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AIR
1,577 posts
Joined November 2012
AIR

salinqi wrote:

Hi M4M 0 0新手渣摸，见谅;w;


[AIR]
01:49:869 (5) - 加个NC分梗？fixed
01:56:329 (1,2,3) - ds突然太大= =可怕 这个地方的还是先用小ds吧fixed
02:06:828 (6) - 还是把6放得和5和7近一点吧fixed
02:18:710 (2,3,4) - ds突然太小有吗
01:38:794 (3) - 01:40:639 (3) - 01:43:639 (2) - 像这种 很多note前后ds不等 不知道该不该摸…… 感觉非跳的常规部分ds相同好看一些0 0也不算太跳吧，毕竟这个bpm

Mio_chan wrote:

[AIR’s part]

01:43:408 (1,2) – 这个跳太直了，三角一点 ? 像这样 fixed
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01:48:023 (5,6,7,8) – 超难读，因为音乐在用电子音乐常用的 drum fill ，全部用 1/4 滑条较适合音乐fixed

01:48:946 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5) – 我觉得这里用 1/8 也不过份，但真的太少 notes 了这里 毕竟慢嘛

01:56:675 (2,3) – 突然在 1/4 用这么大的 spacing 怪怪的fixed

02:06:828 (6) – stack 在 (7) 上?fixed

02:08:789 (5) – 像这样 ?fixed
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02:49:629 (4,5) – 转做 1/4 slider?fixed

02:56:320 (1) – 有点奇怪 ... 突然这么远fixed

CoLouRed GlaZeE wrote:

AIR part

[*]02:42:015 (4,5,6,7,1) - 这里不应该隔开的啊见鬼，完全没有记忆
[*]03:13:740 - 这里还有音的 放个notefixed

Binguo wrote:

我的天哪 吓尿 羡慕交际花

00:23:574 (1) - 这个和前面00:22:651 (5) - 一比较的话也太近了
00:26:112 (1) - 为什么不直接重叠呢 这样看起来也更加整洁
00:36:957 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1) - 这一段太无聊了 想办法变一下
01:00:030 (3,4) - 分别CTRL+G
01:48:946 (1) - 有些太远了吧fixed
02:55:397 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 没看懂为什么要缩小间距fixed
04:49:841 (1,1) - 这个应该放远一点吧？
06:10:137 (5,6,7,8) - 这个歪了？
06:13:136 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - 这个多边形也是的 很明显
膜拜orz

yf_bmp wrote:

[AIR]
某些滑条好做作 说实话我觉得并不很适合放在这种曲子里 嗯嗯，做作
02:14:096 (6,7,8) - 这里不合适fixed
03:10:856 (2,3,4,5,6,7,1) - 等距吧fixed

GL
update http://puu.sh/qGKD1/53ca296b70.rar
Adol Christin
875 posts
Joined October 2012
Adol Christin

AIR wrote:

update http://puu.sh/qGKD1/53ca296b70.rar
失踪人口回归系列
Misure
951 posts
Joined September 2012
Misure
m4m来的啊哈
如果你们是DJ
[General]
  1. diff名首字母不大写？或者这diif名不如就叫Collab DJ 233
  2. 加点audio leadin?
  3. 讲道理OD8就已经挺高了 尤其低BPM 没必要8.2吧
[collab]
  • blueloniess:
  1. 00:01:193 (4,5) - 这里拉的很远00:01:424 (5,1) - 又突然变近感觉不是很合适
  2. 00:04:654 (5,6,1) - ^
  3. 00:07:423 - 00:09:269 - NC 00:08:346 - 取消NC 或者说这里排列分组就错了吧
  4. 00:13:422 (3,4) - NC没了距离也拉进 有点势头突然变弱的感觉 不太合适吧
  5. 00:14:806 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4) - 这组NC配置和前面那里一样 好像不太对
  6. 后面这NC也看不太懂...个人感觉这种节奏长白线一组总是没错的
  7. 00:36:957 (5,6) - 节奏互换？按照你前面那个滑条的下法这里滑条首尾压vocal才是比较正确的吧 而且你现在这个6的头也没压到重音 打着很奇怪 顺便后面NC哪里去了orz
  8. 01:13:874 - 后面这部分强行漏鼓点我感觉很不好啊（而且也漏vocal）
  9. 03:41:429 (9,1,1) - ...蜜汁NC
  10. 主要问题一个是NC配置 也就是排列分组吧 就不要整串排列揉在一起 用NC来帮助玩家明确打击分组玩起来感觉会好很多
    然后是一个四分拍鼓点的问题 现在感觉是想到哪就做到哪 有的五连跟 有的就不跟 打起来没有固定的节奏 有的时候就感觉比较奇怪 打过之后也没啥感觉这就不太好 再有一个就是间距变化 现在感觉有点随机...间距变化总归是要合曲的

    AIR:
  11. 01:47:792 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - 这个节奏有点微妙...
  12. 02:18:710 (2,3,4) - 大间距要玩就玩到底啊11 这里突然又变小不合适吧
  13. 02:42:015 (4,5,6,7,1) - ？？？突然出来个这么个吓人的...

    liangv587:
  14. 04:47:995 (1) - 接前面的话这个ctrl+G? 现在有点突然
感觉还需要磨一磨
总之Good luck :)
cjn1508
37 posts
Joined April 2015
cjn1508
00:37:649 (7,8,9) - 这个三连有点奇怪
00:39:034 (13,14) - 可以弄成短滑条
02:20:325 (1,2) - 大跳好像长了点
02:48:937 (1,2,3) - 挨近一点
04:19:615 (6) - 与连打重合 且间距较近
05:54:216 (6) - 改成单点
05:56:062 (7) - 改成单点
05:59:753 (8) - 单点

ok
blueloniess
364 posts
Joined February 2014
Topic Starter
blueloniess

Misure wrote:

m4m来的啊哈
如果你们是DJ
[General]
  1. diff名首字母不大写？或者这diif名不如就叫Collab DJ 233
  2. 加点audio leadin?打图的时候并没有感觉要加
  3. 讲道理OD8就已经挺高了 尤其低BPM 没必要8.2吧pp map XD
[collab]
  • blueloniess:
  1. 00:01:193 (4,5) - 这里拉的很远00:01:424 (5,1) - 又突然变近感觉不是很合适没有吧,这些跳基本都是等距的呢
  2. 00:04:654 (5,6,1) - ^
  3. 00:07:423 - 00:09:269 - NC 00:08:346 - 取消NC 或者说这里排列分组就错了吧?没怎么看懂,不过我还是改了一下NC
  4. 00:13:422 (3,4) - NC没了距离也拉进 有点势头突然变弱的感觉 不太合适吧没位置放了orz
  5. 00:14:806 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4) - 这组NC配置和前面那里一样 好像不太对
  6. 后面这NC也看不太懂...个人感觉这种节奏长白线一组总是没错的
  7. 00:36:957 (5,6) - 节奏互换？按照你前面那个滑条的下法这里滑条首尾压vocal才是比较正确的吧 而且你现在这个6的头也没压到重音 打着很奇怪 顺便后面NC哪里去了orz这里的确是换了一下下节奏,后面的就全部跟鼓点了,因此还是改了一些
  8. 01:13:874 - 后面这部分强行漏鼓点我感觉很不好啊（而且也漏vocal） 这里打算重新起头,因此转盘故意停在前面,算是留一点反应的时间
  9. 03:41:429 (9,1,1) - ...蜜汁NCfixed
  10. 主要问题一个是NC配置 也就是排列分组吧 就不要整串排列揉在一起 用NC来帮助玩家明确打击分组玩起来感觉会好很多
    然后是一个四分拍鼓点的问题 现在感觉是想到哪就做到哪 有的五连跟 有的就不跟 打起来没有固定的节奏 有的时候就感觉比较奇怪 打过之后也没啥感觉这就不太好 再有一个就是间距变化 现在感觉有点随机...间距变化总归是要合曲的

    AIR:
  11. 01:47:792 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - 这个节奏有点微妙...听起来还是没啥问题的感觉...
  12. 02:18:710 (2,3,4) - 大间距要玩就玩到底啊11 这里突然又变小不合适吧这里想给人一种收缩的感觉
  13. 02:42:015 (4,5,6,7,1) - ？？？突然出来个这么个吓人的...改了

    liangv587:
  14. 04:47:995 (1) - 接前面的话这个ctrl+G? 现在有点突然没啥必要的...
感觉还需要磨一磨√
总之Good luck :)
谢谢啦
blueloniess
364 posts
Joined February 2014
Topic Starter
blueloniess

cjn1508 wrote:

00:37:649 (7,8,9) - 这个三连有点奇怪并没有呀
00:39:034 (13,14) - 可以弄成短滑条不必要的
02:20:325 (1,2) - 大跳好像长了点对于1/4滑条来说,并不长,
02:48:937 (1,2,3) - 挨近一点这样是跟后面的物件联系的,要把玩家引导到后面的那个滑条上面,不能放一起的
04:19:615 (6) - 与连打重合 且间距较近本身就是重合的,只是stack的原因而已
05:54:216 (6) - 改成单点
05:56:062 (7) - 改成单点
05:59:753 (8) - 单点

ok
感谢
AIR
1,577 posts
Joined November 2012
AIR
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294,48,137095,1,8,1:2:0:0:
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10,261,138018,1,8,1:2:0:0:
116,185,138249,1,0,1:0:0:0:
116,185,138364,1,0,1:0:0:0:
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140,253,141710,1,0,0:0:0:0:
132,254,141825,1,0,0:0:0:0:
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116,256,142056,1,0,0:0:0:0:
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286,218,168475,1,0,1:0:0:0:
252,38,168706,1,0,1:0:0:0:
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112,78,169513,1,0,1:0:0:0:
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142,84,169744,1,0,1:0:0:0:
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323,371,172398,1,0,0:0:0:0:
328,244,172628,1,0,0:0:0:0:
186,323,172859,2,0,L|99:331,1,80,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
27,246,173321,2,0,P|15:195|35:160,1,80
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424,128,175166,1,0,0:0:0:0:
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377,20,179089,6,0,L|363:118,1,95.9999970703126,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
331,300,179550,1,0,1:0:0:0:
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411,366,180935,5,0,0:0:0:0:
237,294,181165,1,0,0:0:0:0:
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24,366,181742,1,0,0:0:0:0:
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389,325,184396,1,0,0:0:0:0:
389,334,184511,1,0,0:0:0:0:
389,343,184626,5,0,0:0:0:0:
181,279,184857,2,0,P|114:286|83:268,1,95.9999970703126,0|0,0:0|1:0,0:0:0:0:
254,228,185319,1,0,0:0:0:0:
254,228,185434,1,0,0:0:0:0:
254,228,185549,1,0,0:0:0:0:
119,368,185780,1,0,0:0:0:0:
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252,265,193856,1,4,1:0:0:0:

重摆了下，试试看行不行
delta_t
24 posts
Joined November 2014
delta_t
卧槽这歌wwwwwww

[General]

有些地方一个NC太长。我感觉一个NC的长度控制在一小节（4拍）之内比较好

[blueloniess]

00:03:270 (6) - 这里改成下面这样？
SPOILER
其实我感觉这首歌大部分地方的二四拍snare/clap是比较突出的，但你的部分并没有把它表现出来。可以试着在二四拍的位置放上较大间距的圈或者滑条头，不要只是用滑条尾带过。
00:21:267 (1) - 去掉NC
00:22:190 (4) - 加NC
00:26:112 (1) - 去掉NC。00:25:651 (1) 上的NC可以移到 00:25:882 (3) 上。
00:26:805 (4,5) - 间距太大，特别是在有 00:25:189 (8) 的情况下，会被判断成只折返一次。

00:36:957 (5) - 这里是个重音但是没有被表现出来。建议把它前面两个圈改成一个短滑条，然后稍微拉开这个音和短滑条的距离。
00:41:572 (4,5,6,7,8) - 可以摆得再好看一点
01:07:183 (3,4,5,6,7,1,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - 这里的hitsound好奇怪。建议改成比较高频的（比如snare+clap之类的）。
01:11:105 (5,6) - 间距改小
01:28:641 (1) - 如果你跟的是人声的话把滑条头往前挪半拍，如果跟鼓的话在前面加两个1/4的note。这一段音乐是在积蓄能量，如果有的地方空着会感觉不给力。
01:30:487 (1) - 同上
01:32:333 (1) - 前面加两个1/4的note
01:32:333 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 有点单调重复，可以旋转一下或者挪一下之类的

03:25:854 (5,6) - 间距改小
03:37:391 (5,6,7,1) - 改成五连？（其实我觉得这一段音乐大量的五连都不应该无视掉）
04:02:771 (4,5) - 间距改小
04:06:809 (7) - 音乐中并没有这个音...
04:06:925 (8) - 改成连打？
04:07:732 (3) - 音乐中并没有这个音...这一段一直到 04:09:693 (4) 有很多overmap的note和很多被忽略掉的音，建议重新下下节奏
04:27:229 (7,8,9,10,1) - 这个直直的pattern用得太多，建议全部掰弯

[AIR]

01:42:947 (14,15,16,17,1,2) - flow有点奇怪，可以考虑不那么线性的摆法
02:16:634 (9,10,11) - 这里不是太美观。要不干脆和前面滑条尾完全重叠？
kiai部分还没做hitsound？

[liangv587]

节奏排列没啥问题。hitsound好炫酷...

妈的...出不去了...这歌有毒...
blueloniess
364 posts
Joined February 2014
Topic Starter
blueloniess

delta_t wrote:

卧槽这歌wwwwwww

[General]

有些地方一个NC太长。我感觉一个NC的长度控制在一小节（4拍）之内比较好

[blueloniess]

00:03:270 (6) - 这里改成下面这样？
SPOILER
其实我感觉这首歌大部分地方的二四拍snare/clap是比较突出的，但你的部分并没有把它表现出来。可以试着在二四拍的位置放上较大间距的圈或者滑条头，不要只是用滑条尾带过。
00:21:267 (1) - 去掉NC
00:22:190 (4) - 加NC
00:26:112 (1) - 去掉NC。00:25:651 (1) 上的NC可以移到 00:25:882 (3) 上。
00:26:805 (4,5) - 间距太大，特别是在有 00:25:189 (8) 的情况下，会被判断成只折返一次。

00:36:957 (5) - 这里是个重音但是没有被表现出来。建议把它前面两个圈改成一个短滑条，然后稍微拉开这个音和短滑条的距离。
00:41:572 (4,5,6,7,8) - 可以摆得再好看一点
01:07:183 (3,4,5,6,7,1,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - 这里的hitsound好奇怪。建议改成比较高频的（比如snare+clap之类的）。
01:11:105 (5,6) - 间距改小
01:28:641 (1) - 如果你跟的是人声的话把滑条头往前挪半拍，如果跟鼓的话在前面加两个1/4的note。这一段音乐是在积蓄能量，如果有的地方空着会感觉不给力。
01:30:487 (1) - 同上
01:32:333 (1) - 前面加两个1/4的note
01:32:333 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 有点单调重复，可以旋转一下或者挪一下之类的

03:25:854 (5,6) - 间距改小
03:37:391 (5,6,7,1) - 改成五连？（其实我觉得这一段音乐大量的五连都不应该无视掉）
04:02:771 (4,5) - 间距改小
04:06:809 (7) - 音乐中并没有这个音...
04:06:925 (8) - 改成连打？
04:07:732 (3) - 音乐中并没有这个音...这一段一直到 04:09:693 (4) 有很多overmap的note和很多被忽略掉的音，建议重新下下节奏
04:27:229 (7,8,9,10,1) - 这个直直的pattern用得太多，建议全部掰弯

[AIR]

01:42:947 (14,15,16,17,1,2) - flow有点奇怪，可以考虑不那么线性的摆法
02:16:634 (9,10,11) - 这里不是太美观。要不干脆和前面滑条尾完全重叠？
kiai部分还没做hitsound？

[liangv587]

节奏排列没啥问题。hitsound好炫酷...

妈的...出不去了...这歌有毒...
不好意思,前几天有点事就没有上屙屎,推迟了一下现在开始看你的图啦!
我的部分估计会remap一次啦,感谢你的摸图~! ;)
blueloniess
364 posts
Joined February 2014
Topic Starter
blueloniess
我remapped
Yugu
Elite Mapper
1,006 posts
Joined August 2013
Yugu 
20:41 *blueloniess is listening to [https://osu.ppy.sh/b/648799 Wang Yi Long - Wu Ye DJ]
20:41 blueloniess: 求摸图..
20:43 Yugu: 00:22:882 (2,3,4) - 00:23:574 (5,6) - 
20:43 Yugu: 建议3*的图stack模式单一一点好
20:44 Yugu: 1/4节奏学00:21:728 (4,5,1) - 这种摆法挺好的，也分得清
20:44 Yugu: 或者还是把1/2改了
20:45 Yugu: 00:53:570 (1,3) - 这是故意没叠上去的吗
20:45 Yugu: 看上区有点不像
20:46 blueloniess: 第一个是啥意思...?
20:46 Yugu: 00:58:646 (6,7,1) - 间距弄一致，跟你之前的一样，或者7 1调远点，重音挺明显的
20:47 Yugu: 就是你这里
20:47 Yugu: 1/4用了stack00:22:882 (2,3,4) - 
20:47 Yugu: 紧接着的后面1/2还是stack00:23:574 (5,6) - 
20:47 Yugu: 可能会误读
20:48 blueloniess: 哦哦
20:48 blueloniess: 这个啊
20:48 blueloniess: 应该不会把
20:49 blueloniess: 这里感觉节奏挺明显的
20:49 Yugu: 毕竟是个低星图，改不改还是看你吧 :3
20:49 Yugu: 新手玩家可能会读不清
20:50 blueloniess: enen
20:50 Yugu: 01:10:413 (4) - 这里NC吧
20:50 blueloniess: e
20:52 Yugu: 01:36:025 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14) - 这段里面也NC一下吧
20:52 Yugu: 太长了
20:52 Yugu: 后面也一样
20:52 blueloniess: 不
20:52 blueloniess: 他的这个是一个完整的梗
20:53 blueloniess: 我这个先不打算动
20:53 Yugu: 噢
20:54 Yugu: 02:00:483 (3,4,5) - 弄成半径相同的包
20:54 Yugu: 02:02:328 (10,11) - 这没包好
20:54 blueloniess: 好
20:56 Yugu: 02:51:936 (2,3,5,6) - 间距弄相同5和2 3和6
20:57 Yugu: 02:51:936 (2,3,5,6,9,12) - 总觉的都是不同间距的.....
20:57 blueloniess: 有点点
20:57 blueloniess: 他这么做应该只是不想叠
20:57 blueloniess: 故意这么放的
20:58 Yugu: en
20:58 Yugu: 03:01:742 (4,5,7,8) - 这块，前面1/4是stack，后面却是间距连打
20:59 Yugu: 03:02:088 (6,7,8,9,1) - 03:03:934 (7,8,9,10,1) - 
20:59 Yugu: 雨点看不懂啊
20:59 Yugu: 有点*
21:00 blueloniess: 这里是有古典的
21:00 blueloniess: 鼓点
21:00 blueloniess: 你把note去掉，可以听到的
21:00 Yugu: 03:16:163 (4,5,6,7) - 这块就很不友好了
21:01 Yugu: 03:16:855 (8,9) - 擦边
21:01 Yugu: 03:17:778 (2,3,4,5) - 和第一条一样
21:02 blueloniess: e
21:02 Yugu: 03:20:316 (4,5) - 这个间距拉近点和03:20:086 (3,4) - 太相似了
21:02 blueloniess: en
21:02 blueloniess: hao
21:03 Yugu: 03:35:545 (8,9,1) - 这应该不是个正三角形
21:03 Yugu: 03:48:466 (5,1,5,1) - 为啥不一样
21:04 Yugu: 03:51:465 (2,1) - stack?
21:04 Yugu: 03:54:465 (1,2,3) - 建议把2拉远点
21:04 Yugu: 03:55:619 (4,1) - 间距问题
21:05 Yugu: 04:02:541 (6,7,8) - 真的有点贴
21:05 Yugu: 04:03:694 (1,1) - 距离有点小，可能会反应不过来
21:07 Yugu: 04:40:612 (1,2,3,6,7,8) - 有点炫酷，是不是故意弄的
21:08 blueloniess: 倒杯水回来
21:08 blueloniess: 2333
21:09 Yugu: 04:49:610 (2,1,2,3,4) - 相同问题，其实在前面给点提示这个问题就可以很好解决了(
21:09 blueloniess: 是的
21:09 Yugu: 对外解释也很顺利23333
21:10 blueloniess: 这里似乎还好
21:10 Yugu: 嗯
21:10 Yugu: 因为有NC
21:10 blueloniess: 好
21:10 blueloniess: 稍等一下，我处理一下比赛的事情
21:10 blueloniess: 马上来
21:10 Yugu: 嗯
21:12 Yugu: 感觉没啥了
21:12 blueloniess: 好的
21:12 blueloniess: 谢谢啦~
21:12 Yugu: 我去论坛水个kd(
yf_bmp
Elite Storyboarder II / Elite Mapper
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yf_bmp
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collab

  • 你自己的部分图挺好但不够基情啊。距离可以放开一点的
    AIR部分的blanket，以及细节间距都需要查一遍
    音效全图风格建议统一下
  1. 00:19:883 (4) - 这个有点近
  2. 00:25:882 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - 摆成弧形
  3. 00:22:651 (1) - remove nc
  4. 01:08:567 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,1) - 不如想点更有意思的排列
  5. 01:28:641 - 01:36:025 - 这段可以做成一种“发狂段”的感觉
  6. 02:48:937 (5,6) - 太紧
  7. 03:20:316 (4,5) - 没看懂这个间距
  8. 03:47:774 (2,3,4,5) - 小细节
  9. 03:47:081 - 04:01:387 - 这的flow一个方向转了很久
  10. 04:06:925 (4,5) - 挺突兀的，不符合你的风格
  11. 04:08:770 (4,5) -
  12. 04:12:001 (1,2,3,4) - overmapped，要么音效上好
  13. 04:19:500 (11) -
  14. 你自己的最后一段kiai基础问题开始浮现了，要检查下
blueloniess
364 posts
Joined February 2014
Topic Starter
blueloniess

yf_bmp wrote:

  1. Just comments.
  2. Personal suggestions.
  3. Highly recommended.
  4. Unrankable points.
collab

  • 你自己的部分图挺好但不够基情啊。距离可以放开一点的
    AIR部分的blanket，以及细节间距都需要查一遍
    音效全图风格建议统一下
  1. 00:19:883 (4) - 这个有点近
  2. 00:25:882 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - 摆成弧形
  3. 00:22:651 (1) - remove nc
  4. 01:08:567 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,1) - 不如想点更有意思的排列
  5. 01:28:641 - 01:36:025 - 这段可以做成一种“发狂段”的感觉
  6. 02:48:937 (5,6) - 太紧
  7. 03:20:316 (4,5) - 没看懂这个间距
  8. 03:47:774 (2,3,4,5) - 小细节
  9. 03:47:081 - 04:01:387 - 这的flow一个方向转了很久
  10. 04:06:925 (4,5) - 挺突兀的，不符合你的风格
  11. 04:08:770 (4,5) -
  12. 04:12:001 (1,2,3,4) - overmapped，要么音效上好
  13. 04:19:500 (11) -
  14. 你自己的最后一段kiai基础问题开始浮现了，要检查下
好的，谢谢摸图！
AIR remap了一下
我也打算把第二段kiai remap一次了
:)
sodarose
607 posts
Joined July 2011
sodarose
原本想咕的

00:22:651 (1) - 取消NC
01:30:487 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 这段节奏可以跟鼓下密点
02:03:713 (1,4) - 统一一下吧
02:55:397 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 这段排列有点迷
03:03:242 (3,4,5,6) - 这个间距也是有点迷
04:40:381 (6,1) - 太近了换个摆法吧
同意yf说的你自己的部分摆的没放开，但是放开了好像有点崩
blueloniess
364 posts
Joined February 2014
Topic Starter
blueloniess

sodarose wrote:

原本想咕的

00:22:651 (1) - 取消NC 好
01:30:487 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 这段节奏可以跟鼓下密点这里打算跟人声
02:03:713 (1,4) - 统一一下吧 他这里似乎是为了包后面的滑条
02:55:397 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 这段排列有点迷
03:03:242 (3,4,5,6) - 这个间距也是有点迷
04:40:381 (6,1) - 太近了换个摆法吧 这里对称五角星呀... 摆开了就不是对称了呀..
同意yf说的你自己的部分摆的没放开，但是放开了好像有点崩

感谢摸图！！！
5secondsrealman
1 post
Joined July 2017
5secondsrealman
水一个
00:00:040 (1) - 开始建议少用直条，最好全部打弯，也不要无脑绕圈圈
00:25:651 (1,2) - 没必要nc
00:36:957 - break不用这么长，这里可以重新开始了
00:55:416 (1,2,1,2) - 这四个方向向上nc不用这么频繁，00:57:261 (1,2) - 方向向下
01:10:183 (1,2,3,4) - 折线行走
01:14:336 (1) - 这一段我的建议有两点，首先是长滑条，这么多直型很单调，改成一些奇怪的造型，然后就是速度可以用0.8,0.5太低了，长点的滑条也更容易造型
01:17:566 (5) -nc
01:58:175 (8) - 还是一小节nc比较好，后面相同
01:39:024 (5) - 堆在一起了，不好看，跟01:38:101 (2) - 分开
01:54:483 (8) - nc
03:41:082 (5,1) - 间距偏大，可以照之前的尾巴重叠
03:50:312 (5) - 突然3/4？
04:42:919 (2,3) - 这个梗难度偏大了，可以逐渐往右偏移，减小后面的间距
04:38:766 (4) - 间距太大，梗到这里已经结束了，ctrl+g，调头更符合音乐
gg :D
blueloniess
364 posts
Joined February 2014
Topic Starter
blueloniess

5secondsrealman wrote:

水一个
00:00:040 (1) - 开始建议少用直条，最好全部打弯，也不要无脑绕圈圈 这个还是个人习惯了，就算用打弯的滑条也是跟直滑条一样转圈圈，没啥意义
00:25:651 (1,2) - 没必要nc 好
00:36:957 - break不用这么长，这里可以重新开始了 我想跳过这个人声
00:55:416 (1,2,1,2) - 这四个方向向上nc不用这么频繁，00:57:261 (1,2) - 方向向下没必要，这里的NC都是梗的起头
01:10:183 (1,2,3,4) - 折线行走折现直线不都差不多么
01:14:336 (1) - 这一段我的建议有两点，首先是长滑条，这么多直型很单调，改成一些奇怪的造型，然后就是速度可以用0.8,0.5太低了，长点的滑条也更容易造型这里我跟的是电子音啊，所以就是长滑条，造型的话，不太擅长。
01:17:566 (5) -nc没必要，这里一段是一个梗
01:58:175 (8) - 还是一小节nc比较好，后面相同他这里是每14个数字一个NC，而且也是每14个note一个梗
01:39:024 (5) - 堆在一起了，不好看，跟01:38:101 (2) - 分开
01:54:483 (8) - nc没必要
03:41:082 (5,1) - 间距偏大，可以照之前的尾巴重叠好
03:50:312 (5) - 突然3/4？
04:42:919 (2,3) - 这个梗难度偏大了，可以逐渐往右偏移，减小后面的间距这个图的pp段就靠这几个跳啦
04:38:766 (4) - 间距太大，梗到这里已经结束了，ctrl+g，调头更符合音乐
gg :D
谢谢
Adol Christin
875 posts
Joined October 2012
Adol Christin
咕咕，咕咕咕，咕咕咕咕（是我这段时间事情比较多，不好意思）

no kd

Collab

  1. 00:00:040 - 00:14:806 - 这一段，既然你头两个小节的分界处已经用拉开距离的方式来区分，我建议后面几个小节也用同样的做法：00:06:962 (5,1) - 00:08:807 (5,1) - 00:10:653 (5,1) - 。这样至少显得你不是那么随机地在糊满滑条
  2. 00:21:728 (4,5,1) - 叠放好
  3. 00:44:340 (1,2,3) - 这三个可以考虑做成一个对称的图形，通过修改1的形状就能实现
  4. 01:03:722 (3,4,1) - 同上
  5. 01:14:105 - 01:21:027 - 这一段，建议还是跟前面一样，统一在大白线的位置nc。
  6. 01:18:950 (6,7,8) - 搞成直的吧
  7. 01:26:565 (2) - 移动到(290,211)，美观等级瞬间上升一档
  8. AIR的部分：每根大白线nc一次，跟整张图保持统一
  9. 01:56:329 (1,2,3,4) - 建议把这两根滑条的方向都ctrl+g。主要目的是拉开1和上一个14的间距以突出转折。其他有类似节奏的地方都是这么处理的
  10. 03:03:242 (3,4,5,6,7) - 这里间距突然收紧，让人视觉上感觉很不习惯啊。建议扩大间距到1.0-1.1左右
  11. 03:42:236 (2,3) - 考虑包一下

587的部分没啥变化，就省略不看了。感觉改进很大啊，不过外观上还是不是太中看，特别是你做的后面那个部分，感觉不太好看的overlap有点多，可以适当考虑重新摆一摆。

就这样吧。
blueloniess
364 posts
Joined February 2014
Topic Starter
blueloniess

Adol Christin wrote:

咕咕，咕咕咕，咕咕咕咕（是我这段时间事情比较多，不好意思）

no kd

Collab

  1. 00:00:040 - 00:14:806 - 这一段，既然你头两个小节的分界处已经用拉开距离的方式来区分，我建议后面几个小节也用同样的做法：00:06:962 (5,1) - 00:08:807 (5,1) - 00:10:653 (5,1) - 。这样至少显得你不是那么随机地在糊满滑条 我这里再想想...
  2. 00:21:728 (4,5,1) - 叠放好 好
  3. 00:44:340 (1,2,3) - 这三个可以考虑做成一个对称的图形，通过修改1的形状就能实现好
  4. 01:03:722 (3,4,1) - 同上
  5. 01:14:105 - 01:21:027 - 这一段，建议还是跟前面一样，统一在大白线的位置nc。好
  6. 01:18:950 (6,7,8) - 搞成直的吧好
  7. 01:26:565 (2) - 移动到(290,211)，美观等级瞬间上升一档好
  8. AIR的部分：每根大白线nc一次，跟整张图保持统一
  9. 01:56:329 (1,2,3,4) - 建议把这两根滑条的方向都ctrl+g。主要目的是拉开1和上一个14的间距以突出转折。其他有类似节奏的地方都是这么处理的
  10. 03:03:242 (3,4,5,6,7) - 这里间距突然收紧，让人视觉上感觉很不习惯啊。建议扩大间距到1.0-1.1左右
  11. 03:42:236 (2,3) - 考虑包一下

587的部分没啥变化，就省略不看了。感觉改进很大啊，不过外观上还是不是太中看，特别是你做的后面那个部分，感觉不太好看的overlap有点多，可以适当考虑重新摆一摆。

就这样吧。
谢谢啦
Avenora
26 posts
Joined August 2015
Avenora
Hello from my mod queue
Song's pretty good, I like it :)

collab
00:21:728 (4,5,1) - unclean stack
00:22:190 (1) - maybe make this 1/2 slider so it doesn't feel empty in a
00:23:574 (6,7) - earlier parts suggested "stack = 1/4", so don't stack this to avoid confusion
00:47:109 (3,4) - distance between 3 and 4 are larger than the other similar patterns in this section without a clear emphasis, consider reducing the distance
01:07:414 (5) - 1/2 slider so it doesn't feel empty?
01:47:792 (4,5,6,7,8) - the jump from 6 to 7, then brief pause before hitting 8 might be disorienting
02:18:941 (2) - breaking pattern by moving away from the next note instead of moving into. You can ignore this if you like tho
03:13:740 - missing note, add something to follow the drum
03:14:087 (2) - jumped a bit too far imo. move it to somewhere around (416,148)
03:16:394 (6,7) - the pause in a stack can be disorienting when earlier patterns suggest "stack = 1/4"
03:17:778 (2,3) - ^
03:59:310 (6) - jumped a bit too far again imo. move it where 2 was and make it blanket 3 would be nice
04:15:231 (3,4,5) - make 3 tilt to left instead of right to preserve circular flow. 4 - 5 might be breaking flow, so Ctrl+G the 5
04:26:306 (6,11) - unclean overlap reeeeee
04:31:382 (1) - either curve towards 2 or make it straight slider instead
04:41:073 (3,8) - fix overlap pls
04:41:073 (3,8) - ^
04:42:458 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1) - if you notice, second slider is closer than the first slider. going by the pattern you wanted to put in, I suggest move the sliders a bit to the right
04:47:072 (4) - didn't quite overlap with the sliderend
04:47:303 (5) - overlap with the long slider's head maybe
04:49:610 (2,1) - put 2 in the slider's blanket and 1 on the slider tail to prevent stack confusion
05:59:523 (7,8,1) - I don't think the cursor movement for this is smooth enough. You can ignore this though.
06:03:214 (8,9,1) - ^
06:12:444 (4,1) - for a calm section this is too wide
06:16:136 (4,1) - ^
06:17:520 (5,6,7,8) - Ctrl+G might be better suited here

Most of those sounds like me nitpicking, I believe you can tell which is which. Sorry if this is low quality, I'm fairly new to modding.

Good luck with your map :)
EDIT:You might wanna consult your storyboarder for this
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blueloniess
364 posts
Joined February 2014
Topic Starter
blueloniess

C-Yuyuko wrote:

Hello from my mod queue
Song's pretty good, I like it :)

collab
00:21:728 (4,5,1) - unclean stack Ok
00:22:190 (1) - maybe make this 1/2 slider so it doesn't feel empty in a Nope, I don't think there needs a slider
00:23:574 (6,7) - earlier parts suggested "stack = 1/4", so don't stack this to avoid confusion
00:47:109 (3,4) - distance between 3 and 4 are larger than the other similar patterns in this section without a clear emphasis, consider reducing the distance No,this is the same distance.You can see it when you Ctrl+G
01:07:414 (5) - 1/2 slider so it doesn't feel empty? nope
01:47:792 (4,5,6,7,8) - the jump from 6 to 7, then brief pause before hitting 8 might be disorienting
02:18:941 (2) - breaking pattern by moving away from the next note instead of moving into. You can ignore this if you like tho
03:13:740 - missing note, add something to follow the drum
03:14:087 (2) - jumped a bit too far imo. move it to somewhere around (416,148)
No, I want to emphasize the drum here
03:16:394 (6,7) - the pause in a stack can be disorienting when earlier patterns suggest "stack = 1/4"Ok I made a NC here so it would not be disorienting
03:17:778 (2,3) - ^
03:59:310 (6) - jumped a bit too far again imo. move it where 2 was and make it blanket 3 would be nice I think it's fine
04:15:231 (3,4,5) - make 3 tilt to left instead of right to preserve circular flow. 4 - 5 might be breaking flow, so Ctrl+G the 5
04:26:306 (6,11) - unclean overlap reeeeeeOK LOL
04:31:382 (1) - either curve towards 2 or make it straight slider insteadOK
04:41:073 (3,8) - fix overlap plsYES
04:41:073 (3,8) - ^
04:42:458 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1) - if you notice, second slider is closer than the first slider. going by the pattern you wanted to put in, I suggest move the sliders a bit to the rightI think this is fine XD
04:47:072 (4) - didn't quite overlap with the sliderend
04:47:303 (5) - overlap with the long slider's head maybe
04:49:610 (2,1) - put 2 in the slider's blanket and 1 on the slider tail to prevent stack confusion
05:59:523 (7,8,1) - I don't think the cursor movement for this is smooth enough. You can ignore this though.
06:03:214 (8,9,1) - ^
06:12:444 (4,1) - for a calm section this is too wide
06:16:136 (4,1) - ^
06:17:520 (5,6,7,8) - Ctrl+G might be better suited here

Most of those sounds like me nitpicking, I believe you can tell which is which. Sorry if this is low quality, I'm fairly new to modding.

Good luck with your map :)
EDIT:You might wanna consult your storyboarder for this Story board is made by others IDK how to made it so IDK how to fix it... ;w; But I will try to find someone help me to fix it
Thanks for your modding!

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Otosaka-Yu
1,117 posts
Joined August 2013
Otosaka-Yu
如果我是DJ你会爱我妈，你会爱我妈，你会爱我妈。
如果我是DJ你会爱我妈，请你爱我爸！请你爱我爸！
这种土嗨真的会死人

blueloniess

  1. 00:07:884 (2,5) - 这两个滑条复制粘贴一下。。不然看着太强迫了
  2. 00:15:729 (3,4) - ^
  3. 00:19:421 (3,1) - 滑条尾和滑条头stack一下
  4. 01:14:336 (2,1,1,1) - 我理解你想要跟背景的bell音，但是这么多鼓声还是别忽略吧，你可以滑条跟鼓，note跟bell音
  5. 01:24:488 (1) - 去掉nc，01:24:950 (3) - nc
  6. 01:26:334 (1) - 去掉nc，01:26:795 (3) - nc
  7. 01:28:641 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 这一堆这么丰富的1/4全忽略了不好

AIR

  1. 01:48:023 (6,7) - 这gap突然太大了
  2. 01:52:638 (1) - 我想说这种蛇皮滑条真的太丑了，01:54:483 (8) - 01:58:175 (8) - 02:00:713 (4) - 02:06:712 (12) - 这几个的，改下吧，拉开点，直滑条也可以啊，看起来很挤
  3. nc起码要每6, 7, 8这样的combo数nc一次，这nc得太少了，玩起来hp都不会上去。比如
  4. 01:54:483 (8) - nc
  5. 01:58:175 (8) - ^
  6. 02:01:867 (7) - ^
  7. 02:05:559 (7) - ^
先po着，我还没摸完，就表面随便翻来看下细节问题还挺多，kd先别给，等我摸完先
Mafumafu
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Mafumafu
粗略的看了一下 感觉再间距上还需要下一些功夫 现在看起来有点过于随机
建议先改着，以后再找我吧
Otosaka-Yu
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Otosaka-Yu
算了，太忙不摸下去了
blueloniess
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blueloniess

Suzuki_1112 wrote:

算了，太忙不摸下去了
..... :(
blueloniess
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blueloniess

Suzuki_1112 wrote:

如果我是DJ你会爱我妈，你会爱我妈，你会爱我妈。
如果我是DJ你会爱我妈，请你爱我爸！请你爱我爸！
这种土嗨真的会死人

blueloniess

  1. 00:07:884 (2,5) - 这两个滑条复制粘贴一下。。不然看着太强迫了 好
  2. 00:15:729 (3,4) - ^ 好
  3. 00:19:421 (3,1) - 滑条尾和滑条头stack一下 好
  4. 01:14:336 (2,1,1,1) - 我理解你想要跟背景的bell音，但是这么多鼓声还是别忽略吧，你可以滑条跟鼓，note跟bell音 我试试把
  5. 01:24:488 (1) - 去掉nc，01:24:950 (3) - nc 好
  6. 01:26:334 (1) - 去掉nc，01:26:795 (3) - nc 好
  7. 01:28:641 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 这一堆这么丰富的1/4全忽略了不好 这里跟人声

AIR

  1. 01:48:023 (6,7) - 这gap突然太大了
  2. 01:52:638 (1) - 我想说这种蛇皮滑条真的太丑了，01:54:483 (8) - 01:58:175 (8) - 02:00:713 (4) - 02:06:712 (12) - 这几个的，改下吧，拉开点，直滑条也可以啊，看起来很挤
  3. nc起码要每6, 7, 8这样的combo数nc一次，这nc得太少了，玩起来hp都不会上去。比如
  4. 01:54:483 (8) - nc
  5. 01:58:175 (8) - ^
  6. 02:01:867 (7) - ^
  7. 02:05:559 (7) - ^
先po着，我还没摸完，就表面随便翻来看下细节问题还挺多，kd先别给，等我摸完先
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hi m4m

[General]
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check pls gg
- 00:00:040 - change red tick's volume to 60% it's unrankable

[Collab]
- 00:20:344 (1,2,3) - i didn't like flow, curve more or make it linear pls
- 00:56:339 (1) - i don't think this NC is necessary
- 01:06:837 (2) - rather than 1/4, just 1/2 looks suitable and consistent.
- 01:08:337 (3) - actually any indication for this downbeat is needed, this NC and pattern makes user lose rhythm :(
- 01:14:105 - G where's HS
- 01:26:103 (4,5,6) - this DS is quite sudden, nerf some pls
- 01:30:026 (5,1) - this is quite ambiguous, make it more close or obviously take it far away from 5.
- 01:38:101 (2,3) - i won't say blanket, but at least make it balanced
- 02:09:943 (4,5) - isn't 1/2 better?
- 02:19:287 (3) - i would put circle here
- 02:21:018 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - can try this kind? https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9230223
- 02:46:168 (1) - 1/2 here looks more smart rhythm use for consistency etc.
- 02:48:475 (3) - no indication for downbeat in both NC and pattern. at least start NC from here pls
- 03:14:087 (2) - where's HS
- 03:59:080 (5,6) - irregular high DS but 04:47:072 (1,2,3,4) - yea GG
- 04:10:386 (1) - idk this NC is necessary

actually i felt overal DS balace is ruined but good luck
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