1. Collab (2,07 stars, 537 notes)

Mapset

Collab - Pjecoo & Wafu

Storyboard - Wafu

1. As the map goes for approval and it is quite long, you might need a Marathon tag. As well as this, you also might want to add collab and collaboration to the tags.
2. As you have 2 sets of colours bright/not-so bright ones, you can use brighter colours during kiai and softer ones for non-kiai parts.
   Note: just contact me if you didn't get the idea @.@
3. I'd go with Slider Tick rate 2 as it sounds better and makes more sense with the music.

1. Try to drop OD Drain by 1 because that's a marathon map, players will get tired and lowering OD will save them.
   
   Pjecoo
   
   1. 00:05:886 - the actual 1/4 beat goes here and the reverse of 00:06:069 (3) - hits nothing in the music. Is there any reason to do so? I'd suggest re-arranging the pattern.
   2. 00:25:459 (2,3,4) - please, select them and hit Ctrl+G, it will swap them on the timeline and help you to get better (and more enjoyable) rhythm.
   3. 00:37:532 (3) - how about an 1/4 slider + an 1/2 one? It'd work better with the music/vocals and make the pattern a bit more interesting. Example
   4. 01:31:130 (4) - feels overmapped. There is no beat in music, so, the circle feels really weird and out-of-place here, imo.
   5. 01:58:203 - I'd rather place a circle here, than at 01:57:837. So, all you have to do, is just to move 01:57:837 (4) - forward on the timeline.
   6. 02:06:069 (5) - as the "toniiight" begins at 02:06:434 - starting the slider there would be more reasonable. Example
   Wafu
   
   1. 00:54:544 (2,3) - 00:56:191 (6,7) - you've had a really awesome flow and the 1/2 stck suddenly broke it. Moreover, having both 1/4 and 1/2 stacks in the same combo is quite tricky.. Please, try to get rid of the 1/2 stack.
   2. 01:02:593 - a circle would match perfectly here.
   3. 02:22:166 - we can clearly hear a stop in the music at that point, finishing the slider here becaiuse of that is a nice idea. Example
   4. 02:26:556 (6,7,8) - whoops, this sounds slightly off music. I'd highly suggest something like this. See if you like it or not.
   5. 04:11:556 (3,4) - please, replace them with a slider, the beat at 04:11:922 - is nearly inaudible and mapping it with a circle feels forced.
   
   
   Well done. However, you can pay a bit more attention to 1/4s as they were a bit incorrect in some parts.

-Bakari- wrote:

Okay, so I am fially here!

[General]

1. As the map goes for approval and it is quite long, you might need a Marathon tag. As well as this, you also might want to add collab and collaboration to the tags. Added
2. As you have 2 sets of colours bright/not-so bright ones, you can use brighter colours during kiai and softer ones for non-kiai parts. Fixed
   Note: just contact me if you didn't get the idea @.@
3. I'd go with Slider Tick rate 2 as it sounds better and makes more sense with the music. Fixed

[Collab]

1. Try to drop OD Drain by 1 because that's a marathon map, players will get tired and lowering OD will save them. Ok, changed
   
   Pjecoo
   
   1. 00:05:886 - the actual 1/4 beat goes here and the reverse of 00:06:069 (3) - hits nothing in the music. Is there any reason to do so? I'd suggest re-arranging the pattern. Changed
   2. 00:25:459 (2,3,4) - please, select them and hit Ctrl+G, it will swap them on the timeline and help you to get better (and more enjoyable) rhythm. Adjusted a bit
   3. 00:37:532 (3) - how about an 1/4 slider + an 1/2 one? It'd work better with the music/vocals and make the pattern a bit more interesting. Example Fixed
   4. 01:31:130 (4) - feels overmapped. There is no beat in music, so, the circle feels really weird and out-of-place here, imo. Removed
   5. 01:58:203 - I'd rather place a circle here, than at 01:57:837. So, all you have to do, is just to move 01:57:837 (4) - forward on the timeline. Fixed
   6. 02:06:069 (5) - as the "toniiight" begins at 02:06:434 - starting the slider there would be more reasonable. Ok Example

Best of luck! Thanks for mod & stars

1. 00:24:727 (1,2) - You could blanket these
2. 00:30:581 (1,2) - ^
3. 02:41:191 (5,1) - Fix this blanket
4. 03:52:532 (1,2) - ^
5. 04:56:922 (1,2) - You could blanket these

Xellie wrote:

Asked to mod~

[Collab]

1. 00:24:727 (1,2) - You could blanket these Fixed.
2. 00:30:581 (1,2) - ^ Fixed.
3. 03:52:532 (1,2) - ^ Fixed.
4. 04:56:922 (1,2) - You could blanket these Fixed.

I tried to find things but honestly this isn't my type of song for modding, it's really slow which I'm not good at. There were a few parts where you covered parts that could be more interesting by just making them long 1/1 sliders though. Good luck with the map, sorry I couldn't help more

Thank you for your mod.

Sognux wrote:

Hello! From my modding queue~

Collab, is this supposed to be a 1 diff map? It is supposed to be a 1 diff map, it is longer than 5 minutes, so it can go for approval

General
From the AiMod
More than 1/3 of the map is kiai time. Consider reducing this. I would say this is fine if we don't use it on places where the music is totally out of the kiai theme.
Filesize of the mapset exceeds 10MB without video. The map has 11.6MB and it contains storyboard. Current rule says the map can have 24Mb with video or storyboard.
Would it be possible to get a translation right under the japanese lyrics in the storyboard? Sorry, but I think there is no need to get a translation for this. It would be complicated to find correct one and then it would take additional time to include it into storyboard.

This map is good as it is i think, couldnt find anything wrong with it o.o

Good luck getting this ranked~

Fort wrote:

gg this map, too easy for me, too hard for mod this map, i'll give you star then. good luck with ur map

1. Remove Collab from tags, since you already has Collaboration in tags and diff name.
2. Collab is a weird diff name in my opinion, maybe you can think a better one, just as suggestion.
3. AR is too high for this BPM and the way you mapped this diff, AR 7 play a lot better.
4. Reduce HP drain to 6, 7 is too much considering the note density of this mapset.
5. Reply to mods properly, this: p/3515728 is not ok.
6. Add like 700 AudioLeadIn to have two secs before the first object appear.
7. probably you need a timing check, for example is really noticeable that your timing is off in 01:18:691 (2,3,4,5) -

1. 00:05:886 I notice that you are ignoring some triplets and mapping others, I don't know inmy opinion will be nice if you can recheck some spots and add some more circles.
2. 00:06:800 (1) - there are some rhythms like this one, to be honest I dislike them, because the strong vocals and music are at the stanza 00:07:166 and not in the upbeat :l.
3. 00:09:727 (1) - here you changed to follow vocals when in the beginning you was following the instrument and ignoring the vocals, ex:00:04:971 (2) - , 00:01:313 (1,2) - you should consider being more consistent with what are you going to follow when mapping.
4. 00:12:654 (1,2) - there are another rhythms that have problems like this one, even if you are following vocals or instrument the slider should start in 00:13:020 . since is a new word in the vocals and a new section in the music, leaving it as slider tail doesn't make much sense to me.
5. 00:13:752 (3) - so are you following the instruments or vocals 00:15:581 (1) - ? this mix of sometimes vocals, sometimes instruments make me not get the rhythm when playing.
6. 00:18:508 (4) - this vocal is really off, to avoid this problem (since players will click that circle early) I suggest you to change rhythm there, something like this:
   
7. 00:26:008 ignoring this beat, but mapping this 00:27:471 (6) - , doesn't make much sense, map both or ignore both
8. 00:37:532 (3) - probably 2 circles fit better the music, also will be consistent with your previous pattern
9. 00:39:178 I don't think you should ignore this beat, mainly cuz you are mapping other similar triplets
10. 00:43:569 - etc
11. 00:49:971 ignoring beats like this make me T-T, idk a 1/2 repeat slider can work a lot better there.
12. 00:56:922 (1) - same as above (in this kiai time rhythm is a lot better than in the beggining, but still some double check can be nice)
13. 00:59:849 (1) - similar as above, vocals and music are the same in 00:59:849 (1) - 01:01:313 (4) - but mapped in a different way, :l I like the 1/2 slider.
14. 01:02:776 (1) - 1/2 repeat slider ?
15. 01:50:886 ignoring the triplet, but mapping one in 01:53:813 (3) - , why?
16. 01:55:459 (1,2) - were are the 1/2 slider that you using at the beginning 01:49:605 (1,2,3) - since is the same part in the song, so I don't see a valid reason to have them mapped in a different way.
17. 02:01:313 (1,2,3,4) - ^^^^
18. 02:25:642 is weird that you are ignoring this 1/4 beat, but mapping all the others, doesn't feel nice when playing.
19. 02:26:191 ignoring the strong beat, but mapping all the weak ones? (every beat has vocals and music, so I don't see why you are ignoring one o.o)
20. 02:50:337 (4,5) - really weird stack, kinda break the flow of this map, idk a 1/4 repeat slider can fit really nice here.
21. 04:10:642 (2) - following vocals here, but ignoring them in 04:11:373 - T-T

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Natsu wrote:

1. 00:49:971 ignoring beats like this make me T-T, idk a 1/2 repeat slider can work a lot better there. Sorry, but there is not a beat, it's just a guitar, that's different, but nevertheless, I do not see any reason of why should I make this part whole just 1/2 without diversity. Also take in consideration I mapped the snare drum with 1/2 sliders and kept 1/1 on most parts which contained just guitar or almost inaudible snare, so it is emphasized only by the slider tick.
2. 00:56:922 (1) - same as above (in this kiai time rhythm is a lot better than in the beggining, but still some double check can be nice) This one was actually out of the way I was mapping these, so yup, fixed.
3. 00:59:849 (1) - similar as above, vocals and music are the same in 00:59:849 (1) - 01:01:313 (4) - but mapped in a different way, :l I like the 1/2 slider. Already talked above this above
4. 01:02:776 (1) - 1/2 repeat slider ? ^
5. 02:25:642 is weird that you are ignoring this 1/4 beat, but mapping all the others, doesn't feel nice when playing. Eh, why did I ignore this beat? There is not a beat and additionally, if you meant voice (which is still not a beat), it is out of the time a bit, so mapping it makes the map just worse.
6. 02:26:191 ignoring the strong beat, but mapping all the weak ones? (every beat has vocals and music, so I don't see why you are ignoring one o.o) Again, there is no beat, there is just voice, which is again out of the timing, because it's just a singer, and this singer did not hit the song accurately, while, the volume is on the level of song's guitar, so you might have noticed guitar is mapped here, what's totally okay, no matter how loud the voice is, it is not supposed to be mapped, maybe I could hit it accurate with using 1/8 or 1/16 snap, but no, I do not want to bring these to the map when I never used them.
7. 02:50:337 (4,5) - really weird stack, kinda break the flow of this map, idk a 1/4 repeat slider can fit really nice here. I think it is okay, the song song is calm in this part so breaking flow is not a deal, considering the stack was made because the piano note was exactly the same on these two circles.
8. 04:10:642 (2) - following vocals here, but ignoring them in 04:11:373 - T-T Changed, but I followed the guitar anyway.

Wafu wrote:

Please, take in consideration diversity is not the thing that actually makes the map worse nor it is unrankable. The map was not meant to be insane or extra, so there is no reason to map every single note, when you map them with slider tick, or when it is out of the music a bit or it is not so loud, you do not have to map it completely. I am sorry, but you probably won't be satisfied with amount of things I fixed, you probably include too much of your style to the mod, that's probably also why would it be annoying for me to fix everything. Thanks for your understanding and obviously for your mod.

Natsu wrote:

ah, 02:26:191 - listen careful pls.

Wafu wrote:

Natsu wrote:

ah, 02:26:191 - listen careful pls.

Oh, I am sorry, this one was my mistake. I modded the previous note twice.
Actually I did not mean it offensively, I meant, I felt following that guitar in some part was okay with slidertick. I'll recheck it today if I won't change my mind