1. I think 01:17:004 would be a better preview point.

1. 00:37:874 (1,2,3,4) - Eww. All of these sound disgusting due to them being 1/2. Please replace this with something that sounds better.
2. 01:27:439 - Maybe add a beat here?
3. 02:10:482 (5) - Make this end at 02:11:787 somehow. Possibly end with a Finish on that beat, too.

Mogsworth wrote:

Sorry if this seems like a nazimod. Because, well, it is. Definitely not grabbing at straws though, just trying to help.
Just a fair warning, I throw the 'phrase' word around a lot

General:

1. I think 01:17:004 would be a better preview point.

Easy:

1. 00:37:874 (1,2,3,4) - Eww. All of these sound disgusting due to them being 1/2. Please replace this with something that sounds better.
   get some parts changed on hitsound.
2. 01:27:439 - Maybe add a beat here?
   Sound better with removing a note instead of adding one imo.anyway,coz of your suggestion,it gets better.
3. 02:10:482 (5) - Make this end at 02:11:787 somehow. Possibly end with a Finish on that beat, too.

do not sound good imo.

Normal:

SPOILER

1. 00:36:569 (1) - This, musically, belongs to the same phrase as 00:32:656 (1,2,3). I'd say remove the New Combo mark from this and then try to incorporate it into that phrase.
   add new combo following the pattern instead of music in this area.
2. 00:37:874 (2) - Musically, this belongs to the same phrase as 00:39:178 (1,2). I'd say start the 1.0x here, put a New Combo mark on this, remove the NCM from 00:39:178 (1), and start that phrase here.
   the same reason as above mentioned.
3. 01:26:135 (5) - I saw this slowed down to 0.5x in the collab and I thought that was well-done. Why not do that here while extending it to 01:27:439? That'd make the phrase feel more complete.
   agree with you.
4. 01:44:395 (7,8,9,10) - I feel like what you did with 01:49:613 (7,8) would be more appropriate here, while what you did here would be more appropriate at 01:49:613. Why? End of a phrase should probably be harder than the middle, right?
   for more variety.that's why i put the different patterns on same musical area.
   I'm probbably a strange mapper.coz i feel like making middle part harder than end one.
   
5. 02:06:135 (4) - New Combo mark goes here. New phrase, New Combo, right? Unless you'd prefer to start it at 02:07:221 (5), because no matter what, I found both to flow smoothly.
   02:07:874 (6) - getting better on marking new combo here imo.
6. 02:09:178 (8) - New Combo mark.
   already changed new combo setting as above revise.
7. 02:10:482 (10) - 0.5x plus extending to 02:11:787? How about that?
   i still feel 02:11:135 should be a good end after considering your suggestion
8. 03:07:874 (1) - This is part of the previous phrase. I'd suggest making it fit with that because this just felt awkward.
9. 03:09:178 (2) - If you fix the previous point, New Combo mark here.
10. 03:35:265 (8) - New Combo mark here.
11. 03:37:221 (1) - Remove the New Combo mark.
12. 03:40:482 (5) - New Combo mark here.
13. 03:43:091 (1) - Remove the New Combo mark.
    simple pattern.i think its okay?

Collab:

SPOILER

1. 00:50:048 (6) - This first Whistle sounds strange, out of place, and forced. In all of the phrases like this, please remove this sort of Whistle. Sure, one might think that'd make the map sound boring, but it doesn't. It just sounds less awkward/flows more smoothly.
   nope.its a regular hitsound form.if there is other experienced mappers who are the same opinion as you.i will amend this & change my mind.
2. 01:01:352 (1,2,3,4) - Not fond of this far of a distance snap at such a calm point in the song. It feels out of place. Perhaps lower the distance between each by a tad.
   hmm...not changed.sorry.
3. 01:14:395 (1,2,3,4) - This is ridiculous. Lower the distance now.
   ok.fixed
4. 01:25:700 (2,3,4) - Move this away from the endpoint of 1.
   This is stack lenienc issue.can not flow smoothly
5. 01:26:135 (4) - I feel like where this ends is not a good place to end the phrase. Despite the short amount of time between it and the next part, I'd say end the phrase at 01:27:439, whether by extending this or repeating it.
   Already mute sound.its okay i suppose.
6. 01:30:048 (1,2,3,4) - This sort of large spacing still feels out of place in this calmer sort of section. But it's a tad manageable, so I'd say to slightly lower the distance.
   Done
7. 01:34:395 (7) - Remember my Whistle issue? It's repeated with these Claps, but sounds a LOT more awkward.
   The same reason as above mentioned.
8. 01:58:743 (1,2) - This transition in particular is awkward. The rest of the phrase flows nicely, but this transition just feels strange.
   dont wanna change this pattern currently.
9. 02:10:482 (5) - Same complaint as before, except end at 02:11:787.
   Also the same reason as above mentioned.sorry.
10. 03:32:656 (6) - Really? The phrase ends here? That's awkward, sadly. It'd feel right to end at 03:35:265.

Will make decision by azuki

Overall, I like the map. Fun to play plus a somewhat eerie storyboard (Mogsy <3s eerie stuff). Starring due to the fact that it is very well put together and just needs some fixing.

1. Just one thing that seemed to pop out strange to me: Why use the same image in the storyboard and the background? You can easily change the .osb filename to reference the background itself instead of a copy.

1. I can understand having it half-mapped this time, but what bothers me is how you must press skip to get to the ranking screen, and to me, in test, the skip button doesn't appear. You could make the storyboard difficulty-specific and cut the one in Easy.

Gens wrote:

[All Difficulties]


dots,i forgot to resnap after adjusting timing,Fixed

[Storyboard]

1. Just one thing that seemed to pop out strange to me: Why use the same image in the storyboard and the background? You can easily change the .osb filename to reference the background itself instead of a copy.

Will be fixed by Breeze.

[Easy]

1. I can understand having it half-mapped this time, but what bothers me is how you must press skip to get to the ranking screen, and to me, in test, the skip button doesn't appear. You could make the storyboard difficulty-specific and cut the one in Easy.

Fixed

This is kinda creepy. ;~; I liked the song nevertheless.

Alace wrote:

Don`t forget to resnap all notes lol
if you want your map perfect, you may fix the storyboard too
haha.got it.

<Easy>
00:37:874 (1,2,3,4) - they sound bad XD
Yeh,changed~

All good~