Kodora wrote:

as promiced~

[General]

All clean here

[Collab]

*AR8.5 feels quite fast and doesn't really works nice for such low note density, consider please reduse to 8.2-8.3 instead? changed AR8.3

1. 00:03:622 (3,4) - Honestly overlaps like this looks rather messy than cool and doesn't looks/plays nice - could you please re-space it a bit to avoid such overlapping? Like this: ok fixed
   
   
   SPOILER

   
2. 00:05:512 (1,2) - Same as above ^
3. 00:10:709 (3) - Too much whistles goes kinda noisy here; I'd suggest you remove one from this one for the better emphazis. removed
4. 00:12:481 (2,3) - Since previous notes was 1/2, these two would be rather confusing as rhythm change here goes very unexpected, so people probably will misread these ones as 1/2 too. To solve this you may easily replace these two notes with one slider, so it'd plays more comfortable. You may keep 00:14:370 (5,6) - as notes since player would be able to "learn" rhythm here I understood. but not fit slider imo. and it is easy to start again because this part is immediate lol. so no changed
5. 00:24:292 (6,1) - stack them instead according to your next pattern? fixed
6. 02:40:000 (1) - Again, Ctrl+G would made it nicer to play ok fixed
7. 02:50:984 (2) - Could you please space it a little bit closer to 02:51:103 (3) - ? This 1/8 jump is really harsh to play here as it now, and it's may be very confusing simplified it a little
8. 02:57:481 (1,2) - your choosen rhythm feels quite weird here; there's a strong beat at 02:57:953 - , so it feels really weird that you're ignored this. Try this instead for better rhythm choice: fixed rhythm keep placement
   
   SPOILER

   
9. 03:05:040 (1) - Finish to head follow vocals? ok
10. 03:27:244 (3) - This slider sounds better if you end it at the red tick instead nope. I seem to have a sound on a blue line imo
11. 04:53:819 (1) - same as above I match it with a maaagic
12. 05:29:370 (4) - Could go with NC follow pattern added

Overral pretty nice one, despite I highly dislike such usage of ticksounds and claps - if you can't make them consistent better don't use them at all, lack of claps during kiai sounds very strange.

Good luck!

Thanks mod Kodora san

寝れないので直してしまいました遅れて申し訳ないです
http://puu.sh/ftEHd.zip

アップデート前に一応確認お願いします

Kodora wrote:

as promiced~

1. 00:40:355 (4,5) - Again, this overlapping looks quite bad. Perhaps replace it with same spacing, like this? fixed
   
   SPOILER

   
2. 00:40:709 (5) - I really don't like idea of ticksound here - this beat at 00:40:945 - definitely should be hit-able, as missing it feels really weird while playing. Maybe reduse 00:40:709 (5) - by 1/4 and add note at 00:41:063 (6) - ? That plays more natural here, imo
3. 00:50:866 (1,2) - Similiar problem with overlapping as above fixed
4. 01:01:260 (5,6) - Re-space (6) a little bit, same as you did at 01:00:315 (1,2) - for consistency fixed
5. 01:09:173 (1) - Stuff like this sounds nice but it's very weird to play, considering that 1/8 here goes quite fast, and you starting stream at blue tick, which is also uncomfortable to play. Try this: shortened 1/8 with a nice way to fix the whole stream: fixed
   
   
   SPOILER

   
6. 01:24:882 (1,2) - Again, overlapping. fixed
7. 01:28:071 (4) - Missing clap on tail I think whistle fit here
8. 01:32:441 (1,2,3) - Stacking 1/2 notes after 1/4 is really bad idea and would confuse players a lot. Re-space these stacking, please no
9. 01:39:173 (1,2) - Same problem with starting stream using 1/8 slider
10. 01:40:000 (1,2,1) - Overlapping, and it easily can be misreaded as huge spacing issue. Please fix that.
11. 01:46:733 (1) - Make Ctrl+G at this slider, so it'd be easier to hit :3
12. 04:20:394 (3,4) - move it please a bit down so it'd be easier to read & hit: fixed
    
    
    SPOILER

    
13. 04:22:284 (5,1) - I really don't like these 1/2 stacking, can you please move it out from here? :v It plays really weird
14. 04:23:819 (3) - Missing clap on tail I think whistle fit here
15. 04:25:709 (6) - Please move it a bit closer to 04:25:355 (5) - , this 1/4 jump is really hard to read orz... fixed
16. 04:29:134 (2,3) - and even harder here. This one really needs to be moved closer
17. 04:33:858 (3) - missed finish on head fixed
18. 04:34:921 (1) - Ctrl+G it please for better playability
19. 05:01:260 (1,2,3,4) - please don't change spacing like this, these blue tick jumps are really very weird to play orz.. Can you please keep spacing here consistent? Or at least re-arrange placement to not start jumps at the blue ticks fixed

Good luck!

thank you for mod kodora

#1

someone please move this to pending forum because I can't

Thank you Kodora-san

Kodora wrote:

someone please move this to pending forum because I can't

Sure.

Thank you Desperate-kun

sorry popped due to some issues
[General]

1. Artist: fhána
   

[Collab]

1. 00:20:630 (1) –whistle on slidertail and clap on 00:21:103 (2) –‘s head?　 00:21:575 (4) –whistle on the head too,
2. 01:20:630 (1) –clap? It’s snare drum imo
3. 01:25:355 (2) –finish on head to follow cymbal like 04:21:103 (2) -? 02:52:284 (2) -too
4. 01:44:725 (4) –finish on this too
5. 01:48:504 (7) –spacing is confusing, I suggest you move it to(420,40)
6. 02:31:024 (1) –finish on head, seems you missed it
7. 02:50:394 (5) –add whistle to follow high pitch inst
8. 03:06:929 (1) –missing finish imo
9. 05:14:016 (1) –I think it’s more like a 1/8snap like http://puu.sh/g7F3q/72cbf75fec.jpg
10. 05:22:992 (1) –wronly snapped too, they should be like http://puu.sh/g7FdW/d8df24e707.jpg
11. 05:21:103 –double green lines at the same tick is unrankable.
12. 05:29:606 (2) -1ms unsnapping makes the volume not follow your timing point, it should be at05:29:607 –

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Fycho wrote:

sorry popped due to some issues
[General]

1. Artist: fhána
   fixed

[Collab]

1. 00:20:630 (1) –whistle on slidertail and clap on 00:21:103 (2) –‘s head?　 00:21:575 (4) –whistle on the head too, fixed all
2. 02:31:024 (1) –finish on head, seems you missed it added
3. 02:50:394 (5) –add whistle to follow high pitch instadded
4. 03:06:929 (1) –missing finish imo[/color]
5. 05:14:016 (1) –I think it’s more like a 1/8snap like http://puu.sh/g7F3q/72cbf75fec.jpg fixed
6. 05:22:992 (1) –wronly snapped too, they should be like http://puu.sh/g7FdW/d8df24e707.jpg fixed
7. 05:21:103 –double green lines at the same tick is unrankable.OMG deleted
8. 05:29:606 (2) -1ms unsnapping makes the volume not follow your timing point, it should be at05:29:607 – fixed

call me back when replied

And When I asked rhythm help ome friends, I noticed mistakes.
05:13:544 (1,2) - Correction of the rhythm (used 1/12)
05:24:410 (1) - Correction of the rhythm (used 1/16)

Thank you for modding Fycho

Edit:
hopperhtkn Gamu Takos wring (敬称略) 音取りの手助けありがとうございました

Fycho wrote:

sorry popped due to some issues
[General]

1. Artist: fhána
   

[Collab]

1. 00:20:630 (1) –whistle on slidertail and clap on 00:21:103 (2) –‘s head?　 00:21:575 (4) –whistle on the head too,
2. 01:20:630 (1) –clap? It’s snare drum imo
3. 01:25:355 (2) –finish on head to follow cymbal like 04:21:103 (2) -? 02:52:284 (2) -too
4. 01:44:725 (4) –finish on this too
5. 01:48:504 (7) –spacing is confusing, I suggest you move it to(420,40)
6. 02:31:024 (1) –finish on head, seems you missed it
7. 02:50:394 (5) –add whistle to follow high pitch inst
8. 03:06:929 (1) –missing finish imo
9. 05:14:016 (1) –I think it’s more like a 1/8snap like http://puu.sh/g7F3q/72cbf75fec.jpg
10. 05:22:992 (1) –wronly snapped too, they should be like http://puu.sh/g7FdW/d8df24e707.jpg
11. 05:21:103 –double green lines at the same tick is unrankable.
12. 05:29:606 (2) -1ms unsnapping makes the volume not follow your timing point, it should be at05:29:607 –

call me back when replied

all fixed
thanks fycho

updated

due to the popping, this is Bubble #1

I see.

Thank you Fycho :3

k

#2

Moved to Pending~

hello~

Unrankable issues
Highly recommend to fix
Common sugestions

General
omg why can't I see the bitrate of the mp3 file = = I should confirm with some other guys checked with other programs http://puu.sh/geWUS/f94540d76d.png the bitrate should be 192 but I'm not sure if the current mp3 file is safe for rank discussed with QATs and it should be ok
the combo colors seem a bit too bright on this bg, try using the code below? (turned the colors darker)

[Colours]
Combo1 : 255,87,255
Combo2 : 17,255,255
Combo3 : 36,255,36
Combo4 : 255,112,43

Collab
00:18:740 - raise the volume to 30% from this point? cause as the music becomes louder, 00:19:213 (2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4) - become less audiable
00:43:780 (3) - this jump feels kinda big, maybe move it to around (196,368)?
00:48:622 (6) - change it into a 1/4 slider, or two circles? because I think the beat at 00:48:740 - is more important than 00:48:858 -
00:52:166 (6) - clap sounds better here
00:59:725 (1) - similar to above, better add clap here
01:03:504 - ^
01:09:173 (1) - the rhythm here seems wrong, I think there's no beat at 01:09:233 - , but rather at 01:09:351 - . I mean this 1/8 slider should better be moved to 01:09:292 - and a circle could be added at 01:09:173 - instead like
01:10:827 (5) - clap on head instead should fit the music better imo
01:16:969 (4) - clap sounds better than whistle here
01:17:559 (2,3) - maybe CTRL+G ?
01:20:276 - clap sounds better here
01:24:055 (2) - ^
01:31:969 - ^
01:53:229 (1,2) - spacing feels a bit too small, I misread it as 1/2 jump when testing. maybe use 1.5x spacing between 01:53:229 (1,2,3) -
02:10:236 - why a clap here? better remove it imo
02:18:740 (3) - it would fit the music better if it ends 1/4 beat earlier (or use two circles). then you can move the clap to 02:18:858 - and use whistle at 02:18:740 - instead
02:22:638 (5,6) - try to use clap instead for these two notes, it would sound much better!
02:26:418 (4,5) - ^
02:25:355 (1,2) - spacing seems quite small comparing to the other 1/2-beat spacing in this part such as 02:21:575 (1,2) - and else, maybe move 02:26:063 (2,3,4) - together to around (84,232)?
02:35:866 - might want to add a clap here for the drums
02:50:866 (1,2) - maybe it's only me, but I feel that these notes are kinda hard to read because they stick too close to each other, maybe move 02:50:866 (1) - lower to (8,260)?
03:07:166 (2) - I think clap sounds better than whistle here
03:33:622 (6) - ^
03:43:071 - why dragging the breaktime here? I don't think it's necessary
04:12:244 - I think clap would sound better at this point, and on 04:12:717 (4) -
04:19:803 (2) - ^
04:22:284 (5,1) - don't really like this stack, I'd rather prefer to move smoothly instead. consider something like the pic below?
04:24:173 (5,2) - maybe move them together to (364,380)? it feels a bit weird to me to stack 04:24:055 (4,5) - together
04:27:362 (2,1) - please try clap instead of whistle for them! it sounds much better than whistle spam
04:37:638 (1,2) - the spacing feels kinda small here. I'm afraid that players may think theere's only 1/4 beat between them, like 04:36:693 (4,5) - . maybe change 1 like the pic below?
04:55:591 (1,2) - same problem like 02:50:866 (1,2) - , maybe move 04:55:591 (1) - to (480,276)?
05:00:551 (1,2,1) - this jump feels too big and forced for this part, there's no such big jump even in the kiais, so please use a smaller jump here. try moving 05:00:906 (2) - to around (368,104)
05:05:630 (5,1) - same here. there's only 1/4 beat between 05:05:630 (5,1) - while the spacing inbetween is much bigger than the one between 05:05:984 (1,2) - where there's a 1/2-beat gap. try something like the pic below
05:13:544 (1,2,1) - wrong snap here. please redo the rhythm like this with 1/3 snap divisor and probably remove the drum hitsounds because they would sound out of place
05:22:992 (1,1,2,1) - same here, please resnap them on 1/3 snap divisor instead. I know that it doesn't fit exactly right but it should be more reasonable and consistent. Couldn't be sure about these, trying to confirm with QATs btw, why no NC on 05:23:937 (2) - ? it should have one to be consistent I think
05:25:591 (6) - it plays better if you move it to 05:25:709 - imo, same rhythm as 05:27:244 (4,5,6) -

that's all. call me back~

I will talk about the last part rhythm with me looking for QAT.
Thereafter, I write an answer of mod


I asked alacat-san last part rhythm

She wrote
05:13:544 (1,2) - should change 1/4
05:14:016 (1) - no problem
05:24:410 (1) - no problem

I obey this

Zero__wind wrote:

hello~

Unrankable issues
Highly recommend to fix
Common sugestions

General
omg why can't I see the bitrate of the mp3 file = = I should confirm with some other guys checked with other programs http://puu.sh/geWUS/f94540d76d.png the bitrate should be 192 but I'm not sure if the current mp3 file is safe for rank discussed with QATs and it should be ok :3
the combo colors seem a bit too bright on this bg, try using the code below? (turned the colors darker) I do not like it because it is too dark. but I thickened some colors

[Colours]
Combo1 : 255,87,255
Combo2 : 17,255,255
Combo3 : 36,255,36
Combo4 : 255,112,43

Collab
00:18:740 - raise the volume to 30% from this point? cause as the music becomes louder, 00:19:213 (2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4) - become less audiable nice idea changed

02:10:236 - why a clap here? better remove it imo ok removed
02:18:740 (3) - it would fit the music better if it ends 1/4 beat earlier (or use two circles). then you can move the clap to 02:18:858 - and use whistle at 02:18:740 - instead changed
02:22:638 (5,6) - try to use clap instead for these two notes, it would sound much better! ok!
02:26:418 (4,5) - ^ ^
02:25:355 (1,2) - spacing seems quite small comparing to the other 1/2-beat spacing in this part such as 02:21:575 (1,2) - and else, maybe move 02:26:063 (2,3,4) - together to around (84,232)? I understood it
02:35:866 - might want to add a clap here for the drums　nice
02:50:866 (1,2) - maybe it's only me, but I feel that these notes are kinda hard to read because they stick too close to each other, maybe move 02:50:866 (1) - lower to (8,260)? changed
03:07:166 (2) - I think clap sounds better than whistle here added
03:33:622 (6) - ^ ^
03:43:071 - why dragging the breaktime here? I don't think it's necessary mapped it

04:37:638 (1,2) - the spacing feels kinda small here. I'm afraid that players may think theere's only 1/4 beat between them, like 04:36:693 (4,5) - . maybe change 1 like the pic below? ok

sample

04:55:591 (1,2) - same problem like 02:50:866 (1,2) - , maybe move 04:55:591 (1) - to (480,276)? fixed
05:13:544 (1,2,1) - wrong snap here. please redo the rhythm like this with 1/3 snap divisor and probably remove the drum hitsounds because they would sound out of place I don't think 1/3 snap Rhythm. but 05:13:544 (1,2) - changed 1/4 snap Rhythm
05:22:992 (1,1,2,1) - same here, please resnap them on 1/3 snap divisor instead. I know that it doesn't fit exactly right but it should be more reasonable and consistent. Couldn't be sure about these, trying to confirm with QATs btw, why no NC on 05:23:937 (2) - ? it should have one to be consistent I think keep it. but added NC
05:25:591 (6) - it plays better if you move it to 05:25:709 - imo, same rhythm as 05:27:244 (4,5,6) - I don't think same rhythm. keep it

that's all. call me back~

Thank you Zero__wind

I wait for maaagic's correction.

Zero__wind wrote:

00:43:780 (3) - this jump feels kinda big, maybe move it to around (196,368)? no
00:48:622 (6) - change it into a 1/4 slider, or two circles? because I think the beat at 00:48:740 - is more important than 00:48:858 - fixed
00:52:166 (6) - clap sounds better here fixed
00:59:725 (1) - similar to above, better add clap here fixed
01:03:504 - ^ fixed
01:09:173 (1) - the rhythm here seems wrong, I think there's no beat at 01:09:233 - , but rather at 01:09:351 - . I mean this 1/8 slider should better be moved to 01:09:292 - and a circle could be added at 01:09:173 - instead like fixed
01:10:827 (5) - clap on head instead should fit the music better imo fixed
01:16:969 (4) - clap sounds better than whistle here fixed
01:17:559 (2,3) - maybe CTRL+G ? no
01:20:276 - clap sounds better here fixed
01:24:055 (2) - ^ fixed
01:31:969 - ^ fixed
01:53:229 (1,2) - spacing feels a bit too small, I misread it as 1/2 jump when testing. maybe use 1.5x spacing between 01:53:229 (1,2,3) - fixed
04:12:244 - I think clap would sound better at this point, and on 04:12:717 (4) - fixed
04:19:803 (2) - ^ fixed
04:22:284 (5,1) - don't really like this stack, I'd rather prefer to move smoothly instead. consider something like the pic below? fixed

sample

04:24:173 (5,2) - maybe move them together to (364,380)? it feels a bit weird to me to stack 04:24:055 (4,5) - together fixed
04:27:362 (2,1) - please try clap instead of whistle for them! it sounds much better than whistle spam fixed
05:00:551 (1,2,1) - this jump feels too big and forced for this part, there's no such big jump even in the kiais, so please use a smaller jump here. try moving 05:00:906 (2) - to around (368,104) fixed
05:05:630 (5,1) - same here. there's only 1/4 beat between 05:05:630 (5,1) - while the spacing inbetween is much bigger than the one between 05:05:984 (1,2) - where there's a 1/2-beat gap. try something like the pic below fixed

sample

Thank you!!!!!!!!!!

updated

recheck, no kd

03:42:835 - since you mapped this part, your namecard(storyboard) should remain here, till 04:03:622 -
03:50:394 (1,3) - consider shorten them by 1/4 beat. the jump is acceptable, but I'd say, not really good and intuitive in such a slow part. there are clear melody sounds at 03:50:866 - and 03:52:756 - so it won't be weird

nothing else, good job

Zero__wind wrote:

recheck, no kd

03:42:835 - since you mapped this part, your namecard(storyboard) should remain here, till 04:03:622 - I already fixed. Please try again redownload
03:50:394 (1,3) - consider shorten them by 1/4 beat. the jump is acceptable, but I'd say, not really good and intuitive in such a slow part. there are clear melody sounds at 03:50:866 - and 03:52:756 - so it won't be weird I see fixed

nothing else, good job

Thank you recheck Zero__wind

rui wrote:

03:42:835 - since you mapped this part, your namecard(storyboard) should remain here, till 04:03:622 - I already fixed. Please try again redownload

yeah it's because I didn't redownload last time lol, it's actually fine

Approved.

hope we won't have problem with the weird snaps, I've already asked several QATs after all = =

omedeto

omedetou!

おめです！

おめです！

おめです！

おめです！

omedeto!!!

おめでとう！

omedesu!

おめでと

るいさんおめ!

Thank you everyone XD

みんなありがとうヽ(´∀｀*)ﾉ

Just for me personally, i really can't read the rhythms of this, or it's fact or i'm so bad.
Congratz anyways!

i think you can add a part at last:)
last part is good listening:33

おめでとう

glad to see full ver of this get ranked