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kajiyatta
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2017年1月14日 at 19:51:44

Artist: Okui Masami
Title: FISSION
Source: グリザイアの楽園 -LE EDEN DE LA GRISAIA-
Tags: frontwing eroge opening visual novel grisaia no rakuen
BPM: 173
Filesize: 16388kb
Play Time: 01:39
Difficulties Available:
  1. Easy (1.4 stars, 105 notes)
  2. Hard (3.07 stars, 251 notes)
  3. Insane (4.51 stars, 348 notes)
  4. Normal (1.85 stars, 154 notes)
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Meyrink
1st *-*)/

M4M From My Queue

General
  1. Make the Video Silent without audio , for reducing map's file size
  2. BG size better with 1366x768 ! u can use this one Background
  3. Use these comfortable colors ! for the BG u used
    Combo Colors
    Combo1 : 242,158,96
    Combo2 : 182,108,255
    Combo3 : 255,255,128
    Combo4 : 255,128,194
  4. Disable Countdown in all diffs , and widescreen support since u don't have storyboard
  5. 00:11:128 - useless Kiai
  6. 01:20:319 - dunno why everyone says kiai should start from white tick , and better to make all those 2 parts in one (Check Aimod)
Easy
  1. 00:01:070 (1,2,3) - dunno about rhythm here i tried and look wierd dunno why , try somthing like this if u liked
  2. 00:01:070 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - to tell u truth all this rhythm here sound weird ! try to remake that part to find the best rhythm ! maby u can use the rhythm u did here 01:07:660 -
  3. 00:04:191 - map out this piano
  4. 00:17:197 (5) - maby better to end it in red tick ! that sound is louder
  5. 00:25:001 (2,1) - Almost Touched try to make them like 00:08:353 (1,2) -
  6. 01:26:041 (1) - maby 1/2 slider sound better but dunno if u like to do it ! ( 1/2 sliders are allowed in easy diff tho )
  7. 01:31:590 (1) - ^
Normal
  1. 00:04:018 (4,5,6) - i suggest this rhythm
  2. 00:17:197 (2) - try to use this rhythm
  3. 01:36:966 (1) - make it 1/1 and add circle here 01:37:486 (2) -
Hard
  1. 00:08:353 (1,2) - not good flow !
  2. 00:11:128 (1,2) - Blanket slightly off
  3. 00:19:972 (5) - stack it perfectly with 00:19:105 (3) - or 00:18:584 (2) -
  4. 00:32:977 (4,5) - Blanket slightly off
  5. 00:49:798 (4) - too far from 00:49:278 (3) -
  6. 01:03:845 (1) - ^ sudden big spacing
  7. Good flow just try the improve all those blankets and it's totally good
Insane
  1. 00:05:752 (2) - overmapped ! the real sound is actually here 00:05:790 - try to antijump there by deleting it
  2. 00:16:330 (7) - a bit too far
  3. 00:25:868 (3,4,5,1) - inconsistent spacing
  4. sv 1,9 is to much for song ;w; ! 1,8 or 1,7 better for that bpm but yeah it's too late :3

Generally it's a nice mapset ! sorry my mod wasn't that big couldn't find too much and suck at high diffs
i loved also the song ! so starred , and good luck :3
Topic Starter
kajiyatta

Meyrink wrote:

1st *-*)/

M4M From My Queue

General
  1. Make the Video Silent without audio , for reducing map's file size Aliready silinced.
  2. BG size better with 1366x768 ! u can use this one Background
  3. Use these comfortable colors ! for the BG u used I keep them for now, more opinion needed.
    Combo Colors
    Combo1 : 242,158,96
    Combo2 : 182,108,255
    Combo3 : 255,255,128
    Combo4 : 255,128,194
  4. Disable Countdown in all diffs , and widescreen support since u don't have storyboard
  5. 00:11:128 - useless Kiai for effect.
  6. 01:20:319 - dunno why everyone says kiai should start from white tick , and better to make all those 2 parts in one (Check Aimod)It is allowed for effect unless too many use.
Easy
  1. 00:01:070 (1,2,3) - dunno about rhythm here i tried and look wierd dunno why , try somthing like this if u liked
  2. 00:01:070 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - to tell u truth all this rhythm here sound weird ! try to remake that part to find the best rhythm ! maby u can use the rhythm u did here 01:07:660 - It's a intro of music, so I just suppose simple rhythm would be fine for newbie.
  3. 00:04:191 - map out this piano ?
  4. 00:17:197 (5) - maby better to end it in red tick ! that sound is louder No, next white tick has more loud instrumental.
  5. 00:25:001 (2,1) - Almost Touched try to make them like 00:08:353 (1,2) -
  6. 01:26:041 (1) - maby 1/2 slider sound better but dunno if u like to do it ! ( 1/2 sliders are allowed in easy diff tho ) You're right but a bit difficult for newbie I suppose, so I just get more opinion.
  7. 01:31:590 (1) - ^
Normal
  1. 00:04:018 (4,5,6) - i suggest this rhythm
  2. 00:17:197 (2) - try to use this rhythm Sorry current would be fine for me.
  3. 01:36:966 (1) - make it 1/1 and add circle here 01:37:486 (2) - It's a bit difficult I suppose.
Hard
  1. 00:08:353 (1,2) - not good flow ! I don't suppose so.
  2. 00:11:128 (1,2) - Blanket slightly off
  3. 00:19:972 (5) - stack it perfectly with 00:19:105 (3) - or 00:18:584 (2) -
  4. 00:32:977 (4,5) - Blanket slightly off
  5. 00:49:798 (4) - too far from 00:49:278 (3) - It's a ×1.83 distance from previous note, so it is allowed.
  6. 01:03:845 (1) - ^ sudden big spacing Not suddenly, here is a downbeat so it is enough expected.
  7. Good flow just try the improve all those blankets and it's totally good
Insane
  1. 00:05:752 (2) - overmapped ! the real sound is actually here 00:05:790 - try to antijump there by deleting it I just follow the vocal, not blank here.
  2. 00:16:330 (7) - a bit too far ?a bit too?
  3. 00:25:868 (3,4,5,1) - inconsistent spacing It's a intensional jumping.
  4. sv 1,9 is to much for song ;w; ! 1,8 or 1,7 better for that bpm but yeah it's too late :3 Another Ranked map has over SV ×1.9, so it's not problem.

Generally it's a nice mapset ! sorry my mod wasn't that big couldn't find too much and suck at high diffs
i loved also the song ! so starred , and good luck :3
No comment = fixed.
Thanks for modding.
4anke
From My M4M Queue
[general]
00:01:070 - whistle or finish on the beginning of song is better IMO
[easy]
00:06:619 (2) - keep DS there
00:17:197 (5) - NC,00:18:064 (1) - delete NC
00:08:006 - delete whistle
00:42:688 - delete finish
00:58:642 - why not add a circle there?a drum there
[normal]
try this rhythm?
01:33:324 -
01:09:220 (1,2) - blanket,make 01:09:220 (1) - a bit down
01:28:816 (1,2) - -^make 01:28:816 (1) - a bit right
[hard]
00:02:804 (1) - I think this circle is a bit weird delete it?
00:30:550 - try this rhythm
00:36:099 - 00:36:446 - whistle replace clap
01:38:180 (4,5) - bad flow IMO. try this
01:14:249 (6) - I think should not jump there.isn't easy to play,and the song is mild there
[insane]
00:16:937 - add a circle there?
00:26:388 (1) - keep DS there can be easier.
01:26:908 (1) - move NC to 01:27:255 (2) -
01:32:457 (1,2) - -^

Nice mapset I think,starred for you! :)
Topic Starter
kajiyatta

4anke wrote:

From My M4M Queue
[general]
00:01:070 - whistle or finish on the beginning of song is better IMO I know your mean, but there is no instrumental and music. Just consider now.
[easy]
00:06:619 (2) - keep DS there
00:17:197 (5) - NC,00:18:064 (1) - delete NC It's not suitable for music.
00:08:006 - delete whistle To follow the insutrumental.
00:42:688 - delete finish ^
00:58:642 - why not add a circle there?a drum there
[normal]
try this rhythm?
01:33:324 - I suppose it is a bit weird.
01:09:220 (1,2) - blanket,make 01:09:220 (1) - a bit down
01:28:816 (1,2) - -^make 01:28:816 (1) - a bit right
[hard]
00:02:804 (1) - I think this circle is a bit weird delete it? I just follow the piano here.
00:30:550 - try this rhythm No fixed.
00:36:099 - 00:36:446 - whistle replace clap I put whistles in this part for all diffs.
01:38:180 (4,5) - bad flow IMO. try this
01:14:249 (6) - I think should not jump there.isn't easy to play,and the song is mild there I'll get more opinion on here.
[insane]
00:16:937 - add a circle there?
00:26:388 (1) - keep DS there can be easier.
01:26:908 (1) - move NC to 01:27:255 (2) - No.Just put NC when the velocity changed.
01:32:457 (1,2) - -^ ^

Nice mapset I think,starred for you! :)
No comment = fixed.
Thanks for modding.
bigfrog
hello, m4m from queue

Easy
00:29:162 (1) - only use 1 point for bent? looks better :
00:49:972 (3,4) - blanket? just suggestion

Normal
00:29:683 (2,3) - try symmetry??
00:49:278 (2) - maybe this way for flow better :
01:02:977 (2) - place again to fix the weird bent of this slider?
01:09:220 (1,2) - fix blanket
01:32:457 (3) - 40 degrees counterclockwise looks better and maybe can symmetry with 01:33:324 (4) -

Hard
00:59:336 (7) - change to straight slider? since other part like 01:00:723 (3,6) is straight slider

Insane
00:10:781 (3,4,5,6) - this way? just my think :
00:20:319 (3,4) - maybe just my opinion, but i think this pattern flow better :? :
00:35:058 (3) - stack on 00:34:712 (1) might better to hit

that all i can mod, can't find anymore problems :?
nice mapset, GL~
Topic Starter
kajiyatta

bigfrog wrote:

hello, m4m from queue

Easy
00:29:162 (1) - only use 1 point for bent? looks better :
Another changed.
00:49:972 (3,4) - blanket? just suggestion Current flow is better I suppose.

Normal
00:29:683 (2,3) - try symmetry?? symmetry what?
00:49:278 (2) - maybe this way for flow better :
01:02:977 (2) - place again to fix the weird bent of this slider? I don't sseem it is ugly placement, it is enough to play.
01:09:220 (1,2) - fix blanket
01:32:457 (3) - 40 degrees counterclockwise looks better and maybe can symmetry with 01:33:324 (4) - Another changed.

Hard
00:59:336 (7) - change to straight slider? since other part like 01:00:723 (3,6) is straight slider

Insane
00:10:781 (3,4,5,6) - this way? just my think :
I'll consider it, don't have good idea now.
00:20:319 (3,4) - maybe just my opinion, but i think this pattern flow better :? :
00:35:058 (3) - stack on 00:34:712 (1) might better to hit

that all i can mod, can't find anymore problems :?
nice mapset, GL~
No comment = fixed.
Thanks for modding.
-Nanaka-
M4M :)

red: unrankable issue.
blue: maybe unrankable issue.
bold: should fix.


[General]
  1. ソース日本語にして欲しいですゲーム内で見やすいので :( グリザイアの楽園 -LE EDEN DE LA GRISAIA-
  2. 全Diffに言えることなんですがKiaiのVol+10%しませんか?00:31:937 - ここと同じなのはおかしいと思います
  3. Hitsoundに関する指摘は全Diffだと思って見てくれると助かります
[Easy]
  1. 01:02:457 (1) - こういう形あまり好きではなく汚く思うので角度変える感じにしませんか?
[Normal]
  1. 00:06:272 - add whistle
  2. 00:17:197 (2) - 00:17:544 - ここの音が強いのにスルーされてて違和感ありました、普通に赤線まででいいのでは
  3. 00:28:642 - 00:28:816 - ここのピアノを拾うのであれば00:26:388 - 00:27:428 - 00:27:775 - 00:28:295 - ここもwhistle付けるべきだと思います、特に00:27:428 - ここのピアノ音Tickのとこより強いと思うので
  4. 00:31:070 - 上と同じ理由でadd whistle
  5. 00:32:284 - 00:39:914 - ここまでの間のClap流石にうるさくないですか?NormalやEasyなどの低Diffだと音がすくなくスピード感もないのでかなり目立って聞こえました、外したくないのであればVol下げて欲しいです
  6. 00:58:469 (3,4) - やりたいことはわかるんですけど聞こえが良くないと思うので00:58:642 - whistleにしませんか?
  7. 01:08:873 (4) - whistleあったほうが溜めてる感じがするのであってもいいかなと思いました
[Hard]
  1. 00:53:440 (7,8) - Insaneはまだ最高難易度なのであの音取りでいいと思うんですがHardでここを1/4で拾う必要はないと思います、次のと合わせてこうしませんか?
  2. 00:44:769 - すこしさみしいんでClap付けませんか?終点はwhistleでもいいと思うんで
  3. 01:19:105 (1) - Finish欲しいです、個人的には2にも入れたいです;
  4. 01:26:041 (1) - ^
  5. 01:37:486 (2,3) - 見た目は綺麗なんですが流れ急すぎませんか?スライダーの向きと合わさって体感01:38:180 (4,5) - ここと同じだと思うんで、違う感じでもいいんですがこっちの方が断然やりやすいと思います
[Insane]
  1. 00:26:388 (1,2) - このジャンプの意図が分かりませんでした、ボーカルに合わせてるにしてもそこまで強くないと思いますし普通に345と同じ感覚で置いたほうが対応しやすく見栄えもいいかなと
  2. 00:53:440 (5) - ここはNCあったほうがいいと思います
  3. 01:06:966 (3) - つけるならwhistleじゃないですか?かなり違和感あります、個人的には伸びてる音なのでキックスライダー置きたいです
  4. 01:18:238 - add whistle?寂しかったです
  5. 01:19:105 (1) - Hardと同じです、書いてくのも失礼なのでこれ以降省きますね
  6. 01:38:353 (7) - NC?個人的には01:38:006 (5) - ここに入れると視界に入りやすく今時っぽさが出ると思います()
すごく綺麗に音取りされていてあまり指摘できませんでした、申し訳ないです :(
良ければまたM4Mお願いしたいです :) ついでにフレンドも!
頑張ってください :)
mod time:1.5 hour
Topic Starter
kajiyatta

-Nanaka- wrote:

M4M :)

red: unrankable issue.
blue: maybe unrankable issue.
bold: should fix.


[General]
  1. ソース日本語にして欲しいですゲーム内で見やすいので :( グリザイアの楽園 -LE EDEN DE LA GRISAIA-
  2. 全Diffに言えることなんですがKiaiのVol+10%しませんか?00:31:937 - ここと同じなのはおかしいと思います
  3. Hitsoundに関する指摘は全Diffだと思って見てくれると助かります
[Easy]
  1. 01:02:457 (1) - こういう形あまり好きではなく汚く思うので角度変える感じにしませんか? 主観的な問題かもしれませんが、対称的に配置したほうが初心者には読みやすいと思って今の形にしています。
[Normal]
  1. 00:06:272 - add whistle
  2. 00:17:197 (2) - 00:17:544 - ここの音が強いのにスルーされてて違和感ありました、普通に赤線まででいいのでは そうすると、最後に単発を置くことになりますが、1/2リズムで最後に単発を置くのは少し難しいように思えたので今の形にしています。
  3. 00:28:642 - 00:28:816 - ここのピアノを拾うのであれば00:26:388 - 00:27:428 - 00:27:775 - 00:28:295 - ここもwhistle付けるべきだと思います、特に00:27:428 - ここのピアノ音Tickのとこより強いと思うので 少し変えました
  4. 00:31:070 - 上と同じ理由でadd whistle ^
  5. 00:32:284 - 00:39:914 - ここまでの間のClap流石にうるさくないですか?NormalやEasyなどの低Diffだと音がすくなくスピード感もないのでかなり目立って聞こえました、外したくないのであればVol下げて欲しいです バックに合わせての音付けですが、同じような意見が多い場合は変更します。
  6. 00:58:469 (3,4) - やりたいことはわかるんですけど聞こえが良くないと思うので00:58:642 - whistleにしませんか? ピアノ音が無いので、ここはclapの方が聞こえがいいと思います。
  7. 01:08:873 (4) - whistleあったほうが溜めてる感じがするのであってもいいかなと思いました サビを強調させるために無音にしています。
[Hard]
  1. 00:53:440 (7,8) - Insaneはまだ最高難易度なのであの音取りでいいと思うんですがHardでここを1/4で拾う必要はないと思います、次のと合わせてこうしませんか?
  2. 00:44:769 - すこしさみしいんでClap付けませんか?終点はwhistleでもいいと思うんで
  3. 01:19:105 (1) - Finish欲しいです、個人的には2にも入れたいです; 確かにどっちのほうが迷ったんですが、Finish連続だと結構うるさいのと、ピアノのほうが強いかと思ったのでwhistleにしました。
  4. 01:26:041 (1) - ^
  5. 01:37:486 (2,3) - 見た目は綺麗なんですが流れ急すぎませんか?スライダーの向きと合わさって体感01:38:180 (4,5) - ここと同じだと思うんで、違う感じでもいいんですがこっちの方が断然やりやすいと思います いい配置が思い浮かばないのでここは保留で
[Insane]
  1. 00:26:388 (1,2) - このジャンプの意図が分かりませんでした、ボーカルに合わせてるにしてもそこまで強くないと思いますし普通に345と同じ感覚で置いたほうが対応しやすく見栄えもいいかなと
  2. 00:53:440 (5) - ここはNCあったほうがいいと思います
  3. 01:06:966 (3) - つけるならwhistleじゃないですか?かなり違和感あります、個人的には伸びてる音なのでキックスライダー置きたいです 音消しました
  4. 01:18:238 - add whistle?寂しかったです
  5. 01:19:105 (1) - Hardと同じです、書いてくのも失礼なのでこれ以降省きますね ^
  6. 01:38:353 (7) - NC?個人的には01:38:006 (5) - ここに入れると視界に入りやすく今時っぽさが出ると思います()
すごく綺麗に音取りされていてあまり指摘できませんでした、申し訳ないです :(
良ければまたM4Mお願いしたいです :) ついでにフレンドも!
頑張ってください :)
mod time:1.5 hour
書いてない部分は修正しました。
M4Mありがとうございます!
Affirmation
Q

[Easy]
00:25:001 (2,1) - little bit overlapped, looks not so good, could you avoid it?

[Normal]
00:17:544 - this part's song looks strong, adding a beat could be better.
00:41:475 - I think you should add a beat here, this part has a vocal sound.
01:26:908 (3,4) - DS

[Hard]
00:08:006 (7,1) - blanket pattern looks clearer.
00:19:972 (5) - looks unrankable, this slider's reverse arrow is hidden by 00:19:105 (3) - 's head, and players cannot read this,
01:16:850 (5,6) - make same with 01:15:463 (2) - .

[Insane]
00:12:082 - this part has a sound.

GL
Topic Starter
kajiyatta

Neoskylove wrote:

Q

[Easy]
00:25:001 (2,1) - little bit overlapped, looks not so good, could you avoid it?

[Normal]
00:17:544 - this part's song looks strong, adding a beat could be better. I suppose Normal wouldn't be better to add a note for newbie.
00:41:475 - I think you should add a beat here, this part has a vocal sound.
01:26:908 (3,4) - DS

[Hard]
00:08:006 (7,1) - blanket pattern looks clearer.
00:19:972 (5) - looks unrankable, this slider's reverse arrow is hidden by 00:19:105 (3) - 's head, and players cannot read this,
01:16:850 (5,6) - make same with 01:15:463 (2) - . Hold on this opinion.

[Insane]
00:12:082 - this part has a sound. I put a slider consistently for this part in same situation.

GL
No comment = fixed.
Thanks for modding.
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