Demetori - Yuuga ni Sakase, Sumizome no Sakura ~ Border of L · forum

Adol Christin

Joined October 2012

Adol Christin 2015-03-25T20:10:52+00:00

你好，这里是灌水狂魔Adol。随手水一发摸，见笑了。x)
Translation: Greeting. Here is newbie mapper Adol. Just tried my best, hope this can help a bit. x)

既然大家都是国人，那我就不客气地用英文了。(me run >.<)

Extra Stage Collab

Suggest you add the information in your front page to show which part for each mapper. This would provide convenience for other modders. (After the map ranked you can remove it. )
In my opinion the color of mappers' name in storyboard is so close to the background image.

[jonathanlfj]

00:11:824 (2) - Suggest to change the slider to this. Flow would be smoother.
SPOILER
00:04:967 (2) - Missing Normal whistle on the body?
01:53:995 (4) - I think this slider curves too much, looks not fine. What about this?
SPOILER

[captin1]

00:25:195 (3) - This slider curves too much. Comparing with 00:22:452 (1) - , 00:25:195 (3) - looks not that good imo.
00:25:195 (3) - , 00:26:738 (2) - tail, 00:29:652 (4) - head, 00:35:138 (3) - , 00:37:710 (2) - tail and 00:40:452 (2) - tail. Try adding additional whistle on these point (without removing clap), sounds nice. (My personal taste)
02:32:567 (5) - NC
02:40:452 (3) - Suggest you change this into 2 circles, would be better. Current slider tail covers the clap sound.
02:55:367 (1) - Due to the drum sound in the music, this 1/6 slider is overmapped. This slider makes the next circle really tricky. Change it to 1/3 slider please.
04:13:538 (3) - ctrl+g. There's no strong beat here, therefore a jump-back flow does not make good sense imo.

[RLC]

00:45:252 (5) - Missing whistle on the head.
01:01:367 (2) - ctrl+g, I don't think it's necessary to make the flow juggling here.
03:19:538 (3,6,9) - Extend these circles into 1/4 sliders, cuz guitar sound is in continuous 1/4 rhythm.
03:20:395 (1) - Whistle on the head.
03:25:024 (5) - Change the Soft addition into Auto. This hitsound should have been a default Normal whistle, right?
03:31:710 (1) - 03:33:938 (4) - Same.

[Giralda]

01:23:995 (1) - Remove the whistle on the head.
03:13:195 (4,5) - Suggest you not line them up. Looks better imo.
03:17:138 (3,4) - Move the NC from 4 to 3.
04:49:711 (1) - Normal whistle on the body?
04:52:452 (6) - Normal whistle?
04:56:052 (4,5,6,7) - I hear 5 hits of drum sound for 1/4 each, and the last one is downbeat. Therefore 5 1/4 circle would be better imo. Current triplet (4,5,6) starts with white tick and end with red tick.

[Nyquill]

01:29:138 (3,1) - Blanket
01:31:024 (1,3) - Blanket. To make it easier just stack 3 with 01:30:510 (4) -
01:36:852 (2) - head and 01:37:195 (4,5) - Suggest to add whistle on these points.
02:20:395 (1,2,3) - Line them up.
02:24:338 (1,2) - Blanket. (wtf so many nazi mod? me run >.<)

That's all my mod. The map is really smooth for me. Good luck~

Giralda

1,008 posts

Joined August 2012

Giralda 2015-03-27T12:27:00+00:00

VINXIS

VINXIS wrote:
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Giroldo
01:07:538 (5,1) - switch nc. since ur mapping with the guitar, might as well follow the comboing with th eguitar u feel
01:12:852 (6,1) - compared to the guitar I think using a circle instead and moving the slider one red tick to the right would sound better because it sounds awks like as if the slider end is on the end of the measure or smth lmao Not what I was looking to emphasize
01:18:510 (5,1) - same thign about hte nc
01:27:767 (5,6) - i almost broke here ajfgbsdjgsdjkgnsdjkgvmaklmfblndsgv; cud u ctrl+G the second slider or smth pl s That's Nyquill's pattern, not mines.
02:56:052 (1) - I'd say the SV change might cause misreads but it honestly shouldn't be an issu e lo l Not my issue. That one is captin's part.
03:10:795 (5,1) - aghhh do u rlly want that jump mm yes. slider leniency allow this slider to be hit normally and perfect fine.
04:42:682 (5) - i'd put this on the left of 04:42:511 (4) - so that the spacing between 04:41:996 (3,4) - and 04:42:682 (5,1) - is similar (not congruent so to s a y) not quite what I was going for here
04:55:024 (13) - replace with 1/4 slider ekekekek (srsly tho, imo that'd be nice and cool and it literally is the kick ur mapping too s o) I'd rather not do something that cause people to break and then suddenly find out I hid a 1/4 slider there so no.

Adol Christin

[Giralda]

01:23:995 (1) - Remove the whistle on the head.
03:13:195 (4,5) - Suggest you not line them up. Looks better imo. but they aren't
03:17:138 (3,4) - Move the NC from 4 to 3.
04:49:711 (1) - Normal whistle on the body?
04:52:452 (6) - Normal whistle?
04:56:052 (4,5,6,7) - I hear 5 hits of drum sound for 1/4 each, and the last one is downbeat. Therefore 5 1/4 circle would be better imo. Current triplet (4,5,6) starts with white tick and end with red tick. Uh that's not what I hear lol

No reply=fixed thanks
Fixed all from Raose

Part 1

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Part 2

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Part 3

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George

George 2015-03-31T20:18:35+00:00

---General---
I'm not really good at trying to mod fast and jumpy maps like this so I might miss things or not understand certain things about it
---Actual Mod---
01:13:195 (1,2) - Maybe add a circle between these or make it a short slider (idk what to do here or if there is anything to be done)
01:27:767 (5,6,1) - I think these would do better if they were spaced out more
01:48:681 (1) - I think this would look better if the slider border wasnt visible
02:11:652 (9,10) - This might look better as a triplet and a circle (idk if it really needs changed, I just dont like it)
03:19:367 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - I dont understand why you went to triplets here instead of continuing the simulation of a machine gun
05:51:338 - I think you can try ending the spinner here

Depths

681 posts

Joined January 2014

Depths 2015-04-01T03:42:11+00:00

random mod

00:45:595 (1) - stack the tail on 00:44:224 (2) -

01:02:567 (2) - make this into a 1/2 slider? it feels weird without anything there

01:13:195 (1,2) - I feel like this stack hinders the flow a bit maybe separate them a bit?

01:31:881 (2) - stack on head of 01:30:681 (5) -

02:24:852 (2) - stack the tail with 02:23:652 (2) -

02:27:081 (1,2,3,4) - flow here feels a little weird to me

02:32:567 (5) - I can here drum beats at the same time as the slider, I feel like those should be focused more

02:43:195 (5,6) - space these more to be consistent like 02:43:024 (4,5) -

04:21:424 (2) - blanket this with 04:20:910 (1) -

04:35:996 (5,1) - make into a slider?

05:14:224 (4) - you can make this blanket better

great map~

captin1

osu! Alumni

2,595 posts

Joined February 2011

captin1 2015-04-01T04:16:29+00:00

VINXIS wrote:
le map
captin of only 1 ship grill
00:29:138 (1,2,3) - ylol. idk having a triple at the start of a measure or starting at the big white tick instead of ending it sounds really eh. Doesn't sound justifiable either idkk (also slider end on a big white tick ughu) it is in the music, and I think it's fine actually since the white tick isn't a significant beat here
02:35:652 (2,3,4,5) - y doesn't sound justified imo lol they do play fine tho so again, it is in the music
02:41:652 (4) - ^
02:54:167 (5,6) - i feel like the flow is shouting for these to ctrl+g lol idk i'd disagree
02:55:595 (2) - O (couldnt u just make one repeat on the previous slider and make another slider that goes to the slider's end that is there right now to the circle or do u rlly want dat repeat consistency) I think what I have is the best way to do this gameplay wise
04:13:881 (4,1) - omg fullscreen jump tho cri evrytim hm, don't remember it being this large lol
04:17:652 (3,4,1) - le new kanshou no maternou (not that it's bad or anythign lol its g) uh
04:23:138 (3,4,5,1) - asgsfhasfhasfhasvfhascjhasc these jumps tho rip they fit

"Adol Christin"

[captin1]

00:25:195 (3) - This slider curves too much. Comparing with 00:22:452 (1) - , 00:25:195 (3) - looks not that good imo. stylistic choice, I like it as is
00:25:195 (3) - , 00:26:738 (2) - tail, 00:29:652 (4) - head, 00:35:138 (3) - , 00:37:710 (2) - tail and 00:40:452 (2) - tail. Try adding additional whistle on these point (without removing clap), sounds nice. (My personal taste) applied some of them
02:32:567 (5) - NC this isn't my part lol
02:40:452 (3) - Suggest you change this into 2 circles, would be better. Current slider tail covers the clap sound. alright
02:55:367 (1) - Due to the drum sound in the music, this 1/6 slider is overmapped. This slider makes the next circle really tricky. Change it to 1/3 slider please. this is definitely 1/6
04:13:538 (3) - ctrl+g. There's no strong beat here, therefore a jump-back flow does not make good sense imo. this is done more for the circular flow than the back and forth

"Its Depths"

02:43:195 (5,6) - space these more to be consistent like 02:43:024 (4,5) - intentional decrease in spacing for the effect

04:21:424 (2) - blanket this with 04:20:910 (1) - intentionally didn't blanket, it'd be clear if I wanted to

ty

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Giralda

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Giralda 2015-04-01T05:18:58+00:00

George

George wrote:
01:13:195 (1,2) - Maybe add a circle between these or make it a short slider (idk what to do here or if there is anything to be done) mmm probably not.

Its Depths

Its Depths wrote:
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01:13:195 (1,2) - I feel like this stack hinders the flow a bit maybe separate them a bit? this is done to emphasize the far placement of 01:13:538 (3) -
04:35:996 (5,1) - make into a slider? putting the drums in the background as priority here

jonathanlfj

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jonathanlfj 2015-04-01T07:03:58+00:00

VINXIS:
00:14:910 (3,4) - I prefer circles here since there is a triple drum sound in the background
02:11:652 (9,10) - sliders are cool man

Adol Christin:
00:04:967 (2) - a whistle doesnt really fit here

George:
02:11:652 (9,10) - prefer sliders here
05:51:338 - the white tick fits the whistle sound on the spinner better

everything else was fixed on my end, the sb names are only blocked in editor; its visible in both 3:4 and 16:9 playing mode. I made the names more visible though hope that helps readibility

will update once RLC makes his changes

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RLC 2015-04-01T13:35:09+00:00

replies

00:57:424 (4,5,6) - I think it's nicer this way D: (VINXIS)
01:02:738 - added note for consistency with previous similar pattern (self)
03:21:938 (3,4) - I think the current angle balances (4) well (VINXIS)
03:36:681 (2,3) - but these are parallel! (1 is just a reflection of 2) (VINXIS)
05:29:652 - b-but I did it more than once ;_; unless you're referring to the 05:29:995 (3,3) - thing? (VINXIS)
01:00:852 (1,2) - the current direction puts just the right amount of emphasis on 01:01:367 - for me (Adol Christin)

anything not mentioned was fixed (either as suggested or some other way)
thanks!

jonathanlfj

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jonathanlfj 2015-04-02T02:40:18+00:00

updated weeeee

Pho

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Pho 2015-04-03T09:40:50+00:00

Such professionalism.
Thanks for putting the names for the SB right where the timeline is so i have to look up in the design tab every time.

Bold: Fix quickly/unrankable issues
Purple: Questionable
Red: Highly recommend

[General]

I just post this in case somewhat needs metadata clarification later on. From the official website: http://www.kawachi.zaq.ne.jp/demetori/ :
SPOILER
I didn't know Nyquill was written with 3 l's.
Consider also adding the following tags: 'Tokunan 徳南 Kyuuhouji 九宝時 collab Sinen ni Nozomu ga Gotoshi'
Also, shouldn't 西行寺幽々子 have a whitespace between the two names? (meaning: 西行寺幽々子)
You still might wanna someone check the tags again, i'm no adept to japanese language.

[lfj]

02:04:967 (5,6) - Pretty optional, but Ctrl+g'ing these would be more consistent to 02:04:624 (4) - as both sliders would then follow the same notes on the e-guitar.
05:13:881 (3) - Curve this slightly more.

[captin]

02:41:652 (4) - Trifle, but moving the revers-earrow up would make for a better flow transition between 02:41:310 (3,4) -
02:53:995 (4,5) - idk, this feels a bit trolly to be honest lol. Consider ctrl+g'ing 4:
SPOILER
04:31:881 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - The following rhythm seems more plausible to me as it follows percussions better: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2966970
You decide.
04:34:024 (3) - This plays pretty awkward imo, backslider on a blue tick ugh. It'd be nice if you could change this up a bit:
SPOILER

[Giralda]

02:58:624 - The gap feels a bit disruptive here considering the melody is continuing. You could map gap out or consider 02:58:110 (4,5) - merging this into a slider for a smoother play (I prefer the latter).
It'd synergize really well with 03:00:852 (3) - and 03:03:595 (4) - too.
03:04:109 (5) - Clap.
03:07:024 - to 03:15:252 - It'd be nice if you could recheck this section again. There are a lot of triples by the drum clearly audible in the track which you seem to have missed out on purpose.
Is there any reason why you had to leave all out? You don't have to map them all, but some would be really neat at this part imo.
03:17:652 (8) - Just an idea, but maybe use an extended slider to follow the e-guitar and make for a more fluid transition to RLC's part.
http://puu.sh/gZPXS/3e545dcfe2.jpg
04:37:025 (5,6,1) - Kinda odd how you give 04:37:368 (1) - a stronger emphasis than 04:37:196 (6) - although the latter is more dominant. Balance out the distances a bit.
04:44:652 - 04:48:081 - 04:56:310 - Missed notable beats again. ;-;

[RLC]
Give the most intense part to RLC allright.

03:26:224 (1) - Could 1/4 slider here.
03:34:195 (6) - This combo in general sounded so overmapped on first glance lol. I guess it's fine, only mentioned note sounds additional.
03:36:510 (1) - Maybe push this up slightly, it feels slightly overemphasized.
03:38:567 (1,2,3) - This is somewhat tricky and confusing since you suddenly jump into a 1/3 slider section after a heavy 1/4 beat-oriented section. Might give players some time to reorientate and switch this up with 2 backsliders instead.
05:27:852 - How about setting a beat here, this sounds pretty noticeable to me.

[Nyquill]

01:41:995 (1,2,3) - Maybe preference, but these sliders look somewhat awkward to me and the flow is not the most optimal one either.
Their shape don't seem to really fit the overall image of this set imo, just a suggestion from me here:
SPOILER
01:48:681 (1) - I'm a bit disappointed that you didn't map out this section as the drums are pretty noticeable. Setting a break here is fine, but considering the next section is already slow-paced, it seems like a better decision to me to map this out.
SPOILER
Up to you. If not, consider this: The 'bulge' of this slider looks somewhat imbalanced, might wanna fix this up a bit:
SPOILER
02:17:652 (1,2,4) - This looks like unnecessary overlap to me, scale 02:18:167 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - this pattern up a little bit to avoid it.
02:25:366 (5) - Change this up with 2 circles instead to avoid offbeat slider.
02:20:052 (8) - Consider to change this into a slider instead, there's a weak beat at the next red tick to follow.
02:28:110 (5,6) - This feels slightly over the top, i don't think it need that much emphasis even w3ith the drumclap in the track. Might decrease it a bit.
02:32:567 (5) - Consider doing this for the drums:
SPOILER
03:45:938 (2) - 03:56:910 (2) - optional, but backslider instead? There's a beat to cover at the blue ticks too.
03:58:795 (4) - Consider cropping this by 1/4 beat and set a circle on it's current end, extended slider feels bad here since the e-guitar chord already ends at 03:58:967 -
04:00:338 (7) - I have a feeling this is snapped wrong. Starting at 04:00:510 - , this is the point where the rhythm changes to 1/3 beats already, so snapping it on a red tick seems not right as there is no clear beat in the track fitting here.
I don't think it's a good idea to follow the e-guitar here anyway but orz Might be acceptable.

Not much wrong here, this looks pretty fine already.
I will come back later this day or tomorrow to check NC placement and hitsounding again. Good luck

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Nyquill 2015-04-03T17:30:11+00:00

http://puu.sh/h0dfa/97cd6f9808.osu

captin1

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captin1 2015-04-03T17:53:37+00:00

Pho wrote:
[captin]
02:41:652 (4) - Trifle, but moving the revers-earrow up would make for a better flow transition between 02:41:310 (3,4) - I think it's fine as is
02:53:995 (4,5) - idk, this feels a bit trolly to be honest lol. Consider ctrl+g'ing 4: hmm don't see what's wrong with it as is, and to me what you have would feel harder to play
SPOILER
04:31:881 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - The following rhythm seems more plausible to me as it follows percussions better: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2966970
You decide. no thanks, not hearing a note on the blue tick you filled in anyways
04:34:024 (3) - This plays pretty awkward imo, backslider on a blue tick ugh. It'd be nice if you could change this up a bit: jonny can you change to something like http://puu.sh/h0evo.jpg? not worth posting code for something this minor
SPOILER

thanks!

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RLC 2015-04-03T19:52:10+00:00

a

03:26:224 (1) - I think it's "sharper" as a single note, if that makes sense
03:34:195 (6) - i'll leave it, it plays nice with the guitar effect
03:38:567 - I originally tried that, but the sudden halt that 1-repeats cause just felt weird there to me. I think it should be fine, since it's all sliders (yay leniency)

others changed; thanks!

http://a.pomf.se/imcvjm.zip contains my 2nd and 3rd parts (no changes in 1st)

Nyquill

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Nyquill 2015-04-04T18:11:36+00:00

oh yeah I did everything please review

jonathanlfj

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jonathanlfj 2015-04-06T02:14:11+00:00

02:04:967 (5,6) - i want to retain the circular flow here

everything else is fixed, i didnt include "collab" into tags since its already part of the diff name and there is only one diff

updated, waiting on Giralda since he is a little busy irl

Giralda

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Giralda 2015-04-25T23:41:24+00:00

Tried my best to do take every suggestion in some way wherever possible.

Wasn't able to properly hear 04:48:081 and 04:56:310 so I decided to not go along with it.

Part 2

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239,225,188738,1,8,0:0:0:0:
189,52,188910,2,0,P|264:11|339:55,1,180,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
356,255,189424,1,8,0:0:0:0:
262,99,189595,1,2,0:0:0:0:
380,127,189766,6,0,L|472:119,1,90
238,225,190109,2,0,L|146:217,1,90,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
23,172,190451,1,0,0:0:0:0:
65,366,190624,1,0,0:0:0:0:
141,303,190795,1,8,0:0:0:0:
23,172,190967,6,0,L|12:82,2,90,2|0|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
80,235,191481,1,8,0:0:0:0:
137,167,191652,2,0,P|208:116|290:143,1,180,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
370,238,192167,2,0,L|380:327,1,90,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
448,128,192510,6,0,L|458:39,1,90
239,207,192852,1,8,0:0:0:0:
342,155,193024,1,2,0:0:0:0:
185,61,193195,1,0,0:0:0:0:
239,207,193367,2,0,P|250:250|259:294,1,90,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
153,328,193710,1,2,0:0:0:0:
68,235,193881,6,0,P|77:190|88:147,1,90
185,61,194224,2,0,L|276:51,1,90,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
92,47,194567,1,0,0:0:0:0:
349,114,194738,1,0,0:0:0:0:
212,179,194910,2,0,L|222:268,1,90,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
434,216,195252,5,4,0:0:0:0:
316,206,195424,1,0,0:0:0:0:
311,322,195595,1,8,0:0:0:0:
428,330,195767,1,2,0:0:0:0:
203,196,195938,5,0,0:0:0:0:
123,285,196110,1,0,0:0:0:0:
212,358,196281,1,8,0:0:0:0:
289,271,196452,1,2,0:0:0:0:
289,271,196538,1,0,0:0:0:0:
289,271,196624,1,2,0:0:0:0:
270,121,196795,1,0,0:0:0:0:
178,300,196967,5,8,0:0:0:0:
195,297,197052,1,0,0:0:0:0:
212,295,197138,1,0,0:0:0:0:
19,344,197310,1,8,0:3:0:0:
48,324,197395,1,0,0:0:0:0:
62,289,197480,1,0,0:0:0:0:
63,252,197566,1,0,0:0:0:0:
52,222,197652,2,0,B|26:186|26:186|16:146|32:96,1,135

Part 3

297,178,274624,6,0,B|266:198|219:177|219:177|180:198|180:198|143:169|94:188,1,215.999993408203,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
161,301,275138,2,0,P|214:295|257:264,1,107.999996704102,10|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
454,351,275481,1,0,0:0:0:0:
389,138,275652,2,0,L|375:245,1,107.999996704102,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
202,167,275995,2,0,B|118:174|102:67|9:93,1,215.999993408203,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
196,56,276511,2,0,L|306:46,1,107.999996704102,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
452,117,276853,1,0,0:0:0:0:
410,257,277025,1,2,0:0:0:0:
295,136,277196,1,8,0:0:0:0:
490,206,277368,5,0,0:0:0:0:
375,346,277539,2,2,P|316:262|369:174,1,215.999993408203,2|10,0:1|0:1,0:1:0:0:
193,302,278053,1,0,0:0:0:0:
193,302,278139,1,0,0:0:0:0:
193,302,278225,2,0,L|81:290,1,107.999996704102,2|2,0:1|0:0,0:0:0:0:
56,178,278568,1,8,0:0:0:0:
141,55,278739,1,2,0:1:0:0:
238,156,278911,6,0,P|290:169|344:173,1,107.999996704102
479,58,279253,2,0,P|425:61|372:75,1,107.999996704102,10|0,2:1|0:0,0:0:0:0:
193,302,279596,1,8,0:0:0:0:
141,55,279768,1,4,0:0:0:0:
141,55,280111,6,0,L|157:271,1,215.999993408203,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
357,262,280625,1,8,0:0:0:0:
264,340,280796,1,2,0:0:0:0:
254,156,280968,1,0,0:0:0:0:
427,213,281139,2,0,P|440:265|423:316,1,107.999996704102,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
254,156,281482,1,0,0:0:0:0:
343,85,281653,5,0,0:0:0:0:
357,262,281825,1,0,0:0:0:0:
238,304,281996,2,0,B|162:299|162:299|117:253|117:253|41:246,1,215.999993408203,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
62,84,282511,1,2,0:0:0:0:
128,162,282682,1,8,0:0:0:0:
203,78,282853,6,0,L|418:61,1,215.999993408203,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
497,125,283368,1,8,0:0:0:0:
375,275,283539,1,0,0:0:0:0:
333,172,283711,1,8,0:0:0:0:
493,169,283882,5,8,0:0:0:0:
289,248,284053,1,8,0:0:0:0:
237,135,284225,1,4,0:0:0:0:
479,219,284396,5,0,0:0:0:0:
499,256,284482,1,0,0:0:0:0:
490,298,284568,1,0,0:0:0:0:
460,328,284652,1,0,0:0:0:0:
416,333,284739,2,0,L|297:325,1,107.999996704102
47,309,285082,1,8,0:0:0:0:
141,181,285253,1,8,0:0:0:0:
29,192,285425,1,8,0:0:0:0:
154,298,285596,6,0,P|261:287|369:280,1,215.999993408203,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
469,206,286111,2,0,P|484:257|489:311,1,107.999996704102,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
272,188,286453,1,0,0:0:0:0:
400,104,286625,1,2,0:0:0:0:
266,36,286796,1,8,0:0:0:0:
423,212,286968,5,2,0:0:0:0:
459,63,287138,1,0,0:0:0:0:
314,104,287311,1,0,0:0:0:0:
417,315,287481,2,0,P|433:264|422:211,1,107.999996704102,10|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
272,188,287825,2,0,L|165:181,1,107.999996704102,0|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
231,287,288168,1,8,0:0:0:0:
314,104,288339,1,0,0:0:0:0:
381,239,288511,6,2,P|396:290|405:343,1,107.999996704102,2|0,0:1|0:1,0:1:0:0:
231,287,288853,2,0,P|221:233|206:182,1,107.999996704102,10|0,0:1|0:0,0:0:0:0:
460,47,289196,2,2,P|444:98|435:151,1,107.999996704102,2|2,2:1|2:1,2:1:0:0:
299,329,289539,1,10,0:1:0:0:
229,77,289711,6,0,P|313:21|398:77,1,215.999993408203,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
132,157,290225,2,2,L|119:49,1,107.999996704102,10|2,0:1|0:0,0:0:0:0:
453,186,290568,1,0,0:0:0:0:
284,233,290739,1,0,0:0:0:0:
314,116,290911,1,8,0:0:0:0:
420,334,291082,6,2,P|313:325|197:319,1,215.999993408203,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:1:0:0:
98,248,291596,2,0,P|82:299|74:353,1,107.999996704102,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
284,233,291939,1,0,0:0:0:0:
205,319,292111,1,2,0:1:0:0:
95,148,292282,1,8,0:0:0:0:
183,223,292452,2,0,L|193:115,1,107.999996704102,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
378,181,292796,6,0,L|389:293,1,107.999996704102,0|10,0:0|0:1,0:0:0:0:
284,233,293139,1,0,0:0:0:0:
481,130,293311,2,0,L|492:242,1,107.999996704102,2|2,0:0|0:1,0:0:0:0:
396,112,293653,1,10,0:0:0:0:
342,297,293824,1,4,0:0:0:0:
368,264,293910,1,0,0:0:0:0:
372,221,293995,5,0,0:0:0:0:
358,181,294081,1,0,0:0:0:0:
328,147,294167,1,0,0:0:0:0:
319,104,294253,1,0,0:0:0:0:
335,64,294338,1,0,0:0:0:0:
370,39,294424,1,0,0:0:0:0:
414,38,294510,1,0,0:0:0:0:
451,58,294595,1,0,0:0:0:0:
471,96,294681,1,0,0:0:0:0:
467,139,294767,1,0,0:0:0:0:
442,174,294852,1,0,0:0:0:0:
401,190,294938,1,0,0:0:0:0:
358,181,295024,1,0,0:0:0:0:
214,70,295195,6,2,B|206:125|206:125|225:165|225:165|205:199|205:199|229:237|216:272,1,215.999993408203,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:1:0:0:
106,199,295710,1,0,0:0:0:0:
324,248,295881,1,0,0:0:0:0:
127,371,296052,1,0,0:0:0:0:
96,339,296138,1,0,0:0:0:0:
98,295,296224,1,0,0:0:0:0:
131,267,296310,1,0,0:0:0:0:
173,274,296395,2,0,B|226:287|226:287|279:287|323:247,1,161.999995056153,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

There were no mods for Part 1. My apologies for the long delay.

Pho

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Pho 2015-04-27T22:23:43+00:00

~~Placeholding, recheck will come within 24 48 hours. Sry, something went inbetween, so i can check tomorrow first.~~

Okay, rechecking HS and NC and some smaller issues i noticed. Just suggestions, nothing too noteworthy.

Bold: Fix quickly/unrankable issues
Purple: Questionable
Red: Highly recommend

[NC & Hitsound]

Switchable NCs: 01:07:538 (5,1) - 01:18:510 (5,1) - 02:57:252 (4,1) - 03:51:938 (1,2) - 04:37:367 (1,2) - 04:46:968 (1,2) - 04:52:452 (6,1) -
00:42:338 (5,6) - Set normalwhistle on 6 instead sincer this is the stronger guitar chord to follow.
00:51:081 (5,1) - Personal preference, but i'd set whistle on 1 instead of 5's tail, sounds more natural to me.
Also, switch NC here.
00:59:824 (2) - Would actually set a whistle here as well, again personal preference, but it sounds more stable to me
01:06:338 - Giralda: It's odd how normal-whistles just became way more sparse in this section when you compare it to the previous section, even though pace and atmosphere of the song are still tense.
I don't know inhowfar this is a quality issue (if even), but it annoys me a bit. Might be good if you could check this out and set more to fit the e-guitar better.
01:45:938 (5) - NC
02:22:452 (8) - Optional, but would increase SV slightly (~1.0xSV) and set a NC here.
02:41:824 - Normalwhistle here for the e-guitar maybe.
03:01:195 - Maybe whistle/finish for the cymbal as well
03:07:366 (2) - Clap. Also 03:07:709 (4,1,2,3,1,2,3) - Weird NCing, the NCs start on the weakest eguitar riffs which is kinda odd, how about:
http://puu.sh/hvu3W/8f2981f537.jpg
03:24:852 (4) - Normalwhistle? And maybe switch with one at 03:25:538 (3) - too for consistency.
03:58:795 (4) - Whistle on tail instead of head.
04:00:338 (7,1) - Would blanket. Also overlap with 04:00:338 (7,2) - is not very nice.
04:35:995 (5) - NC
04:44:053 (2,3) - Considering 3 has a strong cymbal beat, increasing the spacing here would be plausible to me.
04:50:568 (3,4) - Normalwhistles here would be good for the eguitar.

That's all I guess. Call me back~

RLC

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RLC 2015-05-02T01:52:10+00:00

response

00:51:424 - kept, since i think a soft whistle on 1 sounds nicer D: NC is because i want 00:51:424 (1,2) - to be separated from (5)
00:59:824 - no whistle, because i want to distinguish it from 00:57:081 - , where the whistle matches the guitar most clearly
03:24:852 (4) - sure, sounds good

thank you!

http://a.pomf.se/adparv.zip (contains my 2nd part only)

jonathanlfj

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jonathanlfj 2015-05-02T03:53:05+00:00

captin gave me permission to change all his parts, and Nyquill and Giralda came to my house and fixed stuff in person lol

all updated

Pho

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Pho 2015-05-02T21:47:05+00:00

Let's push this forward. #1

To the next BN: Have a second look at the metadata again, just in case.
From the official website: http://www.kawachi.zaq.ne.jp/demetori/ :

SPOILER

UnderminE

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UnderminE 2015-05-03T13:12:42+00:00

I love how you always map my most favourite Demetori songs such as Eastern Dream, Heartfelt Fancy and this <3 Gj gj

And I'd be happier if this 01:47:310 (1) - were symmetric <__<

pishifat

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pishifat 2015-05-05T04:01:02+00:00

so i talked ingame with jonathan and fixed a couple snapping things through... methods. offset is the same so not a big deal

01:27:252 (2,3,4) - this one still needs to be snapped in 1/6 tho
02:24:338 (5) - new combo makes sense
03:07:024 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - i really can't tell what these new combos are supposed to be emphasizing. the strongest instrument that would support combospam was emphasized at 03:09:766 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3) - 03:15:252 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - yet the music is the same here and combos are not on the places with the empahsisisisisisissfisdiffjdiod. 03:07:709 (2) - 03:08:223 (2) - 03:08:910 (3) - would be points of emphasis
03:17:310 (4,5,6,7,8) - consistent spacing is nice
03:38:567 (1,2) - hitsounding to the drums (which are 1/4) while mapping the guitar (1/3) makes it sound like things are unsnapped. either map the drums or don't hitsound them.
03:22:452 (4,1,2) - would make more sense combod as 4,5,1 instead of 4,1,2. right now it's like there's emphasis on the blue tick cuz that's where the new combo is yeayeayea
03:37:195 (1,2,3) - movement between these is kinda weird. it's linear so it requires momentum control which makes it a lot harder than movement like 03:37:710 (3,4,1) - at a sharper angle. putting 2 below 1 or something would feel a lot better imo
03:59:138 (1) - solame:(

also this
it doesnt matter but it's there

jonathanlfj

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jonathanlfj 2015-05-05T04:40:19+00:00

updated with new mp3

why does no one ever mod my part

captin1

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captin1 2015-05-05T04:41:36+00:00

pishi is moe

RLC

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RLC 2015-05-05T13:00:19+00:00

http://a.pomf.se/xbnwgf.zip (contains second part only)

fixed all except 03:37:195 (1,2,3) - , since the "stop" there is intentional (03:38:052 (4,1) - is angled differently because of the effect in the guitar)

tyy

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Nyquill 2015-05-05T19:53:36+00:00

cock
cock for giralda too

http://puu.sh/hCEII/5be1190485.rar

Giralda: "The NCing at 03:07:024 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2) - was a suggestion made by Pho. Not sure which one I should follow so I think that should be sorted out by the two of you instead (in Nyquill's words, "fight over it" lel)"; Jonny, only my part 2 got changed and nothing else.

jonathanlfj

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jonathanlfj 2015-05-05T21:51:35+00:00

updated, also set 1500ms audio leadin to avoid starting the map to suddenly

i dont have the original file for the sb names so lets just pretend the cut doesnt exist

pishifat

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pishifat 2015-05-06T18:58:55+00:00

so romanized title should be Yuuga ni Sakase, Sumizome no Sakura ~ Border of Life

t/170717/start=60
t/217300
http://puu.sh/hDN34/741b52f4ea.png

if there's some reason to keep the english title then tell

jonathanlfj

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jonathanlfj 2015-05-06T21:46:06+00:00

changed the title, old title is moved into tags

pishifat

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pishifat 2015-05-06T21:52:29+00:00

ttttttttttttttttttttttt

CSLM

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CSLM 2015-05-07T02:30:56+00:00

hype hype hype

Nakano Itsuki

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Nakano Itsuki 2015-05-07T08:04:52+00:00

CSLM wrote:
hype hype hype

Rapthorn

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Rapthorn 2015-05-07T22:46:15+00:00

Been looking forward to this, hype

Pho

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Pho 2015-05-08T22:39:46+00:00

1/6 Snaps are my damnation orz. Some things to reconsider:

SPOILER

Giralda:

01:19:538 (4,5) - This is a bit underwhelming, the beat at 5 is pretty strong, and keeping the spacing low just to make it fit to the structure doesn't feel that good.
03:17:310 (4,5,6,7) - Just saying what pishi said, DS is a bit wonky still.
04:54:252 - Just noticed that this beat in particular is overmapped, putting it out to stick better to the percussions would be neat.

Nyquill:
01:44:395 (4,1) - I can't remember, but weren't these stacked before? The pattern looks kinda untidy at the moment.

Giralda

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Giralda 2015-05-09T22:05:39+00:00

http://puu.sh/hHuQv/357f28dc65.zip

jonathanlfj

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jonathanlfj 2015-05-09T23:25:33+00:00

01:44:395 (4,1) - Nyquill said this was never stacked to begin with so it should be fine as-is

Updated

Pho

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Pho 2015-05-09T23:44:35+00:00

Fixed a HS.

Blub #2

Aka

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Aka 2015-05-11T01:15:52+00:00

h-hi be gentle

giralda's?
・01:27:481 (3,4,5) - messed up in this part for some reason.. i'd add nc on 4, feeling like these sliders will get more players' attention without those followpoints and its also a nice ~refreshing~ part in music sooo > >

nyquill's
・01:36:167 (4,1) - tbh more ..straight path into slider would play more enjoyable and smoother..

SPOILER

・01:44:052 (3,4,1) - compared to all other patterns this one is noticeably cramped and um, doesnt really look neat, i'd like to agree with pho. maybe smth like this instead

SPOILER

・02:22:452 (1,2,3) - 1/3 was pretty uneхpectable for me during the testplay.. either mark 2 and 3 with nc or make even bigger spacing between those circles (for eх. moving 02:22:452 (1,3) - to ~277|169 )?

captin's
・02:53:138 (7,1) - misread those as 1/2 uh.. 7 felt too far away to get that this was 1/4. slightly moving it up could work ):

SPOILER

・~~04:18:681 (2,4) - grrr~~

bum

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Nyquill 2015-05-11T02:30:28+00:00

I decided to take a page out of jonathan's book and add a bunch of triangles.

[HitObjects]
328,133,87767,2,0,L|415:155,1,90,12|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
479,95,88024,2,0,L|391:73,1,90,12|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
352,224,88281,6,0,B|284:208|284:208|248:172|248:172|128:140,1,198.000006042481,4|8,0:0|2:2,0:0:0:0:
0,324,88795,2,0,L|120:364,1,99.0000030212403,0|2,2:0|2:2,0:0:0:0:
208,260,89138,1,2,1:2:0:0:
108,176,89310,1,8,0:0:0:0:
112,320,89481,6,0,B|180:340|180:340|224:356|284:336|312:264,1,198.000006042481
488,256,89995,2,0,P|504:320|496:360,1,99.0000030212403,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
372,228,90338,1,2,1:2:0:0:
392,128,90510,1,2,1:2:0:0:
492,36,90681,1,8,0:0:0:0:
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everything else was fixed i think, updated

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