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i really recommend you to remove the finisher on 00:05:300 - . well i know that you wanted to emphasize the cymbal sound which is given from the song, didn't you? it's nice~ but after considering again this finisher is quite difficult because the Futsuu players who will play your map will be confused because they must still press 1/2 notes again after it. well it's different if we compare 00:05:300 - with 00:06:944 - . on 00:06:944 - after the finsiher comes out you gave a break there. nah of course the player will be a bit relax and can see the next pattern clearly. but it's different with the finisher on 00:05:300 - • kat on 00:09:820 - . make it just a normal pattern for the 1/2 triplet. i know that don is for the lower pitch sound, but just ignore it because
o o O is more confusing than
o o O• don on 00:10:642 - . the pitch sound is still low (as low as 00:10:231 - actually)
• lets have a break please. try to delete 00:12:492 - . you wanted to follow the violin sound by using that note, but consider again about the
breaks. this is such more important
• here again. change 00:25:642 - to be kat and delete 00:26:464 - . you put it suddenly with 1/2 patterns there. actually i was a bit confused when i test played it. so then just change 00:25:642 - to be kat (for having a same colours like 00:25:437 - and 00:26:053 - ) and delete 00:26:464 - for the break again
• don on 00:32:834 - . the vocal is already down and it actually has a similar low pitch sounds like 00:33:040 - and 00:33:245 - which you used dons
• move this note 00:37:149 - to 00:36:327 - and change 00:36:327 - and 00:36:533 - to be dons. don't forget to delete 00:36:944 - . i changed and deleted it to make a similar patterns for the notes like 00:27:492 - ~ 00:29:957 - and 00:30:779 - ~ 00:33:245 -
• nah here. delete 00:50:094 - and 00:51:533 - . change 00:50:916 - and 00:51:122 - to be
o O. kay i changed and moved them to give a break again and it flows better IMO
• you can move 00:52:355 - to 00:52:560 -
• from 01:19:067 - ~ 01:20:916 - , try this
it flows better than yours because these dons on 01:19:067 - and 01:19:272 - actually follow the low vocals really well. and then the o o o o pattern on 01:19:683 - ~ 01:20:505 - follow the vocal+instrument really well too (when the snare comes on 01:20:505 - , the kat can emphasize it really well)• finisher on 01:24:204 - . this finisher will emphasize the strong cymbal sound
you put a finisher too on 00:10:231 - anyway• move 01:26:875 - to 01:26:670 - . i moved this to follow the drum hit (which comes out on 01:26:670 -) and ofc this note will follow the instrument sound better too
• change 01:35:300 - ~ 01:35:711 - to be
o o o. this notes will follow the vocal much better. the vocals actually are high on 01:35:300 - and it drops a bit (becomes a bit lower) on 01:35:505 - . so to make that dropping pitch sound, i change it to be
o o•
delete 01:37:971 - . don't make a suddent doublet pattern there. actually this's quite confusing since you just use a simple pattern from 01:27:492 - , and suddenly you used 1/2 doublets on 01:37:971 - . i know that you wanted to follow the vocals, but actually it's not a good idea• how about to delete 01:40:437 - . yeah i know that you wanted to follow the vocals again, but for following the vocal isn't a good way on there because actually the part becomes silence a while (just vocal and the instruments stop)
• 01:43:519 - ~ 01:43:930 - change to be
o o o. this pattern will give a good dropping pitch sounds
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kat on 01:45:163 - and don on 01:45:574 - . make it consistent for the pattern like you did on 01:41:875 - and 01:48:451 - with kats. it's actually same on 01:45:163 - for the kat• don on 01:46:807 - . much better to follow the vocal by using
o o o• again, move 01:53:588 - to 01:53:382 - and change 01:53:177 - and 01:53:382 - to be
o o. it suits better to follow the snare sound which comes out on 01:53:382 - with a kat (and actually it's not really particular to emphasize the finisher on 01:53:793 - by using a not on 01:53:588 - )
• same like the previous part. delete 02:04:067 - , change 02:04:889 - and 02:05:094 - to be
o O and also delete 02:05:505 -
• move 02:06:327 - to 02:06:533 - and change 02:05:711 - until 02:06:738 - to be
o o oO• try to change 02:11:464 - ~ 02:11:875 - to be
o o o, like your previous part kiai (00:57:492 - ~ 00:57:903 - ). actually it's much better to follow the pitch sounds (vocals) than using
o o o• move 02:23:998 - to 02:24:820 - and change to be kat. the reason is same like above ^
• don on 02:33:040 - . actually the vocal is already low (and has a same pitch like 02:33:245 - too)
• again here. move 02:34:683 - to 02:34:478 - and change 02:33:656 - ~ 02:34:478 - to be
oo oo in 1/2 bsd. here :
it's much better than you put a note on 02:34:683 - to emphasize the finisher on 02:34:889 - . try to follow the snare sound again on 02:34:478 - because it's more interesting too than a note on 02:34:683 - • you can add a note (kat) on 02:42:903 - to follow the piano sounds there. much better than you just give a 1/1 pattern like nardo's Kantan
• try to add a note (don) on 02:50:916 - . much better than a break there
• add a note on 03:07:560 - and change 03:07:355 - ~ 03:07:766 - to be
o o o. actually it'll be much better to follow the vocal (dropping vocals) on there
• delete 03:11:464 - and 03:12:286 - to make the vocals clearly by deleting them
• change 03:22:971 - and 03:23:382 - to be
o o. much better to follow the snare sound with kat on 03:23:382 -
• change 03:35:505 - to be kat. a same notes will be much better and avoid the confusing doublets pattern on the calm part
• don on 03:37:355 - (for the low vocal) and change 03:37:766 - to be kat, and also change 03:38:588 - and 03:38:793 - to be
o o. the pitch sounds are totally different if we compare it with 03:35:300 - and 03:35:505 - because the vocal is lowerrr on 03:38:588 - and 03:38:793 -
• change 03:40:642 - to be don here. vocal has dropped
• change 03:41:875 - and 03:42:286 - to be
o o• what is the function of the note on 03:43:519 - ? there's not any sounds come out there. okay try to move it to 03:44:341 - and change 03:44:341 - and 03:44:546 - to be
o o• again and again. delete 03:58:519 - and change 03:58:108 - and 03:58:314 - to be
o o. i think you know the reason because i have mentioned it twice before
• again too on 04:00:163 - . move it to 03:59:957 - and change 03:59:752 - and 03:59:957 - to be
o o• delete 04:04:067 - to make the break. okay i know that you wanted to follow the instrument sounds again there, but consider again for having the breaks on the patterns
• change 04:05:505 - to be don (because the instrument has dropped here yeah) and delete 04:06:327 - and change 04:06:533 - to be don. okay this is the last part and maybe you wanted to make the patterns a bit denser. okay nice idea but consider again for the Futsuu players who will play your map and they will be a bit shocked when they see the last part which is a bit hard