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Melophobia
BGでらかわいい・・・

[General]
Short verに関するガイドラインがルールに変更されたので外して下さい
"Maou Hajimemashita"をTagに追加
Letterbox during breaksを全難易度で無効化
Preview pointは47392の方が良いと思います

[Insane]
00:11:029 (4,1) - 強調される部分だしこういう配置してるところは全部ここのSpacingも大きくしてもいいんじゃないかなぁとか思ったり。めんどくさいならそのままでもいいよ
00:25:233 (7) - Finish?
00:31:142 (1,2) - ^
00:40:120 (4,1) - 細かいけどspacing
00:43:983 (1) - 終点を00:45:574 - にした方がドラムの切れ目に合って違和感減ると思う
00:46:824 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - 音量が大きすぎてちょっと煩いし、少し低めの音量にした方が次のKiaiの始点が強調されてbetter。
00:51:142 (1,2,3,4) - 前のセクションが少しHitsound多めなのにここでHitsoundが減るから少し耳が寂しいと思う。長いスライダーがあるから多少はしょうがないんだけど、00:51:824 (2,4) - にそれぞれClapつけるとだいぶ良くなる気がする
00:52:961 (1,2) - ^同様の理由でそれぞれの終点にclap? こっちはお好みで
00:58:415 (1,2,3,4) - 00:51:142 (1,2,3,4) - に同じ ただこっちは音の鳴り方が少し違うから音付け変えないで区別化しても良いと思う
01:10:688 (5) - エコー掛かった音だからFinishの方が合うと思う 両方付けてもgood
01:27:051 (2) - ^
01:27:051 (2) - SVが早くて流れが急だからStackしてるとやや叩きにくい&1/4って読みにくい気が個人的にするからUnstackしたほうがいいかな http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/976681

他の難易度にも共通して指摘できる部分(特にHitsound)が多かったけどさすがに手間すぎるのでこれ以降指摘しません 対応するところがあればそっちで判断して直しておいて下さい

[Hard]
00:38:415 (1,2,3) - このSpacingの使い方はHardにしてはかなり読みにくい
01:00:688 (2) - 反転させた配置なのはわかるんだけど流れ&見た目があんまり良くない こんな感じにしてみては http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/976710
今回はspreadがまともなので不問ですがちょっとHardにしては連打が多いです SpreadのためだけでなくInsaneとの区別化という意味でも難易度差をつけるのは大事だと思います

[Normal]
00:27:506 (3,4) - もっとWhistleつけても合うと思う 僕なら(3)全部につけて(4)の始点にもつけます
01:04:779 (5,1) - 対象配置に無理やりつなげすぎてて流れがかなり悪い もっと上手いつなげ方があるはず

[Easy]
00:18:415 - Finish忘れてない?
00:27:506 (3) - 曲げすぎな気がする http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/976739
00:32:961 (1) - ちょっと離れすぎ
01:26:597 (4) - これも対象配置にしちゃった方が自然

Translation
[General]
The guideline regarding (Short Ver.) has been switched to ranking rule, so please remove it.
There should be "Maou Hajimemashita" in the tags I think.
Disable Letterbox during breaks in all difficulties.
Set 47392 as preview point.

[Insane]
00:11:029 (4,1) - For all patterns of this kind, I think a larger spacing may be better considering this section should be emphasized. But as this'd be a tough work, you can leave it as it is.
00:25:233 (7) - Finish?
00:31:142 (1,2) - ^
00:40:120 (4,1) - *nazi* spacing.
00:43:983 (1) - End this spinner at 00:45:574 - to match it with the end of drum-roll.
00:46:824 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - The volume setting is way too loud imo, so please reduce it a little more. And also by doing this the kiai beginning would be more emphasized.
00:51:142 (1,2,3,4) - Considering that there's a lot of hitsounds in the previous section, this section feels empty. That's because of the long sliders but you can prevent it from happening by adding claps to 00:51:824 (2,4) - .
00:52:961 (1,2) - For the same reason as above, you can add claps here. But it's still up to you.
01:10:688 (5) - This sound is kinda echoed so finish fits better imo. Adding both is a good idea as well.
01:27:051 (2) - ^
01:27:051 (2) - Considering its high SV it feels uncomfortable while playing because they're stacked, and it makes the pattern unreadable. Consider unstacking them.
http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/976681

There's a lot of stuff which is applied to other diffs - especially for hitsounds. Please fix them up by yourself.

[Hard]
00:38:415 (1,2,3) - This spacing usage is really unreadable considering its difficulty and doesn't look good either.
01:00:688 (2) - I can tell why you did this but it doesn't look/flow well imo. How aboud rearranging it like this? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/976710

[Normal]
00:27:506 (3,4) - How aboud adding whistles more?
01:04:779 (5,1) - This flows really badly because you're sticking to symmetrical pattern too much.

[Easy]
00:18:415 - You forget a finish here?
00:27:506 (3) - Is too curved imo. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/976739
00:32:961 (1) - Too far.
01:26:597 (4) - It'd be more natural if this one is placed symmetrically as well as (1,2,3).

Forum pm me for a recheck~
Topic Starter
phoon

Melophobia wrote:

BGでらかわいい・・・ なおられには酷評された模様

[General]
Short verに関するガイドラインがルールに変更されたので外して下さい fix
"Maou Hajimemashita"をTagに追加 fix
Letterbox during breaksを全難易度で無効化 fix
Preview pointは47392の方が良いと思います

[Insane]
00:11:029 (4,1) - 強調される部分だしこういう配置してるところは全部ここのSpacingも大きくしてもいいんじゃないかなぁとか思ったり。めんどくさいならそのままでもいいよ 見た目重視で変えませんでした
00:25:233 (7) - Finish? fix
00:31:142 (1,2) - ^ fix
00:40:120 (4,1) - 細かいけどspacing 前後の形を若干変えた
00:43:983 (1) - 終点を00:45:574 - にした方がドラムの切れ目に合って違和感減ると思う fix
00:46:824 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - 音量が大きすぎてちょっと煩いし、少し低めの音量にした方が次のKiaiの始点が強調されてbetter。 fix
00:51:142 (1,2,3,4) - 前のセクションが少しHitsound多めなのにここでHitsoundが減るから少し耳が寂しいと思う。長いスライダーがあるから多少はしょうがないんだけど、00:51:824 (2,4) - にそれぞれClapつけるとだいぶ良くなる気がする fix
00:52:961 (1,2) - ^同様の理由でそれぞれの終点にclap? こっちはお好みで fix
00:58:415 (1,2,3,4) - 00:51:142 (1,2,3,4) - に同じ ただこっちは音の鳴り方が少し違うから音付け変えないで区別化しても良いと思う 変えませんでした
01:10:688 (5) - エコー掛かった音だからFinishの方が合うと思う 両方付けてもgood fix
01:27:051 (2) - ^ fix
01:27:051 (2) - SVが早くて流れが急だからStackしてるとやや叩きにくい&1/4って読みにくい気が個人的にするからUnstackしたほうがいいかな http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/976681 fix

他の難易度にも共通して指摘できる部分(特にHitsound)が多かったけどさすがに手間すぎるのでこれ以降指摘しません 対応するところがあればそっちで判断して直しておいて下さい 自分でもどう付けたのかわからないくらいごちゃごちゃしてたから明らかに違和感あるとこだけ直しました

[Hard]
00:38:415 (1,2,3) - このSpacingの使い方はHardにしてはかなり読みにくい (2)と(3)を入れ替えてそれっぽくしたけどあんまり変わってないかも...
01:00:688 (2) - 反転させた配置なのはわかるんだけど流れ&見た目があんまり良くない こんな感じにしてみては http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/976710 fix
今回はspreadがまともなので不問ですがちょっとHardにしては連打が多いです SpreadのためだけでなくInsaneとの区別化という意味でも難易度差をつけるのは大事だと思います できるだけInsaneと音取り変えないようにしたらこうなった 以後気をつけます
[Normal]
00:27:506 (3,4) - もっとWhistleつけても合うと思う 僕なら(3)全部につけて(4)の始点にもつけます fix
01:04:779 (5,1) - 対象配置に無理やりつなげすぎてて流れがかなり悪い もっと上手いつなげ方があるはず fix

[Easy]
00:18:415 - Finish忘れてない? fix
00:27:506 (3) - 曲げすぎな気がする http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/976739 fix
00:32:961 (1) - ちょっと離れすぎ fix
01:26:597 (4) - これも対象配置にしちゃった方が自然 fix

Translation
[General]
The guideline regarding (Short Ver.) has been switched to ranking rule, so please remove it.
There should be "Maou Hajimemashita" in the tags I think.
Disable Letterbox during breaks in all difficulties.
Set 47392 as preview point.

[Insane]
00:11:029 (4,1) - For all patterns of this kind, I think a larger spacing may be better considering this section should be emphasized. But as this'd be a tough work, you can leave it as it is.
00:25:233 (7) - Finish?
00:31:142 (1,2) - ^
00:40:120 (4,1) - *nazi* spacing.
00:43:983 (1) - End this spinner at 00:45:574 - to match it with the end of drum-roll.
00:46:824 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - The volume setting is way too loud imo, so please reduce it a little more. And also by doing this the kiai beginning would be more emphasized.
00:51:142 (1,2,3,4) - Considering that there's a lot of hitsounds in the previous section, this section feels empty. That's because of the long sliders but you can prevent it from happening by adding claps to 00:51:824 (2,4) - .
00:52:961 (1,2) - For the same reason as above, you can add claps here. But it's still up to you.
01:10:688 (5) - This sound is kinda echoed so finish fits better imo. Adding both is a good idea as well.
01:27:051 (2) - ^
01:27:051 (2) - Considering its high SV it feels uncomfortable while playing because they're stacked, and it makes the pattern unreadable. Consider unstacking them.
http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/976681

There's a lot of stuff which is applied to other diffs - especially for hitsounds. Please fix them up by yourself.

[Hard]
00:38:415 (1,2,3) - This spacing usage is really unreadable considering its difficulty and doesn't look good either.
01:00:688 (2) - I can tell why you did this but it doesn't look/flow well imo. How aboud rearranging it like this? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/976710

[Normal]
00:27:506 (3,4) - How aboud adding whistles more?
01:04:779 (5,1) - This flows really badly because you're sticking to symmetrical pattern too much.

[Easy]
00:18:415 - You forget a finish here?
00:27:506 (3) - Is too curved imo. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/976739
00:32:961 (1) - Too far.
01:26:597 (4) - It'd be more natural if this one is placed symmetrically as well as (1,2,3).
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Melophobia
Satellite
wwwwwwwwwwwww

go go ~
Oyatsu
Yea!! I support Visual Novel Song, Go! GO! plz :D
Garven
fuuuuuun

[General]
Tick rate 2 fits this song best

[Easy]
00:31:142 (3,1) - Spacing is a bit large here

[Normal]
01:11:142 (1) - This is rather soon after a spinner for a normal difficulty. Maybe map through the spinner at 01:09:324 (1) -

[Hard]
OD +1-2
Compared to the Normal, this is rather difficult. Too many streams. Try reducing your use of them in this or restrict the length of the streams to 5 circles.

[Insane]
New combos feel overused. Try to make your combos a little longer - maybe every one or two tall white ticks
00:11:142 (1) - ?
00:30:233 (4,5,1,2,3) - This flows better imo:
->
If you do this, you'll want to move 00:32:052 (1) - closer though.
00:40:233 (1) - ?
01:01:142 (4,5,6) - ?
01:18:415 (1) - Same as earlier
Topic Starter
phoon

Garven wrote:

fuuuuuun ^^

[General]
Tick rate 2 fits this song best changed

[Easy]
00:31:142 (3,1) - Spacing is a bit large here fixed

[Normal]
01:11:142 (1) - This is rather soon after a spinner for a normal difficulty. Maybe map through the spinner at 01:09:324 (1) - no change (Because a similar tendency is seen in other beatmaps)

[Hard]
OD +1-2 fixed
Compared to the Normal, this is rather difficult. Too many streams. Try reducing your use of them in this or restrict the length of the streams to 5 circles.

[Insane]
New combos feel overused. Try to make your combos a little longer - maybe every one or two tall white ticks
(not change it to show a united feeling in Hard and Insane)
00:11:142 (1) - ? changed
00:30:233 (4,5,1,2,3) - This flows better imo: changed
-> changed
If you do this, you'll want to move 00:32:052 (1) - closer though.
00:40:233 (1) - ? changed
01:01:142 (4,5,6) - ? no changed (To stop at the screen edge too much)
01:18:415 (1) - Same as earlier changed
thanks Garven :)
Garven
Did some additional IRC modding fixing a messed up slider and one pattern change in the Insane around 32 seconds in.

Rebubbled!
Topic Starter
phoon
ty Garven :D
Melophobia
Ranked.
HabiHolic
a nice job good!!!
MiLu
ふーん
fusya
おめでとーです!
kajiyatta
omedetou
CakiP
おめでとうございます~
Satellite
おめでとうございます! :)
iyasine
かわいい~ :oops:
litoluna
おめでとうございます! (.>◡<.)
Oyatsu
Sukete!!~
Gratz!!!! :D
alacat
fuuuuuun d=(^o^)=b
Guy
やったぜ!
Natsu
おめでとーです! ;)
Rare
おすだいれくとくれ
Kuria
美しいmapがおめでとう
BeatofIke
moe mappu! ^_^
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