sf/5a5a8fbec5.jpg
2015-03-28 23:02 Kagamine Ren: 比如这样 看图比较清楚
2015-03-28 23:02 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩,看起来舒服一点
2015-03-28 23:02 Kagamine Ren: 有没有觉得这两块地方组成了一种排列
2015-03-28 23:02 Kagamine Ren: 一般就是两个NC之间构建联系
2015-03-28 23:02 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩
2015-03-28 23:03 Kagamine Ren: 差不多就这些基础的东西了
2015-03-28 23:03 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦哦,那这样大部分地方都要有修改了
2015-03-28 23:03 Kagamine Ren: 还是需要多作积累经验
2015-03-28 23:03 Kagamine Ren: 不仅大部分地方
2015-03-28 23:03 Kagamine Ren: 一开始都是要remap的
2015-03-28 23:04 Suzuya Jyuzo: remap是重新做一遍还是什么意思
2015-03-28 23:04 Kagamine Ren: 全部删掉重做
2015-03-28 23:04 Kagamine Ren: 必经之路 不然不会有质的飞越
2015-03-28 23:05 Suzuya Jyuzo: 看来也是,一个地方改了,后面都要跟着改
2015-03-28 23:05 Kagamine Ren: 差不多这样了


然后注意一下 artist里合作曲几个人之间&前后有空格的
所以Artist应该是 宮森あおい & 安原絵麻 & 坂木しずか 罗马音同理 :)
Topic Starter
Suzuya Jyuzo

Kagamine Ren wrote:

2015-03-28 22:12 Suzuya Jyuzo: Ren你好,可以向你要MOD吗?
2015-03-28 22:13 Kagamine Ren: 最近不想mod,你可以先发过来 过一阵子再摸
2015-03-28 22:15 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩,好的,图:https://osu.ppy.sh/s/295996
2015-03-28 22:16 Kagamine Ren: 等等
2015-03-28 22:16 Kagamine Ren: 不如现在来IRC吧
2015-03-28 22:16 Kagamine Ren: 正好有点空
2015-03-28 22:17 Suzuya Jyuzo: IRC?是什么?
2015-03-28 22:17 Kagamine Ren: 就是这样mod
2015-03-28 22:17 Kagamine Ren: 在这里
2015-03-28 22:17 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦,聊天里MOD
2015-03-28 22:17 Kagamine Ren: 然后我把记录贴到论坛 给我个kd就行了
2015-03-28 22:17 Suzuya Jyuzo: 谢谢啦
2015-03-28 22:17 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩恩
2015-03-28 22:18 Kagamine Ren: 00:00:518 - 这里可以三连
2015-03-28 22:18 Kagamine Ren: 理解吗
2015-03-28 22:19 Kagamine Ren: 不知道可以问..
2015-03-28 22:19 Suzuya Jyuzo: 加到前面,红线要往前移吗
2015-03-28 22:19 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩
2015-03-28 22:19 Kagamine Ren: 往前4拍
2015-03-28 22:19 Suzuya Jyuzo: 知道了
2015-03-28 22:19 Kagamine Ren: 就是负数offset
2015-03-28 22:20 Kagamine Ren: 00:14:696 - 这种音别漏了
2015-03-28 22:20 Suzuya Jyuzo: 4拍是4条白线是吗
2015-03-28 22:20 Kagamine Ren: 这歌节奏丰富
2015-03-28 22:20 Kagamine Ren: 是
2015-03-28 22:20 Kagamine Ren: 就是移到前一个大白线上
2015-03-28 22:20 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩
2015-03-28 22:21 Kagamine Ren: 这个默认的clap音效不合适
2015-03-28 22:22 Kagamine Ren: 建议找个别的换一下
2015-03-28 22:23 Suzuya Jyuzo: 自己找音效外加上去吗,我也不知道用什么好
2015-03-28 22:23 Kagamine Ren: 是的
2015-03-28 22:23 Kagamine Ren: 现在大部分图都是自己加音效
2015-03-28 22:23 Kagamine Ren: 不用默认
2015-03-28 22:23 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦
2015-03-28 22:24 Kagamine Ren: 这图的话 可以用那个咚咚咚的clap音效
2015-03-28 22:24 Suzuya Jyuzo: 跟音乐里面的音效相似点的是吧,之后去找找
2015-03-28 22:25 Kagamine Ren: 对
2015-03-28 22:25 Kagamine Ren: ACTION is listening to [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/520110 Sphere - Future Stream]
2015-03-28 22:25 Kagamine Ren: 比如这图里那个clap
2015-03-28 22:25 Kagamine Ren: (变相推销
2015-03-28 22:25 Kagamine Ren: 而且你加的太频繁了
2015-03-28 22:25 Suzuya Jyuzo: 好好,借鉴了,这图我打过~
2015-03-28 22:26 Kagamine Ren: 一般隔一个白线加一次
2015-03-28 22:26 Kagamine Ren: 大部分的歌都是 第二和第四拍加的clap
2015-03-28 22:26 Kagamine Ren: 作图也是一样
2015-03-28 22:27 Kagamine Ren: 02:20:860 - 比如这里是第二拍,02:21:682 - 这里是第四拍
2015-03-28 22:27 Kagamine Ren: 理解吗
2015-03-28 22:27 Suzuya Jyuzo: 额,因为默认Whistle听不怎么出来,都加上了。之后改
2015-03-28 22:27 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩
2015-03-28 22:27 Kagamine Ren: 然后除了24clap
2015-03-28 22:27 Kagamine Ren: 就是13whistle
2015-03-28 22:27 Kagamine Ren: whistle的话默认那个就很好
2015-03-28 22:28 Kagamine Ren: 万能whistle 什么图都能加
2015-03-28 22:28 Suzuya Jyuzo: 都是加白线上的吗,那红线的呢
2015-03-28 22:28 Kagamine Ren: 红线一般不加
2015-03-28 22:29 Kagamine Ren: 还有一个finish音效
2015-03-28 22:29 Kagamine Ren: 02:43:463 - 比如这种地方
2015-03-28 22:29 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦
2015-03-28 22:29 Kagamine Ren: 你听背景有个finish音
2015-03-28 22:29 Kagamine Ren: 就该加finish
2015-03-28 22:29 Kagamine Ren: 一般这里是很重的音 需要强调
2015-03-28 22:30 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩
2015-03-28 22:30 Kagamine Ren: 除了背景有的finish
2015-03-28 22:30 Kagamine Ren: 有时候需要自己判断
2015-03-28 22:30 Kagamine Ren: 哪里音很重 需要finish
2015-03-28 22:31 Kagamine Ren: 音效上差不多就这些
2015-03-28 22:31 Kagamine Ren: 基本的
2015-03-28 22:32 Kagamine Ren: 然后继续看节奏
2015-03-28 22:32 Kagamine Ren: 等等吧 一次说太多我怕被禁言
2015-03-28 22:34 Suzuya Jyuzo: 掉线了,
2015-03-28 22:34 Kagamine Ren: 。。。。。。
2015-03-28 22:34 Kagamine Ren: 你看到哪里了
2015-03-28 22:34 Suzuya Jyuzo: 需要finish那里
2015-03-28 22:34 Kagamine Ren: 哦然后差不多没了
2015-03-28 22:35 Kagamine Ren: 音效就这么些基础的
2015-03-28 22:35 Kagamine Ren: 其他就得靠经验了
2015-03-28 22:35 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩,好,之后好好研究音效
2015-03-28 22:35 Kagamine Ren: 然后继续看节奏
2015-03-28 22:35 Kagamine Ren: 02:43:463 -
2015-03-28 22:36 Kagamine Ren: 这里不适合滑条啊
2015-03-28 22:36 Kagamine Ren: 略过了这么多鼓点
2015-03-28 22:36 Suzuya Jyuzo: 还是跟鼓吗
2015-03-28 22:36 Kagamine Ren: 对啊
2015-03-28 22:37 Kagamine Ren: 03:34:422 (1) - 这个可能是unrankable的
2015-03-28 22:37 Kagamine Ren: 不能用很多红点让滑条变速
2015-03-28 22:38 Suzuya Jyuzo: 啊这样啊,那我这里还想放滑条,要加绿线吗
2015-03-28 22:38 Kagamine Ren: 可以加绿线减速啊
2015-03-28 22:38 Kagamine Ren: 而且你这个滑条不觉得丑吗
2015-03-28 22:39 Suzuya Jyuzo: 有点。。
2015-03-28 22:39 Kagamine Ren: 04:26:203 (1) -
2015-03-28 22:39 Suzuya Jyuzo: 好好记下了
2015-03-28 22:39 Kagamine Ren: 这也是 不适合
2015-03-28 22:39 Kagamine Ren: 而且这个爱心歪了啊
2015-03-28 22:40 Kagamine Ren: 04:26:203 (1) - 这么明显的音 别漏
2015-03-28 22:40 Suzuya Jyuzo: - -|还是都跟鼓好了
2015-03-28 22:40 Kagamine Ren: 对啊
2015-03-28 22:41 Kagamine Ren: 04:40:997 - 也是
2015-03-28 22:42 Kagamine Ren: 05:07:710 - 最后插绿线降音量 20%左右
2015-03-28 22:43 Suzuya Jyuzo: 又掉了。
2015-03-28 22:44 Kagamine Ren: 看到哪了。。
2015-03-28 22:44 Suzuya Jyuzo: 后面差不多了吧
2015-03-28 22:44 Kagamine Ren: 也没啥
2015-03-28 22:44 Suzuya Jyuzo: 爱心那边,歪了
2015-03-28 22:44 Kagamine Ren: 节奏上比一般新人好点
2015-03-28 22:44 Kagamine Ren: 但是排列上还是不行
2015-03-28 22:44 Suzuya Jyuzo: 排列是什么问题
2015-03-28 22:45 Kagamine Ren: 00:09:662 (2,6) - 首先避免这种靠的很近的东西
2015-03-28 22:45 Kagamine Ren: 00:15:724 (6,7) - 还有碰到的东西
2015-03-28 22:46 Suzuya Jyuzo: 额,这里本来用1/4滑条,后来拉成1/2排版没改。。
2015-03-28 22:46 Kagamine Ren: 01:04:730 (3,1,2,3) -
2015-03-28 22:46 Kagamine Ren: 靠太近不好看
2015-03-28 22:47 Kagamine Ren: 01:23:737 (1,2,3,4,5) - 这也碰到了
2015-03-28 22:48 Kagamine Ren: 除非是特定的梗 一般排版不要这样
2015-03-28 22:48 Suzuya Jyuzo: overlap都不行是吗
2015-03-28 22:48 Kagamine Ren: 不是都不行
2015-03-28 22:48 Kagamine Ren: 没有意义的overlap
2015-03-28 22:48 Kagamine Ren: 不行
2015-03-28 22:49 Suzuya Jyuzo: 额。。新人分辨不出有没有意义。。
2015-03-28 22:51 Kagamine Ren: 有时候你需要摆一块梗,这梗需要overlap
2015-03-28 22:51 Kagamine Ren: 看起来也好看
2015-03-28 22:51 Kagamine Ren: 就有意义
2015-03-28 22:51 Kagamine Ren: 无目的的摆 出现overlap 就没意义
2015-03-28 22:51 Kagamine Ren: 比如上面举的例子 你放的时候有想过,这里我要overlap吗
2015-03-28 22:52 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦哦 01:04:422 (1,2,3) - 这一块我是想摆梗的
2015-03-28 22:52 Kagamine Ren: 这梗...
2015-03-28 22:52 Kagamine Ren: 不好玩也不好看
2015-03-28 22:53 Kagamine Ren: 01:04:730 (3,3) - 这种滑条 极丑
2015-03-28 22:54 Suzuya Jyuzo: 把滑条缩短1/4怎么样呢,形状改改
2015-03-28 22:54 Kagamine Ren: 改弯点就行了
2015-03-28 22:55 Kagamine Ren: 这个又弯又直的 纠结死了
2015-03-28 22:55 Suzuya Jyuzo: ...恩
2015-03-28 22:56 Kagamine Ren: 间距上
2015-03-28 22:56 Kagamine Ren: 一开始作图 就统一一点
2015-03-28 22:56 Kagamine Ren: 平时的地方 都确定一个间距
2015-03-28 22:56 Kagamine Ren: 开DS摆
2015-03-28 22:57 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩,大部分地方都有DS
2015-03-28 22:57 Kagamine Ren: 00:16:545 (1,2,3) - 比如小跳
2015-03-28 22:57 Kagamine Ren: 全图都用一个ds
2015-03-28 22:57 Kagamine Ren: 这个看起来也还行
2015-03-28 22:58 Kagamine Ren: 主要问题是排版
2015-03-28 22:58 Kagamine Ren: 不知道怎么表达
2015-03-28 22:58 Suzuya Jyuzo: 额。
2015-03-28 22:58 Suzuya Jyuzo: 是什么感觉
2015-03-28 22:58 Kagamine Ren: 简单的说就是 太乱了
2015-03-28 22:58 Kagamine Ren: 用某个人的话说就是 没有结构
2015-03-28 22:59 Kagamine Ren: 一块与一块地方需要建立一定的联系
2015-03-28 22:59 Suzuya Jyuzo: 要怎么摆才能体现出结构
2015-03-28 22:59 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦
2015-03-28 22:59 Kagamine Ren: 比如多用共用点
2015-03-28 22:59 Kagamine Ren: 就是重叠
2015-03-28 22:59 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦
2015-03-28 23:00 Kagamine Ren: 或者说两块地方组成一个梗
2015-03-28 23:00 Kagamine Ren: 01:09:765 (1,2,3) - 比如这里跟01:08:532 (3,4,5,6) -
2015-03-28 23:00 Kagamine Ren: 这两块地方 可以建立联系
2015-03-28 23:01 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦,懂了
2015-03-28 23:01 Kagamine Ren: http://puu.sh/gT4sf/5a5a8fbec5.jpg
2015-03-28 23:02 Kagamine Ren: 比如这样 看图比较清楚
2015-03-28 23:02 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩,看起来舒服一点
2015-03-28 23:02 Kagamine Ren: 有没有觉得这两块地方组成了一种排列
2015-03-28 23:02 Kagamine Ren: 一般就是两个NC之间构建联系
2015-03-28 23:02 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩
2015-03-28 23:03 Kagamine Ren: 差不多就这些基础的东西了
2015-03-28 23:03 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦哦,那这样大部分地方都要有修改了
2015-03-28 23:03 Kagamine Ren: 还是需要多作积累经验
2015-03-28 23:03 Kagamine Ren: 不仅大部分地方
2015-03-28 23:03 Kagamine Ren: 一开始都是要remap的
2015-03-28 23:04 Suzuya Jyuzo: remap是重新做一遍还是什么意思
2015-03-28 23:04 Kagamine Ren: 全部删掉重做
2015-03-28 23:04 Kagamine Ren: 必经之路 不然不会有质的飞越
2015-03-28 23:05 Suzuya Jyuzo: 看来也是,一个地方改了,后面都要跟着改
2015-03-28 23:05 Kagamine Ren: 差不多这样了


然后注意一下 artist里合作曲几个人之间&前后有空格的
所以Artist应该是 宮森あおい & 安原絵麻 & 坂木しずか 罗马音同理 :)
好好,排版改了一下,之前音效都删了
EncoreW
[Love Letter]


难度名我觉得可以换一个

总体来看,开头结尾有段地方重复似乎是用的太多了,可能会给人一种滥用的感觉,另外图中有好多个能做的很有意思的地方直接被略过了

还有就是timing方面听上去似乎有点问题,可能需要找个人来测一下,kiai 段的偏差听上去非常明显

音效方面可以试试看滑条静音,而且我感觉kiai 段的很多地方音量都有点偏大

00:03:396 (2,3) - 我觉得换个位置更好

00:07:300 (3) - 这个滑条在我看来更应该加速然后用新的NC

00:07:300 (3,2,2) - 这三个没完全叠好

00:13:670 (7,8) - 这个地方我觉得一个1/4滑条能更好的切合音乐

00:27:437 (1) - 这里的音效应该可以换成drum-finish而不是auto,auto的话听起来似乎有一些违和感,之后类似的鼓点都可以换一下

00:35:861 (4,2) - 要叠就把他叠好

00:38:122 (1,2) - 近一点,这里的音乐根本用不到这么大的DS

00:38:430 (1) - 转盘去掉,搞些别的东西出来,这地方肯定不止一个转盘这么简单的

00:44:697 (1,1,1,1,1) - 这么多NC完全没必要啊,00:44:697 (1,1,1) - 这三个我觉得可以去掉的

00:54:354 - 确定没漏音?

00:54:560 (1) - 从这里开始我觉得有些问题,kiai 的话根本不应该出现在00:54:149 - 因为这里根本没有重音,我觉得更应该是00:54:765 - 这里,但是这个地方居然被放在滑条尾,没有任何打击的感觉和效果,这真的好么?

00:59:491 (1,1,1) - 这里的NC没啥必要

01:04:423 (1,2,3) - 这里我觉得更应该是这样,后面两组同理

01:16:957 (6) - 把坐标对准,456按你的意思应该是XY坐标都是等差数列的,顺便01:16:752 (5,6) - 可以blanket

01:22:505 (1) - 这个NC没啥必要,建议去掉

01:38:944 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 试试看这样子

01:40:793 - 01:40:896 - 很明显的两个鼓点,和01:40:998 - 一起刚好可以是一个3连

01:45:108 (1) - 这个NC感觉也不是很有必要,建议去掉

01:46:752 (5) - 这音效听上去太突兀,违和感有点厉害,而且我觉得不应该是whistle,01:46:649 (4,5) - 这两个我觉得都是finish

01:48:498 (5,6,7,8) - 这四个我觉得都应该加上finish

02:01:957 (1,2,3) - 03:47:163 (1,2,3) - 和01:04:423 (1,2,3) - 一样

02:06:683 (1) - 这里的NC也不是很有必要的样子

02:19:628 (7) - kiai 的问题和我前面讲的一样,出现在了不应该出现的地方

02:25:793 (1) - 这个NC去了,太没必要了

02:29:081 (1,2) - 这里不适合用和后面几个一样的组合,歌词音调什么的完全不一样

02:38:944 (1) - NC去了,很明显没这必要,02:39:560 (3) - 更应该用NC

02:43:464 (1) - 这一段我觉得更应该是这样

02:47:985 (1) - 这个NC没必要,建议去了

02:49:937 (1) - 这个NC存在的意义是什么?

02:50:861 (1,1) - 03:04:012 (1,1) - 03:10:587 (1,1) - 而且这两个也不是很有必要

03:15:108 (1) - 这个其实也没什么必要的

03:18:396 (1) - 03:21:067 (1) - 这里也要NC一个?

03:33:807 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 鼓点这么明显的地方直接soft,然后什么都不带,这太不好了

03:34:423 (7) - 这种这么明显的变速滑条又不NC了?

03:38:122 (1) - NC去了,根本没必要的

03:46:546 (4) - 1/4往返的滑条已经够了,用1/8反而不好

03:52:916 (1) - NC去了

03:56:204 (3,2) - 叠好

03:58:259 (7) - 这个1/4滑条个人感觉毫无意义,这里没有任何歌词或者音乐需要放这个东西,03:58:361 - 没有任何东西

04:12:026 (2) - 同上

04:18:601 (2) - 这个地方用1/4滑条感觉比前面合理一点,不过还是建议改一下

04:11:409 (1,1) - NC没啥意义,其实感觉这种地方用NC的话啥用都没有

04:17:985 (1,1) - NC去掉

后奏听上去和前奏差不多,照着改就是了
Topic Starter
Suzuya Jyuzo

tm1209 wrote:

[Love Letter]


难度名我觉得可以换一个 = =直接换回Insane?

总体来看,开头结尾有段地方重复似乎是用的太多了,可能会给人一种滥用的感觉,另外图中有好多个能做的很有意思的地方直接被略过了

还有就是timing方面听上去似乎有点问题,可能需要找个人来测一下,kiai 段的偏差听上去非常明显

音效方面可以试试看滑条静音,而且我感觉kiai 段的很多地方音量都有点偏大

额,重复的有些地方还是改改好了,有意思的地方你说的大概是这里01:20:039开始的kiai,应该多些切指梗什么的,timing我去找人测测好了,滑条静音我会去弄一个,KIAI段音量也调一下(关于NC过多的问题,一直按照自己的打图习惯放了好多NC利于读图 Σ( ° △ °|||)︴作图这种习惯看来要改)

00:03:396 (2,3) - 我觉得换个位置更好 放这里感觉和后面的两个滑条可以形成一种左右对称- -自己看起来比较舒服

00:07:300 (3) - 这个滑条在我看来更应该加速然后用新的NC 改了

00:07:300 (3,2,2) - 这三个没完全叠好 改了

00:13:670 (7,8) - 这个地方我觉得一个1/4滑条能更好的切合音乐 改了

00:27:437 (1) - 这里的音效应该可以换成drum-finish而不是auto,auto的话听起来似乎有一些违和感,之后类似的鼓点都可以换一下

改了,后面的鼓点我之后一个个找着改

00:35:861 (4,2) - 要叠就把他叠好 改了

00:38:122 (1,2) - 近一点,这里的音乐根本用不到这么大的DS 改了

00:38:430 (1) - 转盘去掉,搞些别的东西出来,这地方肯定不止一个转盘这么简单的 改了

00:44:697 (1,1,1,1,1) - 这么多NC完全没必要啊,00:44:697 (1,1,1) - 这三个我觉得可以去掉的 改了

00:54:354 - 确定没漏音? 改了

00:54:560 (1) - 从这里开始我觉得有些问题,kiai 的话根本不应该出现在00:54:149 - 因为这里根本没有重音,我觉得更应该是00:54:765 - 这里,但是这个地方居然被放在滑条尾,没有任何打击的感觉和效果,这真的好么? 改了

00:59:491 (1,1,1) - 这里的NC没啥必要 改了

01:04:423 (1,2,3) - 这里我觉得更应该是这样,后面两组同理 这里这样放应该没有问题吧?有点overmap,还是改吧

01:16:957 (6) - 把坐标对准,456按你的意思应该是XY坐标都是等差数列的,顺便01:16:752 (5,6) - 可以blanket 改了

01:22:505 (1) - 这个NC没啥必要,建议去掉 改了

01:38:944 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 试试看这样子 改了

01:40:793 - 01:40:896 - 很明显的两个鼓点,和01:40:998 - 一起刚好可以是一个3连 改了(我发现这一段的确是漏了一些鼓点,可以3连,你指的也应该是这里没有做得很有趣,之后这边的3段都需要改一遍)

01:45:108 (1) - 这个NC感觉也不是很有必要,建议去掉 改了

01:46:752 (5) - 这音效听上去太突兀,违和感有点厉害,而且我觉得不应该是whistle,01:46:649 (4,5) - 这两个我觉得都是finish 改了

01:48:498 (5,6,7,8) - 这四个我觉得都应该加上finish 改了

02:01:957 (1,2,3) - 03:47:163 (1,2,3) - 和01:04:423 (1,2,3) - 一样 同上

02:06:683 (1) - 这里的NC也不是很有必要的样子 改了

02:19:628 (7) - kiai 的问题和我前面讲的一样,出现在了不应该出现的地方 改了

02:25:793 (1) - 这个NC去了,太没必要了 改了

02:29:081 (1,2) - 这里不适合用和后面几个一样的组合,歌词音调什么的完全不一样 改了

02:38:944 (1) - NC去了,很明显没这必要,02:39:560 (3) - 更应该用NC 改了

02:43:464 (1) - 这一段我觉得更应该是这样 改了

02:47:985 (1) - 这个NC没必要,建议去了 改了

02:49:937 (1) - 这个NC存在的意义是什么? 改了

02:50:861 (1,1) - 03:04:012 (1,1) - 03:10:587 (1,1) - 而且这两个也不是很有必要 改了

03:15:108 (1) - 这个其实也没什么必要的 改了

03:18:396 (1) - 03:21:067 (1) - 这里也要NC一个? 改了

03:33:807 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 鼓点这么明显的地方直接soft,然后什么都不带,这太不好了 改了

03:34:423 (7) - 这种这么明显的变速滑条又不NC了? 改了

03:38:122 (1) - NC去了,根本没必要的 改了

03:46:546 (4) - 1/4往返的滑条已经够了,用1/8反而不好 改了

03:52:916 (1) - NC去了 改了

03:56:204 (3,2) - 叠好 改了

03:58:259 (7) - 这个1/4滑条个人感觉毫无意义,这里没有任何歌词或者音乐需要放这个东西,03:58:361 - 没有任何东西 改了

04:12:026 (2) - 同上 改成3连

04:18:601 (2) - 这个地方用1/4滑条感觉比前面合理一点,不过还是建议改一下

04:11:409 (1,1) - NC没啥意义,其实感觉这种地方用NC的话啥用都没有 改了

04:17:985 (1,1) - NC去掉 改了

后奏听上去和前奏差不多,照着改就是了
OK

非常感谢! :)
需要一段时间来改动
JBHyperion
Request from Wild and Hyper's Modding Queue

General Comments:
  1. Offset feels wrong, notes in the map are arriving too late for their respective sounds in the song. Try -950ms (and don't forget to resnap all of your notes)
  2. Some custom combo colours would be good to make the map more appealing. You could easily do one colour for each of the characters in the bg image (so green, yellow, pink, blue and purple) - these would show up really well considering most of the bg is white
  3. Maybe increase AR to 8.5? AR 8.2 feels a little slow for 146 bpm, but this is maybe just me
  4. You use a lot of linear sliders, which an get boring. In areas where you have lots of linear sliders, try making a few of them curved to create some variety


Map-Specific Comments:
00:02:779 (8) - Move to [x-165] so it's directly below (1,2,3) and this pattern is symmetrical

00:11:204 (2,3,4) - Stack these with the previous stack at 00:10:176 (1,2)

00:16:752 (3) - Move to [x-336,y-292] to make (1,2,3) a neater triangle with equal sides

00:27:848 (3,4) - Bad blanket. Also, the close distance between these made me think it was 1/4, but it's still 1/2. I don't think an anti jump is appropriate here, so I would move (4) further away

00:44:697 (1,1) - I can't work out what this 1/4 slider is supposed to be mapping, and the 1/4 jump to the next slider is far too large for what is a calm piece of music. I would just make 00:44:697 (1) a single circle

00:53:533 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Streams in a straight line aren't all that interesting, try making them into a shallow S or curve shape

01:15:519 (7) - Remove the repeat, there's no note in the music that I can hear to justify it

01:20:039 (1,2) - Reduce the curve on (1) to improve the blanket here

01:25:998 (6,7,8,1,2,3) - Placing two triplets right on top of each other with this amount of time between them is very confusing, since it appears to be a six note stack, and not split into two triples as it should be. I would move 01:26:409 (1,2,3) somewhere else to make this easier to read (maybe starting at [x-460,y-60]? If you do this, you'll need to reflow the following combo so you're not left with a huge jump

02:19:012 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Another linear stream, curve to make this more interesting

02:45:519 (1,2) - Same as at 01:20:039 - reduce the curve on (1) to improve the blanket here

03:09:663 (4) - Remove this as I can't hear a note here. However, there's a cool drum triplet at 03:09:149 (1,2) that you've missed, so move the triplet here (add a note at 03:09:252 -)

03:17:985 to 03:37:300 - Personally, I feel this instrumental solo is one of the more prominent parts of the music and should be emphasised. Since you've already decided to devote your kiai time to the vocal sections, the volume should be increased here

03:49:731 - There's a note here as part of the drum fill, so add a circle here

04:26:615 (5) - Rotate the tail 3 degrees anticlockwise to make it parallel with 04:26:204 (4)

05:06:067 - From here onwards, add a timing point on each white and red tick so you can reduce the volume to match the fade out of the song. You should reduce the volume by 5% each green timing point, down to 5% volume at 05:07:505 - this will also remove the weird cymbal hitsound you get at the end of the spinner, which feels very out of place here.


That's all from me - hopefully you find this useful, but if anything is unclear, don't hesitate to ask me ingame or through forum message.

Best of luck! (:
Topic Starter
Suzuya Jyuzo

JBHyperion wrote:

Request from Wild and Hyper's Modding Queue

General Comments:
  1. Offset feels wrong, notes in the map are arriving too late for their respective sounds in the song. Try -950ms (and don't forget to resnap all of your notes) √ I just need someone to test BPM. It's just in time.
  2. Some custom combo colours would be good to make the map more appealing. You could easily do one colour for each of the characters in the bg image (so green, yellow, pink, blue and purple) - these would show up really well considering most of the bg is white
  3. Maybe increase AR to 8.5? AR 8.2 feels a little slow for 146 bpm, but this is maybe just me
  4. You use a lot of linear sliders, which an get boring. In areas where you have lots of linear sliders, try making a few of them curved to create some variety
Thank you for advice,I try to change

Map-Specific Comments:
00:02:779 (8) - Move to [x-165] so it's directly below (1,2,3) and this pattern is symmetrical

00:11:204 (2,3,4) - Stack these with the previous stack at 00:10:176 (1,2)

00:16:752 (3) - Move to [x-336,y-292] to make (1,2,3) a neater triangle with equal sides

00:27:848 (3,4) - Bad blanket. Also, the close distance between these made me think it was 1/4, but it's still 1/2. I don't think an anti jump is appropriate here, so I would move (4) further away

00:44:697 (1,1) - I can't work out what this 1/4 slider is supposed to be mapping, and the 1/4 jump to the next slider is far too large for what is a calm piece of music. I would just make 00:44:697 (1) a single circle

00:53:533 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Streams in a straight line aren't all that interesting, try making them into a shallow S or curve shape I think this is okay,not need to change

01:15:519 (7) - Remove the repeat, there's no note in the music that I can hear to justify it

01:20:039 (1,2) - Reduce the curve on (1) to improve the blanket here

01:25:998 (6,7,8,1,2,3) - Placing two triplets right on top of each other with this amount of time between them is very confusing, since it appears to be a six note stack, and not split into two triples as it should be. I would move 01:26:409 (1,2,3) somewhere else to make this easier to read (maybe starting at [x-460,y-60]? If you do this, you'll need to reflow the following combo so you're not left with a huge jump

02:19:012 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Another linear stream, curve to make this more interesting

02:45:519 (1,2) - Same as at 01:20:039 - reduce the curve on (1) to improve the blanket here

03:09:663 (4) - Remove this as I can't hear a note here. However, there's a cool drum triplet at 03:09:149 (1,2) that you've missed, so move the triplet here (add a note at 03:09:252 -) I put it into http://puu.sh/h4El0/1133414641.jpg

03:17:985 to 03:37:300 - Personally, I feel this instrumental solo is one of the more prominent parts of the music and should be emphasised. Since you've already decided to devote your kiai time to the vocal sections, the volume should be increased here


03:49:731 - There's a note here as part of the drum fill, so add a circle here I put it into http://puu.sh/h4ET2/b43e2ab9f9.jpg

04:26:615 (5) - Rotate the tail 3 degrees anticlockwise to make it parallel with 04:26:204 (4)

05:06:067 - From here onwards, add a timing point on each white and red tick so you can reduce the volume to match the fade out of the song. You should reduce the volume by 5% each green timing point, down to 5% volume at 05:07:505 - this will also remove the weird cymbal hitsound you get at the end of the spinner, which feels very out of place here.


That's all from me - hopefully you find this useful, but if anything is unclear, don't hesitate to ask me ingame or through forum message.

Best of luck! (:

I found some problems,so i need time to change it.
Thank you very much:)
AIR
[Insane]
  1. 00:02:337 (7,1) - 00:05:214 (1,4) - 交换nc,类似尽量大白线
  2. 00:04:392 (2,3,1) - 控制下视距DS,尽量不同的看起来不要太接近
  3. 00:06:447 (1,2) - 其实我比较倾向于跟鼓点,不过这样也不错
  4. 00:22:680 (4,1) - 可以合一个条或者3/4过渡
  5. 00:25:145 (3) - 锚点尽量不要出界
  6. 00:38:091 (5,6,7,1,2,3) - 然而并不好读,可以试下这个节奏
  7. 01:13:639 (4) - 去whistle
  8. 04:15:899 (2,3,4) - 尽量别搞这种分离式orz
  9. 04:57:200 - 添条140的红线
  10. 美丽


goodluck
Topic Starter
Suzuya Jyuzo

AIR wrote:

[Insane]
  1. 00:02:337 (7,1) - 00:05:214 (1,4) - 交换nc,类似尽量大白线
  2. 00:04:392 (2,3,1) - 控制下视距DS,尽量不同的看起来不要太接近 这边发现了点问题,后面的节奏要改改,所以这条忽略
  3. 00:06:447 (1,2) - 其实我比较倾向于跟鼓点,不过这样也不错 那就这样吧
  4. 00:22:680 (4,1) - 可以合一个条或者3/4过渡 滑条换成NOTE,3/4过渡了,后奏也有相同的地方也改了
  5. 00:25:145 (3) - 锚点尽量不要出界 横着放了
  6. 00:38:091 (5,6,7,1,2,3) - 然而并不好读,可以试下这个节奏我换成这样
  7. 01:13:639 (4) - 去whistle
  8. 04:15:899 (2,3,4) - 尽量别搞这种分离式orz 叠滑条尾了
  9. 04:57:200 - 添条140的红线
  10. 美丽


goodluck

精简有用的MOD ;)
还射了星,谢谢~ :)
-TakoYaki-
Hello ,From M4M request :D

AR9可能會比較好
00:05:419 (5,1) - 這個有點反應不過來
00:08:091 (2) - 這個可以複製00:07:680 (1) 再反過來,因為00:08:502 (3,4) 是對稱的
00:49:597 (5,6,7,1) - 這個flow比較難
00:51:241 (7,8,9,1) - ^^^
00:53:091 (7,1) - 連打疊在一起在AR8.5比較難看出來
01:04:186 - 可以放點東西
01:17:440 - ^^^
01:40:556 (6) - 可以改成一個note,這樣聽起來比較好
01:52:474 (1) - 有點怪,建議換成一個note
02:13:433 (6,7) - 6和7疊在一起難看出來
02:45:385 (1,2,3,4,5) - 看起來不像連打
02:50:419 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 可以改一下,星形/六角形也不錯
03:16:139 (5,1) - 和開始的時候一樣,反應不過來 :|
03:36:036 (2) - 這個好像不太需要
04:06:858 (5) - 這個聽起來需要三連打
04:43:433 (1) - 太短了,拉到紅線上聽起來比較好
04:49:597 (2,3,4,1) - 這個好像是5連打來的
04:56:173 (2,3,4,1) - ^^
04:57:628 (2) - 這個聽起來像是1/6的3連打

就是這樣~~


總結來說是非常美喔~~很喜歡那些跳 :D 希望能夠快點Rank啦~
Topic Starter
Suzuya Jyuzo

-TakoYaki- wrote:

Hello ,From M4M request :D

AR9可能會比較好 这个我想还是不改了,就8.5吧
00:05:419 (5,1) - 這個有點反應不過來 因为有2个1/6鼓点,我暂时想不到好的东西
00:08:091 (2) - 這個可以複製00:07:680 (1) 再反過來,因為00:08:502 (3,4) 是對稱的 改了
00:49:597 (5,6,7,1) - 這個flow比較難 暂时没改,改的话要换成单点有点丑,额...
00:51:241 (7,8,9,1) - ^^^
00:53:091 (7,1) - 連打疊在一起在AR8.5比較難看出來 那我把它们分开下
01:04:186 - 可以放點東西 加的话,看起来有点乱,不是重音应该可以忽略
01:17:440 - ^^^
01:40:556 (6) - 可以改成一個note,這樣聽起來比較好
01:52:474 (1) - 有點怪,建議換成一個note 改了
02:13:433 (6,7) - 6和7疊在一起難看出來 好吧,这里我考虑换个排列
02:45:385 (1,2,3,4,5) - 看起來不像連打 有鼓点,仔细听
02:50:419 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 可以改一下,星形/六角形也不錯
03:16:139 (5,1) - 和開始的時候一樣,反應不過來 :|
03:36:036 (2) - 這個好像不太需要 音是有的,转盘前面加个圈,习惯了= =
04:06:858 (5) - 這個聽起來需要三連打 恩,04:07:166是这里漏了音
04:43:433 (1) - 太短了,拉到紅線上聽起來比較好 我试下
04:49:597 (2,3,4,1) - 這個好像是5連打來的
04:56:173 (2,3,4,1) - ^^
04:57:628 (2) - 這個聽起來像是1/6的3連打 这边我打算就跟重音了,1/6的4连,连打太难,折返又有点丑

就是這樣~~


總結來說是非常美喔~~很喜歡那些跳 :D 希望能夠快點Rank啦~
谢谢摸图啦~ :)
liangv587
00:17:132 (1) - 这里换成2连,不要容易打快
02:04:803 (1) - 这里都有鼓点的,最好做成串,这样节奏不明
02:14:460 - 这里三连吧?
03:37:474 - 这里加1/1滑条,转盘结束1拍比1拍半好打
04:43:433 (1) - 2连
诶,基本找不出问题,点都不新手
比如00:52:474 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 串用滑条来转换,会圆滑些,其他没什么了
Topic Starter
Suzuya Jyuzo

liangv587 wrote:

00:17:132 (1) - 这里换成2连,不要容易打快
02:04:803 (1) - 这里都有鼓点的,最好做成串,这样节奏不明
02:14:460 - 这里三连吧?
03:37:474 - 这里加1/1滑条,转盘结束1拍比1拍半好打
04:43:433 (1) - 2连
诶,基本找不出问题,点都不新手
比如00:52:474 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 串用滑条来转换,会圆滑些,其他没什么了
前面的都改了

你说的串用滑条来转换是指的这串结束的NOTE换滑条然后接下一个串吗?

感谢摸图~ :)
Hyasalia
M4M
2015-04-20 21:53 Hyasalia: 我IRC摸行吗
2015-04-20 21:54 Suzuya Jyuzo: 可以,
2015-04-20 21:54 Hyasalia: ACTION is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/664808 Miyamori Aoi & Yasuhara Ema & Sakaki Shizuka - Animetic Love Letter [Insane]]
2015-04-20 21:55 Hyasalia: 感觉挺不错的,只是打起来不是很舒服
2015-04-20 21:55 Hyasalia: 00:49:803 (7,1) - 这里感觉节奏不对
2015-04-20 21:55 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩,有什么地方不好的直接说
2015-04-20 21:55 Hyasalia: 你总体应该是跟vocal的吧
2015-04-20 21:56 Suzuya Jyuzo: 想跟鼓
2015-04-20 21:56 Suzuya Jyuzo: 但是好像跟乱了
2015-04-20 21:56 Hyasalia: 嗯,后面一些地方比较跟vocal
2015-04-20 21:56 Hyasalia: 00:49:803 (7,1) - 这里你可以试试3连
2015-04-20 21:57 Hyasalia: 因为这里断开来很不舒服
2015-04-20 21:57 Hyasalia: 或者试试把滑条换成两个note
2015-04-20 21:57 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦,但是3连会overmap,我放一起可以吗
2015-04-20 21:58 Hyasalia: 一些红线起符合vocal的三连还是可以被接受的吧
2015-04-20 21:59 Hyasalia: 等等,我再看了下
2015-04-20 21:59 Suzuya Jyuzo: 不是很清楚,我之前是放了3连,被说overmap,然后我发现好多地方都overmap
2015-04-20 21:59 Suzuya Jyuzo: 然后重新做了一遍图。。
2015-04-20 22:00 Hyasalia: 好吧,那么就先不要这样了
2015-04-20 22:00 Hyasalia: 如果你跟vocal的话,试试这里00:50:008起的1/1滑条
2015-04-20 22:01 Suzuya Jyuzo: 好像不错
2015-04-20 22:02 Hyasalia: 总感觉有点串轨。
2015-04-20 22:02 Hyasalia: 01:28:639 (4,5,6) - 然后这里
2015-04-20 22:02 Hyasalia: 这里flow不是很好
2015-04-20 22:03 Hyasalia: 这里从4的尾巴到5到6的头基本呈一个直角,这样打起来不太舒服
2015-04-20 22:03 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩,本来5是个1/4滑条,后来发现没鼓,给去了orz,
2015-04-20 22:04 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦
2015-04-20 22:04 Hyasalia: 试试锐角
2015-04-20 22:04 Hyasalia: 应该会更好一点
2015-04-20 22:04 Suzuya Jyuzo: 好
2015-04-20 22:05 Hyasalia: 01:57:406 (1,2,3,4) - 这里你用重复的滑条来表现vocal的重复性
2015-04-20 22:06 Hyasalia: 其实前后两组vocal的音调不太一样
2015-04-20 22:06 Hyasalia: 叠在一起感觉不是特别好
2015-04-20 22:06 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦
2015-04-20 22:07 Hyasalia: 试试分开一点
2015-04-20 22:07 Suzuya Jyuzo: 跟鼓的话要怎么样呢?
2015-04-20 22:07 Suzuya Jyuzo: 4个单点?
2015-04-20 22:08 Hyasalia: 不行,白线上是重鼓,红线上比较轻
2015-04-20 22:08 Hyasalia: 还是滑条比较好
2015-04-20 22:08 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦
2015-04-20 22:08 Suzuya Jyuzo: 我试着分开点
2015-04-20 22:09 Hyasalia: 02:00:693 (1,2,3,4,1) - 这里又跟vocal了
2015-04-20 22:09 Hyasalia: 空的几个红线上还是有音的
2015-04-20 22:10 Hyasalia: 02:05:625 (1,2) - 这里有点不好看,blanket也没做好
2015-04-20 22:10 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦
2015-04-20 22:11 Hyasalia: 02:31:721 (1) - 这里应该是个三连霸
2015-04-20 22:11 Hyasalia: 吧
2015-04-20 22:13 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩,这种地方有好几处,看来要改
2015-04-20 22:13 Hyasalia: 03:09:734 (1) - 这里大白线上应该没鼓吧
2015-04-20 22:15 Suzuya Jyuzo: 去掉换成1/1滑条好了
2015-04-20 22:15 Hyasalia: 恩
2015-04-20 22:15 Hyasalia: 04:02:337 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - 这里你想摆梗,但间距没注意
2015-04-20 22:16 Hyasalia: 1/2和1/4间距是一样的
2015-04-20 22:16 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦
2015-04-20 22:17 Suzuya Jyuzo: 后面的是有点帖太近了
2015-04-20 22:18 Hyasalia: 04:33:981 (1,3) - 这里两个滑条没对称,形状不一样,虽然没什么大碍
2015-04-20 22:20 Hyasalia: 04:00:693 (1,2,3,4) - 这里的梗,唔有点像星爷一张图里的摆法
2015-04-20 22:20 Suzuya Jyuzo: 好,我修一下
2015-04-20 22:21 Suzuya Jyuzo: 星爷图打多了- -
2015-04-20 22:21 Suzuya Jyuzo: 我是星爷NC粉
2015-04-20 22:21 Hyasalia: 啊,我也很喜欢星爷的图XD
2015-04-20 22:22 Suzuya Jyuzo: hhh
2015-04-20 22:24 Hyasalia: 01:15:899 (1,2,3,4,5) - 这里flow,456排到一条直线上去了
2015-04-20 22:24 Hyasalia: 打起来还是有点不舒服的。试试6往下移一点
2015-04-20 22:25 Suzuya Jyuzo: 额,有点强迫症
2015-04-20 22:25 Hyasalia: 直线flow出现的比较好
2015-04-20 22:26 Hyasalia: 比较少
2015-04-20 22:26 Hyasalia: 锐角和钝角用的比较多
2015-04-20 22:26 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦,直线flow,从来没想过用好像。。。
2015-04-20 22:27 Hyasalia: 所以456这种一条直线上的还是尽量不要用
2015-04-20 22:27 Suzuya Jyuzo: 我问下,如果跟鼓的话 00:28:228 (4,5) - 这边这些单点全部要变成滑条吗?
2015-04-20 22:28 Hyasalia: 不用
2015-04-20 22:28 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩,那我其他的NOTE也调一下好了
2015-04-20 22:28 Hyasalia: 恩,差不多就这样了

good luck
Topic Starter
Suzuya Jyuzo

Hyasalia wrote:

M4M
2015-04-20 21:53 Hyasalia: 我IRC摸行吗
2015-04-20 21:54 Suzuya Jyuzo: 可以,
2015-04-20 21:54 Hyasalia: ACTION is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/664808 Miyamori Aoi & Yasuhara Ema & Sakaki Shizuka - Animetic Love Letter [Insane]]
2015-04-20 21:55 Hyasalia: 感觉挺不错的,只是打起来不是很舒服
2015-04-20 21:55 Hyasalia: 00:49:803 (7,1) - 这里感觉节奏不对
2015-04-20 21:55 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩,有什么地方不好的直接说
2015-04-20 21:55 Hyasalia: 你总体应该是跟vocal的吧
2015-04-20 21:56 Suzuya Jyuzo: 想跟鼓
2015-04-20 21:56 Suzuya Jyuzo: 但是好像跟乱了
2015-04-20 21:56 Hyasalia: 嗯,后面一些地方比较跟vocal
2015-04-20 21:56 Hyasalia: 00:49:803 (7,1) - 这里你可以试试3连
2015-04-20 21:57 Hyasalia: 因为这里断开来很不舒服
2015-04-20 21:57 Hyasalia: 或者试试把滑条换成两个note
2015-04-20 21:57 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦,但是3连会overmap,我放一起可以吗
2015-04-20 21:58 Hyasalia: 一些红线起符合vocal的三连还是可以被接受的吧
2015-04-20 21:59 Hyasalia: 等等,我再看了下
2015-04-20 21:59 Suzuya Jyuzo: 不是很清楚,我之前是放了3连,被说overmap,然后我发现好多地方都overmap
2015-04-20 21:59 Suzuya Jyuzo: 然后重新做了一遍图。。
2015-04-20 22:00 Hyasalia: 好吧,那么就先不要这样了
2015-04-20 22:00 Hyasalia: 如果你跟vocal的话,试试这里00:50:008起的1/1滑条
2015-04-20 22:01 Suzuya Jyuzo: 好像不错
2015-04-20 22:02 Hyasalia: 总感觉有点串轨。
2015-04-20 22:02 Hyasalia: 01:28:639 (4,5,6) - 然后这里
2015-04-20 22:02 Hyasalia: 这里flow不是很好
2015-04-20 22:03 Hyasalia: 这里从4的尾巴到5到6的头基本呈一个直角,这样打起来不太舒服
2015-04-20 22:03 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩,本来5是个1/4滑条,后来发现没鼓,给去了orz,
2015-04-20 22:04 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦
2015-04-20 22:04 Hyasalia: 试试锐角
2015-04-20 22:04 Hyasalia: 应该会更好一点
2015-04-20 22:04 Suzuya Jyuzo: 好
2015-04-20 22:05 Hyasalia: 01:57:406 (1,2,3,4) - 这里你用重复的滑条来表现vocal的重复性
2015-04-20 22:06 Hyasalia: 其实前后两组vocal的音调不太一样
2015-04-20 22:06 Hyasalia: 叠在一起感觉不是特别好
2015-04-20 22:06 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦
2015-04-20 22:07 Hyasalia: 试试分开一点
2015-04-20 22:07 Suzuya Jyuzo: 跟鼓的话要怎么样呢?
2015-04-20 22:07 Suzuya Jyuzo: 4个单点?
2015-04-20 22:08 Hyasalia: 不行,白线上是重鼓,红线上比较轻
2015-04-20 22:08 Hyasalia: 还是滑条比较好
2015-04-20 22:08 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦
2015-04-20 22:08 Suzuya Jyuzo: 我试着分开点
2015-04-20 22:09 Hyasalia: 02:00:693 (1,2,3,4,1) - 这里又跟vocal了
2015-04-20 22:09 Hyasalia: 空的几个红线上还是有音的
2015-04-20 22:10 Hyasalia: 02:05:625 (1,2) - 这里有点不好看,blanket也没做好
2015-04-20 22:10 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦
2015-04-20 22:11 Hyasalia: 02:31:721 (1) - 这里应该是个三连霸
2015-04-20 22:11 Hyasalia: 吧
2015-04-20 22:13 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩,这种地方有好几处,看来要改
2015-04-20 22:13 Hyasalia: 03:09:734 (1) - 这里大白线上应该没鼓吧
2015-04-20 22:15 Suzuya Jyuzo: 去掉换成1/1滑条好了
2015-04-20 22:15 Hyasalia: 恩
2015-04-20 22:15 Hyasalia: 04:02:337 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - 这里你想摆梗,但间距没注意
2015-04-20 22:16 Hyasalia: 1/2和1/4间距是一样的
2015-04-20 22:16 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦
2015-04-20 22:17 Suzuya Jyuzo: 后面的是有点帖太近了
2015-04-20 22:18 Hyasalia: 04:33:981 (1,3) - 这里两个滑条没对称,形状不一样,虽然没什么大碍
2015-04-20 22:20 Hyasalia: 04:00:693 (1,2,3,4) - 这里的梗,唔有点像星爷一张图里的摆法
2015-04-20 22:20 Suzuya Jyuzo: 好,我修一下
2015-04-20 22:21 Suzuya Jyuzo: 星爷图打多了- -
2015-04-20 22:21 Suzuya Jyuzo: 我是星爷NC粉
2015-04-20 22:21 Hyasalia: 啊,我也很喜欢星爷的图XD
2015-04-20 22:22 Suzuya Jyuzo: hhh
2015-04-20 22:24 Hyasalia: 01:15:899 (1,2,3,4,5) - 这里flow,456排到一条直线上去了
2015-04-20 22:24 Hyasalia: 打起来还是有点不舒服的。试试6往下移一点
2015-04-20 22:25 Suzuya Jyuzo: 额,有点强迫症
2015-04-20 22:25 Hyasalia: 直线flow出现的比较好
2015-04-20 22:26 Hyasalia: 比较少
2015-04-20 22:26 Hyasalia: 锐角和钝角用的比较多
2015-04-20 22:26 Suzuya Jyuzo: 哦,直线flow,从来没想过用好像。。。
2015-04-20 22:27 Hyasalia: 所以456这种一条直线上的还是尽量不要用
2015-04-20 22:27 Suzuya Jyuzo: 我问下,如果跟鼓的话 00:28:228 (4,5) - 这边这些单点全部要变成滑条吗?
2015-04-20 22:28 Hyasalia: 不用
2015-04-20 22:28 Suzuya Jyuzo: 恩,那我其他的NOTE也调一下好了
2015-04-20 22:28 Hyasalia: 恩,差不多就这样了

good luck
thanks :)
Shiranai
Helloooo from my queue
Some small sugestion from me,

[General]
  1. Your bckground is kinda low quality imo, maybe Ringating can help you improve the BG here t/191777&start=0
  2. You need to double check artist metadata,

    Source: http://www.amazon.co.jp/Animetic-Love-L ... B00PKTMZHM , http://www.kasi-time.com/item-73971.html
    Artist: 宮森あおい&安原絵麻&坂木しずか(cv.木村珠莉&佳村はるか&千菅春香)
    Romanised: Miyamori Aoi & Yasuhara Ema & Sasaki Shizuka (CV: Kimura Juri & Yoshimura Haruka & Chisuga Haruka)
  3. I think you should delete this on Tags: SHIROBAKO Miyamori Aoi Yasuhara Ema Sakaki Shizuka Animetic Love Letter not necessary needed, since those already on Astist, Title and Source
  4. Your purple combo color is too dark imo, maybe make it a bit brighter to fit the other colors
  5. Have you double check the timing? Idk it's a bit late 10ms for me haha XD maybe another timing recheck the timing will be great


[Insane]
  1. How about you re-name this diff into something else? it's quite poppular nowsaday to have custom diff name on marathon or app map
  2. 00:05:419 (5) - Too sudden to change the rhythm into 1/8, and yet it should be 1/4 snap instead 1/8 imo, maybe change the rhythm into triplet like this http://puu.sh/hrd81/178d49ce1d.jpg, http://puu.sh/hrd92/7f8af79c42.jpg
  3. 00:06:036 (3) - Maybe for a better readability that one can be moved to x:364 y:132. so it can make a perfect stack with 00:06:447 (5,6,7) - then you can also move this one to 00:06:241 (4) - x:248 y:60 so at the end the pattern looks like this http://puu.sh/hrdeW/c3ef636d66.jpg
  4. 00:12:817 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - Tbh there's no reason to spread the stream like that, because the music itself prety constant there
  5. 00:29:460 (3) - For a better readability, how about NC that one? because it stack completely with 00:28:639 (1) - and it's hard to tell the rhythm there
  6. 00:32:748 (3) - Same as above
  7. 00:39:426 (3,4) - Move to x:311 y:345? and stack better under 00:38:913 (2) -
  8. 01:06:241 (2) - Re-adjust the nodes? Second node is on x:256 y:158 and the tail node is on x:294 y:104 http://puu.sh/hrdNJ/5970f2950b.jpg
  9. 01:06:858 (2) - Move to x::440 y:84? so the whole slider stream is flow better http://puu.sh/hrdHg/1834c77365.jpg
  10. 01:19:597 (1) - NC? to indicate the transition music of the "love letter" lyric
  11. 01:58:228 (3) - For a better readability, how about NC that one? because it stack completely with 01:57:406 (1) - and it's hard to tell the rhythm there
  12. 02:18:981 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1) - Those overlap is looking not nice ;(
  13. 02:46:105 (5,6,7,8,9,10) - The stream looks so cramped, maybe it flow better if spread it more that stream like this http://puu.sh/hre6C/2e4a4863bc.jpg
  14. 02:55:659 (3,4,5,6) - Make that stream something like this 03:02:234 (3,4,5,6) - ? because you can make it neater
  15. 03:06:858 (2,3,4) - That stream is so big, compare to the other stream e.g. 03:06:036 (7,8,9) - maybe it'll better if you reduce the distance here 03:06:858 (2,3,4) -
  16. 03:16:104 (5,1) - Change the rhythm on them? because you overmap this 03:16:104 (5) - imo, maybe change the rhythm into something like this http://puu.sh/hremb/9b8c972f6f.jpg fit more with the drum sound imo
  17. 03:36:139 (1) - spinner should be end here 03:36:858 - imo and add circle here 03:37:063 - and here 03:37:269 - because those two is strong vocal and better if we click that while play, so change the rhythm into something like this http://puu.sh/hreud/aa7cc7edb0.jpg
  18. 04:16:926 (8,9,1) - Please reconsider that thing, I barely see this slider 04:17:132 (1) - because that slider (1) is covered under several notes 04:16:207 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - might hard to read while playing
  19. 04:20:693 (2) - Not snaped imo, and kinda overmap there, maybe change that into circle? something like this might good http://puu.sh/hreL5/5b98c8a090.jpg
  20. 04:32:748 (1,2) - Overmap imo, I think it should be snaped on 1/4 instead http://puu.sh/hreQ7/3528974221.jpg


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That's all my sugestion, feel free to re-think on it, I hope it help hihihi goodluck~
Topic Starter
Suzuya Jyuzo

Mako Sakata wrote:

Helloooo from my queue
Some small sugestion from me,

[General]
  1. Your bckground is kinda low quality imo, maybe Ringating can help you improve the BG here t/191777&start=0 Thank you for advice
  2. You need to double check artist metadata,

    Source: http://www.amazon.co.jp/Animetic-Love-L ... B00PKTMZHM , http://www.kasi-time.com/item-73971.html
    Artist: 宮森あおい&安原絵麻&坂木しずか(cv.木村珠莉&佳村はるか&千菅春香)
    Romanised: Miyamori Aoi & Yasuhara Ema & Sasaki Shizuka (CV: Kimura Juri & Yoshimura Haruka & Chisuga Haruka)
  3. I think you should delete this on Tags: SHIROBAKO Miyamori Aoi Yasuhara Ema Sakaki Shizuka Animetic Love Letter not necessary needed, since those already on Astist, Title and Source
  4. Your purple combo color is too dark imo, maybe make it a bit brighter to fit the other colors
  5. Have you double check the timing? Idk it's a bit late 10ms for me haha XD maybe another timing recheck the timing will be great
    Really? I'll check





[Insane]
  1. How about you re-name this diff into something else? it's quite poppular nowsaday to have custom diff name on marathon or app map I try to change,how about "Love Letter"?
  2. 00:05:419 (5) - Too sudden to change the rhythm into 1/8, and yet it should be 1/4 snap instead 1/8 imo, maybe change the rhythm into triplet like this http://puu.sh/hrd81/178d49ce1d.jpg, http://puu.sh/hrd92/7f8af79c42.jpg But this is 1/6 snap XD ,i put http://puu.sh/hri1E/39408dfdc6.jpg
  3. 00:06:036 (3) - Maybe for a better readability that one can be moved to x:364 y:132. so it can make a perfect stack with 00:06:447 (5,6,7) - then you can also move this one to 00:06:241 (4) - x:248 y:60 so at the end the pattern looks like this http://puu.sh/hrdeW/c3ef636d66.jpg
  4. 00:12:817 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - Tbh there's no reason to spread the stream like that, because the music itself prety constant there
    wait to be decided
  5. 00:29:460 (3) - For a better readability, how about NC that one? because it stack completely with 00:28:639 (1) - and it's hard to tell the rhythm there
  6. 00:32:748 (3) - Same as above
  7. 00:39:426 (3,4) - Move to x:311 y:345? and stack better under 00:38:913 (2) -
  8. 01:06:241 (2) - Re-adjust the nodes? Second node is on x:256 y:158 and the tail node is on x:294 y:104 http://puu.sh/hrdNJ/5970f2950b.jpg
  9. 01:06:858 (2) - Move to x::440 y:84? so the whole slider stream is flow better http://puu.sh/hrdHg/1834c77365.jpg
  10. 01:19:597 (1) - NC? to indicate the transition music of the "love letter" lyric
  11. 01:58:228 (3) - For a better readability, how about NC that one? because it stack completely with 01:57:406 (1) - and it's hard to tell the rhythm there
  12. 02:18:981 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1) - Those overlap is looking not nice ;( wait to be decided
  13. 02:46:105 (5,6,7,8,9,10) - The stream looks so cramped, maybe it flow better if spread it more that stream like this http://puu.sh/hre6C/2e4a4863bc.jpg
  14. 02:55:659 (3,4,5,6) - Make that stream something like this 03:02:234 (3,4,5,6) - ? because you can make it neater
  15. 03:06:858 (2,3,4) - That stream is so big, compare to the other stream e.g. 03:06:036 (7,8,9) - maybe it'll better if you reduce the distance here 03:06:858 (2,3,4) - wait to be decided
  16. 03:16:104 (5,1) - Change the rhythm on them? because you overmap this 03:16:104 (5) - imo, maybe change the rhythm into something like this http://puu.sh/hremb/9b8c972f6f.jpg fit more with the drum sound imo Same as 00:05:419 (5)
  17. 03:36:139 (1) - spinner should be end here 03:36:858 - imo and add circle here 03:37:063 - and here 03:37:269 - because those two is strong vocal and better if we click that while play, so change the rhythm into something like this http://puu.sh/hreud/aa7cc7edb0.jpg
  18. 04:16:926 (8,9,1) - Please reconsider that thing, I barely see this slider 04:17:132 (1) - because that slider (1) is covered under several notes 04:16:207 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - might hard to read while playing wait to be decided
  19. 04:20:693 (2) - Not snaped imo, and kinda overmap there, maybe change that into circle? something like this might good http://puu.sh/hreL5/5b98c8a090.jpg 04:20:693 (2) - have two 1/6 snap
  20. 04:32:748 (1,2) - Overmap imo, I think it should be snaped on 1/4 instead http://puu.sh/hreQ7/3528974221.jpg


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That's all my sugestion, feel free to re-think on it, I hope it help hihihi goodluck~
Thanks :)
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