1. 01:01:099 (387,388,389,390) - To me, I think kkddd or kkddk fits better here. That noise just sticks out so much that it feels weird leaving it alone.
   
2. 01:06:125 (424,425,426,427) - ^
   
3. 01:16:177 (492,493,494) - Same with this part, but since you started your variety here, maybe ddddk or ddkkk instead.
   
4. 01:58:115 - 01:59:214 - Why not continue what you did before at 01:53:089 - 01:54:188 - but with k's instead?
   
5. 02:03:141 - 02:04:240 - Try using d k - d k - d k instead here, vary it from the previous part.
   
6. 02:08:167 - 02:09:267 - Switch this around and have it k d - k d - k d to make it the opposite.
   
7. 03:00:078 (1135) - This note will catch people offguard imo. Instead, make this a k and maybe change 03:00:235 (1137) - into a d.
   
8. 03:05:104 (1178) - ^
9. 03:11:937 - As I've stated at the beginning, but since this is less intense, try using ddd d at 03:11:937 - 03:12:251.

Love wrote:

Well, lets get this rolling.

Suggestion.
Highly Suggested.
Strongly Suggested.

[Oni]

1. 01:01:099 (387,388,389,390) - To me, I think kkddd or kkddk fits better here. That noise just sticks out so much that it feels weird leaving it alone. Fixed to kkddd
   
2. 01:06:125 (424,425,426,427) - ^ Fixed ^
   
3. 01:16:177 (492,493,494) - Same with this part, but since you started your variety here, maybe ddddk or ddkkk instead. Fixed to ddddk
   
4. 01:58:115 - 01:59:214 - Why not continue what you did before at 01:53:089 - 01:54:188 - but with k's instead? Yeah, I was unsure about doing it with k's but excluding the same rhythm pattern made it feel empty. Fixed.
   
5. 02:03:141 - 02:04:240 - Try using d k - d k - d k instead here, vary it from the previous part. Nah, I'd like to keep these the same color because the pitch is really similar on all these notes.
   
6. 02:08:167 - 02:09:267 - Switch this around and have it k d - k d - k d to make it the opposite. I only did kats for the same reason as above, but fixed sorta.
   
7. 03:00:078 (1135) - This note will catch people offguard imo. Instead, make this a k and maybe change 03:00:235 (1137) - into a d. Sure, this plays way more fluently and it sounds nice.
   
8. 03:05:104 (1178) - ^ Fixed this too.
9. 03:11:937 - As I've stated at the beginning, but since this is less intense, try using ddd d at 03:11:937 - 03:12:251. Fixed

I have nothing else to point out, very well polished.

-GN wrote:

jesus this needs to be ranked like right now

OnosakiHito wrote:

05:01:413 - Maybe it is better to move the kiai at 05:01:099 . Finding the right start is tricky here, so following the very first note might be a good solution at this point.

End is monotonically, huh?

That's all. Waiting for you.

TKS wrote:

awesome