GeneralArtist: 柿チョコ
Romanised: Kakichoco
Remove kakichoco ifuudoudou from tags
Remove hatsune miku gumi luka megpoid kagamine from tags as well because they aren't involved in this version
Add cover into the tags
Romanised Title is
not 'ifuudoudou' or 'If You Do Do'
As according to the official video post: "If you do do ではありません"
Title should be "Pomp and Circumstance"Official Source:
http://www.nicovideo.jp/watch/sm19233263Insane00:24:710 (1,2,3,4) - the flow between 00:24:710 (1,2) is not good, you jerk upwards to do the stream, which is bad. Place the stream anywhere other than above the end of 00:24:710 (1) - best is below or directly beside it
00:26:556 (1,2) - sounds weird because it's very generalised, map to the streams, or at least 1/2 beats, because this sounds too empty
00:28:863 (5) - change this slider to have something start at 00:29:094 because the vocals here are important and something should start here instead of being in the middle of a slider
00:30:941 (5) - NC for slider velocity change indication, as well as put it in the middle of the pattern 00:30:018 (1,2,3,4) to make it look more uniform
00:36:480 (5,6) - blanket them
00:42:941 (9) - NC
00:44:786 (3) - slider end at 00:45:017 and add a note at 00:45:248 - the current rhythm doesn't fit the song
00:51:941 (5,6) - the angle is too acute, 00:52:172 (6) should be placed in a more decent angle, like x: 256 y: 152
00:53:095 (9) - place it more to the left of the end of 00:52:633 (8) instead of underneath it and towards the right, so that it flows better and movement is more smooth
00:55:864 (6,7,8,9) - make spacing between them look equal for better looking presentation
00:57:711 (1) - rotate more clockwise, same with 00:57:941 (2) - the flow gets awkward if the curve goes upwards and higher than the straight direction of the stream
01:00:480 (4) - NC
01:10:864 (1,2,3,4,5) - use more curves instead of straight lines, curves make flow better
01:11:440 (5,6) - this jump is too extreme, put them closer
01:15:249 (5) - NC for velocity change indication
01:17:095 (5) - ^ and blanket it with 01:16:056 (2) the curve is not pretty right now
01:17:556 (1,2,3,4,5) - make it more round, make it look nicer, this shape is ugly, doesn't look neat too
01:18:941 (7) - NC to show change in velocity
01:19:403 (8) - ^
01:25:403 (4) - NC
01:32:671 - continue the stream here because the vocals are here also and should be mapped
01:33:249 (3,4,5) - blanket better
01:39:017 (3) - slider should end at 01:39:248 with the vocals
01:42:710 (4) - remove the finishes on the 2nd and 3rd repeat, you should only have a finish on the
end of the whole slider
01:45:710 (1) - use a better shape, you can then blanket 01:46:172 (2) as well
01:47:556 (9) - Ctrl + H this shape for better flow. NC should be here also, instead of 01:48:018 (1)
01:48:480 (3,4) - blanket
01:49:403 (6) - the slider is not in rhythm. Remove 01:49:864 (7) and make the repeat slider in 1/2 beat rhythm
01:50:787 (4) - the ends being not in same plane looks ugly
01:52:864 (1) - something should start at 01:53:094 with the vocals, not go over with this slider
02:08:556 (3,4,5) - make it a straight line
02:31:402 (6,1) - blanket them
02:32:326 (2) - slider should end at 02:32:556 to go with the music
02:32:902 (1) - slider starts late. Start at 02:32:786
02:49:403 (3,4,6,7) - repeat sliders are off-rhythm, they should be 1/2 repeat sliders, so the circles shouldn't be there at all
02:53:326 (6,1,1) - not in a straight line, it doesn't look good
Overall, I think the rhythm can be better, at times the rhythm is too simplistic, it does not go well with the song, just doesn't fit nicely. Map more to the vocals, it will help make it blend better to the song. Flow could be better, just try and move around and create imaginary lines to connect the parts together, that will really help in making a more fluid map.
Hard00:30:940 (5,1) - you should not start 00:32:094 (1) behind the end of 00:30:940 (5) because the movement is not natural, you have to move the opposite direction to go to 00:32:094 (1) before moving back up again
00:34:633 (2,3,4,5) - this pattern looks disproportionate, 00:33:940 (1,2) should also be further apart
00:35:786 (1,2,3) - blanket better
00:36:940 (3,6) - must the overlap?
00:38:325 (1,2) - ^
00:44:786 (4) - slider should end at 00:45:017 and add a circle at 00:45:248 to fit the song better
00:47:095 (3,4) - this is bad flow
00:54:710 (5) - the flow should not be moving in this direction, according to the song, the slider moving in the left direction would flow better. You would have to move it elsewhere too
01:19:633 (1,2) - don't overlap
01:26:556 (6,7) - ^
01:27:479 (1,1) - don't touch each other
01:31:863 (5,1) - blanket them
01:33:248 (4,5) - bad flow
01:47:556 (5,2) - must the overlap?
01:47:556 (5,3) - ^
01:52:402 (5,1) - doesn't flow well with each other
02:14:556 (2) - this slider doesn't fit the song, the main beat is at 02:14:786
02:29:556 (1,2) - flow between them isn't good
02:34:172 (3,4) - bad flow
02:38:326 (5,1) - blanket them
02:44:095 (1,2) - too close to each other, not good for playing as well as doesn't look nice
02:48:249 (4,5) - ^
02:48:480 (5,2,3) - don't overlap
03:07:633 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - bland and boring rhythm to end the song, use more variety and less repeat sliders
Rhythm needs to be more interesting, it's too boring most of the time, flow looks angular and straight as well, needs more fluidity
Normal00:26:556 (1,2) - blanket
00:30:940 (4,1) - ugly overlap
00:40:403 (1,2) - blanket
00:44:787 (2) - shape doesn't look good in this song
00:47:095 (2,1) - blanket
00:49:633 (1,2) - ^
00:59:556 (1,2) - stack nicely please
01:15:249 (2,1) - don't touch each other
01:15:941 (1) - you should not have so many repeats in the Normal difficulty, you should change the rhythm here
01:18:018 (1,2) - end of (2) don't touch other slider
01:33:248 (2,1) - blanket
01:35:786 (1,2) - ^
01:45:709 (1,1) - stack properly
02:13:403 (3,2) - don't overlap
02:16:633 (3,4) - stack properly
02:26:556 (1,2) - blanket
02:28:633 (4) - could have been more fitting to the rhythm of the music, with the crucial beat at 02:29:094
02:30:017 (1,2,3) - you generalized the rhythm too much here, it honestly doesn't fit the song
02:40:171 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - this part definitely looks copy-pasted from the previous chorus, doesn't look good knowing it's the exact same thing
02:46:633 (1,1) - stack properly
02:53:095 (2,1) - blanket
02:54:017 (1,2,3,4) - use better shape
02:55:402 (4,1) - don't touch
02:57:710 (2) - don't have so man repeat in a Normal, change the rhythm here
Rhythm can be improved a lot, positioning and shape as well, the difficulty looks very plain and not distinct to the song as well, you need to make it more designed just for this song, the positions and placement helps in making the map look more professionally done and more structured and more experienced looking.
Song can be improved a lot more, good luck