Thank you!haha i don't know what that black haired chick is named but I would do her multiple times. → she's really..Insane:
00:00:801 (4) - This feels weird to play mostly because it starts on the red tick, whereas the emphasis is on the white tick beforehand. → changed rhythm. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1211440
00:04:631 (6,7,8,9,10,11) - I'd rather have the jumps more spaced out from (6). I'm not saying to increase spacing, but I'm getting really confused having to go back to (8) since it's so close to (6) → hmm.. right. too close '6' note. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1211459
00:09:737 (1,2,3) - Would prefer it if these were in the same order as the previous notes → okay.
00:38:461 (2) - I know stacks are pretty but proper spacing is like having a personal stripper on your own private island. Make this spacing even so (3) isn't awkwardly shorter → (...maybe)it's pretty shape hmm. changed http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1211697
00:45:801 (4) - ^ → http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1211694 like this?
00:17:237 (2) - Remove clap. → Fixed.
00:34:312 (2) - WOAH. Jumps are fun when they're natural, and this doesn't feel all too natural → hmm. okay. it's too hard o.o i changed 1.1x distance.
00:38:301 (1) - Spinners should have some sort of meaning, weather it be a long held out note, or a low-key transitional area. This spinner is REALLY random. I'd personally just map this part. → remove spinner. add note(slider) http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1211403
00:52:024 (5) - Add normal hitnormal on the end of this slider → hitnormal?.. umm. i don't know. (it's N:C1 Sound)
01:15:481 (2,3) - This is dying to be a jump → remove NC
CLAPS ON 2 AND 4 pls → MAYBE IT'S MY MISTAKE.
00:26:173 (1) - This would be better not overlapping → Fixed.
00:38:860 (1) - Add some sort of hitsound to this. Maybe like a whistle or finish or something → add soft-whistle
CLAPS ON 2 AND 4 ALSO pls → ALSO MAYBE IT'S MY MISTAKE.
It's a good start. The biggest issues I'm finding is that although you have a decent grasp of sparsely using jumps, its important to also look at how jumps play. Even if something looks visually pleasing and looks cool to play, sometimes it might be awkward to actually achieve. → thanks advice.
(maybe it will be improved)