sasakure.UK - Atropos (Short Edit) [OsuMania] · forum

WhiteAries

Joined April 2013

Topic Starter

WhiteAries 2013-12-02T16:29:55+00:00

This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2014年1月21日 at 22:56:39

Artist: sasakure.UK
Title: Atropos (Short Edit)
Source: beatmania IIDX
Tags: beatmania, Sasakure.UK, SPADA, IIDX, AtröpΦs, NEUTRONIKA
BPM: 182
Filesize: 12758kb
Play Time: 01:53
Difficulties Available:

Another - 7Key (5 stars, 1243 notes)
Hyper - 7Key (3.14 stars, 679 notes)
Normal - 7Key (1.62 stars, 346 notes)

Download: sasakure.UK - Atropos (Short Edit)
Download: sasakure.UK - Atropos (Short Edit) (no video)
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
---------------
My first rank map! :3

thanks to all!

Normal - 4
Hyper - 8
Another - 12

Last edited by WhiteAries 2014-01-21T14:08:49+00:00, edited 15 times in total.

[Shi-Ra]

458 posts

Joined October 2012

[Shi-Ra] 2013-12-22T08:10:45+00:00

Hi, there are mods for your mania chart ^w^

Shi-Ra's Patterns Review:
(notice that columns are following like 0 1 2 3 4 5 6)
Normal

Inside :3

00:13:717 (13717|5) - I suggest you to move this note to 4th column, it's more suitable transition with your previous and next going patterns here, so perform some alternation

00:30:036 (30036|0) - there's no need to place two notes in one column, it's not comfortable for your pattern here coz there are two different sounds, move this note to 2nd column to make your pattern more balanced

Here 00:30:200 - I suggest you to use this pattern, it makes your pattern more hand-balanced between 0>2nd>4th>6th columns there

00:33:497 (33497|6) - move this LN to 3rd column, centre column here is more suitable for it coz you've leave it empty for a long time and this LN position is more comfortable with your previous LN

From 00:33:992 to 00:41:574 - this part looks too monotonously, so I suggest you to re-arrange your pattern here and switch beat columns every two tacts, make it more different

00:45:530 (45530|4) - move this note to 6th column, current position is ruin your previous pattern, end it correctly

01:04:981 (64981|4,65805|3) - I suggest you to open these chords and switch these notes to 3rd and 4th columns accordingly, this pattern will be more suitable here and more comfortable to play between your previous and next going parts

01:15:036 (75036|6) - move this note to 2nd column and make here symmetrical balanced pattern, it's more suitable here, now it looks awkward and uncomfortable to play

01:17:343 (77343|1) - there's no suitable repeating sound to place two notes in same column so I recommend you to move this note to 3rd column and make comfortable stair pattern here

01:41:574 (101574|0) - I suggest you to move this note to 2nd column, same reason as above ^

Hyper

Inside :3

00:14:871 (14871|5,15200|6) - move these notes to 4th and 5th columns accordingly to make alternation here correctly, now these notes are too far from basic pattern

From 00:15:530 - I suggest you to re-arrange pattern in this way to perform more comfortable transition between all notes according to the song coz there's no repeating notes

00:19:157 (19157|6) - move this note to 1st column, it'll be more suitable with your previous and next going pattern here, now it's too far from other notes and it's ruin your pattern here

00:19:981 (19981|5) - and this one I recommend you to move to 2nd column and perform good ending for your previous pattern (it's good for your next going triplet too)

From 00:36:464 to 00:38:607 - I suggest you to mirror this pattern and make some difference between two previous and two next going tacts, without that it looks too monotonously here

00:50:475 (50475|3) - move to 2nd column, it's better transition before your chord here coz there are two different sounds, not same

00:54:596 (54596|4) - open this chord and perform more balanced pattern here, move this note to 3rd column coz there are three notes in a row in 4th column already

01:28:717 (88717|5,88882|5,89706|5,89871|5) - move these notes to 4th column and make some difference in this pattern, tapping same notes for ending part looks boring~

01:49:321 - you can add one more note to 4th column here according to the beat, check that

Another

Inside :3

00:03:003 (3003|2,3003|4,3003|6) - move these notes to 1st>3rd>5th columns accordingly, it's more comfortable chord transition and you can fill mostly all columns with such note placement, I suggest you to use this rule for next going chords too

From 00:14:047 to 00:21:959 - I highly recommend you to switch your beat column here every tact or two tacts, this part looks boring when you place all beat notes into 0,1st and 2nd columns, so re-arrange that and make it more comfortable to play

00:21:959 (21959|3,21959|1,21959|0,21959|2) - four note chord here is overmapping coz there's no four different sounds to accent it, I suggest you to delete at least one note here

00:48:497 (48497|3) - I suggest you to open this chord and move this note to 2nd column, then move 00:48:827 (48827|6) - this note to 3rd column and make your pattern here more hand-balanced and comfortable to play

00:50:475 (50475|1,50640|2) - move these notes to 2nd and 3rd columns accordingly and perform double stairs, they'll be better here rather than double note, check that

01:13:717 - here goes too long trill, it's playable but uncomfortable coz of it's length, I suggest you to use alternation here or simply switch second column to 3rd in second tact here, it'll be little more comfortable

01:37:124 (97124|2,97288|1) - move these notes to 3rd and 2nd columns accordingly to make more suitable transition between your previous and next going pattern here coz now it's uncomfortable

I've learned some new patterns from this chart, good job ^w^
Good luck :3/

Sorarei

1,420 posts

Joined August 2012

Sorarei 2013-12-23T08:21:50+00:00

[General]
Background image larger than 1366 x 768 suggest to change 1024 x 768

[Normal]
Balancing note needed

SPOILER

01:15:036 (75036|6) - remove, a relax music didn't need this

WhiteAries

87 posts

Joined April 2013

Topic Starter

WhiteAries 2013-12-26T11:16:47+00:00

[Shi-Ra] wrote:
Hi, there are mods for your mania chart ^w^

Shi-Ra's Patterns Review:
(notice that columns are following like 0 1 2 3 4 5 6)
Normal
Inside :3
00:13:717 (13717|5) - I suggest you to move this note to 4th column, it's more suitable transition with your previous and next going patterns here, so perform some alternation

00:30:036 (30036|0) - there's no need to place two notes in one column, it's not comfortable for your pattern here coz there are two different sounds, move this note to 2nd column to make your pattern more balanced

Here 00:30:200 - I suggest you to use this pattern, it makes your pattern more hand-balanced between 0>2nd>4th>6th columns there

00:33:497 (33497|6) - move this LN to 3rd column, centre column here is more suitable for it coz you've leave it empty for a long time and this LN position is more comfortable with your previous LN

From 00:33:992 to 00:41:574 - this part looks too monotonously, so I suggest you to re-arrange your pattern here and switch beat columns every two tacts, make it more different

00:45:530 (45530|4) - move this note to 6th column, current position is ruin your previous pattern, end it correctly

01:04:981 (64981|4,65805|3) - I suggest you to open these chords and switch these notes to 3rd and 4th columns accordingly, this pattern will be more suitable here and more comfortable to play between your previous and next going parts

01:15:036 (75036|6) - move this note to 2nd column and make here symmetrical balanced pattern, it's more suitable here, now it looks awkward and uncomfortable to play

01:17:343 (77343|1) - there's no suitable repeating sound to place two notes in same column so I recommend you to move this note to 3rd column and make comfortable stair pattern here

01:41:574 (101574|0) - I suggest you to move this note to 2nd column, same reason as above ^

Hyper
Inside :3
00:14:871 (14871|5,15200|6) - move these notes to 4th and 5th columns accordingly to make alternation here correctly, now these notes are too far from basic pattern

From 00:15:530 - I suggest you to re-arrange pattern in this way to perform more comfortable transition between all notes according to the song coz there's no repeating notes

00:19:157 (19157|6) - move this note to 1st column, it'll be more suitable with your previous and next going pattern here, now it's too far from other notes and it's ruin your pattern here

00:19:981 (19981|5) - and this one I recommend you to move to 2nd column and perform good ending for your previous pattern (it's good for your next going triplet too)

From 00:36:464 to 00:38:607 - I suggest you to mirror this pattern and make some difference between two previous and two next going tacts, without that it looks too monotonously here

00:50:475 (50475|3) - move to 2nd column, it's better transition before your chord here coz there are two different sounds, not same

00:54:596 (54596|4) - open this chord and perform more balanced pattern here, move this note to 3rd column coz there are three notes in a row in 4th column already

01:28:717 (88717|5,88882|5,89706|5,89871|5) - move these notes to 4th column and make some difference in this pattern, tapping same notes for ending part looks boring~

01:49:321 - you can add one more note to 4th column here according to the beat, check that

Another
Inside :3
00:03:003 (3003|2,3003|4,3003|6) - move these notes to 1st>3rd>5th columns accordingly, it's more comfortable chord transition and you can fill mostly all columns with such note placement, I suggest you to use this rule for next going chords too

From 00:14:047 to 00:21:959 - I highly recommend you to switch your beat column here every tact or two tacts, this part looks boring when you place all beat notes into 0,1st and 2nd columns, so re-arrange that and make it more comfortable to play

00:21:959 (21959|3,21959|1,21959|0,21959|2) - four note chord here is overmapping coz there's no four different sounds to accent it, I suggest you to delete at least one note here

00:48:497 (48497|3) - I suggest you to open this chord and move this note to 2nd column, then move 00:48:827 (48827|6) - this note to 3rd column and make your pattern here more hand-balanced and comfortable to play

00:50:475 (50475|1,50640|2) - move these notes to 2nd and 3rd columns accordingly and perform double stairs, they'll be better here rather than double note, check that

01:13:717 - here goes too long trill, it's playable but uncomfortable coz of it's length, I suggest you to use alternation here or simply switch second column to 3rd in second tact here, it'll be little more comfortable

01:37:124 (97124|2,97288|1) - move these notes to 3rd and 2nd columns accordingly to make more suitable transition between your previous and next going pattern here coz now it's uncomfortable

I've learned some new patterns from this chart, good job ^w^
Good luck :3/

Reikosaka wrote:
[General]
Background image larger than 1366 x 768 suggest to change 1024 x 768

[Normal]
Balancing note needed
SPOILER
00:04:321 (4321|5) - move to 2nd
00:08:277 (8277|5) - move to 2nd
00:30:036 (30036|0) - move to 3rd
00:50:310 (50310|3) - move to 2nd
00:51:299 (51299|3) - move to 1st
00:52:288 (52288|2) - move to 2nd
00:53:277 (53277|2) - move to 7th
00:54:266 (54266|3,55255|3) - move to 2nd
00:56:244 (56244|2,57233|2) - move to 7th
01:08:442 (68442|2) - move to 2nd
01:09:761 (69761|2) - move to 6th
01:10:420 (70420|4) - move to 2nd
01:20:310 (80310|2) - move to 1st
01:28:058 (88058|5) - move to 2nd
01:15:036 (75036|6) - remove, a relax music didn't need this

[Hyper] HP -1 OD -1
00:21:794 (21794|4) - move to 7th
00:34:651 (34651|6,35640|6) - move to 6th
00:36:794 (36794|6,37783|6) - move to 6th
00:39:432 (39432|4,40421|4) - move to 6th
00:41:739 - Try this Click me!
01:03:744 (63744|6) - move to 3rd
01:09:019 (69019|6) - move to 2nd
01:15:613 (75613|6) - move to 4th
01:19:321 (79321|4) - move to 1st

[Another] OD -1
00:12:728 - to 00:21:794 - you need to place 4th column a.k.a center note for balancing note

All fixed! :3
sorry for late check and delay kudosu! ><

Evening

2,464 posts

Joined December 2012

Evening 2013-12-27T05:29:02+00:00

From Zenx' Mod Queue! o/

Timing Check

Offset

No Problems

BPM

No Problems

Another

Note Placement

00:19:816 (19816|6,19898|5,19981|4) - I assume you are mapping for the high-pitched sound here, there should be 5 notes here on 1/8s
00:20:228 (20228|4,20310|5,20393|6) - ^
00:31:189 (31189|4,31272|3,31354|4,31437|1,31519|4,31602|5,31684|2,31766|6) - ^, add 1/8 notes in between these if you are mapping for the high-pitched sound
00:31:849 - Missing note her for the high-pitched sound

01:32:755 - Missing note here?

01:32:838 to 01:33:497 make a 1/8 stream instead

Overmapping

01:36:794 (96794|2,96794|5) - No sound here

Note Count

Awkward note count overall, some sounds have too much notes for emphasis, some sounds have too less
I'm just going to list some examples, you can fix rest of them your own o/

Too less notes:
00:33:827 (33827|0) - One note isn't enough to emphasize the loud sound on 00:33:827 , I suggest adding 2 notes to it since it is louder than 00:33:744 (33744|4,33744|1) -
00:50:640 (50640|6,50640|3) - Too less emphasis, add 1 note so that it seems louder than 00:50:475 (50475|2,50475|5) -
00:56:574 (56574|6) - Too less for the kick here

Too much notes:
01:42:069 (102069|5) - Don't use 2 notes for this soft hat, it has too much emphasis on it
01:11:574 (71574|6,71574|5,71574|1) - Too much emphasis here, it sounds as loud as 01:11:409 (71409|4,71409|2) - , therefore there should be only 2 notes
01:24:349 (84349|3,84349|4,84514|3,84514|4,84679|4,84679|3,84843|3,84843|4) - Good pattern here, but the imbalance with 01:24:266 (84266|1,84431|1,84596|1,84761|1) - is a bit too much, they are of the same sound after all, I suggest turning those into one note "chords"
01:34:898 (94898|2,94898|1,95063|2,95063|1,95228|1,95228|2) - ^

Hit-Sound Check

No Problems for this, however I suggest you to use some inheriting points to lower the volume at some points

SV Check

None? - Add some if you want o_o

Kiai Time Check

No Problems

General

Ranking Criteria Check

No Problems

AiMod

Background image is larger than 1366*768
Resized it for you - https://www.dropbox.com/s/vhdens6kueclmuh/bg.jpg

Title Check

No Problems

Pattern Check

Great patterns, however, at some points, the left hand seems to be doing more work than the right - 00:16:684
This might be biased to the left handers 00:32:508 (32508|0,32591|1,32673|0,32755|1,32838|0,32920|1,33003|0,33085|1) - since right handers will find it hard to trill with the ring and index
Otherwise, smooth patterns for both hands o/

7K Hyper:

00:25:585 (25585|4) - Move down 1/2 and extend by 1/2 - The low pitched piano starts here
00:24:102 (24102|2) - Extend by 1/2 - ^
00:29:376 (29376|4) - Extend by 1 - ^
... and so on, some sliders don't make sense unless you map it to a sound that drags on, please fix this

00:44:294 - Might want to add one note on the 1st column from the left

01:09:102 (69102|5) - Move to the last column from the left, the pattern on the right hand may be hard for some players to read

Avoid using these patterns 01:36:629 (96629|5,96711|6,96794|5) - for either side of the playfield, it is hard for advanced players to trill

01:52:288 (112288|5,112398|4,112508|3,112618|2,112728|1,112838|0) - I suggest flipping this, the piano pitch goes down, so your notes must go right to left for pitch relevancy

7K Normal:

01:52:288 (112288|5,112398|4,112508|3,112618|2,112728|1,112838|0) - Pattern here is too hard for Normal players, avoid using hammers with chords

No other problems o/

Good luck!

Hanyuu

2,223 posts

Joined February 2009

Hanyuu 2013-12-28T10:05:26+00:00

Another was better at level 12. This level 11 now looks a bit more as it was just made easier because the modder complained. I liked the previous version more, wish i didnt update it

richardfeder

1,056 posts

Joined March 2013

richardfeder 2013-12-28T12:00:14+00:00

Hanyuu wrote:
Another was better at level 12. This level 11 now looks a bit more as it was just made easier because the modder complained. I liked the previous version more, wish i didnt update it

www I am glad that I didn't update(/run

WhiteAries

87 posts

Joined April 2013

Topic Starter

WhiteAries 2013-12-29T02:27:23+00:00

Some remake&return pattern in Another

Faust

osu! Alumni

4,783 posts

Joined January 2009

Faust 2013-12-29T02:36:10+00:00

There's no capitalization for the 's' and neither is there an 'IIDX ver' as part of the song title either.

"sasakure.UK - Atropos (Short Edit)" is the official track listing on the Original Soundtrack.

You could add 'NEUTRONIKA' in tags. Source is just 'beatmania IIDX' as well.

WhiteAries

87 posts

Joined April 2013

Topic Starter

WhiteAries 2013-12-29T02:42:45+00:00

Faust wrote:
There's no capitalization for the 's' and neither is there an 'IIDX ver' as part of the song title either.

"sasakure.UK - Atropos (Short Edit)" is the official track listing on the Original Soundtrack.

You could add 'NEUTRONIKA' in tags. Source is just 'beatmania IIDX' as well.

Fixed! thanks :3

Faust

osu! Alumni

4,783 posts

Joined January 2009

Faust 2013-12-29T02:45:14+00:00

You've yet to make most of the changes though. Someone is bound to repeat what I've mentioned at a later time, in any case.

Rumia-

2,513 posts

Joined July 2012

Rumia- 2013-12-29T03:54:35+00:00

just checking 1 diff for now , i'll do the other diff later ;w;
[Another]
00:08:113 - add note , balancing the dense, 1 is enough
00:08:772 = 00:03:497 (3497|0,3497|2,3497|4) -
00:09:761 - add here on 1st collumn, there's another sound . like crash or something
00:25:338 - add
00:25:338 - add
00:27:893 - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1208861 or
http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1208863
00:28:552 - add 1 more note
00:29:871 - add 1 note at 7?
00:30:613 - add here , there is sound
00:31:025 - ^
00:31:684 - add note or maybe (1/6?) not sure lol.
00:32:261 - add notes
00:32:426 - ^
00:37:371 (37371|6) - move to 6
add notes for better density
00:34:157 - 1st collumn
00:34:816 - 3rd
00:35:475 - (at 3rd maybe)
00:36:464 - 4 and 7
00:36:794 - 2
00:37:453 - at 7
00:39:102 - at 1

00:48:003 (48003|0) - move to 6 maybe?
01:06:299 - this should have 2 note for piano chord
01:11:739 - hissu sound xd
01:17:096 - add
01:18:580 - add
01:18:744 - add
01:22:371 - add
01:22:783 (82783|4) - move to 7 , i heard the piano repeats
01:22:618 (82618|6) - move to 1 in my opinion
01:23:854 - add
01:24:019 - add
01:30:860 - add at 5?
01:31:354 - add
01:49:321 - uh dun ignore the drum ;_;
01:50:970 - ^

imariL

370 posts

Joined February 2011

imariL 2014-01-02T21:30:13+00:00

Column 0 1 2 3 4 5 6

[Normal]

HP -1 OD -1

00:22:618 (22618|5,22948|5) - 4번줄로 이동
00:25:420 (25420|1,25585|5) - Ctrl+H
00:27:893 (27893|1) - 일반노트로 바꾼 뒤 Ctrl+H
00:28:058 - 박자가 빠짐 여기까지 1번, 5번줄이 베이스를 따라 키가 배치되어있는데 00:28:222 (28222|5) - 이 롱노트를 00:28:058 - 여기서 부터 시작점으로 바꾸어야함. 즉, 00:27:893 (27893|1,28222|5) - 이 두 노트가 사진으로 이렇게 배치되어야함. https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1221103
00:30:365 - 박자가 빠짐.
00:30:530 (30530|2,30860|4) - 노트를 이렇게 배치하는게 더욱 나아보임. 또한, 00:30:695 박자가 빔. https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1221108
00:44:376 - 노트를 하나 추가
01:08:442 ~ 01:12:233 - 계속 피아노 선율 위주로 박자가 배치되서 나오다가 드럼 위주로 나와서 헷갈릴 경향이 있음. 무조건적으로 바꾸어야 할 필요성은 없으나 바꾸면 더욱 좋을것 같음(개인적인 생각)
01:08:937 - 박자가 빔, 노트 추가(피아노 선율로 바꾸지 않는다면)
01:21:464 (81464|4) - 01:21:299 - 로 이동
01:21:629 (81629|2) - 01:21:464 - 로 이동
01:23:937 - 4번과 6번 줄에 노트 추가도 괜찮아보임 이 부분에 박자가 없으니 허전함

[Hyper]

OD +1

00:08:937 (8937|4,9266|4,9596|4,9926|4,10420|4) - 단조로운 패턴이나 굳이 사용할려면 5번줄로 이동하는것을 추천
00:23:937 (23937|2) - 00:24:102 - 로 이동
00:44:294 (44294|0,44376|1) - 좋지 못한 패턴인것 같음. 이런식으로 고치는것도 괜찮아 보임 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1221170
00:44:376 (44376|1) - 노트 하나 더 추가
01:13:717 (73717|3) - whistle 제거 킥, 혹은 강한 비트가 있는 곳이 아닌데 이렇게 히트사운드를 넣으니 굉장히 어색함
01:15:530 (75530|5,75530|2) - 둘중 하나 제거, 같은 박자인 01:20:805 (80805|3) - 이곳엔 노트가 하나밖에 없음.
01:27:398 - 패턴이 단조로움 위 사진과 고치는것도 괜찮아 보임. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1221185
01:31:272 - 노트 추가
01:34:651 (94651|4) - 2번 라인으로 이동
01:42:728 (102728|1) - 롱노트가 01:43:387 - 에 끝나야함. 롱노트가 1/4 박자 비트를 지금 나타내고 있는데 이 비트가 01:43:387 에 끝남, 이 노트를 고치면 01:43:058 (103058|2) - 이 노트또한 0, 2번을 제외한 다른곳으로 옮기는것이 좋아보임.
01:50:475 (110475|4) - 이 노트를 01:50:640 - 로 이동

[Another]

00:17:179 (17179|4) - 제거
00:25:420 (25420|1,25420|0,25750|3,25750|2) - 오른손으로 노트 분산, 너무 왼손에 집중되어있음
00:28:552 - 노트 하나, 혹은 두개 추가
00:28:882 (28882|2,28882|0,28882|4) - 노트 셋중 하나 삭제
00:29:871 - 노트 하나, 혹은 두개 추가
00:31:189 ~ 00:31:849 - 리맵, 1/8박자 배경음을 넣으려 한것같은데 playback rate 25~50퍼센트로 들으면서 다시 맵핑
01:05:805 - 노트 하나 추가, 같은 리듬인 01:03:168 (63168|0,63168|5) - 여기엔 노트가 두개 들어가있음
01:04:321 (64321|5,64321|1) - 둘중 하나 제거, 이유는 바로 위 지적과 같음 01:06:959 (66959|5,66959|1)
01:09:596 - 노트 하나 추가
01:13:717 ~ 01:14:953 휘슬 전부 제거
01:25:091 - 노트 추가
01:28:305 (88305|5) - 제거, 피아노 음이 존재하지 않음
01:33:085 - 노트 추가
01:46:602 (106602|4,106602|6) - 01:46:684 로 이동, 01:46:602 에 노트 추가
01:50:228 - 노트 추가

Last edited by imariL 2014-01-02T22:38:17+00:00, edited 2 times in total.

WhiteAries

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WhiteAries 2014-01-02T22:02:34+00:00

- R u m i a - wrote:
just checking 1 diff for now , i'll do the other diff later ;w;
[Another]
00:08:113 - add note , balancing the dense, 1 is enough
00:08:772 = 00:03:497 (3497|0,3497|2,3497|4) -
00:09:761 - add here on 1st collumn, there's another sound . like crash or something
00:25:338 - add
00:25:338 - add
00:27:893 - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1208861 or
http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1208863
00:28:552 - add 1 more note
00:29:871 - add 1 note at 7?
00:30:613 - add here , there is sound
00:31:025 - ^
00:31:684 - add note or maybe (1/6?) not sure lol.
00:32:261 - add notes
00:32:426 - ^
00:37:371 (37371|6) - move to 6
add notes for better density
00:34:157 - 1st collumn
00:34:816 - 3rd
00:35:475 - (at 3rd maybe)
00:36:464 - 4 and 7
00:36:794 - 2
00:37:453 - at 7
00:39:102 - at 1

00:48:003 (48003|0) - move to 6 maybe?
01:06:299 - this should have 2 note for piano chord
01:11:739 - hissu sound xd
01:17:096 - add
01:18:580 - add
01:18:744 - add
01:22:371 - add
01:22:783 (82783|4) - move to 7 , i heard the piano repeats
01:22:618 (82618|6) - move to 1 in my opinion
01:23:854 - add
01:24:019 - add
01:30:860 - add at 5?
01:31:354 - add
01:49:321 - uh dun ignore the drum ;_;
01:50:970 - ^

Fixed! thanks :3

YunoFanatic

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Joined April 2013

YunoFanatic 2014-01-06T06:39:07+00:00

Hi! from queue!
Yooooo WA-chan~!

Normal

00:49:321 (49321|4) - i think this should start at 00:49:157 take a look

Hyper

00:06:135 (6135|2,6135|6) - should this be at 1 and 5? because of the pitch its very deep
01:08:607 (68607|2) - move to 1
01:13:717 (73717|3,73717|4) - this holders should be starting 01:13:552
01:22:453 (82453|3,82453|1,82618|2,82618|4,82783|3,82783|5) - move them 1 column left just to balanace the pattern a bit

Another

00:06:135 (6135|4,6135|6,6135|2) - this should be at 1 3 5 ?

Nice mapset Here's a star!

PROGUY

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PROGUY 2014-01-09T15:26:54+00:00

Hi WhiteAries, here's my check as requested.

[General]
00:33:497 I recommend here to be the preview point.

[Another]
00:12:728 From this point until 00:21:959, you're gonna give a lot of stress on the left hand. If possible maybe you can try moving some of them rightwards and have a few of them use the 4th column?

WhiteAries

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WhiteAries 2014-01-09T19:01:45+00:00

PROGUY wrote:
Hi WhiteAries, here's my check as requested.

[General]
00:33:497 I recommend here to be the preview point.

[Another]
00:12:728 From this point until 00:21:959, you're gonna give a lot of stress on the left hand. If possible maybe you can try moving some of them rightwards and have a few of them use the 4th column?

fixed thanks! :3

PROGUY

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PROGUY 2014-01-09T19:20:30+00:00

No problem.
Here's your first bubble.

WhiteAries

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WhiteAries 2014-01-09T19:29:36+00:00

Yeah bubble! XD

ljqandylee

Former osu!mania 7K Champion: 2016

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ljqandylee 2014-01-19T07:06:46+00:00

Hi WhiteAries, Here's some suggestion about your map's hardest diff.

I'll check other diffs according to your reply on this diff, to avoid some contingent disagreements on concept again and again XD
[Another]
00:03:003 (3003|1,3003|3,3003|5) - Change one to LN to fit the continuous sound

00:04:321 (4321|1,4321|3,4321|5) - ^

00:05:640 (5640|1,5640|3,5640|5) - ^

00:06:959 (6959|0,6959|2,6959|4) - ^

00:08:113 (8113|6,8113|0) - ^

00:10:750 (10750|5,10750|1) - ^

00:11:409 (11409|4,11409|3) - These LNs shouldn't end at 00:12:398, since the sound continues till 00:12:728

00:13:882 (13882|2,13882|4) - Move to 2 and 4

00:14:459 - Here can also add note

00:30:613 (30613|2) - Move to 00:30:530

00:31:025 - Add a note at 2

00:32:179 (32179|6,32179|2,32261|1,32261|5,32426|1,32426|5) - Meaningless gap, I suggest reduce 00:32:261 to 1 note, add 2 notes at 00:32:343 and reduce 00:32:426 to 1 note.

00:32:508 ~ 00:33:168 - This period should not be the same way as 00:33:250 ~ 00:33:827, bcz the latter period has definitely other sound and much stronger than the former period, you'd better try to show that by different ways of their patterns.

00:41:739 ~ 00:44:376 - All 1/4 double notes pattern doesn't make any sense, bcz there're many instruments working here, at least you should consider the drumbeat. You can also take care of other instruments here to make a proper pattern for the song.

00:57:893 (57893|0) - Shouldn't end at 01:02:838, it continues to 01:03:168

01:06:959 (66959|1) - ^, similar problem

01:07:618 (67618|2) - ^, similar problem

01:12:233 (72233|4,72233|2) - ^, similar problem

01:18:827 - Add 1~2 notes

01:24:102 - ^

01:24:266 ~ 01:24:843 - Here use single note is enough, and put the double notes pattern to 01:24:926 ~ 01:25:585, don't you think the latter period deserves it better? XD

01:26:409 - Add note

01:26:739 - ^, for transition to the coming 1/4 pattern

01:27:563 (87563|1,87646|2) - Move 1 column left

01:27:728 (87728|4,87810|5) - Move 2 columns left

01:26:574 (86574|6) - End at 01:28:058

01:28:305 - Missing note

01:29:294 - ^

01:32:838 ~ 01:33:497 - Should be 1/6 pattern, whether to make it harder or easier depend on you XD

01:33:992 - Heavy beat, why only 1 note

01:34:486 - ^

01:34:981 - ^

01:35:475 - ^

01:35:805 - ^

01:40:750 ~ 01:41:409 - Very discordant with the parts around it, don't suddenly make a hard pattern while the patterns around this part are simple and the music doesn't have such a big change.

01:45:365 ~ 01:46:684 - Same suggestion as 01:24:266 ~ 01:25:585

01:47:014 - Add note

01:53:607 (113607|4) - Individual note is enough, the sound is low and short.

WhiteAries

87 posts

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Topic Starter

WhiteAries 2014-01-19T08:04:47+00:00

ljqandylee wrote:
Hi WhiteAries, Here's some suggestion about your map's hardest diff.

I'll check other diffs according to your reply on this diff, to avoid some contingent disagreements on concept again and again XD
[Another]
00:03:003 (3003|1,3003|3,3003|5) - Change one to LN to fit the continuous sound

00:04:321 (4321|1,4321|3,4321|5) - ^

00:05:640 (5640|1,5640|3,5640|5) - ^

00:06:959 (6959|0,6959|2,6959|4) - ^

00:08:113 (8113|6,8113|0) - ^

00:10:750 (10750|5,10750|1) - ^

00:11:409 (11409|4,11409|3) - These LNs shouldn't end at 00:12:398, since the sound continues till 00:12:728

00:13:882 (13882|2,13882|4) - Move to 2 and 4

00:14:459 - Here can also add note

00:30:613 (30613|2) - Move to 00:30:530

00:31:025 - Add a note at 2

00:32:179 (32179|6,32179|2,32261|1,32261|5,32426|1,32426|5) - Meaningless gap, I suggest reduce 00:32:261 to 1 note, add 2 notes at 00:32:343 and reduce 00:32:426 to 1 note.

00:32:508 ~ 00:33:168 - This period should not be the same way as 00:33:250 ~ 00:33:827, bcz the latter period has definitely other sound and much stronger than the former period, you'd better try to show that by different ways of their patterns.

00:41:739 ~ 00:44:376 - All 1/4 double notes pattern doesn't make any sense, bcz there're many instruments working here, at least you should consider the drumbeat. You can also take care of other instruments here to make a proper pattern for the song.

00:57:893 (57893|0) - Shouldn't end at 01:02:838, it continues to 01:03:168

01:06:959 (66959|1) - ^, similar problem

01:07:618 (67618|2) - ^, similar problem

01:12:233 (72233|4,72233|2) - ^, similar problem

01:18:827 - Add 1~2 notes

01:24:102 - ^

01:24:266 ~ 01:24:843 - Here use single note is enough, and put the double notes pattern to 01:24:926 ~ 01:25:585, don't you think the latter period deserves it better? XD

01:26:409 - Add note

01:26:739 - ^, for transition to the coming 1/4 pattern

01:27:563 (87563|1,87646|2) - Move 1 column left

01:27:728 (87728|4,87810|5) - Move 2 columns left

01:26:574 (86574|6) - End at 01:28:058

01:28:305 - Missing note

01:29:294 - ^

01:32:838 ~ 01:33:497 - Should be 1/6 pattern, whether to make it harder or easier depend on you XD

01:33:992 - Heavy beat, why only 1 note

01:34:486 - ^

01:34:981 - ^

01:35:475 - ^

01:35:805 - ^

01:40:750 ~ 01:41:409 - Very discordant with the parts around it, don't suddenly make a hard pattern while the patterns around this part are simple and the music doesn't have such a big change.

01:45:365 ~ 01:46:684 - Same suggestion as 01:24:266 ~ 01:25:585

01:47:014 - Add note

01:53:607 (113607|4) - Individual note is enough, the sound is low and short.

i fixed it almost.. but i think 00:03:003 (3003|1,3003|3,3003|5) this part is good to no LN so.. i passed it sry ;w; and other suggestion are fixed! tnx:3