sheela901 wrote:

You add "hatsune miku" in the tags two times. Remove one, and I might mod it tomorrow.
No kudosu.

• 00:05:304 (1) - it's strange that using a straight slider here. Just try to curve it. 0.0
  00:14:640 (6,7) - I think it's not fit the music, it's likes better that removeing the note and puting the slider's head on the next redline.
  01:12:344 (4) - change it to a slider like 01:11:732 (2) - ,and it'll be better
  01:14:181 (2) - have a try to make it parallel with 01:13:875 (1) - 0.0
  01:27:038 (4,5) - I think it's too far from note to slider, although vocal is very high here (skiping this suggestion is OK )
  01:50:151 (4) - changing it to a straight slider may be better 0.0
  01:56:426 (5) - Ctrl +g and move 01:56:885 (6) - to stack with the next slider's head
  02:17:396 (6) - removing this will be better ,I think
  02:39:589 (1) - move the slder to stack with 02:39:283 (5) -
  03:31:783 (4) - remove the note, I think it's not necessary

spring wrote:

hi,from soga's queue

a awesome song, I love it. O.O yes this song is great <3

Hana Emi

• 00:05:304 (1) - it's strange that using a straight slider here. Just try to curve it. 0.0 fixed
  00:14:640 (6,7) - I think it's not fit the music, it's likes better that removeing the note and puting the slider's head on the next redline.fixed
  01:12:344 (4) - change it to a slider like 01:11:732 (2) - ,and it'll be better fixed
  01:14:181 (2) - have a try to make it parallel with 01:13:875 (1) - 0.0i like this the way it is
  01:27:038 (4,5) - I think it's too far from note to slider, although vocal is very high here (skiping this suggestion is OK ) yes i try to emphasize the vocals at this part
  01:50:151 (4) - changing it to a straight slider may be better 0.0hmm i like it the way it is now
  01:56:426 (5) - Ctrl +g and move 01:56:885 (6) - to stack with the next slider's head i dont like this pattern sorry
  02:17:396 (6) - removing this will be better ,I think yes i agree, fixed
  02:39:589 (1) - move the slder to stack with 02:39:283 (5) - hmm ok fixed
  03:31:783 (4) - remove the note, I think it's not necessary

since it is kiai time, i want to keep the chorus dense with notes

Good song, good map,wonderful storyboard ty
Good luck 0.0

sheela901 wrote:

Hello.

General

1. The file size is too big, because of the images. You can convert the PNG backgrounds into a JPG file, since it'll chop the half of the file size.
   I see that you duplicate the main background (HAND.jpg) (you put it in the SB folder, and named it hand pulse.png), which was unneccesary, because you can use the main background as an element, and you'll add 1 MB more.
   You also duplicate these files: GREY HAND PULSE; GERY HAND; LIGHT BLUE HAND PULSE; pink lemonade hand pulse. Please use only one image file if you want to make pulse and background with the same image.
   I decided to make a lot of changes, so here's the new osz (make a backup of the current first, and if you see something not right, you can PM and tell what's wrong). The backgrounds are in JPG, I compressed them so it could get a reasonable file size, removed duplicates, and I edited the .osb file with new names. http://puu.sh/bdrKX/03eac272d1.osz
2. Add "vocaloid utaite" in the tags.

The post isn't complete, but I just want to inform this. No kudosu though. And sorry posting in this thread two times. There'll be a third time...

sheela901 wrote:

Re-Hello

Hana Emi

1. If there's an object before the first timing point, you should put the timing point before the first object, which in this case, move the timing point to 00:00:406 .ok fixed
2. You use too much kiai mode in my opinion. Like 00:29:793 -, in my opinion.yeah i dont think a kiai time is needed here, fixed
3. The first landed on 01:34:691 should be on 01:35:916 - , since the chorus starts there. You should also end it on 01:54:589 . It follows nicer with the music. There's also 03:42:957 that can end on 03:46:936 .
4. End the second kiai time on 02:15:100 .
5. 05:05:916 - On the SB, the pulse isn't correctly pulse (unless it's because of something I changed in the .osb file).hmm it wasnt like that before, fixed
6. 01:33:467 - I like the particles you made here.thanks <3
7. 01:35:304 - Should the "light border.png" be scaled like this, or maybe you can scale it more?fixed
8. "pink lemonade hand.jpg" is a bad background, as you can see the little "distort", the "borders" aren't "smooth". I suggest to re-do the background, or remove it and replace the element in the SB by something else.im really a big fan of this BG, i really like it
   ---------------------------------------------------
9. 00:01:936 (1) - Try facing the curve down:fixed
   
   SPOILER

   
   In my opinion, the slider looks more nicer, and won't have a curve like 00:02:855 (2) -, because I personally saw it ugly.
   Or, when you face the curve to the up, it'll create a circular flow with the next object, so it's comfortable to play.
10. 00:02:855 (2) - Add a new combo, since the beat here is strong (and it's on a downbeat). Also, loosen the curve a bit:fixed
    
    SPOILER

    
    Like I mentioned in the first suggestion, in my taste, curves like this are ugly.
11. 00:04:691 (5,6,1) - Try moving these to x:309 y:65, so you could adjust the curve of 00:04:691 (5) so it could make a blanket with the previous object's head.ok fixed
12. 00:08:365 (2,3,4) - I suggest to move more closer to each other so it follows better with the music. The tone (beats) is quiet than 00:09:283 (1,2,3) -, which are louder, so it gives more emphasis, so a jump would follow the music. This suggestion will break the pattern you created with 00:09:283 (1,2,3) .hmm fixed
13. 00:23:365 (3) - I don't really this type of wave shape, as I can see the little triangular corner, on the slider's border. Try a wave with only four nodes:fixed ty
    
    SPOILER

    
14. 00:26:885 (1,2) - Swap the new combo ((1) becomes (6), and (2) becomes (1)), since downbeats has (always) strong beats.i see what your sayin, fixed
15. 00:34:691 (1) - Same suggestion as 00:23:365 (3) . The shape isn't "complete", as you can see that the right side is shorter than the opposite side. Try to replicate (it's okay if it's not precise) the shape in the image below:fixed
    
    SPOILER

    
16. 00:40:814 (2,3) - These were uncomfortable to play, because the distance got suddenly short. I suggest to move them apart, as you did to 00:35:916 (2,3) . You can try placing them like in the image below:tried my best to replicate the image
    
    SPOILER

    
17. 00:42:038 (4) - The tone of the voice got higher, so it can use a new combo. It also lands on a downbeat.
18. 00:50:916 (1) - Remove the new combo? The tone is likely the same as 00:49:691 (1,2,3) .
19. 00:51:834 (1) - Lel. Nazi. This kind of curve were used in old maps, because the developer didn't upgrade the nodes on the slider earlier. You can remove the node in the middle by selecting the slider, hold CTRL, and click on the node. To add one, hold CTRL, then add the node where do you want to place.
20. 00:59:793 (3) - The distance between this and the previous object is too short (I testplayed and it was uncomfortable to play). Move it further to the previous object, and if possible, try blanketing with 00:58:875 (5) . If the distance is short, you can ignore it.i think i fixed it
21. 01:29:181 (2) - Move this to where that 01:28:569 (1) could shoot naturally to the next object.fixed
22. 01:29:487 (3,4,5,6,7) - Try moving them more further to each other. Since the previous part has a higher distance between them, you can to these, so it stays on a same "consistency play".fixed
23. 01:50:916 (7) - That's a weird shape. Try a curve so it follows the pattern with the previous object.made it more curvier
24. 02:11:803 - Same suggestion as 01:29:487 (3,4,5,6,7) . The distance is too little, so it's a little uncomfortable to play.fixed
25. 05:05:916 (1) - The shape is really weird, and ugly. A normal curve would fit.

fixed
I have a similar mapping style, but mine's shittier
Well, that's all (I guess). Good Luck on ranking this map.

CDFA wrote:

!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Overall:
Spamming kudosu stars isn't always a good idea haha yeah, this is my first serious map so i thought you were supposed to spam stars xD
tbh when I saw an Extra level diff then heard the song, I had an idea of how this was gonna turn out and . . . yeah.
For reference, just because a map is going for approval, it doesn't mean it has to be super hard well the map isnt very difficult at all

Diff:
AR - 1. no
Instead of making a shitload of posts being like "fix this specifically" I'm gonna give a generalization. Firstly, a map's note density is completely based on how much is happening in the background. Hence why I'd map this with less notes than this, because both songs call for different things.
Also, to explain a jump, a jump is primarily used to put emphasis on parts of music, to make it stand out more than other parts. Especially when you're starting to map, it's important to realize that jumps have a purpose in your mapping. A lot of people choose to just have jumps wherever and whenever. I also don't like a lot of people's choice to do that. A jump should have purpose, and a lot of these jumps don't seem to have purpose (or even purpose in terms of creating patterns)
Don't put 2 of the same combo color in a row ;w;. There's a reason combo colors exist, and there's a reason they're default set to different colors.
and here's everything elsefor whatever reason, when im in the editor, or playing my map, the combo colors arent what i set them, i have use default skin and i dont have ignore beatmap skin checked, so idk whats going on
01:22:140 (3,4,1,2) - I don't have to explain why this is wrongyes you do have to explain why this is wrong, i dont see anything wrong with this
01:26:732 (2,3,4,5) - Jump theory from someone that doesn't play the game, uhhhh, to do a good jump, you need to have some sort of momentum. Which is why I hate it when people put jumps as the first note in their mapi think this is fine
01:33:467 (1,2,1,2) - The piano doesn't change, hwy are you changing?fixed
01:37:600 (2,3,4) - Momentum aaaaawoops, accidentally deleted some of this pattern
01:39:283 (4,1,2) - Don't have to explain why this is a boo booplease explain, you are supposed to help me improve my map and mapping skills, just saying something is a fucking boo boo does nothing for me, especially since your a BAT
01:43:722 (2) - WOAH FRIEND YOU MAY NEED TO SLOW DOWNk
01:55:202 (5,6,1) - Is this like a thingyes it is
01:58:263 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - 1/2 everywhere B( out some more circles here
02:05:151 (6,1) - The weird thing about this combo is that you're not even avoiding the slider overlap, which is what most people who put a jump here would do. it's also really big.reduced spacing a bit
02:29:028 (5,6,7,8,1) - Reasonably, how many people are gonna hit this on their first try?tried to fix it a little
02:33:314 (5) - did something uhfixed
02:35:304 (2,3,4) - tbh this is super hard to reali dont really know how to fix this
04:02:855 (1,2,1,2) - so now you choose to slow down?yes i slowed down this part to emphasize the final chorus of the song, A.K.A the most difficult part

I didn't point out a lot of specifics because im hoping you'll look at the map and see what needs the most affection, in terms of note density, note placement, and proper comboing

[sekai] wrote:

00:13:263 (2) - try to move close to 00:12:651 (1) - i think its ok as it is
00:59:105 (8)wut
01:11:120 (7,1) - ^wut
01:11:273 (1,2) - ^wut
01:12:344 (4) - change it to a slider like 01:11:732it is
02:17:396 (6) - removing thisok
02:29:105 (4)wut
02:32:166 (1) - So these need to be moved one note to the lefti think its good

02:34:079 (7)goodty
03:31:783 (4) - remove the notei'd rather keep the note there rather then stopping the flow
03:57:957 (1) -
Finish

1. Your soft-hitclap is a corrupt file, it's only 7 kbs in size. You need to replace it with a different one. Here is a version of your clap that isn't corrupt:
   soft-hitclap
   
2. All in all I thought you could do a lot more with the hitsounds here. Your clap is really quiet, maybe you can add a deeper clap that you can use for sounds like 00:07:140 and all the claps in the more loud sections like the kiai. Up to you, maybe you can try these:
   http://puu.sh/bfdIj/8326b3a344.wav
   http://puu.sh/bfdJR/444e0ab7bc.wav
   Along with these I felt you could make much more use of drum claps and finishes. When you hear them in the music(lots of times in transitions), you can add them to embellish a pattern. I tried to mention a few below.

1. 00:01:936 (1) - Could try a whistle on the repeat for the high piano hit.
   
2. 00:03:773 (3) - A whistle on the head is nice here for the piano.
   
3. 00:06:222 (3) - ^ Same as above, seems a whistle works nicely.
   
4. 00:20:610 (3,4,5) - When you have two running circles leading in a line into a slider like this, I feel it can play nicer if you use a consistent spacing.
   
5. 00:24:589 (6,7,1) - ^ Same, seems a constant distance will play better. This would apply to all your patterns like this, I felt you could even the spacing up more when you had running notes(as in not jumping).
   
6. 00:29:181 (1) - Drum sample works well here. Try a clap on the repeat and finish on the end.
   
7. 00:29:870 (1) - Seemed weird that you reduced to volume to 20% right before the end of the spinner. I thought maybe you could do a more gradual decrease in volume through the whole spinner, or make it all 20%. For the sound to suddenly drop near the end is a bit strange.
   
8. 00:34:691 to 01:11:426 - I thought you could add more soft whistles in this section, specifically to follow the piano when it hits. Here are some places I thought they would work well:
   
   Whistles

   00:39:589 -
   00:42:038 -
   00:45:712 -
   00:48:161 -
   00:51:834 -
   So on and so forth if you see the general pattern there.
9. 00:50:916 (4,5,6,1) - Try to match the curve given from 00:49:691 (1,2,3) to make a nice echo effect here, I think it will play nicer. Currently the 4-1 has a sharp curve in comparison, here's what I mean:
   
   Example

   
10. 00:54:130 (5) - I suggest to put the NC here instead of 00:54:283 (1). It will make the antijump much easier to spot and will be consistent with 00:59:105 (1) in that both NC's are before the downbeat.
    
11. 01:03:467 (4,5,1) - Jumping would be really fitting here imo because of the loud base transition. The constant spacing feels stale to me. Maybe you can try a different pattern.
    
12. 01:03:773 (5) - Drum finish fits better with the music.
    
13. 01:13:263 (1,2,3,4) - It seems that drum finishes match the music better than claps on the second set of 4 notes here.
    
14. 01:13:416 (2) - I think it might be nicer to play placed more around (308,288). The current placement makes a large push right for the 2 and then back for 3, but then spacing after the 3 is much less. Try it:
    
    Example

    
15. 01:19:538 (2) - I thought it might be nicer with the vocals if you deleted this and added a circle at 01:19:691 stacked on the 01:19:852 (3). Jumping over for the 2 doesn't really match the vocals here, the pause might be better.
    
16. 01:26:120 (1,2) - Confusing anti-jump here. Try not to use less spacing for 1/2 than you do for 1/4 in a given pattern. Like here you have an anti-jump in 1/2 from 1 to 2, and then a large jump in 1/4 from 2 to 3. It's something you want to avoid if possible because player will have trouble reading it.
    
17. 01:49:998 (3,4) - This jump feels pretty awkward since it's not really mapped to anything in the music. What would be best here is a pause after hitting the 01:49:998 (3) and then a slider or circles at 01:50:303. That would fit more solidly with the vocals. To me it doesn't make much sense how you have small spacing through 01:50:151 (4,5,6) when the vocals are pushing into the downbeat. That would call for spacing increases imo.
    
18. 01:59:334 (7) - Maybe the slider is better at 01:59:487. This is so that the player can click it there along with the vocals. Try not to use too many offbeats sliders because they can often feel distant from the music. You don't want important beats to be landing on slider ends.
    
19. 02:00:099 (10,11,1) - I miss the nice spacing you had before, seems not powerful enough now in comparison with other patterns.
    
20. 02:09:742 (7) - I think deleting this note will be better, there really isn't anything in the song that it's mapped to and it makes this jumping quite large. You could adjust 02:09:896 (7,8) after it.
    
21. 02:18:008 - You can add a note or make a 1/4 slider here to follow the drums.
    
22. 02:23:977 to 02:44:487 - Since piano is very dominant in this section, I though you could do a lot more with the soft whistles. Right now you're basically just using claps, try to fill out your sound more here with the whistles in a pattern to follow the piano.
    
23. 02:23:977 (2,3,4) - Even spacing would feel nicer here, try moving the 4 up to make a triangle.
    
    Example

    
24. 02:29:028 (5,6,7,8,1) - This rhythm is not correct. Listen in 25% playback and you will see. I don't think that the piano can be mapped here since it isn't playing along with the metronome at all. In that case you need to use a rhythm that follows the drum beat. Maybe you can try:
    
    Example

    
25. 02:46:324 (5) - 02:49:385 (1) - Some the sliders in this section need some work. You don't need to use so many white anchor points. If you want to have your long sliders curve and blanket around the smaller ones, you should make the large slider first then place the smaller ones around it since they are easier to adjust with only one anchor point. Also you can check out this guide for creating beautiful sliders:
    t/37194
    
26. 02:50:304 (3) - The slider end is unsnapped. You need to snap it to 02:50:508 in 1/6 beatsnap divisor. Since this phrase is 1/6, you should use less spacing between the 3 and 4 here than you do between other objects in the section that are 1/4, such as 02:46:936 (1,2).
    
27. 02:55:049 (2,3) - It might fit with the music nicer if you switched these two on the time line. That way the player can click the slider at 02:55:201 where the string melody begins again.
    
28. 03:18:008 (2) - This note feels really extra here. Maybe you can try using a 1/4 slider at 03:17:854 instead and rethinking the pattern. Either way, the jumping shouldn't be starting until 03:18:161 to follow the music properly.
    
29. 03:22:447 (3) - Try ending this slider at 03:23:059 to hit with the drum and then having a 1/4 stream right after it. I think it might be nicer to play than the current long slider since the vocals do change at 03:23:059.
    
    Example

    
30. 03:42:651 (6,7) - Same concern here as 01:50:151 (4) about the jumping not following the vocals. I'd really like to have an object on 03:42:957 to click.
    
31. 03:54:436 (4,5) - Spacing feels a big closed there. Maybe you can try to increase it.
    
32. 03:55:508 (1,2,3) - Maybe try this flow here.
    
    Example

    
33. 03:57:957 (1) - Missed a finish?
    
34. 04:06:528 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - Drum sample could fit really well here.
    
35. 04:46:936 (1) - Ctrl+G makes a nicer pattern to play imo, but you'd have to adjust the placement on 04:47:855 (2,3).
    
36. 05:06:528 to end - Same as 00:34:691 to 01:11:426. You can try adding soft whistles in a pattern to follow the piano hits. It will sound very nice.
    
37. 05:15:100 (1,2,3,4) - Soft whistles are very nice here.
    
38. 05:23:671 - I suggest to use a spiner here to end the map ending at 05:27:038. The reason is because the guitar isn't playing perfectly in time, so it will be easy for the player to get a 100 here.

UnitedWeSin wrote:

Sup Jimmy.
From #modreqs.
Nice song choice.
Cool SB. \o/

[General]

1. Your soft-hitclap is a corrupt file, it's only 7 kbs in size. You need to replace it with a different one. Here is a version of your clap that isn't corrupt:
   soft-hitclap
   
2. All in all I thought you could do a lot more with the hitsounds here. Your clap is really quiet, maybe you can add a deeper clap that you can use for sounds like 00:07:140 and all the claps in the more loud sections like the kiai. Up to you, maybe you can try these:
   http://puu.sh/bfdIj/8326b3a344.wav
   http://puu.sh/bfdJR/444e0ab7bc.wav
   Along with these I felt you could make much more use of drum claps and finishes. When you hear them in the music(lots of times in transitions), you can add them to embellish a pattern. I tried to mention a few below.

[Hana Emi]

1. 00:01:936 (1) - Could try a whistle on the repeat for the high piano hit.
   
2. 00:03:773 (3) - A whistle on the head is nice here for the piano.
   
3. 00:06:222 (3) - ^ Same as above, seems a whistle works nicely.
   
4. 00:20:610 (3,4,5) - When you have two running circles leading in a line into a slider like this, I feel it can play nicer if you use a consistent spacing.
   
5. 00:24:589 (6,7,1) - ^ Same, seems a constant distance will play better. This would apply to all your patterns like this, I felt you could even the spacing up more when you had running notes(as in not jumping).
   
6. 00:29:181 (1) - Drum sample works well here. Try a clap on the repeat and finish on the end.
   
7. 00:29:870 (1) - Seemed weird that you reduced to volume to 20% right before the end of the spinner. I thought maybe you could do a more gradual decrease in volume through the whole spinner, or make it all 20%. For the sound to suddenly drop near the end is a bit strange.
   
8. 00:34:691 to 01:11:426 - I thought you could add more soft whistles in this section, specifically to follow the piano when it hits. Here are some places I thought they would work well:
   
   Whistles

   00:39:589 -
   00:42:038 -
   00:45:712 -
   00:48:161 -
   00:51:834 -
   So on and so forth if you see the general pattern there.
9. 00:50:916 (4,5,6,1) - Try to match the curve given from 00:49:691 (1,2,3) to make a nice echo effect here, I think it will play nicer. Currently the 4-1 has a sharp curve in comparison, here's what I mean:
   
   Example

   
10. 00:54:130 (5) - I suggest to put the NC here instead of 00:54:283 (1). It will make the antijump much easier to spot and will be consistent with 00:59:105 (1) in that both NC's are before the downbeat.
    
11. 01:03:467 (4,5,1) - Jumping would be really fitting here imo because of the loud base transition. The constant spacing feels stale to me. Maybe you can try a different pattern.
    
12. 01:03:773 (5) - Drum finish fits better with the music.
    
13. 01:13:263 (1,2,3,4) - It seems that drum finishes match the music better than claps on the second set of 4 notes here.
    
14. 01:13:416 (2) - I think it might be nicer to play placed more around (308,288). The current placement makes a large push right for the 2 and then back for 3, but then spacing after the 3 is much less. Try it:
    
    Example

    
15. 01:19:538 (2) - I thought it might be nicer with the vocals if you deleted this and added a circle at 01:19:691 stacked on the 01:19:852 (3). Jumping over for the 2 doesn't really match the vocals here, the pause might be better.
    
16. 01:26:120 (1,2) - Confusing anti-jump here. Try not to use less spacing for 1/2 than you do for 1/4 in a given pattern. Like here you have an anti-jump in 1/2 from 1 to 2, and then a large jump in 1/4 from 2 to 3. It's something you want to avoid if possible because player will have trouble reading it.
    
17. 01:49:998 (3,4) - This jump feels pretty awkward since it's not really mapped to anything in the music. What would be best here is a pause after hitting the 01:49:998 (3) and then a slider or circles at 01:50:303. That would fit more solidly with the vocals. To me it doesn't make much sense how you have small spacing through 01:50:151 (4,5,6) when the vocals are pushing into the downbeat. That would call for spacing increases imo.
    
18. 01:59:334 (7) - Maybe the slider is better at 01:59:487. This is so that the player can click it there along with the vocals. Try not to use too many offbeats sliders because they can often feel distant from the music. You don't want important beats to be landing on slider ends.
    
19. 02:00:099 (10,11,1) - I miss the nice spacing you had before, seems not powerful enough now in comparison with other patterns.
    
20. 02:09:742 (7) - I think deleting this note will be better, there really isn't anything in the song that it's mapped to and it makes this jumping quite large. You could adjust 02:09:896 (7,8) after it.
    
21. 02:18:008 - You can add a note or make a 1/4 slider here to follow the drums.
    
22. 02:23:977 to 02:44:487 - Since piano is very dominant in this section, I though you could do a lot more with the soft whistles. Right now you're basically just using claps, try to fill out your sound more here with the whistles in a pattern to follow the piano.
    
23. 02:23:977 (2,3,4) - Even spacing would feel nicer here, try moving the 4 up to make a triangle.
    
    Example

    
24. 02:29:028 (5,6,7,8,1) - This rhythm is not correct. Listen in 25% playback and you will see. I don't think that the piano can be mapped here since it isn't playing along with the metronome at all. In that case you need to use a rhythm that follows the drum beat. Maybe you can try:
    
    Example

    
25. 02:46:324 (5) - 02:49:385 (1) - Some the sliders in this section need some work. You don't need to use so many white anchor points. If you want to have your long sliders curve and blanket around the smaller ones, you should make the large slider first then place the smaller ones around it since they are easier to adjust with only one anchor point. Also you can check out this guide for creating beautiful sliders:
    t/37194
    
26. 02:50:304 (3) - The slider end is unsnapped. You need to snap it to 02:50:508 in 1/6 beatsnap divisor. Since this phrase is 1/6, you should use less spacing between the 3 and 4 here than you do between other objects in the section that are 1/4, such as 02:46:936 (1,2).
    
27. 02:55:049 (2,3) - It might fit with the music nicer if you switched these two on the time line. That way the player can click the slider at 02:55:201 where the string melody begins again.
    
28. 03:18:008 (2) - This note feels really extra here. Maybe you can try using a 1/4 slider at 03:17:854 instead and rethinking the pattern. Either way, the jumping shouldn't be starting until 03:18:161 to follow the music properly.
    
29. 03:22:447 (3) - Try ending this slider at 03:23:059 to hit with the drum and then having a 1/4 stream right after it. I think it might be nicer to play than the current long slider since the vocals do change at 03:23:059.
    
    Example

    
30. 03:42:651 (6,7) - Same concern here as 01:50:151 (4) about the jumping not following the vocals. I'd really like to have an object on 03:42:957 to click.
    
31. 03:54:436 (4,5) - Spacing feels a big closed there. Maybe you can try to increase it.
    
32. 03:55:508 (1,2,3) - Maybe try this flow here.
    
    Example

    
33. 03:57:957 (1) - Missed a finish?
    
34. 04:06:528 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - Drum sample could fit really well here.
    
35. 04:46:936 (1) - Ctrl+G makes a nicer pattern to play imo, but you'd have to adjust the placement on 04:47:855 (2,3).
    
36. 05:06:528 to end - Same as 00:34:691 to 01:11:426. You can try adding soft whistles in a pattern to follow the piano hits. It will sound very nice.
    
37. 05:15:100 (1,2,3,4) - Soft whistles are very nice here.
    
38. 05:23:671 - I suggest to use a spiner here to end the map ending at 05:27:038. The reason is because the guitar isn't playing perfectly in time, so it will be easy for the player to get a 100 here.

I think you've got some great ideas and creativity here. Your flow is generally really nice, and your patterns are fun when they are properly following the vocals. Main problems I see here are hitsounding, a few rhythm issues, and overmapping. Continuous 1/4 jumping sections like 04:24:896 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) are made awkward when there is no continuous 1/4 in the music to back it up. I hope you can understand the reasoning there. I think those sections can work, but maybe you can work more on them and add some sliders in between to ease the constant 1/4, like you've done at 03:27:650 (3). Jumping sections such as 03:46:936 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) work well because there is 1/4 streaming in the music.

I hope this can help you. Definitely work some more on this, and fell free to contact me if you've got questions. I know you can make it even better.

[Hana Emi]
00:04:691 (4,5,1) - maybe move 5 to x:180 y:92 so its looks like a straight line
00:06:222 (3) - u can do a nice blanket here with 00:05:303 (1) -
01:54:589 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - i think its goes 123465 flows better
03:31:936 (5,7) - move 7up dont hit 5
04:08:059 (2,4) - ^
04:12:651 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - make it 465
03:30:712 (7,1) - looks not good
03:48:467 (2,4) - same with 03:31:936 (5,7) -
U can ignore it：
In the mapping history many mapper says that the map is good only if it fit the music.
I think your map will be a nice map if the bpm is 186,but it is 98
u overused alot of 1/4 in the kiai that i almost feel that the song is bpm 186
I suggest u to remap kiai with svX1.25 and dont use 1/4x6or up circles
If u don't want to just plz ignore this
and dont be mad to me OwO

Alex Li wrote:

from paper modding team

[Hana Emi]
00:04:691 (4,5,1) - maybe move 5 to x:180 y:92 so its looks like a straight linefixed
00:06:222 (3) - u can do a nice blanket here with 00:05:303 (1) - i changed it but in a different way
01:54:589 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - i think its goes 123465 flows betterfixed
03:31:936 (5,7) - move 7up dont hit 5ok fixed
04:08:059 (2,4) - ^did something different
04:12:651 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - make it 465i dont like this sorry
03:30:712 (7,1) - looks not goodfixed
03:48:467 (2,4) - same with 03:31:936 (5,7) -fixed
U can ignore it：
In the mapping history many mapper says that the map is good only if it fit the music.
I think your map will be a nice map if the bpm is 186,but it is 98
u overused alot of 1/4 in the kiai that i almost feel that the song is bpm 186
I suggest u to remap kiai with svX1.25 and dont use 1/4x6or up circles
If u don't want to just plz ignore this
and dont be mad to me OwO

sammy711 wrote:

From BMT modding queue

Really awesome Storyboard...
Hanatan !
[Hana Emi]
00:06:212 (3) - remove slider whistle, it sounds bad. You should add whistle on the head instead
00:54:273 (3) - remove slider whistle
01:20:293 (1) - no need NC here. You shoud follow what you did before:NC once a big white line
01:26:722 (2,3,4) - how about patttern like this

like this

01:31:620 (3,7) - add the clap. the sudden vanish of the clap sounds weird
01:32:998 (8,9,10) - And these three note maybe also need a clap or something
01:36:671 (4) -

like this

maybe this place fits better in keeping the DS
01:44:477 (5) - NC here
01:45:702 (1) - finish?
01:51:518 (1) - remove slider whistle
01:58:712 (4,6) - 01:58:865 (5,1) - make these two group parallel can be better
01:59:630 (3) - weird place here. Inconsistent DS here

like this

some change with the same distance and some stack like this can be better
02:01:773 (4) - NC
02:01:926 (5,6) - too close compared with before, and this caused it seems so crowded. Maybe you can try a better place to set 02:02:232 (6)

like this

02:05:293 (1) - finish
02:05:447 (2) - No matter in which way thought, this should not be a place to set a big jump.　And the downbeat 02:05:293 (1) much more deserve it.
02:05:293 (1,2) - Maybe Ctrl+G this could be better but you'd best replace this part
02:06:518 (7) - NC
02:19:375 (1) - Remove NC here. Not such many NCs are required here
02:19:834 (2) - i dont think here is a good place to put this note. Apparently you are try to put this note farther to strengthen the downbeat (02:19:987 (1)),but you can just throw away the DS and put this one to where 02:19:222 (2) - sits
02:19:987 (1) - finish on the head
02:21:518 (5) - ＾
02:24:885 (1) - remove that noisy slider whistle
02:27:028 (9) - ^
02:30:702 (5) - ^
02:32:844 (4) - clap on the head
02:34:069 (8) - ^
02:34:069 (8,9,10) - this pattern is a little bit crazy.
No one will concern if a circle in where he can't see is 1/3 or 1/2
When I played it, the rhythm messed up here 02:35:293 (2,3,4,5) - And i can hardly read what the rhythm here is. Maybe you should put those 1/3 in a clear way, or put those 1/3 in a smaller DS
02:34:681 (11) - finish on the head
02:42:028 (4) - ^
02:49:375 (1) - ^
02:58:253 (1,2,3) - make those parallel
02:58:559 (2,1) - perfect blanket
03:24:579 (1,2,3,4) - these stream are not neat. Disabling Grid snap can make a much smoother curve.
03:25:498 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - ^
03:31:926 (1) - remove NC
03:35:906 (1) - remove slider whistle
03:35:447 (6,7,8) - there is no trace of reversing or returning sight in the music, so instead of reverse jump, how about pattern like this

like this

03:37:742 (8) - clap
03:38:355 (1) - finish on the head
03:38:661 (2,1) - perfect stack
03:38:814 (3) - clap on the tail
03:40:038 (3) - ^
03:42:640 (5) - clap on the head
03:48:763 (3,4) - you should keep the DS here ww
03:49:069 (5,7) - It is not beautiful to touch each other. Stack 03:50:293 (9) - is a much better choice

like this

03:53:049 (1) - finish on the head
03:57:181 (8) - move it to (248,88), it keeps a good distance to 03:56:722 (7,10) -
03:57:947 (1) - finish
03:59:630 (3) - clap on the tail
04:11:569 (6) - NC here
04:17:538 - Audio from here to 04:19:603 - is almost 0... Maybe you should reset Audio from here
04:14:477 (5) - clap on the head
04:21:212 (6) - NC

OK... This map is a good job but some patterns are still seem strange. Especially some jump is not fit with the song, like 04:21:212 (6) - distance here has not ever show this is a downbeat. Maybe some jump is awesome, but using it to an appropriate timing is also important I think

Hope this can get ranked

sammy711 wrote:

sammy711 wrote:

From BMT modding queue

Really awesome Storyboard...
Hanatan !
[Hana Emi]
00:06:212 (3) - remove slider whistle, it sounds bad. You should add whistle on the head instead fixed
00:54:273 (3) - remove slider whistle fixed
01:20:293 (1) - no need NC here. You shoud follow what you did before:NC once a big white linefixed
01:26:722 (2,3,4) - how about patttern like this hmm yeah i like this better

like this

01:31:620 (3,7) - add the clap. the sudden vanish of the clap sounds weird fixed
01:32:998 (8,9,10) - And these three note maybe also need a clap or something fixed
01:36:671 (4) -

like this

ok fixed
maybe this place fits better in keeping the DS
01:44:477 (5) - NC here fixed
01:45:702 (1) - finish? fixed
01:51:518 (1) - remove slider whistle fixed
01:58:712 (4,6) - 01:58:865 (5,1) - make these two group parallel can be better ok i tried my best
01:59:630 (3) - weird place here. Inconsistent DS here redid this part

like this

some change with the same distance and some stack like this can be better
02:01:773 (4) - NC fixed
02:01:926 (5,6) - too close compared with before, and this caused it seems so crowded. Maybe you can try a better place to set 02:02:232 (6) ok fixed

like this

02:05:293 (1) - finish fixed
02:05:447 (2) - No matter in which way thought, this should not be a place to set a big jump.　And the downbeat 02:05:293 (1) much more deserve it. fixed
02:05:293 (1,2) - Maybe Ctrl+G this could be better but you'd best replace this part hmm ok
02:06:518 (7) - NC fixed
02:19:375 (1) - Remove NC here. Not such many NCs are required here fixed
02:19:834 (2) - i dont think here is a good place to put this note. Apparently you are try to put this note farther to strengthen the downbeat (02:19:987 (1)),but you can just throw away the DS and put this one to where 02:19:222 (2) - sits ok fixed
02:19:987 (1) - finish on the head fixed
02:21:518 (5) - ＾
02:24:885 (1) - remove that noisy slider whistle
02:27:028 (9) - ^
02:30:702 (5) - ^
02:32:844 (4) - clap on the head
02:34:069 (8) - ^ fixed all these ^
02:34:069 (8,9,10) - this pattern is a little bit crazy.
No one will concern if a circle in where he can't see is 1/3 or 1/2
When I played it, the rhythm messed up here 02:35:293 (2,3,4,5) - And i can hardly read what the rhythm here is. Maybe you should put those 1/3 in a clear way, or put those 1/3 in a smaller DS ok i think i fixed it
02:34:681 (11) - finish on the head
02:42:028 (4) - ^
02:49:375 (1) - ^ fixed ^
02:58:253 (1,2,3) - make those parallel fixed
02:58:559 (2,1) - perfect blanket fixed
03:24:579 (1,2,3,4) - these stream are not neat. Disabling Grid snap can make a much smoother curve.
03:25:498 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - ^ ok fixed ^
03:31:926 (1) - remove NC fixed
03:35:906 (1) - remove slider whistle fixed
03:35:447 (6,7,8) - there is no trace of reversing or returning sight in the music, so instead of reverse jump, how about pattern like this

like this

03:37:742 (8) - clap fixed
03:38:355 (1) - finish on the head fixed
03:38:661 (2,1) - perfect stack fixed
03:38:814 (3) - clap on the tai l fixed
03:40:038 (3) - ^ fixed
03:42:640 (5) - clap on the head fixed
03:48:763 (3,4) - you should keep the DS here ww fixed
03:49:069 (5,7) - It is not beautiful to touch each other. Stack 03:50:293 (9) - is a much better choice ok ty fixed

like this

03:53:049 (1) - finish on the head fixed
03:57:181 (8) - move it to (248,88), it keeps a good distance to 03:56:722 (7,10) - fixed
03:57:947 (1) - finish fixed
03:59:630 (3) - clap on the tail fixed
04:11:569 (6) - NC here fixed
04:17:538 - Audio from here to 04:19:603 - is almost 0... Maybe you should reset Audio from here not sure what you mean
04:14:477 (5) - clap on the headfixed
04:21:212 (6) - NC fixed

OK... This map is a good job but some patterns are still seem strange. Especially some jump is not fit with the song, like 04:21:212 (6) - distance here has not ever show this is a downbeat. Maybe some jump is awesome, but using it to an appropriate timing is also important I think

Hope this can get ranked

pishifat wrote:

just wondering, why isn't widescreen support enabled? the entire storyboard would work just fine in widescreen excluding black.png and Light Border.png, which would just need to be scaled a bit larger. seems kind of stupid to have it look like this when it could easily look like this (which is a lot better). no kudosu obviously

KyleDinny wrote:

I'll mod this when I get back from school :3

KyleDinny wrote:

[Hana Emi]

00:12:640 (1,2) - Blanket the 2nd note properly for a better look fixed
00:13:559 (3,4) - ^ i like this the way it is
01:33:457 (1,2,3,4) - Make these smaller sliders and reverse them once again, and make them more compact like in this picture hmm ok fixed

SPOILER

http://i.gyazo.com/95145ae4c292c6564b950bf63448ab8a.png

02:17:538 (1) - Reverse selection on this slider, the jump feels too forced. fixed
02:45:702 (4) - The curve looks a tad ugly imo, I suggest a change to this picture below ok fixed

SPOILER

http://i.gyazo.com/130e7aaa1d11f35823016616201361d4.png

02:46:314 (5,1,2,3) - I know the song changes and all, but these are so mundane for a hard difficulty like this. I suggest making it more difficult. i really like this part
03:20:753 (8) - Add a note here for a good buildup. fixed
03:42:028 (1) - Part after this is overmapped, I suggest a change to this timeline and positioning like in the picture. ok ty

SPOILER

https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2015669

Nothing else to find! ;o

Great mapped, wbl for ranked I imagine XD

blizzardice wrote:

fun map

also, don't know how to mod (good) so these are mostly opinions

hana emi

01:26:875 (1,2,3,4,5) - is this section following the rhythm, or voice, or both? if it's following the voice, then (3) is overmapped it feels really awkward with 3 not being there
03:01:620 (1,2,3,4,5) - space each note a little (distance apart increasing every note for this combo, so that the transition from this pattern to the much more spaced notes is smoother) oh ok i see what you mean, fixed
03:20:753 (8,9) - overmapped mayb e? (although you do this a lot so prob keep it) its there for the buildup
03:52:896 (6) - a little weird (again, ^) hmm it feels alright to me
04:08:508 (4) - maybe take out this note (tried playing that section without that note, felt better) i dont really like this sorry
04:12:640 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - either turn this pattern into 2 sliders, maybe to prepare the player for patterns like this 04:49:375 (1,2,3,4,5) or decrease the spacing a little because this pattern is hard (for non-touch players lol), although it's a kiai part of the map so it's probably fine if you don't nerf it that hard hmm i see what your saying, but since this is the last kiai time of the song, it has to be the most difficult part, that why the background is changed as well
04:56:110 (2,3) - switch 2 and 3, i think a left-right-left-right zig-zag is easier to read than up-down-up-down i'll leave it for now, your actually the very first person to have a problem with this part, so if more opinions about this part occur, i'll change it

good luck~

lkx_Shore wrote:

[Hana Emi]
00:06:212 (3) - remove sliderbodyt-whistle fixed
00:06:824 (1,2,3) - use 20% Volume normalhit? i changed samlpleset to drum instead
00:08:355 (2) - add whistle? hmm ok
00:19:681 (6) - Sliderhead add clap? fixed
00:19:987 (1) - change into 1/1 slider it better i like it the way it is
00:59:094 (1,2) - stack it? hmm no thanks
01:13:865 (1) - sliderhead add finish. ok fixed
01:24:426 (2,3,4) - too close ok i increased spacing a little bit
01:32:844 (7) - Nc? fixed
02:00:855 (2) - clap change into whistle? fixed
02:19:987 (5) - http://puu.sh/byBvE/0bd9a52d95.png
02:32:156 (1,2) - stack? no ty
03:33:916 (2) - clap change into whistle? fixed
03:59:630 (3) - slidertail add clap fixed
04:02:844 (1) - add soft-finish fixed
05:10:804 (4,5) - music is calm here,use small distance is better. fixed

too many random jump here...Goodluck!

neonat wrote:

General

Why does AiMod say that: File missing:sb\blue dot.png woops i fixed that sorry

Being 98 BPM, I think having AR around 8~8.5 would be more appropriate, it would be less forcing a higher AR upon the player, and make it better to play IMO yes it is 98 bpm, but i mapped it with 1/8 slider BSD, so it is essentially 196 bpm

Hana Emi

00:15:549 - seems like you missed the drum beat here. Before this you had been mapping to the drums as well, up until this point at least. Add something here to match up, so it won't be so odd-one-out opk fixed
00:28:253 (3) - more to the left? It felt a little weird moving from 00:27:947 (2) because I had to twist down and right a bit fixed
00:54:120 (1,2,3) - shift it further away from 00:53:661 (4) - move 00:54:885 (4,5,6) along with it if you have to, shifting it left would be the best choice. It just looks too cramped right now, causes complication to 00:53:661 (4) fixed
01:16:008 (4) - would look better less curved in ok fixed
01:38:967 (4,3) - y-axis is off by 1. Really, ctrl + G 01:38:967 (4) and you can see that they are 268 and 269 (01:38:967 (4) is 269) i think i fixed it
01:46:161 (3) - this slider feels weird, especially because of the end ending at 01:46:314 - It just plays weird with the slider, maybe change it to circles, the only other significant part that feels slider worthy is the next vocal word at 01:46:620 (5) - it's either that or the position feels weird hence it plays off fixed
02:06:977 (3,5) - their ends aren't stacked perfectly, you can Ctrl + G both of them to check fixed
02:19:987 (5) - would really deserve a finish on the start of the slider fixed
02:34:069 (8) - you could NC this fixed
02:57:947 (4) - finish on start of slider fixed
03:02:538 (4) - shift more to the left, movement would be smoother fixed
04:17:538 (1) - finish on start of slider
04:17:538 (1,2,3) and 04:18:763 (1,2,3) - currently they are both in the sequence of 1/4 slider circle 1/2 slider, but this doesn't fit the song, mostly because of the music and that held vocal. What would fit better would be 1/2 slider circle 1/4 slider sequence: fixed

SPOILER

Next time try not to post the same link (in my queue) 3 times lol, Good Luck. sorry again lol

Knotts wrote:

Hiii jimmy. Mod request from my queue.

Hana Emi

1. Maybe add a silent sliderslide hitsound. The rolling sound doesn't sound really nice during the quiet slow parts. ok
2. 00:12:640 (1) - Sounds better to end this slider at the red tick fixed
3. 00:21:212 (1) - Whistle fixed
4. 00:21:518 (3) - ^ fixed
5. 00:21:671 (4) - Drum clap or finish fixed
6. 00:22:130 (7) - Whistle fixed
7. 00:26:875 (6) - Clap sounds a little better than finish to me fixed
8. 00:55:498 (5,1) - Improve blanket fixed
9. 01:34:681 (1,2) - I thought it'd be cool to lower the SV here to build up momentum but you did the opposite and sped it up xD ok i made them slower
10. 03:24:885 (4) - Replace this with a stream into the next slider pls. It'd feel a lot more fun fixed
11. 04:13:100 (4) - This finish doesn't sound good here ok fixed
12. 04:13:559 (1) - ^ Might be better to replace this one with a whistle. fixed
13. 04:14:171 (3) - Whistle fixed
14. 04:14:477 (4) - Clap oops i missed that one
15. 04:17:538 - Sounds like a good time to lower the SV but I guess it's a little to late to say that.
16. 05:00:702 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1) - I'm sure you can make a better looking circle than that

i tried me best

I didn't really add all the hitsound suggestions that I could have so ask me for more if you ended up liking them, if not I'm sorry orz.
That's all from me. PM me if you need anything else

SkyDevil wrote:

decided to check on the map and holy shit you should stop spamming stars cause it's a waste to do so, my friend did that too and it barely got any more attention than any other map... you should save them just to hit the 12* minimum for your next map