[Kyoko]Thanks for the help.
00:14:317 (2) - Align with both start and end. Like http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8597 - fixed, I'm still bad at slider art
00:17:590 (3) - How about move 1 grid right? - moved
00:18:681 (1) - ^ - moved
00:10:772 (4) - [Suggestion] How about move 1 grid down? - moved
00:13:772 (4,5) - How about move 1 grid down? - moved
00:15:953 (6,7,8) - Umm... I worried about this pattern... Maybe I prefer other pattern instead of this... - I redesigned the slider to be prettier and "coil"-shaped to fit the title of the source. I think it's intuitive enough that because the combo is progressing left, the slider will begin by going left. If this isn't intuitive someone will probably tell me.
00:20:590 (3,4) - [Suggestion] How about move 1 grid left? - moved
00:59:044 (4,5) - [Suggestion] How about move 1 grid up? - moved
00:31:772 (2) - [Suggestion] It seems little hidden... - switched the direction of the combo from right then down to down then right
00:34:908 (8,1) - Not good jump ;_; - connected it to the next stream
00:35:726 (6,1) - ^ - connected it to the next 1
01:16:226 (1) - [Suggestion] Make its end slience? - I just figured out how to do this, it's done now
Good luck for your 1st song :3