nyu - wrote:

now i have a got eroge to play ~
thanks!

easy

00:08:274 (4) - x:148 y:355 - looks cleaner and makes the flow even better. ookay
00:12:889 (1) - move this a little lower for a cleaner flow sure
00:55:120 (3) - move this a little lower ^ done
01:07:351 (4) - could be something like this http://puu.sh/rwlTF.jpg naah, didn't plan to make any blanket at here
01:48:889 (1) - blanket them better there

other diffs are too clean for me to mod
im sorry It's okay!
D:

1. 00:13:813 (3,4,1,2) - why rhythm is not the same as the rest of intro part? make the main guitar sound 00:14:505 - clickable would be consistent with previous imo, and u also ignored 00:14:966 (1,2) - the minor bass previously.. if u dont feel like changing, pay attention to ds inconsistency here 00:14:274 (4,1,2) -
2. 00:27:197 (2) - maybe make the flow linear to the next object https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/6291191
3. 00:32:274 - etc... consider whistle or drumsample for similar sounds
4. 01:09:428 (3,4) - to make the 3/2 less awkward to play, try this consistent rhythm pattern instead maybe? -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/6291229
5. 01:11:736 - add two notes like 02:36:659 - maybe
6. 01:23:043 (1) - whistle? similarly as 00:05:505 (1) -
7. 01:34:120 (3,1) - swap nc? u always add nc to finish previously
8. 01:45:659 (2,1) - not a neat blanket
9. 01:55:813 (5) - 5->1 ds inconsistency
10. 02:01:351 (3) - ds nitpick, 1 is kinda too near
11. 02:51:659 (1,1,2,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - i think for slow parts here, passive rhythm pattern like this is more relaxing than circles on the redticks which are harder to read -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/6291319

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  uhh, overall i think u should fix some nonsense (to me) inconsistent spacing like 00:18:428 (1,2,3) - 00:22:582 (2,3,4) - etc.. that would make the whole map neater. emphasize thing is another general problem to me, for example, 01:05:966 (4,1,2) - as ur hitsounding suggest (whistle), the high pitch vocal should be emphasized, but u use less spacing than 01:04:582 (1,2,3) - .
  
  not something modern but its also nice if u can get what i mentioned above and fixed other similar stuffs in the map w

Garden wrote:

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1. 00:13:813 (3,4,1,2) - why rhythm is not the same as the rest of intro part? make the main guitar sound 00:14:505 - clickable would be consistent with previous imo, and u also ignored 00:14:966 (1,2) - the minor bass previously.. if u dont feel like changing, pay attention to ds inconsistency here 00:14:274 (4,1,2) - changed the part as you said and fixed the DS problem , thank you
2. 00:27:197 (2) - maybe make the flow linear to the next object https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/6291191
3. 00:32:274 - etc... consider whistle or drumsample for similar sounds hmm, I like the current one. It give a kinda surprising feeling to the players
4. 01:09:428 (3,4) - to make the 3/2 less awkward to play, try this consistent rhythm pattern instead maybe? -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/6291229 hmm, good idea but.. it didn't fit enough for me
5. 01:11:736 - add two notes like 02:36:659 - maybe done
6. 01:23:043 (1) - whistle? similarly as 00:05:505 (1) - ayy
7. 01:34:120 (3,1) - swap nc? u always add nc to finish previously aaah, nice catch
8. 01:45:659 (2,1) - not a neat blanket done
9. 01:55:813 (5) - 5->1 ds inconsistency aah thanks
10. 02:01:351 (3) - ds nitpick, 1 is kinda too near true
11. 02:51:659 (1,1,2,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - i think for slow parts here, passive rhythm pattern like this is more relaxing than circles on the redticks which are harder to read -> https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/6291319 right, I changed as you suggested and I like it, Thanks

Insane

• 
  uhh, overall i think u should fix some nonsense (to me) inconsistent spacing like 00:18:428 (1,2,3) - 00:22:582 (2,3,4) - etc.. that would make the whole map neater. emphasize thing is another general problem to me, for example, 01:05:966 (4,1,2) - as ur hitsounding suggest (whistle), the high pitch vocal should be emphasized, but u use less spacing than 01:04:582 (1,2,3) - .
  
  not something modern but its also nice if u can get what i mentioned above and fixed other similar stuffs in the map w did quita a huge change at this diff, thanks

good luck~

1. Structrual Issue
   Clean and I don't think there is something really worth mentioning. Nice catch on rhythm about 1/2, decent usage in Easy in this BPM.
   
   
2. Minor Picks
   03:43:351 - You can actually make the volume lower here, since it's already after kiai and looking for landing on the end.

1. Structrual Issue
   Clean and decent. Just the overally flow is more of drawing a circle, which will make it not so interesting. But nothing too bad to mention.
   
   03:35:966 (1,2,3) - I don't think it is a really good idea but well, you got it. It makes the pattern looks not evenly spaced visually, which is what you have done so far. And I honestly have no idea about how to fix this without making too much change.
   
   
2. Minor Picks
   03:18:889 - Should be a clap here.

1. Structrual Issue
   Pretty clean.
   
   02:03:428 (5,6,1) - This stream seems to be too spaced. How about a smaller spaced stream like this? I know you want to keep 5 in the middle but it will hurt game play a bit.
   SPOILER

   
   
   02:22:120 (1,2,3) - Just saying that you can get a better blanket if you intend to.
   SPOILER

   
   
   02:34:582 (4) - This jump is a bit like insane diff. I would say that making the distance bit smaller will make it more consistent.
   
   03:05:966 (6) - Since people feel stream more intense, so actually this stream is much harder than the previous 1.50x jump. My suggestion here is to make the spaced stream more compact to make it easier to catch the stream.
   SPOILER

   
2. Minor Picks
   00:52:351 (3,4,5) - Just a bit not too smooth for this flow. How about trim the stream better to the previous slider like this?
   SPOILER

   
   
   03:11:504 (4) - Same blanket issue here. Just make it better.
   SPOILER

   

1. Structrual Issue
   Some patterns need to be polished more, personally I am fine with this style, but I prefer more tidy arrangements visually.
   
   00:58:351 (3) - Yeah if stacked something really close to it, why not making this note stacked too? Like 00:56:274 (3,1) .
   
   01:11:505 (5,6,7,8,9) - Considering the intensity of the stream which is pretty slow, making this big distance will make a lot of move while you need to make control of the keyboard side. I know you want to emphasize this place but a stream is enough. Distance like 00:45:659 should be perfect stream distance control.
   
   01:20:505 (4,1) - Distance control. Visually these 2 notes are just too close to each other. Since this diff you tried quite hard on making objects seems evenly or similarly distanced, but here will make the two notes too close, which will harm the overall balance. I would personally try things like this as blanket:
   SPOILER

   
   
   01:27:659 (3,5) - This overlap will work better if you fully stack that. Seems not so tidy and makes people think that this is pretty random.
   
   02:08:043 (2,3,4,5) - I believe you can make a better pattern rather than making a uneven quadrangle. You may want to solve the distance problem here so you sacrificed the pattern, so here is my solution:
   SPOILER

   
   This may not be a good idea so if you are willing to make something else, especially for the vocal is starting on 4, so you can make 2,3 as a group, 4,5 as another.
   SPOILER

   
   
   03:03:428 (1,2,3,4,5) - You can actually make a better pentagon rather than something like this.
   SPOILER

   
   
   
2. Minor Picks
   00:05:043 (4) - This might be a good idea to stack on the tail of slider 2. Overlapping is not bad but stacking will make it looks more tidy.
   
   00:08:736 (4,5) - 4 can be stacked on slider 1's tail to make it more tidier. And 5 can go stacking on slider 2's head.
   
   00:12:428 (4,5) - Same stuff as previously indicated. Also for objects like 00:11:966 (3,1) - will also make people feel that the arrangement is a bit random.
   
   00:38:274 (4,1) - Showing an example of appropriate overlapping. This is related with the whole pattern. If your pattern is related with "repeating" some feelings, stacking will make it better. But if you intentionally want to have something overlapped, like this, it will be fine.
   
   00:55:120 (1) - Personally I would go with stacking the slider heads together. Long sliders are aimed at making the similar feeling rather than making something different, personally speaking.
   
   01:16:582 (5,1) - If you want to make something like blanket, just make the slider bend less. Like this:
   SPOILER

   
   
   02:20:736 (2) - Some small adjustment will make the symmetry look better:
   SPOILER

   
   
   02:57:659 (2,3,4,5) - I still think you can do better on details. These kind of stuff is not a big deal, but if you get a lot of small issues, it will be actually not a good sign of a great map.
   SPOILER

   
   
   03:06:428 (1,2,3) - Just a side note that you can actually avoid this kind of flow since this is like a rectangle from 1-2-3. You can make it smoothier like this:
   SPOILER

   
   
   And in the last kiai, there are a lot of issues similar to what I've mentioned so far. You can look into that and see what you can do with your current work.

Atrue wrote:

For Standard Diffs.
[General]
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[Solar's Easy]

1. Structrual Issue
   Clean and I don't think there is something really worth mentioning. Nice catch on rhythm about 1/2, decent usage in Easy in this BPM.
   
   
2. Minor Picks
   03:43:351 - You can actually make the volume lower here, since it's already after kiai and looking for landing on the end. sure

[Normal]

1. Structrual Issue
   Clean and decent. Just the overally flow is more of drawing a circle, which will make it not so interesting. But nothing too bad to mention.
   
   03:35:966 (1,2,3) - I don't think it is a really good idea but well, you got it. It makes the pattern looks not evenly spaced visually, which is what you have done so far. And I honestly have no idea about how to fix this without making too much change. hmm? but it looks fine for me
   
   
2. Minor Picks
   03:18:889 - Should be a clap here. I missed it, Thanks

[Insane]

1. Structrual Issue
   Some patterns need to be polished more, personally I am fine with this style, but I prefer more tidy arrangements visually.
   
   00:58:351 (3) - Yeah if stacked something really close to it, why not making this note stacked too? Like 00:56:274 (3,1) . Aah, I kinda like this un-stacked thing if you don't mind
   
   01:11:505 (5,6,7,8,9) - Considering the intensity of the stream which is pretty slow, making this big distance will make a lot of move while you need to make control of the keyboard side. I know you want to emphasize this place but a stream is enough. Distance like 00:45:659 should be perfect stream distance control. sure thing
   
   01:20:505 (4,1) - Distance control. Visually these 2 notes are just too close to each other. Since this diff you tried quite hard on making objects seems evenly or similarly distanced, but here will make the two notes too close, which will harm the overall balance. I would personally try things like this as blanket:
   SPOILER

   
   done
   
   01:27:659 (3,5) - This overlap will work better if you fully stack that. Seems not so tidy and makes people think that this is pretty random. good point
   
   02:08:043 (2,3,4,5) - I believe you can make a better pattern rather than making a uneven quadrangle. You may want to solve the distance problem here so you sacrificed the pattern, so here is my solution:
   SPOILER

   
   This may not be a good idea so if you are willing to make something else, especially for the vocal is starting on 4, so you can make 2,3 as a group, 4,5 as another.
   SPOILER

   
   awesome
   
   03:03:428 (1,2,3,4,5) - You can actually make a better pentagon rather than something like this.
   SPOILER

   
   waaa, thank you
   
2. Minor Picks
   00:05:043 (4) - This might be a good idea to stack on the tail of slider 2. Overlapping is not bad but stacking will make it looks more tidy. naah, I did this intentional
   
   00:08:736 (4,5) - 4 can be stacked on slider 1's tail to make it more tidier. And 5 can go stacking on slider 2's head. ^^
   
   00:12:428 (4,5) - Same stuff as previously indicated. Also for objects like 00:11:966 (3,1) - will also make people feel that the arrangement is a bit random. still the same
   
   00:38:274 (4,1) - Showing an example of appropriate overlapping. This is related with the whole pattern. If your pattern is related with "repeating" some feelings, stacking will make it better. But if you intentionally want to have something overlapped, like this, it will be fine. this, I can agree with you
   
   00:55:120 (1) - Personally I would go with stacking the slider heads together. Long sliders are aimed at making the similar feeling rather than making something different, personally speaking. mmh, I agree
   
   01:16:582 (5,1) - If you want to make something like blanket, just make the slider bend less. Like this:
   SPOILER

   
   done
   
   02:20:736 (2) - Some small adjustment will make the symmetry look better:
   SPOILER

   
   agrred
   
   02:57:659 (2,3,4,5) - I still think you can do better on details. These kind of stuff is not a big deal, but if you get a lot of small issues, it will be actually not a good sign of a great map.
   SPOILER

   
   thank you very much
   
   03:06:428 (1,2,3) - Just a side note that you can actually avoid this kind of flow since this is like a rectangle from 1-2-3. You can make it smoothier like this:
   SPOILER

   
   done
   
   And in the last kiai, there are a lot of issues similar to what I've mentioned so far. You can look into that and see what you can do with your current work.

Forum PM for any questions related. Thank you!

1. 03:16:928 (7) - where's the clap? it's annoying to play i think
2. hmm well i think it's useless to point out more details, lets say it in general. This map doesn't have big problems but the spacing details and flow really need improvements, like 03:31:120 (3,4,5) - 02:59:505 (2,3,4,1) - 03:03:428 (1,2,3,4,5) - these random ds changes, they don't affect much gameplay but they destroy your map a lot. About flow, lets see an example 03:19:120 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,1) - , it's basically a circle and it makes players play like a clock, which is quite boring to play and should be avoided when mapping, learn to switch the flows next time. I also don't agree with the large ds you used in this map, the map is supposed to be an easy one, such a large ds everywhere just increases the pain lol. and map has other visual detail problems like 03:42:889 (5,6,1) - 01:46:120 (4,1) - .etc

Karen wrote:

top diff top

1. 03:16:928 (7) - where's the clap? it's annoying to play i think ooh, right
2. hmm well i think it's useless to point out more details, lets say it in general. This map doesn't have big problems but the spacing details and flow really need improvements, like 03:31:120 (3,4,5) - 02:59:505 (2,3,4,1) - 03:03:428 (1,2,3,4,5) - these random ds changes, they don't affect much gameplay but they destroy your map a lot. About flow, lets see an example 03:19:120 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,1) - , it's basically a circle and it makes players play like a clock, which is quite boring to play and should be avoided when mapping, learn to switch the flows next time. I also don't agree with the large ds you used in this map, the map is supposed to be an easy one, such a large ds everywhere just increases the pain lol. and map has other visual detail problems like 03:42:889 (5,6,1) - 01:46:120 (4,1) - .etc hmmm

Good luck with this map and the nice song hehe!

1. so yeah I checked prev posts and I agree this diff kinda needs some more polishing and consistency imo after seeing the normal and easy diff which looked a lot more consistent and visually appealing to me, feel free to ignore anything if its against your style
2. 00:10:120 (3,1) - you got a pretty long clockwise flow going on here 00:07:120 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3) - I feel this would be a good place to go counterclockwise so you flow with the return back in same direction like place you can start the next slider on the tail of 00:09:197 (1) - for instant to keep the same ds
3. 00:12:659 (5,1) - some detail stuff but reduce the ds here to match 00:05:274 (5,1) - since its identical in the music, makes the diff more consistent
4. 00:14:505 (1) - compared to the other similar instances in the music this shape kinda comes out of nowhere since nothing really changes in the music, I'd just use a curved slider like you did before it'll flow the same basicly
5. 00:16:582 (1,1) - same curve as the second (1)? makes the blanket look better and looks less messy
6. 00:26:274 (2,3) - 00:28:120 (2,3) - 00:28:582 (4,5) - nothing really changing anything during this section and these small ds changes make it look a bit ugly 00:29:043 (5,1) - this being a notable ds increase would be nicer imo for this section since thats where the vocals rise
7. 00:36:428 (5,1) - thoughts on changing this to this rythm? goes well with the piano strokes and vocals changing intensity since now 00:37:582 (3) - feels kinda out of place being suddenly mapped to vocal
   
8. 00:43:120 (3,4) - first slider then the circles feels better here to me so you have the start of the vocal and the piano clickable at 00:43:582 -
9. 01:05:274 (3,4,1) - nothing really that warrants the spacing drop here imo, still same vocals between these and same intensity of claps etc so that sudden spacing drop compared to the rest feels a bit out of place
10. 01:11:966 (9) - and similar ones, could NC here to make it stand out more and to give players a better read on the lenght of the stream (easier to spot 4+1 then 5 for the lenght)
11. 01:23:043 (1,2) - quite a big jump and flow shift compared to the rest of this section while its relatively the same in the music, would reduce the ds a bit here
12. 01:35:505 (4,5) - reduce spacing here a bit, kinda sudden jump out of nowhere during this section while theres no change in the song
13. 02:08:043 (2,4) - control+g would fit nice here so you change flow when the vocals change and these flow changes 02:06:428 (4,5,6,1,2) - is kinda really fast after eachother compared to the rest of the map that follows the same flow for 1-2 combos most of the time
14. 02:13:351 (2,3,4,5,6,7,1) - this kinda stood out a bit since its a lot harder pattern with a lot denser rythm then your prev kiai yet it sounds the same feel like the difference is a bit too much not to adress could maybe buff the prev kiai a bit around this part with more a bit denser rythm near the same part for example or nerf this a bit
15. 02:21:889 (6) - and similar missing clap on tail or remove on head? sounds a bit off now to have an uneven claps here when its all kinda similar, its a bit inconsistent with stuff like 00:45:659 (5,6,7,8) - aswell where you have 2 claps 2 whistles for the same sounds
16. 02:29:043 (4,5) - nerf the ds here a bit, looks a bit too much visually like the 1/1 rythm and it being in the same combo it might be mistaken for one
17. 02:51:428 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4) - the ds in this section just looks really random to me, the small changes makes it look a bit unpolished and 02:52:120 (3) - standing out here while playing this just is kinda weird when nothing in the song support that emphasizing
18. 02:57:889 (3,4,5,6) - minor here but it'd be cool if (3) was also part of that row of (4,5,6) since it also has a piano so its more grouped toghether
19. 03:01:351 (2,3) - could place the whistel on (3) here instead for that stronger piano sound since you break the whisle pattern on 03:02:736 (5) - anyway so why not have both the strong piano notes whistled
20. 03:03:428 (1,2,3,4,5) - pentagon is off here, I'd just use control+shift+d '40 degree offset, 4.00 ds method here to make a perfect pentagon, looks a bit cleaner
21. 03:23:505 (2) - control h+g+j would be better here imo to go with the flow of (1) more since you alrdy broke flow here 03:22:582 (4,1) -
22. 03:31:582 (5,6) - reduce ds a bit its a bit too much of a jump compared the rest of the section and a bit inconsistent with similar parts like 03:16:351 (3,4) - 02:10:351 (4,5) -
23. 03:57:659 (6) - feel like adding a finish aswell would be good here since its the end of the song and it has those cymbals
24. Well thats kinda it for this diff, agreeing with the rest here with the spacing and flow issues. Dunno how to put it but like some consistent spacing where the music is relatively the same would make it a lot cleaner, and for conistency dont differentiate your jumps during section by too much like 01:35:505 (4,5) - if the music doenst call for it, those just come out of nowhere while playing and don't make that much sense. Same for flow changes, you mostly have a long clockwise into a long counterclockwise flow which is alright but then at some parts it shifts every few notes but the music is still the same as in those long clockwise flow parts which makes the map as a whole kinda weird on those parts, could do stuff like change direction when the vocals reach a highpoint for example and use that consistent for the diff but with a variety of patterns to make the diff more consistent, just some stuff for thought while I played the map

1. 00:12:889 (1,2,3) - could place it something like this to so (4,3) doesnt overlap here, looks a bit cleaner https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/6649522
2. 00:37:351 (1) - would consider changing into something like this rythm instead that fits better with the drum+vocal, now having 00:38:043 - empty soudns kinda weird
   
3. 01:57:889 (1,4) - overlap here looks a bit ugly compared to the rest of the map, could move everying a bit to the right to get something like this to fix it
   
4. 02:20:505 (3,1,2) - ^ , maybe something like this to avoid?
   
5. 02:23:274 - mapping this would be good here even passively works, has the vocals changing intensity and the strong drum coming back, a bit too much to ignore if you want breaks here I'd remove 02:23:736 (5) - and replace it with a note on that mentioned spot since this one doesnt have the drum only the vocal
6. 02:25:582 (4)- and 02:27:428 (5) - 02:31:120 (5) - 02:34:813 (5) - kinda same as ^ try placing these one red tick earlier, it sounds a lot better imo and is a lot easier to follow the rythm
7. liking this a lot better than the insane tbh, more consistent use of slider shapes and rythm and I dunno it feels less forced to me like everyhing came more natural, easy diff looks good

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Insane

1. so yeah I checked prev posts and I agree this diff kinda needs some more polishing and consistency imo after seeing the normal and easy diff which looked a lot more consistent and visually appealing to me, feel free to ignore anything if its against your style
2. 00:10:120 (3,1) - you got a pretty long clockwise flow going on here 00:07:120 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3) - I feel this would be a good place to go counterclockwise so you flow with the return back in same direction like place you can start the next slider on the tail of 00:09:197 (1) - for instant to keep the same ds
3. 00:12:659 (5,1) - some detail stuff but reduce the ds here to match 00:05:274 (5,1) - since its identical in the music, makes the diff more consistent
4. 00:14:505 (1) - compared to the other similar instances in the music this shape kinda comes out of nowhere since nothing really changes in the music, I'd just use a curved slider like you did before it'll flow the same basicly
5. 00:16:582 (1,1) - same curve as the second (1)? makes the blanket look better and looks less messy
6. 00:26:274 (2,3) - 00:28:120 (2,3) - 00:28:582 (4,5) - nothing really changing anything during this section and these small ds changes make it look a bit ugly 00:29:043 (5,1) - this being a notable ds increase would be nicer imo for this section since thats where the vocals rise
7. 00:36:428 (5,1) - thoughts on changing this to this rythm? goes well with the piano strokes and vocals changing intensity since now 00:37:582 (3) - feels kinda out of place being suddenly mapped to vocal
   
8. 00:43:120 (3,4) - first slider then the circles feels better here to me so you have the start of the vocal and the piano clickable at 00:43:582 -
9. 01:05:274 (3,4,1) - nothing really that warrants the spacing drop here imo, still same vocals between these and same intensity of claps etc so that sudden spacing drop compared to the rest feels a bit out of place
10. 01:11:966 (9) - and similar ones, could NC here to make it stand out more and to give players a better read on the lenght of the stream (easier to spot 4+1 then 5 for the lenght)
11. 01:23:043 (1,2) - quite a big jump and flow shift compared to the rest of this section while its relatively the same in the music, would reduce the ds a bit here
12. 01:35:505 (4,5) - reduce spacing here a bit, kinda sudden jump out of nowhere during this section while theres no change in the song
13. 02:08:043 (2,4) - control+g would fit nice here so you change flow when the vocals change and these flow changes 02:06:428 (4,5,6,1,2) - is kinda really fast after eachother compared to the rest of the map that follows the same flow for 1-2 combos most of the time
14. 02:13:351 (2,3,4,5,6,7,1) - this kinda stood out a bit since its a lot harder pattern with a lot denser rythm then your prev kiai yet it sounds the same feel like the difference is a bit too much not to adress could maybe buff the prev kiai a bit around this part with more a bit denser rythm near the same part for example or nerf this a bit
15. 02:21:889 (6) - and similar missing clap on tail or remove on head? sounds a bit off now to have an uneven claps here when its all kinda similar, its a bit inconsistent with stuff like 00:45:659 (5,6,7,8) - aswell where you have 2 claps 2 whistles for the same sounds
16. 02:29:043 (4,5) - nerf the ds here a bit, looks a bit too much visually like the 1/1 rythm and it being in the same combo it might be mistaken for one
17. 02:51:428 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4) - the ds in this section just looks really random to me, the small changes makes it look a bit unpolished and 02:52:120 (3) - standing out here while playing this just is kinda weird when nothing in the song support that emphasizing
18. 02:57:889 (3,4,5,6) - minor here but it'd be cool if (3) was also part of that row of (4,5,6) since it also has a piano so its more grouped toghether
19. 03:01:351 (2,3) - could place the whistel on (3) here instead for that stronger piano sound since you break the whisle pattern on 03:02:736 (5) - anyway so why not have both the strong piano notes whistled
20. 03:03:428 (1,2,3,4,5) - pentagon is off here, I'd just use control+shift+d '40 degree offset, 4.00 ds method here to make a perfect pentagon, looks a bit cleaner
21. 03:23:505 (2) - control h+g+j would be better here imo to go with the flow of (1) more since you alrdy broke flow here 03:22:582 (4,1) -
22. 03:31:582 (5,6) - reduce ds a bit its a bit too much of a jump compared the rest of the section and a bit inconsistent with similar parts like 03:16:351 (3,4) - 02:10:351 (4,5) -
23. 03:57:659 (6) - feel like adding a finish aswell would be good here since its the end of the song and it has those cymbals
24. Well thats kinda it for this diff, agreeing with the rest here with the spacing and flow issues. Dunno how to put it but like some consistent spacing where the music is relatively the same would make it a lot cleaner, and for conistency dont differentiate your jumps during section by too much like 01:35:505 (4,5) - if the music doenst call for it, those just come out of nowhere while playing and don't make that much sense. Same for flow changes, you mostly have a long clockwise into a long counterclockwise flow which is alright but then at some parts it shifts every few notes but the music is still the same as in those long clockwise flow parts which makes the map as a whole kinda weird on those parts, could do stuff like change direction when the vocals reach a highpoint for example and use that consistent for the diff but with a variety of patterns to make the diff more consistent, just some stuff for thought while I played the map

I remapped this one based by your suggestions, thanks.


Normal

1. 00:12:889 (1,2,3) - could place it something like this to so (4,3) doesnt overlap here, looks a bit cleaner https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/6649522 ya
2. 00:37:351 (1) - would consider changing into something like this rythm instead that fits better with the drum+vocal, now having 00:38:043 - empty soudns kinda weird
   
   sure
3. 01:57:889 (1,4) - overlap here looks a bit ugly compared to the rest of the map, could move everying a bit to the right to get something like this to fix it ya
   
4. 02:20:505 (3,1,2) - ^ , maybe something like this to avoid? mmm
   
5. 02:23:274 - mapping this would be good here even passively works, has the vocals changing intensity and the strong drum coming back, a bit too much to ignore if you want breaks here I'd remove 02:23:736 (5) - and replace it with a note on that mentioned spot since this one doesnt have the drum only the vocal hmm, nice suggestion but I feel like I have to keep this one since for me the current rhythm already did a good job
6. 02:25:582 (4)- and 02:27:428 (5) - 02:31:120 (5) - 02:34:813 (5) - kinda same as ^ try placing these one red tick earlier, it sounds a lot better imo and is a lot easier to follow the rythm mmm
7. liking this a lot better than the insane tbh, more consistent use of slider shapes and rythm and I dunno it feels less forced to me like everyhing came more natural, easy diff looks good

Thats about it hope it helped!

1. Why is the audio bitrate is too low? It is 192 bitrate mp3
2. Widescreen support turn on?
3. Add in tags: Meis Clauson Angel Note OP theme フレラバ オリジナルマキシシングル

1. 00:14:505 (1) - You can improve form.
2. 00:30:889 (4) - Add whistle and clap?Sounds cool!
3. 00:35:505 (2) - Jump on strong beat? ( x209 y108 )
4. 00:35:736 (3,4) - Improve it, move 00:36:197 (4) - on x27 y279.
5. 00:37:351 (2) - Very small DS on strong beat.
6. 00:41:043 (2) - ^
7. 00:43:813 (5) - ^
8. 01:08:736 (2) - ^
9. ok, I will no longer write about it.
10. 01:19:236 (6,1) - Improve form.
11. 01:58:582 (2,5) - Stack?
12. 01:05:274 (3,1) - Make them similar.
13. 02:10:928 (8) - If you put here a note, then put it here 01:00:774 - too.
14. 02:18:313 (6) - Оvermaped?
15. 03:21:082 (8,6) - ^
16. 03:43:351 - Why do you use other hitsounds? Not like here 00:02:274 - .
17. 03:42:889 (5,6) - Do as here 01:11:505 (5,6,7,8,9) - .

1. Put NС as in Insane.
2. 00:31:120 (4) - Too big jump for hard diff.
3. 00:37:813 (4) - ^ . Can be x432 y207.
4. 00:52:928 (4) - Оvermaped?
5. 01:11:505 (4,5) -This is a 130bpm song, you can make stream.
6. 01:56:159 - ^ or slider repeat.
7. 02:21:659 (6,7,8,9) - YES, AS HERE and 02:36:428 (4) - here.
8. 03:06:428 (1,2) - Is there a point?You never used it.
9. 03:31:928 - Ignore beats?
10. 03:35:851 - Оvermaped?
11. 03:43:005 - You can make stream...
12. 03:51:197 (2,3,4) - Too much for the stack, because it a hard diff.

Lama Poluna wrote:

Hai~

[General]

1. Why is the audio bitrate is too low? It is 192 bitrate mp3 oooh, Thank you!
2. Widescreen support turn on? the SBs are using an old style one. It was made 3 years ago. Turning on the widescreen will make it looks cluttered
3. Add in tags: Meis Clauson Angel Note OP theme フレラバ オリジナルマキシシングル not pretty necessary since I already added the most important tags

[Insane]

1. 00:14:505 (1) - You can improve form. aight
2. 00:30:889 (4) - Add whistle and clap?Sounds cool! ok
3. 00:35:505 (2) - Jump on strong beat? ( x209 y108 ) naah, i prefer to emphasize the next object instead.
4. 00:35:736 (3,4) - Improve it, move 00:36:197 (4) - on x27 y279. did something else instead
5. 00:37:351 (2) - Very small DS on strong beat. kk
6. 00:41:043 (2) - ^ naaah, like what I stated from above i want to emphasize the next object instead
7. 00:43:813 (5) - ^ same
8. 01:08:736 (2) - ^ same
9. ok, I will no longer write about it.
10. 01:19:236 (6,1) - Improve form. idk what but i did something
11. 01:58:582 (2,5) - Stack? intentional
12. 01:05:274 (3,1) - Make them similar. aightt
13. 02:10:928 (8) - If you put here a note, then put it here 01:00:774 - too. yea
14. 02:18:313 (6) - Оvermaped? aight ,, removed
15. 03:21:082 (8,6) - ^ mhh
16. 03:43:351 - Why do you use other hitsounds? Not like here 00:02:274 - . because as you can lhear it has different instruments that being used on this part
17. 03:42:889 (5,6) - Do as here 01:11:505 (5,6,7,8,9) - . aight

Nice map, I liked insane diff.
gl~

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Log Off Now wrote:

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[Easy]

mostly nitpick because its good diff, plays like a bit like a normal though

00:22:120 (3,4) - blanket (slider end on 4) ya
00:24:889 (2,3) - any reason why this is different to 00:29:505 (4) - when its the same music essentially? i would prefer it if you stuck to one of these rhythms for consistency it's quite different music imo
00:35:505 (2,3) - blanket (slider head on 2) mm hmm
00:52:582 (4,5,1) - linear flows are kinda hard for new players, would prefer a more angled shape here naah, let's give 'em a bit challenge.
01:07:351 (4,1) - blanket (slider middle on (1) ya
01:26:736 (1,2) - this is potentially misleading as the slider on 1 points one way and the flow is in the opposite direction, maybe make 2 a little higher? sure
01:29:966 (4) - i don't understand why this is a repeat slider as the quick vocals starts on the red tick and finishes in the middle of this slider, and it looks like you ran out of room on the playfield, this should be a 1/1 slider imo a bit customization, should be fine. i hope
01:47:043 (3) - similar comment as 01:26:736 (1,2) - as the slider body is somewhat misleading, make this just a linear slider imo to make this easier to hit hmmm, naah.
02:26:274 (5) - nc
02:27:197 (1) - remove nc aight.

[Insane]

another a e s t h e t i c m o d sorry, theres some actual content in here too xd

00:02:736 (4) - stack on 1 for a better aesthetic over 00:02:274 (3) - ? mm hmm
00:31:813 (2) - make this a little higher so you don't get a strange 1/4 overlap on 00:32:736 (5) - , atm it looks a little cramped aye yup
00:32:043 (3,5) - shadow overlap on default skin ya
00:32:966 (1) - maybe lower this a little, its a bit close to hp on low res ya
01:08:274 (1,2,3) - maybe make this perfect linear flow? or move 3 a little more to the left for a more angular one if you want a bit more emphasis on the vocal left
01:08:966 (3,1) - any reason for this relatively small spacing compared to the rest of the kiai when a similar vocal pattern comes up? srry
01:34:120 (1) - i think this spacing might be a bit much considering the calm nature of this section xd agree
01:50:505 (1) - this shape is a bit weird with the super flat curve :p, i would make the curve more curvy (sounds so stupid) right
01:58:582 (2,3,5) - similar comment to 00:31:813 (2) - oops
02:21:428 (4) - this should also be a kick slider, you can hear the snare faintly on the blue tick uh huuh, right
02:21:889 (6) - maybe make this parallel with 02:22:582 (2) - ua
02:29:274 (1) - not sure if this nc is necessary, the spacing is pretty intuitive here move these to the center
02:32:966 (6,1) - this spacing is huge compared to vocals of a similar intensity 02:34:120 (3,4,5,6,1) - here, would suggest nerfing it a bit nerfed
03:17:043 (8) - nc for the change in drum? aigh
03:41:505 (1) - move this to the left a little bit to avoid overlap on the slider end of 03:40:351 (3) - done
03:42:774 - there is another faint snare hit here thats missed out let's undermap this one

gl!

1. 00:32:966 (1,2,3,4,5) - random shape for me, try this http://puu.sh/tPHB4/44eea70406.png
2. 01:18:428 (4,5,6,1) - http://puu.sh/tPHNS/8ee1e405b3.png
3. 01:38:274 (2,3,4) - unconfortable flow imo, maybe try sharp angle?
4. 01:42:197 (3) - curve it less for consistence with 01:41:505 (1) http://puu.sh/tPIgT/5b315682e3.png
5. 03:08:736 (2,4) - can u fix overlap?
6. 03:18:197 (3,2) - ^
7. 03:20:736 (6,2) - ^ huh
8. 03:19:120 (1) - curve it more for consistence with 03:18:197 (3) im nazi xd

Allihoppa wrote:

hi i mod hi i reply
[Insane]

1. 00:32:966 (1,2,3,4,5) - random shape for me, try this http://puu.sh/tPHB4/44eea70406.png looks neat, thanks
2. 01:18:428 (4,5,6,1) - http://puu.sh/tPHNS/8ee1e405b3.png mm gmm
3. 01:38:274 (2,3,4) - unconfortable flow imo, maybe try sharp angle? sure
4. 01:42:197 (3) - curve it less for consistence with 01:41:505 (1) http://puu.sh/tPIgT/5b315682e3.png aight
5. 03:08:736 (2,4) - can u fix overlap? yes i can
6. 03:18:197 (3,2) - ^ v
7. 03:20:736 (6,2) - ^ huh huh?
8. 03:19:120 (1) - curve it more for consistence with 03:18:197 (3) im nazi xd ayy

Overall i think good map but need polished other patterns and overlaps

1. 00:02:736 (4) - Would look better if you rotated this slider -50 and keep the head stacked with 00:01:813 (1) - . This would also create a blanket with 00:02:043 (2) - and avoid them overlapping.
2. 00:07:120 (1,2,3) - Try something like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7341386 basically move 00:07:120 (1) - up a bit so both sliders are about the same distance from the circle for aesthetics. It will also emphasize the downbeat a bit more.
3. 00:08:274 (4,1) - Same here, for better aesthetics try moving 00:09:197 (1) - a bit to the left so its head is kind of blanketed by 00:08:274 (4) - just like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7341396
4. 00:10:120 (3) - Probably is better if you turn this slider into circles to make 00:10:120 (3) - and 00:10:120 (3) - clickable as they are more important than what your reverse sliders usually cover + it would also add some variety. Here's a pattern suggestion if you want https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7341452
5. 00:17:505 (4) - I think you could add a slight left curve for better flow
6. 00:23:736 (5,1) - Spacing could be increased to emphasize the downbeat and finish on slider. Probably by moving it up a bit so the spacing between them is larger than between 00:23:505 (4,5) - (more than now)
7. 00:31:120 (5) - I really believe removing this circle and changing 00:30:889 (4) - into a 3/4 slider would fit much better simply cuz the loud beat on 00:30:889 (4) - really overpowers the vocal and using a 3/4 slider would better transition to the other section and emphasize the downbeat more. Also silence the sliderend
8. The transition from 00:37:582 (4) - to 00:38:274 (5,6) - feels a bit random there is no logic placement. I'd recommend a pattern like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7342432 because I noticed most circles you placed are to emphasize vocals so I think stacking 00:38:274 (5) - under 00:37:582 (4) - reduces the emphasis on this circle to further emphasize the one which covers the vocal 00:38:505 (6) - . If you don't want to stack try
   https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7342470
9. 00:43:582 (4,5) - These could really use more spacing as the vocals are pretty strong although I can understand that you lowered the spacing to further emphasize 00:44:043 (1) -
10. 00:47:736 (1,2,3) - It seems like the vocals "work together" but I can't really feel the logic behind this pattern to reflect that. Once again I don't want to map your map for you but just as an example here's what I would do https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7342614 : this is a pattern where the sliders have a logical placement to represent the vocals IMO. Hope you understand what I mean lol. After going threw the map I saw you did just that xD 03:11:736 (1,2,3) -
11. 00:57:659 (2) - You should probably keep using 1/1 sliders for the vocals only (in the kiai) this is the only one that doesn't cover vocals so maybe change it into a 1/2 reverse slider to also cover the guitar.
12. 00:58:582 (4,1) - Sense I assume you are focusing on vocals here considering you mapped the following kiais like 00:58:582 (4,1) - and 03:29:736 (2,3,4) - , the current pattern isn't the best to do so because doesn't land on a vocal. Try a rhythm like this instead https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7342748 (don't take the pattern into count)
13. 01:08:736 (2,3,4,1) - Using perfect symmetry would work nicely here, to do so just duplicate this pattern 01:08:966 (3,4) - and ctrl+H it (to replace 01:09:889 (1,2) -
14. 01:12:082 (1) - Makes more sense to me to end this spinner 1/2 further on the guitar cuz the following section is mainly focusing on it. That's also where the held vocal ends.
15. 01:17:966 (2,3) - Should have less spacing than 01:18:889 (5,6) - as they are much more noticeable. Refer to 01:21:659 (2,3) - and 01:22:582 (5,6) - for example
16. 01:54:197 (1,2,3,4) - Spacing could be increased as this part if higher pitched and is the transition to the kiai. 00:44:505 (2,3) - for example
17. 02:08:505 (4,5) - Increase the spacing a bit to separate the circles covering vocals from the rest
18. 02:23:966 (1) - I think it would play better if you placed this circle close to 02:23:274 (4) - like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7349862. Overall better for emphasis on downbeat too
19. 02:35:043 (1,2) - Increase spacing here also for strong high pitched vocal on 02:35:505 (2) -
20. 02:53:966 (2) - Should be excluded from 02:53:966 (2,3,4,5) - because it doesn't cover a piano note like the rest so I think there should be a space between 02:53:966 (2,3) - . Exactly what you did here 02:57:659 (2,3) - !
21. 03:13:582 (6,1) - Increase spacing to emphasize the finish on downbeat and vocal
22. 03:16:582 (4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4) - I don't think this portrays the song the best. I think the circular flow doesn't work because you can clearly hear that 03:16:928 (7,1) - should be separated IMO. For example this would fit better https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7350031 or https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7350118. But overall just try not to map both parts of the stream into one shape, there are many different patterns which could fit.
23. 03:20:505 (5) - ? Random NC even though it makes it look better is still unnecessary, your NCs are pretty consistent so keep it that way.
    Same for 03:35:274 (1) -
24. 03:27:197 (2) - Having the vocal on the slider end feels weird, I'd encourage you to use a rhythm like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7350179 (don't take pattern into count)
25. 03:30:889 (2,4) - These should be emphasized for the strong beat they are covering, maybe add a NC on each and move them so they are distinct from the pattern. Also swap NCs here 03:30:889 (2,4) -
26. 03:35:966 (1,2,3) - This shouldn't be mapped the same as 03:37:582 (1,2,3) - (keep this one). The first one should have a different rhythm like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7350344 so each slider head is covering a strong vocal because 03:36:889 (3) - wasn't
27. 03:58:120 (1) - Add NC for the last circle on downbeat xD

SeaRasp wrote:

Hi M4M from your queue

Insane

1. 00:02:736 (4) - Would look better if you rotated this slider -50 and keep the head stacked with 00:01:813 (1) - . This would also create a blanket with 00:02:043 (2) - and avoid them overlapping. sure thing!
2. 00:07:120 (1,2,3) - Try something like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7341386 basically move 00:07:120 (1) - up a bit so both sliders are about the same distance from the circle for aesthetics. It will also emphasize the downbeat a bit more. done
3. 00:08:274 (4,1) - Same here, for better aesthetics try moving 00:09:197 (1) - a bit to the left so its head is kind of blanketed by 00:08:274 (4) - just like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7341396 done
4. 00:10:120 (3) - Probably is better if you turn this slider into circles to make 00:10:120 (3) - and 00:10:120 (3) - clickable as they are more important than what your reverse sliders usually cover + it would also add some variety. Here's a pattern suggestion if you want https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7341452 naah i did that on the similar thing on the last part. Gonna make a good build up at here
5. 00:17:505 (4) - I think you could add a slight left curve for better flow not really interested to curve this
6. 00:23:736 (5,1) - Spacing could be increased to emphasize the downbeat and finish on slider. Probably by moving it up a bit so the spacing between them is larger than between 00:23:505 (4,5) - (more than now) sure
7. 00:31:120 (5) - I really believe removing this circle and changing 00:30:889 (4) - into a 3/4 slider would fit much better simply cuz the loud beat on 00:30:889 (4) - really overpowers the vocal and using a 3/4 slider would better transition to the other section and emphasize the downbeat more. Also silence the sliderend let's try
8. The transition from 00:37:582 (4) - to 00:38:274 (5,6) - feels a bit random there is no logic placement. I'd recommend a pattern like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7342432 because I noticed most circles you placed are to emphasize vocals so I think stacking 00:38:274 (5) - under 00:37:582 (4) - reduces the emphasis on this circle to further emphasize the one which covers the vocal 00:38:505 (6) - . If you don't want to stack try
   https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7342470 alright , let's try to use the 2nd one
9. 00:43:582 (4,5) - These could really use more spacing as the vocals are pretty strong although I can understand that you lowered the spacing to further emphasize 00:44:043 (1) - there
10. 00:47:736 (1,2,3) - It seems like the vocals "work together" but I can't really feel the logic behind this pattern to reflect that. Once again I don't want to map your map for you but just as an example here's what I would do https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7342614 : this is a pattern where the sliders have a logical placement to represent the vocals IMO. Hope you understand what I mean lol. After going threw the map I saw you did just that xD 03:11:736 (1,2,3) - let's give it a try then
11. 00:57:659 (2) - You should probably keep using 1/1 sliders for the vocals only (in the kiai) this is the only one that doesn't cover vocals so maybe change it into a 1/2 reverse slider to also cover the guitar. fair enough
12. 00:58:582 (4,1) - Sense I assume you are focusing on vocals here considering you mapped the following kiais like 00:58:582 (4,1) - and 03:29:736 (2,3,4) - , the current pattern isn't the best to do so because doesn't land on a vocal. Try a rhythm like this instead https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7342748 (don't take the pattern into count) alright
13. 01:08:736 (2,3,4,1) - Using perfect symmetry would work nicely here, to do so just duplicate this pattern 01:08:966 (3,4) - and ctrl+H it (to replace 01:09:889 (1,2) - naah, imo the current one is already fine as it is
14. 01:12:082 (1) - Makes more sense to me to end this spinner 1/2 further on the guitar cuz the following section is mainly focusing on it. That's also where the held vocal ends. sure thing
15. 01:17:966 (2,3) - Should have less spacing than 01:18:889 (5,6) - as they are much more noticeable. Refer to 01:21:659 (2,3) - and 01:22:582 (5,6) - for example fair enough
16. 01:54:197 (1,2,3,4) - Spacing could be increased as this part if higher pitched and is the transition to the kiai. 00:44:505 (2,3) - for example aight
17. 02:08:505 (4,5) - Increase the spacing a bit to separate the circles covering vocals from the rest ayy
18. 02:23:966 (1) - I think it would play better if you placed this circle close to 02:23:274 (4) - like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7349862. Overall better for emphasis on downbeat too fine
19. 02:35:043 (1,2) - Increase spacing here also for strong high pitched vocal on 02:35:505 (2) - Thought I've done this
20. 02:53:966 (2) - Should be excluded from 02:53:966 (2,3,4,5) - because it doesn't cover a piano note like the rest so I think there should be a space between 02:53:966 (2,3) - . Exactly what you did here 02:57:659 (2,3) - ! good point
21. 03:13:582 (6,1) - Increase spacing to emphasize the finish on downbeat and vocal ok
22. 03:16:582 (4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4) - I don't think this portrays the song the best. I think the circular flow doesn't work because you can clearly hear that 03:16:928 (7,1) - should be separated IMO. For example this would fit better https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7350031 or https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7350118. But overall just try not to map both parts of the stream into one shape, there are many different patterns which could fit. nice point
23. 03:20:505 (5) - ? Random NC even though it makes it look better is still unnecessary, your NCs are pretty consistent so keep it that way.
    Same for 03:35:274 (1) - naah, this one is pretty fine I guess
24. 03:27:197 (2) - Having the vocal on the slider end feels weird, I'd encourage you to use a rhythm like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7350179 (don't take pattern into count) good point
25. 03:30:889 (2,4) - These should be emphasized for the strong beat they are covering, maybe add a NC on each and move them so they are distinct from the pattern. Also swap NCs here 03:30:889 (2,4) - done
26. 03:35:966 (1,2,3) - This shouldn't be mapped the same as 03:37:582 (1,2,3) - (keep this one). The first one should have a different rhythm like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7350344 so each slider head is covering a strong vocal because 03:36:889 (3) - wasn't good point
27. 03:58:120 (1) - Add NC for the last circle on downbeat xD xd

Alright I'd say after double checking the stuff mentioned above this diff should be good enough even though it sometimes looks a bit messy (but for a 2014 map lol). This is the only diff I'll mod cuz I'm not the best at modding lower diffs so GL!!

Kencho wrote:

Sorry about this, but this mapset still not good in all. So I won't give nomination now because of the following reasons.

For Easy, Normal and Hard diffs seems not bad at all. Since they were using DS and no jumps. But for Insane diff, I think it still not high in quality. Almost all pattern with no clean structure and messy flow. For example, at the beginning of the map, 00:10:813 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6) - it just like random objects on the screen but only keeping a messy DS. Some pattern like 00:17:043 (2,3,4,5,6,1) - 00:27:659 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - is really not good in aesthetics. It maybe able to play but really ugly imo and no structure. 00:40:352 (1,2,3,4) - 00:48:659 (3,4,5,6,1) - 01:06:659 (2,3,4,5,6,1) - 01:17:274 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - and etc. These objects also really bad in flow, I just feel confused about it.

Although this mapset do not have unrankable issues, Insane diff is really bad in structure, flow and aesthetics. It is undeniable that the best way to upgrade the quality is to remap Insane diff. You can look for some ranked maps nowadays and see what they did for it. Keep in mind that don't keep your old style right now. Therefore, if you have any problem or you make the change, you can poke me again.