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Kurosaki Maon - Rakuen no Tsubasa

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Momochikun
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Joined October 2012
Momochikun

Xinely wrote:

as per request which become m4m (i guess) lol




  • Hard
    Javanese here we go /runs /go
  1. 00:03:698 (3) - gae repeat e slider lali whistle? ben podo karo 00:04:472 (4) - added
  2. 00:14:924 (2) - well overlap karo next slider e rodo elek dilihat jare ku, mendingan pindah en nang 164,164 imo sih coolbuat flow
  3. 00:15:118 (3) - well 3/4 disini kedengaran aneh imo, musik blue tick jg gak kuat jadi beneran suggest buat 1/2 aja pending sek, prasaan dok mp3 sing lama ada clap disini >_>
  4. 00:22:860 (2) - arahin flownya ke atas please ben flow e bener2 lebih natural http://puu.sh/cHgDr.jpg beres
  5. 00:36:795 (4) - well abis triplet kerasa susah kalo lgsg dikasih jump, mendingan pke normal spacing atau mini jump kek 1,5x spacing gtu on purpose sih klo yg ini.. tak ganti 1/4 mungkin tapi agak ntaran
  6. 00:48:214 (4) - well personally gw ngeroso overlap e gak terlalu apik, agak blend sama previous slider sisan jadi e lumayan susah baca (dikit) kadung symmetry e.. lmao
  7. 00:57:698 (4,1) - tau ini style cuma beneran NC nya gak ada arti khusus kok disana, spacing ya kecil, gampang dibaca juga iya.. pendingan taruh 00:57:698 (4) - buat emphasize jump gtu, sek lebih bisa dimengerti gede itu kok prasaan ><
  8. 01:09:698 (3,4,5) - jadiin slider repeat aja? well cuma taste aja soalnya gw emang gak terlalu suka triplet di Hard agak susah sbelum kiai reset ngga masalah si imo..
  9. 01:10:085 (6,1) - sama kek 00:57:698 (4,1) - same then
  10. 01:16:279 (1,3) - stack properly? ok


try find 2 mods more and then call me back ;)
also fixed from other mod, thanks :3

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Title:Rakuen no Tsubasa
TitleUnicode:楽園の翼
Artist:Kurosaki Maon
ArtistUnicode:黒崎 真音
Creator:Tari
Version:Mochi's Hard
Source:グリザイアの果実 -LE FRUIT DE LA GRISAIA-
Tags:opening fruit of loom forbidden Momochikun adaption
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185,200,71634,6,0,P|136:245|46:242,1,142,4|0,3:2|3:0,0:0:0:0:
63,249,72214,2,0,P|48:288|39:322,1,71,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
142,276,72601,2,0,P|146:311|155:345,1,71,0|0,3:0|3:0,0:0:0:0:
235,374,72989,1,8,0:0:0:0:
292,311,73182,6,0,B|330:303|364:319|364:319|392:302|390:257,1,142,2|0,3:0|3:0,0:0:0:0:
363,178,73763,1,8,0:0:0:0:
301,118,73956,2,0,L|145:137,1,142,2|0,0:0|3:0,0:0:0:0:
115,207,74537,1,8,0:0:0:0:
37,172,74731,6,0,P|22:122|32:31,1,142,2|0,3:0|3:0,0:0:0:0:
115,20,75311,1,8,0:0:0:0:
198,6,75505,2,0,P|239:15|284:21,1,71,2|0,3:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
396,81,75892,2,0,P|360:86|326:94,1,71,0|8,3:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
265,153,76279,6,0,P|196:164|138:126,1,142,4|0,0:0|3:0,0:0:0:0:
50,88,76860,1,8,0:0:0:0:
150,229,77053,2,0,P|153:176|138:126,1,106.5,2|0,3:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
133,103,77440,2,0,P|122:68|122:34,1,71,0|8,3:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
210,2,77827,1,2,0:0:0:0:
133,103,78021,6,0,L|54:89,2,71,4|0|8,0:0|3:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
217,186,78601,2,0,L|356:210,1,142,4|0,0:0|3:0,0:0:0:0:
425,261,79182,1,8,0:0:0:0:
446,178,79376,1,2,0:0:0:0:
458,93,79569,6,0,P|354:112|337:113,1,106.5,4|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
231,139,80150,1,2,0:0:0:0:
207,215,80343,2,0,P|265:223|319:235,1,106.5,0|2,3:0|0:3,0:0:0:0:
396,322,80924,1,0,3:0:0:0:
313,342,81118,5,4,0:0:0:0:
313,342,82279,2,0,L|266:349,1,35.5,10|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
247,337,82472,2,0,L|200:344,1,35.5,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
179,357,82666,6,0,B|127:380|86:344|86:344|71:297,1,142,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
100,222,83247,2,0,P|112:184|103:83,1,142,2|0,3:0|3:0,0:0:0:0:
176,40,83827,1,8,0:0:0:0:
255,68,84021,1,2,0:0:0:0:
335,96,84214,6,0,L|416:83,1,71,0|0,3:0|3:0,0:0:0:0:
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467,133,85182,1,0,3:0:0:0:
434,247,85376,2,0,P|443:291|449:317,1,71,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
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225,340,86150,1,8,0:0:0:0:
235,255,86343,1,2,0:0:0:0:
246,170,86537,1,0,3:0:0:0:
258,85,86731,5,2,3:0:0:0:
235,255,87118,1,4,0:0:0:0:
256,192,87214,12,0,88472,0:0:0:0:
syuru
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syuru
from in game req（ ≧ ω ∂ )
aside from my inability to read ar8.3 the map played pretty great, so i only have a few things to say
[Easy]
  2. 00:23:827 (1,2) - i hardly ever notice anything in easy except nitpicky blanket stuff... i think this part can be blanketed better unless this was intentional
[Normal]
  1. 00:12:601 - i think there should be a note here?
  2. 01:06:795 (1) - she starts singing at slider-end so this part feels a bit awkward to me
  3. 01:23:827 - missing note here maybe, goes better w/music i think
[Hard]
  1. 00:06:021 (1,2,3) - this seemed a bit lacking to me, especially because the ar shows the next slider so close and there's nothing for the player to do but pause, except the music isn't really implying a stop and go sort of motion
  2. 01:26:150 (2,3,4,1,2) - this is so picky but i think this feels too linear? like the rest of the map is pretty flowy and i'm thinking a different approach to these notes would look better
[Insane]
  1. 00:24:214 (2) - the overlap seems unnecessary imo
  2. 00:43:956 (1,2) - for some reason i get the feeling that the jump here should be a little bit bigger to set this apart as a pause, it has the same spacing as 00:44:537 (3,4) which makes it seem like all the beats are equally emphasized but 1 and 2 are supposed to be stronger, at least that's what i thought
  3. 01:04:279 (2) - i think the timing here can be clearer if it's overlapped slightly by 1 instead of a direct stack, so like what you did at 01:10:085 (1,2) instead of how it is now, this applies to the other slider>note patterns in this part
  4. 01:15:311 (2,3) - too much overlap maybe? it's not consistent w/the overlapping on the rest of map
  5. 01:17:053 (4,5) - these should slightly overlap i think, not doing so suddenly can be confusing imo
  6. 01:19:569 (1,2) - i think one of these repeat sliders is probably fine but having two makes this part seem too simple for insane
nothing i pointed out has anything to do with big issues; they're mostly things i think would improve playing and appearance so it's all up to you, good luck!
Tari
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ankou wrote:

from in game req（ ≧ ω ∂ )
aside from my inability to read ar8.3 the map played pretty great, so i only have a few things to say
[Easy]
  2. 00:23:827 (1,2) - i hardly ever notice anything in easy except nitpicky blanket stuff... i think this part can be blanketed better unless this was intentional
[Normal]
  1. 00:12:601 - i think there should be a note here?
  2. 01:06:795 (1) - she starts singing at slider-end so this part feels a bit awkward to me
  3. 01:23:827 - missing note here maybe, goes better w/music i think
[Hard]
  1. 00:06:021 (1,2,3) - this seemed a bit lacking to me, especially because the ar shows the next slider so close and there's nothing for the player to do but pause, except the music isn't really implying a stop and go sort of motion
  2. 01:26:150 (2,3,4,1,2) - this is so picky but i think this feels too linear? like the rest of the map is pretty flowy and i'm thinking a different approach to these notes would look better
[Insane]
  1. 00:24:214 (2) - the overlap seems unnecessary imo kept, them the same. the notes form a triangle.
  2. 00:43:956 (1,2) - for some reason i get the feeling that the jump here should be a little bit bigger to set this apart as a pause, it has the same spacing as 00:44:537 (3,4) which makes it seem like all the beats are equally emphasized but 1 and 2 are supposed to be stronger, at least that's what i thought spacing is negligible here.
  3. 01:04:279 (2) - i think the timing here can be clearer if it's overlapped slightly by 1 instead of a direct stack, so like what you did at 01:10:085 (1,2) instead of how it is now, this applies to the other slider>note patterns in this part
  4. 01:15:311 (2,3) - too much overlap maybe? it's not consistent w/the overlapping on the rest of map
  5. 01:17:053 (4,5) - these should slightly overlap i think, not doing so suddenly can be confusing imo really prefer this, the pattern I want here will be kept.
  6. 01:19:569 (1,2) - i think one of these repeat sliders is probably fine but having two makes this part seem too simple for insane
nothing i pointed out has anything to do with big issues; they're mostly things i think would improve playing and appearance so it's all up to you, good luck!


Kept normal rhythms the same, they're getting really difficult.

Everything else fixed though thanks!
Xinely
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Xinely
we did many rechecks before go here, looks nice for me now

Bubbled! ヽ(｡ゝω・｡)ﾉ

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K all looks good to me
Qualified!
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Gratz Tari~
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Congrats :)
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Tariiiii congratssss!!!
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too fast for me to approach! >:(
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Grats Tari :D
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How fast. Grats Tari ~
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:) Grats :)
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Congratz Rakuen Tari :)
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Congratz! Tari :)
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Grisaia!

Congrats Tari <3
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congratz !!
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Gratz Tari! :)
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Thanks!
febirizky
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Tari wrote:

This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on Thursday, November 13, 2014 at 3:12:23 PM

Artist: Kurosaki Maon
Title: Rakuen no Tsubasa
Source: グリザイアの果実 -LE FRUIT DE LA GRISAIA-
Tags: opening fruit of loom forbidden Momochikun adaption
BPM: 155
Filesize: 20363kb
Play Time: 01:28
Difficulties Available:
  1. Easy (1.47 stars, 86 notes)
  2. Insane (3.89 stars, 284 notes)
  3. Mochi's Hard (3.12 stars, 238 notes)
  4. Normal (2.04 stars, 152 notes)
Download: Kurosaki Maon - Rakuen no Tsubasa
Download: Kurosaki Maon - Rakuen no Tsubasa (no video)
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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osu! needs more Grisaia!!
video by lust thanks.
grisaia 8-)
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