TwoThirds & Feint - Epiphany (feat. Veela)

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Snowy Wings
[General]
  1. 没有Source?
  2. 感觉HP5有点小,看了下BPM175应该也不容易掉血,看这难度应该至少HP6吧。
[E.T.]

  1. 00:28:176 (3,4) - 位置对调下,感觉打起来更顺一点。下一个三角形同样。
  2. 00:38:290 (7) - Ctrl+G一下,理由同上
  3. 00:36:919 (6,7,1) - 00:39:662 (6,7,1) - 这里的NC和前面的不太一样吧,比如说这里 00:25:947 (6,7,8) -
  4. 00:46:347 (3) - 这里也是NC的问题,和后面的不一样,同样是五连,好像就这里是没加NC的。
  5. 01:49:776 (1) - 这个灰色应该是代表SV变化的吧,这里好像没变。如果改的话我建议BPM*2,然后长度弄成这样

    效果自己感受。
  6. 04:23:376 (1) - ^
  7. 03:14:804 (1) - 这里应该用灰色吧
  8. 03:29:376 (1,1,1,1) - 这四个①这样摆怎样,和滑条对应相反
  9. 03:39:490 - 04:01:433 - 这段个人感觉可以先全部滑条,再全部摆圈,这样跟背景声音的循环也对应的来。
  10. 04:24:919 (1) - 这个滑条尾的位置不对吧
  11. 04:53:204 (3) - BPM*1.5这种变化的话建议加上NC
  12. 05:08:290 (5,6,1) - 02:12:747 (5,1,2) - 还用解释吗?
    NC问题懒得一个一个挑了,自己检查下
  13. 05:29:204到后面不知道哪里 - 这里请不要大段大段的复制粘贴然后镜像一下再向下移动两三格好吗,这样偷懒的行为不要以为BAT看不出来,这样复制粘贴现在基本上不可能rank。我估计前面也有,懒得找了。
  14. 06:35:204到结束 - 这一段背景暗下来了,应该是曲子表演落幕了吧,那这里也应该是属于Zweib说的舒缓的地方吧。建议把距离和SV缩小点,可能连StoryBoard一起改会比较麻烦。
这图给我的第一印象是很好的,音效做的很好。只不过排列基本没什么变化,玩家打起来会很无聊,不过这是曲子本身的问题怪不得你。
不好意思口气稍微冲了点。听着这曲子一趟mod下来,我整个人都不好了。
Topic Starter
Echoy
8-)

Snowy Wings wrote:

[General]
  1. 没有Source? 说是不需要
  2. 感觉HP5有点小,看了下BPM175应该也不容易掉血,看这难度应该至少HP6吧。改了
[E.T.]

  1. 00:28:176 (3,4) - 位置对调下,感觉打起来更顺一点。下一个三角形同样。no
  2. 00:38:290 (7) - Ctrl+G一下,理由同上 no
  3. 00:36:919 (6,7,1) - 00:39:662 (6,7,1) - 这里的NC和前面的不太一样吧,比如说这里 00:25:947 (6,7,8) - 改了
  4. 00:46:347 (3) - 这里也是NC的问题,和后面的不一样,同样是五连,好像就这里是没加NC的。改了
  5. 01:49:776 (1) - 这个灰色应该是代表SV变化的吧,这里好像没变。如果改的话我建议BPM*2,然后长度弄成这样 no

    效果自己感受。
  6. 04:23:376 (1) - ^
  7. 03:14:804 (1) - 这里应该用灰色吧 改了
  8. 03:29:376 (1,1,1,1) - 这四个①这样摆怎样,和滑条对应相反no
  9. 03:39:490 - 04:01:433 - 这段个人感觉可以先全部滑条,再全部摆圈,这样跟背景声音的循环也对应的来。no,数量太巨大,有点儿无聊
  10. 04:24:919 (1) - 这个滑条尾的位置不对吧改了
  11. 04:53:204 (3) - BPM*1.5这种变化的话建议加上NC改了
  12. 05:08:290 (5,6,1) - 02:12:747 (5,1,2) - 还用解释吗?改了
    NC问题懒得一个一个挑了,自己检查下 全改了。。
  13. 05:29:204到后面不知道哪里 - 这里请不要大段大段的复制粘贴然后镜像一下再向下移动两三格好吗,这样偷懒的行为不要以为BAT看不出来,这样复制粘贴现在基本上不可能rank。我估计前面也有,懒得找了。 惨痛地改了
  14. 06:35:204到结束 - 这一段背景暗下来了,应该是曲子表演落幕了吧,那这里也应该是属于Zweib说的舒缓的地方吧。建议把距离和SV缩小点,可能连StoryBoard一起改会比较麻烦。大家都挺喜欢这段的,所以no
这图给我的第一印象是很好的,音效做的很好。只不过排列基本没什么变化,玩家打起来会很无聊,不过这是曲子本身的问题怪不得你。
不好意思口气稍微冲了点。听着这曲子一趟mod下来,我整个人都不好了。
谢谢!
Yoges
Bit too much stuff on the screen at once for AR 9 maybe 9.3 would suit it better?
l1mi

Yoges wrote:

Bit too much stuff on the screen at once for AR 9 maybe 9.3 would suit it better?
9,3 and ill cry.. but wouldnt mind 8,5
Topic Starter
Echoy

Yoges wrote:

Bit too much stuff on the screen at once for AR 9 maybe 9.3 would suit it better?
OMG that's what I'm considering right at this moment, but sadly most player cannot get used to it...I'll find some modders and ask for their advice XD
Thank you~
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Echoy wrote:

Yoges wrote:

Bit too much stuff on the screen at once for AR 9 maybe 9.3 would suit it better?
OMG that's what I'm considering right at this moment, but sadly most player cannot get used to it...I'll find some modders and ask for their advice XD
Thank you~
I think AR 9.3 would be better and I'm quite noob, I don't think it would be too hard for anyone who can play the map
Topic Starter
Echoy

l1mi wrote:

Yoges wrote:

Bit too much stuff on the screen at once for AR 9 maybe 9.3 would suit it better?
9,3 and ill cry.. but wouldnt mind 8,5
I'm thinking about that, too...seems there's truly too much objects at the time. So I'm prepared to ask you for some advice, after all I can't play this map... I would rather not change it if you don't like it ;A;
Lyric
[General]
1. 总体感觉不错,不过KIAI部分Overmap的趋向明显。
2. 自行检查AiMod里的错误。

[E.T.]
00:24:064 (1) - 改成两个单点。
00:24:749 (1) - 把这个滑条Ctrl-J, Ctrl-H之后调回这个位置。
00:25:092 (2) - 方向倒过来。
00:27:149 (5,6) - 第一个朝左,第二个朝右。
00:32:292 (3) - 向下弯。
00:34:178 (6) - 这个短滑条的方向应该重新考虑。
00:35:035 (3) - 把这个滑条Ctrl-J, Ctrl-H之后调回这个位置。
00:38:292 (6) - 明显向左好些。
00:38:806 (2) - 稍微顺时针旋转30度。
01:50:292 (1) - 不管你有没有累死,我反正是累死了。
02:03:835 (2) - 改为单点。
02:08:978 (1,2,3,4) - 不可读。
02:24:064 (2,3) - 05:41:549 (2,3) - Bad flow.
02:56:121 (1,2,3) - 错开一些用意何在。
02:56:806 (1,2,3) - ^
03:40:864 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - 这部分的音效太响了。
04:17:892 (7) - 与其消音不如直接换成单点。
04:34:178 (7,8) - 距离缩短。
04:38:292 (1,2) - 中间漏掉了节奏。
06:23:721 (1,2,3,4,5) - 你要是把它当作典故也可以,不过事实上太难读了。
结尾部分非常好。
Topic Starter
Echoy

scooderic wrote:

[General]
1. 总体感觉不错,不过KIAI部分Overmap的趋向明显。我不这么认为
2. 自行检查AiMod里的错误。啥意思,没啥错误诶?

[E.T.]
00:24:064 (1) - 改成两个单点。这里有个叮的音耶,有这些音的地方我都做了滑条
00:24:749 (1) - 把这个滑条Ctrl-J, Ctrl-H之后调回这个位置。no,这是下降的音
00:25:092 (2) - 方向倒过来。为何?
00:27:149 (5,6) - 第一个朝左,第二个朝右。亲爱的,为啥啊??
00:32:292 (3) - 向下弯。行行行
00:34:178 (6) - 这个短滑条的方向应该重新考虑。我感觉很好XD
00:35:035 (3) - 把这个滑条Ctrl-J, Ctrl-H之后调回这个位置。NO,音是上升的
00:38:292 (6) - 明显向左好些。玩家玩的时候,其实这样更容易移动吧
00:38:806 (2) - 稍微顺时针旋转30度。为什么?
01:50:292 (1) - 不管你有没有累死,我反正是累死了。我玩不了这图,Test的说还好
02:03:835 (2) - 改为单点。好呀
02:08:978 (1,2,3,4) - 不可读。亲爱的,试玩的都过了XD 多好看
02:24:064 (2,3) - 05:41:549 (2,3) - Bad flow. flow不一定就是顺着来:)
02:56:121 (1,2,3) - 错开一些用意何在。你真正玩就知道了,自动的unsnap丑哭了,这是个技巧罢了
02:56:806 (1,2,3) - ^
03:40:864 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - 这部分的音效太响了。 调小了
04:17:892 (7) - 与其消音不如直接换成单点。形状好看
04:34:178 (7,8) - 距离缩短。no
04:38:292 (1,2) - 中间漏掉了节奏。 这里为了突出人声的空,只跟人声。
06:23:721 (1,2,3,4,5) - 你要是把它当作典故也可以,不过事实上太难读了。 我改改看,的确太坑
结尾部分非常好。简直感动
Narcissu
你需要一個不怕死的ba

AImod 里有關於storyboard 的項目 ……

Streliteela
按我那张图改一下metadata吧,BAT已经确认过了的应该没有问题了
  1. Artist: TwoThirds & Feint
  2. Title: Epiphany (feat. Veela)
  3. Source: <空着不填>

加油!
Topic Starter
Echoy

Streliteela wrote:

按我那张图改一下metadata吧,BAT已经确认过了的应该没有问题了
  1. Artist: TwoThirds & Feint
  2. Title: Epiphany (feat. Veela)
  3. Source: <空着不填>

加油!
超感谢!!!
Topic Starter
Echoy

Narcissu wrote:

你需要一個不怕死的ba

AImod 里有關於storyboard 的項目 ……

谢谢水仙~
sb还在做,我这里都是不完全的坂本~
deetz
irc stuff happened

2015-02-10 22:37 Echoy: Hi, deetz
2015-02-10 22:37 deetz: Hi, Echoy
2015-02-10 22:37 Echoy: would you have a look at my map? it's dnb
2015-02-10 22:38 deetz: uhhhh i can try lol
2015-02-10 22:38 deetz: np it
2015-02-10 22:38 Echoy: i like your newly ranked one so much ><
2015-02-10 22:38 Echoy: ACTION is listening to [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/521687 TwoThirds & Feint - Epiphany (feat. Veela)]
2015-02-10 22:38 deetz: wow, thanks lol
2015-02-10 22:38 Echoy: Thank you so much!
2015-02-10 22:39 deetz: hm i cant playtest right now but i can give you my opinion just looking at now
2015-02-10 22:40 Echoy: that's fine! thanks!
2015-02-10 22:41 deetz: i think you have cool pattern sense and i like some of your aesthetic
2015-02-10 22:42 deetz: i think you should work more on fitting ot hte song and a bit of rhythm tho
2015-02-10 22:42 deetz: like 00:22:006 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - is cool but absolutely massive for what it is in the song
2015-02-10 22:42 Echoy: >///< thanks a lot!
2015-02-10 22:43 Echoy: okay, i got this
2015-02-10 22:43 deetz: this is just something im picky about, but its good to be consistent with the rhythm if the song is consistent
2015-02-10 22:44 deetz: i think it's pretty cool overall though
2015-02-10 22:45 Echoy: at first, i was trying to make it echo with the last part
2015-02-10 22:45 Echoy: 06:52:349 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,1) -
2015-02-10 22:45 deetz: ah, you could do the reverse where it gets bigger in the start because its kinda hard to expect massive jumps right off the bat
2015-02-10 22:46 deetz: you could also reduce the spacing and it would be cool
2015-02-10 22:46 Echoy: thanks! I'll take that!
2015-02-10 22:46 deetz: cause as it is at the start it's almost cross screen :p
2015-02-10 22:47 Echoy: will change it later~ reduce the spacing
2015-02-10 22:47 deetz: mm one thing i dont like though are sv changes, kinda drastic in my opinion for the sounds you want to represent
2015-02-10 22:47 deetz: 05:12:064 (1) -
2015-02-10 22:47 deetz: that sorta thing
2015-02-10 22:48 Echoy: ummm, I've been considering about it, is it too sudden or doesn't fit the music at all?
2015-02-10 22:49 deetz: well you added the hitsound there yourself :p
2015-02-10 22:49 Echoy: yes, that echo thing
2015-02-10 22:49 deetz: i don't like how the other sliders are really fast and then there's that which one would probably expect to be the same
2015-02-10 22:51 Echoy: you mean the player may not expect the sudden change of the slider speed?
2015-02-10 22:51 deetz: yes, and i dont think a change that drastic fits
2015-02-10 22:51 deetz: 02:25:435 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - this is kinda random and makes me sad
2015-02-10 22:52 Echoy: okay, got it
2015-02-10 22:54 deetz: i really like some of the things you do with 1/4 and slider overlaps tho, just some overlap too much and become hard to read
2015-02-10 22:54 deetz: 03:01:435 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2) - too many things going on in the same spot
2015-02-10 22:54 deetz: and then you change the direction :(
2015-02-10 22:55 Echoy: hhh, that's one part I cant read..
2015-02-10 22:55 deetz: 03:18:064 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - this is fking cool gj
2015-02-10 22:56 Echoy: thanks/////
2015-02-10 22:56 deetz: 04:18:235 (1,2,3) - slight overlaps look meh
2015-02-10 22:57 Echoy: i'll move it!
2015-02-10 22:57 deetz: i'm not sure if this is silenced but it seems to be 04:24:064 (1) - and its unrankable if it is
2015-02-10 22:57 deetz: note needs proper feedback
2015-02-10 22:57 deetz: stuff in that section
2015-02-10 22:59 Echoy: it's not! I changed the hitnormal sound
2015-02-10 22:59 Echoy: which is extremly like the music
2015-02-10 23:00 deetz: 05:01:092 (1) - i think you can make this slider start part more round https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2740013 <- i just quickly did that
2015-02-10 23:00 deetz: play around a bit with the shape :p
2015-02-10 23:01 Echoy: i was meant to make a musical note but...
2015-02-10 23:01 Echoy: I'll remake it
2015-02-10 23:05 deetz: i dont think many people would notice that, people might just think it's messy
2015-02-10 23:06 Echoy: you're right..orz
2015-02-10 23:06 deetz: slider art is the easiest thing for people to be picky about :p
2015-02-10 23:06 Echoy: TAT
2015-02-10 23:07 deetz: one other thing i don't like 05:11:035 (4) - you have a lot of momentum in this part, when you make the spacing so close it kinda breaks the momentum
2015-02-10 23:09 Echoy: you mean this kind of overlap?
2015-02-10 23:09 deetz: i mean when the slider end is right next to the next clickable object
2015-02-10 23:10 deetz: you cuold make the jump more interesting, like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2740053
2015-02-10 23:10 Echoy: ! i understand
2015-02-10 23:10 deetz: up to you
2015-02-10 23:10 Echoy: i'll take this!
2015-02-10 23:12 deetz: in the end, is the sb supposed to be sharp and flashy?
2015-02-10 23:12 Echoy: yes , we want it look like a flash light
2015-02-10 23:13 deetz: ah gotcha
2015-02-10 23:14 deetz: 03:40:521 (6) - ctrl g and blanket on 1 for more interesting flow
2015-02-10 23:14 Echoy: got it
2015-02-10 23:15 deetz: consider adding little images to sb to mark who mapped what part :D
2015-02-10 23:15 Echoy: I mapped all part, my friend do the sb
2015-02-10 23:16 deetz: ahhhhh i get it, you should make that clear in creator's words
2015-02-10 23:17 Echoy: ah, i know, the sb haven't been done yet, we are working on how to make some rain effect...
2015-02-10 23:17 deetz: ah :p
2015-02-10 23:17 deetz: well i think that's all from me now, i hope you remember some of the things I said and good luck
2015-02-10 23:17 deetz: i hope to see your first ranked!
2015-02-10 23:18 Echoy: thank you so much, deetz ><
2015-02-10 23:18 deetz: np :D
2015-02-10 23:19 deetz: since you ended up changing stuff do you mind if i post a log
2015-02-10 23:20 Echoy: nooo
2015-02-10 23:20 Echoy: your advice is quite useful


good luck :D
Topic Starter
Echoy

deetz wrote:

irc stuff happened

2015-02-10 22:37 Echoy: Hi, deetz
2015-02-10 22:37 deetz: Hi, Echoy
2015-02-10 22:37 Echoy: would you have a look at my map? it's dnb
2015-02-10 22:38 deetz: uhhhh i can try lol
2015-02-10 22:38 deetz: np it
2015-02-10 22:38 Echoy: i like your newly ranked one so much ><
2015-02-10 22:38 Echoy: ACTION is listening to [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/521687 TwoThirds & Feint - Epiphany (feat. Veela)]
2015-02-10 22:38 deetz: wow, thanks lol
2015-02-10 22:38 Echoy: Thank you so much!
2015-02-10 22:39 deetz: hm i cant playtest right now but i can give you my opinion just looking at now
2015-02-10 22:40 Echoy: that's fine! thanks!
2015-02-10 22:41 deetz: i think you have cool pattern sense and i like some of your aesthetic
2015-02-10 22:42 deetz: i think you should work more on fitting ot hte song and a bit of rhythm tho
2015-02-10 22:42 deetz: like 00:22:006 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - is cool but absolutely massive for what it is in the song
2015-02-10 22:42 Echoy: >///< thanks a lot!
2015-02-10 22:43 Echoy: okay, i got this
2015-02-10 22:43 deetz: this is just something im picky about, but its good to be consistent with the rhythm if the song is consistent
2015-02-10 22:44 deetz: i think it's pretty cool overall though
2015-02-10 22:45 Echoy: at first, i was trying to make it echo with the last part
2015-02-10 22:45 Echoy: 06:52:349 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,1) -
2015-02-10 22:45 deetz: ah, you could do the reverse where it gets bigger in the start because its kinda hard to expect massive jumps right off the bat
2015-02-10 22:46 deetz: you could also reduce the spacing and it would be cool
2015-02-10 22:46 Echoy: thanks! I'll take that!
2015-02-10 22:46 deetz: cause as it is at the start it's almost cross screen :p
2015-02-10 22:47 Echoy: will change it later~ reduce the spacing
2015-02-10 22:47 deetz: mm one thing i dont like though are sv changes, kinda drastic in my opinion for the sounds you want to represent
2015-02-10 22:47 deetz: 05:12:064 (1) -
2015-02-10 22:47 deetz: that sorta thing
2015-02-10 22:48 Echoy: ummm, I've been considering about it, is it too sudden or doesn't fit the music at all?
2015-02-10 22:49 deetz: well you added the hitsound there yourself :p
2015-02-10 22:49 Echoy: yes, that echo thing
2015-02-10 22:49 deetz: i don't like how the other sliders are really fast and then there's that which one would probably expect to be the same
2015-02-10 22:51 Echoy: you mean the player may not expect the sudden change of the slider speed?
2015-02-10 22:51 deetz: yes, and i dont think a change that drastic fits
2015-02-10 22:51 deetz: 02:25:435 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - this is kinda random and makes me sad
2015-02-10 22:52 Echoy: okay, got it
2015-02-10 22:54 deetz: i really like some of the things you do with 1/4 and slider overlaps tho, just some overlap too much and become hard to read
2015-02-10 22:54 deetz: 03:01:435 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2) - too many things going on in the same spot
2015-02-10 22:54 deetz: and then you change the direction :(
2015-02-10 22:55 Echoy: hhh, that's one part I cant read..
2015-02-10 22:55 deetz: 03:18:064 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - this is fking cool gj
2015-02-10 22:56 Echoy: thanks/////
2015-02-10 22:56 deetz: 04:18:235 (1,2,3) - slight overlaps look meh
2015-02-10 22:57 Echoy: i'll move it!
2015-02-10 22:57 deetz: i'm not sure if this is silenced but it seems to be 04:24:064 (1) - and its unrankable if it is
2015-02-10 22:57 deetz: note needs proper feedback
2015-02-10 22:57 deetz: stuff in that section
2015-02-10 22:59 Echoy: it's not! I changed the hitnormal sound
2015-02-10 22:59 Echoy: which is extremly like the music
2015-02-10 23:00 deetz: 05:01:092 (1) - i think you can make this slider start part more round https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2740013 <- i just quickly did that
2015-02-10 23:00 deetz: play around a bit with the shape :p
2015-02-10 23:01 Echoy: i was meant to make a musical note but...
2015-02-10 23:01 Echoy: I'll remake it
2015-02-10 23:05 deetz: i dont think many people would notice that, people might just think it's messy
2015-02-10 23:06 Echoy: you're right..orz
2015-02-10 23:06 deetz: slider art is the easiest thing for people to be picky about :p
2015-02-10 23:06 Echoy: TAT
2015-02-10 23:07 deetz: one other thing i don't like 05:11:035 (4) - you have a lot of momentum in this part, when you make the spacing so close it kinda breaks the momentum
2015-02-10 23:09 Echoy: you mean this kind of overlap?
2015-02-10 23:09 deetz: i mean when the slider end is right next to the next clickable object
2015-02-10 23:10 deetz: you cuold make the jump more interesting, like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2740053
2015-02-10 23:10 Echoy: ! i understand
2015-02-10 23:10 deetz: up to you
2015-02-10 23:10 Echoy: i'll take this!
2015-02-10 23:12 deetz: in the end, is the sb supposed to be sharp and flashy?
2015-02-10 23:12 Echoy: yes , we want it look like a flash light
2015-02-10 23:13 deetz: ah gotcha
2015-02-10 23:14 deetz: 03:40:521 (6) - ctrl g and blanket on 1 for more interesting flow
2015-02-10 23:14 Echoy: got it
2015-02-10 23:15 deetz: consider adding little images to sb to mark who mapped what part :D
2015-02-10 23:15 Echoy: I mapped all part, my friend do the sb
2015-02-10 23:16 deetz: ahhhhh i get it, you should make that clear in creator's words
2015-02-10 23:17 Echoy: ah, i know, the sb haven't been done yet, we are working on how to make some rain effect...
2015-02-10 23:17 deetz: ah :p
2015-02-10 23:17 deetz: well i think that's all from me now, i hope you remember some of the things I said and good luck
2015-02-10 23:17 deetz: i hope to see your first ranked!
2015-02-10 23:18 Echoy: thank you so much, deetz ><
2015-02-10 23:18 deetz: np :D
2015-02-10 23:19 deetz: since you ended up changing stuff do you mind if i post a log
2015-02-10 23:20 Echoy: nooo
2015-02-10 23:20 Echoy: your advice is quite useful


good luck :D
most of them fixed
Two thing remains:
about the SV of the kiai time, I changed them to 1.0...hope it will be better~
The direction-changed slider after kiai time, I didnt change it, because all the testplay so far havent made a mistake there and i think it's interesting~

Thank you~~
Breezy
Hey there, here's my mod from my M4M queue!

E.T.

00:24:747 (1,2) - I feel like if you mirrored these notes with each other, it would look more visually appealing.

00:38:119 (5,6) - CTRL + G either one of these, because this is similar to sections such as 00:27:147 (5,6) it would help with consistency.

00:41:204 (1) - I think it would be nicer if this was a slider, because the upcoming note is very similar to this part of the song.

00:52:176 (1) - If you're doing a part like this, make it so that they are sliders instead of single notes, the other section of the song previous of this section is similar to this.

00:54:576 - I know you're following that one noise in the song, but I feel like starting a stream right here would fit in well.

01:17:033 - I would place a note here because of the upcoming pattern, I think it would fit in.

01:34:004 (1,2) - Have these blanket?

01:35:376 (5,6) - ^

01:36:747 (1,2) - ^ (Add/fix any other blankets in this section of the song as a side note, or just make them look a bit neater and directly in the center of the sliders like blankets usually are.)

01:40:347 (3) - CTRL + H for better flow imo (keep the same position of this slider still)

02:07:433 (4) - Looks weird having this under the slider, I would make it look something like 02:04:176 (3,4)

02:14:976 (1,4) - Stack the end of (4)'s tail with the head of (1)?

02:55:947 - A note should go here because of the clap in the song.

03:17:890 - ^

03:20:290 (6) - I feel like a NC should start here.

04:30:919 (4) - I would curve this reverse slider so it flows into the upcoming stream, because currently it feels like its not flowing right into it, but more towards the side.

04:54:919 (1,2) - Curve these some more? The curve is not that noticeable to me.

05:12:490 (1,2,3,4) - The current position of these don't appear to play well, I personally would just connect the stream to the slider, it just makes it more confusing and hard to aim by having this position.

05:23:462 (1,2,3,4) - This one is a bit better, but I'm not really fond of this. I think you should honestly just connect it somehow to the stream or move it more closer.

05:34:433 (1,2,3,4) - Ok, my last comment for these parts :D If you haven't already, I would have players test this part out and see if they can play it normally, and if they seem to struggle with this then I would change it.

05:40:519 (8) - Spread this slider out more? It doesn't really fit in to me and how close this is to the preceding slider.

06:07:347 (1,2,3,4) - If you're keeping this, then I would find a better place for this because it feels extremely scrunched up here compared to the other stream that are like this.

06:23:719 (1,2,3,4,5) - Kind of an awkward stream shape, I would just make it a vertical stream just like the other stream in this section.

06:54:233 (1) - I think sliders would honestly fit in better that single notes, but it's up to you.


Good luck with your map!

Hope this helped a bit!
Topic Starter
Echoy

Breezy wrote:

Hey there, here's my mod from my M4M queue!

E.T.

00:24:747 (1,2) - I feel like if you mirrored these notes with each other, it would look more visually appealing. considering

00:38:119 (5,6) - CTRL + G either one of these, because this is similar to sections such as 00:27:147 (5,6) it would help with consistency.Yes

00:41:204 (1) - I think it would be nicer if this was a slider, because the upcoming note is very similar to this part of the song. I like this in this part,but I tried hard while the outcome didn't work out quite well...still considering

00:52:176 (1) - If you're doing a part like this, make it so that they are sliders instead of single notes, the other section of the song previous of this section is similar to this. sorry, no, I think this is just fine to me

00:54:576 - I know you're following that one noise in the song, but I feel like starting a stream right here would fit in well. No,because

01:17:033 - I would place a note here because of the upcoming pattern, I think it would fit in. I want to leave some space here. so, no

01:34:004 (1,2) - Have these blanket?I don't like it when blanket goes everywhere :D

01:35:376 (5,6) - ^

01:36:747 (1,2) - ^ (Add/fix any other blankets in this section of the song as a side note, or just make them look a bit neater and directly in the center of the sliders like blankets usually are.)

01:40:347 (3) - CTRL + H for better flow imo (keep the same position of this slider still) Yes

02:07:433 (4) - Looks weird having this under the slider, I would make it look something like 02:04:176 (3,4) Yes

02:14:976 (1,4) - Stack the end of (4)'s tail with the head of (1)? Coinsidering, most other sliders in this part isn't stacked though

02:55:947 - A note should go here because of the clap in the song. no, I think some rest here might be better

03:17:890 - ^

03:20:290 (6) - I feel like a NC should start here. since all pattern like this isn't NC so I'll leave this as well

04:30:919 (4) - I would curve this reverse slider so it flows into the upcoming stream, because currently it feels like its not flowing right into it, but more towards the side. I didn't figure this out...I think the flow is just fine?

04:54:919 (1,2) - Curve these some more? The curve is not that noticeable to me. I think it's elegant :(

05:12:490 (1,2,3,4) - The current position of these don't appear to play well, I personally would just connect the stream to the slider, it just makes it more confusing and hard to aim by having this position.

05:23:462 (1,2,3,4) - This one is a bit better, but I'm not really fond of this. I think you should honestly just connect it somehow to the stream or move it more closer.

05:34:433 (1,2,3,4) - Ok, my last comment for these parts :D If you haven't already, I would have players test this part out and see if they can play it normally, and if they seem to struggle with this then I would change it. Tested, it goes well for players XD

05:40:519 (8) - Spread this slider out more? It doesn't really fit in to me and how close this is to the preceding slider. I like this so please I want it stay (crying

06:07:347 (1,2,3,4) - If you're keeping this, then I would find a better place for this because it feels extremely scrunched up here compared to the other stream that are like this. Considering...

06:23:719 (1,2,3,4,5) - Kind of an awkward stream shape, I would just make it a vertical stream just like the other stream in this section.I want this last one to be more special...If another one came out and want me to change, I'll just do it

06:54:233 (1) - I think sliders would honestly fit in better that single notes, but it's up to you.oOh, it's beautiful a single note lying down here in the end!


Good luck with your map!

Hope this helped a bit!
Thank you for your Mod~
Atsuro
Hey, m4m from my queue

[E.T.]
  1. 00:24:576 (3) - Try moving this a bit lower (like at x: 271, y: 239) to make it lead better to the next slider 00:24:747 (1) -
  2. 00:30:576 (2) - Ctrl + g this for better flow? It would make a nice circular flow with the next circles
  3. 00:41:204 (1) - This slowdown is REALLY unexpected, i'm not against slowdowns of this kind but this doesn't fit too well as the song doesn't slow down or does something to warrant this.
  4. 00:54:919 (1) - Would be better if this was a slider, feels more natural to start again the flow of the map after the small "rest" you gave
  5. 01:11:376 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - Ehhh this is interesting, but it feels weird when it's played, consider changing around this pattern to make it better, like you did here 03:23:034 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - . The rotation makes it more fun and easier to read :).
  6. 01:14:119 (1,2,3,4) - Ctrl+g this to improve the flow with the previous slider (01:13:776 (2) - )
  7. 01:38:462 (6) - Ctrl+g to this one?
  8. 01:43:604 (5) - ^ Would make the flow to 01:43:947 (6) - more natural
  9. 01:46:347 (5) - Rotate it by something like 60 degrees and position like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2772719
  10. 02:08:976 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - I think this is overmapped, just saying
  11. 02:12:062 (2,3) - These 1/4 jumps are really hard to get and uncomfortable to play, try making the distance smaller please.
  12. 02:28:690 (1,2,3,4) - Increase the distance between the triple and the slider, one would think that it's 1/4 all the way after seeing the 1/4 jumps you used before.
  13. 03:03:147 (2) - I think you should unstack this from 03:02:976 (1) - to avoid confusing players into thinking that the slider is "1".
  14. 04:17:890 (7) - The silent end of this slider sound weird, because you didn't silence it other times (04:15:319 (7) - 04:20:804 (7) - etc). Remove those green lines to have more consistency with the rest of this section.
  15. 04:30:404 (2) - Rotate this 60° on selection centre to make it lead to 04:30:747 (3) - better.
  16. 05:01:090 (1) - I'm not sure about the rankability if this slider, it overlaps with itself and makes the path unclear, but not enough to make it especially confusing, and with how they are unqualifying stuff now i think it's safer to change it.

    Ranking Criteria wrote:

    Every slider must have a clear and visible path to follow from start to end. Sliders which overlap themselves in a way that makes any section unreadable or ambiguous (including "burai sliders") cannot be used.
  17. 05:11:719 (3) - Ctrl+g this to improve flow with both 05:11:376 (2) - and 05:12:062 (1) - .
  18. 05:50:462 (1) - Hmmmm i think this is unrankable, raise the volume of the slider as it's not audible.

    Ranking Criteria wrote:

    Hitsounds from notes and sliders must be audible. These provide feedback for the player, and having them silent in a rhythm game doesn't make much sense. Lowering the volume of a few notes to provide a dampened effect is usually fine, but complete silence is always unacceptable.
  19. 06:12:919 (4) - Meh ctrl+g?
  20. 06:55:604 (1,1) - Make a triangle or something, it's a bit anticlimatic if they are just stacked imo :p.


Interesting map, it still needs work before ranking but it's pretty fun.

GL!

Edit: Fixed a little mistake in my mod.
my angel yayoi
清queue大法——
from my m4m queue

[E.T.]
00:22:004 (1,2,3) – 这里的三角形顺序换成231?
00:25:947 (6,7,8) –叠在这里总感觉不是特别好……
00:31:090 (4) –你应该是想把这个物件和1的尾巴叠起来……但是前后间距不一致,推荐345开着DS向左边歪一点
00:33:319 (2) –我认为你把1复制过来转个30°就行了
00:36:062 (2) –^,不过得转半圈……
00:38:290 (6) –反向
00:49:604 (1) –这里开始到00:52:176 -的音效降到50%,不如说你所有用默认soft-hitnormal的地方都要降低至50%甚至40%
00:52:176 (1,1,1) -旋律下行的话这三个应该越来越低
00:55:090 –00:55:262 –add
00:59:547 (3,4,5) –如果是4和00:58:862 (6) –叠起来的话3应该比5要高一点
01:00:233 (2) –反向
01:02:290 –可删
01:06:062 -01:06:233 –add
01:07:090 (6) –NC
01:21:662 (1) –在这个时点上whistle
01:50:290 (1) –这个spinner如果是为了那个渐慢的……奇怪的音,那么请务必把音效降至10%
02:12:319 (3) –这里开始不少的类似节奏都是很难读,flow也不是很顺。虽说不用大改也可以考虑加一些易于分辨的NC color(如果这曲子的bpm不是那么高也就算了
比如:
  • 02:13:004 (1) –
  1. 02:23:290 (1) –
  2. 02:23:976 (1) – 这边这个也可以把02:23:719 (3) –的方向调整一下接上flow
  3. 02:37:690 (1) –
  4. 02:45:233 (1) –
  5. 02:45:918 (1) –
  6. 05:08:547 (1) –
  7. 05:18:833 (1) –
  8. 05:19:519 (1,2) –可以把12和3的位置放开一点
  9. 05:29:804 (3) –连NC都给省了是想杀人吗……
  10. 05:30:490 (1) –
  11. 05:33:233 (1,2) –如果把2 ctrl+g之后还算好一点

……太多了你还是自己打一次试试看那些不顺手吧(逃

02:47:376 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) –用13241324的顺序下?
02:55:776 -02:55:947 –add。你不少灰色滑条后面的这两个音都不用故意空着……
03:25:777 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) –像是个菱形有不是很整齐……稍微修改一下
03:54:576 (1,2,3) –这个三角形的间距和之前保持一致
03:58:690 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) –把这些四方形的大小从小到大去做来引入下一段?
04:01:947 –后面的类似乐句里这个音是填上的……加个circle充数也好,虽然我倾向于你把类似的音都空下来
04:34:347 (8) –NC,04:34:690 (1) –的去掉
05:12:062 (1,1,2,3,4) –有点吓人
06:06:919 (1,1,2,3,4) -^
05:23:462 (1,2,3,4) –和之前的滑条靠上,或者把05:23:033 (1) –这个向内拉和这些接上
05:47:033 (1,2,3) –这几个放开一点
05:48:404 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) –←用这个顺序下NC
06:01:433 (1) –这里加上finish
06:34:347 (1) –从这边是结束段的话开着1.2xDS下节奏吧,结尾了就不要那么跳了……
06:55:604 (1) –与其用自定义音效还不如拉成慢速滑条,06:56:976 (1) –这个也刚好接在下面
storyboard完全不懂(
就是这样啦,总感觉我一张3分半的坠毁图换一个app有点亏是错觉吗……
十分想要recheck虽然我不是dalao麻婆
还有这到底是哪国语言我一直听成阿姨阿姨蒙娜丽莎……
接好星星☆祝早日qualified~
Ayakura Mei
带颗星星来助阵 :)
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