Bonjouj | Modreq by Arrival.
@Arrival j'mod en anglais ok alors gueule pas xd
La Oni vient après, il est tard là
et oui je mets beaucoup de trucs. Mais tkt j'te tue pas si tu dis non[Muzukashii]
** At the beginning, maybe create a bot of variety so it isn't boring ? (00:00:650 (1) - to 00:15:994 (53) - )
A possible thing to do is to create a one-beat break at 00:04:006 (11,12,13,14) - In this case 11 and 14 stay.
00:11:678 (37,38,39,40) - Same would apply here if the above has been applied. I believe this makes the beginning less boring while being still on your view and consistent.
** Section from 00:15:994 (53) - to 00:46:683 (147) - Try to make that a little bit more varied so the player doesn't find that boring (keeping the general structure while changing the rhythm is the best way, but I fear this would break a lot your construction to lyrics)
00:22:947 (74) - Delete so you get a better emphasis on the lyrics?
00:23:427 (76) - k ? The "ma" in the sentence has a slightly similar pitch, comparing to the previous "sur". Plus, it will be consistent with kkk d before.
00:28:701 (92) - k to stay consistent with 00:21:029 (68) - (exactly similar lyrics, and it seems like you did map that on them)
00:30:619 (98) - Delete so you get a better emphasis on the lyrics?
** Kiai 1, 2, 3 - I think you really need to change the patterns, they're almost the same all over the place and thus make it a bit boring. Try to be more varied and use your own beats!
** 01:02:028 (206) - to 01:17:372 (261) - The intensity is a bit lower, maybe decrease the density as well here? (7-notes cut into 3-3s, 5-1s or 1-5s for example would be fine)
01:17:372 (261) - Put a D on that note for low-tom?
01:31:997 (300) - I think you can also delete it to emphasize the "sur ma route" as before.
01:39:669 (324) - ^
02:07:002 (415,416) - This could definitely be a ddd, don't you think?
02:10:838 (423,424) - ^
02:41:047 (522) - Same as 300/324.
** 02:41:766 (525) - to 02:49:439 (547) - Maybe change your colors as you're having a lot of copypaste on that particular chunk of song...
03:10:538 (608) - Maybe delete that one, as there's no real note under ? And while we're at it, add a note at 03:11:497 - and 03:11:977 - on the lyric.
03:35:473 (55) - All other kiais didn't start with a finisher, so why did you put one here - the emphasis was correct before.
03:55:493 (3,4) - Questionable pattern, there's a big volume drop in the song where you put 3.
03:54:174 (4,5,6,1) - k d k ? This doesn't really call for kkk k, plus you will have some color variety.
03:58:010 (4,5,6,1) - ^
04:01:846 (4,5,6,1) - ^
04:06:161 (1) - d ? The final guitar is low pitched so it works well as d.
03:58:969 (2,3,4) - ↓
04:02:805 (2,3,4) - 1/2 please, this doesn't ask for a k kk.
03:52:256 (108,109,1) - ↓
03:56:092 (5,6,1,2) - The current way is rythmically questionable, I recommend
03:59:928 (5,6,1,2) - ^
I really liked the difficulty as a whole and tried to put some ways to improve the map. Suitable for ranking as it is, but really needing some more variety to being fun with it.
[Oni]
00:05:325 (20,21,22,23,24,25,26) - kddk k d d to follow the guitar strumming ?
00:23:187 (95,96,97,98,99) - Why not a 3+1 pattern ? The part is pretty calm and you do not go higher than doubles.
00:24:865 (103,104) - kd k d d k felt weird to play, and the "compte" seems the lowest pitched of the sequence. I suggest you to invert the notes so it becomes kd d k d k.
00:30:859 (123,124) - About this one, I can see a triplet here, a bit like your quintuplets on other instances.
00:40:209 (164,165) - Same as 103-104.
00:20:789 - 00:28:461 - 00:43:806 - Muzukashii has a note at these spots but not Oni. Add a k on each of them ?
Kiais do not have any small 1/1 pauses, please consider removing some notes! Also, some rhythms are really odd to play and doesn't flow well.
IE 00:48:122 (192,193,194) - 00:51:718 (212,213,214,215,216,217) -
01:02:028 (274) - to 01:17:372 (343) - The general structure of the song is more like 00:15:994 (71) - to 00:31:339 (125) - except that kicks are present. Try to have that general structure while toning down the patterns so it feels more calm.
01:07:782 (300) - Delete that to have the same structure as 01:14:015 (326,327,328,329,330,331,332,333,334) - ?
01:16:893 (339,340,341,342,343) - BTW, remove 342 so you can stick a D on 343.
Accidentally sounded awkward.01:17:372 (343) - to 01:32:717 (6) - same comment as for the kiais, add more breaks.
01:41:587 (45,46) - Invert k and d ? Same as 103-104 above.
The part past the second kiai has unnecessary notes such as 02:05:204 (161) - 02:09:040 (175) - 02:12:876 (191) - 02:16:713 (207) - , any reason for these ? I think these add a bit of artificial difficulty :I
02:18:750 (213) - 02:26:422 (254) - Same as the kiais, too restless, you can definitely make a similar flow with less notes.
02:28:341 (261) - to 02:34:095 (292) - ^. You have good spots to make the player rest.
02:41:287 (322,323,324,325,326) - 3+1 on here? (Reason at the beginning)
01:45:184 - 02:46:562 - Add note here
03:27:321 (496,497,498,499) - 3+1, same as 2 lines above
03:35:473 (530) - Remove don, same reason as muzukashii.
The end post-last kiai appears a bit overmapped in comparison to the Muzukashii. Please consider removing some notes and keep a base of 1/2 with SOME 1/4s.
The map also has a lot of copy-pasted patterns, please make sure you can make some differences and keep a certain flow !
Once you're done finishing, please call me. I'll recheck in the following days.
dont make me bubble pls