Hanazawa Kana wrote:

这SB好叼 先跪
那么我开始水了

[Magical Astronomy]
其实我觉得前面那部分节奏可以不用做那么紧凑
00:19:275 (1,2,3,4) - 建议改成滑条或者空掉 强调下后面的鼓点 想了下还是改成了两个滑条
00:20:475 (5,6,7) - 这个三连打起来有点难受 你要是跟人声的话就都跟吧 我感觉这里还是都单点比较合适 这一段开始的部分都有三连的音于是就放着了
00:21:375 (3) - 这里可以把滑条拉短一点成1/2的 00:21:600 -在这个位置加个note 强调下人声 这里还是保持现状吧，kiai time我有强调vocal，这里主要是强调鼓点
00:23:775 (3) - 同上 00:24:000 -
00:30:075 (3,4) - blanket? 可以，调整了一下
00:57:075 (1,1,1) - sv加的有点厉害 作为ex，应该没事吧，大概（
01:15:075 - 看得出来你在追人声 不过这么重的音也要空吗 感觉来个滑条带过去也可以啊 为了排列，所以扔掉这点我局的会更加有意思
01:16:275 - 同
01:24:675 - 同
01:17:475 - 同
03:08:400 (4) - 考虑删掉这个note? 先留着吧这一段，等被干了再说，我觉得这样子的overmap挺好玩的，而且听着也不奇怪
03:34:275 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 这里间距差的有点多啊 建议34 78分别ctrl+g? 不用了，这样子其实flow更加好，ctrl+G反而感觉难打了
made 我pass不了这个难度 瞎说什么，这图挺简单的啊你FC都可以）

[Insane]
00:42:075 (5,7) - blanket? fixed
二连 note加滑条有点难打..

[Normal]
01:24:075 (2) - 这样?

图

可以，不过我弄成向上比较直的

[Easy]
好像没什么..

上面的都只是我的建议

这歌好好听 加油rank啊
射你一个

• [Magical Astronomy]

1. 00:34:575 (3,4) - 怎不乾脆ctrl + g, flow比較好
2. 00:41:175 (4,2) - 沒stack好
3. 00:50:925 (5,6) - 這兩個重音....你那樣擺完全不能express這兩個重音, 建議可以擺開, 可以把6擺在181 122之類的, 不然就stack在一起, 後面相同的地方也是一樣
4. 01:10:575 (7,8) - blanket好看點
5. 01:34:275 (5,2) - stack好
6. 01:42:675 - 我覺得這邊只用1/1拍不符合音樂, 01:45:075 - 跟01:37:875 - 這兩個地方的音樂與01:42:675 -一樣, 不過01:42:675 -卻只有1/1而其他地方卻不是, 這裡肯定有比1/1還要好的擺法
7. 02:18:825 (7) - 同樣vocal音, 不用改滑條, 滑條改2個note來consist這地方, 後面相同的地方就不再說了
8. 02:30:675 (1,2,3,4) - 這是...沒梗嗎 xd
9. 02:41:475 - 恩一樣
10. 03:08:400 (4) - 建議刪掉, 這note感覺特別突出, 多於, 又沒有音樂支持, 要馬就擺的跟 03:17:475 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 一樣, 至少這有形狀可以支持那個note的存在
11. 03:13:200 (4) - ^
12. 03:22:800 (4) - ^
13. 03:34:425 (2,3) - 擺開點, 這邊沒理由間距縮這麼小
14. 03:42:675 - 這邊用轉盤的用意:o?

• [Spring Roll's Extra]

1. 00:47:475 (7,1,2) - 間距擺開點, 這看起來像1/2的, 容易讓人誤讀
2. 00:58:875 (1,2) - 哦... 1/1的間距不要用的跟1/2一樣, 不然就把他給nc
3. 01:16:875 (5,1) - 一樣, 建議擺的跟01:15:675 (1,2) - 一樣
4. 01:16:875 (5) - nc這個吧, 跟01:15:675 - 一樣, 不然會inconsistent
5. 01:26:475 (4,1) - ^同上面2個問題
6. 01:49:725 (8) - 要順著flow的話8要擺在293 24, 突然轉向會讓flow整個毀掉=w=
7. 02:36:375 (5,6,7,1) - 這邊是個5連打, 你漏了02:36:600 -
8. 03:21:525 (4,5) - 故意不擺同間距的嬤:p?

• [Killing Art's Lunatic]

1. 00:29:925 (3,4) - 故意不擺同間距的嬤:p?
2. 01:37:575 (1) - NC off, not necessary
3. 01:57:075 (1) - 這應該是個1/1滑條吧, 跟vocal的
4. 02:36:375 (1) - same
5. 03:43:875 (5) - nc

• [Insane]

1. 00:11:325 (4) - 沒音 刪掉
2. 01:41:475 (2) - 這個滑條漏了一堆音=w=
3. 01:42:075 - 01:42:600 - 這邊可以做一下... insane diff最好不要全空掉
4. 02:00:075 (3,4) - 用的跟01:59:475 (1,2) - 一樣to consist with this part
5. 02:19:875 (1,2) - stack好
6. 02:21:975 (8,1) - blanket好
7. 02:40:275 (2) - 同

SnowNiNo_ wrote:

M4M~

• [Magical Astronomy]

1. 00:34:575 (3,4) - 怎不乾脆ctrl + g, flow比較好 其实我之前是那样子的，但是滑条速度比较快，我想让4的滑条的距离大一点
2. 00:41:175 (4,2) - 沒stack好 fixed
3. 00:50:925 (5,6) - 這兩個重音....你那樣擺完全不能express這兩個重音, 建議可以擺開, 可以把6擺在181 122之類的, 不然就stack在一起, 後面相同的地方也是一樣 唔，怎么说呢，我感觉重叠体现相同的重音挺好的啊;W;原地点两下
4. 01:10:575 (7,8) - blanket好看點 再次调整了一些，感觉已经很贴了;W;
5. 01:34:275 (5,2) - stack好 fixed
6. 01:42:675 - 我覺得這邊只用1/1拍不符合音樂, 01:45:075 - 跟01:37:875 - 這兩個地方的音樂與01:42:675 -一樣, 不過01:42:675 -卻只有1/1而其他地方卻不是, 這裡肯定有比1/1還要好的擺法 唔，塞爆确实可能会比较爽，但是这种渐快的节奏其实也不错啊，因为拖长音到01:45:075 (1) - 开始转了另一个长音
7. 02:18:825 (7) - 同樣vocal音, 不用改滑條, 滑條改2個note來consist這地方, 後面相同的地方就不再說了 这个的话应该没事吧，而且为了排列的美观，不想把滑条变note <3
8. 02:30:675 (1,2,3,4) - 這是...沒梗嗎 xd 唔，其实这是抄的RLC的梗（
9. 02:41:475 - 恩一樣
10. 03:08:400 (4) - 建議刪掉, 這note感覺特別突出, 多於, 又沒有音樂支持, 要馬就擺的跟 03:17:475 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 一樣, 至少這有形狀可以支持那個note的存在 哭哭，已经被提到好多次了，可以的话我还是想保留这个overmap，毕竟这是自己下的节奏为了好玩，如果可能起飞的话，我希望被打下来再说QAQ
11. 03:13:200 (4) - ^
12. 03:22:800 (4) - ^
13. 03:34:425 (2,3) - 擺開點, 這邊沒理由間距縮這麼小 故意的诶，想当梗来着
14. 03:42:675 - 這邊用轉盤的用意:o? 全篇没转盘，当然没转盘也没事啦，这一段的声音不知道如何用note滑条这些体现，感觉挺适合转盘就塞了个

• [Spring Roll's Extra]

1. 00:47:475 (7,1,2) - 間距擺開點, 這看起來像1/2的, 容易讓人誤讀
2. 00:58:875 (1,2) - 哦... 1/1的間距不要用的跟1/2一樣, 不然就把他給nc
3. 01:16:875 (5,1) - 一樣, 建議擺的跟01:15:675 (1,2) - 一樣
4. 01:16:875 (5) - nc這個吧, 跟01:15:675 - 一樣, 不然會inconsistent
5. 01:26:475 (4,1) - ^同上面2個問題
6. 01:49:725 (8) - 要順著flow的話8要擺在293 24, 突然轉向會讓flow整個毀掉=w=
7. 02:36:375 (5,6,7,1) - 這邊是個5連打, 你漏了02:36:600 -
8. 03:21:525 (4,5) - 故意不擺同間距的嬤:p?

• [Killing Art's Lunatic]

1. 00:29:925 (3,4) - 故意不擺同間距的嬤:p?
2. 01:37:575 (1) - NC off, not necessary
3. 01:57:075 (1) - 這應該是個1/1滑條吧, 跟vocal的
4. 02:36:375 (1) - same
5. 03:43:875 (5) - nc

• [Insane]

1. 00:11:325 (4) - 沒音 刪掉 可以
2. 01:41:475 (2) - 這個滑條漏了一堆音=w= 跟的vocal，故意的
3. 01:42:075 - 01:42:600 - 這邊可以做一下... insane diff最好不要全空掉 唔，这一段还是放空比较好，塞爆的话感觉怪怪的毕竟前面是长滑条，适合柔和段
4. 02:00:075 (3,4) - 用的跟01:59:475 (1,2) - 一樣to consist with this part [color=#00000]可以吧，不过想了下还是没有更加好的排列还是算了[/color]
5. 02:19:875 (1,2) - stack好 fixed
6. 02:21:975 (8,1) - blanket好
7. 02:40:275 (2) - 同 fixed

很多diff都還需要polish一下, 很多spacing issue我就不提了=w=
GL

Frenkie09 wrote:

M4M

Easy
·01:06:675 (3) - 如果按这节奏，就变了跟这种节奏了 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5280971，要不把这个改成和这个01:04:275 (1) - 一样的长滑条 这一段感觉可以这样子放啊，bgm有这种感觉，密集一点的样子
·01:42:675 (1) - 好违和的转盘，不如 01:44:775 - 这里结束，01:45:075 - 到 01:47:475 - 放个转盘 其实这里是跟着vocal结束的啦;W;总之先留着吧
·02:25:875 (3,4,1) - 和01:26:925 (2,3) - 节奏统一一下 好的，修正了
·02:41:475 - Design里的SB，我觉得这个爱字不要出现了就不动，这里拖音可以让他慢慢移动或者逐渐变大，后面的de也是一样。个人认为插一条移动变换线（02:41:475 - 开始）（02:45:675 - 结束）然后对照两个截图改一下前后位置 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5281084， https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5281079，这样就让爱跟着心形移动酷多了。02:43:575 - 还有这个日文de为什么出现在i这个音，爱是a+i。所以应该在这里出现02:43:875 - 好的，我修了下

Normal
·00:28:275 (3,4) - 删了，00:28:125 - 这里加个转盘到 00:29:175 - 感觉不可行，低难度的转盘最好在结束前不要有滑条出现在界面所以这里感觉不可以
·01:06:675 (1,2) - 这两个没必要，直接01:06:675 - 开始白线到白线的滑条带过 可以，fixed
·01:29:475 - 用这样的节奏怎样 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5281456 恩，可以

hard
·03:28:125 (6) - 这个我觉得去掉好点

Insane
·00:45:225 (2,3) - 干脆做成三连吧，后面同 故意的诶，为了节奏不那么单一，因为这曲子节奏变化很少所以想方设法换一些排列我W;
·01:52:425 (2,3) - 同上

Killing Art's Lunatic
·00:14:475 (2) - 往上移一点，包住。然后00:15:075 (1) - 同
·00:17:475 (1,4) - 觉得这两个不好看
·01:01:350 (3) - 这个放错了吧
·01:40:575 (2,4) - 这两个都换成圈圈好点
·01:47:025 (2,4) - 个人认为这两个各自Ctrl+G一下flow好一点
·02:16:275 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - 这段好怪，这里还缺个节奏点，我觉得可以全删了
·02:22:275 (1) - 太胖了，不好看 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5281523这样可以吗
·02:39:975 (5) - 换成圈圈好点
·02:45:225 (2,3) - 个人认为这两个各自Ctrl+G一下flow好一点
·03:25:875 (1) - 这里开始打后红线的音效太大声了，几乎盖过了重音，打起来好奇怪

Spring Roll's Extra
·01:00:375 (3,4,5,6) - 读图难，干脆把圈圈叠起来，01:01:275 (7) - 换成和 01:03:675 (8) - 一样
·01:46:275 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 这里flow超难，改一改吧，反正我是跪了
·02:43:575 (6) - 我觉得这个尾巴可以放蓝线
·03:25:275 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - 连打FLOW难，再加上连接这么远滑条超难

Magical Astronomy
·00:18:675 (1,2,3,1) - 这里过渡的真怪，距离读图怪！不如在00:18:900 (3) - 旁边的红白都加个圈做成三连打好多了。 唔，我觉得这样子还行诶，虽然第一次打都可能被坑道
·02:30:675 (1,2,3,4) - 这样拉大一下距离可以吗 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5281785 不QAQ~！，这是抄袭的RLC梗，而且玩着还意外的挺带感的其实
·03:10:500 (2,4) - 我觉得后面有几处是这样的，干脆把他叠去滑条上去吧，有点难了，反正难度就-0.01，没必要弄个Flow梗 但是那样子感觉不好看了就;W;
·03:10:500 (2,4) - 结尾打了好几次都会断，打不出节奏，建议不要做成连打，你放25%速度去听听节奏，那个人声是对不准蓝线的，严重干扰连打的节奏 恩，确实不在蓝线，怎么说呢好不容易想出来的节奏不想轻易的放弃，其实这样子还行吧也;w;，万一真的不行了再修改掉

GL

Nikrodiss wrote:

If I only had a star, I would have given it to you. Nice mapset. Beautiful song. Good luck for rank.

-Nanaka- wrote:

Magical Astronomy

1. 00:10:875 (3,4,5) - The music really calm, and a jump just doesn't work out well, umm,but i think vocal is suit jump here;W00:19:875 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Distance is greater here than it is nonsense fine,i chaged the spacing
2. 00:13:125 (4,5) - This jump can not understand me. also 00:10:275 - 00:18:375 - imo, this section still don`t have their full intensity, so you might want to reduce the spacing between those objects in fact, i want to reflect the last three vocal
3. 00:20:925 (1,2) - swap nc on purpose,to relfect the accent
4. 00:22:200 (5) - remove note, 00:21:075 (2,3,4) - ur Vocal follow, here sliderjump better but the note 5 has sounds,so keep here
5. 00:23:325 (1,2) - ^ also Don't stack them please . 00:23:475 (2) - really needs spacing to have it emphasized correctly 00:20:775 (8,1,2) - same here Q.Q,i think stack can reflect the same accent better
6. 00:25:725 (1,2) - ^ if you don't agree then atleast consider using a stacke 00:20:925 (1,2) - fixed on 00:20:925 (1,2)
7. 00:29:475 (1,2) - they feels too cramped. you make them more flexble than current position since there are enowgh spacing for doing it fixed, i move the slider to right
8. 00:33:075 (1,2,3,4) - tbh, quite a weird flow. wrong emaphasis. the large spacing must be appears to 00:33:075 (1,2) - 00:33:375 (2,4) - , not to 00:33:975 (4,1) - instead i think here is fine for me.,
9. 00:49:200 (4,5) - use same distance 00:49:125 (3,4) - nope,here is a stream which ds bigger and biggerXD
10. 00:49:875 (1,2,3) - 00:52:275 (1,2,3) - 00:54:675 (1,2,3) - too far away, I feel plays bad get into 100 ..for fun,and not very easy to get 100.if use two finger exchange.
11. 01:23:475 (1) - 364/28? not very weil for me,i love it now
12. 01:28:275 - add finish fixed
13. 01:28:875 (3,4,1) - bad flow changed a little
14. 01:34:275 (5,1) - swap nc fixed
15. 01:37:875 (5) - NC fixed
16. 01:45:675 (5) - You should NC here since the previous circle jumps are all NC'ed every 4 notes. i think dont need nc here ;W;
17. 02:15:975 (2) - change 2 circle 02:16:125 - Make this sound clickable,please, there's a very noticeable drum hit right here that should be emphasis. maybe you could good,fixed
18. 02:16:125 - 02:16:275 (1) - addtions Drum clap 02:16:425 (3) - Clap 02:16:575 (5,6,7,8) - sampleset normal 02:16:875 - Drum clap sounds good,and fixed
19. 02:36:225 (5,6) - bad flow with 02:36:375 (6,7,8,9) - this stream Q.Q.,fine to me
20. 02:45:075 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - cool stream :2
21. 03:08:175 (3,4) - 03:12:975 (3,4) - too far away on purpose,its slider easy to comboo
22. 03:10:500 (2,3,4,5) - 200BPM this pattern very hard... <3,on purpose
    
    This map will have a distance problem.
    i don't really feel a difference in intensity between your kiais and non kiai, and the kiai should definitely feel more intense than your normal parts
    for example 01:28:275 (1,2,3,4) - 01:30:675 (1,2,3,4) - to 01:53:475 (1,2,3,4) - 01:58:275 (1,2,3,4) - etc....
    also non consistency of distance in the same section
    00:21:075 (2,3,4) - 00:23:475 (2,3,4) - , 01:28:275 (1,2,3,4,1) -

加油~

MrSergio wrote:

General

• turn on epilepsy warning on Killing Art's Lunatic fixed
  
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Magical Astronomy

• 00:18:225 (5) - it's a bit uncomfortable to not use the white tick propery here. If you really want a slider, I would place it at 00:18:075 - and use a circle for 00:18:375 - . Little suggestion look good,fixed
  
  00:34:575 (3,4) - Ctrl + G? The spacing between 3 and 2 is a bit too short imo. This pattern should also be similar to 00:37:875 (1,2,3,4) - not fist time see this suggestion.so change to other pattern
  
  00:50:175 (2) - so cramped... can you make it more... "loose" ? Even copying 00:50:475 (3) - is fine
  00:57:075 (1) - same ^ umm,you mean head touch tail is too cramped?,littele adjust
  
  01:04:875 (3) - this is the only slider direction which bothers me, because it gives me a feeling of untidiness. What aobut something like this? i still like the pattern now
  
  01:13:275 (7) - Ctrl + G? Maybe because I'm right-handed but it feels uncomfortable in that direction good flow,fixed
  
  02:18:825 (7) - Again, you waste the white tick here. What about something like this?
  02:21:225 (5) - same ^ seem good, fixed
  
  03:08:400 (4) - I would remove this for the sake of gameplay, really. I would fail it 9 times oout of 10 probably
  03:13:200 (4) - same ^
  03:22:800 (4) - same ^ (oh god, this is huge) umm.not fist time i see the suggsetion.finally i fixed it on this kiai partQ.Q
  
  03:09:675 (5,6,7,8) - I would increase spacing between these, vertically. Also a NC on 5 to make the change: like this seem good,and a liittle like RLC,although i dont think its good for play,but i still changed it
  
  03:20:400 (4,5) - Ugh, this movement is really forced, since it doesn't flow the way you expect it to. Try a Ctrl + G on 03:20:475 (5) - but it's not the best alternative. Consider re-arranging the pattern here to make it more flowy changed to other flow
  
  03:45:075 (9) - NC xP fixed XD
  

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Insane

• 00:13:275 (4,6) - stack properly? on purpose，keep here
  
  00:33:075 (5) - NC?
  00:35:475 (7) - same
  00:37:875 (7) - ^ in fact，i use nc every 2 big line here，but i think nc every 1 big line is better
  
  00:46:275 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - this pattern is a little confusing... I can't really see it as a clean pattern to begin with and how you used the slider throws me off tbh. Is there any way to improve this one? As long as 00:47:175 (6) - is Ctrl + G'd I guess every pattern can work as long as it is clean changer to other pattern
  
  01:58:875 (3,5) - kinda ugly overlap :/ move 3 to under slier 2
  02:07:875 - I would have mapped the break want have a break fo in dif，its a long song，so except highest dif，i want have break
  
  02:18:825 (7) - see your other diff for explanation on this
  02:23:625 (7) - same
  02:24:825 (3) - same i think its fine in insane。。
  

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Normal

• 01:06:675 (7) - you forgot a NC here fixed
  
  02:36:675 (1,2,3) - this flow it's really forced: the line 1 --> 2 comes from right to left, while the shape of 3 is totally the opposite way. Like this the pattern feels uncomfortable to play imo (it isn't the only one, but I skipped the others since it wasn't eassy to explain) changed pattern
  
  03:37:875 (1,2) - blanket can be improved here: see here chagend
  

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Easy

• 02:31:875 (1,2) - blanket can be improved fixed
  03:25:875 - I would avoid at least this break umm， break is fine for me，and a liittle busy and lazy nowdays，dont want map here
  

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Overall, I find the mapset a lot unclean (exception is FreeSong's Hard), or rather, "random".
What I mean by that is that most patterns or slider shapes are placed where they are placed "just because". Few examples:
- 01:12:075 (2,3,1) - on Killing Art's diff (this diff is actually trying to be clean, but it still needs improvements)
- 03:33:075 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - on Spring Roll's diff + some slider shapes which could be more meaningful, like 03:37:275 (3) - and similar
- 01:01:875 (1,2,3) - & 01:28:275 (1,2,3,4) - on Magical Astronomy diff
- 00:46:275 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - on Insane diff

The reason I point out those isn't because they are wrong or anything, but aesthetically I find them not so pleasant and/or so well-thought.
"Why this pattern has this shape?" "How is the player going to play this?" "Why I want to make the player play it like this?" "Is there any better option to give an emotion to my map?" and os on, so forth.

I hope I explained by mind in an understandable way. If not, just PM me for clarification and whatnot.
i know what you said.i can fell it when i mod some new mapper's map(i mean newer than me).but i think its a skill accumulation by time.i maybe can map it better future not now,ai....but i dont konw how long can i still play this game.thanks anyway.


PS: have a star because I love the song~

_Yiiiii wrote:

M4M

[Easy]
00:17:475 (3) - 用弯的吧。 没什么影响，不改了

[Normal]
01:35:475 (1) - S形如何？ 折角挺好看的，不S了


[Insane]
00:57:675 (1) - NC去掉吧，至少我没搞懂为什么要加NC，后面也有同样的问题。
01:32:475 (5) - NC 因为有SV的变化，所以需要NC，不去了，NC是个提醒

[Magical Astronomy]
remap and don't forget my kds
恕我直言，这滑条真是不美观。而且初见打起来各种断滑条尾。
00:21:075 (2,3) - 应该用1/2的吧？ [color=#BFFF0000]就是故意拖长音用这样的滑条的[/color]
00:50:925 (5) - NC 后同。 这里不用了，因为后面的五个是一个part所以我在后面NC了
00:59:475 (1,2,3) - 间距弄小点吧，和之前一样。 [color=#BFFF0000]视觉距离么，实际上这个note之间的距离是差不多的[/color]
01:14:925 (4) - 改成个3/4的滑条吧，后同。 这里刻意这样子做的，跟着vocal
01:50:025 (2,3,4) - 同这样的三连打着不是得劲，因为中间那下不是跟鼓点而是跟vocal的，考虑改一改吧。 再考虑吧（主要是做的时候就计划好了第一段滑条，第二段切指，第三段又是滑条，不过距离更加大
02:30:675 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 复制梗这么用真心不好玩，改成这样03:09:075 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 吧。 我其实是抄的RLC的隔绝，不过不像罢了。。不过这样子也没问题的

good luck XXDDDD

• 
  [insane]
  puush莫名没法截图
  94acc 499C
  00:20:100 - 塞啊，塞爆
  00:58:875 (1) - 叠上不好吗，更激霸了
  01:31:875 - 试试把这里空出来？(最高难度也是)，或者像次难度那样在第二个那里放个三连我觉得也挺好的
  02:30:675 (1) - ^
  01:41:475 (2) - 拉到01:41:475 (2) -
  02:40:275 (2) - ^
  最后加个转盘？
  [spring roll's extra]
  00:49:875 (1) - 到01:08:775 (2) - 节奏啥的有点乱 统一下好点
  02:29:475 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 这个感觉是四个一组啊.....
  感觉难点都在最后了......
  
  [主难度]
  00:25:725 (1,2,3,4,5) - 这个也太机霸了
  00:58:275 (3) - 删了吧，跟背景音就好了
  01:07:875 (3) - ^
  01:30:675 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2) - 为啥在这种地方大跳塞爆.........这里歌不是很激烈啊，塞kiai？而且这个NC看着好莫名.......

-ClariS- wrote:

跳着摸的(

• 
  [insane]
  puush莫名没法截图
  94acc 499C
  00:20:100 - 塞啊，塞爆 233，好像是有音，不过改了感觉怪怪的，还是保留之前的好了
  00:58:875 (1) - 叠上不好吗，更激霸了 可以
  01:31:875 - 试试把这里空出来？(最高难度也是)，或者像次难度那样在第二个那里放个三连我觉得也挺好的
  02:30:675 (1) - ^ 没能怎么理解，不过那个三连确实还不错，不过感觉不好改。。而且In这里全是单点再混个三连感觉有点难了
  01:41:475 (2) - 拉到01:41:475 (2) -
  02:40:275 (2) - ^ 黑人问号？？
  最后加个转盘？ 最后是转盘啊。。
  
  [主难度]
  00:25:725 (1,2,3,4,5) - 这个也太机霸了 233，感觉还好啊，有种停顿感
  00:58:275 (3) - 删了吧，跟背景音就好了
  01:07:875 (3) - ^ 唔，不想丢了那个重音（
  01:30:675 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2) - 为啥在这种地方大跳塞爆.........这里歌不是很激烈啊，塞kiai？而且这个NC看着好莫名....... 仔细听这一段音乐比较有特点，所以就想了个梗，NC是为了三个一组，1个单点和2个重叠的单点这样子
  

SB帅的一比
崇拜给包大师

neonat wrote:

Suggestions

Easy

01:07:875 (4) - should have been soft addition on slider end for the clap fixed
01:31:875 (5) - that clap in the middle of the slider seems quite random, it only appears twice on this and 01:35:475 (3) - so it just feels empty sry，i copied hitsound from high dif，so not notice it。removed 01:31:875 (5) -'s clap and this is easy ，01:35:475 (3) - is ok i think
00:40:275 (2,2,4) - claps on all parts of the sliders but in the next kiai time, fine,fixed 01:49:875 (2,2,2) - only have finish on start and end and 01:52:275 (4,4,4) - have finish on all parts again, reason for difference? for fell of beat（in high difs）,here i copied hit sound.i think its ok?
02:17:475 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - this time you didn't use any soft clap, unlike 01:09:075 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - why? It seemed ok with the soft clap for the earlier part, it sounded more fitting to the song that way, as you can hear the snare in places like 02:25:275
02:37:875 (2) - the finish here sounds out of place maybe,somewhere wrong when copied the hit sound, fixed
03:17:475 (2,3,4) - could make the angle here less acute, shift 03:18:075 (3,4) further up so that it would be less like a horizontal move to the right ok,fixed
03:25:875 - I think you can afford to add a beat here, with finish. Pretty strong sound in the song, ends the verse as well, would be nice to have it clickable ok..added a note
03:35:475 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - different hitsound used compared to the other verses that are similar to it. Does it really get more mellow at the end? With this whistle only section compared to the rest it's much softer changed 03:41:475 (2) - to a repeat slider like before
03:42:675 (1) - soft finish would be nicer than drum imo i think drum is ok here,so no change

Magical Astronomy

00:25:875 (2,3,4,5,1) - the gap here is quite unnatural, especially between 00:26:175 (3,4,5,1) - it's quite a jumble of rhythm here, and it clashes with the main melody line of the song here in fact ,i fixed here many times,and i want keep here for a fell of pause
00:49:875 (1,2,3) - 00:52:275 (1,2,3) - 00:54:675 (1,2,3) - 00:57:075 (1,1,1) - 00:59:475 (1,2,3) - 01:01:875 (1,2,3) - 01:04:275 (1,2,3) - 01:06:675 (1,1,1) - the guitar cuts off after 1/2 beats, at the red lines, extending it after that is excessive and doesn't coincide with the music
its 1/1here ，i use 3/4 slider for the fell of drawl
01:26:775 (1) - seems off as the vocals start at 01:26:925 which is a stronger beat to where the slider starts off. If you want something at 01:26:775 - you can change 01:26:475 (1) into a slider that ends at 01:26:775 but have something start at 01:26:925 to be honest，stream after also the same part like02:24:525 (1,2,3,4,1) - ，but i used a note in 01:26:925 before，but its not fell very well，and slider can fell better when playing。so keep here

The triplets in kiai time, like 01:54:975 (3,4,5) - 01:55:425 (7,8,9) - 02:05:025 (2,3,4) - are overdone, the music is in 1/2 but you don't have to put 1/4s in the middle of it, they aren't the satrting of the phrase or what not umm，to be honest i also fell a bit strange here，and before i remaped this map，my thought is first kiai use slier，second is alternating，third is big ds slider.and in kiai time,blue line have some vocal,so i want keep here;W;,for the thought

02:07:875 (1,2,3) - 02:10:275 (1,2,3) - 02:12:675 (1,2,3) - 02:15:075 (1,1,1) - same as earlier, the guitar is 1/2 beats
02:54:600 - could add a beat here, it's similar in a sense to something like 02:53:400 (5) dont want add here ,for beteer fell of next 02:54:675 (1,2,3) -

same thing as the earlier kiai times, triplets in the middle of the phrase like 03:12:675 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - are excessive said before

Monarch wrote:

Magical Astronomy

00:12:675 (1,2,3) - 00:13:125 (4,5,6) - these two are two different groups of 3, maybe stack all of 00:12:675 (1,2,3) - and all of 00:13:125 (4,5,6) - instead of this random double stack? on purpose to refelt last three vocal

00:21:075 (2,3,4) - maybe place like this?, looking boring with straight lines seem good,changed

SPOILER

00:21:375 (3) - should be 1/2

00:23:775 (3) - ^ on purpose for reflect three heavy beat on white line

00:29:475 (1) - i dont know why this has a weird turn on the end, doesn't look nice cant fell in playing,so keep here

00:36:075 (3,1) - place so that slider tail is stacked?

00:36:375 (4,2) - this too fixed

00:39:075 (1,2,3,4,5) - this flow is weird chaged 2's shape

00:49:875 (1,2) - blanket propperly i think here is fine，no changed

00:57:075 (1) - slider is pinched, maybe move the tail slightly anticlockwise so that its more curvy? no，here i make tail flow to next head is a line

01:06:975 (1,1) - stack slider end of 01:07:275 (1) - on start of 01:06:975 (1) - ? ( and then move 01:06:675 (1) - tail so that it reaches the side of 01:07:275 (1) - fixed

01:26:775 (1) - lyrics start on slider end, maybe change into 2 circles? when in playing this part be slider is better，so keep here

01:40:275 (1) - move slider end so that it is properly ontop of 01:40:875 (1) - fixed

01:40:875 (1) - this one too fixed

02:07:275 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - doesn't look that nice when it is straight but its fine for playing XD

02:23:775 (2) - space slightly more? no，ds on purpose

could make this nice by blanketing these two 02:39:675 (1,1) - and these two 02:39:075 (1,1) - slider ends fixed，but i dont like blanket ;W

02:47:775 (2) - 1/2? no

02:48:375 (4) - remove last node? I highlighted it in red fixed，maybe smwhere wrong when mapping

SPOILER

02:48:675 (1) - make same angle as 02:48:375 (4) - and make it go down like stairs : seem ok

SPOILER

02:50:175 (2) - 1/2?
02:52:575 (2) - ^
03:02:175 (2) - ^ no said before

03:05:475 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - doesn't look that nice when its straight xd its your Illusion

03:10:500 (2,3) - stack ? like 03:08:100 (2,3) -

03:15:300 (2,3) - ^

03:20:100 (2,3) - ^ umm，ok？

mjozog3 wrote:

Here are some of my suggestions:

By the Way, don't expect for me to pick out the hitsound errors.

General:

I would recommend to either to add an additional difficulty with approximately 2.8* or make FreeSongs' Hard easier (from 3.53* to about 3.1*),
however then you would need a Light Insane diff (approximately 3.9*) to make diff jumps lower than 1*.
Also, add "Killing Art" and "Spring Roll" to tags as they have mapped in your mapset. i think this set is enough，too many difs is not good;W;

Easy:

- Change the Approach Rate to 3
- Change the HP Drain to 2
- Increase Tick Rate to 4 i think these dont need chage，my setting is ok(

01:17:475 (5) - Reverse Slider - Change the position so that it is similar to the picture (https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5763491) ok，seem good
02:41:475 (1) - Spinner - Extend it to 02:45:675 (https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5767253) no，spinner should disapper before next note's ring apper in easy dif and normal

These were the only flaws I found in this diff

Normal:

- Change the Circle Size to 3.5
- Change the HP Drain to 3
- Increase Tick Rate to 3
- Why don't you increase Slider Velocity to 1.0 or 1.1? i think these dont need chage，my setting is ok(

01:30:675 (1) - Spinner - Shorten it to 01:31:575
01:31:875 (1) - Spinner - Create a Spinner which ends on 01:32:775 (https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5767026)
02:29:475 (1) - Spinner - Shorten it to 02:30:525
02:30:675 (1) - Spinner - Create a Spinner which ends on 02:31:575 (https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5767036)
02:41:475 (1) - Spinner - Extend the Spinner to 02:44:775 as the spinner should cover up the vocals. i think these spinner is ok，so no change

The main thing is that there is a problem with the spinners in this diff, I would say.

Insane:

This is a very good map and I don't have anything to say aside from that it is very enjoyable

Magical Astronomy:

- Change the Circle Size to 5 i think these dont need chage，my setting is ok(


00:50:775 (4,5,6) - Circle - Remove these and instead create the slider (https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5766809)
00:53:175 (4,5,6) - Circle - Remove these and instead create the slider (https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5766817)
00:58:275 (3) - Circle - Remove it to fit the music (https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5766827) no，dont want lose beat here ↑

That is all I have to say. I hope that my suggestions will improve the map (since I love this map and I hope that it will be ranked)

1. 00:49:875 - 怎么从这开始SB就黑掉了……我这的问题？
2. 作詞：かませ虎　編曲：でいたらぼっち 不知道有没有必要进tags
3. https://en.touhouwiki.net/wiki/Lyrics:_ ... 8%E3%81%86
   很奇怪 不过我觉得大概是这个头后wiki错了吧 而且第一段里那一句也很明显念成いろはじょうへといざなう了
   
   以防万一 如果没有找过metadata check的话再确认下吧

1. 01:40:275 (1,2,3) - 后面的鼓点没有变啊 感觉1 2尾上clap还是应该加上
   这个finish有点意思不过反正我不管是打还是edit放过来都不怎么明显就是了...
2. 02:39:075 (1,2,3) - ^ 这里的3我怎么有强烈的在头上也放个clap的感觉。。
3. 01:50:775 - 空的有点奇怪 考虑加个圈
4. 01:53:175 - ^
5. 02:00:375 - ^
6. 03:08:775 - ^
   再后面就不拿出来了 反正有点nazi 这个节奏好快的啊 而且在副歌里 突然空一拍其实玩着感觉不舒服
7. 02:18:825 (4) - 02:21:225 (4) - 02:23:625 (4) - 红线起头 不是节奏不对 是有点难读…… 考虑给3个NC？
8. 02:29:475 (1) - 这里一个转盘然后后面空的还挺多的……作为N节奏有点散了

1. 00:40:275 (2) - 00:45:075 (2) - 03:07:875 (2) - 03:10:275 (4) - 折返上的finish听着有点怪……后面都有一个了 考虑去掉？

1. 00:45:825 (5) - NC plz 稍微有点难读
2. 01:27:975 (4,5,6,7) - stream排的怪怪的……如果要难一点就5再往上6再往下可以分开一点 简单一点就顺着排下去 都会好看一些的呀~
3. 02:22:875 (2,3,4,5,6) - 强烈建议是这样
   56感觉叠起来从音乐上也没啥表现 怪怪的
4. 02:29:025 (4) - x:188 y:244差不多的位置 02:29:325 (6) - x:184 y:136 这样 我觉得会好看一点
5. 02:30:675 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 打起来真的好难受的…… 第一圈不是直接转过来的 然后第二圈和第一圈还一样 但是我不知道怎么弄比较好

1. 00:28:875 (1) - 从这里开始的stream用更大的ds :/ 后面NC那一个点可以拉的再远一点
2. 02:07:275 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 可以有点变化 不用那么直吧……

raririn wrote:

水摸一下

None = nazi
Blue = Suggestion
Red = Unrankable Stuff

woc 这么长 还这么多难度
这hit好像是U235里那个 有意思 是的没错，我就是那边拿过来的，不过现在更加严格。那个音效有延迟，我还剪了下。。

[General]

1. 00:49:875 - 怎么从这开始SB就黑掉了……我这的问题？ 不是你的问题，是我的233，没做完，我就是做到这里而已;W;，SB重新做了因为
2. 作詞：かませ虎　編曲：でいたらぼっち 不知道有没有必要进tags tags感觉有点多了，而且这两个应该不是TAG搜索的重点(主要是幽闭和senya
3. https://en.touhouwiki.net/wiki/Lyrics:_ ... 8%E3%81%86
   很奇怪 不过我觉得大概是这个头后wiki错了吧 而且第一段里那一句也很明显念成いろはじょうへといざなう了
   
   以防万一 如果没有找过metadata check的话再确认下吧 这个标题应该是没错的，毕竟霓虹人的guy和satellite都这样子拼,应该是那个wiki错了大概

[Normal]

1. 01:40:275 (1,2,3) - 后面的鼓点没有变啊 感觉1 2尾上clap还是应该加上
   这个finish有点意思不过反正我不管是打还是edit放过来都不怎么明显就是了... 唔，试了下感觉怪怪的，其实这个clap原来歌曲都没有，我强行加上去的,这里还是就这样吧
2. 02:39:075 (1,2,3) - ^ 这里的3我怎么有强烈的在头上也放个clap的感觉。。 233，其实这个三个钟的音有个升调，我也不知道音乐，只是感觉而已，保留现在的吧
3. 01:50:775 - 空的有点奇怪 考虑加个圈
4. 01:53:175 - ^
5. 02:00:375 - ^
6. 03:08:775 - ^
   再后面就不拿出来了 反正有点nazi 这个节奏好快的啊 而且在副歌里 突然空一拍其实玩着感觉不舒服 可以，不过改滑条了，圈会加难度，不敢再高了
7. 02:18:825 (4) - 02:21:225 (4) - 02:23:625 (4) - 红线起头 不是节奏不对 是有点难读…… 考虑给3个NC？ 应该不需要吧，毕竟DS没变，这里隔着一拍能看DS
8. 02:29:475 (1) - 这里一个转盘然后后面空的还挺多的……作为N节奏有点散了 唔，偷点懒顺便降低难度

[Easy]

1. 00:40:275 (2) - 00:45:075 (2) - 03:07:875 (2) - 03:10:275 (4) - 折返上的finish听着有点怪……后面都有一个了 考虑去掉？ 可

[Insane]

1. 00:45:825 (5) - NC plz 稍微有点难读 可以，NC了
2. 01:27:975 (4,5,6,7) - stream排的怪怪的……如果要难一点就5再往上6再往下可以分开一点 简单一点就顺着排下去 都会好看一些的呀~ 233，其实是故意扭曲的，这种看起来怪怪的，打起来却没实体感觉的打起来挺好玩的的;;W
3. 02:22:875 (2,3,4,5,6) - 强烈建议是这样
   56感觉叠起来从音乐上也没啥表现 怪怪的 可以是可以的，不过会不会有点难？
4. 02:29:025 (4) - x:188 y:244差不多的位置 02:29:325 (6) - x:184 y:136 这样 我觉得会好看一点 可以
5. 02:30:675 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 打起来真的好难受的…… 第一圈不是直接转过来的 然后第二圈和第一圈还一样 但是我不知道怎么弄比较好 唔，感觉还行啊，repeat这样子挺好玩的，也符合这一段的那个音乐

[Spring Roll's Extra]

1. 00:28:875 (1) - 从这里开始的stream用更大的ds :/ 后面NC那一个点可以拉的再远一点
2. 02:07:275 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 可以有点变化 不用那么直吧……

Hard挺干净的 打开X我就感觉懵逼…… 不知道怎么摸

就这点了 大多nazi 有点水 不好意思

[Kamiya] wrote:

我。。。来了 ━━∑(￣□￣*|||━━
这里好恐怖啊∑(っ °Д °;)っ
所以我水摸(^._.^)ﾉ

[IN]
00:39:675 (4) - 这里虽然整体感很好但是重音放在结尾会感觉怪怪的。 这个折返的三个vocal当一个整体应该就能说的通，而且这里拆开感觉没有更加好的排列。就先保留吧
01:01:875 (1,2) - 这里距离稍微远了些？ 不过反而这样的距离反而更舒服一些，所以其他的距离稍微再调远一些 两个长的我都是用1.6x，后面那些短的1.4x XD
01:32:475 (5,7) - CtrlG 01:32:625 (6,8) - CtrlG 这里其实我是故意重复的，做一个梗，因为音乐这里也合适重复
02:31:425 (2,4) - CtrlG 可以尝试一下。 和上面一样，刻意做的重复梗
03:39:375 (3,4) - 没包住 fixed


啊;w;这不差不多rank的图( ￣ー￣)人(^▽^ ) 离rank大概还有点距离Q.Q
看了无数遍 就上面这些了(′д｀ )…彡…彡

_Yiiiii wrote:

NO KUDOSU 之前摸的时候给过了

[Magical Astronomy]
00:14:475 (2) - Ctrl+H 这里最好与00:13:875 (1) - 不成flow，就像00:11:475 (1,2) - 一样 不错，可改
00:28:275 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 在8之前不要表现出变向的趋势，这样会好打一些，常规也是这样。 没看懂，不过我感觉我这连打挺常规的。。
00:50:175 (2) - Ctrl+G 这组包括之后出现的三个一组的滑条应该是1和2间距小，2和3间距大，不过现在这样问题也不大，不想改就算了吧。 不错，我改改看
03:17:700 (2,5) - overmap再加大间距不太合适，删了吧。 唔，还是想留着，歌词虽然不准确的在蓝线，但是起点也不是白线，这里应该能放吧
03:25:650 (6,7,8) - 只是因为7那里vocal变了个调而折这么一下有点奇怪，把7和8改成一个短滑条吧。 这样子其实打着不奇怪，还好的
03:45:075 (1) - 有一个重音诶，不考虑搞点报复社会的东西么？比如放在(90,280) 2333，算了，我还算良心的（

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