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Chewin

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Chewin 2014-08-24T00:06:04+00:00

Okay, good luck! Bubbie~

Lanturn

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Lanturn 2014-08-24T00:08:35+00:00

Go go go!

Toy

Former osu! Champion: 2019 / Grilled Dodongo

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Joined June 2013

Toy 2014-08-24T00:52:50+00:00

ITS ABOUT TIME SETZ

Setz

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Joined August 2013

Topic Starter

Setz 2014-08-24T08:42:28+00:00

thanks guys, and toy, I worked my ass off to get this far. this one's been quite the struggle.

Midge

475 posts

Joined December 2012

Midge 2014-08-27T16:24:59+00:00

Fight me, setz. ;c

UnitedWeSin

889 posts

Joined July 2012

UnitedWeSin 2014-08-28T08:25:43+00:00

Hey.

Lots of improvement here. Just a few optional stuffs, no KD.

[Insane]

00:14:957 (8,9) - What do you think about Ctrl+G? Feels nicer to crisscross the square imo.
00:23:876 (3) - After a second look there I thought you might enjoy the way this plays if you turn it 90 degrees. I like the flow line to change on the slider. Up to you, try it out.
Example
00:58:741 (1) - It flows better at (181,86) tbh since it continues in the pattern from 00:58:092 (4,5,6,7). Maybe you can try it.
Example
00:59:876 (1,2) - Switch NC's? Like 01:10:092 (4,5).
01:11:714 (1) - Ctrl+G? So fun. ww
01:16:890 - Triplet totally isn't overmapped. ;_; It works really well as a reflection of the 01:06:524 (1) pattern as well. I was surprised you didn't take that suggestion lol. But yea totally up to you.
01:22:874 (3) - It needs moved down a bit so it's centered in between the other sliders. Maybe rotate it by -3 degrees as well.
Nazi

Placed at (215,314)

[Hard]

01:20:123 (2,3,4) - Didn't mention this before, but repeating sliders beginning in 1/2 (red tick) can be confusing to play. Here you can try this rhythm instead:
Example

I think it might be nicer to play for the Hard diff since the melody streaming doesn't start until 01:20:284 and it makes it so all the repeating sliders have the same number of repeats.

[Normal]

01:06:524 (5) - Seems like it would be better to have something hitting on the downbeat 01:06:687 since it's such an important beat, if it falls in the middle of the slider like this it can feel weak. Maybe you'd like to hit for the vocals at 01:06:524 but honestly the pattern can play better if you skip over that hit. Maybe try a more simple rhythm like this:
Example

This will have the weak beat 01:06:524 be in the middle of the slider instead of the strong downbeat.
Maybe if you don't like that you can try:
01:17:693 (1,2) - Switch NC is better here?

[No Dap's Easy]

00:48:524 (2,3) - Strange how there are no finishes on the heads of these slider when it's the exact same music as 00:27:768 (2,1). I guess I need an answer for that.
01:26:118 (1) - 1 grid left or rotate a bit? The blanket is kinda funky.

The map is really fun to play.

Let me know when you're ready.

Ozato Fumika

Beatmap Nominator

3,379 posts

Joined July 2013

Ozato Fumika 2014-08-28T15:10:49+00:00

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Setz

1,419 posts

Joined August 2013

Topic Starter

Setz 2014-08-28T17:15:23+00:00

UnitedWeSin wrote:
Hey.
Lots of improvement here. Just a few optional stuffs, no KD.

[Insane]
00:14:957 (8,9) - What do you think about Ctrl+G? Feels nicer to crisscross the square imo. Done
00:23:876 (3) - After a second look there I thought you might enjoy the way this plays if you turn it 90 degrees. I like the flow line to change on the slider. Up to you, try it out.
Example

Done.
00:58:741 (1) - It flows better at (181,86) tbh since it continues in the pattern from 00:58:092 (4,5,6,7). Maybe you can try it.
Example
Done. I had to shift the following slider around some as a result, so please take a look at that and let me know if it is okay.
00:59:876 (1,2) - Switch NC's? Like 01:10:092 (4,5). Done.
01:11:714 (1) - Ctrl+G? So fun. ww Done
01:16:890 - Triplet totally isn't overmapped. ;_; It works really well as a reflection of the 01:06:524 (1) pattern as well. I was surprised you didn't take that suggestion lol. But yea totally up to you. after listening to this part again, this suggestion actually makes sense, lol I am sorry about before. changed.
01:22:874 (3) - It needs moved down a bit so it's centered in between the other sliders. Maybe rotate it by -3 degrees as well.
Nazi

Placed at (215,314)
Done.
[Hard]
01:20:123 (2,3,4) - Didn't mention this before, but repeating sliders beginning in 1/2 (red tick) can be confusing to play. Here you can try this rhythm instead:
Example

I think it might be nicer to play for the Hard diff since the melody streaming doesn't start until 01:20:284 and it makes it so all the repeating sliders have the same number of repeats.
Done.
[Normal]
01:06:524 (5) - Seems like it would be better to have something hitting on the downbeat 01:06:687 since it's such an important beat, if it falls in the middle of the slider like this it can feel weak. Maybe you'd like to hit for the vocals at 01:06:524 but honestly the pattern can play better if you skip over that hit. Maybe try a more simple rhythm like this:
Example

This will have the weak beat 01:06:524 be in the middle of the slider instead of the strong downbeat.
Maybe if you don't like that you can try:
Took the first suggestion.
01:17:693 (1,2) - Switch NC is better here? Done.
The map is really fun to play.
Let me know when you're ready.

thank you very much again, very helpful, much like your previous mod. all changes are uploaded, and I pm'd you.

UnitedWeSin

889 posts

Joined July 2012

UnitedWeSin 2014-08-29T02:49:09+00:00

[Insane]

00:59:552 (3,4,5,1) - Adjust a bit to maintain 00:59:227 (2,1) blanket? I thought it was important in the pattern:
Example

Don't worry about 00:59:714 (4) being stacked 01:00:524 (2) 's tail. Worry about flow first.

[Hard]

01:20:284 (2,3,4) - I don't think you should do that. The way you did it is really difficult to read for a Hard diff since there is a large 1/4 jump between each slider, and it's not at all natural to click in 1/4(blue tick) at 01:20:526. Plays much more natural to have two 1/4 sliders with two repeats each, that way the player just clicks in 1/1(white ticks) and it's intuitive to play.

[Normal]