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Ray - lull ~Soshite Bokura wa~ (TV Size)

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alacat
yo

[General]
  1. why dont you add a video ? =v=
[Easy]
  1. 01:11:347 - unsnapped green sections, please resnap on 1/4 line.
  2. 00:27:597 (3) - add a clap to the tail and repeat of the slider.
  3. 00:33:011 (1,2) - i prefer your previous part.00:18:575 (1,2) - so i hope you make in a similar here.
  4. 00:43:838 (1) - add a finish to the head of the slider here to follow the crash cymbal in the music.
  5. 00:43:838 (1,2,1) - this part is a little boring to me. 00:45:642 (2) - please remake this slider so will be more interesting !
  6. 00:56:469 (3) - add a whistle to the head of the slider.
  7. 01:20:830 (4) - why don't you follow the crash cymbal here ? 01:21:733 - so consider adding a slider here, like this
  8. 01:24:439 (3,4) - hmm i feel kinda empty here 01:22:635 (1) - , it is better to put 1/1 rhythm for playing also i can hear sound of a bass drum. so i recommend you to use 2/1 slider + note. If you follow my suggestions, it prevents the biginner from misreading.
[Normal]
  1. 00:00:530 - ~00:07:748 - it is better to use spacing around DS1.0x
  2. 00:13:612 (2) - add a finish to the head of the slider here to follow the crash cymbal in the music. like your previous slider 00:12:259 -
  3. 00:31:206 (1) - Design suggestion: how about putting more spacing between red point ? like this
  4. 00:33:462 (2) - hmm.. i feel this part looks crowded. so you should consider moving this note left for the flow ?
  5. 00:37:522 (2) - i recommend you to put to the opposite direction for the flow. like this
  6. 00:43:161 (3) - finish.
  7. 01:19:026 (2,2) - a bit nazi mod, it would look better if it was symmetrical.
  8. 01:27:146 - i feel kinda empty here, it is better to use 1/1 rhythm for playing also i can hear sound of a bass drum. so consider adding a note here.
[Hard]
  1. 00:13:387 - ,00:13:838 (3) - i can hear sound of a bass drum. so consider adding a whistle
  2. 00:57:823 (5) - Flow suggestion : i feel this part looks crowded and unnatural. it is better to make the spacing equal here. like this
  3. 01:21:507 (5) - a bit nazi mod, you forgot to put a new combo here. i guessed your previous part.
  4. 01:27:372 - how about using more lower volume ? since the melody is calmer than previous part. i hope you use 40 ~ 50% volume here.
    really nice diff 0.0
[Insane]
  1. 00:08:199 (2) - flow suggestion: this part feels too hard. so you should consider reduce the spacing this part like my suggestion. it prevents the player is going to misread.
  2. 00:12:484 (4) - the note looks crowded , so please put more distance around (0.60 ~0.80x) spacing.
  3. 00:14:289 (6) - As you can see here, since you already have the up and down motion from your previous patterns, the transition from this to the next slider almost feels like unnatural jump. so i recommend you to use ctrl + G command.
  4. 00:17:221 (2) - Same as above. try to unify the patterns 00:15:417 (4) - ,it looks better to me.
  5. 00:36:620 (1) - add a finish to the head of the slider here to follow the strong sound in this music. like your previous slider 00:33:011 (1) -
  6. 00:40:229 (1) - ^
  7. 00:43:838 (1) - ^
  8. 00:44:289 (2) - flow suggestion: how about moving this note down for the flow ? so this part will flow more naturally and beautifully.
  9. 00:45:642 (1) - a bit nazi mod, please move to this slider to x:408 y:188 will be more beautiful.
  10. 00:49:702 - I recommend you to put a note same as your previous part.
  11. 00:54:439 (1,2) - hmm please check your new combo pattern.00:43:612 (8,1) - so you should consider remake it here.also, 00:54:665 (2) - add a finish to the head of the slider here to follow the strong sound in this music.
  12. 01:09:552 (2) - flow suggestion: feels like unnatural jump in this note. so try to move to center around x:240 y:172 . will be more interesting imo :3
  13. 01:27:372 - Same as Hard diff
sorry for the delay /==/ Good luck ;)
Topic Starter
wcx19911123
alacat

alacat wrote:

[General]
  1. why dont you add a video ? =v=
    added :3
[Easy]
  1. 01:11:347 - unsnapped green sections, please resnap on 1/4 line.
    the unsnapped sections is working for the sliderslide sounds being replay at 01:11:357 -
  2. 00:27:597 (3) - add a clap to the tail and repeat of the slider.
    the claps sound not that good with whistle imo, I'd like to keep this
  3. 00:33:011 (1,2) - i prefer your previous part.00:18:575 (1,2) - so i hope you make in a similar here.
    well, I added a note at 00:34:139 - to fit the song
  4. 00:43:838 (1) - add a finish to the head of the slider here to follow the crash cymbal in the music.
    I'd like to keep this, the sound in music is to weak imo
  5. 00:43:838 (1,2,1) - this part is a little boring to me. 00:45:642 (2) - please remake this slider so will be more interesting !
    uh.. well the music becomes soft here, so I'd like to use some simple patterns
  6. 00:56:469 (3) - add a whistle to the head of the slider.
    I just want to make 00:56:695 - sounds a bit louder than 00:56:469 - when playing the slider, it fits the song better imo, so I didn't add sounds there
  7. 01:20:830 (4) - why don't you follow the crash cymbal here ? 01:21:733 - so consider adding a slider here, like this
    I tried some patterns to follow the cymbal before, but the rhythm sounds too hard to read imo.. (cuz the usually rhythm is ending the slider at 01:21:281 - , then start next one at 01:21:507 - to follow vocal, but this rhythm still can't follow the cymbal)
  8. 01:24:439 (3,4) - hmm i feel kinda empty here 01:22:635 (1) - , it is better to put 1/1 rhythm for playing also i can hear sound of a bass drum. so i recommend you to use 2/1 slider + note. If you follow my suggestions, it prevents the biginner from misreading.
    the bass drum is not as loud as guitar(?) at 01:25:567 - and 01:25:793 - , so I didn't add object there. if I follow more things, the pattern would be too hard to play imo
[Hard]
  1. 00:13:387 - ,00:13:838 (3) - i can hear sound of a bass drum. so consider adding a whistle
    added
  2. 00:57:823 (5) - Flow suggestion : i feel this part looks crowded and unnatural. it is better to make the spacing equal here. like this
    not too much difference imo, I think the current pattern's flow is better(although I broke it at 00:58:048 (6,1) - to follow the heavy beat at 00:58:274 - )
  3. 01:21:507 (5) - a bit nazi mod, you forgot to put a new combo here. i guessed your previous part.
    added
  4. 01:27:372 - how about using more lower volume ? since the melody is calmer than previous part. i hope you use 40 ~ 50% volume here.
    umm, I think 60% is quiet enough..
    really nice diff 0.0
[Insane]
  1. 00:08:199 (2) - flow suggestion: this part feels too hard. so you should consider reduce the spacing this part like my suggestion. it prevents the player is going to misread.
    the jump is slider-to-circle jump, won't be too hard to play imo, plus the stacks make the rhythm easy to raed imo..
  2. 00:12:484 (4) - the note looks crowded , so please put more distance around (0.60 ~0.80x) spacing.
    well this is in purpose, I used different spacing to fit the different tone in the music(00:13:274 - tone here is a bit higher than 00:12:372 - )
  3. 00:14:289 (6) - As you can see here, since you already have the up and down motion from your previous patterns, the transition from this to the next slider almost feels like unnatural jump. so i recommend you to use ctrl + G command.
    fixed
  4. 00:17:221 (2) - Same as above. try to unify the patterns 00:15:417 (4) - ,it looks better to me.
    the spacing is fine imo.. I'd like to use spacing fit the music, here is a bit quiet in the music, so I used smaller spacing
  5. 00:36:620 (1) - add a finish to the head of the slider here to follow the strong sound in this music. like your previous slider 00:33:011 (1) -
    this point is not that strong in the music imo..
  6. 00:40:229 (1) - ^ same as ^
  7. 00:43:838 (1) - ^ same as 00:56:469 (3) - in Easy diff, I'd like to emphasize the finish at 00:43:161 - so I didn't add another at 00:43:838 -
  8. 00:44:289 (2) - flow suggestion: how about moving this note down for the flow ? so this part will flow more naturally and beautifully.
    well the spacing is in purpose, I'd like use a bit bigger jump to fit the heavy beat at 00:44:514 -
  9. 00:45:642 (1) - a bit nazi mod, please move to this slider to x:408 y:188 will be more beautiful.
    fixed
  10. 00:49:702 - I recommend you to put a note same as your previous part.
    I'd like to use some thin rhythm here to emphasize the intense part in coming at 00:51:056 -
  11. 00:54:439 (1,2) - hmm please check your new combo pattern.00:43:612 (8,1) - so you should consider remake it here.
    uh, I don't like to stack objects with different colors..
    also, 00:54:665 (2) - add a finish to the head of the slider here to follow the strong sound in this music.
    same as 00:49:702 - , I like to use thin object to emphasize next part
  12. 01:09:552 (2) - flow suggestion: feels like unnatural jump in this note. so try to move to center around x:240 y:172 . will be more interesting imo :3
    umm, I think the current one's flow is better
  13. 01:27:372 - Same as Hard diff same here
sorry for the delay /==/ Good luck ;)
thanks for mod :3 really a long one, hope you won't mind I rejected mostly of them orz
updated, waiting for guest
wantuole

Natsu wrote:

HI~ wcx19911123

Normal:
  1. 00:06:845 (2,1) - Im kinda curious why you add more distance from this point?fix
  2. 00:12:259 (2,3) - Dix the distance here is relly noticeableno change
  3. 00:14:063 (3,4) - same as above^
  4. 00:47:447 missing finish here since the others diffs have itadded
  5. 00:10:229 (2,3) - remove bothe circles and add one in 00:10:454 you will follow the music better in this way thought
  6. 00:28:274 (2,3) - same as aboveno change
  7. 00:35:266 (2,3) - Fix the distancek
  8. 00:39:778 (3) - you should add a slider like the previous one in 00:39:326 (2) - since you following vocals thats why also is consistent with what do you do in 00:35:717 (3,4) - fix
  9. 00:41:131 (2,3,1,2) - fix the distance in this pattern toofix
  10. 00:43:838 (1,2) - same as above^
  11. 00:49:702 a 1/1 slider will fit better since you can hear how the vocal is really longno
  12. 01:00:078 (1,2) - same here use a properly distance
  13. 01:01:883 (1,2,3) - ^
  14. 01:14:966 (2,3) - ^fix
  15. 01:25:567 remove finish dont fit in nothing with the music also is not consistent with the others diffsfix
  16. 01:26:920 add a circle here this part feel really empty without it fix

alacat wrote:

yo

[Normal]
  1. 00:00:530 - ~00:07:748 - it is better to use spacing around DS1.0x fix
  2. 00:13:612 (2) - add a finish to the head of the slider here to follow the crash cymbal in the music. like your previous slider 00:12:259 - ok
  3. 00:31:206 (1) - Design suggestion: how about putting more spacing between red point ? like thisok
  4. 00:33:462 (2) - hmm.. i feel this part looks crowded. so you should consider moving this note left for the flow ?fix
  5. 00:37:522 (2) - i recommend you to put to the opposite direction for the flow. like thisok
  6. 00:43:161 (3) - finish.added
  7. 01:19:026 (2,2) - a bit nazi mod, it would look better if it was symmetrical.ok
  8. 01:27:146 - i feel kinda empty here, it is better to use 1/1 rhythm for playing also i can hear sound of a bass drum. so consider adding a note here.
add note at 01:26:920 :)
thx mod :)
push:http://puu.sh/5uI2h.osu
Topic Starter
wcx19911123
updated
alacat
Re~check~

[Easy]
  1. 00:43:838 - ,00:47:447 - ,00:51:056 - please check this part, you should consider putting finish sound with constant rhythm.
  2. 00:56:469 (3,4) - again, add a whistle to the head of the slider. i recommend you to put more hit sound for easy difficulty. also it would fit well with this kind of music imo. at least, i wish you add a whistle this slider (4)
  3. 01:20:830 (4) - How about another pattern ? it needs strong sound here.01:21:733 - in this case, this pattern feels too easy for this difficulty.
[Normal]
  1. 00:14:966 - how about using lower volume here ? since the melody is calmer than previous part.
  2. 00:14:966 - you should put more hit sounds to this part.
    00:15:417 - clap
    00:16:319 - ^
    00:17:221 - ^
    00:18:123 - ... You should be able to apply my suggestion for the rest of the all part from 00:14:966 - to 01:28:049 (2) -
  3. 00:19:928 (2) - remove a clap to the head of the slider same as your previous part. so you should consider adding it here 00:20:379 (1) -
  4. 00:51:056 (1) - add a finish to the head of the slider here to follow the crash cymbal in the music.
  5. 00:57:146 (3) - finish
  6. 01:12:710 (1) - ^
  7. 01:25:567 - ^
  8. 01:28:049 (2) - i don't agree this slider repeats o.o it is better to make two sliders.
[Insane]
  1. 00:43:838 (1) - Same.
well, Normal diff is quite good now.
wantuole

alacat wrote:

Re~check~

[Normal]
  1. 00:14:966 - how about using lower volume here ? since the melody is calmer than previous part.use 55%
  2. 00:14:966 - you should put more hit sounds to this part.
    00:15:417 - clap
    00:16:319 - ^
    00:17:221 - ^
    00:18:123 - ... You should be able to apply my suggestion for the rest of the all part from 00:14:966 - to 01:28:049 (2) - ok add 2 4clap :)
  3. 00:19:928 (2) - remove a clap to the head of the slider same as your previous part. so you should consider adding it here 00:20:379 (1) - fix
  4. 00:51:056 (1) - add a finish to the head of the slider here to follow the crash cymbal in the music.added
  5. 00:57:146 (3) - finish^
  6. 01:12:710 (1) - ^^
  7. 01:25:567 - ^^
  8. 01:28:049 (2) - i don't agree this slider repeats o.o it is better to make two sliders. ok
well, Normal diff is quite good now.
thx
push:http://puu.sh/5uPBg.osu
Topic Starter
wcx19911123
alacat

alacat wrote:

Re~check~

[Easy]
  1. 00:43:838 - ,00:47:447 - ,00:51:056 - please check this part, you should consider putting finish sound with constant rhythm.
    well, added finish but turned the volume down a bit, I still think double finishes sound really too loud
  2. 00:56:469 (3,4) - again, add a whistle to the head of the slider. i recommend you to put more hit sound for easy difficulty. also it would fit well with this kind of music imo. at least, i wish you add a whistle this slider (4)
    added on 4
  3. 01:20:830 (4) - How about another pattern ? it needs strong sound here.01:21:733 - in this case, this pattern feels too easy for this difficulty.
    well, I changed the pattern in another way
[Insane]
  1. 00:43:838 (1) - Same.
    added
well, Normal diff is quite good now.
all diffs updated
alacat
sorry for the dalay :?

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gratz~
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Topic Starter
wcx19911123
thanks melo :3
thanks you all xD
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iyasine
nice wcx o.ob
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iyasine wrote:

nice wcx gratz o.ob
Kyouren
Gratzz!! Wantuole and wcx19911123!!^^
mintong89

No_Gu wrote:

吃翔
FFFF撞输wcx了 ;_;
恭喜
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恭喜rank
正好最近在白月做这个的字幕,卧槽已经改成半年番了?
alacat
yahoo~
Kodora
gratz o.o/
Kyouirisu
Really nice song and map! ><
Congrats! :)
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love it ☻♥
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gz nice song :D
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