1. Easy (1.13 stars, 79 notes)
2. Hard (4.74 stars, 223 notes)
3. Hinsvar's Normal (3.24 stars, 121 notes)

- t e n n y a - wrote:

m4m here

[General]

1. Diffs names quite unsuit. but if you make this only 2 diff it's ok (Hinsvar & Xinely) but with Easy here, Hard/Insane diff with name "Xinely" is not suit imo. prefer to change Xinely into "Hard" or remove easy~ kinda disappointed with this, okay

[Easy]

1. 00:05:112 (1,2)- : why don't copy paste slider number 4,5 at 00:07:970. they have a good symmetry rather than this 2 sliders.
2. 00:26:255 (1)- : remove this slider and copy-paste slider no 2 on 00:28:541 ? it has a good shape rather than this one
3. 00:35:398 (1)- : why don't make this slider length same as previouses sliders? like this i meant
   
4. 00:58:255 (1)- : last slider point to x496 y128 to make better blanketing
5. 01:14:827 (1,2)- : how about re-arrange them like this?
   
   SPOILER

   

   212,64,74827,6,0,P|120:28|56:96,1,192,8|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   140,112,76541,1,4,0:0:0:0:

6. 01:20:541 (3)- : last slider point 1grid up fix
7. 01:24:541 (3,4)- : slider no 3 is not follow vocal and music imo. make this slider 1/1 long and remove circle 4 fixed by my own
   
8. 01:30:827 (5)- : 1grid up done
9. 01:32:541 (1)- : last slider point 1 / 2 grid to left
10. 01:38:255 (2)- : how about put it like this to make better flow? hmmm okau
    
    SPOILER

    
11. 01:39:398 (1)- : add whistle to the spinner perhaps? bakanely, forget this, fixed
    lama bgt, fix all deh =3=

[Xinely]

1. <3
2. 00:07:112 (3)- : to follow vocal, delete this slider and add circle at 00:07:398 nope
3. 00:17:112 (1)- : I was hoping for jump here. perhaps move this to x256 y40 errr okay
4. 00:27:112 (2,3,4)- : to follow music, try these rhythms hmm, fix
   
   or
5. 00:56:827 (3)- : rearrange the slider like this perhaps? i don't see wrong in here
   
   SPOILER

   
6. 01:01:970 (5)- : add whistle here perhaps? nope
7. 01:26:827 (3)- : move this to x88 y212 to make better symmetry? yeah
8. 01:38:541 (3)- : 1 grid up fixed
9. 01:39:398 (1)- : why don't put this on x256 y176 to make better jump and flow? 256,192

that's all good luck <3

1. Diffs names quite unsuit. but if you make this only 2 diff it's ok (Hinsvar & Xinely) but with Easy here, Hard/Insane diff with name "Xinely" is not suit imo. prefer to change Xinely into "Hard" or remove easy~

1. 00:05:112 (1,2)- : why don't copy paste slider number 4,5 at 00:07:970. they have a good symmetry rather than this 2 sliders.
2. 00:26:255 (1)- : remove this slider and copy-paste slider no 2 on 00:28:541 ? it has a good shape rather than this one
3. 00:35:398 (1)- : why don't make this slider length same as previouses sliders? like this i meant
   
4. 00:58:255 (1)- : last slider point to x496 y128 to make better blanketing
5. 01:14:827 (1,2)- : how about re-arrange them like this?
   
   SPOILER

   

   212,64,74827,6,0,P|120:28|56:96,1,192,8|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   140,112,76541,1,4,0:0:0:0:

6. 01:20:541 (3)- : last slider point 1grid up
7. 01:24:541 (3,4)- : slider no 3 is not follow vocal and music imo. make this slider 1/1 long and remove circle 4
   
8. 01:30:827 (5)- : 1grid up
9. 01:32:541 (1)- : last slider point 1 / 2 grid to left
10. 01:38:255 (2)- : how about put it like this to make better flow?
    
    SPOILER

    
11. 01:39:398 (1)- : add whistle to the spinner perhaps?

1. 00:04:541 (6)- : vocal change here (nao 's voice a bit loud) so nc here?
2. 00:10:255 (1)- : why don't copy paste slider 4 at 00:07:970 ? It has a good shape and it'll make player easy to play
3. 00:16:827 - : Vocal continues but let this empty is a bit cruel to me. perhaps try this rhythm?
   
4. 00:22:827 (4)- : to follow music better. try this rhythm
   
5. 00:27:398 (3)- : move this circle to 00:27:684 to follow music better.
6. 00:57:112 (4)- : try this rhythm to follow music better?
   
7. 00:59:684 (x)- : add circle here please, it'll follow vocal better
8. 01:08:255 (2)- : try this rhythm to follow vocal better?
   
9. 01:35:398 (3)- : add customslidertick here ?

1. <3
2. 00:07:112 (3)- : to follow vocal, delete this slider and add circle at 00:07:398
3. 00:17:112 (1)- : I was hoping for jump here. perhaps move this to x256 y40
4. 00:27:112 (2,3,4)- : to follow music, try these rhythms
   
   or
5. 00:56:827 (3)- : rearrange the slider like this perhaps?
   
   SPOILER

   
6. 01:01:970 (5)- : add whistle here perhaps?
7. 01:26:827 (3)- : move this to x88 y212 to make better symmetry?
8. 01:38:541 (3)- : 1 grid up
9. 01:39:398 (1)- : why don't put this on x256 y176 to make better jump and flow?

Oyatsu wrote:

[Hinvar's Normal] lol
00:03:398 (1) - Should NC here? The NC here is every two stanzas.
00:23:684 (1) - ^ ^
00:28:541 (5) - Make as: http://puu.sh/3aaUW.jpg >< Uhm, I don't want to make the rhythm complicated in my diff.
01:05:112 (4) - Curved down will more beautiful No, it's definitely better this way. The flow is better like this, anyway.
01:36:541 (1) - Should NC I only place NCs at the beginning of a stanza.

- t e n n y a - wrote:

[Hinsvar's Normal]

1. 00:04:541 (6)- : vocal change here (nao 's voice a bit loud) so nc here? Not loud enough to apply NC there.
2. 00:10:255 (1)- : why don't copy paste slider 4 at 00:07:970 ? It has a good shape and it'll make player easy to play Done.
3. 00:16:827 - : Vocal continues but let this empty is a bit cruel to me. perhaps try this rhythm? I wish to have a variation on the map's rhythm, and there's really no need to emphasize the vocal away, IMO.
   
4. 00:22:827 (4)- : to follow music better. try this rhythm Varied it, I guess.
   
5. 00:27:398 (3)- : move this circle to 00:27:684 to follow music better. Done.
6. 00:57:112 (4)- : try this rhythm to follow music better? Made a bit variation on it.
   
7. 00:59:684 (x)- : add circle here please, it'll follow vocal better Done.
8. 01:08:255 (2)- : try this rhythm to follow vocal better? Varied.
   
9. 01:35:398 (3)- : add customslidertick here ? Done.

P A N wrote:

[Hinsvar's Normal]
where is video? D: ...What the hell? The video was inserted to my diff first... Anyway, added.
00:24:827 - what about this beat :3 Done.
00:42:255 (4) - NC for start the square pattern? I want to keep my combo pattern here, and I don't think it's really that necessary.

-Umi- wrote:

Hinsvar's normal

- 00:06:827 (2) - x:268,y:104 ? Done.
- 00:16:827 - add note here ? ...Well, mapped I guess.
- 00:31:970 (2,4) - align them ? Align like what? I think there's nothing wrong with them anyway.
- 00:42:827 (5) - move to x:200,y:60 Done.
- 00:43:398 (6) - ^ x:332,y:112^
- 00:43:970 (7) - ^ x:284,y:244 ^
- 00:52:541 (5) - ^ x:232,y:276 ? ^
- 00:59:684 (3) - delete the reverse, then move 01:00:541 (4) - to 01:00:255 - (keep the end at 01:01:112 - ) ...I honestly don't see why should the rhythm be changed...

Zero__wind wrote:

Hi :3 m4m from my queue

General
00:00:889 (1,2) - don't put notes before the 1st timing line as I suppoes. Use offset -824 in all diffs to slove this i was tested my hard, no problem until fast get mouse and play, enough break for ready imo

Hard
00:08:027 (4,5,1) - maybe make the transition more satisfying http://puu.sh/3ccHf.jpg i don't see different o.o
00:26:598 (1) - maybe split this into a 1/2 slider and a note. rhythm in a Hard diff should be more delicate as I suppose. also to other similar parts yes i know this, but if i change it, will break my pattern, sorry xD
00:58:027 (4,5,6,7,1) - maybe somehow make them like this http://puu.sh/3ccWq.jpg (forgive me, I didn't placed them really delicately) u are right but my own flow better imo
01:14:312 (1) - maybe http://puu.sh/3cd0k.jpg branket actually
This diff is a bit cluttered to the upright, maybe consider use the whole mapping area more sparingly next time

Easy
00:17:604 (1) - start on red tick plz actually i don't see wrong in here, will change if other say this too
01:15:175 (1,2) - exchange NC ? i always NC after 2 stanza
01:34:794 (1) - start on red tick same
01:39:318 (1) - ^ same
no more critical stuff found
nice blanckets :3

Thats all
good luck~

Zero__wind wrote:

Normal
00:32:032 - add note, if you're not concerned about the difficulty star rating Changed the rhythm here instead.
00:34:592 (5) - remove this and add two notes at 00:34:318 - and 00:34:889 - ^
00:38:163 (1) - start on red tick please as this is a Normal I don't see any problem with this.
00:51:163 (3) - (196,328) I don't see any point in moving this.
01:16:592 (6) - (260,56) ^
01:30:318 (4) - (240,52) ^
01:39:878 (1) - start on red tick Nope; also don't see why should the spinner be started on the red tick too here.
Actually I wanna say that you'd better rearrange all objects with distance snap 1.1x, to avoid overlapping patterns, it won't be too much work for such a short map. It's up to you though Those objects touching each other are actually great. This means player can differ notes that are spaced by 1/2 or 1/1 easier.

1. According to the AImod "Hinsvar'x normal" hasn't the same tag as the other diff. It's beacuse there of the space between "ああっ女神さまっ" and "Oh My Goddess"

1. 00:47:175 (3) - Move the end point to x=256 y=184 for a better blanket. Then move 00:50:032 (1) to match the new blanket. (If the blanket was good 00:46:604 (2) and 00:50:032 (1) should have been at the same place).
2. 01:07:746 (1) - Don't you use Finsih + Whistle in your map?
3. 01:10:032 (2) - Blanket not perfect. Move the end point to x=260 y=136.
4. 01:16:889 (2,3,4,1) - Why not Finish-Clap-Finsh-Clap-Finish instead of Finish-Clap-Whistle-Clap-Finish?

1. 00:42:603 (4,5,6,7) - Not a good square. Move 7 to x=272 y=240.
2. 00:52:603 - Add a note? Because of the piano which play a note right here.
3. 00:54:032 (1) - You use Whistle + Finish at 00:56:318 (3) so why not here?
4. 01:16:889 (1,2,1) - Same suggestion as in the Easy.

1. 00:06:027 (1,2) - If you tried to do a blanket here. Well, it's not really good.
2. 00:17:455 (1) - Whistle + Finish? Like in the Easy diff?
3. 00:24:598 (2,3) - This overlapping looks weird. It's mostly because it's the only one like this in your three diff so it's strange to see one here.
4. 00:33:169 (1,3) - The slider isn't symmetrical so the blanket isn't perfect.
5. 00:32:884 (4,3) - Try to replace the note exactly at the end of the slider.
6. 00:41:741 (4,1) - This time it's not nazi. The blanket is really not good. Move 1 to x=240 y=44.
7. 01:10:027 (1,3) - Litlle overlapping.
8. 01:11:741 (4,1) - Ok, i'll stop pointing the blanket nearly good. I think it will start annoying you.
9. 01:39:741 (1) - You finish with a symmetry so why not putting it at x=256 y=192?

kajiyatta wrote:

[Normal]
Placement
00:40:889(1) a bit far from center of spinner. I suppose it is difficult for newbie, so like this? Nope; in fact, I think it would be easier for players if I place it far from the center, since I'm sure enough most newbie players spin at a wide range of the playfield, not near the center consistently.

SPOILER

01:04:318(3) move like this? it would be nice flow to next slider(4). Made the slider wavy.

SPOILER

Rhythm
00:05:746 to be consistence, add a note here to follow the vocal pattern, you already did it at 00:04:603. I want to make a variety of rhythm so it would be less monotone. No noticeable problem can be detected here, anyway.
00:37:460(3,1) for Normal diff, to begin the spinner on downbeat better for newbie. I don't want to sacrifice the cymbal sound on that downbeat. Will sound real weird if left off.

SPOILER

00:53:746 expect a note here. Added.
00:54:889 ^ Don't think a note is needed here though.

rezoons wrote:

[Hinsvar's Normal]

1. 00:42:603 (4,5,6,7) - Not a good square. Move 7 to x=272 y=240. Tweaked the square by myself.
2. 00:52:603 - Add a note? Because of the piano which play a note right here. I fear that the diff might get a little too hard because there's so many notes connected (in a 1/2-beats gap) with each other.
3. 00:54:032 (1) - You use Whistle + Finish at 00:56:318 (3) so why not here? Guess you're right. Done.
4. 01:16:889 (1,2,1) - Same suggestion as in the Easy. 01:18:032 isn't loud enough for it to be worthy of a finish.

Gloria Guard wrote:

[Hinsvar's Normal]

00:28:889 (3,4,5) I suggest this rhythm. Uhm, I want to create a variety of rhythm too. Using that freaking rhythm all the time will make the diff feel monotone. The rhythm doesn't feel wrong at all anyway.

SPOILER

01:08:603 01:08:603 (1,2,3,4) This does not fit the rhythm to the beat
i recommend rhythm

SPOILER

01:43:175 (1) This is spin end why 01:43:175... this part end sound 01:44:318 It has something to do with the previous mp3 lol. Fixed.

DakeDekaane wrote:

Hi :3

M4M as requested in-game.

[General]
Try with an offset of 1451 (-10), sounds more accurate for me. Nice , fixed >w<
Rest looks fine.

[Easy]
00:08:318 (4) - *nazi* 1 grid left. lol fixed
00:26:604 (1,2,1,2,1) - This part is a bit repetitive to me, maybe replace 00:31:175 (1,2) with something like 00:22:032 (1,2,3) ? change in last
00:51:175 (2,3) - Maybe this is just me, but I think this would look better as this, I think actually it looks a bit sharp.

SPOILER

change in other way as i can
01:11:746 (3,1) - In this part I felt the flow was too harsh, maybe make something like this? (3) is in x:200 y:84 and (1) in y:132 y136.

SPOILER

same as above :3

[Hard]
00:35:175 (4,5,6,7,1) - I think this part could follow the shape of 00:33:175 (1). Nice idea! :3
01:28:175 (6,1) - This looks a bit sharp imo, try making this flow a bit smoother. err, it's okay imo
Oh well, there are many sounds of piano not mapped, but if they were, the gap between Normal and Hard would be too hugh.

That'd be all from my part, nice song and map :3
Good luck with this o/
Actually I feel bad as you modded 6 diffs and I just 3, so feel free to ask me for a mod whenever you want. it's okay, your mod is good and my mod is bad =w=

Updated

DakeDekaane wrote:

[Hinsvar's Normal]
I'll just put some suggestions to lower a bit the difficulty in some parts, I felt it a bit high considering the BPM.
00:12:032 (2) - You could remove this, as I think you're following vocals most of the time. Done.
00:16:032 (2) - Maybe this too, but it fits with vocals, so feel free to ignore this one. Yeah, definitely not this...
00:21:746 (2) - I'd remove this, the next part is full of objects and there should be at least a little 1/1 break, and this is the only place I could find. This spot just "demands" to be mapped orz
00:42:032 (3,4) - I think this could sound better if you do (3) a 1/1 beat slider and put (4) in 00:42:889, like here, you could also joint (4) and (5) into a slider.
Did the second.
00:59:460 (2) - Consider adding a note here, sounds a bit empty in comparison with 01:18:603 (2,3,1) Following the louder instrument here.
01:18:603 (2,3,1) - Also here. Uhm?

1. Hinsvar's Normal has different preview time. Please fix this, it's unrankable.
2. Same, Hinsvar's Normal has different video lead-in, also fix this.

1. AR -1 for better spread? Normal has AR 4, so it will be good idea to decrease this diff AR by 1.
2. 00:24:308 (2) - Please reduce this slider length by 1/2 because there is no heavy beat on 00:25:450 -, it's kinda awkward to hear. Following the music is more important than having different rhythm.
3. 00:35:736 (3) - Same as above case, please reduce this slider length by 1/2 too.
4. 01:32:879 (1) - Nazi, but can you move this slider end point to 172 200? Blanket will be more good if you do this.
5. 01:38:593 (1) - New combo bug, add nc here please.
   The rest is pretty good. Good job :3

1. Don't forget to fix those unrankable stuff that i has mention in general section~
2. 00:28:879 (5) - This slider end doesn't follow the music properly imo since there is no strong beat at 00:30:022 -. It will be nice if you remove the repeat of this slider, and then add circle at 00:29:736 - and 00:30:308 -. This rhythm fit the music perfectly imo.
   Nice, i can't found anything besides that stuff. Great job~

1. 00:00:889 (1) - Unsnapped circle ><
2. 00:01:175 (2) - ^
3. 00:26:593 (1) - I think finish is more appropiate compare to whistle at this slider start. It will keep finish consistencies too~
4. 00:45:450 (3) - Whistle at this slider end? Feels empty there.
5. 01:13:165 (2) - I feel this part is quite empty because there is no whistle here. How about adding a whistle here and then here 01:13:736 (4) - at sldier start and 01:14:308 (1) - slider start too? It's good to hear imo.