GyroX20 wrote:

Nom Nom Nom M4M Nom Nom Nom

[Normal]

00:53:212 (1) - No need for New combo here Ok~
01:31:520 - Circle here?
02:43:981 (2) - Make it curve like (1) to blanket just a little I will consider here
03:33:366 - Circle here + Clap
04:10:750 (1) - Why this shape?
04:18:135 (3) - Fill this space? it fit with a space for pause cus music I think
04:32:904 (5) - why this shape again
05:13:289 (1) - ^ ?
shape just cus some shape it too long and it put them only Straight or Curve will be board (for me) , so I set like this , isn't fun ?

[Hard]

00:46:750 (3) - Blanket better OK~
05:10:520 (3,4,5) - A little awkward flow purposely to do it

[Insane]

00:40:750 (4) - new Combo Umm ... I think it's not in need here
00:56:904 (1) - Make this slider prettier
01:00:596 (1) - ^
01:01:520 (3) - ^ fixed some on this
02:01:520 (1) - Put a hitsound on this Fixed ~

Thats all i really found
good luck!

-Tochi wrote:

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  General

1. Map needs an epilepsy warning, to enable that got to song setup>design and you can find it there.

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  Insane

1. 00:41:212 (5) - Try to put it here Symmetrically for this 00:40:173 (2) - and 00:41:673 (6) - Should be where 00:40:173 (2) - OK~
2. 00:43:981 (1,2,3) - For a better flow, i think you should MOVE 00:44:673 (2) - on to and do Ctrl + G on 00:44:904 (3) - Fixed
3. 00:45:827 (1,2,3) - Same with these, as above.
4. 00:58:750 (1,2,3) - Same thing happens here.
5. 01:00:596 (1,2,3) - Same thing here, but i'll let this go. I fixed these all~
6. 01:09:481 (10,11) - The (10) is too early. I think it's fit the lyrics here
7. 01:21:596 (3,4) - I prefer not to overlap this.
8. 01:29:212 (3,4) - Same here. these place I feel overlap will be good too look too
9. 01:43:058 (1,2) - This is a good example for not overlapped sliders. You could do the same with the others above.
10. 01:44:443 (4,2) - Stack properly, i can that it's like 1 micro grid to the right, left nor up. Ok~
11. 02:14:673 - There's a beat here. You can do something like this: Umm.. I fixed here too , but I try another way
    
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    [img]http://puu.sh/dsKtT/30198128ca.png
    
    http://puu.sh/dsKup/30464b1c02.png[/img]
12. 02:15:366 (6,8) - Stack properly. OK
13. 02:22:520 (2,3) - I prefer that you should use the same shape like: Fixed here , use same shape ^^
    
    ^

    
    
    And if you don't think it fits too well where it is. Try to move 02:22:520 (2) - here to
14. 02:32:904 - I prefer to mute the end of this slider by adding a new green line with the volume of 5% Ok~ but I set on 30% frist here
15. 02:34:750 (1,3) - Stack properly. fixed
16. 02:45:827 (3,4,5) - This part is just like this part 00:43:981 (1,2,3) - same
17. 02:47:673 (1,2,3) - Same as above. ^
18. 02:49:520 (3,4,5) - Ugly overlap here:
    
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19. 04:05:673 (4,5) - This part is good, but this part is the same 04:07:520 (2,3) - and why not map it the same way? Same as to fit lyrics
20. 04:18:366 - I think you should enable a little break here. If the break doesn't show up when u play, it's because it's too short. But i don't think it will yay , it too short , but if add a break I think it will be hurry to restart , so I keep here , maybe I will lost some HP during here , but I guess it's ok
21. 04:29:673 (2,3,4,5) - Maybe switch places for 04:29:904 (3,5) - and for 04:30:135 (4,5) - Great , fixed
22. 04:31:058 (1,2) - Avoid this overlap my making this 04:31:520 (2) - to a blanket for 04:31:058 (1) - Fixed
23. 04:31:981 (3,4) - Avoid this little overlap. ^
24. 04:32:904 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Move this whole part 1 grid down, so 04:33:366 (3) - Stacks with 04:31:981 (3) - ^
25. 04:34:520 (1,2,3,4) - Same with. Just make it stack with 04:31:981 (3) - ^
26. 05:04:058 (1,2) - I prefer to delete these to circle, because it's a little bit sudden after a break, and there's no vocal there. Fixed these ~
27. 05:19:058 - I prefer to add a green line here that have the volume of 5% OK

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  Wow, nice map Good luck with it, i want to see it ranked! I want to rank this too , will work hard on this ^^

Pururut wrote:

我滴妈5分钟3diff normal跳了 我来组成sp

[Hard]
00:07:289 (1,4) - 没叠好,后面还有很多nazi就不挑了.你自己检查下吧. 我自己看都是壓的準的 , 可是好多人挑嗚嗚 , 總之再修一次了
00:42:135 (5,4) - 分别nc 00:43:289 (1) - 不要nc 00:43:981 (4) - 这里正好是长白 而你又放了跳. 對喔 , 好的 , 修改
01:25:289 (4) - ctrl+g比较顺 我比較喜歡繞圈的感覺xD
02:07:289 - 不需要空拍吧,这里空一拍感觉好怪异 233 我跟著後面的電子音 , 所已在這停一拍 , 我再考慮看看好了
02:14:443 (1,2) - 这里节奏你再考虑下？ 好吧 , 我看看要怎麼改

[Insane]
使用ds的部分间距不要老是变来变去的..而且也是有部分地方想叠好 但是没叠好的..还有如果你想做成良心送分图的话 就不要放很容易断的地方.比如
01:09:827 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - 良心圖也想坑人(?
00:40:058 (1,2,3) - 450,119
00:54:366 (6,7,1,2,3) - 跳的略大...好像后面都没这么大间距的跳了 我也覺得突兀 , 那就改小一點好了
01:32:673 (5) - ctrl+g 01:33:596 (1) -

SPOILER

你看如何 這邊是3個一組的所以沒有想要包起來
01:41:443 (2) - 往上移一点
02:26:443 (5) - 和6平行 好的
02:28:520 (6,7,8) - 这里建议改成一个1/4折返滑条 紅線起我覺得3連Note比較舒服
03:15:827 (2,3,4) - 好看一点 Ok~ Fixed

SPOILER

03:48:135 (2) - 这个就用 03:47:673 (1) - ctrl+J+H 03:48:596 (2) - 放正中间 如何 這邊沒有想用跳這麼大的排版
04:09:596 (5) - 96,116 OK

希望你能在圣诞的时候rank
prpr

Rakuen wrote:

Christmas☆Queue 2014

Legend

Default = Normal mods
Blue = Strongly recommended
Red = Unrankable issue
Pink = Will be discussed if not changed

Storyboard

• There are 2 files of storyboard with alike names, check if they're all used (im not good in sb)
  well , check and remove some that didn't used

Normal

1. Try AR 3.5 or 4.0, fits better in SV imo ok~
2. Take a note, next time mapping Normal try using more claps than vocal, it helps players to hit with more accuracy (beat) I'll mind it
3. Check your New combos, some parts are kinda messy checked and set NC more tidy ~
4. 00:10:058 (2,1) - Looks a bit off, changing them to slider would help better in reading Fixed , and also after this some where like this
   ^ Just so, strong vocals are at 00:10:058 - , 00:10:289 - , 00:10:520 - , and 00:10:981 -
5. 00:31:058 (1) - Need more ready time after spinner, consider shorten it to 00:32:443 - (need a white tick space). Removing works too, if you wish Remove all spinner , cus I have no idea on this ;_;
6. 00:51:827 (1,2,3,4) - Claps are wrong here, should be at 00:51:827 - , 00:52:750 - , 00:53:673 - , and 00:54:596 - for consistency Fixed
7. 01:00:596 (1) - Remove NC for constant 2 beat NC OK
8. 01:03:366 (3,1,2) - A bit bad flow here, prefer not to stack. Change if you have other ideas of mapping that part
9. 01:31:981 (1) - A bit bad flow from 01:30:135 (3) - , at least try something like: Fixed some here
   
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10. 02:01:520 (1) - Same as previous, need a white tick of space after spinner ^
11. 02:05:673 - Clap should be here, instead of 02:06:135 - Fixed
12. 02:32:904 (1) - As mentioned recently ^
13. 02:49:520 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Need NC around here, constant 1 beat NC (big white tick) Fixed
14. 03:48:596 (4) - NC? Like did at 01:46:750 (1) - , need them to be constant Fixed
15. 05:11:212 - Try adding a circle blanket with 05:11:673 (1) - , really bad flow here :w: OK~
16. 05:19:058 (4) - Ending NC like other parts? Fixed here too

Hard

1. 00:37:750 (4) - Try using 1.0x DS, feel it's soft part Fixed
2. 00:47:443 (1) - This is hard to read sometimes, for a Hard diff. But it's still fine to use
3. 01:23:443 (3) - Feel placing a bit up (pic) would have better flow: Fixed
   
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4. 02:11:673 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - Might be a bit too hard here, could cause combo break or a combo miss. Try changing this 02:12:596 (5,6) - to 2 long sliders then link to 02:13:520 (7,8) - cuz you're doing the same in Insane
5. 02:17:212 (3) - This one looks like 3 hits (1 reverse), try reducing it and place a circle at 02:17:673 - Fixed
6. 02:34:058 (1,2,3) - Wrongly snapped, it's 4 hits of 1/6. Could try a reverse slider Fixed
7. 02:56:443 (3,4) - Prefer not to stack this one OK~
8. 03:15:366 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - As mentioned before I think I will want to leep these , after request some Hard diff player to testplay , feel it's ok in my view , also cus I don't have more idea ; ;

Insane

1. 01:29:212 (3,4) - Try avoiding the stack, looks not good imo
2. 02:34:058 (1,2,3) - Wrongly snapped, it's 4 hits of 1/6.
3. 02:49:981 (4,5) - Try not to stack with 02:49:520 (3) - , too complex
4. 03:05:327 (3,4,5) - Feel this one's a bit strange >_< , prefer to make it like 03:08:789 (1,2,3,4,5) -
5. 04:30:366 (5) - Whistle should be at 04:30:135 (4) - ? Oops , forgot to change these when I fix this before

Fixed Insane all~

Others

• Insane diff is quite fine
  
  Maybe can get like 1-2 mods for Normal and Hard diff if you think it's ok
  
  Anyways, call me when you feel you're ready

Rakuen wrote:

Bubbled

lkx_Shore wrote:

General

1. Add 1520ms of audio lead-in for 1.5s ready times. Ok~

Insane

1. 00:02:212 (4) - There is no vocal. Plz never let players hit air ( Except you use hitsound remix the rhythm ) . Vocals downbeat on 00:01:981 - and 00:02:096 - . So add 1/4 slider on 00:02:096 - . Ok , fixed
2. 00:04:981 (7) - Same thing. Just make 00:04:635 (6) - end on 00:04:981 - . Fixed
3. 00:06:366 (9) - Remove. No vocal here. 感覺這邊歌詞有個促音 , 順便跟後面那一段對稱 (其實我自己感覺刪這邊的話 , 打起來有點抝手)
4. 01:28:289 (1) - Add a finish on slider head? Ok~
5. 01:46:173 - and 01:46:635 - Why missed these sounds?
6. 02:10:520 (4) - Remove then add 1/2 slider on 02:10:404 - ? I better like to follow these 4 obvious electronic sounds ....
7. 03:08:212 (2) - So weird... Ah?Only here? seems it have some same pattern ... But fixed , move to side
8. 03:47:673 (1,2) - Same as 01:46:173 - .
9. 04:48:596 (1) - ^.
10. 05:18:135 (5) - ^ ;w;. 其實這些地方我覺得只跟那個明顯的電子音比較好打耶;w;

Hard

1. 00:04:981 (6) - Same as Insane diff. Fixed
2. 03:13:289 (7) - Remove. Changed to a slider
   Fine. After spinner one-beat add note is readable imo. This song only have 130bpm.

Normal

1. Fine.

Others

Call me back.

lkx_Shore wrote:

Qualified