hi smsh
General-source is "
Kantai Collection ~KanColle~" (or you can go with the japanese version)
-add tags " 終焉の輝き" (original album title, you just put the translation) also add into tags all the people part of this song like kamase-tor
a (you forgot the A in tora in your map description) , iceon, neiro etc also for when you said "original title" it deceives people for, its not the original title but the song that this is arranged from, 'original song' would be better. add 'C87' since this is where it was released
-add 1000-1500 audio lead in for a total of the recommended 2000ms
-maybe a custom clap? default doesnt match this at all ;-;
Catharsis-00:00:707 (1,2) - just a nazi point but if you move it to the left, the transition from 1 to 2 would be so much smoother, consider this throughout the map
-00:07:441 (2,3,4,5) -
should be snapped to 1/6 heres a visual for the rhythm
http://puu.sh/gHxWD/251affaf39.jpg but i'd recommend something like this
http://puu.sh/gHxZ4/20ce2bc676.jpg for easier playability
-00:10:911 (3,4,5) - ^
same thing applies for anywhere else in the map you hear this similar tune-00:12:135 (1) - try to split this up into 2 sliders like you did here 00:12:952 (2,3) - it plays a lot better
-00:16:013 (4,5) - this rhythm seems really random and doesnt really play well, id suggest 2 circles instead like this
http://puu.sh/gHy8V/bc1ecdbae7.jpg-00:17:033 (1) - your current rhythm doesnt really follow music, how about this
http://puu.sh/gHykF/f46d0a4e06.jpg-00:28:258 (5) - 2 circles would work alot better imo, this effect with the 1/4 sldier doesnt really match the music imo
-00:33:972 (2) - how about this rhythm, i think it follows music better
http://puu.sh/gHyuo/45031d2377.jpg-00:36:217 (4,5,6,7,1) - i don't feel that the 1/4's here are dominant to map but oh well :p
-01:34:992 - the streamy sound kind of stops here for a bit so why not put a slider here instead? i think it would be so much easier to play especially since you put a surprise stream right after a spinner
http://puu.sh/gHyM9/97608962dd.jpg-02:06:625 (2) - wowidontlikehowthissliderlooksitskindofuglyimo
-02:11:115 (4,1) - space this out better, compared to previous stuff its so close
-02:13:768 (3,4,5) -
these should be snapped to 1/3 and i'd recommend a repeat slider since 1/3 notes are hard to hit
http://puu.sh/gHz0c/11af1e86f7.jpg-02:14:584 (1,2,3) - ^
-02:17:441 (9) - i dont think this is suppose to be 1/8, 1/4 works just fine
-02:17:850 - it'd be nice if this downbeat was clickable, its very strong and it doesnt play well imo when its not clickable
-02:16:217 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2) - so in summary for this whole section, listen to the music again, the 1/4's are only dominant starting from 02:17:033 - so imo 02:16:217 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - should just be mapped normally to 1/2, avoid overmapping places like this. change 02:17:441 (2) - to 1/4 and maybe remove a repeat so you can add a circle at 02:17:850 - or something
-02:24:788 (3) - 2 circles feel better imo
-02:25:605 (5,6) - i feel like these 1/4's are overmapped again, same reason as previous the 1/4's are just not dominant here. this song has constant 1/4's playing faintly in the music, and sometimes you just randomly map them which definetely doesn't feel right to play, try to only make streams when they are clearly indicated in the music such as places like 01:13:156 - , 02:42:339 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - (where instruments are clearly 1/4) or 01:18:666 - (where drums are clearly 1/4) not sure why i decided to mention this now but it applies to the rest of the map too where i see streams following barely audible sounds
like here 00:45:605 (4,5,6,7,8) - 02:29:278 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - etc.. hope you fix these
-02:31:319 (3,4) -
these should not be 1/8 mapping them in 1/2 is fine, there are beats on the red ticks
-02:33:360 (4) - sliders like these aren't safe for rank anymore
-02:35:196 (3,4) - not sure why you choose this rhythm personally i think it looses emphasis, either a 1/4 repeat or 3 circles would be better, but if you decide to keep this at least space it out more
-02:35:809 (1) - how about mapping the instruments here? feels weird to just skip them
http://puu.sh/gHzVp/5358cd7e74.jpg-02:37:441 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6) - whats with this weirdly spaced stream? i'd suggest to either clean it up or if you want that stream gap something like this may look nicer
http://puu.sh/gHA7x/8e9ec9932b.jpg heres the code if you would like to use it
SPOILER108,140,157441,5,0,0:0:0:0:
104,168,157543,1,0,0:0:0:0:
100,196,157645,1,0,0:0:0:0:
96,224,157747,1,0,0:0:0:0:
132,244,157850,5,0,0:0:0:0:
136,272,157952,1,0,0:0:0:0:
140,300,158054,1,0,0:0:0:0:
144,328,158156,1,0,0:0:0:0:
184,352,158258,5,0,0:0:0:0:
228,364,158360,1,0,0:0:0:0:
272,360,158462,1,0,0:0:0:0:
312,344,158564,1,0,0:0:0:0:
420,296,158666,2,0,L|460:260,1,45,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
412,200,158870,2,0,L|445:169,1,45
02:42:339 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - same thing with the stream, you can fix it yourself this time lol also why not continue the stream at 02:43:156 - ? you can still hear the guitar
-02:46:421 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - doesnt look very nice imo , i tried fixing it but this shape just doesnt really work out, i'd suggest to just make a normall shaped stream lol
-03:07:849 (11) - add NC to indicate spacing change
-03:14:992 (1) - this is an awkward place to put a spinner, there no increasing sound in the music please just remove it ;--;
-03:23:156 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - hh why so undermapped? :<
-03:25:401 (3,4,5) - this rhythm is very awkward to play how about something like this
http://puu.sh/gHACW/9f099b8453.jpg-03:33:768 (6) - just put 1 circle at 03:33:768 - , theres nothing on the blue tick
-04:07:237 (1,2,3,1,2) - s
hould be all snapped to 1/3, snap them exactly like this picture
http://puu.sh/gHAQr/da1b604c44.jpg-04:09:686 -
don't halve the bpm here just to make the slider slower well at least i think you should not do this, correct me if im wrong, the lowest you ca go is 0.5 for a reason, osu doesnt want a surprise slider that is super slow, so you shouldnt add an uninherited timing point where it isnt needed
okay i'll continue this mod another time, i didnt go into placements and hitsounds since i'm tired, a lot of your rhythms need some improvement, i think i should of pointed them all out here, your rhythm should be good if you follow alot of the bold / highly suggested points. as for your placements.. uh generally fine but imo flow isnt so good you mostly go in zigzags which doesnt feel good to play, circular flows flow a lot better for me, but test out some different flows and test your map often to see how they go. if you need help you can ask me in-game
well, thanks for mapping this song, i was waiting for a map of it,i mapped another song from the same album,but i also quite liked this one hope you can improve it some more and rank it one day
good luck
edit: talked in game, won't be modding other diffs