Fycho wrote:

Black: Suggestions
Blue: Importance.You might consider
Red:Unrank issues. You Must Fix

[general]

• 
  敢用个分辨率大点的背景吗？500x341越看越蛋疼啊，用PS拉到1366或者1024，或者干脆换张背景吧233 啊我找不到更好的bg了....
  有视频的话把letterbox去掉，不管有没有break time
  Romanised title：Jin Ke La Yu Ni Tong Zai fix
  Audio preview time is inconsistent[/color]

[Shore]

• 
  00:04:390 (1,2) –间距突然大了打的时候坑了下 不作改动
  00:06:104 (1,2,3) –放一个三角啊 我觉得这么放是为了突出停顿感，三角该怎么放...
  00:07:819 (3) –stack有点中止flow 这个不作改动
  00:13:390 (2) –试试这种节奏,http://puu.sh/4Lz9K.jpg1/4比串子有趣 我觉得这么放有点乱...
  00:19:819 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) –两个圆弧曲率半斤一样？ 懒改
  00:22:390 (3,4,5,6) –note走势有点单一，建议这样？http://puu.sh/4LzdC.jpg这个有点nazi 改了，但没按你的改
  00:24:104 (5,6) –如果上面一个改了，这两个滑条分别转向flow会顺，而且00:23:890 (3,4,5) –要往左摆点 改了
  00:25:604 (3,4) –stack打起来不舒服 fix
  00:30:104 (1) –我觉得这样打起来顺http://puu.sh/4LzhJ.jpg fix
  00:31:390 (4,5,6) –这样 http://puu.sh/4LzjN.jpg flow好 打起来不太好，我改成别样了
  00:37:604 (4,5) –这两个可以叠3下面去，不然我觉得难读图，而且可以用manual stack体现停顿感 不做修改
  00:38:033 (5,6,7,1) –间距太小，建议和00:36:104 (2,3) –一样 ^
  00:43:390 (6)-这个还是改成1/2好点，再在蓝线上加note 我觉得现在这样没啥问题啊
  00:48:962 (1) –这里柑橘没必要加速啊，也没什么特别的音 突出Go
  00:50:247 (5) –这个倒可以加速 前面没改后面改了会唐突，所以不做修改
  00:52:176 (8,1) –stack不好 想不到怎么改，但还是改动了
  00:58:604 (7) –NC？便于读图 五颜六色我觉得才难读图
  01:06:104 (1,2) –我建议使用倾向于有点变化的节奏，试试这个http://puu.sh/4LzwH.jpg和01:07:819 (1,2,3) –不一样 不太想改成这样
  01:09:533 (1,2) –前面的1/4都摆那么小，这个太大了吧 fix
  01:14:140 –这里那个乐器的音，强烈推荐别忽略，因为你之前都跟了，而且这里这个应该主跟这个，而其他那些鼓可以忽略掉，建议http://puu.sh/4LzDN.jpg 不想这么跟...我加了一个note在01:13:712
  01:19:604 (9,1) –别stack，或者如果你想stack，可以01:19:712 –加圈做triplet 那就加
  01:23:033 (6) –Crtl+G，因为你前面flow都是过来的，这个别顺着绕，而且位置也别变，正好给01:23:247 (1) –来个跳 fix

[Hard]

• 
  00:29:462 (6) –是要保全音效跟鼓点还是跟人声，撒。。。抉择吧 orz,我觉得现在挺好的
  00:34:390 (5) –这个稍微水平点，例如http://puu.sh/4LzSO.jpg fix
  00:44:890 (6,1) –离远点，不仅overlap的不好看还容易读成1/4 fix
  00:48:962 (1) –同insane，而且这个是hard，这样来加速略难 我主要想表达出那个Go.
  00:50:247 (5) –而且，你之前那个加速，这个也加速比较好 这里没Go(
  01:07:819 (1,2) –这个也建议别顺着，像这个一样01:06:533 (2) -，反过来放2，突出人声 我感觉这样挺好的
  01:09:533 (1) –试试这样放http://puu.sh/4LA2A.jpg fix
  01:11:247 (1) –这样摆，不然hard读图难，http://puu.sh/4LA5y.jpg fix
  01:12:962 (1) –这个位置，http://puu.sh/4LA8Y.jpg fix
  01:21:533 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) –hard这样略坑，换成3/2滑条试试 没问题的!

[Normal]

• 
  00:05:247 (1,1) –去掉nc，这里有点NC spam fix
  00:22:176 (1,2,3,4) –这里节奏有点复杂，对于normal，这样http://puu.sh/4LAge.jpg简单的跟音乐就行了，别去刻意跟人声（对于整个diff适用） 我把后面的节奏改得和这样一样了
  00:40:390 (2,3,4,5) –这里把那个乐器全跟了，对于有点难，看起来不干净，因为你这里00:36:104 (1,2,1) –下的很稀
  01:04:819 –add note保持节奏完整，而且不会离转盘太近，因为你这00:21:962 (1) –加了 fix
  01:18:962 (1) -1/1 slider fits the music much better fix
  01:22:390 (1,1) –去NC fix

[Easy]

• 
  00:02:247 (2,3) –新手不会读stack fix
  00:09:533 (3,1) –有点难看，别stack，overlap可以对称下 no
  00:23:247 (2) –折返箭头没音，音在这里00:24:104 –建议这样,http://puu.sh/4LABH.jpg fix
  00:28:390 (1) -^,不想一样的节奏可以换个节奏，不过那个音要跟 这个不改我觉得无所谓
  00:30:104 (2,3) –对于EASY diff这样节奏有点乱啊，而且1/2的也偏难，如果你上一条改了可以试试这个节奏, 上一条没改，sohttp://puu.sh/4LAF3.jpg
  00:52:390 (2) –延长到白线，然后00:53:462 (3) –改成一个在白线00:53:676 -的一个note no
  00:55:819 (3,4,1) –太难 拉远了
  01:05:247 (1,2) –blanket？ no
  01:06:962 –这里漏音 保持这个节奏
  01:11:247 (1,3) –难看，不对称，而且遮尾遮一半 不改，就这样;-;

你是抖M吗，居然说想被我喷，我又不是职业喷子实在喷不动 haochangdemodaaaaaaaa
EDIT：代码修正

Sonnyc wrote:

[]
General:

-- Two "Gangnam Style" in tags. fix
[]
Easy:

00:02:247 (2) - lol What a massive jump. (or maybe (1) is misplaced) change
00:23:247 (2) - I think this rhythm is awkward. Try something like 00:26:676 (3,4) change
00:31:819 (4) - NC? It seems the combo is getting too long. ok,add
[]
Normal:

00:05:247 (1,1) - Imo, deleting NC will feel better. fix
00:47:247 (3) - Place at (332,340)? Current flow doesn't seems nice. fix
00:49:176 - Useless Timeline. delete
00:56:676 (2) - I think there is no reason to miss a Whistle at the start. Maybe a mistake? is mistake,add
01:22:390 (1,1) - SImilar here for NC. fix
[]
Hard:

-- OD6? Currently seems too low. fix

00:06:962 (1) - Well, didn't enjoyed this speed up. Maybe lowering the speed a bit would work better. i change this slider
00:48:962 (1) - ^ emm,no change
00:50:033 (4) - Delete Whistle? no change
01:20:247 (2) - ctrl+G? is not good in here ...

Felt a bit complexed as a Hard, but fine enough. oh
[]
Shore:

00:11:997 (4) - Deleting will feel better imo. fix
00:18:319 - Filling the blank would be better imo. no change
00:22:712 - Ehh,, unlike other patterns, why is here missing a note? A triplet will be nice on playing as other patterns. fix
00:31:497 (5) - Delete this, feels weird. A note rather fits at 00:31:283. fix
00:50:033 (4) - Delete Whistle? no change
01:17:783 (6,8) - Add Whistle? i think add in 01:17:676 (5,7) - is better :3,fix
01:22:390 (4) - NC? fix
01:23:033 (3) - Imo, this slider's flow wasn't that nice. fix
[]
Good luck~

lkx_Shore wrote:

其实我翻了翻osu现在已经rank掉的国产鬼畜map，基本上都是这个up制作的。
然后我就想了想为什么这个up这么受mapper欢迎,而其他什么元首江南style一流的鬼畜视频则没有有人开坑制作。
我觉得所有的所有都可以总结到两个字上---质量
现在的鬼畜视频不迎合大众没人看，迎合大众的却质量低下。(当然也有迎合大众的质量不错的)
随便打开一个很红的鬼畜视频观看,我经常会发现up在调教过程根本没有认真把音一个个的对好/或者是把bpm算好。
这种随便的态度会让视频的质量变低,导致走音错音现象频出。
而osu做谱对音准是十分严格的,稍微有一个音不准都会让mapper觉得这不好受然后就不会开坑。
所以我希望各位做鬼畜/音MAD视频的作者不要急着发布出来，至少先把音调好，调准。
如果你急着发布出来的话，外行人看不出，内行人则会瞧不起你，我觉得这样的视频毫无意义。
所以做视频的时候细心是对自己负责，也是对他人的耳朵(?)负责。
感谢任何抽空看完这一段废话的人,并祝国产鬼畜走出低迷 2013/10/5

[CSGA]Ar3sgice wrote:

这位up主不去做音MAD吗

S o a p wrote:

怎么还没泡

S o a p wrote:

怎么还没泡

Awaken wrote:

S o a p wrote:

怎么还没泡

S o a p wrote:

怎么还没泡

Eggache0 wrote:

Hi, delay request

[General]
真是脱线 不论是歌还是我耳机 于是mod不来 随便扯扯
01:18:104 - kiai到这里结束？前面摸那么多了看样子不到这里也没问题 ok

[Easy]

00:11:247 (1,2) - 用和前面一样的节奏好一点 而且现在也压上3不好看 我觉得还好
00:16:819 - 加note fix
00:31:819 (1) - slider比较舒服 fix


[Normal]

00:06:962 (1,2) - 建议合成1个slider 毕竟是normal fix
01:11:247 (3) - nc fix


[Hard]

00:09:854 - 我觉得三连该下在这 这里也有音啊 fix
00:24:747 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 5放在 x360 y144 不了
00:42:533 (4,5) - 有点违和 只用一个slider就够了 我觉得这样比较突出人声...
00:49:390 (1,2,3,4,5) - 改了，但不是按照你的改的

这样？

00:53:462 (5) - x192 y264 顺便4的blanket下歪了（如果是blanket的话 en，不是
01:15:962 (4) - 移开 不要叠着 fix
01:20:247 (2,7) - 7压在2的尾巴上 顺一点 fix
01:24:104 (1) - 用1.0，在最后扭一下？ fix

上勾拳

[Shore]
真是鬼畜 ♪
00:04:390 (1,2,3,1,2) - 滑条尾巴的normalsample去掉 至少去掉第一个的 fix
00:22:390 (3) - 就摆在2的方向上吧 反着拉一下感觉也不错 这里我看到的时候已经改掉了..
00:52:819 (1,2,3,4) - 节奏来点变化？ 不了
00:57:533 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 五连在后面下 这里还是用1+3舒服 5连...就好吧
01:19:604 (9,10,1) - 10去掉 9挪开 和后面一致 fix

身体健康 再见（无缝循环

Irreversible wrote:

....

Why do people send me weird songs? The weirdest thing tho is, I like the songs as well. wow/_\

[General]

The background resolution seems really weird, suggested is 1024x768, even better would be 1366x768, so you should consider adding another one.

replace to 1024x768 @ @

[Easy]

00:00:962 (1,2,3,4) - Well, one of the parts I don't like in the easy is simply the beginning, it has an odd flow to follow, if you ask me. http://puu.sh/59Gkc.jpg Why not trying something like this? I'm not sure if i'm right with that, but I guess it's easier to play for beginner player. Let me know what you think You're right.i change it,fix
00:16:819 - In my opinion, the beginner can't really tell when he has to click next, to make this a bit esaier, I suggest adding a circle here, so you have a constant rhythm. ok,add note here
00:30:104 (2) - http://puu.sh/59GuK.jpg Putting it like that can also help you to avoid a too complicate rhythm for an easy, and it still sounds good. fix,but i think it is ok,player just only do "hold"and "click:...wow,let me take it easyily
00:45:104 (5,1) - I suggest you not to use any stacks in an easy diff. They're hard to tell for a beginner, if he's really new to that game. Please try to space them properly. This goes to all your stacks. ok,fix

Feedback:

Proper diff, but please get rid of those complicate patterns, they don't fit an easy that well!

fix,i change all stack part

[Normal]

Well, I'll just go directly to the 'feedback'-part here:

The diff seems solid as well, just as easy. The problem I see here tho is, that you've used a rather harder rhythm in the begin (00:04:390 (1) - here for example until 00:08:676 (3) - ), which doesn't fit the overall, you should try to keep it consistent, with deleting one or two circles, and unstack some. But here, you can leave some stackings as well, just not all! They should be used well, and not overused. I hope you get my point, please don't hesitate asking me if not.

take it easyily,right?

[Hard]

00:06:962 (1) - I'm a bit worried about this slider, according to the new rule it might not be unrankable, yet i'd like you to use a simpler slidershape, since it's barely seenable. ok,change

00:58:390 (5,6,7) - Align them properly, to avoid an untidy look fix
01:02:676 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Mh well, since the normal didn't really use 1/4, I think it'd be better if you put 1/4 sliders instead of that stream, so you'd get a better spread, with the density etc. ok,fix
01:03:533 (1,2,1) - Watch the spacing, untidy look avoidance allright,fix
01:15:533 (3,4) - This is weird, normally you have a 1/4 pattern stacked (f.e. 01:07:819 (1,2) - ) and here not. You should keep consistency over all of those, this means either all 1/4 patterns are unstacked, or stacked, and the other one goes to the 1/2 patterns then (with slider -> slider , circle -> circle) ok,change unstack →01:15:533 (3,4)

The diff has a really interesting flow! I like it. Please have an eye on the consistency on this map. ♪

[Insane]

00:09:962 (4,5,6,7) - That spacing is weird, nothing in the song is calling for it, but if you want to keep the jump, you could just use the same DS, but higher, so it looks a bit better imo. emm,now i have a better idea,change :3
00:15:533 (3,4,5,6,7) - http://puu.sh/59Hg6.jpg What do you think of this spacing here? It gives the transition from 2->3 a better flow. Good!fix
00:29:462 (7,8,9) - Mh, I prefer a slight curve here, as well to get a better transition between 00:29:676 (9,10) - this time. http://puu.sh/59HjA.jpg ok,fix
01:05:140 (4) - Just some nazi, try 105 142, looks a bit better (I know, that's a bad reason, but I can't really explain it - just deny if you don't like it!) em,nazi is helpful for map,i think
01:21:533 (1,2) - I think you can improve this blanket here. ok,fix
00:22:390 (3,4,5,6) - I guess this pattern is really not well readable, if you're in a rush while playing it you will just miss and you're most probably going oh...change little,but some testplayer say "no problem"
to be like: what just happened? You should get another place for 3, or for the triplet. ;-;
00:27:319 (5) - Same here as above a...fix
00:31:176 (3,4,5) - And same as above, they're really hidden, it doesn't feel too good, and kills the flow in some ways. change
00:48:962 (1) - Mh.. I'm unsure about this sudden speedup, you should try 1.3 or somethin, 1.5 is definetly too fast and confuses people too easily. because of the judgment of the sliders, players won't break combos easily...sry,no change;-;
00:06:962 (1) - Same here! same ^

Feedback:

The insane was enjoyable, sometimes the flow seems a bit broken, and the things are too hidden. It would be really cool if you could think about it! Let me know what you think by the way.

emm,change some hid part and bored part

[Overall]

The mapset was rather good, the spread can be improved (pointed up suggestions), I'm sure this is on the right way, that why I'm leaving the star icon for now. Good luck, and try to get some more mods!

ok

384059043 wrote:

video到kiai就挂了 估计要换一个吧

azuretwinight wrote:

Hello~
From pm


[Notion]
This color means something you can either choose to fix or not to fix cause I prefer to do this.
This color means some suggestions.
And this color means some issue to fix I think.
[General]
好紧张，神麻婆的图而且还是已经改过多次的，提些建议~ 我又不是0108，肯定有疏漏的地方
整体感觉不错，虽然鬼畜歌我确实不是很喜欢，但是这首相性不错。
射一发
[Easy]
00:47:247 (1) - 转盘结束在00:50:246 - 这里好些，不然转盘尾压在下一段的歌词的第一个字了，这样歌词第一个字可以有一个note的打击感 因为是easy...所以想简单点
00:16:176 (2) - 这里节奏自创似可商榷，不过还好，不建议这种有点自创的感觉出现在ez里面 这不是自创节奏啊...
01:11:247 (1) - 稍微往左弯一点似有利于flow？ fix,不过还是直线
[Normal]
00:23:247 (3) - 节奏有问题额。。中间有一个鼓声选择不跟了而来用这样一个破坏节奏的滑条么。。 fix
00:35:676 (1) - 这个地方似乎没有鼓点而鼓点在转盘后的红线上，虽然这个节奏不推荐但是也似乎只能这样做。。 fix
00:44:676 - 与其跟飘渺的鼓还不如这里来个note跟一跟vocal fix
00:57:533 (1,2) - 这个地方有点挑刺了，就是我觉得flow出现了一个垂直的地方我觉得在normal里面似乎可以把后面那个滑条弄弯一点点。。 啊那就不改

[Hard]
挺好，有几个有点蛋疼的地方
00:27:533 (3,4,5) - 这里三连打起来不卡么。。强烈建议换节奏，而且跟整个map风格根本不适应，并且三连找不到鼓点的依据 fix,改单点了
01:24:104 (1) - 这么我巨爽的地方用原速以上吧，减慢滑条速度不合适 一倍速就好,en
[Shore]
00:11:676 (2,3) - 这里的跳有些突然，而且我觉得1.0也差不多吧。。没有什么迹象说明要用跳的。。 其实是不知道怎么放就这么放了个造型梗了...如果你有更好的想法我会改的
00:14:676 (1,2) - 不明白这个1/4为何要跳一点 同上
00:35:462 (2,1,2) - 这个地方没有跳的处理而这里00:38:676 (1,2) 跳的有点大，会不会显得很突然？ 经过试验，没有任何不良反应
01:18:962 (4,5,6,7,8) - 这个地方节奏有点偷懒的感觉，要是我的话会考虑

SPOILER

，五连节奏总感觉简单了些。。 不了现在就好....

That's my suggestions. 最后祝您身体健康，再见！:) .

Breeze wrote:

图本身没问题，不过这种三次元鬼畜的图artist应该写做这个歌的作者，没错的话应该就是up主“DeXe”了，bilibili可以放到tag里

Breeze wrote:

Bubbled

Lan wings wrote:

个人比较希望Artist和Source反过来..这样可以跟我的排在一起 搜索起来也比较方便 不会东一个非凡哥西一个非凡哥

lkx_Shore wrote:

Lan wings wrote:

个人比较希望Artist和Source反过来..这样可以跟我的排在一起 搜索起来也比较方便 不会东一个非凡哥西一个非凡哥

我本来是抄你的排版的，但微风让我改成这样，我不知道该如何是好了

Lan wings wrote:

lkx_Shore wrote:

我本来是抄你的排版的，但微风让我改成这样，我不知道该如何是好了

毕竟depxe作品总共就那么几个,不像V+的不能用Hatsune Miku之后用P名好歹还有很多首歌是同一个P主的
现在的话本来整个osu就两首要是还分开实在不太好

Irreversible wrote:

A quick recheck before we go~

[Easy]

1/2/2 ? That seems really low, and doesn't provide a good spread. I would find 2/3/2 pretty fitting, that's up to you tho. If you wanna keep the AR, go for 2/2/2 at least. ok,i use 2/2/2 now

00:16:176 - This might be too unreadable for an easy diff. I suggest sticking to something simple, such as this: http://puu.sh/5p1KQ.jpg (2 = 00:15:962 - ) ok,change this part
00:26:676 (2) - Remove finish? I don't find it really fitting here. ok,remove it

Actually, I'm unsure about all those kind of sliders, which start on a red tick. 01:07:176 (3) - Like this for example - it recommend having an easier rhythm here, starting on white ticks. ok,i change them,make them easily

[Normal]

00:07:819 (1,2,3) - Any possibilities to make this slightly more curved? It looks a bit straight-curvy now, which looks kinda bad imo
00:08:676 (3) - I suggest rotating this slider a bit in -> that way. fix
00:18:962 (3) - If you rotate this slightly, you can improve the blanket here. ok,change this part
00:33:533 (7) - No stack needed here, it doesn't fit to the song. 352 172? fix,but move to 276 220
00:54:104 (1) - I personally would move the white point, which causes the curve to 116 132. http://puu.sh/5p1Yv.jpg fix
01:15:533 (3) - http://puu.sh/5p209.jpg I guess this provides a better flow. fix
01:20:247 (4) - Completely stack with 01:18:533 (1) - ? fix

[Hard]

00:10:819 (5) - Although the jump is bigger, it looks much cleaner: http://puu.sh/5p34Y.jpg fix
00:17:676 (5) - Moving this to 400 160 would fit the song quite well. fix
00:23:890 (5,6,7,1,2,3) - This part looks really close together, like, everything is really close to each other. Is there a possibility to increase the DS here a bit, or rearrange the pattern? ok,change
00:27:533 (3,4,5,6,1) - That's really uncreative. How are the stacks explained? Imo, they aren't. They kill the flow if not used well, so please just use regular spacing i suppose. change this part
00:34:390 (5,6) - Use same spacing as 00:19:819 (1,2,3,4) - ? Consistency. fix
00:45:319 (1,2,3) - align the triplet better fix
00:51:104 (3,4) - That flows really bad, the triplet goes -> that way, while the next circle is <- that way, so.. i hope you see what i'm trying to say. change this part
00:57:533 (1,2,3) - align. change this part
00:58:390 (5,6,7) - use same spacing as ^ change this part
01:01:390 (2) - same here, why do you keep changing the DS between 1/4 notes? ...because i made this diff in 7 months ago...at that time idk to maintain consistent spacing
01:20:676 (3,4,5,6,7) - inconsistency in spacing, again

Please go over the hard again, unfortunately there are so many inconsistencies in spacing, and I'm not willing to rank this until that is solved - the point, it just looks much cleaner if you keep the same DS for 1/2 notes, and 1/4, EXCEPT if there is a jump. and in the points i've listed up above, there aren't jumps. So please, tidy it up a little more. ok i will change them.

[Insane]

00:21:533 (1) - keep spacing with the stream fix
00:21:962 (2) - why stacked? emm,change
00:22:390 (3,4,5,6) - I still don't understand how this would make sense.. xD I wouldn't stack it, but if you like it very much, you can keep it. a,so i keep it,thx for your tolerant :3
00:28:712 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - keep the same curve for all the triplets to imrpvoe the flow ok,change
00:32:997 (4) - 250 138? fix
00:48:962 (1) - bad transition, you should rotate this by slight -13°, to improve it. you'll see what i'm refering to! The place should stay the same, ofc ok, fix

the insane is better than the hard, but sometimes you could improve the same things as in hard. but nothing too major here! ok

Alright, so now, the main point is definetly your hard in my opinion. It looks way too unpolished in it's current state. So, please take a look at my suggestions and tell me what you think, and whether you want to fix it or not. Send me a pm, after you're done with the mod, please! Done!

EmingK wrote:

恭喜rank

Irreversible wrote:

Sorry have been quite busy these days, will recheck that tomorrow, or maybe in two days, i hope that's ok for you!

depxe wrote:

:) 酱油渣包路过..今天偶然才知道此图的存在
看简介得知po主在视频源文件的获取上有困难，于是附上正常版本：
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1vgsFd