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mamenoi - Tabi no Owari

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Midasmens
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This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2014年3月11日 星期二 at 22:59:08

Artist: mamenoi
Title: Tabi no Owari
Tags: tachyon yanaginagi manyo evil_twilight autumn
BPM: 140
Filesize: 5795kb
Play Time: 03:27
Difficulties Available:
  1. Atm's Normal (2.71 stars, 232 notes)
  2. G's Hard (4.77 stars, 456 notes)
  3. Insane (4.89 stars, 478 notes)
Download: mamenoi - Tabi no Owari
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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mamenoi(MANYO&やなぎなぎ) 1st Album 『Tachyon』 Track 08
旅の終わり My 8th beatmap~ My 2nd map with Storyboard~


Whatever is worth doing at all is worth doing well.
2013/07/08 add Autumn's Normal diff
2013/07/16 add G's Hard diff
2013/07/21 change StoryBoard effect / add white.png please redownload
2014/01/18 remap the Owari (Insane) diff.
2014/01/19 add skin by S o a p done~
Atm's Normal by Autumn done~
G's Hard by Evil_Twilight done~
Insane by me done~
StoryBoard by me done~
Last edited by Midasmens , edited 57 times in total.
[CSGA]Ar3sgice
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先占个沙发
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O_O
cmn_891127
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终于传了~
Foreverends
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20:23 Midasmens: kemu
20:23 Midasmens: !
20:23 Foreverends: !!!
20:24 Foreverends: 被發現了!!!
20:25 Midasmens: 新坑么？
20:25 Foreverends: 不,只是試試有沒有靈感再作圖;w;
20:26 Midasmens: 哦哦
20:26 Midasmens: 话说小米新图求试
20:26 Foreverends: come on baby
20:26 Midasmens: http://puu.sh/2UFxl.osz
20:27 Foreverends: 來了owo
20:31 Foreverends: 很不錯0.0
20:31 Foreverends: 好玩0.0
20:31 Midasmens: 谢谢
20:32 Foreverends: btw就od一定要8么?;w;
20:32 Midasmens: 感觉可以8于是就8了 xD
20:32 Foreverends: 7好一點吧;w;
20:33 Midasmens: 等马上rank图了~ 上传上去mod再说吧
20:33 Foreverends: 貌似更好打
20:33 Midasmens: 乃也可以骗KD（pia
20:33 Foreverends: mark...i will mod this(maybe
20:33 Foreverends: 立刻savelog ;3
20:34 Midasmens: xD
20:34 Foreverends: 上傳後來騙kd ;D
20:34 *Foreverends is editing mamenoi - Tabi no Owari [Owari]
自己也覺得不好意思領kd(羞
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Midasmens
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20:23 Midasmens: kemu
20:23 Midasmens: !
20:23 Foreverends: !!!
20:24 Foreverends: 被發現了!!!
20:25 Midasmens: 新坑么？
20:25 Foreverends: 不,只是試試有沒有靈感再作圖;w;
20:26 Midasmens: 哦哦
20:26 Midasmens: 话说小米新图求试
20:26 Foreverends: come on baby
20:26 Midasmens: http://puu.sh/2UFxl.osz
20:27 Foreverends: 來了owo
20:31 Foreverends: 很不錯0.0
20:31 Foreverends: 好玩0.0
20:31 Midasmens: 谢谢
20:32 Foreverends: btw就od一定要8么?;w;
20:32 Midasmens: 感觉可以8于是就8了 xD
20:32 Foreverends: 7好一點吧;w;
20:33 Midasmens: 等马上rank图了~ 上传上去mod再说吧
20:33 Foreverends: 貌似更好打
20:33 Midasmens: 乃也可以骗KD（pia
20:33 Foreverends: mark...i will mod this(maybe
20:33 Foreverends: 立刻savelog ;3
20:34 Midasmens: xD
20:34 Foreverends: 上傳後來騙kd ;D
20:34 *Foreverends is editing mamenoi - Tabi no Owari [Owari]
自己也覺得不好意思領kd(羞
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Change OD to 7
Thanks~
Zero__wind
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Zero__wind
我是个抢kd的坏人（>.<）
Owari
考虑到01:17:582 - 这种gap的存在 强烈建议HP6
00:04:725 - 感觉40~50音量比较好 而且我在思考00:04:725 (1) - 这个单独的NC的必要性=。=
00:15:011 - ^ 还有类似的就不说了
00:06:868 (5,2) - 它俩或许可以交尾尾巴重合 虽然可能不是很必要
00:26:047 (1) - 这个combo突然很长
00:33:440 (4) - 对比前后间距 不太科学 3到4是顺方向的 还这么近 4到1是反着的 还很远
00:39:011 (1) - 或许结尾用soft
00:49:940 (4,5) - 间距？我觉得5可以叠在前一个5的脑袋上
00:51:225 (1) - 这NC为什么放在这里我是百思不得其解 后面的几个也是 你或者长白线起或者vocal的句首起 选一个呗？还是你想怎样=。=
00:52:297 (6) - 对比前后间距，建议让7离远点儿
00:56:154 (2) - 这里也是 我感觉你从一开始的排版 就已经让你整张图里所有类似这样的小间距变得不合理了
00:57:011 (7) - 这个slider应该是3/4 slider的 考虑相应调一调位置
01:03:440 (1) - 这个骤停真的也炒鸡别扭 尤其在这个我认为是一个vocal重音的地方 http://puu.sh/3OE0x.jpg 仅供参考
01:07:940 (2,3) - 这个地方虽然也是小间距 但是由于它是circle-->slider 不是slider-->circle 所以我不会说这里怎么不好 虽然是我的话大概还是会稍微拉远一点
01:14:582 (6,7) - 可以合并成一个slider 然后在后面白线加个circle再起spinner？
01:20:582 (2) - 还是觉得太近 类似的我还是不说了
01:36:868 (1,2,3,4) - 我真的觉得这太近了 我觉得当成1/4 slider串一通点完了
01:51:011 (1) - 这里起的段落为什么还要用那么多normal和clap音效？违和吧
02:07:725 (1) - 这个可以CTRL+G
看的我都想学做SB了 OAQ
02:22:190 (2,3) - 建议换成1/4 slider 然后把02:21:868 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 这整个一段的note的间距都拉大 这里应该营造出一种突如其来的开阔感 绕大圈这类的flow会比较适合 不然我觉得你的SB效果就可惜了
02:28:082 - 我觉得这里叠在后面slider上起3连比较好 这里连贯节奏突然断了感觉很不自然 因为你前面根本就不是在跟vocal
02:34:297 (1) - body上的whistle？呃 这么说来 这之前我没有很仔细地去听有没有其他这种情况…不是刻意加的话就去掉吧 自己查一查其他的
02:41:368 (2) - 离前面太近了 误导性很强 上面那么大一片空旷区域可以让它去填充一下的
02:45:011 (3) - 如果是我一定会转角度拉远 这里是重音 你这样的小间距很没有效果的 http://puu.sh/3OEFW.jpg
02:46:297 (1) - 要是不太愉快的骤停imo
02:47:582 (1) - 这slider都是适合加body上的whistle 不过好像其实不太听得见=。=
02:54:440 (6,7,8) - 在这个段落我不提倡用slider后面接连打的排版 这样显得很拘泥 没有音乐给人的开阔的感觉 不大气
03:15:011 (4,5,6) - 相比之下我对这里毫无反感 希望你体会一下=。=
03:19:082 (3,4) - 我觉得它俩该CTRL+G 因为03:17:582 (2,3,4,5,6,1) - 这里营造了一个很强的逆时针flow

G's Hard
00:04:725 - 建议用40~50的音量 还有其他类似的地方
00:31:297 (1,2,3) - 明明1的地方是长音 为什么这样？感觉很违和 即使背景音乐也不是应该连续拍的啊
00:43:725 (4) - 或许尾巴上也clap
00:49:297 (1) - 头上不finish么
00:57:868 (3,1) - 这个地方节奏不太对 应该是在00:57:868 - 这里起3连 后面1的那个地方一个单拍
00:59:154 (4) - 这个地方感觉soft比较好？连续normal太多了
01:14:368 (2,3,4) - 类似这样的音乐比人声更强的地方加一些whistle呗？
01:22:082 (1,2) - 感觉有点太弯了
01:53:582 (3,4) - 蓝线折返还是有点奇怪=。=
02:11:154 (5,1) - 为何感觉很难看
02:31:726 (4) - soft？ 连续normal太多了的感觉
02:44:797 (7,1) - 感觉应该在现在7结束的时间起滑条比较好？

Autumn's Normal
00:03:011 (3) - 左1grid可以不overlap
00:48:225 - 类似的多余绿线删掉
01:24:011 (5,6) - 一起左2grid 可以让6的尾巴和4嵌套得好一点 后面的1要微调一下保证距离稳定
02:27:440 (3) - clap？
02:32:154 (1,3,5) - 尾巴上都不clap么？ 这一段自己查一查
最后的spinner跟的那个音好像在03:27:011 - 就结束了 建议在这里结束spinner 而且我觉得用绿线递减音量配合音乐会好一些

That's all
Good luck
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ts8zs
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20:23 Midasmens: kemu
20:23 Midasmens: !
20:23 Foreverends: !!!
20:24 Foreverends: 被發現了!!!
20:25 Midasmens: 新坑么？
20:25 Foreverends: 不,只是試試有沒有靈感再作圖;w;
20:26 Midasmens: 哦哦
20:26 Midasmens: 话说小米新图求试
20:26 Foreverends: come on baby
20:26 Midasmens: http://puu.sh/2UFxl.osz
20:27 Foreverends: 來了owo
20:31 Foreverends: 很不錯0.0
20:31 Foreverends: 好玩0.0
20:31 Midasmens: 谢谢
20:32 Foreverends: btw就od一定要8么?;w;
20:32 Midasmens: 感觉可以8于是就8了 xD
20:32 Foreverends: 7好一點吧;w;
20:33 Midasmens: 等马上rank图了~ 上传上去mod再说吧
20:33 Foreverends: 貌似更好打
20:33 Midasmens: 乃也可以骗KD（pia
20:33 Foreverends: mark...i will mod this(maybe
20:33 Foreverends: 立刻savelog ;3
20:34 Midasmens: xD
20:34 Foreverends: 上傳後來騙kd ;D
20:34 *Foreverends is editing mamenoi - Tabi no Owari [Owari]
自己也覺得不好意思領kd(羞
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damian_q
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打酱油
buy some sauce
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damian_q
好歌，好图，Mod不能，送颗星
Midasmens
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damian_q wrote:

好歌，好图，Mod不能，送颗星
谢谢！ :D
Evil_Twilight
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Evil_Twilight

Zero__wind wrote:

我是个抢kd的坏人（>.<）

G's Hard
00:04:725 - 建议用40~50的音量 还有其他类似的地方 :arrow: O
00:31:297 (1,2,3) - 明明1的地方是长音 为什么这样？感觉很违和 即使背景音乐也不是应该连续拍的啊 :arrow: X
00:43:725 (4) - 或许尾巴上也clap :arrow: O
00:49:297 (1) - 头上不finish么 :arrow: 你是指哪個的finish
00:57:868 (3,1) - 这个地方节奏不太对 应该是在00:57:868 - 这里起3连 后面1的那个地方一个单拍 :arrow: X
00:59:154 (4) - 这个地方感觉soft比较好？连续normal太多了 :arrow: X
01:14:368 (2,3,4) - 类似这样的音乐比人声更强的地方加一些whistle呗？ :arrow: O
01:22:082 (1,2) - 感觉有点太弯了 :arrow: O
01:53:582 (3,4) - 蓝线折返还是有点奇怪=。= :arrow: X, 因為長的slider放不下
02:11:154 (5,1) - 为何感觉很难看 :arrow: 因為5太短惹
02:31:726 (4) - soft？ 连续normal太多了的感觉 :arrow: X
02:44:797 (7,1) - 感觉应该在现在7结束的时间起滑条比较好？ :arrow: X, 記得這裡我是跟像小提琴聲音的東西放的

That's all
Good luck
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憤怒的我只好快速簡潔回你 :cry:

http://puu.sh/3QpPM.rar o3o
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Autumn
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Autumn

Zero__wind wrote:

00:03:011 (3) - 左1grid可以不overlap OK
00:48:225 - 类似的多余绿线删掉 OK
01:24:011 (5,6) - 一起左2grid 可以让6的尾巴和4嵌套得好一点 后面的1要微调一下保证距离稳定 OK
02:27:440 (3) - clap？OK
02:32:154 (1,3,5) - 尾巴上都不clap么？ 这一段自己查一查 加上了 少数地方跟BGM
最后的spinner跟的那个音好像在03:27:011 - 就结束了 建议在这里结束spinner 而且我觉得用绿线递减音量配合音乐会好一些
加了绿线调整音量,结尾时间没变
Thank you~
ts8zs
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ts8zs
From QQGroup
[Owari]
00:12:440 (5,6) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/923288
00:15:011 (1) - 换成两点定位建议反着画然后Ctrl+G._.
00:18:011 (6,1) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/923290
00:30:440 (1) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/923297 都不怎么搭就是了._. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/923298
00:48:225 (1,2,3,4) - 刚转完就这么鬼畜没关系么换成短滑条怎么样._.
00:52:297 (6,7,1) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/923306
00:54:868 (7,8) - ^
00:59:582 (3) - 我正在想我这是什么心态._. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/923314 升级版 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/923321
01:14:582 (6) - 变成一个折返._.
01:21:868 (1) - NC
01:51:011 (1,2,3) - 仿照后面节奏._.
02:07:725 (1) - 不包就算了歌曲这里也蛮随意的._.
02:14:582 (4) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/923331 不小心弱化了一个音请无视我._.
02:20:797 (1,2) - 既然这里有滑条SB前面那四个要不要加闪光._.
02:27:440 (8,9) - 我感觉单note结尾就是不顺手……原因不明，参见上面._.
02:35:368 (5,6) - 改成长1/1的滑条
03:20:154 (4,5,6) - 旋转方向反了._. 把4 Ctrl+G
03:21:654 (4) - move to 188,296
Warning: [Owari] 00:14:154 有多余的timing线
Warning: [Owari] 02:01:297 有多余的timing线
Warning: [Owari] 03:10:725 有多余的timing线
Error: [Owari] 03:03:038 物件未对齐时间轴
Error: [Owari] 03:08:181 物件未对齐时间轴
Error: [Owari] 03:23:609 物件未对齐时间轴
[G's Hard]
以下内容仅本人可见._.































[Autumn's Normal]
AR4 plz
Warning: [Autumn's Normal] 00:39:011 有多余的timing线
Warning: [Autumn's Normal] 01:40:404 有多余的timing线
Warning: [Autumn's Normal] 02:11:582 有多余的timing线
我这个强迫症患者只希望你能把滑条调到fit approachcircle._. 比如00:23:582 (1) -
不过改起来又没必要又麻烦所以就不说了看在咱关系那么好的份上._.
[G's Hard]
信老板能开发那个功能的都是baka._.
00:52:940 (4,1) - 互换NC 因为停顿
01:00:225 (3) - 没包好2
01:53:582 (3,4) - 仿12
01:54:868 (5) - NC 因为02:00:011 (1) -
02:25:512 (4,1) - 互换NC
02:28:083 (4,1) - ._.
02:54:868 (7) - NC

好结束
求互粉._.
以下内容仅本人可见._. 本人是谁 我？Creator？mapper？呵呵
Autumn
501 posts
Joined October 2011
Autumn
ts8zs's mod

ts8zs wrote:

[Autumn's Normal]
AR4 plz √
Warning: [Autumn's Normal] 00:39:011 有多余的timing线√
Warning: [Autumn's Normal] 01:40:404 有多余的timing线√
Warning: [Autumn's Normal] 02:11:582 有多余的timing线√
我这个强迫症患者只希望你能把滑条调到fit approachcircle._. 比如00:23:582 (1) -
不过改起来又没必要又麻烦所以就不说了看在咱关系那么好的份上._. 好 那就不改了
Thx for mod
http://puu.sh/41zSW.rar
Quilt
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Joined May 2010
Quilt
good song xD
Evil_Twilight and Autumn add tag :D
Evil_Twilight
587 posts
Joined July 2010
Evil_Twilight
ts8zs
G's Hard
信老板能开发那个功能的都是baka._.
00:52:940 (4,1) - 互换NC 因为停顿 :arrow: X
01:00:225 (3) - 没包好2 :arrow: 改惹
01:53:582 (3,4) - 仿12 :arrow: O, 大家怎麼都對這個有意見TA T
01:54:868 (5) - NC 因为02:00:011 (1) - :arrow: X, 這個不是在長白線阿o.o
02:25:512 (4,1) - 互换NC :arrow: X
02:28:083 (4,1) - ._. :arrow: X
02:54:868 (7) - NC :arrow: X

o3o http://puu.sh/4dIHO.osu
[CSGA]Ar3sgice
4,298 posts
Joined July 2011
[CSGA]Ar3sgice
嗯我来mod了


General

  1. 为什么不放kiai
Owari

  1. 00:27:868 (4,5) - 这个跳放得有点远, 大概这个距离就可以了 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/962510
  2. 01:00:440 (5) - 这个滑条的尾部拉起来一点 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/962512
  3. 01:01:725 (8) - 这个最好不要叠上去.. 我的建议是这样 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/962514
  4. 01:35:582 (4) - 往下3格
  5. 01:45:011 - 圆圈太细 还不如approachcircle
  6. 02:09:440 - 放串吧 或者用折返滑条 这里vocal音量好小
  7. 02:31:618 - add note 加一个圈好打一点
  8. 02:44:797 (2) - 放到x:156 y:272比较好, 这里那个owa的音前后比较平滑(?)所以两边一样大比较好(?)
  9. 03:03:038 (1) - ?
  10. 03:13:297 (1) - 这里开始音量放低一点, 另外结尾有点难
G's Hard

  1. 00:15:011 (4) - 这里放的长一点体现一个区别 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/962523
  2. 00:20:154 (5,6) - 和上面那个一样
  3. 00:31:511 (2) - 这个去掉? 话说为什么叠这么多在这里233
  4. 01:09:653 (5,6,7) - 放在上面 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/962527
  5. 01:55:297 (6) - clap好违和
  6. 01:59:582 (7,1,2) - 不科学
Autumn's Normal

  1. good map
Princess God
135 posts
Joined June 2010
Princess God
Nice song~Good luck for ranking!
不好意思这么晚才把mod奉上
建议 最好更改
*01:56:154 (1,2,3,4) - 不考虑一下和01:51:011 (1,2) - 对称一下？
03:08:154 (1) - 这里的音效简直神了……在此感慨一下（炸飞）
G`s Hard
*00:04:725 (1) - nc，后面很多类似的地方（指bgm部分）都可以这么试试看
*00:05:475 和 00:05:582 音量分别改为20%和30%
*00:20:154 (5,6) - 改成一个滑条
*01:30:011 加一个单折返滑条，并取消01:30:225 (8) -
*02:54:868 (7) - nc
Owari
*01:17:797 和 01:18:011 加一个note
*01:18:225 ~ 01:19:725 转盘一个~
*01:55:404 1.0x→1.5x，01:55:832 调回1.0x
*02:24:654 (4,5) - 不必要和6重叠，感觉这一段的其他相似的地方也不必要和滑条相重合这里放开一点比较好，当然也别放开太大的距离
*03:11:154 和 03:11:582 加一个note
*03:12:011~03:12:868 加一个spinner（auto测试过了，能转到2000分）
综述：完成度挺高的……我是发现不了什么问题了，只能给出一些新点子了
Pokie
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　General

  1. Offset +7 (447), don't forget to resnap everything included inheriting sections.

　Autumn's Normal

  1. So...for the consistency of hitsounding, I would prefer to list up those notes which supposed to have hitsound added!
    00:56:154 -
    01:01:297 (3) -
    02:48:868 (5,6) -

    Otherwise, good enough for ranking :D

　G's Hard

  • 00:05:475 - raise up the volume on this timing section, 有條rules是說所有note的音量都需要能聽見的, 這裡用5%可能危險了一些
    03:23:690 - It supposed to have a spinner here, like other difficulties did. Start it from here until this point 03:27:440 -

　Owari

  • 00:16:725 (4,5) - Swap the whistle to (5)'s head
    00:30:868 - Something should be placed here, 這邊其實不太適合3/4折返, 看能不能弄成3/4+1/2

    00:52:725 (7) - 00:54:011 (5) - Somehow you should increase spacing on these kind of notes, 進入kiai段後比較多1/4+大跳, 這種低間距的note可能會導致客易混淆這樣...(你懂低BPM的都會被DT) 比如(7)可以疊在後面(1)之上這樣
    01:25:082 (3) - Not bad to have a new combo here, 打著打著覺得combo有點亂/.\
    01:34:940 (2,3,4) - This spacing, are you sure? Hopefully it's just a mistake tho...

其實小米節奏下的不錯, 不過排列始終還是差了一點點點點點點點點...畢竟圖這種東西, 越整潔/順flow越方便玩, 看起來也舒服! 可以再在這方面努力一下/.\!

ps: 曲子好讚T.T
Evil_Twilight
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Evil_Twilight
Ar3
00:15:011 (4) - 这里放的长一点体现一个区别 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/962523
00:20:154 (5,6) - 和上面那个一样
00:31:511 (2) - 这个去掉? 话说为什么叠这么多在这里233
01:09:653 (5,6,7) - 放在上面 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/962527
01:55:297 (6) - clap好违和
01:59:582 (7,1,2) - 不科学

all fixed

Nightcore Princess G
*00:04:725 (1) - nc，后面很多类似的地方（指bgm部分）都可以这么试试看 :arrow: O
*00:05:475 和 00:05:582 音量分别改为20%和30% :arrow: O
*00:20:154 (5,6) - 改成一个滑条 :arrow: O
*01:30:011 加一个单折返滑条，并取消01:30:225 (8) - :arrow: X
*02:54:868 (7) - nc :arrow: O

Pokie
00:05:475 - raise up the volume on this timing section, 有條rules是說所有note的音量都需要能聽見的, 這裡用5%可能危險了一些 :arrow: O
03:23:690 - It supposed to have a spinner here, like other difficulties did. Start it from here until this point 03:27:440 - :arrow: O

http://puu.sh/4MdKt.osu
Autumn
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Pokie's mod

Pokie wrote:

Request from Forum PM

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    Black: Opinions

　Autumn's Normal

  1. So...for the consistency of hitsounding, I would prefer to list up those notes which supposed to have hitsound added!
    00:56:154 -
    01:01:297 (3) -
    02:48:868 (5,6) -

    I was intended to enhance the BG music so I didn't add hitsounds...but I decide to make some compromise.
    Added hitsounds but using low volume.

    Otherwise, good enough for ranking :D

Thx for modding!

Thx to AR3 & Nightcore princess G for checking.
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Midasmens
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♥ ^____^
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sjoy
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sjoy
[Autumn's Normal]
00:44:161 (1,2) - 我觉得1/2+1/1的节奏
01:03:447 (2) - 就单独一个WIS感觉很突兀
[G's Hard]
00:42:875 (1,2) - 我喜欢方向是朝上下的._.
00:58:518 (2) - 495，197我觉得往内拐挺难受的
01:05:804 (4) - 这个NOTE不应该是提前半拍的么？
01:34:947 (5,7) - 感觉可以删掉
02:06:875 (2,3) - 合并成滑条吧
02:44:375 (5) - 叠在4的尾巴看看
03:20:804 (9) - 这里太挤了。。
[Owari]
00:30:447 (1) - 不对劲的节奏阿
00:36:232加个NOTE吧
00:48:875 (5) - 变速建议NC
01:52:304 (4) - ctrl+g吧 感觉没必要跳
02:07:732 (1) - 要包住02:07:518 (6) - 就包好吧
02:14:589 (4) - 感觉用1/2滑条比较好
02:23:375 (6,1) - 我觉得每俩小节这样下节奏很好阿
02:30:875 (1) - 头 whis
02:44:589 (1) - whis
Midasmens
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Topic Starter
Midasmens

sjoy wrote:

[Owari]
00:30:447 (1) - 不对劲的节奏阿 这个不改~
00:36:232加个NOTE吧 不了
00:48:875 (5) - 变速建议NC 加了太花不好~
01:52:304 (4) - ctrl+g吧 感觉没必要跳 好
02:07:732 (1) - 要包住02:07:518 (6) - 就包好吧 好
02:14:589 (4) - 感觉用1/2滑条比较好 不用
02:23:375 (6,1) - 我觉得每俩小节这样下节奏很好阿 ;)
02:30:875 (1) - 头 whis 加了
02:44:589 (1) - whis 加了
多谢mod！ :D
Evil_Twilight
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Evil_Twilight

sjoy wrote:

[G's Hard]
00:42:875 (1,2) - 我喜欢方向是朝上下的._. :arrow: X
00:58:518 (2) - 495，197我觉得往内拐挺难受的 :arrow: X, 往外的話感覺跟歌對不上
01:05:804 (4) - 这个NOTE不应该是提前半拍的么？ :arrow: X, 我這裡是跟鼓聲的，沒記錯的話 :o
01:34:947 (5,7) - 感觉可以删掉 :arrow: X, 5有鼓聲，7就當裝飾用o3o
02:06:875 (2,3) - 合并成滑条吧 :arrow: O
02:44:375 (5) - 叠在4的尾巴看看 X
03:20:804 (9) - 这里太挤了。。 :arrow: 我看test不會阿o.o
Autumn
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Autumn

sjoy wrote:

[Autumn's Normal]
00:44:161 (1,2) - 我觉得1/2+1/1的节奏 是这样，不过我想和前面的单点+折返保持一致
01:03:447 (2) - 就单独一个WIS感觉很突兀，这里还好把，后面都是这样摆的，如果还有人挑我就改
抱歉来迟了
No change but still thx for mod! XD
Zero__wind
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Midasmens wrote:

不能放弃！
Meisle
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Meisle
我mod不出东西啊~所以no kudosu吧（这不是理所当然的吗）
[General]
整体感觉很完善了啊，曲子好棒啊，我觉的有问题也是音效方面的了（我觉得都过关诶╮(╯▽╰)╭，玩的出感觉，来射仅有的两颗星星）
为什么没有bubbled!!!
[G's Hard]
00:05:589 (1) - 突然觉得好响啊
S o a p
359 posts
Joined March 2012
S o a p
还真没啥好摸的._.
[Owari]
现在不让用这种难度不明的难度名了，改掉吧
01:19:732 - 这边有02:00:875 (1) - 这种声音，为啥不加上
03:23:616 (1) - 这个转盘按照背景音乐来说声音是越来越小的，考虑插绿线使转盘声音越来越小


[G's Hard]
00:06:875 (3) - 这个滑条是不是有点太靠上了
02:00:875 (3) - 你这儿跟了为啥01:50:589 - 这儿不跟
02:07:304 (3) - 这儿怎么突然冒出这么奇怪的clap音效...
02:08:589 (6) - ^

[Autumn's Normal]
没啥问题

然后美丽_(:з」∠)_
popner
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popner
说的十号前摸，好像忘了，先mark
[Owari]
01:33:447 (5,1) - 这种overlap有什么特殊目的么
好多地方1.0x 1.1x 1.2x spacing混用，看着很乱，建议全统一成一个 01:58:732 (1,2) - 02:10:089 (8,9) - 02:02:589 (7,8) - 02:11:589 (1,2) - 02:12:875 (5,6,1) - 02:14:161 (3,4) - 以及其他无数地方
03:02:375 (1,2,3,4,5) - 放到直线上
根据新rule，“Owari”应该是不能做diff名的。
PS.不想每次说那么多细节问题啊，到最后费半天劲变成我在作图了。你自己应该多用点功夫把细节弄好。。。
Midasmens
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Topic Starter
Midasmens

popner wrote:

说的十号前摸，好像忘了，先mark
[Owari]
01:33:447 (5,1) - 这种overlap有什么特殊目的么
好多地方1.0x 1.1x 1.2x spacing混用，看着很乱，建议全统一成一个 01:58:732 (1,2) - 02:10:089 (8,9) - 02:02:589 (7,8) - 02:11:589 (1,2) - 02:12:875 (5,6,1) - 02:14:161 (3,4) - 以及其他无数地方
03:02:375 (1,2,3,4,5) - 放到直线上
根据新rule，“Owari”应该是不能做diff名的。
PS.不想每次说那么多细节问题啊，到最后费半天劲变成我在作图了。你自己应该多用点功夫把细节弄好。。。
改了不少地方~ 应该好多了
我尽最大努力做到要求！
S o a p
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Strawberry
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modded by irc
2014-01-22 15:43 Strawberry: 00:26:589 (3,4,5) - 这里感觉可以摆对称吧。。
2014-01-22 15:43 Strawberry: insane
2014-01-22 15:43 Strawberry: 角度都调一调
2014-01-22 15:44 Strawberry: 00:49:304 - 这里加一个kiai burst吧
2014-01-22 15:46 Midasmens: 有点刺的感觉
2014-01-22 15:48 Strawberry: 作sb效果也可以
2014-01-22 15:48 Midasmens: 就保持这样吧
2014-01-22 15:48 Strawberry: 加个柔和一点的flash
2014-01-22 15:48 Midasmens: （不影响应该
2014-01-22 15:49 Strawberry: 。
2014-01-22 15:49 Midasmens: 中间的一个SB效果好像有点不好~ 我对中心对称了 然后break正好一个勾 难看了呢
2014-01-22 15:49 Strawberry: 你说哪里?
2014-01-22 15:49 Midasmens: 01:45:018 -
2014-01-22 15:51 Strawberry: 这种的话换一套section-pass和fail就好了(?
2014-01-22 15:54 Midasmens: 我调整一下
2014-01-22 15:58 Strawberry: 02:09:875 (7,8,9) - 这里不知道是出于什么考虑.. 不过过渡段还是不建议放这种副歌部分都没出现过几次的大跳..
2014-01-22 15:58 Strawberry: 而且flow总感觉有点怪o.o
2014-01-22 16:00 Midasmens: 其实这里钢琴的声音太明显又不知道怎么抓（干脆做了跳
2014-01-22 16:00 Midasmens: （大概是因为这样
2014-01-22 16:00 Midasmens: :P
2014-01-22 16:00 Strawberry: 这里跟vocal就好了..
2014-01-22 16:02 Midasmens: 好
2014-01-22 16:02 Strawberry: http://puu.sh/6tPnp.jpg
2014-01-22 16:03 Strawberry: 另外这里干脆做blanket 02:17:161 (3) -
2014-01-22 16:04 Midasmens: 包起来么？
2014-01-22 16:04 Strawberry: 恩
2014-01-22 16:07 Strawberry: 03:02:697 (4) - 这里whistle去掉
2014-01-22 16:07 Strawberry: 反而不合 :/
2014-01-22 16:07 Midasmens: 好
2014-01-22 16:08 Strawberry: 恩
2014-01-22 16:08 Midasmens: 去掉？还是不去
2014-01-22 16:08 Strawberry: 去掉
2014-01-22 16:08 Midasmens: 嗯
2014-01-22 16:17 Strawberry: hard03:10:732 - 这里开始whistle的三连都去掉中间的..不然会吵
2014-01-22 16:18 Strawberry: 咦前面好像也有
2014-01-22 16:19 Strawberry: 哦哦 从kiai开始
2014-01-22 16:20 Strawberry: 别的没啥了
@Midasmens: display epilepsy warning on all diffs the i can bub this. :)
Zero__wind
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啊居然要泡了
本来我还打算……上狗以后来泡呢
Midasmens
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Strawberry wrote:

modded by irc
2014-01-22 15:43 Strawberry: 00:26:589 (3,4,5) - 这里感觉可以摆对称吧。。
2014-01-22 15:43 Strawberry: insane
2014-01-22 15:43 Strawberry: 角度都调一调
2014-01-22 15:44 Strawberry: 00:49:304 - 这里加一个kiai burst吧
2014-01-22 15:46 Midasmens: 有点刺的感觉
2014-01-22 15:48 Strawberry: 作sb效果也可以
2014-01-22 15:48 Midasmens: 就保持这样吧
2014-01-22 15:48 Strawberry: 加个柔和一点的flash
2014-01-22 15:48 Midasmens: （不影响应该
2014-01-22 15:49 Strawberry: 。
2014-01-22 15:49 Midasmens: 中间的一个SB效果好像有点不好~ 我对中心对称了 然后break正好一个勾 难看了呢
2014-01-22 15:49 Strawberry: 你说哪里?
2014-01-22 15:49 Midasmens: 01:45:018 -
2014-01-22 15:51 Strawberry: 这种的话换一套section-pass和fail就好了(?
2014-01-22 15:54 Midasmens: 我调整一下
2014-01-22 15:58 Strawberry: 02:09:875 (7,8,9) - 这里不知道是出于什么考虑.. 不过过渡段还是不建议放这种副歌部分都没出现过几次的大跳..
2014-01-22 15:58 Strawberry: 而且flow总感觉有点怪o.o
2014-01-22 16:00 Midasmens: 其实这里钢琴的声音太明显又不知道怎么抓（干脆做了跳
2014-01-22 16:00 Midasmens: （大概是因为这样
2014-01-22 16:00 Midasmens: :P
2014-01-22 16:00 Strawberry: 这里跟vocal就好了..
2014-01-22 16:02 Midasmens: 好
2014-01-22 16:02 Strawberry: http://puu.sh/6tPnp.jpg
2014-01-22 16:03 Strawberry: 另外这里干脆做blanket 02:17:161 (3) -
2014-01-22 16:04 Midasmens: 包起来么？
2014-01-22 16:04 Strawberry: 恩
2014-01-22 16:07 Strawberry: 03:02:697 (4) - 这里whistle去掉
2014-01-22 16:07 Strawberry: 反而不合 :/
2014-01-22 16:07 Midasmens: 好
2014-01-22 16:08 Strawberry: 恩
2014-01-22 16:08 Midasmens: 去掉？还是不去
2014-01-22 16:08 Strawberry: 去掉
2014-01-22 16:08 Midasmens: 嗯
2014-01-22 16:17 Strawberry: hard03:10:732 - 这里开始whistle的三连都去掉中间的..不然会吵
2014-01-22 16:18 Strawberry: 咦前面好像也有
2014-01-22 16:19 Strawberry: 哦哦 从kiai开始
2014-01-22 16:20 Strawberry: 别的没啥了
@Midasmens: display epilepsy warning on all diffs the i can bub this. :)
Done..... :D

Zero__wind wrote:

啊居然要泡了
本来我还打算……上狗以后来泡呢
零风快上狗泡小米其它图 :P
Zero__wind
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Common sugestions

General
your lryic files are at a great size which is too exaggerated, and the problem is mostly caused by the unused space of every lyric file, which is too big. plz cut your lyric files to a proper size, in order to make your .osz file smaller 我跟其他图里面的歌词对比了一下 基本上平均上一句歌词也就能占个一二十kb的，长一点的也不会超过50，而你现在每个都271kb实在太夸张了=。=

Insane
There are many wrong snapped beats in this diff, those particular piano(?) melodies are actually landing on 1/6 beats but you used 1/4 tripples instead. plz rearrange them with 1/6 circles or kcik sliders (or 1/2 beats) to make the rhythm correct. I listed all the wrong snaps below, hope I didn't get anything wrong
01:04:089 (2) -
01:06:661 (4,5,6) -
01:09:232 (1,2,3) - http://puu.sh/6SVf0.jpg
01:11:911 (5,6) -
01:14:482 (5,6) -
02:46:947 (2,3,4) -
02:54:768 (7,8) -
02:57:232 (6,7,8) -
02:59:804 (5,6,7) -
03:02:375 (1,2,3) -
03:15:339 (5,6) -
03:17:804 (3,4,5) -
03:20:482 (5,6) -
03:23:054 (5,6) -

01:09:761 - unsnapped inherited point
and there're some spinners that you snapped on 1/16, it's highly recommended that you snap them ordinarily to blue ticks (1/4) instead, check the below
03:03:045 (1) -
03:08:188 (1) -
03:23:616 (1) -

01:01:732 (8) - the whistle on the sliderbody doesn't really sound nice, I'd suggest that you remove it
02:24:018 (1) - ^
02:30:875 (1) - ^
02:34:304 (1) - ^

G's Hard
02:46:947 (2,3) - same snapping problem, these should actually be snapped on 1/6, but that would be too hard for a Hard, so it's better that you simply delete 02:47:054 (3) -
02:49:518 (5,6,7) - ^ it's ok to use 1/6 reverse sliders in this kind of case I think
02:52:089 (6,7,8) - ^
02:59:804 (7,8) - ^
03:02:375 (4,5,6) - ^
03:07:518 (6,7,8) - ^
03:12:661 (4,5,6) - ^
03:15:232 (4,5,6) - ^
03:17:804 (5,6,7) - ^
03:20:375 (6,7,8) - ^
03:22:947 (6,7,8) - ^

That's all for now
I think it's good to have these important issues addressed first before we go on
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