Silynn wrote:

short mod on this because i enjoyed the map and it looks like it will actually get ranked

first, is there any reason that this is not at least OD9? for a decently high level map (wow 6 stars) OD8 is way too low, especially with those streams. Done, (rip accuracy )

other stuff is just various things i felt could be mapped better to the song while playing

01:28:468 (4,1) - this feels so anti-climactic, i think it would fit the energy of the song better as a jump. also make the spinner start 1/4 earlier (the late start on it feels awkward) ~ suggestion: http://puu.sh/b9Oq6/86627371a0.jpg i keep these stacked notes here, i used a circular flow here and i want to keep it, and it is consistent with other kiai parts too. Moved the spinner.

01:49:678 (3) - don't really like the reverse here. suggest rhythm change: http://puu.sh/b9OA2/46cbf58687.jpg Good idea, changed.

02:26:934 (2) - booooring, the song sounds like circles here to me >< pattern suggestion: http://puu.sh/b9OHC/5bdab9eb6e.jpg here i would emphasize vocals on each slider's start, i could take this suggestion, buuut i dont want because.... i really like to play the current pattern here... ;w;

02:28:748 (4,1) - same as previous, could do so much more with this energy. feels bad to play. also move the spinner 1/4 earlier same as above, but here is a different flow and i want to keep it and i don't want to change anything here.

02:51:771 (3,4) - this rhythm doesn't fit the song. suggestion: http://puu.sh/b9OUl/04eb89bfac.jpg ~ can also make some nice pattern out of it: http://puu.sh/b9OTz/2178bcab43.jpg i want to keep the current rhythm, because finishes are on the red tick and the second stacked note, i would make things consistent for this pattern.

02:53:864 (2) - should not be a reverse slider, just a 1/2 slider. no 1/4 in music, sounds weird while playing done.

04:05:306 (2) - i like this as circles rather than a slider i only use slider for this part, it was intentional ;w; there are just these circles 04:06:980 (3,4) - which introduce another rhythm

04:07:538 (2) - ^ ^

04:47:445 (1,2,3) - would be a lot nicer as a large jump imo, http://puu.sh/b9P6B/7b0dd06624.jpg i changed a bit, i just increased the distance between notes, i dont want to change the flow here.

04:48:003 (1) - this pattern feels SO WRONG to me, i came up with something that is a better alternative to me (although i don't know to you), but i'm sure it's not the best that can be done, i don't really know what to do with it though. but here is my suggestion: http://puu.sh/b9Pf5/2c1f3740c4.jpg uuuuh i used it before each kiai part and they sound fine imo.

05:20:655 (4,1) - same as the other stacks like this, should be a jump instead. except wow the spinner is in the right place this time!? anyways i would ctrl+j on 4 tbh and it's good, i want to keep stacked notes here ;w;

05:22:608 (2) - could make nice jumps out of this i prefer the current flow ;w;

05:23:864 (3,4) - should also be a jump

05:24:980 (3,4) - jump

both done.
in fact the entire end section should just have more jumps, not really, it's enough imo now.

anyways that's it for quick mod ;w; hope it's somewhat helpful.

Silynn wrote:

ah, sorry, one thing i forgot to mention, your offset is a bit early, should be +6 imo

or perhaps even later than that, i'm not sure ;w; i would get some other people to check, but it's definitely early by a significant amount atm.

Lanturn wrote:

To any future QAT: This should be Game (Japanese)

Kenterz wrote:

Here is the updated version of the SB, because it was unrankable xD

Angelo wrote:

Kenterz wrote:

Here is the updated version of the SB, because it was unrankable xD

What was unrankable ? What I've done wrong ?

Please tell me

Kloyd wrote:

need my mod?

Cherry Blossom wrote:

Not really, both versions were unrankable x) (yours and the older version)

Zare wrote:

\o/

Nightmare

1. One of my biggest concerns about this map is the volume of your hitsounds, especially the custom normal-hitfinish. I'd strongly advice to reduce the volume on the 70% ~ 80% by like... 15%? (atm you can barely hear the music ;w;) Example: 00:20:666 - The entire section is really mroe hitsound-driven than music-focussed, or so it seems to me. Same for the kiais etc. decreased volume : 80 -> 70% and 70 -> 60%
   Also, the hitfinish is sometimes used in weird places or in a seemingly inconsistent way. But let's get to that later. noooo, i use them to emphasize strong things, 100% intentional and carefully done
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2. 00:19:828 (5) - Are you intentionally missing a whistle on the tail to emphasize (6) or was this a mistake? Add a whistle or don't, either way is fine by me, just pointing this out to get attention towards it. it was intentional, but yes i can add a whitsle here (since i have a new headphone i say YES /me runs), done
3. 00:23:735 (6) - Why a stack here? You could place this one like, above (3), forming a triangle with (3) and (4), that would intensify the whole pattern a bit and would be more fun °-° i want to be consistent with the whole section here, so that's why i stacked here.
4. 00:42:293 (2) - I feel like replacing this with a circle and then a slider (w/o) reverse would feel better in regards to the whistle pattern you're using
   yeah, that works nice, done.
5. 01:04:200 (1,2,3,4,5) - You kind of make me fall for you this map <3 please Zare. /me runs
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6. Okay so in your kiai you use hitfinishes to enhance the strong vocal phrases, namely 01:17:456 - here or 01:19:689 - etc etc, but you don't do this stuff right at the beginning of the kiai, let's for example say at 01:15:363. When comparing the two instances, this first part of the kiai feels awkwardly empty and I'd like to see the finishes to be used consistently throughout the chorus on all strong vocals. no, no, no i don't agree, don't touch to my hitsounds ;w; i have already tried to add more finishes here, they ruin the atmosphere and i didnt want to make something like Augoeides (Happy30's version) with finishes everywhere. They sound a bit wrong for this song compared to augoeides.
7. 01:17:456 (1,2,3,4) - This is probably the only pattern where I think that your symmetry didn't work out. It feel a bit forced, as the angle you're going at is somewhat awkward... (I know This is really vague, I'm sorry. Just consider a different kind slider pairing, by mirroring the first slider on both axes for example) i like the current movement, i would avoid circular movement, so i opted to use a "X" movement.
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8. 01:23:456 (2,4) - You should use circles here in order to emphasize the vocals on (3), they currently kind of lack the accentuation i don't really like to use circles here, because they will ruin the whole pattern and i don't have solutions to make them playable without moving the whole section. And i find a jump between 01:23:456 (2,3) - is fine and could be accentuate vocals imo.
9. 01:29:875 - repeating myself but this section is too looouuud @_@ repating myself but i decreased volume. @_@
10. 01:42:572 (2) - same as 00:42:293 (2) done, but i just swapped 01:42:572 (2,3) - to wary patterns.
11. 01:48:712 (4) - This slider doesn't make sense, it starts on a barely audible note and then skips the vocals with its body. Do vvv that vvv
    i'm not supposed to follow vocals, according to hitsounds.
12. 02:05:317 (4) - Sorry for breaking down your symmetry, but this should really be circles. The 2 beats both want to be clicked, so you should somehow rearrange this done (added 2 stacked notes)
13. 02:24:572 - Here too, it feels awkward to not have finishes... same 02:25:689 - here etc. same as i said before
14. 02:48:852 (4) - streams starting on slidertails aaaaaaaahhhh remove this slider and put circles, not only makes it more sense to the music but it makes getting into the stream muuuuuuch easier. Please do this. done.
15. 02:53:596 (1) - Why is this 1/4, exactly? There's no such beats in the music and this doesn't have any music-complimenting or -enhancing effects imo. Use 1/2. fixed (i added a 1/2 slider)
16. 02:56:945 - this is way too loud.. at least imo noooo ;w;
17. 03:01:270 (1,2) - Haha! lazy blanket! fix pls fixed >.>
18. 03:08:945 (4) - same as 02:53:596 (1) done.
19. 03:20:945 (3,4,5) - urgh. Remove one reverse arrow, then place a circle instead to keep a correctly displayed 1/3 ryhthm here.
    i think they are fine here, people dont really have problems when playing this. It is more intuitive to play a slider with 2 reverses before starting a stream or triples
20. 03:26:805 (5) - I don't understand why you put this reversed sldier instead of continuing with the previous 1/4 rhythms, they would still fit here. changed (added circles instead)
21. 03:33:642 (4) - There should be a slider here to properly follow the guitars imo, same applies on 03:34:061 - so starting from 03:33:642 - you might want to use that rhythm:
    
    i don't really like this pattern, i always try to start a slider on a downbeat, and this current pattern looks fine imo (IT IS MY STYLE)
22. 03:38:107 (1,2) - similar to 03:20:945 (3,4,5). On both sliders, remove a reverse arrow, then move the second on the tick where the first one would have ended before and add 2 circles after it same as above.
23. 03:38:666 (3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - After that, please increase the spacing on this stream slightly, to like 0.9, to make it clearer that this is indeed 1/3. (That's just a suggestion because I had trouble sightreading this, no need to do it if you dislike it, I guess) (lol please your copypaste faied) DS looks fine here (this is not FREEDOM DIVE FOUR DIMENSIONS /me runs)
24. 03:50:945 (9,10) - remove these two circles, then select 03:51:084 (1,2,1,2) - and move them onto 03:50:945. Judging by what my ears tell me, this fits the guitar better which is focussed on the red ticks. After this, place 2 circles on 03:52:061 - and 03:52:131 - i agree, done.
25. 05:01:689 (7) - don't like the rhythm here, the vocals are on the slider tail, it feels awkward ;w; (circles resolve everything and anything by default so put circles for this slider) fixed.
26. 05:01:689 (7,4,5,6) - I feel like your kiais needed more of this in general 8D, then again, this makes for an epic ending, so it's alright I guess
27. My hitsound concerns about weird finish-usage apply in the third chorus as well, ofc. my finishes are consistent ;w;
    
    Aside from this, the Storyboard images seem to be too big, so please have them resized.

Damnae wrote:

SB load is too high for what is displayed:
- Add the background to the background layer and fade it out when it's not displayed (pretty much all the time I think). Okey Done
- Fade out images that aren't visible, even if they aren't visible they are still drawn unless you fade them out. (there's lots of them around this time 04:12:433 - but that's just an example) I don't get it, all the pictures at 04:12:433 can't be fade out because it'll break the pattern =/
- Once you do that you don't need to have a full screen black sprite to fade the screen to black, you can just fade out the displayed image. But if I do that, I'll have the background instead of the black picture ;w;

That should make the difference between your sb being watchable on a laptop or not.

Raging Bull wrote:

Bring back Frostmourne go go.

Nozhomi wrote:

It's maybe just me, but I think hitsound for kiai are a little too loud, particularly finish. 60% fit better for this part imo.
No kd.