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_AI

225 posts

Joined February 2013

_AI 2013-09-08T13:01:26+00:00

GD accepted ?

Melt

353 posts

Joined May 2011

Topic Starter

Melt 2013-09-10T05:14:09+00:00

_AI wrote:
GD accepted ?

sorry, the mapset is full

- Jelly -

30 posts

Joined April 2013

- Jelly - 2013-09-13T07:41:49+00:00

[Insane]

00:38:553 (6,7,8) - 放在 00:37:113 (4) - 的位置感觉更流畅
00:48:873 (7) - 位置略奇怪，向下移动一点试试？
00:52:473 (5) - 微调下从00:52:953 开始弯曲
01:02:553 (1) - 1.6x感觉快了点
01:42:633 (7) - 下移一点
01:51:513 (2,3,4,5) - 3 4交换位置
03:29:673 (3,4) - 会当成2连吧 - -
03:34:953 (3,4,5,6) - 间距控制有些随意

音效感觉不能多说;w;

~~我其实是来建（tou）议（xue）的~~

10crystalmask01

10crystalmask01 2013-09-15T03:36:33+00:00

Ello o3o random mod!

[G's Normal]

I suggest raising the slider velocity up a bit, since your sliders look so small and looks tightly placed together whenever they're 1/4 apart.

00:16:473 (1) - Try adding a finish or whistle on the head?
00:51:033 (4) - NC
00:58:233 (4) - ^
01:02:553 (1) - Add finish on the head?
01:37:113 (1,2) - Ugly overlap.
01:58:233 (4,5) - ^
03:54:873 (3,4) - ^
04:09:273 (1,2) - Try to move them apart?

Looks pretty good

[Hard]
01:41:913 (5,6) - ? Try to adjust the spacing so it's the same as 01:41:673 (4,5) -
01:47:673 (6) - Add finish on the head.
02:46:233 (2,1) - Move father apart please.

Aww who am I kidding, this looks perfect! ^^

[Oblivious]
01:07:593 (7,8) - Dat spacing O^O
01:11:673 (5,6) - hmm, can you try to move 5 above the slider instead of on it?
02:19:833 (2,4,2,4,2,4,2) - Stack properly?
03:30:153 (5,6) - Move 5 off of the slider?

Wow, this map looks too good! Hope it gets ranked soon!

*Throws a kudos*
Hope this helps~!

Melt

353 posts

Joined May 2011

Topic Starter

Melt 2013-09-16T15:21:48+00:00

Awaken

怀疑会被全部ignore

~~哇妹儿贴音效包好好好想盗几个;w;~~

[Hard]

00:54:873 (2) - 试试ctrl+g

01:35:673 (6,7) - 交换下试试感觉不需要那么远0.0

02:20:313 (3) - 感觉可以和1一样的fin

02:35:673 (1) - 感觉音乐挺激昂的 nc不用这样颜色的combo color了吧？ 03:05:433 (1) - 然后从这里再开始用白黑色增加了红和粉的比例

03:56:793 (3) - 感觉可以ctrl+g

01:42:153 (5,6) - 跟上面一样1.5x吧为了造型就牺牲掉了orz

01:48:153 (7) - 感觉这里的SV可以更慢一点拖拽感更强一点w fixed

03:34:233 (2) - fin 加上了一个鼓的fin

最后一段kiai感觉不够激情建议fin用多一点然后音量大一点w 好主意

GL~

我为这悲

Jelly

[Insane]

00:38:553 (6,7,8) - 放在 00:37:113 (4) - 的位置感觉更流畅其实感觉两种都不错，不过为了排列就没改:3
00:48:873 (7) - 位置略奇怪，向下移动一点试试？fixed
00:52:473 (5) - 微调下从00:52:953 开始弯曲 good idea!
01:02:553 (1) - 1.6x感觉快了点因为要跟前面的形成一个落差
01:42:633 (7) - 下移一点 fixed
01:51:513 (2,3,4,5) - 3 4交换位置
03:29:673 (3,4) - 会当成2连吧 - - 其实我感觉这个还行啊，再有人提就改掉
03:34:953 (3,4,5,6) - 间距控制有些随意

音效感觉不能多说;w;

~~我其实是来建（tou）议（xue）的~~

10crystalmask01

Ello o3o random mod!

[G's Normal]

I suggest raising the slider velocity up a bit, since your sliders look so small and looks tightly placed together whenever they're 1/4 apart.

00:16:473 (1) - Try adding a finish or whistle on the head?
00:51:033 (4) - NC
00:58:233 (4) - ^
01:02:553 (1) - Add finish on the head?
01:37:113 (1,2) - Ugly overlap.
01:58:233 (4,5) - ^
03:54:873 (3,4) - ^
04:09:273 (1,2) - Try to move them apart?

Looks pretty good

[Hard]
01:41:913 (5,6) - ? Try to adjust the spacing so it's the same as 01:41:673 (4,5) - i think its may better to me to increase the distance since the vocal changed here =P
01:47:673 (6) - Add finish on the head.
02:46:233 (2,1) - Move father apart please. fixed

Aww who am I kidding, this looks perfect! ^^

[Oblivious]
01:07:593 (7,8) - Dat spacing O^O a little jump here O^O
01:11:673 (5,6) - hmm, can you try to move 5 above the slider instead of on it?
02:19:833 (2,4,2,4,2,4,2) - Stack properly?changed a little
03:30:153 (5,6) - Move 5 off of the slider?

Wow, this map looks too good! Hope it gets ranked soon!

*Throws a kudos* thanks a lot :3
Hope this helps~!

Thanks for your modding!

bokito

76 posts

Joined July 2010

bokito 2013-09-18T05:15:37+00:00

[Obivious]
00:41:193 (4) -

00:47:913 (3,4,5,6,7) - 排成个星状？
00:56:793 (6,7,8,9) - 这句个我觉得距离不适当另外00:57:753 (10) - 建议不要和00:57:273 (8) - overlap
01:41:673 (3,4,5,6) - 这几个搞个菱形?
01:42:633 (1) - nc
01:48:153 (7) - ctrl+g
01:49:113 (2,3,4,5,6) - 搞个星星形状？
01:56:313 (2) - add finish 顺便在这里弄个喷泉效果
03:32:313 (1) - nc
00:15:993 (5) - x160 y288
01:25:593 (1) - x320 y334
01:36:633 (1,3) - 这两个直线对齐
[hard]
00:15:993 (5) - x160 y288
01:25:593 (1) - x320 y334
01:36:633 (1,3) - 这两个直线对齐
01:38:553 (5,6) -

[Normal]
- - - - - - -
good luck

Last edited by bokito 2013-09-18T08:06:53+00:00, edited 1 time in total.

epocsodielaK

50 posts

Joined March 2012

epocsodielaK 2013-09-18T05:49:09+00:00

how to 摸？

[General]
既然加了SB是不是可以放瞎眼警告？

[Oblivious]
00:04:953 (5,1) - swap NC?
00:51:753 (4,5) - 老实说不太好看._.可能4和5隔得太远？
01:00:153 (4) - 好像太长了= =尝试下多弯几次？比如

SPOILER

01:04:233 (5) - 角度大点可能更好看
04:06:633 (4) - 没包好
音效无能为力orz

[Hard]
00:51:753 (4) - 位置太上，碰到血条了
01:02:553 (1) - ^

[Normal]
AImod里有几个distance snap问题
01:17:913 (5) - kiai NC
02:03:993 (5) - ^
01:48:633 (1) - 为啥这里有个clap前面01:02:553 (1) - 没有。。
03:57:273 (5) - NC

FoolB

53 posts

Joined June 2011

FoolB 2013-09-18T12:34:51+00:00

[Oblivious]
■ 00:19:113 (5,6) - 这里5和6叠起来感觉不够爽

可以这样

~~不过blanket就美丽了~~

■ 01:55:833 (1) - 这里和前面那个滑条靠太近啦

这样试试？

~~其实这图我画得不咋地~~

■ 03:04:713 (6,7,1) - 这里嘛...也是俩滑条靠得近

大家好我是“可以这样”君

6我叠在了3那里

■ 03:07:353 (6,7,8) - 似乎靠得有些近
■ 03:39:033 (6,7) - 这里做个blanket？

[Hard]
■ 04:11:673 (8,9,10) - 这里Ctrl+G？

[G's Normal]
■ 00:39:513 (1,2,3) - 滑条弧度太大了，没包住(其实好多是这样，比如02:48:153 (3,4) - )
■ 04:09:753 (2) - 这个滑条不如左移一点？干脆多遮一些

没了orz，我太弱

Melt

353 posts

Joined May 2011

Topic Starter

Melt 2013-09-18T16:40:07+00:00

bokito wrote:
[Obivious]
00:41:193 (4) -
00:47:913 (3,4,5,6,7) - 排成个星状？还是原来的摆法稍微修改了一下位置
00:56:793 (6,7,8,9) - 这句个我觉得距离不适当另外00:57:753 (10) - 建议不要和00:57:273 (8) - overlap 找不到地方放了orz
01:41:673 (3,4,5,6) - 这几个搞个菱形? 往左摆了一点
01:42:633 (1) - nc 感觉没必要
01:48:153 (7) - ctrl+g
01:49:113 (2,3,4,5,6) - 搞个星星形状？根据vocal 01:49:593(4,5,6,7)才应该是跳跃，说以1,2,3的ds是比较小的
01:56:313 (2) - add finish 顺便在这里弄个喷泉效果
03:32:313 (1) - nc
00:15:993 (5) - x160 y288？
01:25:593 (1) - x320 y334？这两个地方都放不过去啊o.o
01:36:633 (1,3) - 这两个直线对齐 fixed
[hard]
00:15:993 (5) - x160 y288 another fixed
01:25:593 (1) - x320 y334 感觉原来这个还行稍微动了一点
01:36:633 (1,3) - 这两个直线对齐
01:38:553 (5,6) - 原来这个还行0.0
[Normal]
- - - - - - -
good luck

thanks for modding

Melt

353 posts

Joined May 2011

Topic Starter

Melt 2013-09-18T16:47:39+00:00

epocsodielaK wrote:
how to 摸？

[General]
既然加了SB是不是可以放瞎眼警告？其实我感觉比nightcore什么的好多了，再有人提就加0.0

[Oblivious]
00:04:953 (5,1) - swap NC? 感觉没必要
00:51:753 (4,5) - 老实说不太好看._.可能4和5隔得太远？修正了一点距离
01:00:153 (4) - 好像太长了= =尝试下多弯几次？比如拉了半个小时还是觉得我用不来红点orz
SPOILER
01:04:233 (5) - 角度大点可能更好看好
04:06:633 (4) - 没包好 fixed
音效无能为力orz

[Hard]
00:51:753 (4) - 位置太上，碰到血条了其实感觉这种问题不是很大（逃
01:02:553 (1) - ^

[Normal]
AImod里有几个distance snap问题
01:17:913 (5) - kiai NC
02:03:993 (5) - ^
01:48:633 (1) - 为啥这里有个clap前面01:02:553 (1) - 没有。。
03:57:273 (5) - NC

Thanks for modding

Melt

353 posts

Joined May 2011

Topic Starter

Melt 2013-09-18T16:58:38+00:00

FoolB wrote:
[Oblivious]
■ 00:19:113 (5,6) - 这里5和6叠起来感觉不够爽
可以这样
~~不过blanket就美丽了~~
好主意
■ 01:55:833 (1) - 这里和前面那个滑条靠太近啦
这样试试？
~~其实这图我画得不咋地~~
感觉原来那个还将就稍微放开了点
■ 03:04:713 (6,7,1) - 这里嘛...也是俩滑条靠得近
大家好我是“可以这样”君
6我叠在了3那里
其实这图叠的东西也不算很多所以我还是把距离拉开了
■ 03:07:353 (6,7,8) - 似乎靠得有些近 ds不算小了orz
■ 03:39:033 (6,7) - 这里做个blanket？7是顺着6出去的方向上的

[Hard]
■ 04:11:673 (8,9,10) - 这里Ctrl+G？都快完了感觉ctrlG要被差评orz

[G's Normal]
■ 00:39:513 (1,2,3) - 滑条弧度太大了，没包住(其实好多是这样，比如02:48:153 (3,4) - )
■ 04:09:753 (2) - 这个滑条不如左移一点？干脆多遮一些

没了orz，我太弱

Thanks for modding :3

Evil_Twilight

587 posts

Joined July 2010

Evil_Twilight 2013-09-19T01:01:46+00:00

10crystalmask01

I suggest raising the slider velocity up a bit, since your sliders look so small and looks tightly placed together whenever they're 1/4 apart.
00:16:473 (1) - Try adding a finish or whistle on the head?

O
00:51:033 (4) - NC

O
00:58:233 (4) - ^

O
01:02:553 (1) - Add finish on the head?

O, i forgot to add finish here lol
01:37:113 (1,2) - Ugly overlap.

X
01:58:233 (4,5) - ^

X
03:54:873 (3,4) - ^

X
04:09:273 (1,2) - Try to move them apart?

X

epocsodielaK

AImod里有几个distance snap问题我怎麼沒有看到

01:17:913 (5) - kiai NC

O
02:03:993 (5) - ^

O
01:48:633 (1) - 为啥这里有个clap前面01:02:553 (1) - 没有。。

因為忘惹加
03:57:273 (5) - NC

O

FoolB

■ 00:39:513 (1,2,3) - 滑条弧度太大了，没包住(其实好多是这样，比如02:48:153 (3,4) - )

X, 不要在意小細節

■ 04:09:753 (2) - 这个滑条不如左移一点？干脆多遮一些

O, 移到旁邊去了

http://puu.sh/4uKuv.osu

Melt

353 posts

Joined May 2011

Topic Starter

Melt 2013-09-19T06:46:05+00:00

Updated

AruOtta

1,296 posts

Joined May 2012

AruOtta 2013-09-20T19:43:18+00:00

From your M4M request <3

[Easy]
00:56:793 (3) - Try this patern :

SPOILER

01:38:553 (2,3,4) - Try this :

SPOILER

01:55:353 (5,1) - Blanket ?
01:59:673 (5,1) - Try this :

SPOILER

02:27:033 (2,1) - Distance Snap
02:37:593 (7,8) - Try this (more easy) :

SPOILER

02:41:433 (2,3) - ^
02:45:273 (2,3) - ^
03:08:793 (5) - Try this :

SPOILER

03:33:753 (5) - Slider => Circle
03:49:113 (3,1) - ^
03:56:313 (4) - Try this :

SPOILER

[Hard]
Circle Size => 3 ?
00:15:993 (5,1) - Distance Snap
00:17:193 (2,3) - ^
00:23:193 (4,1) - ^
01:01:593 (6,7) - ^

[Oblivious]
Nothing to say ^^

Good Luck *u*

Melt

353 posts

Joined May 2011

Topic Starter

Melt 2013-09-21T07:37:47+00:00

Kenterz9 wrote:
From your M4M request <3

[Hard]
Circle Size => 3 ?its 4 ;w;
00:15:993 (5,1) - Distance Snap fixed
00:17:193 (2,3) - ^ changed a little
00:23:193 (4,1) - ^
01:01:593 (6,7) - ^ its fine :3

[Oblivious]
Nothing to say ^^

Good Luck *u*

Thanks for help ~

Keiko Minamoto

3 posts

Joined June 2012

Keiko Minamoto 2013-09-22T14:43:32+00:00

[General]

put epilepsy warning because of SB
BG-1.jpg & BG-2.jpg must be resized to a rankable SB size (the maximum is 800x600 pixels, although 640x480 is highly preferred)

[G's Normal]
00:06:873 (4,5,1) - bad flow
00:08:313 (5) - put it x 32 y 144
00:21:273 (1,2,3) - triangle not tidy
00:23:193 (3) - x 292 y 196
00:50:553 (3) - put this a bit down
00:51:033 (1,2,3) - same as 00:06:873 (4,5,1) -
00:52:473 (2) - x 272 y 12
00:55:833 (2,3) - overlap
00:56:793 (3) - x 96 y 288
00:56:793 (4) - because of this ^, move to x 188 y 324
01:07:353 (2,3,4,5,6) - hexagon shaped
01:08:313 (3,4,5,6) - make it tidier

SPOILER

01:08:313 (3) - x 224 y 340
01:08:793 (4) - x 168 y 256
01:09:273 (5) - x 208 y 164
01:09:753 (6) - x 308 y 160

01:37:113 (1,2) - overlap
01:52:473 (1,2,3,4) - bad flow
01:53:913 (3) - move to x 260 y 48
01:58:233 (4,5) - overlap
03:08:793 (5,1) - overlap
03:46:713 (2,3) - move it to make it blanket with 03:47:673 (1) -

SPOILER

03:46:713 (2) - x 348 y 84
03:47:193 (3) - x 312 y 176

03:54:873 (3,4) - overlap

[Hard]
01:26:313 (2) - move to x 378 y 278 - to make it blanket with 01:25:593 (1) -
01:27:753 (3,4,5) - change because of this ^

SPOILER

01:27:753 (3) - x 378 y 278
01:27:993 (4) - x 482 y 216
01:28:233 (5) - x 376 y 155

01:28:473 (6) - move to x 438 y 64 - to make blanket with 01:28:233 (5) -
01:29:193 (7) - move to x 216 y 92 - to make M curve with 01:28:473 (6) - and 01:29:433 (1) -

[Oblivious]
00:47:913 (3,4,5,6,7) - tidier, make it star-shaped?

SPOILER

00:47:913 (3) - x 90 y 122
00:48:153 (4) - x 168 y 196
00:48:393 (5) - x 12 y 184
00:48:633 (6) - x 136 y 288
00:48:873 (7) - x 32 y 284

01:07:113 (5,6,7) - bad flow

SPOILER

01:07:353 (6) - x 264 y 280
01:07:593 (7) - x 156 y 320

01:08:313 (1,3,5) - because of 01:07:593 (7) - moved

SPOILER

01:08:313 (1) - x 147 y 328
01:08:793 (3) - x 134 y 327
01:09:273 (5) - x 126 y 322

01:49:113 (2) - stack it to 01:50:313 (7) - head (x 290 y 163)
01:42:393 (6) - stack it to 01:42:633 (7) - (x 499 y 300)

I think that's all, good luck for ranked!

Melt

353 posts

Joined May 2011

Topic Starter

Melt 2013-09-23T13:46:40+00:00

Keiko Minamoto wrote:
[Hard]
01:26:313 (2) - move to x 378 y 278 - to make it blanket with 01:25:593 (1) -
the 01:25:593(1)'s tail is in the extension line of the sldier01:26:313(2)，changed a little in my way
01:27:753 (3,4,5) - change because of this ^
SPOILER
01:27:753 (3) - x 378 y 278
01:27:993 (4) - x 482 y 216
01:28:233 (5) - x 376 y 155
01:28:473 (6) - move to x 438 y 64 - to make blanket with 01:28:233 (5) -
01:29:193 (7) - move to x 216 y 92 - to make M curve with 01:28:473 (6) - and 01:29:433 (1) -

[Oblivious]
00:47:913 (3,4,5,6,7) - tidier, make it star-shaped?
SPOILER
00:47:913 (3) - x 90 y 122
00:48:153 (4) - x 168 y 196
00:48:393 (5) - x 12 y 184
00:48:633 (6) - x 136 y 288
00:48:873 (7) - x 32 y 284
the vocal changed at the time point 00:48:153(4) so i used a jump here
01:07:113 (5,6,7) - bad flow another fixed
SPOILER
01:07:353 (6) - x 264 y 280
01:07:593 (7) - x 156 y 320
01:08:313 (1,3,5) - because of 01:07:593 (7) - moved
SPOILER
01:08:313 (1) - x 147 y 328
01:08:793 (3) - x 134 y 327
01:09:273 (5) - x 126 y 322
01:49:113 (2) - stack it to 01:50:313 (7) - head (x 290 y 163) same vocal changes as above
01:42:393 (6) - stack it to 01:42:633 (7) - (x 499 y 300)

I think that's all, good luck for ranked!

Thanks for modding :3

Princess God

135 posts

Joined June 2010

Princess God 2013-09-30T06:18:38+00:00

说好的mod……虽然是挺晚的了
我认为最好改改的地方会用*标记

Another
00:20:313 (1) - Flip Vertically，并移动到（8,128）,同时00:21:033 (2) - 移动到（192,72）
00:49:113 (8) - 延长一个四分拍，01:42:873 (8) - 这里也是一个意见
01:06:873 (4,5) - 合并成一个滑条
01:10:233 (1) - 减少一个四分拍，然后在原来的结尾处加个滑条，一直到01:10:953 (2) - 的位置
以上两处的重音感觉适合突出
01:36:873 (2) - 移动到（384,264）
01:45:513 (4) - 移动到（256,56）
01:48:153 (7) - Reverse Selection
03:29:673 (3,4) - 这里的节奏是刻意为之么？
03:41:793 可以加一个note
04:12:753 (1) - 延长到04:19:113

~~好的，今次就偷个懒，就不额外附赠其他难度的mod啦~~~

Melt

353 posts

Joined May 2011

Topic Starter

Melt 2013-10-04T04:40:30+00:00

Nightcore Princess G wrote:
说好的mod……虽然是挺晚的了

sb出了点问题，等改好了一起传orz

Melt

353 posts

Joined May 2011

Topic Starter

Melt 2013-10-05T09:34:36+00:00

Nightcore Princess G wrote:
说好的mod……虽然是挺晚的了
我认为最好改改的地方会用*标记

Another
00:20:313 (1) - Flip Vertically，并移动到（8,128）,同时00:21:033 (2) - 移动到（192,72）fixed
00:49:113 (8) - 延长一个四分拍，01:42:873 (8) - 这里也是一个意见稍微改了下
01:06:873 (4,5) - 合并成一个滑条 5是vocal的起始所以没改
01:10:233 (1) - 减少一个四分拍，然后在原来的结尾处加个滑条，一直到01:10:953 (2) - 的位置
以上两处的重音感觉适合突出
01:36:873 (2) - 移动到（384,264）好
01:45:513 (4) - 移动到（256,56）移动了一点点，这里没想做blanket的
01:48:153 (7) - Reverse Selection
03:29:673 (3,4) - 这里的节奏是刻意为之么？对，我在考虑要不要加个nc ;w;
03:41:793 可以加一个note
04:12:753 (1) - 延长到04:19:113

~~好的，今次就偷个懒，就不额外附赠其他难度的mod啦~~~

Thanks for modding~
updated

Scorpiour

2,633 posts

Joined May 2011

Scorpiour 2013-11-19T13:10:34+00:00

Hi there~~mod from queue
sorry for my late >.<

red - must be fixed
blue - highly recommend to consider
black - only suggestions

[General]

Stack Leneincy 0.3意义不明，有什么特殊需求吗？一般来说尽量放在0.7的默认位置比较好。

[Oblivious]

00:12:873 (3) - ctrl+g一下？我觉得换个方向会更贴近你在前奏段的跳跃感
00:27:753 (6,1) - 这里也是我认为ctrl+g一下感觉会更好的地方，当然如果交换的话00:28:353 (2) - 也要调整下位置
00:38:553 (6,7,8) - 这里，现在的stack总有点破坏跳跃flow的感觉，因为(8)和后面的slider之间是1/2的间距，而白线三连本身停顿感已经足够了，再原地stack一下反而变得拖沓了。尝试一下把(6,7,8)放在105:102附近，然后slider放到141:255，看看效果？
00:56:793 (6,7,8,9,10) - 这里我可能会用这个顺序？在慢速的slider结束后一个大跳出去来保持整体的跳跃感
SPOILER
01:00:153 (4) - 这要是我肯定ctrl+g了……
01:03:033 (2) - 位置感觉有点怪……放到200:20或者87:14看看？
01:11:193 (3) - 这里其实是下一句的起点，所以无论是NC还是Stack都觉得有点违和
01:13:593 (3) - ctrl+g一下？
01:15:033 (7) - 这个stack真的有些煞风景了……放到327:196吧，起码……
01:23:193 (5) - 角度调成斜向上会感觉更舒服一些像这样：
SPOILER
01:29:433 (1) - 由于01:29:913 - 的clap，我还是觉得2个slider会更舒服
01:41:673 (3,4,5,6,7) - 试试看这样跳？
SPOILER
01:44:793 (3) - 这里也是我认为ctrl+g后感觉会更好的地方
01:53:433 (1) - 也许可以试试放在220:173?
02:47:193 (1) - flow有点不舒服，试试放在295:255，像这个形状：
SPOILER
03:29:913 (4,5) - 要是我的话肯定ctrl+g了，突然这么近好別手……
03:35:913 (7,8) - 建议分别ctrl+g
04:02:313 (6) - 根据这里音乐节奏的话，建议放到04:02:433 - 并且移动到(7)那里
04:04:233 (7) - ^，听起来会舒服很多
04:09:993 (7) - ^，依然
04:11:913 (6) - ^，还是

整体感觉还不错有些地方flow有点不是很流畅

[Hard]

01:32:793 (12) - 读图上有点不舒服
02:58:473 (2) - 有点偷懒的感觉，这里的节奏这样会更舒服一点吧

[G's Normal]

换一套有静音sliderslide的音效？这sliderslide音听着略不爽
然后把combo colour和另外两个diff一样分段整理起来比较好
00:32:793 (1) - 然后从这里开始到vocal段(00:43:473 (1) - )之前，clap音听起来略重了感觉用的不是很好
02:37:593 (7,8) - 感觉这节奏没什么必要，听起来效果也一般，后面几个也是……
03:17:073 (1) - 太长了………………

Generally fine, call me back to recheck when you're ready

Evil_Twilight

587 posts

Joined July 2010

Evil_Twilight 2013-11-21T06:26:25+00:00

Kenterz9

00:56:793 (3) - Try this patern :

X
01:38:553 (2,3,4) - Try this :

O
01:55:353 (5,1) - Blanket ?

X
01:59:673 (5,1) - Try this :

O
02:27:033 (2,1) - Distance Snap

X
02:37:593 (7,8) - Try this (more easy) :

X
02:41:433 (2,3) - ^

X
02:45:273 (2,3) - ^

X
03:08:793 (5) - Try this :

X
03:33:753 (5) - Slider => Circle

X
03:49:113 (3,1) - ^

X
03:56:313 (4) - Try this :

X

Keiko Minamoto

00:06:873 (4,5,1) - bad flow
00:08:313 (5) - put it x 32 y 144

X
00:21:273 (1,2,3) - triangle not tidy
00:23:193 (3) - x 292 y 196

O
00:50:553 (3) - put this a bit down

O
00:51:033 (1,2,3) - same as 00:06:873 (4,5,1) -
00:52:473 (2) - x 272 y 12

X
00:55:833 (2,3) - overlap
00:56:793 (3) - x 96 y 288

fixed
00:56:793 (4) - because of this ^, move to x 188 y 324
01:07:353 (2,3,4,5,6) - hexagon shaped
01:08:313 (3,4,5,6) - make it tidier

fixed
01:37:113 (1,2) - overlap

fixed
01:52:473 (1,2,3,4) - bad flow
01:53:913 (3) - move to x 260 y 48

X
01:58:233 (4,5) - overlap

fixed
03:08:793 (5,1) - overlap

X
03:46:713 (2,3) - move it to make it blanket with 03:47:673 (1) -

X
03:54:873 (3,4) - overlap

X

Scorpiour

换一套有静音sliderslide的音效？这sliderslide音听着略不爽

好
然后把combo colour和另外两个diff一样分段整理起来比较好
00:32:793 (1) - 然后从这里开始到vocal段(00:43:473 (1) - )之前，clap音听起来略重了感觉用的不是很好

改小聲了
02:37:593 (7,8) - 感觉这节奏没什么必要，听起来效果也一般，后面几个也是……

這裡窩是跟著鼓聲下的TA T
03:17:073 (1) - 太长了………………

縮短了一小節夠不夠阿

http://puu.sh/5oJQE.osu

Melt

353 posts

Joined May 2011

Topic Starter

Melt 2013-11-21T12:56:42+00:00

Scorpiour wrote:
Hi there~~mod from queue
sorry for my late >.<

red - must be fixed
blue - highly recommend to consider
black - only suggestions

[General]
Stack Leneincy 0.3意义不明，有什么特殊需求吗？一般来说尽量放在0.7的默认位置比较好。只是为了让单点不错开0.0 我自己不太喜欢高sl，感觉有点破坏结构orz
[Oblivious]
00:12:873 (3) - ctrl+g一下？我觉得换个方向会更贴近你在前奏段的跳跃感 fixed
00:27:753 (6,1) - 这里也是我认为ctrl+g一下感觉会更好的地方，当然如果交换的话00:28:353 (2) - 也要调整下位置 fixed
00:38:553 (6,7,8) - 这里，现在的stack总有点破坏跳跃flow的感觉，因为(8)和后面的slider之间是1/2的间距，而白线三连本身停顿感已经足够了，再原地stack一下反而变得拖沓了。尝试一下把(6,7,8)放在105:102附近，然后slider放到141:255，看看效果？好
00:56:793 (6,7,8,9,10) - 这里我可能会用这个顺序？在慢速的slider结束后一个大跳出去来保持整体的跳跃感
SPOILER
因为整体不是很难所以感觉6放在最远端距离有点大，所以换了一个排法
01:00:153 (4) - 这要是我肯定ctrl+g了…… fixed
01:03:033 (2) - 位置感觉有点怪……放到200:20或者87:14看看？2.3想跟4还有5照应一下，所以摆成竖的了
01:11:193 (3) - 这里其实是下一句的起点，所以无论是NC还是Stack都觉得有点违和 fixed，2叠了一下
01:13:593 (3) - ctrl+g一下？感觉现在这样还能看orz
01:15:033 (7) - 这个stack真的有些煞风景了……放到327:196吧，起码…… 好
01:23:193 (5) - 角度调成斜向上会感觉更舒服一些像这样：
SPOILER
好
01:29:433 (1) - 由于01:29:913 - 的clap，我还是觉得2个slider会更舒服 fixed
01:41:673 (3,4,5,6,7) - 试试看这样跳？
SPOILER
因为是跟vocal（4,5）（6,7）分成两组跳了，所以没动
01:44:793 (3) - 这里也是我认为ctrl+g后感觉会更好的地方 fixed
01:53:433 (1) - 也许可以试试放在220:173? 1,2,3,4都动了一点点
02:47:193 (1) - flow有点不舒服，试试放在295:255，像这个形状：
SPOILER
好
03:29:913 (4,5) - 要是我的话肯定ctrl+g了，突然这么近好別手…… 这一段重新排了一下
03:35:913 (7,8) - 建议分别ctrl+g fixed
04:02:313 (6) - 根据这里音乐节奏的话，建议放到04:02:433 - 并且移动到(7)那里 fixed
04:04:233 (7) - ^，听起来会舒服很多 fixed
04:09:993 (7) - ^，依然 fixed
04:11:913 (6) - ^，还是 fixed
整体感觉还不错有些地方flow有点不是很流畅

[Hard]
01:32:793 (12) - 读图上有点不舒服
02:58:473 (2) - 有点偷懒的感觉，这里的节奏这样会更舒服一点吧
All fixed

Generally fine, call me back to recheck when you're ready

Thanks for help :3

Scorpiour

2,633 posts

Joined May 2011

Scorpiour 2013-11-21T13:13:52+00:00

Bubbled~~!!

Melt

353 posts

Joined May 2011

Topic Starter

Melt 2013-11-21T13:46:48+00:00

thanks >.<

spboxer3

Global Moderator

3,616 posts

Joined November 2009

spboxer3 2013-11-26T14:49:31+00:00

mod log

20:39 Melt: (／・ω・)／薯片
21:11 spboxer3: 好
21:12 Melt: 还以为你不见了w
21:13 spboxer3: 剛剛去睡
21:13 spboxer3: 00:22:233 (5,6,7,8) - 
21:14 spboxer3: 建議是56位置對調 78也對調
21:14 spboxer3: 不然00:23:672 (8,1) - 位置太近了
21:15 spboxer3: 一點重音的感覺也沒有
21:15 spboxer3: 重點是前面的slider都是跳 可是這邊沒有跳很奇怪
21:15 Melt: 好
21:15 Melt: 了解
21:17 spboxer3: 00:48:153 (4,5,6,7) - 這4個給人感覺剛好是反過來的 應該是漸強而不是漸弱 但是你的spacing作的是漸弱
21:17 Melt: 反过来和上面那个3做个3角如何
21:19 spboxer3: 其實我覺得00:48:153 (4,6) - 交換一下位置感覺挺不錯的
21:19 spboxer3: 感覺間距就沒有長短的問題
21:19 Melt: 哦哦
21:20 Melt: 改掉了
21:21 spboxer3: 00:52:473 (5) - 233這彎的很無意義阿
21:21 Melt: 其实是想在白线那个位置用一个红点啦.-.
21:21 spboxer3: 恩 我知道
21:22 spboxer3: 我也只是吐槽>_>
21:22 Melt: 其实我不会用红点来着orz 一般都是3点
21:22 spboxer3: 00:56:793 (6,7,8,9,10) - ->9 8 7 6 10
21:23 spboxer3: 這樣擺 是我比較建議的
21:23 spboxer3: 00:57:513 (9,10) - 因為這邊應該是要有移動的感覺
21:23 spboxer3: 定點定的很沒道理
21:23 spboxer3: 給我的感覺啦 看你覺得如何
21:23 Melt: 嗯
21:24 Melt: 好像最开始就是这样的..后来给改掉了 我再看看
21:26 spboxer3: 01:07:353 (6,7,8,9) - 這邊給我感覺是一段內被分成兩個部分 但是我覺得該分開的位置反倒是01:07:113 (5,6) -  三個都分開我覺得OK 但是只分開01:07:593 (7,8) - 讓人感覺怪怪的
21:28 Melt: http://puu.sh/5tOjG.jpg 这样如何
21:29 spboxer3: 我覺得可以更美化些 不過你覺得OK也行
21:30 spboxer3: 或許你可以這樣做
21:30 spboxer3: 01:07:353 (6,7) - 對調01:07:833 (8,9) - 對調
21:32 spboxer3: 01:11:193 (3,4,5) - 我會做的更跳點變成453的排法 按照音高擺位置 雖然這樣01:11:673 (5,6) - 的接法會有個大跳
21:33 Melt: 这样5,6是不是间距太大了 这图本来不是很难的0 0
21:35 Melt: 好改了> >
21:35 spboxer3: 嘛~看你了 反正是我容許範圍>_>
21:35 spboxer3: 你覺得那種好你決定:)
21:35 spboxer3: 我提供意見而已
21:35 Melt: 发现后面接着就是一个差不多的ds..
21:35 spboxer3: >_>
21:38 spboxer3: 01:47:673 (6,7,1) - 這距離>_>
21:38 spboxer3: 前頭這麼開 最後1加速感覺會嚇人>_>
21:40 Melt: 往中间收了点....点...
21:40 spboxer3: 恩恩 沒關係 我只是提出來而已
21:40 spboxer3: 01:53:433 (1,3,5) - 
21:40 spboxer3: 這個給我的感覺應該作相同的動作 (小跳)
21:40 spboxer3: 而你在5的位置卻放在定點
21:41 Melt: 感觉vocal的话到5那里已经收了orz
21:41 Melt: 我放下面吧
21:42 spboxer3: 我覺得移到x200y216也是不錯的選擇 
21:42 spboxer3: 恩...你說的也是 看你的感覺吧
21:43 Melt: 嗯
21:47 spboxer3: 02:55:833 (1,2,3,4) - 我來做的話會把24反向啦 因為這地方音樂沒有很明顯的讓間距縮短 所以我會讓02:55:833 (1,2) - 與02:56:313 (3,4) - 保持同樣的間距
21:49 spboxer3: 03:00:153 (5,6,7) - 間距貌似有點...短? 感覺和音樂的契合度變少了 前面的擺法明顯比較合 但是這邊卻變短了
21:49 Melt: 好的 顺便我把5移的跟6对称了.
21:50 Melt: 好 6往外拉了
21:51 spboxer3: 03:30:153 (5,6) - 同樣是間距給人的感覺 感覺這個點應該爆發才對 可是相比前頭卻萎了
21:54 Melt: http://puu.sh/5tP94.jpg 这个行么
21:54 spboxer3: 03:33:273 (9) - 建議移到和03:31:593 (2) - 同位置
21:54 spboxer3: 因為聽音樂03:32:793 (7,8,9) - 並不應該是同間距的
21:55 spboxer3: 8~9之間應該要短點
21:55 Melt: 嗯
21:56 spboxer3: 恩...剛剛你給的那張圖我覺得有個點有問題 大跳應該下在03:29:673 (3,4) - 間比較適合 而不是03:29:913 (4,5) - 
21:57 Melt: 好 我再调调
21:57 spboxer3: 起碼03:29:913 (4,5) - 的距離給我的感覺應該和03:29:433 (2,3) - 一致會比較合
21:59 Melt: 于是我把2,4叠一起了.-.
22:00 spboxer3: :o
22:00 spboxer3: 03:33:273 (9) - 這個呢?
22:01 Melt: http://puu.sh/5tPmR.jpg
22:02 spboxer3: 03:42:633 (3) - move到5頭如何?
22:03 Melt: 好  顺便2移到6上面去了
22:04 spboxer3: 我覺得2不用移
22:04 spboxer3: 看你感覺吧~
22:04 Melt: 嗯
22:05 spboxer3: 大概這樣吧~
22:06 Melt: 好的w
22:09 spboxer3: 傳完了嗎?
22:09 Melt: 诶 我以为还看hard 马上
22:10 spboxer3: 看完了._.
22:11 Melt: 传好了
22:11 spboxer3: 00:56:793 (6,7,8,9,10) - 這地方還是保持嗎?
22:12 Melt: 咦
22:12 spboxer3: 等等
22:14 spboxer3: 02:56:793 (5,6) - orz...我覺得你這個對稱還不如之前那樣來的好看說
22:15 Melt: 好orz
22:16 spboxer3: 其他那兩個呢?
22:16 spboxer3: 有要改嗎??
22:16 Melt: 56秒那个么 改了
22:17 spboxer3: 還有這個 01:10:953 (2,3,4,5,6) - 
22:18 spboxer3: 我剛剛recheck的時候忘記打上來了orz...
22:19 Melt: 其实我觉得这里改的话03:50:553 (4,5,6) - 是不是也改一下好点
22:19 Melt: 03:35:193 (4,5,6) - 还有这里
22:20 spboxer3: 恩...主要是因為你剛剛那個點沒有做出音高的變化 甚至是相反的 後來你說的兩個點都有做到 雖然沒有很明顯
22:20 spboxer3: 看你的選擇吧
22:21 Melt: 01:11:193 (3,4,5,6) - 4和5换一下如何
22:22 Melt: 哦 orz
22:22 Melt: 我懂了
22:22 spboxer3: 這樣的話會變成01:10:953 (2,3) - 的間距...(ry
22:24 Melt: 还是按之前你给的453的顺序改了
22:24 spboxer3: 恩恩
22:25 spboxer3: 傳了嗎
22:27 Melt: 好了
22:30 spboxer3: title/artist有要改色?
22:30 Melt: 唔
22:30 Melt: 粉色成么
22:30 Melt: 就note那个
22:30 spboxer3: 哪個?
22:31 Melt: combo colour5
22:31 spboxer3: 然後artist和title是分開的
22:32 Melt: 都一个色吧0 0
22:32 Melt: 话说以前都没改过orz
22:32 spboxer3: >_>
22:32 Melt: 这个出现的时间也可以改么
22:32 spboxer3: 可以
22:33 Melt: 02:03:993 break这里吧0 0
22:33 Melt: 02:03:993
22:36 spboxer3: 去看看
22:39 Melt: 02:05:433 orz这个点吧
22:40 Melt: 麻烦了orz
22:40 spboxer3: 好了
22:40 spboxer3: 去看看
22:40 Melt: 好的0 0
22:41 spboxer3: 用兩倍速跳過阿>_>
22:41 Melt: 跳了0 0
22:41 Melt: edit里不能看么这个.
22:42 spboxer3: 不能
22:43 Melt: 诶 就这样吧
22:43 spboxer3: 其他沒有要動的?
22:43 Melt: 没了
22:43 spboxer3: OK