1. Heavy (2,25 stars, 252 notes)
2. Light (1,48 stars, 175 notes)

1. you don't have a preview point

1. 00:47:509 (6,1,2) - what about to do something like this? you'll have a better flow with it o3o
   
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2. 01:12:055 (1,2) - for bought a ctrl+g would be so nice *-* you'll have a perfect flow for the prew objects
3. 01:15:327 (3) - is the whistle here intentional? because in the other parts i can't hear that you used it
4. 01:38:782 (6) - ctrl + g ?
5. 01:44:782 - what about to add a circle here with a finish it will match better with the sound in the song
6. 02:32:236 (5) - you forgot a clap on slider start

1. 01:15:327 (2) - whistle on slider end should be removed due is no other in the msp
2. 01:41:509 (2) - missing clap on slider end
3. 01:44:782 - what about to add a circle here with a finish it will match better with the sound in the song (same as hard)
4. 02:12:327 (2,3) - i think a slider will fitt better here imo the two circles look a bit ugly ;_;

Kaguya Hourain wrote:

Hi I'm just bored >.>

General

1. KIAI TIME IS TOGGLED ON FOR LESS THAN 15 SECONDS *shot*
2. Maybe a SB mod is needed? Not sure since you don't have that many things. I don't think I could mess up that storyboard, I am not that bad with SBs
3. No custom samples to check offset at
4. Tbh offset +1 lol, okay

Light

1. Pretty sure this can work with AR4 4,5.
2. 00:51:327 (4,5,6) - This feels really awkward. Ctrl + h and readjusting to follow sliderpath would feel much better. I've changed that, but in another way
3. 01:30:600 (5) - 116|63? Then 01:31:691 (1,2) - to 47|244 for better flow and 2 blanket with 5? nah, I did not intend to make a blanket here and I kinda don't want to. :C as for the flow, I prefer it as it is.
4. 01:40:418 (1,2) - Almost overlap, sort of looks almost bad. Place 2 a little lower o/ sure
5. 01:43:691 (5,6) - If you don't care about symmetry so much you could make these a slider! I want to emphasize this part and the symmetry does this "emphasis" nicely :c
6. 01:44:782 (1) - This could use a normal-hitfinish on it. indeed
7. I feel the whole part between the kiais has no musical progression that feels right. I also don't fancy the reverse 1/1 sliders a lot here either, they feel too dragged and feel like they could be replaced by 1/1 slider + circle or new slider. I also believe you've placed some 1/2 on some random places to make it more interesting whereas the 1/2 could be in parts that fit the song much more in this timeframe! For example:
   02:02:236 (1,2) - Starting off with 1/2 here doesn't really tell a lot about how the song will progress. Giving a 1/2 at the start signifies that you will have lots of 1/2 in the section. I would get rid of this one.
   02:05:509 (5,6) - I believe that using 1/2 in the end here would fit more instead of using them in the beginning~ this one here is for the contast with previous 4-circles-ppattern. I could replace it with an 1/1 pattern, but that sounds kinda weird, in my opinion.
   02:06:600 (1) - Same for 1/2 usage at the start! and this one is for consistency
   02:09:873 (4,5) - You've done it nicely here >.< yay \w/
   02:10:964 (1,2) - If you're gonna use 1/2 here it would be better if you used it in a similar fashion 02:13:145 (3,4) - here. welll, this one should go away @.@
   Basically that would be the best pattern you can go with. Spam 1/1 from NC to where I suggested a 1/2 use~ The examples you've pointed out were explained/fixed, as for the rest of the prat, I've changed something else but I still want to keep the rhythm as it is now, I believe it makes sense with the song and fits well
8. 02:45:873 (1,2) - Move 1 to 394|199 for better flow from the previous slider and, as before, 2's sliderend feels too close to 1's body. You should probably make 2's sliderend head a little bit more to the left. moved o/

Heavy

1. OD to 7? no way, the song isn't asking for anything harder than this. :c
2. 00:41:509 (6,7) - I uhhh don't get the spacing increase here, too large to just signify some drumclaps. Try 1,4 DS \:D/ I'll go with 1,5
3. 00:51:327 (5,6,7) - See here there's not even remotely a spacing increase while you still have the exact same music! You should make the small jump consistent from the previous section.
4. 00:59:782 (5,6,7) - Try 1,4DS on 6 here as well, and make it so that 6 is 1,4 away from both 5 and 7~ 1,5
5. 01:09:327 (4) - 58|244 otherwise it feels off with the rest of the antijumps. yeah, my bad
6. 01:17:509 (7,8) - Minor unstack here move 8 a bit lower to stack properly~ at least I tried to
7. 01:44:782 (1) - Same as Light yeah!
8. Cool kiai 1!
9. 02:09:873 (7,8,9) - This time the increased spacing is between 8 and 9 1,5 will stay here
10. 02:13:418 (5,6) - I don't think you have made a spacing increase for this particular clap anywhere else in the map. The DS has been kept consistent throughout, please do so here as well. whoops
11. 02:18:600 (7,8) - I feel slider 7 really doesn't fit here since you kinda wanna click the clap that's now at the slider's red tick. You should make that a circle and use DS increase accordingly~ yep, nice catch
12. 02:39:327 (5,7) - I don't really fancy the small overlap between starting points in these two sliders :/ fixed that o/
13. 02:43:691 (5,6) - Stack here again, move 5 a bit higher <: sure
14. 02:43:418 (4,8) - Not sure if intentional but stack these properly. Just copy 8 and paste it on 4 since 8 is a better blanket than 4. nah, that stuff isn't even noticeablle in-game
15. 02:48:055 (5) - Well inconsistency for the win right? You should really make this 1/2 sliders since that's basically what you're doing in the kiais. yep, did that
16. 02:53:509 (7,8,1,2,3) - Oh my god I love this! ha-ha :3
17. 03:05:236 (4,6) - I also don't like how these two overlap You should move 6 a little lower. sure

Yes, good song!

Loved the concept in the kiai with the crossed sliders >.<

Good luck!~

Inyuschan wrote:

So fast lol

Sieg wrote:

quality matters