1. No preview point. You'd better add one to make map's preview more awesome!
2. Probably this map should have japanese-characters in it's Title/Artist. Check the wikipedia, please!
3. You forget to add tag TeA in tags, I think it's quite clear why you should use this tag.
4. According to AiBat there's a missed file "reverse-arrow.png" :<
5. Use Slider Tick Rate 2, please it will fit with music the way better!
6. Remove sound from video-file, it doesn't make any sense here. And if it's possible try to find a better quality video, current one doesn't look so good to me.

1. 00:36:155 (6,1) - nazi - I'd swap new combos here. So you will follow music closer + 00:36:155 (6) - NC here will help us to read your pattern! (you know, jumpy pattern > NC > regular pattern)
2. 00:46:087 (4,1) - nazi - somehow, I've expected blanket slider here. as you did it here 00:47:101 (3,4)
3. 00:52:776 - start spinner here, since that spin-sound starts here + 00:52:574 - circle here to keep rhythm consistent
4. 01:16:695 (4,1) - nazi - same as 00:36:155 (6,1). Fix them both or ignore them both for consistency!

1. 1/4 streams here are unexpected and feels weird. They're TOO hard for your relaxing diff, use sliders instead, please.
2. Distance spacing is too low (x0.6) I makes sliders too fast + it plays awkward, imo. Maybe it's just me, anyway. :<
3. 00:41:830 - I'd recommend you to place circle here, instead of using slider. It fits with vocals the way better, imo.
4. 00:42:641 (2) - same as above, circle here. But this time circle for music, not for vocals! Also put NC at this circle to follow your patttern.
5. 00:54:803 - missed circles everywhere. Please, check your rhythm properly next time!
6. 01:20:344 (5) - nazi - Kiai end = New combo. If you will do it HTIS way, your patterns will be more reasonable.
7. 01:15:074 (4) - for patterns like this one, you can use NC because jump distance is two times bigger than regular spacing! make sure, that ALL THE JUMPS are EASY-READABLE.

1. 00:38:993 (5) - nazi - sliders with angles like this one feels weird for that SOFT song, please use white dots to create slider, because vocals are REALLY soft here.
2. 00:49:533 (1) - two LOOOOOOOOONG sliders are too much fr ths diff. It's becoming the way TOO boring.
3. 00:57:641 (4) - nazi - don't you feel like there's a missed new combo

1. AR 4 is too fast for Easy diff. Try to reduce AR and other diff settings, please! It's too hard for Easy diff.
2. 00:55:209 (1) - overlapped with spinner's hitburst. It will confuse and stress beginners a lot!

-Bakari- wrote:

as requested Thanks :3

[General]

1. No preview point. You'd better add one to make map's preview more awesome! Fixed
2. Probably this map should have japanese-characters in it's Title/Artist. Check the wikipedia, please! No O.o
3. You forget to add tag TeA in tags, I think it's quite clear why you should use this tag. Fixed
4. According to AiBat there's a missed file "reverse-arrow.png" :< D:
5. Use Slider Tick Rate 2, please it will fit with music the way better! Fixed
6. Remove sound from video-file, it doesn't make any sense here. And if it's possible try to find a better quality video, current one doesn't look so good to me.Fixed

[TeA's insane]
\:3/ HAI HAI PRO MAPPER

1. 00:36:155 (6,1) - nazi - I'd swap new combos here. So you will follow music closer + 00:36:155 (6) - NC here will help us to read your pattern! (you know, jumpy pattern > NC > regular pattern)
2. 00:46:087 (4,1) - nazi - somehow, I've expected blanket slider here. as you did it here 00:47:101 (3,4)
3. 00:52:776 - start spinner here, since that spin-sound starts here + 00:52:574 - circle here to keep rhythm consistent
4. 01:16:695 (4,1) - nazi - same as 00:36:155 (6,1). Fix them both or ignore them both for consistency!

[Hard]

1. 1/4 streams here are unexpected and feels weird. They're TOO hard for your relaxing diff, use sliders instead, please. i'll keep this , Thanks
2. Distance spacing is too low (x0.6) I makes sliders too fast + it plays awkward, imo. Maybe it's just me, anyway. :< ^
3. 00:41:830 - I'd recommend you to place circle here, instead of using slider. It fits with vocals the way better, imo. ^
4. 00:42:641 (2) - same as above, circle here. But this time circle for music, not for vocals! Also put NC at this circle to follow your patttern. New combo Only
5. 00:54:803 - missed circles everywhere. Please, check your rhythm properly next time!Fixed
6. 01:20:344 (5) - nazi - Kiai end = New combo. If you will do it HTIS way, your patterns will be more reasonable. Fixed
7. 01:15:074 (4) - for patterns like this one, you can use NC because jump distance is two times bigger than regular spacing! make sure, that ALL THE JUMPS are EASY-READABLE.Fixed

[Normal]

1. 00:38:993 (5) - nazi - sliders with angles like this one feels weird for that SOFT song, please use white dots to create slider, because vocals are REALLY soft here. Fixed
2. 00:49:533 (1) - two LOOOOOOOOONG sliders are too much fr ths diff. It's becoming the way TOO boring.Fixed
3. 00:57:641 (4) - nazi - don't you feel like there's a missed new comboFixed

[Easy]

1. AR 4 is too fast for Easy diff. Try to reduce AR and other diff settings, please! It's too hard for Easy diff. Fixed
2. 00:55:209 (1) - overlapped with spinner's hitburst. It will confuse and stress beginners a lot! Fixed

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Good job here, just make sure there's no more obvious/unrankable mistakes like missing preview pointFixed.

CDFA wrote:

DEAncientNaga wrote:

DEAncientNaga's Mod Queue

[General]
Nice song
Nicely mapped

00:03:290 - Start here for 1 or 2 diff (like hard and insane) No , i'll keep this

[Easy]
00:52:141 (1) - Slider until here No , i'll keep this

[Normal]
00:20:114 (1) - Make this more bent Fixed

[Hard]
00:21:330 (2,3) - Make (2) (3) goes down from above cuz (4) is bend Fixed

[TeA's Insane]
00:55:587 (3,4,5,6) - Put hitsound to make the lyric part more clearly, same as 01:10:384 (1,2,3) - Fixed
01:21:736 (1) - Suggest not to put long spinner in insane But i like it

1. you don't have artistUnicode and titleUnicode 0,0
2. i think it's 早見沙織 - セキレイ (and according to this, the artist name is Hayami Saori 0,0)

1. 00:13:932 (4) - add note here? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/850582
2. 00:52:344 (4) - i think this pattern is better to play http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/850574
3. 01:02:479 (2) - better to add a note here, http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/850577 because the spacing is similar as 00:59:641 (2) -
4. 01:07:040 (6) - move 1 grid down w
5. 01:16:263 (4,5) - add note? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/850581

1. spacing is so small 0,0
2. 01:02:276 (4,5,6) - it should be here 0,0 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/850592
3. 01:07:546 (2) - move this up 3-5 grids, the flow may feel better ww
4. 01:12:006 (3,4,5) - move this pattern down for 8-12 grids.. it's too close now

1. 00:20:114 (1) - this map looks biased to the right here, you can turn this slider left a little bit(? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/850597

1. should be ok ww

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Legenda wrote:

→ Unrankable things, must fix
→ My human doubts, things to consider
→ Tips & Tricks to make your map better
♥ → Greetings
* → Just comments, not mods
Naked Lines → Mods

* No General issues to point.

* And no complaints for [Easy], [Normal] and [Hard]. Testplayed all of these (at Hard I got misses ._.).

[Tea's Insane]
00:13:425 (1,2,3,4,5) - Why not try something like → http://puu.sh/3wmmw.jpg

Alarido wrote:

P.S.: Hm... Before I seen the CDFA's post I noticed her too. That girl on red pants reminds me Kasugano Sakura from Street Fighter Alpha. Possibly this anime had its public release (or was created) after the SFA public release. I did think the same thing when i saw her the first time , lol

1. 00:13:627 (3,4,5) - Not entirely sure on how this rhythm pattern fits, seeing how you don't offer this anywhere else in the map given the same vocal pattern. I'd probably just use what you did at 00:16:871 (3,4,5) - with longer sliders or 00:20:114 (3) - with a 3/4 repeat.
2. 00:26:398 (1,2,3) - Would look much neater if straight.
3. 00:32:884 (1,2,3) - Again, see to that you make these straight for better effect. Additionally the absence of N:C1 slidertick at 00:33:492 - doesn't provide a very good audio transition.
4. 00:39:573 (1) - Starting this section, you will only be able to see what I'm talking about in play/test mode. Notice how followpoint only appears between some of the objects, but not all. You should change the spacing on certain objects accordingly based on whether you intended for the followpoints to appear or not (increase or decrease general spacing so that appearance of followpoint is consistent in this section).
5. 00:54:168 (1) - Starting this section, I notice a lack of hitsounds, especially on the longer sliders. Make this Kiai Time more exciting!
6. 01:06:330 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - Good improv.

1. Hard reminds me of the first time I tried to make a Hard difficulty that wasn't quite Normal but wasn't quite Insane. A major flaw is that you're choosing to use such a low distance spacing (0.60x) with a slider velocity high relative to your spacing. I think the spacing you use at 00:41:195 (3,4,5,1) - is PERFECT for the entire difficulty, and would prove to make a smoother, more flowing map.
   
   1. A problem with this low spacing is that it makes passages like 00:44:438 (4,5,6,7,1,2,3) - really messy. If you have a higher distance spacing you can make these more freely.
   2. Another problem would be that you are sacrificing position of objects like 00:55:384 (3) - and 01:06:330 (3) - where they are meant to be symmetrical (on the axis) but you can't do so because you have to fit distance spacing. A larger distance spacing would allow more freedom of object placement.
2. Normal is your best diff of the three. One thing I can mention here is that you didn't quite emphasize all cymbals heard at 00:34:303 (3,4) - . You do it nicely at 01:15:249 (3,4) - though .
3. Easy could use AR2. One thing I really like is the group of consecutive circles in the Kiai Time 01:15:249 (2,3,4) - . On the contrary, your Kiai Time as a whole can make use of more circles instead of relying solely on sliders to bring out the song.

14:54 mancuso_JM_: podemos ver algunas cositas por IRC
14:54 mancuso_JM_: ?
14:54 *mancuso_JM_ is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/222520 Saori Hayami - Sekirei (TV Size) [TeA's Insane]]
14:55 Tur00: oks
14:55 Tur00: perame un momento
14:55 Tur00: termino esta cancion D:
14:55 mancuso_JM_: dale, no hay apuro
14:57 Tur00: listo dime
14:58 mancuso_JM_: tenes permiso para cambiar cosas en la diff. de TeA?
14:58 Tur00: se
14:58 Tur00: el no puede descargar el song
14:58 Tur00: no lo deja
14:58 mancuso_JM_: ok, ok
14:58 Tur00: y me dijo que le cambiara lo de la diff de el
14:58 mancuso_JM_: entonces
14:59 mancuso_JM_: 00:28:830 - Ahi falta una Nota
14:59 mancuso_JM_: ubicala en x:168 y:72
15:01 Tur00: ok
15:02 mancuso_JM_: 00:45:046 (2) - Ubica ese slider en x:224 y:184 para mejorar el flow en el patron
15:04 Tur00: ya.
15:05 mancuso_JM_: 01:04:303 - Olvido el clap en el slidertick
15:06 Tur00: ahi esta ._.
15:07 mancuso_JM_: me equivoque, sorry
15:07 mancuso_JM_: 01:01:060 - debi decir
15:07 Tur00: ya :3
15:09 mancuso_JM_: en Hard
15:10 mancuso_JM_: 00:30:046 (7,1,2) - Ubica (7) en x:288 y:200 , (1) en x:240 y:136 y (2) en x:168 y:104 para mejorar el flow
15:13 mancuso_JM_: ?????
15:14 mancuso_JM_: avisame cuando vuelvas
15:14 mancuso_JM_: btw, en Hard tambien
15:14 mancuso_JM_: 00:54:168 (1) - Agrega un finish en esa nota
15:14 Tur00: ok
15:14 Tur00: ya >.<
15:15 mancuso_JM_: agregaste ambas cosas? o que?
15:15 Tur00: todo 
15:16 Tur00: osea si amas xd
15:16 Tur00: ambas*
15:16 mancuso_JM_: 01:20:114 (5) - New Combo y Finish al comienzo de este Slider
15:16 mancuso_JM_: 01:21:330 - Y Clap en esa nota
15:20 mancuso_JM_: avisame cuando hagas los cambios
15:20 mancuso_JM_: no soy adivino xD
15:20 Tur00: solo sigue
15:20 Tur00: XD
15:20 mancuso_JM_: en Normal
15:20 Tur00: no te preocupes haha
15:20 mancuso_JM_: 00:50:519 (2) - Usa clap en lugar del whistle
15:21 mancuso_JM_: 00:50:925 (3) - Whistle al comienzo del slider y en el reverse arrow. Clap al final del slider
15:22 mancuso_JM_: 01:19:709 (5,6) - Clap por whistle en (5) y finish en (6)
15:26 mancuso_JM_: En Easy: 01:18:087 (2,3) - Para mejor flow mueve (2) a x:316 y:188 y (3) a x:308 y:268
15:26 mancuso_JM_: luego de esto, actualiza
15:27 Tur00: hmm
15:29 Tur00: listo

1. Hitsounds fixes (Normal - Hard)
2. Some changes to increase the flow (Easy - TeA's Insane)

mancuso_JM_ wrote:

IRC Rechecked! (No need to kds here)

14:54 mancuso_JM_: podemos ver algunas cositas por IRC
14:54 mancuso_JM_: ?
14:54 *mancuso_JM_ is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/222520 Saori Hayami - Sekirei (TV Size) [TeA's Insane]]
14:55 Tur00: oks
14:55 Tur00: perame un momento
14:55 Tur00: termino esta cancion D:
14:55 mancuso_JM_: dale, no hay apuro
14:57 Tur00: listo dime
14:58 mancuso_JM_: tenes permiso para cambiar cosas en la diff. de TeA?
14:58 Tur00: se
14:58 Tur00: el no puede descargar el song
14:58 Tur00: no lo deja
14:58 mancuso_JM_: ok, ok
14:58 Tur00: y me dijo que le cambiara lo de la diff de el
14:58 mancuso_JM_: entonces
14:59 mancuso_JM_: 00:28:830 - Ahi falta una Nota
14:59 mancuso_JM_: ubicala en x:168 y:72
15:01 Tur00: ok
15:02 mancuso_JM_: 00:45:046 (2) - Ubica ese slider en x:224 y:184 para mejorar el flow en el patron
15:04 Tur00: ya.
15:05 mancuso_JM_: 01:04:303 - Olvido el clap en el slidertick
15:06 Tur00: ahi esta ._.
15:07 mancuso_JM_: me equivoque, sorry
15:07 mancuso_JM_: 01:01:060 - debi decir
15:07 Tur00: ya :3
15:09 mancuso_JM_: en Hard
15:10 mancuso_JM_: 00:30:046 (7,1,2) - Ubica (7) en x:288 y:200 , (1) en x:240 y:136 y (2) en x:168 y:104 para mejorar el flow
15:13 mancuso_JM_: ?????
15:14 mancuso_JM_: avisame cuando vuelvas
15:14 mancuso_JM_: btw, en Hard tambien
15:14 mancuso_JM_: 00:54:168 (1) - Agrega un finish en esa nota
15:14 Tur00: ok
15:14 Tur00: ya >.<
15:15 mancuso_JM_: agregaste ambas cosas? o que?
15:15 Tur00: todo 
15:16 Tur00: osea si amas xd
15:16 Tur00: ambas*
15:16 mancuso_JM_: 01:20:114 (5) - New Combo y Finish al comienzo de este Slider
15:16 mancuso_JM_: 01:21:330 - Y Clap en esa nota
15:20 mancuso_JM_: avisame cuando hagas los cambios
15:20 mancuso_JM_: no soy adivino xD
15:20 Tur00: solo sigue
15:20 Tur00: XD
15:20 mancuso_JM_: en Normal
15:20 Tur00: no te preocupes haha
15:20 mancuso_JM_: 00:50:519 (2) - Usa clap en lugar del whistle
15:21 mancuso_JM_: 00:50:925 (3) - Whistle al comienzo del slider y en el reverse arrow. Clap al final del slider
15:22 mancuso_JM_: 01:19:709 (5,6) - Clap por whistle en (5) y finish en (6)
15:26 mancuso_JM_: En Easy: 01:18:087 (2,3) - Para mejor flow mueve (2) a x:316 y:188 y (3) a x:308 y:268
15:26 mancuso_JM_: luego de esto, actualiza
15:27 Tur00: hmm
15:29 Tur00: listo

Changes:

1. Hitsounds fixes (Normal - Hard)
2. Some changes to increase the flow (Easy - TeA's Insane)

With that, I can say that everything looks in set to me
So, Bubbled!

Thanks!

dkun wrote:

Sorry for the really late mod! I know I said I would look at this ages ago~

We fixed a few things in Hard (hitsounds and a few slider/combo changes)~

Have a heart from me! (≧∇≦)/ <<< This looks a bit gay .. but , THanks!!

Lanturn wrote:

Love this song, and a very nice mapset to go with it. great job

Edit: Artist name should be Hayami Saori, not Saori Hayami.

Family Name before Given name.