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Ayakura Mei - NIGHTFALL

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233pc
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233pc
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2013年2月12日星期二 at 18:54:11

Artist: Ayakura Mei
Title: NIGHTFALL
Source: Touhou
Tags: c83 DOMINATED DANCEHALL alstroemeria records
BPM: 128
Filesize: 8987kb
Play Time: 05:30
Difficulties Available:
  1. Hard (4.77 stars, 713 notes)
  2. Normal (2.42 stars, 318 notes)
  3. Villa Orleans (4.99 stars, 693 notes)
Download: Ayakura Mei - NIGHTFALL
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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Alstroemeria Records C83 alBum "DOMINATED DANCEHALL" #3. NIGHTFALL

vocal: Ayakura Mei
compose: Masayoshi Minoshima
lyrics: haruka

Insane diff (Villa Orleans): 233pc
other diffs: #random mapper#
Last edited by 233pc , edited 3 times in total.
Tachibana Kanade
64 posts
Joined August 2012
Tachibana Kanade
渣mod多多見諒 :roll:

Normal
01:03:344 (1) - 这里感觉这个slider不合适 建议01:03:344 (1) - 白线改成一个单独note 然后下个白线用slider
http://puu.sh/1YMUV
01:07:563 (4) - NC
01:39:907 (1) - remove NC
01:41:313 (2) - NC
02:19:282 (1) - remove nc
02:20:688 (1,2,3) - 这里感觉不太合适 第三个note后还有人声却直接空拍 要不直接改slider到红线试试
http://puu.sh/1YN5J
02:23:969 (5) - NC
02:24:907 (1) - remove nc
02:31:938 (1,2) - 和 02:31:001 (1) - 叠起？
02:46:469 (1) - remove nc
02:46:938 (2) - nc
02:47:876 (1) - remove nc
02:57:251 (1) - remove nc
03:36:860 (1) - remove nc
03:37:563 (3) - nc
03:48:344 (1) - remove nc
03:48:813 (2) - nc
04:00:532 (1) - remove nc
04:11:547 (1,2,3) - 排版 建议要么重叠 不然不要把note放slifer上
04:18:344 (1) - 建议用单独note 然后在04:18:813用slider （白线开始slider下一个白线结束slider）
04:25:844 (1) - remove nc
04:26:313 (2) - nc
04:39:438 (3) - 这里是不是也考虑用和04:37:094 (2,3,4) - 一样的note 节奏好一致
04:41:313 (7) - nc
04:52:563 (6) - remove nc
04:53:032 (1) - nc
05:23:969 (1) - remove nc
05:24:438 (2) - nc


hard
01:03:579 (1) - remove nc
01:03:813 (2) - nc
01:04:985 (1) - remove nc
01:07:329 (1) - remove nc
01:11:079 (1) - 删掉slider 人声只在01:11:313 所以只在这里白线放一个note
01:14:829 (2) - 修改
01:51:626 (1) - remove nc
01:58:422 (8) - nc
01:58:657 (1) - remove nc
02:00:063 (1,2,3) - 这里感觉塞进去的三连 换成二连试试? 白线和红线各一个note就可以
02:01:704 (1) - remove nc
02:02:876 (1) - remove nc
02:03:813 (2) - nc
02:04:516 (1) - remove nc
02:05:922 (1) - remove nc
02:12:485 (1) - remove nc
02:18:344 (1) - remove nc
02:18:813 (2) - nc
02:29:829 (1) - remove nc
02:37:563 (9) - nc
02:38:032 (1) - remove nc
02:38:969 (3) - 删slider 人声在后半段 建议02:38:970 处放一个note 然后下一个白线起slider 红线结束

02:41:313 (7) - nc
02:44:594 (1) - remove nc
02:45:063 (4) - nc
02:46:704 (1) - remove nc
02:46:938 (2) - nc
（总之关于nc的问题后面你都可以自己修改了 0.0

..
..
03:31:235 (1) - remove nc
03:31:704 (2) - nc
03:33:579 (6) - nc
03:35:922 (1) - remoce nc
03:40:141 (1) - remove nc
03:46:469 (1,2,3) - 去掉中间的note
04:14:829 (1) - remove nc
04:59:594 (11,12,13) - 这里很别扭 我建议直接从04:59:594 开始4个note （白线 红线 白线 红线
233pc
50 posts
Joined June 2012
Topic Starter
233pc
哇, 好认真的mod, 好评
Kayano
1,286 posts
Joined July 2011
Kayano

233pc wrote:

哇, 好认真的mod, 好评
Tachibana Kanade
64 posts
Joined August 2012
Tachibana Kanade

Blackshane wrote:

233pc wrote:

哇, 好认真的mod, 好评
。
Kayano
1,286 posts
Joined July 2011
Kayano
[General Check]
如果你想APP 请把前面1分钟做完 如果想ranked 请把前面1分钟切掉因为不然总时长会超过5分钟
大概从00:59:946 - 开始切就行了 然后Audio Lead-in设为2500
或者从00:56:196 - 开始切 就不要设Audio Lead-in了（建议后者）
可以音效淡入下
Artist改成这样
SPOILER
storyboarding下的这个点掉
SPOILER
colours略多...
hard的AR-1或者HDR+1 OD+1(推荐后者)
insane的HDR调到7
EDIT:每个难度的colours最好改成一样的 推荐用insane的colours
233pc
50 posts
Joined June 2012
Topic Starter
233pc

Blackshane wrote:

[General Check]
如果你想APP 请把前面1分钟做完 如果想ranked 请把前面1分钟切掉因为不然总时长会超过5分钟
大概从00:59:946 - 开始切就行了 然后Audio Lead-in设为2500
或者从00:56:196 - 开始切 就不要设Audio Lead-in了（建议后者）
可以音效淡入下
Artist改成这样
SPOILER
storyboarding下的这个点掉
SPOILER
colours略多...
hard的AR-1或者HDR+1 OD+1(推荐后者)
insane的HDR调到7
EDIT:每个难度的colours最好改成一样的 推荐用insane的colours
切歌之类的等要rank的时候再切吧, 目前先观望一下

artist fix
kajiyatta
1,421 posts
Joined April 2011
kajiyatta
from modding queue
General
you can put hit sound such as crap & whistle at backbeat. (2 &4 in the below picture), and add finish (1), it will be strong point of music
and put NC at (1) better.
SPOILER
please set same combo color in all diffs.
Normal
Placement
01:03:345(1) this slider seems so difficult for newbie because there are so many red ticks.
01:41:782(2)^
01:47:876(2)^
01:08:501(2,3,4) this flow seems weird and difficult, maybe like this
SPOILER
02:00:532(2) this flow isn't good. you should put notes newbie will expect easily in this diff.
02:29:126(2)^
02:39:907(2)^
02:54:907(4)^
02:02:876(2) this note isn't visible , you can move it.
02:05:220(2)^
04:28:657(3)^
04:58:188(3)^
02:18:813(1) remove NC
02:33:345(1)^
02:53:501(1)^
02:55:376(1)^
02:31:938(1,2) please stack at 02:31:001
03:39:907(5) this slider makes confusing for newbie.please put a clear notes and slider.
Rhythm
04:01:938(2,3,4,5) please follow the music like this
SPOILER
04:11:548(1,2) not overlapped.
Hit Sonud
so many pointed out things... but you can fix by yourself with above comment.

sorry for lazy modding, this map needs so many works so I modded only one diff... you can read official guideline http://osu.ppy.sh/wiki/Ranking_Criteria
and there are many Ranked maps, these help your mapping skills.
233pc
50 posts
Joined June 2012
Topic Starter
233pc
thanks modding!! fixed some
Autumn
501 posts
Joined October 2011
Autumn
Hi~
Mod from 233星球

[Normal]
作为Normal，这种程度的遮挡和滑条我还是第一次看到..Sorry..Mod不能

[Hard]
各种扭曲滑条和奇葩遮挡..（想到了kiiwa）
虽然这类mapper很多，但我是不太喜欢这种风格，就不提flow方面的意见了。(除了像01:09:672 (2) 和 04:24:438 (4) 这种..犹抱琵琶半遮面？)
还有跟鼓点和vocal的切换需要加强

01:04:985 (1,2,3,4,5) 和01:05:922 (1,2,3,4,5) - 建议三连在前。DownBeat单点，弱拍用三连填充：
SPOILER
02:21:743 (6) - Remove to fit the vocal
05:30:063 (6) - Finish？

[Villa Orleans]
一如既往的迷の遮挡和拖拍...

几处比较confusing的跳，注意下：
01:31:470 (10,1) -
02:48:813 (1,2) - 放到下面构成反平行似乎好一些：
SPOILER
02:52:095 (5,6) - 因为后面的02:52:915 (2,3) space几乎一样啊..改成02:53:970 (5,6) 的间距？或者减少一点也好

01:50:102 (4,5) - Stack好..其实问题也不大，反正有Stack leniency..
02:08:032 (2) - 往右一点减少遮挡
SPOILER
04:45:415 (2) - 右移一点对齐上面的滑条
04:45:649 (3,4) - 包好
05:12:954 (6) - 这里的遮挡有点难看 把05:12:602 (5)弄弯试试（不过破坏了你的Style）
SPOILER
05:29:595 (3,4) - 绝对坑爹啊..多少人会以为这里是四分拍？
放成三角形应该可破..如果你不是故意坑人的..

GL~Fav亮了
233pc
50 posts
Joined June 2012
Topic Starter
233pc

Autumn wrote:

Hi~
Mod from 233星球

[Normal]
作为Normal，这种程度的遮挡和滑条我还是第一次看到..Sorry..Mod不能 思考

[Hard]
各种扭曲滑条和奇葩遮挡..（想到了kiiwa）
虽然这类mapper很多，但我是不太喜欢这种风格，就不提flow方面的意见了。(除了像01:09:672 (2) 和 04:24:438 (4) 这种..犹抱琵琶半遮面？)
还有跟鼓点和vocal的切换需要加强

01:04:985 (1,2,3,4,5) 和01:05:922 (1,2,3,4,5) - 建议三连在前。DownBeat单点，弱拍用三连填充： changed
SPOILER
02:21:743 (6) - Remove to fit the vocal
05:30:063 (6) - Finish？

[Villa Orleans]
一如既往的迷の遮挡和拖拍... 别墅奥尔良

几处比较confusing的跳，注意下：
01:31:470 (10,1) - changed
02:48:813 (1,2) - 放到下面构成反平行似乎好一些： 这样感觉两边不平衡
SPOILER
02:52:095 (5,6) - 因为后面的02:52:915 (2,3) space几乎一样啊..改成02:53:970 (5,6) 的间距？或者减少一点也好 两个都改了下

01:50:102 (4,5) - Stack好..其实问题也不大，反正有Stack leniency.. changed
02:08:032 (2) - 往右一点减少遮挡 这个挡就挡吧, 三角形比较好看
SPOILER
04:45:415 (2) - 右移一点对齐上面的滑条 ok
04:45:649 (3,4) - 包好 包不好
05:12:954 (6) - 这里的遮挡有点难看 把05:12:602 (5)弄弯试试（不过破坏了你的Style） 把4弯过去就ok了
SPOILER
05:29:595 (3,4) - 绝对坑爹啊..多少人会以为这里是四分拍？ 结尾出50是标准结局好吗
放成三角形应该可破..如果你不是故意坑人的..

GL~Fav亮了 壮我萌?
thanks!!
Ayakura Mei
156 posts
Joined September 2011
Ayakura Mei
额 一点小问题 artist你那个应该是拼音打出来的 其实应该是綾倉盟
Edit:考虑把Tick Rate调高一格？ 利用slider tick把clap更加系统的补全一点会不会好点...
233pc
50 posts
Joined June 2012
Topic Starter
233pc

Ayakura Mei wrote:

额 一点小问题 artist你那个应该是拼音打出来的 其实应该是綾倉盟
Edit:考虑把Tick Rate调高一格？ 利用slider tick把clap更加系统的补全一点会不会好点...
好
eveless
2,080 posts
Joined April 2009
eveless
[General]
  1. preview time不一致
  2. break太长，建议在20s以下。
  3. 最好还是把GDer写一下？tag里面也要加一下。
[Villa Orleans]
  1. HP太低了.至少6-7吧
  2. 01:00:063 (1) - slider头上放finish
  3. 02:59:595 (3,4,5) - 3在右 5在左比较好，这样和两边的slider也不会碰到.
    SPOILER
  4. 03:48:110 (3,4,5) - 可以设计的更好看一点吧，现在看起来有点随意
  5. 04:32:759 (3) - 去掉开头的clap, 其实你整体上来说clap加的也并不是很频繁，这边加太多有点突兀
  6. 04:37:563 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6) - 这边突然不加clap换成whistle,两边音效也没有形成很明显的对比，后面又换回clap，感觉有点乱
  7. 05:10:962 (5) - 现在这样不是很好看，你可以摆成一条直线
  8. 05:12:017 (3) - 可以把它和12的尾巴构成一个三角形
[Hard]
  1. 01:14:829 (2) - 额这节奏实在不推荐
  2. 01:21:626 (3) - ^
  3. 01:26:079 (3) - 虽然说是鼓励自创节奏不过也该构思好
  4. 04:24:438 (4) - 这应该是unranked
  5. 在跑之前还是先学会走吧.虽然说艺术slider是很好，可是也要看用在什么地方。建议多看看别人的图学学节奏排版音效
[Normal]
  1. 总体上来说问题同HARD,finish加的有点乱.slider可以好好画的还是好好画吧
个人感觉是normal和hard还要下很大的功夫，祝好运
233pc
50 posts
Joined June 2012
Topic Starter
233pc

goodbye wrote:

[General]
  1. preview time不一致 好
  2. break太长，建议在20s以下。 这个改不了啊
  3. 最好还是把GDer写一下？tag里面也要加一下。 别墅奥尔良
[Villa Orleans]
  1. HP太低了.至少6-7吧 好
  2. 01:00:063 (1) - slider头上放finish 刚开头口味不要太重
  3. 02:59:595 (3,4,5) - 3在右 5在左比较好，这样和两边的slider也不会碰到. 我还没发现叠了, 好
    SPOILER
  4. 03:48:110 (3,4,5) - 可以设计的更好看一点吧，现在看起来有点随意 这里本来就很随意的
  5. 04:32:759 (3) - 去掉开头的clap, 其实你整体上来说clap加的也并不是很频繁，这边加太多有点突兀 好
  6. 04:37:563 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6) - 这边突然不加clap换成whistle,两边音效也没有形成很明显的对比，后面又换回clap，感觉有点乱 其实是改了排列忘加了
  7. 05:10:962 (5) - 现在这样不是很好看，你可以摆成一条直线 对齐了下
  8. 05:12:017 (3) - 可以把它和12的尾巴构成一个三角形 其实现在就是三角形, 不过还是改了下
[Hard]
  1. 01:14:829 (2) - 额这节奏实在不推荐 fixed some
  2. 01:21:626 (3) - ^ fixed
  3. 01:26:079 (3) - 虽然说是鼓励自创节奏不过也该构思好 好
  4. 04:24:438 (4) - 这应该是unranked 好!
  5. 在跑之前还是先学会走吧.虽然说艺术slider是很好，可是也要看用在什么地方。建议多看看别人的图学学节奏排版音效

    这个思路不错, 不过学习功能不好写啊. 还是先试试看能不能分析节奏
[Normal]
  1. 总体上来说问题同HARD,finish加的有点乱.slider可以好好画的还是好好画吧 好!
个人感觉是normal和hard还要下很大的功夫，祝好运
thanks!
sunshy_old
141 posts
Joined July 2012
sunshy_old
分析节奏 （思考
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