Jerry Barnes Quiana - Moon without the stars

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Pappy

gokugohan12468 wrote:

BG is wrong <..<
I know, this one is from Revolution Era. ;-; I just can't find backround from this song in good quality...
KittyAdventure

Pappy wrote:

gokugohan12468 wrote:

BG is wrong <..<
I know, this one is from Revolution Era. ;-; I just can't find backround from this song in good quality...
Wait, i have~
XinCrin use that BG~ :3
So, ask with XinCrin~


Can i add you as friend? :P
Topic Starter
Pappy
K I'll ask him lol

Ofc you can I added you too :3
Trynna
[average]

00:11:682 - try add a circle here
od 4 would be better I think

sorry for small mod :c
Topic Starter
Pappy

Firewest wrote:

[average]

00:11:682 - try add a circle here Not fit for this diff.
od 4 would be better I think You're right, changed!

sorry for small mod :c No problem, every help is appreciated for me <3

+Changed artist, so redownload.
BluOxy
NM here.

[Normal]
00:18:321(2) you can blanket this slider more carefully. if you changed this, also change 00:19:797. ...Uhm,at least this one is lowest diff and this slider is overlap so you should be carefull about that.
00:23:731(1) same, here is overlap so you must be carefull.
00:30:125(5) ^
00:31:600(1) ^
00:35:534(1) ^
00:43:403(1) ^
00:47:829(2) ^
00:52:256(3) ^
00:55:944(3) ^
01:01:108(1) ^ ...it'll be endless so I won't write more :)



[Hard]
01:16:231 (3) this red sliderpoint should move to blue line. like this
Hm,other part is no problem! very nice mapping.

I couldn't find many problem on this map, so kudosu for you~
And, This SB is awesome! I want to make Insane, Can I? ;) Anyway good luck X)

repost:alright about Insane! Good luck :D
Topic Starter
Pappy
Keeping sliderpoint in hard, I like as it is. About normal, I can't do anything with this because if I click at numbers it says "wrong format" so I don't know what do you mean, sorry. :< Okay I got it. Changed Stack Lenciency, this should help. Also after thinking moved sliderpoint. o3o

About insane, I want this mapset to be done fully by me, I'm sorry. :c

Thank you for mod and star! o3o
Jemmmmy
soft finish a little bit delay
use this http://puu.sh/fvkVr/8e10bac3c3.wav
[normal]
00:39:469 (1) -
[hard]
00:18:567 -

serious, it's good to go!! beautiful song
Topic Starter
Pappy
Fixed slider in normal, rhytm issue on hard and delay on hitsound. Thank you Jemmmmy! :3
I should fix also lirycs but I'm too lazy to do that. D:
-[ Asuna ]-

General


preview point is a bit more faster and feels "i need to wait, is this gud song?", im suggest move it a bit backward at 00:46:846

Normal

  1. 00:11:436 (3) - why no 1/2 slider to consistent with the ritme as previous ?
  2. 00:15:616 (4) - remove this sounds nice for me
  3. 00:24:469 (2,3) - not stacked propely and looks a bit weird, if can't stacked properly cuz distance problem, try to repair blanket at 00:23:731 (1) - , maybe something like this can help you to stack them properly + (improve the blanket) http://puu.sh/fw91B/40e579561e.jpg
  4. 00:26:928 (2) - i dont hear anything in the red tick even i play it in 50% playback, change it into circle in the white tick or repeat the previous slider than make an 1/2 slider
  5. 00:30:125 (5,1) - try to add spinner, and i think this part is a good place to add a spinner, remove and change into spinner *timeline
  6. 00:33:321 (1) - since the tail's feels follow nothing, how about make it like previous part *timeline
  7. 00:39:469 (1) - stack properly ?
  8. 00:40:452 (2) - curve to other side for better flow
  9. 00:41:436 (1,2) - feels empty and a bit awkward at 00:41:682, change (1) into 1/1 and remove reverse at (2) then move into 00:42:174 -,*timeline
  10. 00:45:125 - add note ? isn't part like 00:15:616 - , so you can add a note here i guess, the sound more loud than previous
  11. 01:14:879 (1,2) - the follow is a bit awkward, make it more natural please :3

Hard
  1. 00:10:698 - why not adding note? feels awkward w/o note here
  2. 00:38:977 (5,6) - i just thinking this is should be 1/2 slider instead
  3. 00:47:092 (3,1) - i dont know what to say but i want to move it a bit down like http://puu.sh/fwhvD/71237b99d7.jpg
  4. 01:06:272 (4) - i'd like (4) stack with tail's of (2)
  5. 01:14:879 (1) - i'd like ctrl+g this, its make it more fun to play, jump in new combo
  6. 01:16:600 (4,1) - i dont think its good doubling the distance, 1.5x or 1.7x is enough i guess

ok thats it
nice map and song~
hope this helped and Good luck!!~

EDIT: idk what should i do with my kds
Topic Starter
Pappy

-[ Asuna ]- wrote:

General


preview point is a bit more faster and feels "i need to wait, is this gud song?", im suggest move it a bit backward at 00:46:846 Preview Point in Deemo game is the same so keeping, it's just some ms plz.

Normal

  1. 00:11:436 (3) - why no 1/2 slider to consistent with the ritme as previous ? Idk, simple note feels better for me. ;w;
  2. 00:15:616 (4) - remove this sounds nice for me Leaving it for piano sound.
  3. 00:41:436 (1,2) - feels empty and a bit awkward at 00:41:682, change (1) into 1/1 and remove reverse at (2) then move into 00:42:174 -,*timeline I like as it is. D:
  4. 00:45:125 - add note ? isn't part like 00:15:616 - , so you can add a note here i guess, the sound more loud than previous There isn't any place do do this, adding this note would let me move every note after this. D:
  5. 01:14:879 (1,2) - the follow is a bit awkward, make it more natural please :3

Hard
  1. 00:38:977 (5,6) - i just thinking this is should be 1/2 slider instead I like as it is. D:
  2. 00:47:092 (3,1) - i dont know what to say but i want to move it a bit down like http://puu.sh/fwhvD/71237b99d7.jpg There's no need to do this. D:

ok thats it
nice map and song~
hope this helped and Good luck!!~

EDIT: idk what should i do with my kds

Omg thanks for mod and all stars. <3
Xgor
Slender man love story :? ...anyways SB modding time.

[Files&Images]
You have two osb's right now. Remove Jerry Barnes & Quiana - Moon Without the Stars (Pappy).osb as it's the unused one.

There is no reason that the images in the Storyboard is in png. They are really huge with images over a megabyte. Just change them to jpg,

this folder...

(If you don't want to be remembered as the "Lirycs guy" you should probably fix the name. )

All the lyric images has quite a lot of unused transparency. Please crop them

[SB Load]

Xgor wrote:

You haven't removed the background image even if you don't use it in the SB at all
How to do it here (t/55177)
As the default color when you remove the screen will be black you won't need the black image you have behind the background at all time.
If you do these things you'll save +2 SB load!
[Storyboard Design]
Quite a lot of the moving background images doesn't cover the whole background when in widescreen. Scale them up slightly so things like this dosn't happen
Nhawak
Hello Pappy <3

Little IRC mod in the normal diff o3o

15:12 Nhawak: IRC mod? owo
15:13 Pappy: okay
15:14 *Nhawak is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/598365 Jerry Barnes Quiana - Moon without the stars [Normal]]
15:14 Nhawak: 00:23:731 -
15:15 Nhawak: try y 164 ;w;
15:16 Nhawak: 00:39:469 -
15:16 Nhawak: http://puu.sh/fE4wJ/5bf23371ac.jpg
15:17 Nhawak: try this :3
15:17 Nhawak: is more beautiful <3
15:18 Pappy: l
15:18 Pappy: k
15:18 Pappy: *
15:18 Nhawak: 00:43:403 -
15:18 Nhawak: x 168 :3
15:18 Nhawak: y***
15:19 Nhawak: OH
15:19 Nhawak: y 327***************
15:19 Nhawak: sorry
15:19 *Nhawak runs
15:21 Pappy: k
15:23 Nhawak: hard diff is perfect for me <3
15:23 Pappy: Glad to hear it <3
15:24 Nhawak: sorry for the poor mod
15:24 Nhawak: :'<

Awesome Mapper, Beautiful Song <333333
Good luck <3
Sieg
hello there

[General]
  1. You have 2 osb files in your beatmap directory.
  2. offset +8


[Normal]

  • 00:47:092 (2) - consider to remove this one, catch rhythm is much easier from strong downbeat especially for normal level players.


[Hard]

  • 00:47:092 (3,1) - perfect stack?
Topic Starter
Pappy
Sieg - applied all, thank you! o3o

But I haven't done things from Xgor's SB mod yet, in progress. D:
Mystyk
Hi from my queue!

[General]
Please remove this 00:00:133 - green line from both difficulties since it's unrankable: http://puu.sh/fZhs2/ee265128ad.png
An inherited timing section may be placed on an uninherited timing section (but only to change the slider speed).
You didn't use any SV changes so the green line has to be removed.

[Normal]
  1. 00:19:305 (3,1) - please don't do such a confusing stack, please unstack them, example: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2767191
  2. 00:30:125 (1,1) - there has to be more space between the spinner and the object afterwards on Normal, so try this? - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2767133
  3. 00:35:043 (5,1) - I would also unstack these, because afterwards there is 1/2 which is also stacked, so it would be easier to tell which one is 1/2 and which one isn't if this wasn't stacked
  4. 00:42:911 (3,1) - the sliderend is too close to (3) imo which could also be confusing, just an example: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2767283
  5. 00:51:026 (4) - there is a bit too much 1/2 here in my opinion, so if you at least removed (4) it would be better (just remake the pattern a little bit) - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2767337
  6. 01:02:338 (2) - same here, I would remove (2) and instead, I would only add a hit circle here 01:02:338 - to make it a bit easier
  7. 01:16:846 (1) - try to move the sliderend further from the sliderbeginning

[Hard]
Well I don't really have a problem with this difficulty, but that star shape at the end could be nicer. Maybe a few things...
00:29:395 (1) - looks like an unnecessary new combo, I would remove it
00:56:198 (3) - personally it is annoying that you don't map to vocals here, since it's a hard diff, I would rather play more, than just playing a long slider, but as I said it's really a personal opinion
00:58:165 (3) - same here ^

Also please wait until I ask someone about the artist.

FORGOT TO MENTION:
00:46:608 - it would be nice if you could resnap the preview point on both difficulties >.< sorry that I forgot to mention it earlier - http://puu.sh/fZsI8/2e933b6c82.jpg
XinCrin
A quick mod here :o

General

  1. 00:08:001 - 00:13:903 The custom Clap doesnt fit with the music at the beginning , I would really like if you remove them and use another sound.


Normall

  1. 00:08:001 (1,2) The current blanket doesn't look very good at all, Maybe you could try something like this:
  2. 00:13:411 (3) I suggest you to add a Whistle at the beginning of this slider, fits very good with the music
  3. 00:13:903 (1) Whistle (^)
  4. 00:20:542 (2,3) Stacked objects could be a bit confusing for beginner players, since this is the easiest diff in the whole mapset. You should consider unstack them
  5. 00:24:477 (2) (^)
  6. 00:45:378 (1) I feel this NC very unnecessary. What to about to remove it?
  7. 00:55:214 (1) Finish doesn't feel very good at here in my opinion. Maybe you should remove it


Hard

  1. 00:13:411 (3) A whistle at the beginning of this slider gives a good touch
  2. 00:14:395 (4,6) You should consider to CTRL+G these slider, since if you keep the current pattern there will be an antijump at (4). But if you don't want to do this, you should add a NC at (4) because of and antijump.
  3. 00:32:100 (2) I feel that the NC should be at here because of voice rhythm change


Really cool beatmap, good luck with the ranking :)
HootOwlStar
Short and late mod from #modreqs :3
My favourite Deemo song of all times BTW #yay
Anyway, MISSION START!!!

General


  1. Nice song
  2. Nice storyboard
  3. Nice skin
  4. Nice mapper and storyboarder
    What could I say more lol

Normal


  • Mostly suggestions so you cn simply ignore them if you want lol
  1. 00:08:001 (1,2) - XinCrin's suggestion looks better for this so maybe you can try?
  2. 00:14:395 (2,3) - Avoid the pattern that two curve sliders in same orientation and same direction appearing in same time for design. At least you should Ctrl+H 00:14:395 (2)
  3. 00:18:329 (2,3,1) - The flow seems unnatural here. You don't really need to symmetry for 00:18:329 (2,1) and the note 00:19:313 (3) seems breaking the flow. Making 00:19:805 (1) straight seems more better. You can try sth similar to this instead
  4. 01:15:870 (2) - Follow vocals better. You can try this
  5. 01:16:854 (1) - The star is not similar to the star in Hard diff. There is sth like this so can it be fixed idk
    Nice diff overall

Hard


  1. 00:10:952 (3,4) - The distance between two notes to make sth like imperfect stack idk is different w/ 00:08:001 (1,2). Try to make 00:10:952 (3,4) be more closer
  2. 00:12:673 (2,3) - Suggestion: for 00:12:673 (2), move slider to x:300 y:340, move red turning point to x:256 y:324 and move slider end to x:212 y:340. Just minor change for slider design to make the slider nt too bump-out (?). And sth similar w/ 00:13:411 (3), 00:24:231 (3,4), and 01:05:051 (1,2)
  3. 00:30:133 (1) - tat slider nvm let us go on
  4. 00:56:198 (3,1) - As stated, try avoid the pattern that two curve sliders in same orientation and same direction appearing in same time. You cn try somewhat concept like this
  5. 01:16:608 (4) - Make it to single note will do, in my opinion

I know my suggestions like sh*t so if you hv problems, feel free to PM me or find me in-game
Overall well-polished mapset, ald could be ready for ranked
Anyway, good luck for both of us
Topic Starter
Pappy

HootOwlStar wrote:

Short and late mod from #modreqs :3
My favourite Deemo song of all times BTW #yay
Anyway, MISSION START!!!

General


  1. Nice song
  2. Nice storyboard
  3. Nice skin
  4. Nice mapper and storyboarder
    What could I say more lol

Normal


  • Mostly suggestions so you cn simply ignore them if you want lol
  1. 00:14:395 (2,3) - Avoid the pattern that two curve sliders in same orientation and same direction appearing in same time for design. At least you should Ctrl+H 00:14:395 (2) It plays and looks nice, so why I should change it?
  2. 00:18:329 (2,3,1) - The flow seems unnatural here. You don't really need to symmetry for 00:18:329 (2,1) and the note 00:19:313 (3) seems breaking the flow. Making 00:19:805 (1) straight seems more better. You can try sth similar to this instead Flow on 1/1 in normal, I didn't know that it exists. It plays nice, so keeping as it is.
  3. 01:15:870 (2) - Follow vocals better. You can try this I wanted to use very plain rhytms at this moment, so keeping.

Hard


  1. 00:10:952 (3,4) - The distance between two notes to make sth like imperfect stack idk is different w/ 00:08:001 (1,2). Try to make 00:10:952 (3,4) be more closer It's okay for me.
  2. 00:12:673 (2,3) - Suggestion: for 00:12:673 (2), move slider to x:300 y:340, move red turning point to x:256 y:324 and move slider end to x:212 y:340. Just minor change for slider design to make the slider nt too bump-out (?). And sth similar w/ 00:13:411 (3), 00:24:231 (3,4), and 01:05:051 (1,2) I want to keep as it is.
  3. 00:56:198 (3,1) - As stated, try avoid the pattern that two curve sliders in same orientation and same direction appearing in same time. You cn try somewhat concept like thisIt would change rhytm too much comparing to other patterns, so keeping.
  4. 01:16:608 (4) - Make it to single note will do, in my opinion Keeping because guitar.

I know my suggestions like sh*t so if you hv problems, feel free to PM me or find me in-game
Overall well-polished mapset, ald could be ready for ranked
Anyway, good luck for both of us
Sorry that I denied so much stuff. :<

XinCrin wrote:

A quick mod here :o

General

  1. 00:08:001 - 00:13:903 The custom Clap doesnt fit with the music at the beginning , I would really like if you remove them and use another sound. I don't have anyone that fits :<


Normall

  1. 00:55:214 (1) Finish doesn't feel very good at here in my opinion. Maybe you should remove it Imo it fits, so I'll keep it.

Thanks you both, you helped me alot! :D

I also applied Xgor's mod. So,
RE-DOWNLOAD PLS
Sieg
find me ingame
we did few adjustments and beatmap should be ready to go now

metadata confirmation from Deemo
also
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jQYiTz82WQk
those 2 spaces are pretty much legit

to qualifying bn: recheck sb lyrics before qualifying, please
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