pkhg wrote:

sorry for the delay :3/

[Lunatic]
Add "marathon" to tags? done
AiMod says there are missing files, idk what that means though http://puu.sh/ga3nh.png

00:26:428 (3) - Remove NC. It might be confusing since the player could think that it's from a new section and hit it later (because the ds) ok
00:29:721 (1) - NC seems unnecesary nc here to giving mark there are 1/4 jumps for next
00:31:184 (7,1) - Space them properly, around 0.8x. 1/4 jumps from circle to slider are anoying to play done
00:35:575 (4) - add nc here to be consistent with 00:33:380 (1) - 00:34:111 (1) - remove their NC instead
01:11:611 (1,1,1) - You can remove these NCs, looks better without them i have asked several testplays and they got trap to read as 1/1 when i didnt put NC so imo give NC would be easier here
01:53:136 (1) - Add NC for consistency (also i dont like when combo reaches 10) nc for stream which didnt increase spacing looks weird, i'd keep it now
02:20:483 (1,1) - There's no reason for these NCs mark 1/4? *let me keep
02:50:575 (7,8) - Ctrl+g, better rhythm :p changed to 2 circles instead
02:58:989 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - Perfect triangle: fixed

472,292,178989,5,0,1:0:0:0:
404,273,179172,1,0,0:0:0:0:
456,224,179355,1,0,0:0:0:0:
491,312,179538,5,0,1:0:0:0:
375,280,179721,1,0,0:0:0:0:
464,196,179904,1,0,0:0:0:0:
511,332,180087,5,0,1:0:0:0:
349,287,180270,1,0,0:0:0:0:
473,170,180453,1,0,0:0:0:0:

03:18:014 (3,4,5) - Its weird. This 03:16:550 (4,5,6) - plays much better than the current one ok changed
03:51:672 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - You dont need all these NCs here, keeping these 03:51:672 (1,1) - works better im sure pan gives these NCs because the spacing
04:12:160 (2,3,4) - what about stacking these on 04:12:892 (1) - 's tail? also move this 04:12:526 (5) - 1 grid down for better blanket. personally i dont like something stack or overlap, let me keep first
04:57:526 (4) - NC for consistency
05:03:380 (4) - ^
05:04:843 (3) - ^ removed a NC that makes inconsistency instead
05:05:209 (5) - a triplet will be great here since the music on blue tick not really loud as white and redtick, i'd like to keep first, i'll consider when someone tells this one again

Hope it helps :3/

1. The current offset is too early, adding +12ms to the current one is more precise.

• 
  Xinely:

1. 00:07:038 (1,2,3,4,5) - Whistles in these combo's sound weird comparing to the previous ones.
2. 00:29:264 - Don't miss this beat ;-;
3. 01:09:050 (3,4) - The offbeat slider sounds really off here, it doesn't fit to the vocal. Ctrl+g?
4. 01:14:995 (3) - Same problem with offbeat slider like above, how about wapping with two circles instead.
5. 02:03:197 (5) - Annoying offbeat slider, switch with circles.
6. 03:12:892 (1,2) - ^, should delete 2 and make slider 1 a kickslider instead, or ministream. The important thing is that 03:13:258 - this beat should be played as well, not only followed.
7. 03:18:014 (3,4) - Fuse into a slider goes really well with the melody here.
8. 03:20:209 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - This looks somewhat squished, could make the curve rounder
9. 03:21:489 (4,5,6) - Suddenly stopping the motion at this point feel awkward imo, you should space them a little bit out:
   
   SPOILER

   
10. 04:00:636 (4) - Yes I admit, I hate offbeat sliders very much orz
11. 04:12:160 (2,3,4,5) - Stacking feels really awkward here, the should be some kind of motion to express the vocal on the next slider better.
12. 04:17:831 (3,4) - Same as 01:09:050 (3,4) -
13. 04:23:776 (3) - orz... I know it's for variation, but these sound really weird to play to me.
14. 04:59:995 - Don't miss this beat out.
15. 05:01:733 (5,6) - Angle is really awkward and makes the flow awkward, please smooth it:
    
    SPOILER

    
16. 05:04:934 (4) -05:16:642 (4) - Not sure why you starting a slider here since there's no notable beat at these blue ticks. It makes the rhythm feel really forced.
17. 05:08:319 (4,1,2) - Ctrl+g and reposition, this feels more natural to play and makes it consistent to 05:09:965 (1,2) -
18. 05:15:087 (4,5,6) - Spacing is weird here, shouldn't it be equal?
    
    PAN:
19. 00:40:331 (4) - I feel ending this on the red tick already goes much better with the vocal, as the syllable is already ending at 00:40:514 -
20. 00:42:526 (2,3) - Missing a lot of percussion beats here. They might be faint, but should be followed with kicksliders imo:
    
    SPOILER

    
21. 00:51:489 (2,3) - 00:57:343 (2,3) - Idk man, would be better you just ministream regularly, this feels a bit trolly.
22. 01:50:209 (1,2) - Shouldn't this be a slider like 01:48:745 (1) -?
23. 01:57:526 (1,2) - Same as above, should be like 01:56:063 (1) - .
24. 02:07:038 (1,2) - Align the slider 1 with 2. http://puu.sh/gg5E1/cfeb3d0568.jpg
25. 02:24:965 (3) - Switching these off with 2 circles feels better imo.
26. 02:26:794 (3,4) - How about jump here, it would fit in good to the vocal:
    
    SPOILER

    
27. 02:55:148 (7) - Having this directing to the next slider more would be better:
    
    SPOILER

    
28. 03:44:355 (4) - Finish.
29. 03:45:819 (1,2,3) - This might be a terrible suggestion, but the following follows the percussions much better:
    
    SPOILER

    
    Why this part sounds so sketchy ;-;
30. 03:50:117 (2) - Feels like unnecessary overmap.
31. 03:51:306 (3,4) - Same like 00:42:526 (2,3) -
32. 04:48:380 (2) - This extended slider feels unnecessary, not sure what you are following with it as the vocal is already finished at the previous red tick at 04:48:563 - . Should crop it to that point.

Pho wrote:

P A N's part is dead? :c

Putting this as placeholder hier, post will come within hours

Pho wrote:

P A N's part is dead? :c

Putting this as placeholder hier, post will come within hours

Bold: Fix quickly/unrankable stuff
Red: Highly recommend
Note: Almost all suggestions concerning offbeat sliders should be marked red, I kept them black for better readability.

[General]

1. The current offset is too early, adding +12ms to the current one is more precise. ok, my timing is bad lol

[Lunatic]
[list]
Xinely:
[*]00:07:038 (1,2,3,4,5) - Whistles in these combo's sound weird comparing to the previous ones. yeah but im hitsounding from the pattern actually. i dont have any better idea too
[*]00:29:264 - Don't miss this beat ;-; lol mapped
[*]01:09:050 (3,4) - The offbeat slider sounds really off here, it doesn't fit to the vocal. Ctrl+g? aaaa i map this according the pattern, imo they played well too
[*]01:14:995 (3) - Same problem with offbeat slider like above, how about wapping with two circles instead. ok
[*]02:03:197 (5) - Annoying offbeat slider, switch with circles. ok
[*]03:12:892 (1,2) - ^, should delete 2 and make slider 1 a kickslider instead, or ministream. The important thing is that 03:13:258 - this beat should be played as well, not only followed. ok
[*]03:18:014 (3,4) - Fuse into a slider goes really well with the melody here. i'd like to keep circles like this. i want to map triplet for 03:18:209 (4,5,6) - and imo circle works fine here
[*]03:20:209 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - This looks somewhat squished, could make the curve rounder curve the slider to downward instead
[*]03:21:489 (4,5,6) - Suddenly stopping the motion at this point feel awkward imo, you should space them a little bit out: ok

SPOILER

[*]04:00:636 (4) - Yes I admit, I hate offbeat sliders very much orz aa wait i dont get what do you mean offbeat here o.o
[*]04:12:160 (2,3,4,5) - Stacking feels really awkward here, the should be some kind of motion to express the vocal on the next slider better. lol agree, i forgot to fix this
[*]04:17:831 (3,4) - Same as 01:09:050 (3,4) - same too :<
[*]04:23:776 (3) - orz... I know it's for variation, but these sound really weird to play to me. ok fixed
[*]04:59:995 - Don't miss this beat out. mapped
[*]05:01:733 (5,6) - Angle is really awkward and makes the flow awkward, please smooth it: i think i missplace this slider lol fixed

SPOILER

[*]05:04:934 (4) -05:16:642 (4) - Not sure why you starting a slider here since there's no notable beat at these blue ticks. It makes the rhythm feel really forced. they were for variation but since you said like that, changed the rhythms
[*]05:08:319 (4,1,2) - Ctrl+g and reposition, this feels more natural to play and makes it consistent to 05:09:965 (1,2) - ok then lol
[*]05:15:087 (4,5,6) - Spacing is weird here, shouldn't it be equal? ups, fixed

Pho wrote:

[strike]P A N's part is dead? :c

PAN:
[*]00:40:331 (4) - I feel ending this on the red tick already goes much better with the vocal, as the syllable is already ending at 00:40:514 - it really ruin my pattern if i fix this.
[*]00:51:489 (2,3) - 00:57:343 (2,3) - Idk man, would be better you just ministream regularly, this feels a bit trolly. let's keep like this first >_> it's not a problem imo.
[*]01:50:209 (1,2) - Shouldn't this be a slider like 01:48:745 (1) -? it still same imo just change the pattern.
[*]01:57:526 (1,2) - Same as above, should be like 01:56:063 (1) - . same
[*]02:24:965 (3) - Switching these off with 2 circles feels better imo. keep it first, i love this
[*]03:45:819 (1,2,3) - This might be a terrible suggestion, but the following follows the percussions much better: that beat is too calm imo XD

SPOILER

Why this part sounds so sketchy ;-;
[*]03:50:117 (2) - Feels like unnecessary overmap. it's not overmapped imo.
[/list]

Looks neat, I might come back later and check hitsounds and NCs. GL with this!

1. 00:31:288 (1) - This feels pretty weird being on the blue tick, maybe turn it into a 1/4 slider and add a circle?
2. 03:01:196 (1) - Make this a curved slider to carry a bit more flow from 03:00:922 (2,3,4) and to transition better into 03:01:562 (2) especially with the sv boost
3. 03:19:764 (5) - Try a ctrl+g here and moving it down a bit, the sound you map to here is slightly higher pitch than in 03:19:489 (4) so having them different in some way would be nice. It should also create more emphasis on 03:20:038 (6) which is even higher in pitch
4. 03:30:465 (1,2) - Make these parallel? Just looks neater imo
5. 03:51:684 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) -I don't think that many NC's is necessary, just NC for each pair that you increased spacing and volume on
6. 03:44:001 (3) - Curve this a bit for a better flow into the stream
7. 04:37:782 (1) - ^
8. 04:38:514 (1) - ^

sukiNathan wrote:

From pm req owo

[Lunatic]

1. 03:51:684 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) -I don't think that many NC's is necessary, just NC for each pair that you increased spacing and volume on I increase the spacing on every note.
2. 03:44:001 (3) - Curve this a bit for a better flow into the stream yea sure
3. 04:37:782 (1) - ^ intentional, the note after these sliders already make a straight line so it no need imo.
4. 04:38:514 (1) - ^ same

hmm cool map ;w;

Momochikun wrote:

mod setitik as requested xD

[Lunatic]
01:36:684 (2,1) - this kind of flowbreak which make the plays become uncomfortable, i'd space them a bit farther this is end of kiai already so I think it no need to be that far, let's see for other opinion.
01:41:989 (3) - some hitosund for this slider ? drum or maybe normal sampleset might be nice imo, the music already emphasis it so it no need to make it louder (let's see what is xinely's opinion, i will follow to her here.
01:42:172 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - i dont get the idea of this NC tbh, its just messing up the hp drain imo ahaha ok remove, just want to try something fun.
02:24:611 (1,2,3) - rhythm would fit the song more if it was slider+triplet + slider again, right now the 02:24:977 (3) - 's end was landed on highbeat which make it weird on gameplay nice fixed.
03:45:831 (1,2) - 1/8 doesn't seems right here.. it sounds a bit off when you listen at 25%, you may want to ask some expert for this or just follow the drums for the safer way yep agreed for this, someone expert will figure this out and will reconsider about this.
03:48:026 (1,2,3) - i dislike this over height slider, just ditch 03:48:026 (1) - to white tick pls agreed
03:51:684 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - delete some NC, it's too much I increase spacing on every note so I think it reasonable to NC on each note.
03:55:343 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - it's kind of overmapped imo, i cant hear any instrument played at the bgm tbh I emphasis the extended beat so that's why i make the spacing really short, will see for this, look for more opinion.
04:00:282 (2,3,4) - this pattern is hard to read, consider removing note or make them closer
04:52:050 - Try this pattern ? (stack 04:52:050 (2,2) - them), flow from 04:51:684 (1) - would be more natural interesting, fixed.

SPOILER

could be more polished in some tricky part, but that's could be considered as fine.. good luck !

Mei wrote:

♂

[Lunatic]

• 
  
  pan

1. 00:46:745 (2,4) - remove this 2 notes? there still have a calm sound so that's why I make it with short spacing.
   
2. 01:01:471 (3) - this is kind overmap for me, i suggest you remove this note and move 2 to x264y356 great, also curve the slider on xinely's part to improve the flow.
   
3. 01:11:623 (1,1,1) - these looks cool but i;'d like to remove these NC this is xinely's part
   
   
4. 01:46:562 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - this rhymn is better mhm yours are interesting but I don't want to skip the beat on red tick.
   
   Picture

   
5. 03:16:379 (3,2) - stack better this is xinely's part x3

no much things can be mentioned

sukiNathan wrote:

From pm req owo

[Lunatic]

1. 00:31:288 (1) - This feels pretty weird being on the blue tick, maybe turn it into a 1/4 slider and add a circle? let me keep it now, it's hard to catch 1/4 slider, circle and then 1/4 slider again lol
2. 03:01:196 (1) - Make this a curved slider to carry a bit more flow from 03:00:922 (2,3,4) and to transition better into 03:01:562 (2) especially with the sv boost ok
3. 03:19:764 (5) - Try a ctrl+g here and moving it down a bit, the sound you map to here is slightly higher pitch than in 03:19:489 (4) so having them different in some way would be nice. It should also create more emphasis on 03:20:038 (6) which is even higher in pitch moved instead
4. 03:30:465 (1,2) - Make these parallel? Just looks neater imo sure lol

hmm cool map ;w;

Momochikun wrote:

mod setitik as requested xD

[Lunatic]
00:03:392 (2,3) - whistle nya ngga kebalik di (2)'s end ya ? klo liat 00:01:197 (1,2,3,1) - sih harusnya gitu. rada aneh sih.. well gw keep dlu dah
00:19:672 (4) - kok end nya soft ? normal lbih tepat keknya mabuk lol
01:19:946 (7,8) - ini entah gw agak bingung bacanya, kirain itu 1/2 rhythm tbh. deketin dikit ? ok
02:47:477 (5,6,7) - ^ 2 grid right lol
01:21:044 (5) - triplet disini rasanya ga cocok berhubung ga ada suara itu, delete pls w masih pas imo, kan ada suara.. lagian 1/2 mulu terlalu gampang
01:03:483 - ^ coba gw keep dlu
01:23:422 (1) - sounds noisy.. consider deleting whistle or reduce the volume intentionally, because i arrange the volume following the vocal
01:01:196 (1) - Finish instead of whistle ok
01:16:562 (3,4,5) - this part plays weird imo, how about changing the slider into some note for pattern ? well gw masih merasa fine fine aja :<
01:41:989 (3) - some hitosund for this slider ? drum or maybe normal sampleset might be nice ok
03:03:940 (3) - ^
02:22:782 (1,2,1) - space them more equal ? the (2) looks like 1/2 jump for me keseluruhan testplayer ngeread ini sempurna kok
02:50:953 (9,1) - swap NC ? on purpose
03:07:050 (1,2,3,4) - Try jump pattenrn ? it would build more impact before the stream which is good o.o ok

SPOILER

03:31:928 (1) - whistle at slider end ok
03:32:751 (2,4,5,6) - try adding clap ok
04:00:282 (2,3,4) - this pattern is hard to read, consider removing note or make them closer k
04:56:806 (1) - i'd recommend triplet instead here gini aja :3

could be more polished in some tricky part, but that's could be considered as fine.. good luck !

Mei wrote:

♂

[notice][Lunatic]
[list]

xinely

[*] 00:19:672 (4) - it is better if you select normal as sampleset but addtitions use soft yep, noticed in previous mod lol

[*] 00:26:806 (6,7) - I thinnk this pattern is better, current one is kind misleading (and you have so many this kind of sliders...whch i dont reallt like it) curved it instead, better flow xD

Picture

[*] 00:32:477 (3) - move to x40 y308? moved to another place

[*] 01:23:148 (1,1,2,3) - it is better if you select normal as sampleset but addtitions use soft great idea <3

[*] 04:00:556 (3) - remove this? i tested here and ask someone to test it, both of us drop here ok

[*] 04:32:203 (1) - ctrl+g plays better no jump no fun :<

p3n wrote:

Wow. Trying to rank a nuclear fusion song without Ono's Taiko is just rude.....just.....rude

DakeDekaane wrote:

You can't just map an Okuu song without Ono's Taiko *runs*

[ S a k u r a ] wrote:

HYPE

have a star

Xinely wrote:

Edit : i hope Ono knows already that i only mapped 1/2 of this song

p3n wrote:

Wow. Trying to rank a nuclear fusion song without Ono's Taiko is just rude.....just.....rude

1. Can I get confirmation about the metadata? The romanization of the artist's name still give me doubts. <.<

1. 00:07:050 (1,2,3,4,5) - SO these whistles still feel inconsistent here lol. Sorry for not putting in a suggestion from my other mod, so try the following:
   Set the whistles at 00:07:050 - 00:07:233 - 00:07:416 - 00:07:782 - 00:07:965 - 00:08:331 - and delete the one at 00:08:696 (2) - .
2. 00:16:562 (5) - How about clap on head as well, you can clearly hear it in the track at this point.
3. 00:21:318 (7) - Whistle on tail would be nice since you are following the strings with it. Delete it on 00:21:684 (1) - the head instead.
4. 00:22:599 (6,8) - Delete whistles on these and on 00:23:148 (1) - 's head and set a whistle on 00:22:782 (7) - instead.
5. 00:32:934 (5) - Missed whistle on head.
6. 00:37:050 (1) - I can hear a cymbal on head, finish
7. 00:39:062 (4) - Could delete this whistle, it feels overhitsounded. I feels cleaner if you only set your whistles on strong emphasized vocal beats at this part.
8. 01:00:465 (3,6) - Finish on these?
9. 01:16:562 (3,4) - How about whistle on 3 instead?
10. 01:37:233 (2,2,2,2,3) - I think setting whistles at these would make for a pretty interesting effect. Same at 01:40:160 (2,2,2,2) -
11. 01:44:001 (3) - Whistle on head please.
12. 01:53:056 (6,9) - How about whistling on these instead of 01:53:148 (7) - to follow the melody better.
13. 02:01:745 (3,5) - Whistle on 3 instead of 5 makes more sense to follow the vocal better.
14. 02:03:940 (9) - Delete this whistles, it's overhitsounded imo since there's nothing to emphasise at this beat.
15. 02:07:965 (4,5) - Whistle on 5's head instead?
16. 02:19:672 (4,5) - whistle on 5 instead of 4?
17. 02:25:160 (4,5) - ^, the other way around
18. 02:38:514 (3) - This should have a whistle as well.
19. 02:46:562 (1) - Missed finish on head.
20. 02:50:404 (6) - Whistle on this beat would be cool.
21. 03:08:879 (2,3) - This feels pretty awkward, why are you setting a beat at 03:09:245 - when there is no actual beat to begin with in the track >< Just delete 3 and extend 2 to this point.
22. 03:12:721 (8) - Should have a whistle as well and mb delete the one at 03:12:904 (1) -
23. 03:18:300 (5) - Whistle?
24. 03:18:940 (2,3) - What, it sounds like you confused whistle and clap here lol. Clap should be on 3 and whistle on 2.
25. 03:42:904 (4) - Whistle should be here as well.
26. 03:45:831 (3,5,6) - Set whistles here would be good.
27. 04:25:343 (3) - ^ 04:26:806 (1) - ^ 04:37:050 (3) - ^04:52:782 (5) - ^ on head
28. 05:12:446 (2,3) - I have the strong belief that this is blanketable.

Pho wrote:

Ayyy recheck time! /o/ Focussing on HS now with some smaller issues inbetween.

Bold: Fix quickly/unrankable stuff
Red: Highly recommend

[General]

1. Can I get confirmation about the metadata? The romanization of the artist's name still give me doubts. <.< catching japanese BNs now to confirm. i couldnt

[Lunatic]

1. 00:07:050 (1,2,3,4,5) - SO these whistles still feel inconsistent here lol. Sorry for not putting in a suggestion from my other mod, so try the following:
   Set the whistles at 00:07:050 - 00:07:233 - 00:07:416 - 00:07:782 - 00:07:965 - 00:08:331 - and delete the one at 00:08:696 (2) - .
2. 00:16:562 (5) - How about clap on head as well, you can clearly hear it in the track at this point.
3. 00:21:318 (7) - Whistle on tail would be nice since you are following the strings with it. Delete it on 00:21:684 (1) - the head instead.
4. 00:22:599 (6,8) - Delete whistles on these and on 00:23:148 (1) - 's head and set a whistle on 00:22:782 (7) - instead.
5. 00:32:934 (5) - Missed whistle on head.
6. 00:37:050 (1) - I can hear a cymbal on head, finish
7. 00:39:062 (4) - Could delete this whistle, it feels overhitsounded. I feels cleaner if you only set your whistles on strong emphasized vocal beats at this part.i hitsounded the background music, not vocal so i'd like to keep
8. 01:00:465 (3,6) - Finish on these?
9. 01:16:562 (3,4) - How about whistle on 3 instead? for this i want to hitsound the vocal on (4) so let me keep
10. 01:37:233 (2,2,2,2,3) - I think setting whistles at these would make for a pretty interesting effect. Same at 01:40:160 (2,2,2,2) -
11. 01:44:001 (3) - Whistle on head please.
12. 01:53:056 (6,9) - How about whistling on these instead of 01:53:148 (7) - to follow the melody better.
13. 02:01:745 (3,5) - Whistle on 3 instead of 5 makes more sense to follow the vocal better.
14. 02:03:940 (9) - Delete this whistles, it's overhitsounded imo since there's nothing to emphasise at this beat.
15. 02:07:965 (4,5) - Whistle on 5's head instead?
16. 02:19:672 (4,5) - whistle on 5 instead of 4?
17. 02:25:160 (4,5) - ^, the other way around
18. 02:38:514 (3) - This should have a whistle as well.
19. 02:46:562 (1) - Missed finish on head.
20. 02:50:404 (6) - Whistle on this beat would be cool.
21. 03:08:879 (2,3) - This feels pretty awkward, why are you setting a beat at 03:09:245 - when there is no actual beat to begin with in the track >< Just delete 3 and extend 2 to this point.
22. 03:12:721 (8) - Should have a whistle as well and mb delete the one at 03:12:904 (1) - added and keep whistle on (1)
23. 03:18:300 (5) - Whistle?
24. 03:18:940 (2,3) - What, it sounds like you confused whistle and clap here lol. Clap should be on 3 and whistle on 2. lol drunk me
25. 03:42:904 (4) - Whistle should be here as well.
26. 03:45:831 (3,5,6) - Set whistles here would be good. ups, pan changed this pattern and i forgot to hitsound lol
27. 04:25:343 (3) - ^ 04:26:806 (1) - ^ 04:37:050 (3) - ^04:52:782 (5) - ^ on head
28. 05:12:446 (2,3) - I have the strong belief that this is blanketable.

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