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M,0,52256,55980,360,293,460,293

1. That'd be a good idea to cut your mp3. You don't have to do it, but there're 15% of the mp3 which are unused. Don't make us download extra data, cut the mp3.
2. I'm sure that you can add some more combo colours. More colours will make your map look a bit more interesting for players, imo.
3. How about adding more tags? Your previous username, some of the main characters, name of the album, real name of the singer and so on... Such a nice SB is it, you should help us to find this map easier!

1. HP Drain 4 will fit here better, even though it's the easiest dff, there's no reason to keep it so low!
2. 00:08:394 - imo, it feels kinda weird when the slider starts in the middle of the vocals. To make it a bit more fitting, i recommend you to use something different, instead. (so, (2) will fit with the "kknooow~" in vocals.
   Note: 00:56:394 (1) - pretty much the same happens here. You're quite good at feeling the rhythm, so I'm sure that you'll quickly find a way to fix it!
3. 00:14:601 - you can drag the break here. It'll actually fit pretty well.
4. 00:16:256 -00:46:049 - so many overlaps in this part make the diff a bit messy. You could increase the DS to x0.9 to avoid ALL these overlaps. This little thing make your map look much more enjoyable!
5. 00:17:911 - try to make the tail of the slider less loud. It is kinda weird to hear that loud sound while there's NOTHING to follow in music.
6. 00:27:015 (4,1) - the transition between these objects isn't very clear. You can work a bit more in order to make a smoother flow here. hope you'll spot the difference
7. 00:32:808 (1) - since there's practically no beat on 00:33:636 - ou can convert this slider into something like this. It'll fit both with the lyrics and with the music
8. 00:46:049 - I'd move the previous spinner here and place a 3/1 slider on 00:44:394 - example. The break feels a bit strange here + the map is short and it's actually okay to have no breaks during the whole diff.
9. 00:51:636 - there's no way for you to IGNORE this awesome guitar sound there! Come on, you're creative, try to emphasize it! Even something as simple, as this would work rather good here.
10. 01:01:360 (3,2) - your SB is so pretty, this little overlap looks so messy here, don't spoil such a good map with this little mistake!
11. 01:08:394 - just place an 1/1 slider here and remove (5). So, you'll keep your rhythm more consistent and make the diff more enjoyable!
    Note: 01:12:532 - ahh, pretty much the same happens here. With a little change in your rhythm you'll make it consistent and perfectly fitting with the vocals! It's the easiest diff, using long sliders is quite natural!
    
    Pretty nice diff, but it can be improved more.

1. Looks like you're keeping the HP Drain lower on purpose. I don't really get why, there's no any reasons to do it!
   Note: I'd rather reduce the OD because your rhythm feel a bit choppy and may confuse some players.
2. 00:03:015 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - it's the SAME beat repeated 4 times. Since it's a repetivi part, try to make the pattern a bit repetitive here, as well.
3. 00:06:325 (4,1,2,3,4) - I do LOVE your creativity, but it's the ^ same pattern again. Try to keep the consistency here!
4. 00:18:325 (4) - maybe a new combo to warn us about the DS changes. It'll also fit with the vocals, anyway.
5. 00:21:222 (1,2) - DO NOT overmap. There's nothing really notabe here, so you shouldn't place any sliders here. It's a rhythm game, so we are supposed to follow the rhythm of the song!
6. 00:45:739 (4,5) - feels too hard. This diff is so relaxing and cheerful, try to replace it with a slider, if it's possible.
   Note: do the same for every 1/4 pattern in order to make the diff a bit easier. It may seem unimportant for you, but DT players will appreciate it!
7. 00:51:842 (3,4) - feels kinda out of it's placе, Even though it's a drop-off slider, it still feels kinda too had to do this jump. Try to make the DS lower, if it's possible!
   Note: 01:00:118 (3,4) - the same
8. 01:06:739 (2,3,4) - I don't want to annoy you, but this pattern is one more reason to lower your OD. 3/4 patterns are hard to play, and reducing the OD woud help us to pass this pattern.
   
   Nice diff. Though, there're some things that I'd like to see changed.

1. 00:15:015 - 00:15:429 - there're soe minor drum beats, if you want to make the diff a bit more challenging, you could map them. So, players will have no time to relax after the spinner!
2. 00:17:498 (3,4) - overmapping is not a way to go. Do not overmap.
3. 00:26:187 (1,2) - jumps should FIT with the music, and look neat. THis one is unfitting, though it looks cute. Try to avoid such things, they ruin the playability of your diff!
4. 00:55:360 (3,4) - as a player, I'd ask you not to use such stacks. they're quite hard to read and it can be easily unstacked!
   
   Overmapped patterns are really, really weird. Everything else is fine.

-Bakari- wrote:

Yo, thanks a lot for the request. Hope, I won't disappoint you
hiya bakarin

[General]

1. That'd be a good idea to cut your mp3. You don't have to do it, but there're 15% of the mp3 which are unused. Don't make us download extra data, cut the mp3. took from ranked map tho.. i'll see this later
2. I'm sure that you can add some more combo colours. More colours will make your map look a bit more interesting for players, imo. don't have any idea about the combo color (since the sb is black white grey so I don't want to use a lot of combo colors D:)
3. [b]How about adding more tags? Your previous username, some of the main characters, name of the album, real name of the singer and so on... Such a nice SB is it, you should help us to find this map easier!
   wth how can i forget to add ahahah xD

[Normal]

1. [b]HP Drain 4 will fit here better, even though it's the easiest dff, there's no reason to keep it so low! ok
2. 00:08:394 - imo, it feels kinda weird when the slider starts in the middle of the vocals. To make it a bit more fitting, i recommend you to use something different, instead. (so, (2) will fit with the "kknooow~" in vocals. i simply the pattern here so normal player will have some relax bfore spinner
   Note: 00:56:394 (1) - pretty much the same happens here. You're quite good at feeling the rhythm, so I'm sure that you'll quickly find a way to fix it!
3. 00:14:601 - you can drag the break here. It'll actually fit pretty well. ok
4. 00:16:256 -00:46:049 - so many overlaps in this part make the diff a bit messy. You could increase the DS to x0.9 to avoid ALL these overlaps. This little thing make your map look much more enjoyable! ok
5. 00:17:911 - try to make the tail of the slider less loud. It is kinda weird to hear that loud sound while there's NOTHING to follow in music. if you hear this clearly there's piano sound at here
6. 00:27:015 (4,1) - the transition between these objects isn't very clear. You can work a bit more in order to make a smoother flow here. hope you'll spot the difference ok
7. 00:32:808 (1) - since there's practically no beat on 00:33:636 - ou can convert this slider into something like this. It'll fit both with the lyrics and with the music ok
8. 00:46:049 - I'd move the previous spinner here and place a 3/1 slider on 00:44:394 - example. The break feels a bit strange here + the map is short and it's actually okay to have no breaks during the whole diff. i want to make this part a bit calm since its easiest diff
9. 00:51:636 - there's no way for you to IGNORE this awesome guitar sound there! Come on, you're creative, try to emphasize it! Even something as simple, as this would work rather good here. ok~
10. 01:01:360 (3,2) - your SB is so pretty, this little overlap looks so messy here, don't spoil such a good map with this little mistake!
11. 01:08:394 - just place an 1/1 slider here and remove (5). So, you'll keep your rhythm more consistent and make the diff more enjoyable! ok
    Note: 01:12:532 - ahh, pretty much the same happens here. With a little change in your rhythm you'll make it consistent and perfectly fitting with the vocals! It's the easiest diff, using long sliders is quite natural! ok~
    
    Pretty nice diff, but it can be improved more.

[Hard]

1. Looks like you're keeping the HP Drain lower on purpose. I don't really get why, there's no any reasons to do it!
   Note: I'd rather reduce the OD because your rhythm feel a bit choppy and may confuse some players. ok
2. 00:03:015 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - it's the SAME beat repeated 4 times. Since it's a repetivi part, try to make the pattern a bit repetitive here, as well. i want to keep current sorry ;;
3. 00:06:325 (4,1,2,3,4) - I do LOVE your creativity, but it's the ^ same pattern again. Try to keep the consistency here! D:
4. 00:18:325 (4) - maybe a new combo to warn us about the DS changes. It'll also fit with the vocals, anyway. ok
5. 00:21:222 (1,2) - DO NOT overmap. There's nothing really notabe here, so you shouldn't place any sliders here. It's a rhythm game, so we are supposed to follow the rhythm of the song! ok
6. 00:45:739 (4,5) - feels too hard. This diff is so relaxing and cheerful, try to replace it with a slider, if it's possible.
   Note: do the same for every 1/4 pattern in order to make the diff a bit easier. It may seem unimportant for you, but DT players will appreciate it! i'll think about this later since i can s this with dt lol D:
7. 00:51:842 (3,4) - feels kinda out of it's placе, Even though it's a drop-off slider, it still feels kinda too had to do this jump. Try to make the DS lower, if it's possible!
   Note: 01:00:118 (3,4) - the same though they're normal jumpp pattern, sorry keep current D:
8. 01:06:739 (2,3,4) - I don't want to annoy you, but this pattern is one more reason to lower your OD. 3/4 patterns are hard to play, and reducing the OD woud help us to pass this pattern. keep pattern reduced od
   
   Nice diff. Though, there're some things that I'd like to see changed.

[Insane]

1. 00:15:015 - 00:15:429 - there're soe minor drum beats, if you want to make the diff a bit more challenging, you could map them. So, players will have no time to relax after the spinner! nah i keep this part calm cause there's no sound at here ;;
2. 00:17:498 (3,4) - overmapping is not a way to go. Do not overmap. whops fixd
3. 00:26:187 (1,2) - jumps should FIT with the music, and look neat. THis one is unfitting, though it looks cute. Try to avoid such things, they ruin the playability of your diff! I want to keep jump pattern (also they have similar rhythm) D:
4. 00:55:360 (3,4) - as a player, I'd ask you not to use such stacks. they're quite hard to read and it can be easily unstacked!
   
   Overmapped patterns are really, really weird. Everything else is fine. some are fixed

A few serious things should be fixed, a few general improvements can be done. It's not a bad diff.

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Best of luck!

1. This SB is so awesome xD I don't actually know anything about storyboards, but here are some things I think are incorrect in lyrics, and some other minor things..
2. I think the second line (two.png) should be "IF YOU PUT YOUR TRUST IN ME"
3. I think four.png should say "OH, YOU ARE ALL I EVER NEED"
4. I think 13.png should say "I WISH I COULD SEE YOUR INSIDES"
5. Maybe you need a comma after "love" like: "MY LOVE, YOU'VE GOT TO FEEL IT" (because you used a comma in one.png) but it's not necessary since it might ruin the effect of your red text.. so i guess it's ok
6. 16.png should say "YOU KNOW WHAT OUR LIVES WOULD BE"
7. 17.png should probably be "OH, YOU ARE THE ONE I BELIEVE" since "you" and "are" are on separate syllables, I don't think they used the contraction "you're"
8. Maybe me.png should appear at 01:08:187 - to match when it actually is heard in vocals
9. I think you should make love-u.png and noob.png (<-lol) stay for a longer time, because most players have opaque spinners, and these two sb elements fade out too soon after the spinner so the player can't read it.. ;w;

1. 01:00:118 (2,3) - Make the distance 0.8x?
2. 01:06:739 (2,3) - ^
3. It's probably not noticeable in game, but I think it would be better to make 01:10:877 (4) - stack with 01:08:808 (5) - You can also blanket 01:09:222 (1,4) - For example: http://puu.sh/6OBH5.jpg To do this, stack head of 01:10:877 (4) - with 01:08:808 (5) - and adjust the other points to blanket (1). move 01:10:463 (3,5) - to x:340|y:176, and move 01:12:532 (1) - to x:264|y:120
4. 01:12:532 (1) - I think you can make the shape nicer.. http://puu.sh/6OCqs.jpg
5. 00:04:670 (3) - Finish on head to match Insane?
6. 00:19:567 (1) - I think whistle on head would be good here.
7. 00:29:084 (2) - Drum whistle on end to match other diffs.
8. I think you should switch the NC around between 00:04:670 (3,1) - and remove NC from 00:03:429 (1) - That way, the combos will match the musical phrasing.
9. 00:27:015 (4,1) - Swap NC and add NC at 00:30:325 (4) -

1. 01:17:705 (2) - I think this slider doesn't fit the rhythm of the music well. I can't hear any important sound in the music on the blue tick, and I think you should map something to the red tick because there is electric bass sound there.
2. 00:04:670 (1) - Missing hitsound on head? I suggest finish to match Insane.

1. 00:19:567 (1) - Add whistle on head?
2. 00:03:842 (5) - Add NC? it would match with the rest of this section and also with Hard diff.
3. 01:07:567 (7,1) - Swap NC between these two? I think it matches the phrase better.

1. That'd be a good idea to cut your mp3, I agree with bakari, anyways take if you want I did it for you:
   http://puu.sh/6QhYI.mp3
2. Unused Image:
   sb\black.jpg
3. Turn off widescreen support since all your sb elements are 4:3
4. also resize your BG img actually is 16:9 and your sb elements are 4:3

1. 00:01:773 (2,3) - QAQ this blanket can be better, also try to stack 00:03:015 (1) - with the tail of 00:01:773 (2) -
2. 00:04:256 (6,1) - and 00:05:084 (2,3) - 00:07:980 (1,2) - can be better blanket just use approach circle to improve them
3. 00:07:567 (2,3) - should be a 1/4 stream here, since is an Insane diff will make your map more interesting IMO
4. 00:12:118 (1,2,3,4,5) - try to use the same distance between the jumps, for better playability
5. 00:13:049 reduce the volume of the spinner at least to 40% or 30%
6. 00:17:498 (3) - nothing in the music here QAQ, I know, you add it for keep this part less empty but is better for me if you add a repeat in 00:16:256 (1) - and remove 00:16:877 (2,3) - since they doesn't fit the song :/, my suggestion:
   
   SPOILER

   
7. 00:23:498 (2) - nothing in the music here, similar as above better remove the slider and add a repeat in 00:22:877 (1) -
8. 00:25:153 (2) - here too, nothing in the music there, but in 00:25:360 try this instead:
   
   SPOILER

   
9. 00:25:980 (4) - here too, no sound there imo is better to make a 1/2 slider with 00:25:773 (3) -
10. 00:26:187 from here to here 00:28:670 sound really overmapped since the sliders and beats doesn't follow the music ( that part is kinda hard to map lol) but my suggestion:
    
    SPOILER

    
11. 00:30:118 (2) - slider start is overmapped, try this rhythm instead:
    
    SPOILER

    
12. 00:34:463 (5) - missing NC following your every 1 stanza pattern
13. 00:37:773 (5) - ^
14. 00:47:705 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - not a fan of this flow since the connection between every 1/4 jump is not natural to play, my suggestion:
    
    SPOILER

    
15. 00:50:394 (4,5) - mmm sliders usually start with the strong beat, your slider will sound better if you move it to 00:50:601
    
    SPOILER

    
16. 00:53:291 (3,4) - same as above
17. 00:12:946 (5) - add NC for consistency with 01:19:153 (1) -
18. 01:03:429 (3) - missing NC? like you did on 00:10:463 (1) -

1. OD +1 (6) for balance the spread, since you use 8 in the insane actually the jump in the spread is too big.
2. 00:07:670 add a circle, there is an important drum sound
3. 00:09:636 (4) - missing NC following your pattern
4. 00:12:946 (4) - ^
5. 00:19:360 (2) - nothing in the music here, remove this circle for better rhythm
6. 00:23:498 (2) - same as insane
7. 00:30:739 (3) - remove this beat, there is not music
8. 00:25:153 (2) - same as insane
9. 00:26:187 (1) - same as insane
10. 00:30:118 ^
11. 00:38:601 (4,1) - mmm sliders usually start with the strong beats, try this:
    
    SPOILER

    
12. 00:43:980 (4,1) - same as above
13. 00:45:222 (3,4,5) - sorry for nazi but stack this properly
14. 00:49:360 (2) - missing NC, kiai start here :p
15. 00:55:773 (4,1) - should be a jump here since the music in 00:55:980 (1) - is really powerful, also feel weird how you reduce the spacing after the previous jumps.
16. 00:57:015 (3,4) - similar as 00:38:601
17. 01:03:636 (3,4) - ^
18. 01:09:118 (4) - this circle feel overmapped, consider to remove it

1. 00:02:808 (3,1) - sliders usually start with the strong beats, try this:
   
   SPOILER

   
2. 00:12:946 add a break like you did in 00:46:256 (that drain zone can kill new players D:)
3. 00:16:256 (1) - remove the repeat since nothing in the music at 00:17:911
4. 00:27:015 nothing in the music in the slider start, just add a circle in 00:27:429
5. 00:30:325 (3) - this slider doesn't follow the music properly. try to improve the rhythm start a slider in 00:29:498 and end it in 00:30:325 then add a circle in 00:31:153 like:
   
   SPOILER

   
6. 00:53:084 (2) - this slider should end in 00:53:498 with vocals and music, since nothing in 00:53:705
7. 00:56:394 (1) - ^
8. 00:59:291 (1) - ^
9. 01:00:118 (2,3) - Fix the distance
10. 01:06:739 (2,3) - same as above
11. 01:18:325 (3,1) - try this for better rhythm:
    
    SPOILER

    

1. wrong source? "ef: A Tale of Melodies" here is the right one i think
2. add "ef: A Fairy Tale of the Two" to the tags since this anime is adaptation from manga and VN that i mentioned before
3. there is two versions of this track, english version 1 and version 2, i don't know which version of this track, it'd be better you search which version is it and add on the tags maybe
4. i think TENMON should be in artist instead of tag along with ELISA. Wikipedia and myanimelist said same too.
5. Shaft on the tags
6. nice SB i can't mod SB lel
7. Outro is just too long, consider cut last part, like some previous modders said

1. aku masih belum begitu paham pake sampleset, seringan pake greenline, jadi kalo ada hitsound modku yang nonsense ignore aja
2. 00:03:636 (4) - Berasa akward banget, deketin dikit sama (2), maybe 156|124 lebih berasa bagus
3. 00:05:498 (3,4,5) - http://puu.sh/79JpC.jpg flownya berasa lebih enak, coba deh
4. 00:10:463 (1,2,3,4) - ctrl + G jump nya lebih enakan imo
5. 00:29:498 (1) - drum whistle ga cocok imo, soft whistle dong.
6. 00:48:118 (1,2,3,4) - ctrl + G please, flow streamnya lebih bagus dari yang sebelumnya imo, selain itu sudden change ke 5x DS keknya berlebihan hhe.
7. 00:55:153 (1,2,3) - ngga nyangka kalo ini 1/4, di kasih overlap lebih dikit lagi imo
   01:08:394 (2,3,4) - ^
8. 00:55:567 (4) - http://puu.sh/79K8h.jpg ngikutin suara gitar, daripada sebelunya berasa kayak overmap di (5)
9. 01:03:429 (3,4,5,6) - Ctrl + G juga, jumpnya lebih enak
10. 01:13:360 (3,4) - ctrl + G juga, anti jump berasa anti-klimaks sama musiknya
11. 00:07:567 (2,3,4,5,1) - agak geser dikit, empasize NC kah? tapi berasa lebih artistik kalo dibikin segaris

1. OD 6 biar gap insane sama hard ga terlalu jauh, kalo nggak turunin OD insane nya jadi OD 7
2. 00:03:015 (1,2,3,4) - personal preference sih, nggak begitu suka stacked doubles pattern kayak gitu, kek gini gimana? http://puu.sh/79O8Y.jpg
3. 00:41:911 - add note here because of drum sound
4. 01:06:739 (2,3,4) - kasih spacing yang lebih gedean, 1.5/1.7. soalnya ada pindahan polarity dari white ke blue tick dan sebaliknya, gampang bacanya kalo dikasih jump imo
5. 00:19:360 (2) - Nazi 84 | 340
6. 00:32:601 - add note here? terdengar suara gitar yang lemah namun syahdu, lel
7. 00:58:256 (2) - jumpnya keajauhan buat hard, stack sama (1)
8. 01:17:084 (3,4,1) - sounds overmap, ganti sama slider pls
9. 00:46:049 - consider map this part 10nya, drumnya terlalu banyak yang nggak cocok dikasih spinner
10. 00:55:360 (2,4) - finish, bagusan dikasih cymbal
11. 00:55:980 (1) - kalo ini di remove maybe

1. 00:00:946 - add note here, berasa kosong kalo suara bass gede gitu ga dikasih note (buat others diff juga sih)
2. check aibat, ada beberapa spacing yang inconsistent
3. 01:08:601 - tambah note disini, ada suara gitar nan syahdu, bingungin imo kalo cuma ada note di 01:08:808 (5) doang, slider sampe (5) juga oke
4. 00:22:049 (2,1) - avoid overlap dongs.
5. 00:16:256 - 0,75x SV pace-nya kerasa beda banget buat easiest diff, naikin dikit ato jadiin 1 aja dong, toh juga easiest diff
6. 01:07:153 (3,4) - overlap model gini juga kadang susah di hit buat newcomer

RatedNC17 wrote:

Hello~ (from your queue) Hi~

Not sure if the song title should include (TV Edit Ver.) Unless the extension is part of the song's original title. If you map is substantially shorter than the length of the track, you can add (Cut ver.) to the title.
see this t/87323&start=0
I'm following the mp3 file name here~ (im sure its official since the mp3 from the album)

[Normal]
00:02:808 (3) - this is pretty nazi but just make this a straight slider or a tilt slider. first get rid of that last point on the slider (click then ctrl right click the point) and lengthen it and make it tilt a bit to the left. Like this

SPOILER

sure
00:16:256 - reduce volume here to 35%. it's a bit too loud and soft hitsounds take away from the music a bit. ok
00:29:498 (1) - the drum whistle here does not really fit here. you should replace with a soft whistle it's fit tho
00:59:291 (1) - this would be a perfect time to use the normal hitsound on the slider tick to keep rhythm going keep current sorry
01:07:153 (3) - add a clap at slider start too loud imo

[Hard]
00:12:325 (3) - nc here. from what i can see is that in the beginning you used the purple color for the instrumentals and green for vocals and since your still following vocals here it would be better to take the nc ok
00:16:256 - that volume suggestion applies here ok
00:29:498 (1) - the soft whistle suggestion here too ok

[Insane]
00:07:980 (1) - the placement of this slider being a bit to the left of the other previous notes looks a bit unappealing. how about moving it to x:288 y:360
00:16:256 - volume suggestion here ok
00:29:498 (1) - soft hit whistle here

Mei wrote:

hi this is for m4m
nice choice! I am a fan of ef

[Insane]

1. 00:07:567 (2,3,4,5) - move i grid left ok
   
2. 00:16:049 add a note here
   
3. 00:17:498 (3) - this note does not help on rythmn but kinda mislead me. I advice you to remove it
   
4. 00:20:187 (2) - move to x436 y128 is better for me
   
5. 00:27:429 (3,1) - this part is kind strange, how about this
   
   Picture

   
6. 00:46:360 (3,2) - i suggest you remove this 2 , and make some jump for this part
   
7. 00:48:015 (4,4) - remove this 2 notes, i am sure this is the correct way
   
8. 00:50:808 (5,2) - there's overlap
   
9. 00:52:463 (6,1) - swap NC ok
   
10. 00:53:084 (2,3) - this tythmn is better
    
11. 00:54:739 (2,1) - there should be a jump between this two but there isn's. maybe ctrl +g for 00:55:153 (1,2,3) -
    
12. 00:59:291 (1,2,3) - this rythmn is better
    
    Picture

    

[hard]

1. 00:04:256 (2,1) - use 1.1 ds ok
   
2. 00:05:498 (2,3) - try this
   
   Picture

   
   prefer mine sorry
3. 00:07:153 (1,2,3,4,5) - try this
   
   Picture

   
   following drum n guitar here
   
4. 00:08:808 (2,3) - same as 00:05:498 (2,3)
   nope sorry
5. 00:10:463 (3,4) - kee p it same with 00:09:636 (1,2) -
   no sorry
6. 00:17:084 (3) - remove this note
   ok
7. 00:58:463 (3,1) - cuz there's a jump I suggest you to swap NC
   i want to keep nc pattern here
8. 01:05:911 (1,2) - swap NC same as above

NM is fine
and OD8 is kind high for this insane, i suggest you to reduce 1 od for each diff.
Good luck

00:33:636 (3,4,5,6,7) - i know this is an insane but this part feels over-mapped and does not correlate with the music.

Thats about it nice storyboard by the way