1. Another (4.05 stars, 409 notes)
2. Mei's Beginner (1.47 stars, 102 notes)
3. Normal (2.12 stars, 206 notes)
4. wantuole's Hyper (3 stars, 264 notes)

Mei wrote:

萌！



弱弱的问一句：要不要gd啊。。。。

OrangeNeKo wrote:

Insane

01:42:120 (1,2,3) - 不放个跳么
01:43:532 (1,2,3) - 同上
01:37:532 (1,2,3) - 试试这样?

L4D MOE

Left 4 Dead wrote:

OrangeNeKo wrote:

Insane

嘿嘿嘿，兔饼骗分大失败。如果兔饼你承认自己萌的话，或许还会考虑下给你kds哦？（坏笑

1. 00:25:532 (3,4) - 建议围好
2. 00:37:179 (5,6,1) - 试的时候断了滑条，我思考5尾部压重，6和1是直线，目押有点难度，考虑换排列或者搞出点曲线
3. 01:16:356 (6) - 建议尾部whistle换到开头，配合乐音
4. 建议曲末接消音转盘

1. 00:23:061 (1,1) - 后一个滑条头部向前一个重叠，个人感觉最好是后面三滑条向内正三角
2. 00:24:826 (1,2,3) - 个人建议和前面对称，一个稀饭
   SPOILER

   
3. 00:27:650 (3,3) - 建议遮好
4. 00:30:120 (1) - 尾部拉到红线，也能配合下后面的节奏
5. 00:39:650 (2,2) - 后一个滑条尾部和前面的泡泡叠上
6. 00:50:061 (2,5) - 也是两个配合着叠上比较好看
7. 00:58:179 (2,1) - ↑
8. 01:12:297 (4,1) - 1叠到4，正三角
9. 01:28:356 (3,1,2,3,4) - 试的时候50了一个，这个弯不太好读，建议连打起始挪到滑条3开头
10. 01:53:767 (1,6) - ↑
11. 01:59:414 (5,4) - ↑别忘了挪这个02:02:040 (2) -
12. 02:04:096 - 个人建议尾部加一个消音转盘

ids wrote:

黑~
来自m4m

wantuole's Hard

• 
  
  

1. 00:25:532 (3,4) - 建议围好
2. 00:37:179 (5,6,1) - 试的时候断了滑条，我思考5尾部压重，6和1是直线，目押有点难度，考虑换排列或者搞出点曲线
3. 01:16:356 (6) - 建议尾部whistle换到开头，配合乐音
4. 建议曲末接消音转盘

Insane

1. 00:23:061 (1,1) - 后一个滑条头部向前一个重叠，个人感觉最好是后面三滑条向内正三角
2. 00:24:826 (1,2,3) - 个人建议和前面对称，一个稀饭
   SPOILER

   
3. 00:27:650 (3,3) - 建议遮好
4. 00:30:120 (1) - 尾部拉到红线，也能配合下后面的节奏
5. 00:39:650 (2,2) - 后一个滑条尾部和前面的泡泡叠上
6. 00:50:061 (2,5) - 也是两个配合着叠上比较好看
7. 00:58:179 (2,1) - ↑
8. 01:12:297 (4,1) - 1叠到4，正三角
9. 01:28:356 (3,1,2,3,4) - 试的时候50了一个，这个弯不太好读，建议连打起始挪到滑条3开头
10. 01:53:767 (1,6) - ↑
11. 01:59:414 (5,4) - ↑别忘了挪这个02:02:040 (2) -
12. 02:04:096 - 个人建议尾部加一个消音转盘

好，美丽，已赞过

Mei wrote:

送你一分（请叫我雷锋

[insane]

1. 00:09:650 (3) - 以前教我作图的前辈说过最好不要用滑条尾去压有重音的长白线，所以可以试试这样
   
   Picture

   
2. 00:17:767 (2,3,1,2) - 这里试试这样，吧 00:18:120 (3,1) - 做成00:17:767 (2) - 旋转120度/240度然后可以排成这样一个图案（我个人感觉美观会加分>.>
   
   Picture

   
3. 00:32:414 (3,4) - 修一下blanket
   
4. 01:03:297 (3,4,1) - 试试这样，吧3移到x100 y272 , 把1移到x296 y32
   
   Picture

   
5. 01:04:708 (1,4) - 避免一下overlap（虽然我觉得也不是太必要，不过随手就能解决的
   
6. 01:13:532 (1,2,3) - 这3个也能做成那种依次120度旋转的图形
   
7. 01:25:356 (4,5) - 没包好
   
8. 01:39:650 (4) - 也是滑条尾巴压到重音了，试着改成3/4滑条+1个note这样的节奏啊

[wantuole's hard]

1. 00:33:650 (3,4) - 干脆做个bat喜闻乐见的blanket啊
   
2. 00:38:591 (1,2,3,4,1) - 这个听起来不太舒服，因为00:39:297 (2,4) - 这2个滑条都都把尾巴压在人声上了感觉有点弱（不知道怎么说，反正试试这样
   
   Picture

   
3. 01:01:885 (1,3) - 这两个叠啊（貌似有点难
   
4. 01:09:297 (4,5) - 感觉和下一个滑条离得有点远啊，试试移到x132 y220

[normal]

• 
  normal 不要变速比较好吧。。。。可能会被狗说

1. 01:16:708 (1,1) - normal里面这个有点太近了，建议直接把1删掉

ez谁做的真是aji
顺便射一射

Thanks for Modding!

[CSGA]Ar3sgice wrote:

01:31:444 - 这里想办法插个note吧
01:50:591 (1) - 改成两个短滑条来突出一下spada这个主题或许不错

还有就是这个背景用故事版做成滚动的就好了, 再加个云彩特效, 给人一种乡村小城市的氛围, 然后结合主题, 就是一个这一首歌带起了2dx21spada整个碟子的那种感觉

就是那种慢速的滚动, 在慢慢移动的火车上远望城市的那种感觉

送你个star

tm1209 wrote:

Insane：
我感觉OD8更好，能提升一些难度:3
00:29:061 (3) - 这里之后放个转盘可能会好点？
其他好像没问题了呢:3
音效改成和音乐里面的鼓点相似或许打起来会更爽
大概就是这样了吧

Thanks For Modding!

lkx_Shore wrote:

From m4m

[General]
没有break,去掉letterbox
02:04:096 - 虽然有一点提前音...但我觉得用70bpm最好

[Insane]
OD+1 曲子很平淡没啥特别的变化，OD7太送了..
01:48:385 - 加note?和这里差不多01:31:179 (2,3,4) -
02:02:312 - 其实这里加note更好啊。

[Wantuole's Hard]
OD+1
00:49:708 (2) - 这个红线滑条打起来有点别扭..
01:27:297 (3) - 换1/2滑条然后加note更好

[Normal]
00:26:944 (1) - 折返一下就没必要下后面那1/2滑条...多余的节奏
02:01:179 (1,2,3) - NC?...敢低难度这里堆一块容易当成一种速度的

Thanks for Modding!

orza6006 wrote:

M4M from my queue

Hmm... it's beatmania IIDX so you could rename difficulties to Mei's Beginner, Standard, wantuole's Hyper and Another to reflect the source material

Mei's Easy

00:16:356 (5,1) - Nice slider wrapping
00:34:003 (5) - Ctrl-G and then move everything accordingly to keep distance snap equal
00:52:003 (1) - Either move to 96/40 for better flow into the slider, or 96/28 so it's on the same level as the slider on the other side
01:59:061 (1) - Make the end of the spinner more quiet so it doesn't intrude into the ending

Normal

AR5 maybe?
00:11:061 (5,6) - Incredibly Nazi but 5 to 312/184 and 6 to 92/224. Also having 6 curve the other way would improve flow
00:34:356 (6) - Maybe move this out, I'm not sure about objects under slider ends in Normal difficulty
01:06:120 (4) - Curve the other way for better flow
01:24:826 (1) - Nazi but angle this ever so slightly clockwise (outward) so it resembles the slider on the other end a little more
02:01:179 (1,1,1) - Nice ending

wantuole's Hard

HP+1 perhaps? It's probably OK how it is though
00:30:120 (2) - NC here, this note doesn't have any relation to the note before it
00:43:885 (3) - This is fine, but it might be nice to stack it on the head of the previous slider
00:46:003 (1,1,1) - Nice usage of NCs
00:55:885 (2) - If you move to 288/128 the flow will be nicer, and then you can move 5 so that the end stacks with it
01:31:356 (1,2) - The distance between these should be increased to fit in with the ones that come afterwards

Insane

00:19:708 (2) - Move to 196/244 for better flow
00:23:767 (1) - To 236/164 for better stacking with the others
00:26:591 (6) - The slider end could be stacked better with 3's end but I know grid snap gets in the way, so either leave it or play around with it a little to get them to stack properly
01:08:591 (1) - Maybe you could re-angle so you could get the end to stack with 2 and the head to stack with the yellow 3?
01:11:944 (2,3,1,2,3) - Nice stacking
01:24:826 (1,2,3,4) - For a nicer shape, have 244/140, 300/276, 332/128, 224/228 in that order
01:25:532 (5) - Stack end with 1
02:03:251 (3,4) - The hitsounds should be quieter here to represent the slowing down in the song

All difficulties are very nice, so not much for me to point out I'm afraid. I tried my best though.

Good luck getting this ranked, I don't think it needs much more work before it's time to call a BAT.

Hmm, you starred my map, so I guess I'll return the favour. Starred!

fanzhen0019 wrote:

斯巴达元素
先mark 我记得以前好像下过

fanzhen0019 wrote:

General

• iidx的命名习惯是Beginner Normal Hyper Another 你可以考虑一下

Easy

Hitsounds

• Clear

Arrangement & Design

• 工整 没啥好说的

Standard

Hitsounds

• Clear

Arrangement & Design

• 01:37:885 (1) - 我觉得可以new combo

1. 01:53:767 (2,3,4,5,6) - wocao

玩脱Hyp

Hitsounds

• 开头建议在短白线都下whistle
  感觉下的有点意识流 但都是whistle也没啥关系

Arrangement & Design

1. 00:46:003 (1,1) - 叠了 挪一挪
2. 00:47:767 (3,4) - 没包好
3. 01:19:356 (4) - 其实可以放到01:20:238 (3) - 这个位置
4. 01:28:356 (1) - 建议加大和前面的spacing 这有点欺诈了

Another

Hitsounds

• 没啥问题

Arrangement & Design

• Excellent

这歌是我过的第一个SPA啊
赶紧找BAT
GL!

Thanks for Modding!

Left 4 Dead wrote:

lkx_Shore wrote:

[Insane]
01:48:385 - 加note?和这里差不多01:31:179 (2,3,4) - 我觉得这里的排列不好改动，所以没改 这啥理由，这是音乐游戏，先有节奏再有排列...

lkx_Shore wrote:

[Insane]
01:48:385 - 加note?和这里差不多01:31:179 (2,3,4) - 我觉得这里的排列不好改动，所以没改 这啥理由，这是音乐游戏，先有节奏再有排列...

1. uncheck widescreensup

SPOILER

SPOILER

1. 00:13:708
2. 00:15:120
3. 00:16:179
4. 00:16:885
5. 00:22:179
6. 00:23:591
7. 00:24:650
8. 00:26:414

SPOILER

Pandiar wrote:

request from Mei sama


[General]

1. uncheck widescreensup

[Mei's Beginner]
00:48:120 (1) - how about this? for better flow

SPOILER

good

[Normal]
00:35:061 (1,2,3) - try to this rhythm

SPOILER

01:20:944 (1) - NC?

good

[wantuole's Hyper]
Why don't put the note?
good flow is wasted

1. 00:13:708
2. 00:15:120
3. 00:16:179
4. 00:16:885
5. 00:22:179
6. 00:23:591
7. 00:24:650
8. 00:26:414

KIAI TIME is also same


[Another]
00:06:650 (3) - i think it is little close. move about x316 y272 is better
00:25:003 (2) - for better flow

SPOILER

00:26:238 (6) - x488 y156
00:26:944 (8) - x440 y257
00:29:061 (3) - x264 y344?
00:46:356 (2) - NC because SV is changing
00:46:708 (3) - ^
01:03:650 - remove green line?

It was interesting >o<


good luck ~ !

Fixed Giving a slider a NC in special may be not good, so I make the slider into two circles (Actually, I think I made it harder for playing )

Well, because the Another isn't very difficult, so I think it is necessary to make some blanks for reducing the difficulty of the Hyper...However, if more people mention this, I would think about it. Thanks anyway

Thanks for Modding! ... and cute Mei!

Cherry Blossom wrote:

baka cb will mod it, stay tuned.

Cherry Blossom wrote:

Your map is in this list, because Krah loves this long.

Mei's Beginner

1. 00:10:003 (1,2) - Rhythm is changing here, so you can vary pattern, why don't to try this ?
   
   SPOILER

   
2. 00:17:414 (1,2) - flow could be imrpoved here, move 00:18:473 (2) - a bit up for a better flow.
3. 00:32:238 (3,4) - if i follow your logic with the whole pattern, this 00:33:297 (4) - should be placed under 00:32:238 (3) - , not above.
4. 00:34:003 (5) - the strong beat here 00:34:356 is not clicked, you made all of them clickable, so if i follow your logic, it has to be clicked.
5. 00:41:767 (5) - here again you missed a strong beat, try this instead, it works well because it also follows vocals
   
   SPOILER

   
   
   The rest of the diff is fine, really nice diff o/

Normal

1. 00:07:885 - The strong beat here is not clicked, it should be, since every strong beats are clicked.
2. 00:12:120 (6) - this goes really far, i mean its direction is on the left and the next object is on the right, try to make something which limits flow breaking, like this for example 00:14:238 (4,5) -
3. 00:22:708 (3,4) - there is no reason to stack here, since you didnt use stack before, for the same sound.
4. 00:26:944 (1,2) - first polarity issue of this diff, you should avoid it it makes the map harder to read. To fix that polarity issue, you should add a note here 00:27:650, but i really have doubts if you will agree because you didnt use any 1/2. But using 1/2 will fix that polarity issue and make the map easier to read, and a Normal should have some 1/2 to add more density and balance diff spread.
5. 00:38:591 (1) - if i follow your logic with the whole pattern, it should be under 00:37:532 (4) - , not above.
6. 00:50:238 (1,2,3) - make an equilateral triangle, you made one here 00:51:297 (3,1,2) - .
7. 01:07:885 (2,3) - plays better if they are curved, so make 2 curved sliders.
8. 01:24:826 (1,2) - same as ^
9. 01:51:650 (1,2,3) - this looks really overkill for a normal, undermap this part ;w; use less 1/2 spacings.
10. 01:53:414 (1,2,3,4) - same as ^
11. 01:56:944 (1,2,3,4) - this shape looks weird imo, try this
    
    SPOILER

    

wantuole's Hyper

1. 00:13:885 (2,3,4) - this looks a bit hard to play because of the 1/1 gap before. Dicrease a bit the distance between 00:13:885 (2,3) - as you did here 00:22:356 (2,3) -
2. 00:33:297 (2,3,4,1) - stacks looks kinda confusing imo, unstacking 00:33:297 (2,3) - should be better.
3. 00:43:885 (3,4) - spacing looks kinda confusing here and looks random because it can be considered as 1/2 and it is not, so increase a bit the spacing.
4. 00:47:061 (1,3) - i have doubts about how it flow, slider's curves should be like this imo
   
   SPOILER

   
5. 01:48:120 (5) - the strong note is not played, i mean 01:48:473 , make this instead
   
   SPOILER

   

Another

1. 00:16:356 - sad to see that the strong note is not clicked, try this
   
   SPOILER

   
2. 00:23:767 (1) - wrong curve, if i refer to the logic of your triple sliders flow, it should be curved like this
   
   SPOILER

   
3. 01:26:061 (1) - the strong beat is not clicked here and you can hear that it is really loud and should be clicked, try this
   
   SPOILER

   
4. 01:39:650 (4) - same as ^
5. 02:04:108 (4) - add a NC here to emphasize the last note.

Well, to be honest, i really loved this mapset, every diffs look well done and beautiful.
The Another is really comfortable to play, i can't believe a beginner can make something like this, i'm really impressed.
You did a good job.
I hope my mod was useful, take my double star o/ + favourited.
If you don't rank it i will kill you i swear :3
Good Luck ~

Wow, I never expect this

Fixed but I don't think I made a good pattern then

Fixed OK, you are right!

Fixed How did this happened? Well, that because I use the method of making insane diffs to make a Normal

Now that you did me big favor, I won't let you down!

Thanks for modding and stars and fav!

Cyc17- wrote:

友情mod来辣!!
太aji了就直接打死吧!!!


[Notion]
This color means it is a suggestion. I prefer to do this, but you can either choose to fix or not.
And this color means some issue to fix I think.

[General]
白猫的SB前面的部分建议改改 字体排列统一
打的时候常常突然我都没读到图了..
TAG里面少了你自己
Good Lucky to you~

[Mei's Beginner]
General
总体clear.感觉只是要修一些slider的拉伸就可以

Beats
00:59:767 (1) - 这个sipnner个人感觉可以调整出现的位置或者完全不需要.
缩短到01:00:826 - 开始spinner 前面 从00:59:414 - 开始增加note.换成4个circle或者2个slider
填补一下感觉更好 或者直接不要sipnner全填circle和slider的混合

01:31:179 - 感觉上可以填补一个circle

01:37:885 (1,2,3) - 请好好包好
3的slider对应曲子的感觉上可以替换成1circle和1slider的搭配

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[Normal]
General
normal的循环感觉有点奇怪(?!)
kiai段落开始的01:22:003 (3,4,5) - 是这种排列
后面的循环到01:30:120 (4,5,6) - 变成两个circle开头感觉不如直接循环前面的好

Beats
00:27:826 - 少个拍子

01:30:120 (4,5,6) - 感觉在节奏上的摆列ctrl+G效果更佳

01:31:179 (1) - 发音在后面的01:31:356 上 感觉多打了一个拍子出来

01:36:826 (3,4) - ctrl+G?

01:38:238 (2) - 换成两个circle 或者后面01:39:297 (1,2) - 换成跟这里一样的slider 感觉更好

[wantuole's Hyper]
General
YEYE 摸不动 clear好吗

[Another]

手贴桌子完全打不动啊 orz

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Good luck :3

这里是包好了的啊？不过图里面的建议是一个好主意 ，所以请让我考虑一下，如果更多人提起我就修正这个地方。

Thanks for modding!

lZenxl wrote:

SB Check here owo/

Will give some suggestions to improve the SB

SB\Light.png @ 4356 Offset

I think you should push this scaling and fading 1/1 later, it feels too early imo
Also, have the Scale on Easing Out, it feels more dynamic
FIXED
SB Lyrics @ 30120 & 114120 Offset

The SB seems to fade out rather fast, I think you should extend the time of the fade out so it feels smoother
30120:Sorry,I don't think it should be sommther beacasue the drum here is powerful.
114120:FIXED
SB\d-5.png @ 97179 Offset

I think 誰 kanji is enough, I don't think a よ is needed here
FIXED
SB\SAKURA.png

The same Move/Rotate happens twice, which looks unnatural, I suggest to change the Move/Rotate on 00:55:532 - of the SAKURA.png
FIXED
SB\Ring.png

I suggest to use Easing out on the Scale, it looks more dynamic imo
Just fixed once
Otherwise, the SB looks pretty good owo/