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Nishizawa Hagumi - Yureru Cycle

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Topic Starter
alacat
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2014年3月9日 at 1:30:25

Artist: Nishizawa Hagumi
Title: Yureru Cycle
Source: Cocoro@Function!
Tags: KSHR umi -umi- Melophobia visual novel eroge hentai Willplus pulltop ココロ@ファンクション!
BPM: 140
Filesize: 18527kb
Play Time: 01:45
Difficulties Available:
  1. Insane (5 stars, 353 notes)
  2. KSHR's Easy (2.28 stars, 105 notes)
  3. Melo's Hard (4.88 stars, 266 notes)
  4. Umi's Normal (4.11 stars, 156 notes)


Download: Nishizawa Hagumi - Yureru Cycle
Download: Nishizawa Hagumi - Yureru Cycle (no video)
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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My 20th Ranked map! :)

Easy KSHR !!!
Normal -Umi- !!!
Hard Melo !!!
Thanks!
phoon
v^v^v
Topic Starter
alacat
:D
Melophobia
Topic Starter
alacat
†Melo†さん、ありがとうです ;)
CakiP
がんばれ~、@l@c@tさん!
KSHR
数日で出来るとか言っときながらBATに昇格とか色々あって遅れちゃった ごめんね
何か変なところがあったらgame内でもforum pmでもなんでもいいので教えてもらえると
よろしく! http://puu.sh/6PsWV.zip
Topic Starter
alacat
@CakiP

☆@rig@to!!!!!!!

@KSHR

Yureru Kaminoke

ありがとです :D
KSHR
Japanese BAT x 3
Fycho
nice song/map and starred xD
Umi

KSHR wrote:

Japanese BAT x 3
I feel alone xD

anyways normal incoming >.</

done =w=/

> http://puu.sh/6QrqP/778a8d7727.rar (with some custom hitsounds :3)
Asphyxia
Hi guys! Actually, this song is cool! Melophobia requested a mod so yeah, here I am :3

General thoughts
  1. Let's get nazi, shall we! Your BG rezo is 1365 x 768 and not 1366 x 768, that's a simple resize if you want to do it!
  2. Some inconsistencies in kiai-times:
  3. I see you have umi and -umi- in tags, I'd honestly remove one of them from there. If not, you should add probably ''Melo'' to your tags aswell, I myself
    would search it with ''Melo'' more but I guess that's just me.
  4. Disable widescreen support please!
  5. Clean!

KSHR's Easy
  1. 00:04:531 (3) - Shouldn't this be NC'd according to 00:07:960 (1) - ? If not, remove the NC from 00:07:960 (1) -
  2. 00:15:674 (2) - I'd move this slider a bit down to the movement doesn't feel too bad here, like erm, x:277, y:260?
  3. 00:25:531 (2) - Doesn't fit because of it's shape, I mean it does fit but not as well as it could. I think this slider should be more blanketed 00:24:031 (4) - with this sliders end. Well, if you don't understand what I mean, see this picture:
  4. 01:14:388 (2) - Movement here was also a bit unnatural for me, you could move this slider somewhere around x:203 y:34 to help the flow a bit ;)
  5. 01:40:531 (1) - I'm not really a fan of 1 combo objects, I mean yeah, it could be for the emphaziz (idk how to write it properly... orz) but still, it feels too unnecessary so consider removing the NC there.
  6. One problem I had with this was the tick sounds, they shouldn't be there at all, sometimes it screwed the rhythm imo... well, get more opinions on that I guess! Other than that, solid and nice difficulty!

Umi's Normal
  1. 00:02:603 (3) - This shouldn't belong to 00:01:960 (2) - this combo at all. It felt really weird while playing. 00:01:103 (1,2) - are so strong and 00:02:603 (3) - and this isn't so it's really weird :( I guess you made your mind now! (note: this applies for 00:05:817 (4) - etc)
  2. 00:23:388 (4,5) - Dat spacing, I guess it should be pretty easy to fix!
  3. 00:40:317 (3) - Moving this note a bit more down creates a cool flow there! It plays better than this straight one, try it!
  4. Honestly, I would've done those overlaps a bit differently but that seems to be your style and it'd be quite rude to try to change it so I rather not. Cool diff otherwise.

Melo's Hard

/me pokes Melo
  1. 00:01:103 (1) - Just a personal thing here, you could make it a bit better looking, now it feels kind of meh... like this maybe? http://puu.sh/6QXfB.jpg
  2. 00:01:103 (1,2,3) - If you can, rotate them a bit clockwise, the movement wasn't was natural as I wanted it to be. Like this:
  3. 00:21:031 (4,5) - This jump was quite unexpected (for me) but I guess you want to keep it though. Could you reduce the spacing on this maybe a bit? The song isn't imo that intense to have such a jump there, atleast not that big. : p
  4. 00:28:960 (1) - I guess it's small thing but I'd rotate this slider a bit so the movement gets better here. Atleast it got better when I tested it.
  5. 00:42:031 (1) - This kind of overlaps felt wrong to play, I'd just adjust them a bit so they don't get overlapped. Of course if you don't like this idea, don't apply this to anywhere ^^
  6. 00:57:674 (1,2) - This was so pretty but the small, small overlap (imo) kind of ruined it, care to fix that?
  7. 01:15:460 (2,3,4,5,6) - Those jumps were pretty big if you ask me. I'd reduce them a bit.
  8. So pretty o.o Great job!

Insane
  1. 00:04:317 - There's actually a beat that you could place a note. I feel like this place having not a note made it play pretty weird, I didn't like the break there.
  2. 00:13:103 (1,2) - This played way better if you would CTRL + G 1 and then CTRL + G, kind of reverse them, try it out!
  3. 00:16:960 (2) - Try to CTRL + J this slider and move it back to it's original place? Feels more natural this way!
  4. 00:22:317 (2) - I'd honestly move this note a bit up, considering the movement wasn't perfect here. This would make it way better imho! (x:158 y:54 could work)
  5. 01:16:103 (7) - Try CTRL + G here, plays more interesting and feels good to play, check it!
  6. 01:16:960 (2) - I'd move this note more closer to 01:16:531 (1) - 's end, I first thought it would be on the red tick instead in the blue tick.
  7. 01:41:817 (7) - I would NC this note to be consistent with the other diffs?
  8. Can't really point out much stuff because this diff played well. GJ ~

Sorry for the crappy mod ;-; this mapset is nice (btw I love the BG) so yeah, GL guys with it! ~ 8-)
BeatofIke
<3
KSHR
βёдтofIκё
Melophobia

Asphyxia wrote:

Melo's Hard

/me pokes Melo
  1. 00:01:103 (1) - Just a personal thing here, you could make it a bit better looking, now it feels kind of meh... like this maybe? http://puu.sh/6QXfB.jpg I somehow wanted to try something new to me. lol but yeah, yours should look better. Fixed accordingly.
  2. 00:01:103 (1,2,3) - If you can, rotate them a bit clockwise, the movement wasn't was natural as I wanted it to be. Like this: Good point, I've been thinking that could be better. Fixed in my own way though.
  3. 00:21:031 (4,5) - This jump was quite unexpected (for me) but I guess you want to keep it though. Could you reduce the spacing on this maybe a bit? The song isn't imo that intense to have such a jump there, atleast not that big. : p Well I don't love that pattern either. Fixed into a boring stacking pattern.
  4. 00:28:960 (1) - I guess it's small thing but I'd rotate this slider a bit so the movement gets better here. Atleast it got better when I tested it. Hmm, no. The current one flows/looks better to me.
  5. 00:42:031 (1) - This kind of overlaps felt wrong to play, I'd just adjust them a bit so they don't get overlapped. Of course if you don't like this idea, don't apply this to anywhere ^^ I liked the way it touches the previous slider but i found a cool alternative so fixed.
  6. 00:57:674 (1,2) - This was so pretty but the small, small overlap (imo) kind of ruined it, care to fix that? Agreed. I curved it in the opposite direction.
  7. 01:15:460 (2,3,4,5,6) - Those jumps were pretty big if you ask me. I'd reduce them a bit. Well that was a bit too much. xD Reduced the spacing.
  8. So pretty o.o Great job!
Thanks for modding! it was quite helpful to me. :D
I thought you disliked non-english songs so I'm glad you like this song. xD
Guy
Hi! from Melo-san's request :3

Red : You must be fix.
Blue : You should be fix.
Black : Just suggestion.


[General]
  1. 少し始まるのが早いのでLead-inを500~1000くらい入れてもいいかも?
  2. BGのサイズが1365x768になってますがこれはいいんですかね・・・? きちんと16:9である1366x768のものを使用することをオススメします。
  3. 全diffのWidescreen supportのチェックを外しましょう。



[Insane]
  1. 00:02:603 (4) - 音取りの提案です。ボーカルをフォローしつつ裏のバスを拾えるこの音取りはどうでしょうか?

  2. 00:06:995 (7,8,9) - 7,8を00:06:888 (6) - と同様にSampleset Drumにして(もしくは8をSampleset Noneでwhistle)、00:07:424 (9) - ここの終端と同じ音が00:07:103 (8) - この終端にあるので、同じようにAdd whistleはどうでしょう
  3. 00:10:103 (5) - 曲にfitさせるならclapよりwhistleが合ってると思います。
  4. 00:16:531 (1,2) - ここは次にくる3連に繋ぎやすくするように丸い流れを作ってみてはどうでしょう?
  5. 00:20:388 (4,5,6) - 6への流れがスムーズではなかったので配置の提案です。このように三角形を作ってみてはどうでしょうか? 4は 00:21:245 (7) - の終端にスタックしてあり、5は 00:19:960 (3) - のブランケットを意識してます。この流れならばスムーズなAIM運びが可能であると思います。
  6. 00:24:245 (7) - whistleが入るはずですがストリームの途中ということで故意的に抜いているのであればスルーしてください!
  7. 00:24:674 (10) - 次のnoteへ直線上になるように置いたほうが、個人的にはAIMした時に若干打ちやすいです。
  8. 00:35:388 (1) - 1/4スライダーの後のせいか、若干スペーシングが狭く感じました。 それと合わせてスライダーの向きを反対側に曲げて次のスライダーを打ちやすくしてみるのはどうでしょう?
  9. 01:29:388 - この手の音のする箇所にはfinishの入ったnoteが必ずあるので、Add noteしてfinishをいれて欲しい場所でした。 周りの配置を崩さずに置くなら x:404 y:128あたりがベストかなと思います。
  10. 01:34:745 (4) - 01:35:817 (3) - ここにスタックして、ストンと落ちるような配置が自分は好みです!



[Melo's Hard]
  1. 00:04:531 (1) - かなり細かいけどx:360 y:136に移動すると00:03:888 (4,5,1) - ここの始端同士で綺麗な三角形になります。
  2. 01:04:317 (1,3,4) - 1と4のスライダーは並行な形になっているので、それに合わせて3のスライダーも同じように角度を合わせてみてはどうでしょう
  3. 01:07:103 (2,3,4) - 曲の方が思いっきり1/6のリズムなのでこの3連は違和感がありました。Insaneと同じようにスライダーで音取りしてみてはどうでしょう?
  4. 01:12:031 (3) - ボーカルをフォローした音取りの方が自然で、さらに他の同じような箇所もボーカルフォローが多いので統一感を出すためにも合わせてみては?
  5. 01:15:460 (2,3,4,5,6,1,2) - BPM低いというのもありますがHardにしては少し飛びすぎではと思いました。少し縮めたものを作ってみたのでよかったら使ってみてください。

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  6. 01:24:245 (3) - このスライダーも少し曲げてあげた方が流れも見栄えも良くなると思います。4の位置も若干移動させてます。
  7. 01:25:745 (2) - 01:12:031 (3) - と同じです。



[Umi's Normal]
  1. 00:02:603 (3) - Add finish to slider head. same as 00:09:460 (4) - here.
  2. 00:26:817 (4) - Add whistle to slider end. Whistle and clap have been added in other similar places.
  3. 00:51:460 (4) - Add clap to slider head and end?
  4. 01:11:388 (4) - design suggesiton. I think current one is a little bad form. so What about use a copy slider?
  5. 01:20:817 (3) - Add finish.
  6. 01:39:674 (4) - add a slider curve for blanket.



[KSHR's Easy]
  1. 01:03:460 (2) - Sampleset drumよりもピアノに合わせてwhistle入れたほうが曲にあっていていいと思いました。

    Nice diff!!


Good luck! :)
Melophobia

Guy wrote:

[Melo's Hard]
  1. 00:04:531 (1) - かなり細かいけどx:360 y:136に移動すると00:03:888 (4,5,1) - ここの始端同士で綺麗な三角形になります。ほい
  2. 01:04:317 (1,3,4) - 1と4のスライダーは並行な形になっているので、それに合わせて3のスライダーも同じように角度を合わせてみてはどうでしょう おっけー
  3. 01:07:103 (2,3,4) - 曲の方が思いっきり1/6のリズムなのでこの3連は違和感がありました。Insaneと同じようにスライダーで音取りしてみてはどうでしょう? 悩んでたんですよねぇ3連打でHardの人でも叩けるようにしたかったんですけどまぁ確かに違和感あったのでスライダーにしちゃいました
  4. 01:12:031 (3) - ボーカルをフォローした音取りの方が自然で、さらに他の同じような箇所もボーカルフォローが多いので統一感を出すためにも合わせてみては? ごもっともな意見ではあるんですけど今の方が好みなのでしばらくこれでいきます
  5. 01:15:460 (2,3,4,5,6,1,2) - BPM低いというのもありますがHardにしては少し飛びすぎではと思いました。少し縮めたものを作ってみたのでよかったら使ってみてください。前のModで指摘されて自力で修正したんですけどこっちの方が綺麗ですねありがとうございます使わせてもらいます

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  6. 01:24:245 (3) - このスライダーも少し曲げてあげた方が流れも見栄えも良くなると思います。4の位置も若干移動させてます。おっけーです
  7. 01:25:745 (2) - 01:12:031 (3) - と同じです。同じ理由です
ありがとう!
http://puu.sh/6R1ed.osu
Umi

Asphyxia wrote:

Umi's Normal
  1. 00:02:603 (3) - This shouldn't belong to 00:01:960 (2) - this combo at all. It felt really weird while playing. 00:01:103 (1,2) - are so strong and 00:02:603 (3) - and this isn't so it's really weird :( I guess you made your mind now! (note: this applies for 00:05:817 (4) - etc) So you mean NC right ? added then
  2. 00:23:388 (4,5) - Dat spacing, I guess it should be pretty easy to fix! ops lol fixed
  3. 00:40:317 (3) - Moving this note a bit more down creates a cool flow there! It plays better than this straight one, try it! yeah not bad :3
  4. Honestly, I would've done those overlaps a bit differently but that seems to be your style and it'd be quite rude to try to change it so I rather not. Cool diff otherwise.

Guy wrote:

[Umi's Normal]
  1. 00:02:603 (3) - Add finish to slider head. same as 00:09:460 (4) - here.
  2. 00:26:817 (4) - Add whistle to slider end. Whistle and clap have been added in other similar places.
  3. 00:51:460 (4) - Add clap to slider head and end?
  4. 01:11:388 (4) - design suggesiton. I think current one is a little bad form. so What about use a copy slider?
  5. 01:20:817 (3) - Add finish.
  6. 01:39:674 (4) - add a slider curve for blanket.

    All fixed :3



Good luck! :)
sankyuu both for mod ;)

osu file format v12

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Title:Yureru Cycle
TitleUnicode:ユレルサイクル
Artist:Nishizawa Hagumi
ArtistUnicode:西沢はぐみ
Creator:alacat
Version:Umi's Normal
Source:Cocoro@Function!
Tags:KSHR umi -umi- Melophobia visual novel eroge hentai game pulltop ココロ@ファンクション!
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100,162,19103,2,0,P|119:217|100:272,1,120,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
201,336,19960,2,0,P|274:315|319:311,1,120,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
403,226,20817,2,0,L|372:86,1,120,2|10,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
293,22,21674,6,0,L|252:153,1,120,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
237,193,22317,1,2,0:0:0:0:
237,193,22531,2,0,P|177:185|118:192,1,120,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
118,312,23388,2,0,P|177:319|236:312,1,120,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
351,275,24245,2,0,L|360:201,1,60,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
333,160,24674,2,0,L|364:80,1,60,10|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
375,47,25103,6,0,P|304:54|245:45,1,120,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
137,67,25960,2,0,P|141:128|126:197,1,120,8|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
122,247,26603,1,0,0:0:0:0:
122,247,26817,2,0,P|188:233|317:253,2,180,8|0|10,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
64,266,28317,6,0,L|114:86,1,180,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
215,31,29388,1,8,0:0:0:0:
308,107,29817,2,0,L|379:61,1,60,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
409,43,30245,2,0,P|430:98|420:156,1,120,8|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
370,190,30888,2,0,P|359:248|381:303,1,120
411,355,31531,1,8,0:0:0:0:
291,345,31960,6,0,L|168:326,1,120,10|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
112,317,32603,2,0,P|159:209|228:230,1,180
315,248,33674,1,8,0:0:0:0:
357,135,34103,2,0,L|291:100,1,60,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
251,78,34531,2,0,P|223:127|153:153,1,120,10|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
106,154,35174,6,0,P|137:236|106:318,1,180,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
224,341,36245,2,0,P|281:328|339:342,1,120,8|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
340,222,37103,2,0,P|282:236|224:222,1,120,8|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
135,141,37960,2,0,L|188:77,1,60,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
232,101,38388,2,0,L|294:58,1,60,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
339,82,38817,6,0,L|456:58,1,120,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
438,176,39674,2,0,L|321:200,1,120,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
263,220,40317,1,0,0:0:0:0:
200,216,40531,2,0,P|169:152|209:41,2,180,0|0|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
245,254,42031,6,0,P|327:224|410:255,1,180,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
326,342,43103,1,0,0:0:0:0:
245,255,43531,2,0,L|192:204,1,60,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
141,207,43960,2,0,L|206:102,1,120,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
180,49,44603,2,0,L|327:29,1,120
358,26,45245,1,8,0:0:0:0:
461,87,45674,6,0,P|425:162|437:216,1,120,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
436,255,46317,2,0,P|366:260|286:345,1,180,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
170,324,47388,1,0,0:0:0:0:
116,217,47817,1,8,0:0:0:0:
173,111,48245,6,0,B|211:98|257:109|257:109|313:125|349:106,2,180,2|2|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
167,231,49960,2,0,P|231:243|296:223,1,120,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
390,175,50817,2,0,L|412:241,2,60,0|8|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
368,118,51460,2,0,P|337:79|242:72,1,120,8|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
210,62,52103,1,8,0:0:0:0:
127,149,52531,6,0,P|114:231|27:275,2,180,4|2|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
210,62,54245,2,0,L|324:144,1,120,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
354,169,54888,2,0,P|282:219|275:306,1,180,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
380,364,55960,6,0,P|451:314|458:227,1,180,4|4,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
324,105,57245,1,8,0:0:0:0:
222,165,57674,2,0,P|144:172|83:159,1,120,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
45,149,58317,1,4,0:0:0:0:
29,267,58745,2,0,L|93:328,1,60,4|8,3:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
191,321,59388,6,0,P|289:301|375:330,2,180,4|2|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
140,353,60888,2,0,L|140:216,1,120,4|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
137,172,61531,1,0,0:0:0:0:
137,172,61745,2,0,P|194:187|251:171,1,120,2|4,0:0|0:3,0:0:0:0:
277,116,62388,1,8,0:0:0:0:
298,59,62603,6,0,P|355:42|412:58,1,120,4|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
456,169,63460,1,2,0:0:0:0:
390,269,63888,2,0,L|310:299,1,60,4|8,3:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
278,313,64317,1,4,0:0:0:0:
196,224,64745,2,0,L|225:147,1,60,4|4,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
244,50,65388,2,0,L|158:63,2,60,8|8|4,0:0|3:0|3:0,0:0:0:0:
303,41,66031,5,4,0:0:0:0:
388,125,66460,1,4,0:0:0:0:
322,225,66888,2,0,P|259:257|151:216,2,180,4|4|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
371,190,68388,2,0,P|434:202|492:278,1,120,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
379,311,69245,1,8,0:0:0:0:
275,249,69674,6,0,P|260:167|293:119,1,120,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
305,85,70317,1,0,0:0:0:0:
305,85,70531,2,0,L|151:67,1,120,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
115,168,71388,2,0,L|269:186,1,120,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
351,215,72245,2,0,L|402:184,1,60,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
409,124,72674,2,0,L|357:93,1,60,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
300,69,73103,6,0,P|242:58|183:69,1,120,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
91,147,73960,1,2,0:0:0:0:
145,253,74388,2,0,L|241:181,2,120,8|2|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
250,309,75674,2,0,L|365:268,1,120,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
419,248,76317,1,0,0:0:0:0:
442,192,76531,6,0,P|409:138|418:67,1,120,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
417,23,77174,1,2,0:0:0:0:
305,66,77603,2,0,L|226:56,1,60,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
185,52,78031,2,0,P|126:106|185:159,1,180,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
238,188,78888,2,0,P|265:231|230:295,1,120,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
185,317,79531,1,8,0:0:0:0:
72,273,79960,5,4,0:0:0:0:
72,153,80388,1,8,0:0:0:0:
176,214,80817,1,4,0:0:0:0:
176,94,81245,2,0,P|236:77|354:101,1,180,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
401,129,82103,1,8,0:0:0:0:
412,248,82531,2,0,L|345:249,1,60,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
308,290,82960,2,0,L|241:291,1,60,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
192,314,83388,6,0,P|137:294|97:250,1,120,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
80,192,84031,1,0,0:0:0:0:
97,133,84245,2,0,P|137:89|192:69,1,120,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
267,163,85103,2,0,P|322:142|362:98,1,120,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
473,52,85960,2,0,L|457:140,1,60,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
476,169,86388,2,0,L|436:219,1,60,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
395,257,86817,6,0,P|312:288|229:257,1,180,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
181,221,87674,1,4,0:0:0:0:
79,155,88103,2,0,P|180:100|282:153,1,240,12|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
246,268,89388,1,4,0:0:0:0:
349,328,89817,1,8,0:0:0:0:
414,227,90245,6,0,P|402:153|423:109,1,120,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
321,43,91103,1,2,0:0:0:0:
217,102,91531,2,0,L|107:34,2,120,8|4|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
310,177,92817,2,0,L|295:257,1,60,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
287,294,93245,2,0,L|207:282,1,60,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
168,275,93674,6,0,L|195:133,1,120,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
246,51,94531,1,2,0:0:0:0:
364,72,94960,2,0,B|401:123|371:187|371:187|341:252|377:300,1,240,12|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
482,243,96245,1,2,0:0:0:0:
475,123,96674,1,8,0:0:0:0:
364,73,97103,6,0,P|286:67|231:75,1,120,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
134,118,97960,1,2,0:0:0:0:
91,230,98388,2,0,P|134:316|178:230,1,240,12|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
247,131,99674,2,0,P|287:185|298:246,1,120,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
406,286,100531,6,0,L|425:229,2,60,4|8|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
386,342,101174,2,0,P|328:330|270:343,1,120,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
210,354,101817,1,4,0:0:0:0:
256,192,102031,12,4,105674,0:1:0:0:
kajiyatta
As requested from Melophobia.
[General]
前の二人が全部言ってくれたので特に無いです
[Easy]
Hit Sound
01:30:245(1) 始点にfinish追加
[Normal]
Placement
00:17:388(5,6,1) Put these notes more symmterically, and the flow looks more nice.
Rhythm
01:21:245(4) It looks a bit difficult because of not 1/1 rhythm, so I suppose it would be better if you like.
Hit Sound
01:16:531(1) Prefer finish than whistle to follow the instrumental.
[Hard]
Placement
00:23:388(1) 前の三連スタックのオーバーラップが少し気になるので、ブランケット状に配置してみるのは?
01:13:745(2) スライダーの向きが次のnoteに対してやや不自然なので、以下のようにしてみては?
01:33:674(1) 強迫でfinishもついてるので、ここはジャンプさせた方が曲調に合ってると思います。前の部分で星形ジャンプかけてて、ここでスペーシング急に小さくするのはやや不自然に見えます。e.g.)
Rhythm
00:33:674(3) 途中でボーカル始まってるので、それを拾ってやったほうが今よりも違和感なく聞こえます。 e.g.)
00:47:338(3) ^
[Insane]
Placement
00:11:174(13,14,1) - (13,14)が直線になっており(1)への流れが少し妙なので、内側へ曲げるような形にすると今よりもいい感じになります。 e.g.)
00:16:531(1) 逆側に曲げたやった方が前のnoteから自然につながり、かつ次の(2)への流れも良いと思います。
00:21:245(7) ここも同様の理由で、前後のnoteの家回しを考えると向きを逆にするといいです。 
00:49:317(2,3) ここCTRL+Gしてみては?今の配置だと四角形っぽく回す形にしては、(4)から(5)へのジャンプで少し打ち回しが変わって少し妙なので、それならば星形等間隔でジャンプさせた方が読みやすいように思いました。
01:08:603(4) ここでNC入れてみては?01:07:531でNC入れてるのを見ると、2コンボの後に11コンボ続くのも少し見た目が悪いので、ボーカルが始まるここで一旦区切ったほうがいいです。
01:24:460(4) ここ×1.00になってますけど、次の(5,1)間や他のスペーシング見ると×1.10にするべきでは?
01:29:574(5) ブランケットがやや強制気味で次のnoteへの流れが悪いように見えるので、直線スライダーで置き換えてみては?また(8,1)でジャンプを設けると、強迫をフォロー出来ると思います。。e.g.)
Rhythm
00:04:317 ここにnote追加してみては?バックにインストとボーカルが聞こえて、次の00:07:745でnote入ってるので対称的にした方がいいです。

Good luck.
Melophobia

kajiyatta wrote:

[Hard]
Placement
00:23:388(1) 前の三連スタックのオーバーラップが少し気になるので、ブランケット状に配置してみるのは? わざと重ねてます、後続のスライダーの曲げ方的にも今のままの方が好きです
01:13:745(2) スライダーの向きが次のnoteに対してやや不自然なので、以下のようにしてみては? 個人的にそこまで違和感ない&次のNoteとの間に一拍置いてるので問題ないと思ってます 今の置き方は前のスライダーの角度と合わせてて個人的に綺麗だと思うので見た目的にも現状維持します
01:33:674(1) 強迫でfinishもついてるので、ここはジャンプさせた方が曲調に合ってると思います。前の部分で星形ジャンプかけてて、ここでスペーシング急に小さくするのはやや不自然に見えます。e.g.) 流れとは反対の方向にアンチジャンプを作っても強調はできるかなーと思ってこうしてます
Rhythm
00:33:674(3) 途中でボーカル始まってるので、それを拾ってやったほうが今よりも違和感なく聞こえます。 e.g.) 違和感あるかどうかはイマイチわからないんですがこのパートはボーカルが比較的少ないのでボーカル寄りに音取りすると違和感あるように感じたのもありバックグラウンドの音を重視しておいてます(00:27:674 (3,4) - とか顕著です)
00:47:338(3) ^
Modありがとう~
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