1. Yuraki (5.15 stars, 1317 notes)

21:48 sjoy: 想不到好DIFF名字
21:52 Sakaue Nachi: 有点爽
21:52 Sakaue Nachi: 叫kirakira？
21:53 sjoy: 哈？
21:53 Sakaue Nachi: yurayura
21:53 Sakaue Nachi: 歌词好像有这两
21:54 sjoy: 会闪亮么
21:54 Sakaue Nachi: 我再听听。。。
21:55 sjoy: 这个有
21:56 Sakaue Nachi: 你去查下歌词看下。
21:57 Sakaue Nachi: 是yure
21:57 Sakaue Nachi: 我说错之前
21:58 sjoy: yura 吧
21:59 Sakaue Nachi: 额。。
21:59 sjoy: 好像是摇晃的意思
22:00 Sakaue Nachi: 叫YURAKI
22:00 Sakaue Nachi: 好不好。。
22:00 sjoy: KI又是什么
22:01 Sakaue Nachi: aki是秋
22:01 sjoy: 好屌
22:01 Sakaue Nachi: 然后你懂得

Hollow Wings wrote:

as ur req

Lunatic

1. 01:14:983 (1,3) - 这两个都变成3/4会不会好点
2. 01:16:176 (5) - 放俩八分滑条？后同
3. 02:34:073 (1) - 这个还是放1/2的好，但后面同样位置3/4的违和感就没那么足，你可以酌情改改少了后面
4. 也没啥特别想说的，节奏感觉单薄了点，很多音都没跟

感觉这对姐妹出场就是卖萌用的。。。
为何是卖萌
good luck

qq944364487 wrote:

善用drum 尤其是whistie

sjoy wrote:

其实我更喜欢DRUM-FINISH的音效
WHISTLE听起来有点涩

1. tags suggetion:
   Tonic Triangle
   Sumijun

1. since BG size is 1024*768, I recommend to remove Widescreen support
2. 03:43:619~03:49:073- "ゆらゆら" → "きらきら"
3. too long time from the end of playing to result displaying . maybe this number is too large (276801 is correct, imo)
   
   SPOILER

   

1. 00:31:858 (3,4,5) - curve more
   
   SPOILER

   
2. 00:44:983 (1,2,3) - not good flow
3. 00:53:846 (5) - x:428 y:288
4. 00:55:380 (4,5) - I prefer to exchange their positions
5. 01:14:045 (2) - delete?
6. 01:16:261- add a note
7. 02:27:255 (1,3) - blanket correctly
8. 02:46:346 (1) - hm, end at 02:46:517
9. 03:54:528~03:59:983- fantastic <3
10. 04:15:665 (5,6) - avoid overlap
11. 04:28:278 (5,6,7,8,1) - this stream is not suit to song, imo. I suggest to make the pattern including slider
12. 04:31:005 (6,7,8,9,1) - ^
13. 04:37:568 (5,7) - I prefer to delete and make 1/2 beat
14. 04:39:358- add a note
15. 04:59:642 (6,7) - I prefer to combine into 1 slider

RandomEffect wrote:

hi, sjoy~

[General]

1. tags suggetion:
   Tonic Triangle
   Sumijun added

[SB]

1. since BG size is 1024*768, I recommend to remove Widescreen support
2. 03:43:619~03:49:073- "ゆらゆら" → "きらきら"
3. too long time from the end of playing to result displaying . maybe this number is too large (276801 is correct, imo)
   
   SPOILER

   

I'll fix it soon
[Yuraki]

1. 00:31:858 (3,4,5) - curve more fixed
   
   SPOILER

   
2. 00:44:983 (1,2,3) - not good flowI think fine
3. 00:53:846 (5) - x:428 y:288 fixed
4. 00:55:380 (4,5) - I prefer to exchange their positions keep
5. 01:14:045 (2) - delete?fine for me
6. 01:16:261- add a note ok
7. 02:27:255 (1,3) - blanket correctlyfixed
8. 02:46:346 (1) - hm, end at 02:46:517fixed
9. 03:54:528~03:59:983- fantastic <3
10. 04:15:665 (5,6) - avoid overlap fixed
11. 04:28:278 (5,6,7,8,1) - this stream is not suit to song, imo. I suggest to make the pattern including slider in fact it's the last kiai part .I want to user these stream to increase the hit sense
12. 04:31:005 (6,7,8,9,1) - ^ ^
13. 04:37:568 (5,7) - I prefer to delete and make 1/2 beat
14. 04:39:358- add a note
15. 04:59:642 (6,7) - I prefer to combine into 1 slider

harmonious drum's sound
~Good Luck~

P A N wrote:

aaaaaa

hitsound/pattern modding via irc but lazy to post :X

irc mod

23:47 P A N: D:
23:47 sjoy:
23:47 P A N: continue irc mod or?
23:47 sjoy: ok.
23:48 sjoy: I updated the hitsounds after your suggestions
23:48 P A N: I modding a jump
23:49 sjoy: ok
23:50 P A N: 00:40:381 (6) - move it around 372|64
23:50 P A N: feel more flow imo
23:51 sjoy: ok changed it
23:54 P A N: 00:42:426 (2) - I think it's too near to (1) but I hope it's ok
23:54 P A N: it may make the player think that it still 1/4
23:54 P A N: if you want to avoid it maybe you can stack it with 00:41:744 (3) -
23:54 sjoy: yeah it's a trap XD
23:55 P A N: ah ok trap
23:55 P A N: lol
23:56 P A N: I will check just a only big jump XD
23:56 P A N: because I'm lazy too LOL
23:56 sjoy: me too lol
23:56 sjoy: it doesn't matter
23:56 P A N: lol
23:57 P A N: we both lazy and m4m
23:57 sjoy: becuz it's really hard to find mods now as before
23:58 sjoy: I still remembered I m4med with you first time .There were more people than now
23:59 P A N: yep I remember that I m4med you
00:00 sjoy: it's 3rd m4m?
00:00 P A N: if you right
00:00 P A N: around that
00:00 P A N: ok let's stop modding and chat
00:06 P A N: 02:46:346 (1) - I think if this is curve, it would be great
00:06 P A N: blanket with next (4)
00:06 sjoy: OK
00:07 P A N: I mean more flow
00:08 P A N: 03:38:676 - ouch why don't add note here
00:09 sjoy: I can't find a good place
00:10 P A N: ฟไ
00:10 P A N: aw
00:10 P A N: 03:40:892 (1) -
00:10 P A N: after this
00:10 P A N: hmmmmm :/
00:10 P A N: intentional slider tick hitsound?
00:12 sjoy: yeah. I think it's cool
00:13 P A N: ok if listen carefully
00:13 P A N: it's fit
00:14 P A N: 03:37:994 (7) - make this further from next (1)?
00:14 P A N: I think (1) should be jump but the current spacing is shorter than 6 to 7
00:16 sjoy: ok that's great
00:19 P A N: 03:38:676 - add note on 331|131?
00:19 P A N: and move 03:38:846 (3) a bit up
00:19 P A N: it will zigzag up down
00:20 sjoy: fine~
00:22 P A N: 04:06:801 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - this jump are weird but I don't have idea for pattern yet
00:23 sjoy: it is fine for me lol
00:24 P A N: yes it weird just because
00:25 P A N: 04:07:654 (6,7,8,1) - this square
00:25 P A N: it ruin the zigzag jump
00:26 sjoy: so you meant 04:07:824 (7,8) - ctrl+g?
00:28 P A N: maybe just leave it like that
00:28 P A N: I'm not sure which is better
00:28 P A N: maybe that's all
00:28 P A N: I'm lazy ahaha
00:28 P A N: and nice song
00:29 sjoy: it doesn't matter.the beginning hitsound helped me a lot
00:31 P A N: cute bg
00:32 P A N: why you can listen my mod this long time lol
00:32 P A N: don't you bored?
00:32 sjoy: why bored?
00:33 P A N: it was very longgg time lol
00:33 sjoy: fine for me xD
00:41 P A N: oh
00:41 P A N: one more thing
00:41 sjoy: what?
00:41 P A N: 01:42:085 (5) - I think the finish sound need to be clicked
00:41 P A N: not a tail
00:45 sjoy: umm in fact this part I use fin for 1st white tick
00:46 P A N: I mean
00:46 P A N: ermm
00:46 P A N: make 01:41:914 (4) - 1/2 slider and add note on 01:42:255 -
00:46 P A N: or something
00:47 sjoy: I see but I follow the vocal here
00:47 sjoy: 01:42:085 here is a "ga"
00:47 P A N: three circle?
00:47 P A N: lol
00:47 P A N: nevermind
00:47 P A N: it's ok though
00:52 sjoy: Why do you want map full ver this time instead of tv size?
00:53 P A N: oh you know that I always map tv size?
00:55 sjoy: at least the map I m4med your map all were the tv size before lol
00:55 P A N: lol
00:55 P A N: well
00:55 P A N: I love tokohana
00:57 sjoy: after all ,long song is harder to find mods than tv size
00:57 P A N: yes
01:03 P A N: oh I forget to eat your kds
01:03 sjoy: lo

sjoy wrote:

P A N wrote:

aaaaaa

hitsound/pattern modding via irc but lazy to post :X

here is IRC

irc mod

23:47 P A N: D:
23:47 sjoy:
23:47 P A N: continue irc mod or?
23:47 sjoy: ok.
23:48 sjoy: I updated the hitsounds after your suggestions
23:48 P A N: I modding a jump
23:49 sjoy: ok
23:50 P A N: 00:40:381 (6) - move it around 372|64
23:50 P A N: feel more flow imo
23:51 sjoy: ok changed it
23:54 P A N: 00:42:426 (2) - I think it's too near to (1) but I hope it's ok
23:54 P A N: it may make the player think that it still 1/4
23:54 P A N: if you want to avoid it maybe you can stack it with 00:41:744 (3) -
23:54 sjoy: yeah it's a trap XD
23:55 P A N: ah ok trap
23:55 P A N: lol
23:56 P A N: I will check just a only big jump XD
23:56 P A N: because I'm lazy too LOL
23:56 sjoy: me too lol
23:56 sjoy: it doesn't matter
23:56 P A N: lol
23:57 P A N: we both lazy and m4m
23:57 sjoy: becuz it's really hard to find mods now as before
23:58 sjoy: I still remembered I m4med with you first time .There were more people than now
23:59 P A N: yep I remember that I m4med you
00:00 sjoy: it's 3rd m4m?
00:00 P A N: if you right
00:00 P A N: around that
00:00 P A N: ok let's stop modding and chat
00:06 P A N: 02:46:346 (1) - I think if this is curve, it would be great
00:06 P A N: blanket with next (4)
00:06 sjoy: OK
00:07 P A N: I mean more flow
00:08 P A N: 03:38:676 - ouch why don't add note here
00:09 sjoy: I can't find a good place
00:10 P A N: ฟไ
00:10 P A N: aw
00:10 P A N: 03:40:892 (1) -
00:10 P A N: after this
00:10 P A N: hmmmmm :/
00:10 P A N: intentional slider tick hitsound?
00:12 sjoy: yeah. I think it's cool
00:13 P A N: ok if listen carefully
00:13 P A N: it's fit
00:14 P A N: 03:37:994 (7) - make this further from next (1)?
00:14 P A N: I think (1) should be jump but the current spacing is shorter than 6 to 7
00:16 sjoy: ok that's great
00:19 P A N: 03:38:676 - add note on 331|131?
00:19 P A N: and move 03:38:846 (3) a bit up
00:19 P A N: it will zigzag up down
00:20 sjoy: fine~
00:22 P A N: 04:06:801 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - this jump are weird but I don't have idea for pattern yet
00:23 sjoy: it is fine for me lol
00:24 P A N: yes it weird just because
00:25 P A N: 04:07:654 (6,7,8,1) - this square
00:25 P A N: it ruin the zigzag jump
00:26 sjoy: so you meant 04:07:824 (7,8) - ctrl+g?
00:28 P A N: maybe just leave it like that
00:28 P A N: I'm not sure which is better
00:28 P A N: maybe that's all
00:28 P A N: I'm lazy ahaha
00:28 P A N: and nice song
00:29 sjoy: it doesn't matter.the beginning hitsound helped me a lot
00:31 P A N: cute bg
00:32 P A N: why you can listen my mod this long time lol
00:32 P A N: don't you bored?
00:32 sjoy: why bored?
00:33 P A N: it was very longgg time lol
00:33 sjoy: fine for me xD
00:41 P A N: oh
00:41 P A N: one more thing
00:41 sjoy: what?
00:41 P A N: 01:42:085 (5) - I think the finish sound need to be clicked
00:41 P A N: not a tail
00:45 sjoy: umm in fact this part I use fin for 1st white tick
00:46 P A N: I mean
00:46 P A N: ermm
00:46 P A N: make 01:41:914 (4) - 1/2 slider and add note on 01:42:255 -
00:46 P A N: or something
00:47 sjoy: I see but I follow the vocal here
00:47 sjoy: 01:42:085 here is a "ga"
00:47 P A N: three circle?
00:47 P A N: lol
00:47 P A N: nevermind
00:47 P A N: it's ok though
00:52 sjoy: Why do you want map full ver this time instead of tv size?
00:53 P A N: oh you know that I always map tv size?
00:55 sjoy: at least the map I m4med your map all were the tv size before lol
00:55 P A N: lol
00:55 P A N: well
00:55 P A N: I love tokohana
00:57 sjoy: after all ,long song is harder to find mods than tv size
00:57 P A N: yes
01:03 P A N: oh I forget to eat your kds
01:03 sjoy: lo

1. 00:16:858 (3,4) - 这里不建议overmap，test的时候就有一瞬的蛋疼，edit一看确实没这节奏。就按原先的note来吧
2. 00:42:426 (2) - 稍微拉远一点吧，可以比2-3的距离小一些，有点渐变的效果。现在这样虽然读还是能读懂，就是感觉怪怪的
3. 01:20:096 (4) - 放平一点？像这样，看起来可能好点
   SPOILER

   
4. 01:55:551 (5,6,7,1) - 整体按着ctrl+g试试？我指的是节奏。排列可以适当调整。01:54:528 (1) - 和这个的长音对应一下
5. 05:39:443 (3) - 这里25%听听看，应该在05:39:507 - 而不是05:39:485 - 折返。拉长1/16

1. 03:08:164 (1) - 这里ctrl+g可能好一些，因为角度和flow
2. 03:33:562 (4,6) - 03:34:073 (1,3) - 两组同时ctrl+g，可以稍稍左移一下1的位置
3. 04:59:983 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 1-2这里音乐给我的感觉应该是带点跳的，而2-3不太适合跳，因为后面3-4 5-6应该是两组跳才对。不过按照现在的排版想不到好的方案。自己可以琢磨一下，不改也ok。
4. 05:10:551 (7,8) - 感觉突然有点低落了，虽然8-1确实表现出来跳了...试试这个？
   SPOILER

   
5. 05:14:130 (2,3,4,5) - 4-5横向不建议突然移动这么大，打起来会比较乏力。可以考虑从05:13:108 (3,4,5) - 开始就压低高度，05:13:619 (1) - 不要太高。大致这样看看怎么样？
   SPOILER

   

Kamio Misuzu wrote:

hi~sjoy的slider换style了，要飞升
~Yuraki~

1. 00:16:858 (3,4) - 这里不建议overmap，test的时候就有一瞬的蛋疼，edit一看确实没这节奏。就按原先的note来吧有道理，顺便后面也改了
2. 00:42:426 (2) - 稍微拉远一点吧，可以比2-3的距离小一些，有点渐变的效果。现在这样虽然读还是能读懂，就是感觉怪怪的 其实这里本来想弄个读图陷阱
3. 01:20:096 (4) - 放平一点？像这样，看起来可能好点
   SPOILER

   
4. 01:55:551 (5,6,7,1) - 整体按着ctrl+g试试？我指的是节奏。排列可以适当调整。01:54:528 (1) - 和这个的长音对应一下好
5. 05:39:443 (3) - 这里25%听听看，应该在05:39:507 - 而不是05:39:485 - 折返。拉长1/16妈呀服气这都听得到

beautiful
太中规中矩了= =|||而且你的style就是比较随性的那种，排列也没什么可说的，节奏很赞。
不过有点太少了，建议你几个跳的地方吧，个人观点仅供参考

1. 03:08:164 (1) - 这里ctrl+g可能好一些，因为角度和flow还成
2. 03:33:562 (4,6) - 03:34:073 (1,3) - 两组同时ctrl+g，可以稍稍左移一下1的位置感觉现在还成
3. 04:59:983 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 1-2这里音乐给我的感觉应该是带点跳的，而2-3不太适合跳，因为后面3-4 5-6应该是两组跳才对。不过按照现在的排版想不到好的方案。自己可以琢磨一下，不改也ok。我会好好考虑的
4. 05:10:551 (7,8) - 感觉突然有点低落了，虽然8-1确实表现出来跳了...试试这个？
   SPOILER

   
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5. 05:14:130 (2,3,4,5) - 4-5横向不建议突然移动这么大，打起来会比较乏力。可以考虑从05:13:108 (3,4,5) - 开始就压低高度，05:13:619 (1) - 不要太高。大致这样看看怎么样？
   SPOILER

   

赞
really beautiful
good luck~

smallboat wrote:

嗨，吃藥了沒?

[Yuraki]

00:13:448 (7) - 如果照前面的旋律這樣聽的話，那這個note我覺得應該可以remove，這裡沒有音。去掉了
00:26:914 (6) - 也許能放在(420|328)的位置照著弧度，然後跳的也比較合理(個人感覺)，感覺現在放這樣有點擠。这样接下去有点远
00:27:767 (3,4) - 這邊節奏我覺得放錯了，3是長音應該是放滑條，兩個ctrl+g試試? 我感觉还好阿有钢琴
00:32:710 (1,3) - 或許兩者可對稱?
00:49:073 (1) - 似乎ctrl+g好像也可以。懒
00:55:039 (2,3) - ^ 懒
01:40:210 (4) - 這音效應該是 whistle +finish ? 对
01:47:880 (2,4) - 2感覺離前面太近，移到(240|144)，然後4移到(100|140)看看?(漸大間距) 就是要那么近
02:09:017 (5) - 這個間距怎麼感覺有點JB。还好阿 我能接上
02:26:914 (6) - 要跳一下嗎? 放在(120|240)。改梗了
03:31:176 (5) - 應該是換2個note? 因為我覺得大白線有vocal，覺得可以用note壓這裡。感觉不好
03:39:869 (2) - 看看尾端能不能跟著vocal加個whistle? 感觉有点多余

GL。

imoutosan wrote:

M4m

[yuraki]

yuraki是啥啊

SB感觉朴素了点 字可以ps点效果（我看看hw怎么弄的
至少描边或阴影突出一下吧 当然也有可能是字体不搭融入不进背景里 炫酷度不足
叶子还是不要搞白边 感觉怪怪的 尤其是红叶
00:32:710 - 闪光打在note上的主意不错 不过玩家未必看得出来…… 在旁边再加一两束细点的可能好点？
00:42:255 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 这加上面那个闪光说不定挺炫酷
01:16:346 - 咦 fade in呢
02:07:823 - 这句歌词拆开和前面保持一致？后面也有一个
02:14:983 - 我觉得这句还是动起来比较合曲 而且后面强调的地方不动 这里也不动有点怪
03:37:823 - 这两句同上

咦 好像忘了点啥 还得mod图？烦躁

05:38:164 (1) - 没做好对称？还是没打算做对称 fixed
00:08:164 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - 和前面比起来有点空啊 我觉得还好啊
00:37:483 (3) - ...请认真做blanket fixed
02:43:619 (1) - ^
04:00:664 (3) - ^ 这啥啊
01:50:096 (5) - 你为啥会想到在这里捞出一个弧度不一样的滑条啊 是好看吗 fixed
02:19:244 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - 请认真摆多边形 你这个音效太多啦我懒得改完放code了fixed
02:52:994 - 加个note水平一拉感觉特帅

SPOILER

04:10:210 (5) - 为啥要在上面挤着 放到下边呗 懒阿
04:18:733 (5) - 这么下blanket太呆了 转转1吧 懒阿
04:30:495 (2,3,4) - 2和红点坐标一致 fixed
05:04:073 (1) - 叠上了喂 fixed

以上

imoutosan wrote:

M4m

[yuraki]

yuraki是啥啊

SB感觉朴素了点 字可以ps点效果（我看看hw怎么弄的
至少描边或阴影突出一下吧 当然也有可能是字体不搭融入不进背景里 炫酷度不足
叶子还是不要搞白边 感觉怪怪的 尤其是红叶 (那个找不到合适的素材)
00:32:710 - 闪光打在note上的主意不错 不过玩家未必看得出来…… 在旁边再加一两束细点的可能好点？ （会乱的）
00:42:255 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 这加上面那个闪光说不定挺炫酷 （还是会乱的）
01:16:346 - 咦 fade in呢 （fade in是什么）
02:07:823 - 这句歌词拆开和前面保持一致？后面也有一个 （？没懂）
02:14:983 - 我觉得这句还是动起来比较合曲 而且后面强调的地方不动 这里也不动有点怪 （。。。。。。）
03:37:823 - 这两句同上 （我觉得蛮好的啊？）

咦 好像忘了点啥 还得mod图？烦躁

05:38:164 (1) - 没做好对称？还是没打算做对称
00:08:164 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - 和前面比起来有点空啊
00:37:483 (3) - ...请认真做blanket
02:43:619 (1) - ^
04:00:664 (3) - ^ 这啥啊
01:50:096 (5) - 你为啥会想到在这里捞出一个弧度不一样的滑条啊 是好看吗
02:19:244 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - 请认真摆多边形 你这个音效太多啦我懒得改完放code了
02:52:994 - 加个note水平一拉感觉特帅

SPOILER

04:10:210 (5) - 为啥要在上面挤着 放到下边呗
04:18:733 (5) - 这么下blanket太呆了 转转1吧
04:30:495 (2,3,4) - 2和红点坐标一致
05:04:073 (1) - 叠上了喂

以上

1. 00:29:983 (1) - missing clap on end?
2. 00:36:801 (1,3) - 1 looks a bit messy when compared to the curve of 3, try to make them more similar?
3. 00:47:028 (4) - try curving a bit like this, I feel it'll fit better with 5 and flow more smoothly
   
   SPOILER

   
4. 00:48:733 (5) - I feel you could extend this slider to 3/4, would bring a little more variety to the rhythm and motions
5. 01:14:812 (6) - try x108 y116 or somewhere similar, to put a jump going into 01:14:983 (1) -
6. 01:17:028 (3,4) - make the curve more similar to each other?
7. this could a lot neater, try more like this?
   
   SPOILER

   
8. 02:02:710 (1) - try making this slider neater, so that the red point is in the middle and the curves properly blanket the circles
9. 02:09:187 (6) - try this shape instead, I think will flow much better and look nicer as well
   
   SPOILER

   

   212,104,129187,2,0,B|147:124|147:124|104:148|80:212|136:264,1,215.999993408203,8|4,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

10. 02:17:028 (3,4,1) - could make all of these sliders more similar, or perhaps just (3,4) similar and something different with 1 since it's the new combo
11. 02:49:585 (2,3,4) - unevenly spaced stream
12. 03:06:460 (4) - try changing this to two circles, to better represent the strong vocal on 03:06:630 - . same with 03:09:187 (4) -
13. 03:38:335 - the bass drum notes on the slider ticks doesn't fit here imo, might be better to use a custom set without them
14. 04:24:358 (6,7,1) - imo this would feel better to play if this stream was stacked, since right now the stream doesn't mesh very well with the motion from the last note.
15. 04:44:983 - finish sound in the music is skipped, I think you could at least change 04:44:812 (5) - into a 1/2 slider to map it. same with 04:47:710 - (you have it mapped the previous time this section came up 02:23:164 - )

captin1 wrote:

[Yuraki]

1. 00:29:983 (1) - missing clap on end?fixed
2. 00:36:801 (1,3) - 1 looks a bit messy when compared to the curve of 3, try to make them more similarfixed
3. 00:47:028 (4) - try curving a bit like this, I feel it'll fit better with 5 and flow more smoothlyfixed
   
   SPOILER

   
4. 00:48:733 (5) - I feel you could extend this slider to 3/4, would bring a little more variety to the rhythm and motionsin fact I usually use 3/4 slider in the vocal
5. 01:14:812 (6) - try x108 y116 or somewhere similar, to put a jump going into 01:14:983 (1) - ok
6. 01:17:028 (3,4) - make the curve more similar to each other?ok
7. this could a lot neater, try more like this?
   
   SPOILER

   
8. 02:02:710 (1) - try making this slider neater, so that the red point is in the middle and the curves properly blanket the circlesok
9. 02:09:187 (6) - try this shape instead, I think will flow much better and look nicer as wellok
   
   SPOILER

   fine!

   212,104,129187,2,0,B|147:124|147:124|104:148|80:212|136:264,1,215.999993408203,8|4,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

10. 02:17:028 (3,4,1) - could make all of these sliders more similar, or perhaps just (3,4) similar and something different with 1 since it's the new combo ok
11. 02:49:585 (2,3,4) - unevenly spaced stream fixed
12. 03:06:460 (4) - try changing this to two circles, to better represent the strong vocal on 03:06:630 - . same with 03:09:187 (4) -
    in fact , don't like use notes after 3/4 slider
13. 03:38:335 - the bass drum notes on the slider ticks doesn't fit here imo, might be better to use a custom set without them
    ok.changed it
14. 04:24:358 (6,7,1) - imo this would feel better to play if this stream was stacked, since right now the stream doesn't mesh very well with the motion from the last note.ok changed it
15. 04:44:983 - finish sound in the music is skipped, I think you could at least change 04:44:812 (5) - into a 1/2 slider to map it. same with 04:47:710 - (you have it mapped the previous time this section came up 02:23:164 - )

ok changed them
overall plays well, although could benefit from more attention to clean patterning. will leave a star icon for now, try to seek some more mods u r right .It's 1st time to use these red point slider.It's hard for me ;w; big thanks for the slider suggestion.I'll find more mods about it .thanks

captin1 wrote:

oops, realized i didn't paste one link, that should be for 01:38:164 (1) -

Loneight wrote:

o/ 抱歉遲了一天
Request from PM

• 
  黑色 只是建議,不喜歡可以略過~OAO
  藍色 是建議改掉
  紅色 是unrankable

[general]

1. 考慮試試這音效吧, 用在哪裡你應該清楚XD, 我的老毛病, 聽到可以加音效的地方就會想要加類似的音效 已用，效果拔群
2. 關於SB的light.png, 你可以考慮用Rotate改些方向, 不一定要全部都用左邊射向右邊的, 換個方向也能有趣些

SB重做中

[Yuraki]

1. 00:04:926 (6) - 對我來說聽起來有點怪, 因為00:04:926 (6) - 的piano音並沒有00:04:755 (5) - 的高, 所以00:04:755 (5) - 有加whistle還能理解, 不如刪掉00:04:926 (6) - 的whistle, 來讓這邊跟隨著piano的變化吧确实如此
2. 00:06:630 (6,1) - 在00:06:630 (6) - 加個whistle, 然後00:06:801 (1) - 刪掉sliderhead的whistle來跟隨piano是不是比較好些?好
3. 00:17:539 (7,8,1) - 很久沒給這樣的建議了, 在這做一個微小移動的三連吧, 換句話說就是別stack, 我感覺更適合哎之前蠢总是叠
   00:16:687 (2,3,4,5,6) - 的flow且也適合音樂給的感覺, 另外00:17:710 (1) - sliderhead的whistle刪掉, 原因同00:06:630 (6,1) -
   [/color]好
4. 00:26:062 (2) - ctrl+G試試? 感覺這裡的00:25:892 (1,2) - flow會變好些fixed
5. 00:42:255 (1,2) - 這邊的距離還是太小了, 很容易讓人誤會成跟前面的部份是一樣的1/4連擊, 試試換個位子, 或換個前面的steam的排列. 04:09:699 (2) - 這個我就覺得還ok, 因為並沒有被steam完全的包住, 所以還是能讀好
6. 00:51:119 (5) - NC起來是不是比較好讀出00:51:119 (5,6,7,8) - 的排列?好
7. 01:16:176 (5) - 試試ctrl+G, 在我看來這個1/8短折返滑條的位子, 讓我感到一種, 不知道如何說明的奇怪感, 似乎是因為1/8滑條又stack sliderhead, 讓人會有點難讀圖, 但ctrl+G之後我就覺得好多了. 03:05:267 (5) - 同這好
8. 01:26:914 (6) - 突然又未提示的變速, NC一下會比較好. 03:16:005 (6) - 同這fixed
9. 01:55:977 (1,2) - nazi suggest, stack完整點吧 fixed
10. 01:59:983 (1) - 試試把slider的第4個點拉到408|215吧? 我覺得會讓這slider的無論flow或美觀都會好些好
11. 02:33:988 (6,1) - 距離的問題...而且flow也不對勁, 試著調整看看吧. 02:40:806 (7,1) - 同這changed them
12. 02:56:914 (5) - 我覺得往上彎的flow比較適合vocal, 也適合你這邊02:55:892 (1,2,3,4) - 整個的flow, 讓他連貫下去, 我蠻喜歡02:55:551 (6,1) - 你這邊的flow, 像圖片這樣
    圖片

    
    好
13. 03:39:869 (2) - 考慮加大距離, 這樣的距離再加上位子又是下方, 很容易讓人誤判成是1/2跳, fixed
14. 04:04:756 (3) - 感覺這slider形狀很危險啊, 考慮改一下吧? 我擔心會被判成unrankable好，改掉
15. 04:30:494 (2) - 考慮NC, 因為顏色的關係, 而且又stack在相同顏色的sliderbody下

我觉得还好拉
歌詞SB下次可以考慮用跟背景差多一點的顏色, 要不然說真的, 打圖很難發現歌詞在哪裡www, 就算用電影模式看了, 還是有點傷眼睛

that's all!
good luck

1. 00:12:596 (3,4) - 根据前后，四尾部独立出来感觉好点
2. 00:27:767 (3,4) - 红线放条比较合适？
3. 00:42:255 (1,2,3,4,5) - 这里调上翘感觉怎么样
4. 01:00:494 (2,3) - ^
5. 01:46:005 (5,6) - ctrl+g也不错
6. 02:57:255 (1,2) - 试了下，有点不顺
7. 03:12:937 (4) - 调头比较顺
8. 03:58:789 (4) - 方向向内比较合适

AIR wrote:

m4m

Yuraki

1. 00:12:596 (3,4) - 根据前后，四尾部独立出来感觉好点 好像还行
2. 00:27:767 (3,4) - 红线放条比较合适？改了
3. 00:42:255 (1,2,3,4,5) - 这里调上翘感觉怎么样好
4. 01:00:494 (2,3) - ^好
5. 01:46:005 (5,6) - ctrl+g也不错
6. 02:57:255 (1,2) - 试了下，有点不顺改了
7. 03:12:937 (4) - 调头比较顺 行
8. 03:58:789 (4) - 方向向内比较合适 还行

Satellite wrote:

first irc check

16:28 Satellite: 00:14:812 (7) - forgot whistle here?
16:29 sjoy: yeah..
16:30 Satellite: 02:26:573 (4,5) -
16:30 Satellite: This spacing is really awkward imo... What's do you think here :3 ?
16:32 sjoy: ;w; I didn't know why map these then... Now I should change it to slider.
16:34 Satellite: 02:41:403 (3) - whistle ? :3
16:35 sjoy: ok
16:36 Satellite: 03:30:664 (3,4,5) - mmmm
16:37 Satellite: I think not better flow this place...
16:38 sjoy: ok both changed and changed sb...
16:38 Satellite: yeah. sorry ;w;
16:38 Satellite: my suggestion to 03:31:005 (4) - move X265 y318
16:38 sjoy: don't mind it ;w; I 'm lazy to remap it then.It's shame for me
16:39 Satellite: kk
16:39 Satellite: 03:41:403 (2) - add whistle here ?
16:40 sjoy: ok
16:41 Satellite: 04:10:551 (1) - not need Nc here ?
16:41 Satellite: 01:48:392 (5) - same part here
16:41 Satellite: please check both =3=
16:42 sjoy: ok It's my fault ;w;
16:42 Satellite: 04:30:494 (2) - ... Please changed pattern. It's hard too see. overlap...
16:43 sjoy: ok.
16:45 Satellite: other fine to me :3
16:45 Satellite: If you are ready call me back =3= I check unranked issue ~

Satellite wrote:

Recheck and fine to me... So bubbled 1

*Changed log
-some missing lyric SB.
-add some tags.
-remove unused wav file.

Loneight wrote:

a placeholder
EDIT: IRC-modding with mapper

irc

14:26 Loneight: 01:16:346 (1) - 有點擔心會被判定成unrankable, slider本身是沒超出螢幕, 不過slidercircle倒是超出了, 我用1024x768的 (逃
14:27 sjoy: 你TEST看看
14:27 sjoy: 有没有超
14:28 Loneight: 主要是擔心[http://puu.sh/dkiVg.jpg 這個]
14:29 sjoy: 好我改了吧
14:30 Loneight: sb變得好帥 lol
14:31 Loneight: 發現sb問題(?
14:31 Loneight: 01:37:994 - 這閃光是不是應該在slider-end
14:33 sjoy: 哎呀手误了
14:33 sjoy: 马上改
14:34 Loneight: 02:23:164 (1) - 尾巴, 閃光少了(?
14:35 sjoy: 嗯
14:36 Loneight: 03:27:255 - 閃光錯位
14:39 sjoy: 恩 太粗心了
14:43 Loneight: 05:39:443 (3) - 看要步要考慮往上移一點點, 不要造成stack, 因為這兩個stack再一起, 加上這AR, 有點難判斷哪個是slider
14:43 Loneight: ...等等 好像
14:43 Loneight: 沒事!
14:43 Loneight: 不用改, 我忘記SL了
14:43 Loneight: ....OTZ
14:44 sjoy: 话说最后这个节奏有点奇怪
14:44 sjoy: 我都用到1/16了
14:44 sjoy: 是不是错位了呢
14:45 Loneight: 你用1/12看看
14:45 sjoy: 话说最后这个节奏有点奇怪
14:45 sjoy: 我都用到1/16了
14:45 sjoy: 是不是错位了呢
14:45 sjoy: 有道理移上去一点好了
14:45 Loneight: sjoy 你是不是延遲了XDD
14:46 Loneight: 還是是我延遲
14:46 sjoy: 估计是我这延迟
14:46 Loneight: 試試把最後改成1/12吧?
14:47 Loneight: 你不說我沒注意, 100%撥放聽起來只差一點, 用25%撥放就聽得出怪怪的了
14:47 sjoy: 05:39:500 这里折返？
14:47 Loneight: 嗯
14:47 Loneight: 05:39:443 (3) - 試試1/12
14:48 sjoy: 好
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15:36 Loneight: 又要請你上傳一次了 (stress
15:37 Loneight: 我剛剛忘記用AIBat檢查一下
15:37 Loneight: sb/white.png沒用到
15:37 sjoy: 好
15:37 Loneight: 看要使用, 還是刪掉上傳都行

Bubbled #2! ヽ( ･д･´)

1. 02:27:340 - unnecessary green line
2. 03:16:346 (1) - I personally feel like this would be better placed to the right of the last slider around x380 y330 since it's the last note before a break, just having a smoother motion feels nicer to me