Continuation of my mod since I was really impressed by your mod. No kudosu.
[General]
Some of the difficulties aren't consistent with where the kiai should be.
[wendao's hyper]
00:22:657 (3) – and 00:23:575 (2) – I personally find the ends of these sliders at 00:22:963 – and 00:23:881 – to be strong notes in the melody and would have made these clickable. Consider a rhythm like this for this section: http://puu.sh/pQku9/dd035b32de.jpg
00:46:993 (2,3) – Consider this? http://puu.sh/pNMwy/c6a42209c7.jpg
01:07:963 (3,4) – There's some notes in the harmony here that denote a change in the music, so I don't think using repetition in your flow is very expressive of this, so consider a flow change, like maybe http://puu.sh/pNMDb/a0f5a551b7.jpg
[toybot's Another]
00:01:228 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) – This is a lot of ½ rhythm at a fair DS which is kind of intense. I have no problem with this alone, but the fact that there is no mirrored pattern in the next four measures at 00:06:126 (1) – makes your introduction have an odd pacing curve (in that this pattern feels too hard relative to the rest of it). While making 00:01:228 (1) – into a 1/1 slider could be worthwhile, I don't think I'll be able to convince you of that, so instead let me try weakening a different part of this pattern. At 00:01:840 (1) - , the pitch starts to fall, so making the spacing descend like so might have an interesting effect while reducing the intensity of the section overall to make the emphasis fall at better moments within the first eight measures: http://puu.sh/pQdmz/499bd32659.jpg
00:21:279 (3,4,5) – Consider this for the rhythm (and for the others in this section): http://puu.sh/pQdAk/1c2c73a7ef.jpg (I'm making this suggestion because I'm missing your intention behind it, which is my fault, but still a problem for me and other similar players)
01:12:248 (6) – I strongly recommend this and all others like it be a ½ slider. I agree this should be restful, but I think you're going too far. This is an overall strong section of the song after all.
01:37:963 (1) – I like that this is a ¼ slider to go with the piano here, but I'm puzzled why 01:39:187 (1) – isn't a ¼ slider to continue with what the piano is doing since there isn't a strong auditory clue to assert the harmony that you've mapped over this melody. If you're going to acknowledge the piano/melody (which I think you should), I think you need to commit to it. I think the measure at 01:39:187 (1) – ought to be restful in order to set up the stronger measure at 01:39:646 (1) - , so use really small spacing here, and then you can use clockwise flow on 01:39:646 (1) – to contrast with 01:37:963 (1) – like so: http://puu.sh/pQeLL/517d614c5a.jpg --------- http://puu.sh/pQeTb/89f8348ae7.jpg
[Expert]
00:07:811 (3,4) – The pacing of this introduction section into the chorus feels odd due to this much ½ rhythm and high spacing leading into the long slider at 00:10:259 (3) – and 00:11:483 (5) - . These two factors make the first section of the song more challenging and more intense than this second section of the song, and that's not the way I interpret this since the beginning is using fewer and calmer instruments. So consider scaling down the first section and making 00:10:259 (3) – into a slightly more intense rhythm like: http://puu.sh/pQfQq/dcff8106a9.jpg. I can see why you want the long slider to provide rest,
00:25:565 (6,1) – Try not to go downwards into (1) since this continues the same V flow from before which doesn't seem to fit the music to me. Try using a less sharp angle like: http://puu.sh/pQfQq/dcff8106a9.jpg
00:32:912 (7,1) – and 00:33:524 (3,1) – These anti-jumps set a really strong precedence for the rest of this section. The inconsistency with the patterns at 00:37:810 (6,1) – , 00:45:310 (1,2) - , etc is really noticeable and slightly disruptive, so I recommend getting rid of the anti-jumps on 00:32:912 (7,1) – or making 00:37:810 (6,1) – into anti-jumps
00:50:361 – Even though it's kind of quiet, there is a note here in the melody, so having a 1/1 pause here feels like undermapping this. You can use low DS or even make (1) a slider, but do at least experiment with these before rejecting.
01:39:799 (5) – I don't think it's worth it to abandon the piano here since this is the climax of this melody, so you want to lean into the piano as much as you can here to reap the rewards of following it. Try making this all ½ circles with big jumps.
[iyasine_sk's Extreme]
00:06:662 (3) – How much enjoyment do you get out of this ¼ circle, and how much enjoyment do you lose by not following the melody by having it? This is an overall calm section of the song, and I personally think you lose more by having it since the melody is doing a great job of introducing the song that you don't need to try to give extra excitement with this.
00:32:912 (2,1) – I'm not a big fan of how you did this 1/1 pause since it reads like ½ rhythm which can be justified by the new harmony on 00:33:065 - , but I'm not the target audience anyway.
01:12:248 (1) – Consider having this be a ½ slider since I think a circle is overdoing how much rest should be here.
01:39:799 (3) - I don't think it's worth it to abandon the piano here since this is the climax of this melody, so you want to lean into the piano as much as you can here to reap the rewards of following it. Try making this ½ circles with big jumps, which goes really nicely with the sliders before it that provide enough rest to set you up for a strong moment like big jumps.
[Oxy's Master]
00:06:738 (1) – There is a very noticeable pitch change here in the melody which is a pretty big change in the intensity of the song here, so I think the pattern can be more expressive here if you change the DS and/or flow. Suggestion: http://puu.sh/pQix2/7b67cd106b.jpg
00:01:228 (1,1,1,1) – This place is similar, so try using symmetry for this one like: http://puu.sh/pQiG3/a3bc455d04.jpg
01:15:616 (3) – This note is kind of strong, consider increasing the DS into it?
01:30:004 (1) – Normal-whistle doesn't sound nice to me, consider using soft-whistle even if that means you have to make it a custom hitsound
01:39:799 (5) – I don't think it's worth it to abandon the piano here since this is the climax of this melody, so you want to lean into the piano as much as you can here to reap the rewards of following it. Try making this all ½ circles with big jumps.
Nice set overall, good luck!
[General]
Some of the difficulties aren't consistent with where the kiai should be.
[wendao's hyper]
00:22:657 (3) – and 00:23:575 (2) – I personally find the ends of these sliders at 00:22:963 – and 00:23:881 – to be strong notes in the melody and would have made these clickable. Consider a rhythm like this for this section: http://puu.sh/pQku9/dd035b32de.jpg
00:46:993 (2,3) – Consider this? http://puu.sh/pNMwy/c6a42209c7.jpg
01:07:963 (3,4) – There's some notes in the harmony here that denote a change in the music, so I don't think using repetition in your flow is very expressive of this, so consider a flow change, like maybe http://puu.sh/pNMDb/a0f5a551b7.jpg
[toybot's Another]
00:01:228 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) – This is a lot of ½ rhythm at a fair DS which is kind of intense. I have no problem with this alone, but the fact that there is no mirrored pattern in the next four measures at 00:06:126 (1) – makes your introduction have an odd pacing curve (in that this pattern feels too hard relative to the rest of it). While making 00:01:228 (1) – into a 1/1 slider could be worthwhile, I don't think I'll be able to convince you of that, so instead let me try weakening a different part of this pattern. At 00:01:840 (1) - , the pitch starts to fall, so making the spacing descend like so might have an interesting effect while reducing the intensity of the section overall to make the emphasis fall at better moments within the first eight measures: http://puu.sh/pQdmz/499bd32659.jpg
00:21:279 (3,4,5) – Consider this for the rhythm (and for the others in this section): http://puu.sh/pQdAk/1c2c73a7ef.jpg (I'm making this suggestion because I'm missing your intention behind it, which is my fault, but still a problem for me and other similar players)
01:12:248 (6) – I strongly recommend this and all others like it be a ½ slider. I agree this should be restful, but I think you're going too far. This is an overall strong section of the song after all.
01:37:963 (1) – I like that this is a ¼ slider to go with the piano here, but I'm puzzled why 01:39:187 (1) – isn't a ¼ slider to continue with what the piano is doing since there isn't a strong auditory clue to assert the harmony that you've mapped over this melody. If you're going to acknowledge the piano/melody (which I think you should), I think you need to commit to it. I think the measure at 01:39:187 (1) – ought to be restful in order to set up the stronger measure at 01:39:646 (1) - , so use really small spacing here, and then you can use clockwise flow on 01:39:646 (1) – to contrast with 01:37:963 (1) – like so: http://puu.sh/pQeLL/517d614c5a.jpg --------- http://puu.sh/pQeTb/89f8348ae7.jpg
[Expert]
00:07:811 (3,4) – The pacing of this introduction section into the chorus feels odd due to this much ½ rhythm and high spacing leading into the long slider at 00:10:259 (3) – and 00:11:483 (5) - . These two factors make the first section of the song more challenging and more intense than this second section of the song, and that's not the way I interpret this since the beginning is using fewer and calmer instruments. So consider scaling down the first section and making 00:10:259 (3) – into a slightly more intense rhythm like: http://puu.sh/pQfQq/dcff8106a9.jpg. I can see why you want the long slider to provide rest,
00:25:565 (6,1) – Try not to go downwards into (1) since this continues the same V flow from before which doesn't seem to fit the music to me. Try using a less sharp angle like: http://puu.sh/pQfQq/dcff8106a9.jpg
00:32:912 (7,1) – and 00:33:524 (3,1) – These anti-jumps set a really strong precedence for the rest of this section. The inconsistency with the patterns at 00:37:810 (6,1) – , 00:45:310 (1,2) - , etc is really noticeable and slightly disruptive, so I recommend getting rid of the anti-jumps on 00:32:912 (7,1) – or making 00:37:810 (6,1) – into anti-jumps
00:50:361 – Even though it's kind of quiet, there is a note here in the melody, so having a 1/1 pause here feels like undermapping this. You can use low DS or even make (1) a slider, but do at least experiment with these before rejecting.
01:39:799 (5) – I don't think it's worth it to abandon the piano here since this is the climax of this melody, so you want to lean into the piano as much as you can here to reap the rewards of following it. Try making this all ½ circles with big jumps.
[iyasine_sk's Extreme]
00:06:662 (3) – How much enjoyment do you get out of this ¼ circle, and how much enjoyment do you lose by not following the melody by having it? This is an overall calm section of the song, and I personally think you lose more by having it since the melody is doing a great job of introducing the song that you don't need to try to give extra excitement with this.
00:32:912 (2,1) – I'm not a big fan of how you did this 1/1 pause since it reads like ½ rhythm which can be justified by the new harmony on 00:33:065 - , but I'm not the target audience anyway.
01:12:248 (1) – Consider having this be a ½ slider since I think a circle is overdoing how much rest should be here.
01:39:799 (3) - I don't think it's worth it to abandon the piano here since this is the climax of this melody, so you want to lean into the piano as much as you can here to reap the rewards of following it. Try making this ½ circles with big jumps, which goes really nicely with the sliders before it that provide enough rest to set you up for a strong moment like big jumps.
[Oxy's Master]
00:06:738 (1) – There is a very noticeable pitch change here in the melody which is a pretty big change in the intensity of the song here, so I think the pattern can be more expressive here if you change the DS and/or flow. Suggestion: http://puu.sh/pQix2/7b67cd106b.jpg
00:01:228 (1,1,1,1) – This place is similar, so try using symmetry for this one like: http://puu.sh/pQiG3/a3bc455d04.jpg
01:15:616 (3) – This note is kind of strong, consider increasing the DS into it?
01:30:004 (1) – Normal-whistle doesn't sound nice to me, consider using soft-whistle even if that means you have to make it a custom hitsound
01:39:799 (5) – I don't think it's worth it to abandon the piano here since this is the climax of this melody, so you want to lean into the piano as much as you can here to reap the rewards of following it. Try making this all ½ circles with big jumps.
Nice set overall, good luck!
is back! yahallo aka :3
And I also want to point out that should we make the kiai time starts at 01:11:330 - as the heavy beat starts here? 
